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MAHO-Dou - Ojamajo Carnival (TV Size)

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vivere
752 posts
Joined April 2009
vivere
Hi wring

[ying's Easy]:

00:57:483- Add clap
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[Normal]:

00:55:856- New combo
01:12:534- ^
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[Hard]:

01:06:025- New combo
01:25:551- ^
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good map

star ;)
banvi
1,793 posts
Joined June 2009
banvi
:)
Niva
Global Moderator
3,188 posts
Joined November 2009
Niva
Random mod :D

[General]
-> This song seems familiar, is there any connection with this song?
-> End kiai time at 88.805 ms.

[Easy]
00:30:432 (x) - Add circle?
00:31:856 (2) - Add hitsound finish?
00:33:686 (5) - Add circle?
00:44:873 (3,1) - Not perfectly stacked (Don't follow distance spacing here, nobody will realize)

[Normal]
00:11:517 (6) and 00:13:144 (3) - Not perfectly stacked, turn off grid snap
00:25:347 (3) - Beautiful ^_^

[Hard]
00:02:974 (2) - Switch hitsound between these two?
00:14:364 (7,1) - Spacing
00:28:602 (2) - Change hitsound to finish?
00:33:076 (4) - Linear slider in the mapset. Change it to bezier, linear feels weird for a happy song.
00:55:246 (5) - ^
01:09:279 (7,8,9) - Just place in triangle pattern, current pattern feels weird...

[Insane]
00:11:110 (2,3) - Lengthen (2) by 1/4, and shorten (3) by 1/4.
00:25:347 (2) - I don't think it needs to be silenced
00:29:313 (2,3) - Start 1/4 earlier.
01:19:042 (1,2,3) - Copy (1) to (2), and rotate by 120°. Copy (1) to (3), and rotate by 240°.

Nice mapset overall, feels fun while playing this.
Star!
MoonShade
487 posts
Joined February 2010
MoonShade
It's nice to see how the map develops :3

Here a few suggestions for the easy and normal diff, maybe i will comment the other diffs later:

SPOILER
Think about just having one picture for all diffs when you have a video
Maybe you can reduce the video file size

[ying's Easy]
Maybe you should reduce the slider velocity
You should think about using the clap sound more often, for example:
00:05:008 (4)
00:03:381 (2)
00:06:635 (2)
00:07:856 (3)
00:08:669 (3)
00:16:398 (2)
00:18:025 (1)
...

00:20:466 (3) - Put a circle here?
00:26:974 (4) - ^
00:36:737 (3) - whistle sound on the beginning + the slider
00:38:364 (3) - finish sound
00:43:042 (3) - End slider here?
00:46:296 (3) - ^
00:49:551 (3) - ^
00:52:805 (3) - ^
00:59:517 (3) - Delete the whistle sound on the end of the slider
01:19:042 (3) - maybe put this somewhere else
01:25:144 (2) - end slider here
01:25:144 (3) - delete this
01:25:551 (x) - maybe put something else here, for example:
01:25:551 (1) - circle
01:26:364 (2) - circle
01:26:771 (1) - circle
01:27:585 (2) - circle
01:27:991 (1) - circle
01:28:398 (2) - circle

[Normal]
00:02:568 (1) - add finish, remove whistle
00:02:974 (2) - add clap, remove whistle
00:03:381 (3) - whistle at the beginning
00:09:076 (1) - add finish, remove whistle
00:15:178 (5) - why not use a normal soft sound here?
00:20:263 (2) - I don't think a normal finish sound fits
00:26:771 (3) - ^
00:28:602 (2) - finish sound
00:29:008 (3,4) - try to make these slider more like this:

00:34:500 (1) - this sounds weird
01:01:957 (3) - remove clap
01:02:364 (3) - add clap
01:02:771 (4) - remove clap
01:03:585 (6) - maybe use a finish sound instead
01:26:364 (2) - use a finish sound here
01:27:585 (2) - ^
01:28:805 (2) - ^
For your effort in this map: Star!
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring

Nivalis wrote:

-> This song seems familiar, is there any connection with this song?
Yeah, this is the original one :)

MoonShade wrote:

Think about just having one picture for all diffs when you have a video
Maybe you can reduce the video file size
Umm.. , I'll try to.

