1. Insane (4.93 stars, 478 notes)
2. Lalarun's Hard (4.75 stars, 328 notes)
3. Normal (2.86 stars, 172 notes)
4. Patche's Lunatic (4.97 stars, 468 notes)

Licnect wrote:

hi poor mod
modding time !!

[Overall]
offset 30406 Maybe to best fixed
[Normal]
find

[Lalarun's hard]
Nice! your a good mapper !

[Insane]
02:30:339 you can't use bpm 69 red line fixed
because have rule. so remove it
02:32:114 remove red line fixed
use too many streams

[Patche's Lunatic]
nice

a nice map
you have many good guest diff
fighting~~~

KSHR wrote:

modding
(requested by Reflain & you)


Overall
- TagsにPatcheを追加 OK!
- 完成した譜面はWorks In Progress/HelpではなくPendingでアップしてくださいOK!


Normal

SPOILER

00:33:884 (1) - 前のサークルと近いので、初心者は戸惑うと思いますfixed
00:44:319 (1) - add finish at beginningfixed
01:15:623 (1) - remove whistle at turnfixed
01:16:927 (2) - ^fixed
01:18:232 (3) - remove whistle at turn and end, add finish at endfixed
01:33:014 (x) - add note with finish and new combo here?fixed
02:08:232 (1) - 一番簡単な難易度のスピナーのすぐ後の配置としては離れ気味だと思いますfixed
02:15:623 (2,4) - remove whistle and add finish?fixed
02:21:710 (1) - add finish at beginningfixed
02:49:536 (1) - ^fixed
02:49:536 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 一番簡単な難易度ではジャンプ（と言えないかもしれないけど）はNGですfixed
02:54:753 (1,2) - ^fixed
02:57:797 (4,1) - スぺーシングfixed
02:59:537 (4,5) - ^fixed
02:59:971 (5) - new combo?fixed

Easy, Normalは初心者向けの譜面になるので、スぺーシングを統一させてください

Lalarun's hard

SPOILER

dif名:Lalarun's Hard

others fine!!
nice Hard dif for me~

Insane

SPOILER

Beat Snap Divisorが1/4の状態でResnap All Notesfixed

00:30:394 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - スぺーシングが中途半端に変わっているように思うのですが...fixed
00:41:699 (4) - 1grid down?fixed
00:48:655 (3) - 1grid rightfixed
01:14:960 (4) - 2grid rightfixed
01:17:351 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 形が所々崩れていて見栄えが悪いので整えてみてくださいfixed
01:26:699 (3,4) - 1grid downfixed
01:45:829 (1) - x:224 y:248fixed
01:46:047 (2) - x:128 y:120fixed
01:49:525 (2) - x:240 y:56fixed
01:49:960 (4) - x:328 y:96fixed
02:03:655 (3) - 1grid rightfixed
02:03:873 (4) - x:40 y:80fixed
02:58:403 (2) - x:184 y:64fixed

もやし's Lunatic

SPOILER

00:40:621 (6) - 1grid up & rightfixed
00:48:664 (5,6,7) - 1grid right (grid level 4)fixed
00:54:969 (2) - 1grid down (grid level 4)fixed
00:56:490 (6) - 1grid downfixed
01:00:186 (2) - 見栄え的に1grid left (grid level 4)fixed
01:13:882 (1) - 2gird left?fixed
01:21:056 (1) - remove whistle at end?fixed
01:49:317 (3) - 1grid up & rightfixed
01:50:621 (2,4) - 1grid upfixed
02:02:361 (2) - 1grid down right (gird level 4)fixed
02:08:664 (4) - ^fixed
02:11:273 (1) - 1grid left (grid level 4)fixed
02:16:056 (5) - 1grid downfixed

※grid level 4のスぺーシングmodについては結構細いので
実際は修正なしでもプレイには問題ないものが多いです

nice map~

Garven wrote:

[Lalarun's hard]
Change to Lalarun's Hard Changed
02:30:405 (1,1) - Felt kind of awkward. Maybe add a note at 02:32:579 - ? OK

rEdo wrote:

[Lalarun's Hard]
nothing really, just the hitsounds are kinda too silent at that kiai part, i'd suggest boosting it's volume to ~75% Fixed

Garven wrote:

Some IRC modding for Chocopikel's difficulties. Changed MP3, numerous fixes with rhythm changes and break useage, along wtih a kiai change.

