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Apex_old
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ampzz
My horror story:

I woke up in the morning and looked in the mirror.

- Fin
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Apex_old
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NoHitter
@Zerobladers
I didn't find it scary at all.

Also just go google Creepypastas.
Vext_old
Shouldn't this have come out before halloween instead of after?
Faust
Don't challenge my authoritah
Topic Starter
Apex_old
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silmarilen
no.. not scary.
Firo Prochainezo

NoHItter wrote:

@Zerobladers
I didn't find it scary at all.

Also just go google Creepypastas.
Most of the creepypastas out there are not creepy at all, lol.
NoHitter

Zerobladers wrote:

Please give constructive criticism
The first part seemed like an introduction to some Knight quest or something, then poof it was just a janitor.
- Make the terms and language more fitting to a urban setting I guess.

Avoid deus ex machina.
- Why for no apparent reason does the janitor look down the well?
- How is there a secret passage under the well? Give some sort of hint that it had one.

It wasn't even scary in the first place?
- A skull is scary?
- No build-up/ no suspense?

Edit:
Oh and type in proper grammar and paragraphs.
OzzyOzrock
AAHAHAHAHAHA OHHHH HMY GOD SDGHOLOLOOOLYY CRAP AHGSSG

SO SERIOUS!!! GSGFAFSQAAA
scaryie4stt story
ever read
Cuddlebun

Zerobladers wrote:

Please give constructive criticism
Shit sucks, please revise
kriers
tl;dr... boh! /o/
Minty Gum

Apex wrote:

he was to concentrated on his work to even take a look at it
To = "I'm going to the store."
Too = "There's too much."

Moral of the story: Replace to with too and look quite a bit smarter.
thelewa
I went outside once. It was pretty scary.
f e a r
When I was young, this scarred me for life.

http://youtu.be/9D-RYNPETws?t=3m19s

Note that it starts on around 3:50 to 4:20.
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Apex_old
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TTTTTTTTTTTT
yoooooooooooooooooo
Haseo_old

NoHItter wrote:

Creepypastas.
Shellghost
A Bosmer was murdered. The Altmer claims the Dunmer is guilty, the Dunmer says the Kahjit did it, the Orc swears he didn't kill the Bosmer and the Kahjit says the Dunmer is lying.

If only one of them is telling the truth, who murdered the Bosmer?
Vext_old

Shellghost wrote:

A Bosmer was murdered. The Altmer claims the Dunmer is guilty, the Dunmer says the Kahjit did it, the Orc swears he didn't kill the Bosmer and the Kahjit says the Dunmer is lying.

If only one of them is telling the truth, who murdered the Bosmer?
Oh my, Morrowind. I remember this as well as the drake one. Orc
Firo Prochainezo
then who was phone
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