[Lalarun's hard]
Change to Lalarun's Hard
02:30:405 (1,1) - Felt kind of awkward. Maybe add a note at 02:32:579 - ?

[Patche's Lunatic]
There was an unsnapped note, but now that the MP3 changed, it will probably go away. Good map.

IRC log

03:27 <Chocopikel> : I'm sorry suddenly
03:27 <Chocopikel> : Is it good though I want you to do modding?
03:28 <Garven> : ahm
03:28 <Garven> : Which map?
03:28 *Chocopikel is listening to (Senya - Koakuma Apple)[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/28479]
03:28 <Garven> : Downloading
03:29 <Garven> : Is your English good enough for an IRC mod?
03:29 <Chocopikel> : ok!
03:29 <Chocopikel> : Thank you really
03:30 <Garven> : Hmm, MP3 is 320 kbps
03:30 <Garven> : Do you know how to re-encode to 192kbps or do you need help?
03:30 <Chocopikel> : The way is not understood....
03:31 <Garven> : Okay, I'll do it for you, matte kudasai
03:31 <Chocopikel> : I'm sorry purposely.....
03:32 <Garven> : http://puu.sh/1zSr
03:32 <Garven> : Timing will be different, but I am not good at that. ><
03:33 <Chocopikel> : It not suitable?
03:34 <Chocopikel> : Thank you for re-encode XD
03:34 <Garven> : http://puu.sh/1zSw Old MP3 上 new MP3 下
03:35 <Garven> : Small difference in offset
03:36 <Chocopikel> : It was said that this offset was suitable in mod from Licnect
03:36 <Garven> : For the old MP3, yes
03:36 <Garven> : New MP3 has different timing, unfortunately
03:36 <Garven> : It's very close, but still different.
03:36 <Chocopikel> : I see
03:37 <Garven> : Anyway, for your two difficulties the first kiai section doesn't feel like a good place for Kiai.
03:37 <Garven> : 01:12:145 -
03:37 <Chocopikel> : It is a little different certainly....
03:38 <Garven> : It's a softer part of the song, so it doesn't feel like it needs that emphasis with the kiai fountain and flashing.
03:39 <Chocopikel> : Should I erase the first kiai?
03:39 <Garven> : In Normal: 01:12:145 - This is too soon after a spinner for the easiest difficulty. It might be best to delete 01:24:427 (1) - and map
03:39 <Garven> : through it. Possibly with this rhythm? http://puu.sh/1zSI
03:39 <Garven> : It's up to you fo rthe kiai
03:39 <Garven> : I suggest that you do, though
03:39 <Garven> : For the reasoning above
03:41 <Garven> : 01:33:449 - This break is awkward. I'd just map through it.
03:42 <Chocopikel> : I see
03:43 <Garven> : If you do map through it, perhaps delete 01:38:232 (1) - and use a short break between that and 01:39:971 (1) - ?
03:43 <Garven> : 02:08:232 (1) - Maybe delete since it's so soon after a spinner?
03:45 <Chocopikel> : ok,It corrects it
03:46 <Garven> : 02:42:797 (1,2,1,2) - These feel weird against the vocals. Might play better like this? http://puu.sh/1zSV ?
03:46 <Garven> : 02:46:710 (3) - I don't recommend stacking under sliders for the easiest difficulty, but it's okay if you keep it since it is a Normal.
03:47 <Garven> : 02:51:275 (3) - New combo
03:47 <Garven> : 02:53:014 (5) - New combo
03:47 <Garven> : 03:00:732 (1) - Extend to 03:03:449 - and delete 03:03:449 (1) -
03:48 <Garven> : Lalarun's hard -> Lalarun's Hard
03:48 <Garven> : Are you okay with making fixes on guest difficulties? Or you want me to post those?
03:49 <Chocopikel> : Because I asked, it is unquestionable
03:49 <Garven> : Well, I can simply post my opinions and let the mappers decide if they wish to make changes on their own
03:49 <Garven> : And mod your maps via IRC
03:50 <Chocopikel> : Thank you really from what to what
03:53 <Garven> : Well then, for Insane: Same comment about the first kiai
03:54 <Garven> : 01:17:362 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This didn't really fit very well for such a slow part of the song
03:55 <Garven> : 01:33:014 - Map through this break with the same suggestion of a short break where 01:38:232 (1) - is
03:57 <Garven> : Otherwise it looks fine. :3
03:58 <Chocopikel> : Thanks
03:58 <Garven> : I'll mod the other two difficulties and post on the forum. Also
03:58 <Garven> : Delete the osb file in the folder before you do full submit with the new MP3
03:58 <Garven> : It's the old song title before you changed the artist.
04:00 <Chocopikel> : I see.
04:01 <Chocopikel> : Because I am not so good at English, it might take time for all the corrections.
04:01 <Chocopikel> : However, it absolutely corrects it
04:02 <Chocopikel> : Thank you really from first to last though it asked a big favor here suddenly
04:02 <Garven> : Take your time, and remember that these are merely suggestions, not something you must change (except the mp3/timing)

Good luck!

rEdo wrote:

[Normal]
0:53:022 (1) - delete new combo? It puts it without changing it because it is thought that externals are bad
1:59:109 (1) - ^ In on and the same
2:28:674 (5,1) - swap new combos fixed
3:00:740 (1) - this spinner starts too soon, please start it at the white tick fixed

[Lalarun's Hard]
nothing really, just the hitsounds are kinda too silent at that kiai part, i'd suggest boosting it's volume to ~75% It corrected it to Lalarun

[Insane]
1:17:370 (5) - swap new combos fixed
2:41:718 (1) - unnecessary new combo? fixed
2:58:457 (2,2) - move those notes to the left/right, so they form perfect diamond patterns with the rest. fixed

[Patche's Lunatic]
1:13:022 (1) - unnecessary new combo fixed


couldn't really find anything, good job!

Garven wrote:

[General]
There's something weird going on. You need to set your offsets to 28674 for all difficulties, then set a new uninherited timing section (green line) at the old starting offset and start that with kiai. Right now it's kinda buggy and prematurely starting kiai. fixed

[Normal]
01:26:500 (1) - Spinnerの後では早すぎます。もっと時間を置いてください。01:22:587 (1) - は01:24:327 - で終わる。そうして01:25:196 - と01:25:631 - と01:26:066 - Noteを足す、Maybe? fixed
02:46:935 (1) - 02:48:892 - で終わる？さっきの同じです。 fixed

[Patche's Lunatic]
00:30:403 (1) - Unsnapped fixed

1. Tags aren't the same thorough all the difficulties... not terribly important, but would be nice if fixed in the beatmap itself. Besides that, I guess 'apple' doesn't need to be in tags since it's already in the title... you can ignore that if you want though.

Gens wrote:

1. Tags aren't the same thorough all the difficulties... not terribly important, but would be nice if fixed in the beatmap itself. Besides that, I guess 'apple' doesn't need to be in tags since it's already in the title... you can ignore that if you want though.

I'm sorry. Because it is an arrangement of Bad Apple, the change is tentatively stopped

[Normal]

03:00:630 (2) - This isn't properly stacked and it's easy to restack stuff so why not. fixed

[Patche's Lunatic]

02:32:369 (2,3,4) - Only thing that irked me in this difficulty; the slider track isn't completely hidden so it doesn't fall under the unrankable side, but I still wonder why put it like that, not to mention it still can confuse players. Up to you though. fixed

That's basically it. I'm popping this temporarily, not because it's currently unrankable but because it's still going to be popped when you submit, so I'm just clearing some confusion between 'ready to rank' and 'pending submit'. I actually plan to rank after you (dis)agree, since these are minor things to take care of.

Gens wrote:

Congratulations on your first ranked map!

val0108 wrote:

omedetouuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

_LRJ_ wrote:

Congratz Chocopikel

Komeiji Yuki wrote:

omedetou~

Oh...I dled it yesterday

and it's ranked today XD