Thank you mod , I all fixed :)
Kotone
2,402 posts
Joined August 2008
Kotone
SPOILER

Odaril wrote:

ying's Easy:
First thoughts: ugly sliders.
00:25:347 (3) - Ugly slider.
00:34:500 (1) - ^
00:34:500 (1,3) - This overlap looks ugly and can be easily avoided.
00:41:618 (3) - This slider can be better !
00:44:873 (3) - ^
00:47:313 (1,2,3) - This overlap looks meh.
01:06:025 (4) - This sounds better with Finish hitsounds - maybe even soft finish.
01:19:042 (3) - This slider is too high and is partially overlapped by the HP bar.
01:25:551 (1) - This spinner hardly makes sense - I'd rather see circles here.

I know I'm very picky about slider forms, but ugly sliders just make a map less enjoyable than it could be. Likewise, good sliders make a map appear better. I'm willing to help you anytime for these sliders, if you need, or just want. Just catch me in-game (I'll be only on IRC so I won't appear in the user panel list) and I will gladly help you.
all fixed
I tried to make they beautiful :D

KuraiPettan wrote:

[ying's Easy]
00:38:771 (Break) - Insert break time here ? (If you do that, disable the "Letterbox during breaks" in all difficulty. Song setup => Storyboarding => Misc. Toggles) no thanks

vivere wrote:

[ying's Easy]:
00:57:483- Add clap k

Nivalis wrote:

[Easy]
00:30:432 (x) - Add circle? k
00:31:856 (2) - Add hitsound finish? k
00:33:686 (5) - Add circle? k
00:44:873 (3,1) - Not perfectly stacked (Don't follow distance spacing here, nobody will realize) :/

MoonShade wrote:

[ying's Easy]
Maybe you should reduce the slider velocity no thanks
You should think about using the clap sound more often, for example:
00:05:008 (4)
00:03:381 (2)
00:06:635 (2)
00:07:856 (3)
00:08:669 (3)
00:16:398 (2)
00:18:025 (1)
... no
Gonzvlo
osu! Alumni
2,896 posts
Joined January 2010
Gonzvlo
General
  1. OK~
ying's Easy
  1. 00:12:330 (1) - It looks better if you move it 1 grid left & 2 grids up imo.
  2. Pretty Solid.
Normal
  1. 00:09:076 (1,3) - Align (3) with (1)
  2. 00:35:924 (1) - New Combo
  3. 00:40:805 (1,2,3) - Suggestion: For this streams I think that "Finish" sounds better than "Clap" at the end of the sliders, (If you decide to change it , apply to all the sliders)
  4. 01:28:805 (2) - Suggestion: Change to Finish
Hard
  1. 00:16:602 (4,1) - Suggestion: Unstack (1) , It belongs to a different combo.
Insane
  1. 00:21:483 (1) - Suggestion: Add "Finish"
  2. 00:30:229 (1) - Remove New Combo
  3. 00:46:093 (1) - ^
Fun to play & The song is catchy, STAR~
fartownik
2,189 posts
Joined December 2008
fartownik
offset +9-12ms

[Insane]

The consistency of new combos and hitsounds feels really random on this diff.

00:11:110 (2,3) - Sounds off. Especially the 1/4 slider.
00:21:483 (1) - Delete new combo.


[Hard]

Pretty nice diff. Mapped far better than Insane for sure.

Decrease OD by 1 tick.

01:01:957 (5) - Add a repeat.


Other diffs are fine.
star
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
I changed offset.
Thanks mod Gonzvlo and fartownik :)
Muya
2,355 posts
Joined August 2009
Muya
:)
Cuuuuri
315 posts
Joined April 2009
Cuuuuri
どれみc~♪
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
thanks :D
-Xero-
526 posts
Joined October 2009
-Xero-
JIN KE LA!

Overall
It's (TV Size)

Easy
00:12:335 (1,2,3) - Move this up and left a bit so it doesn't overlap with the other slider.
00:21:488 (x) - Maybe add a circle here?
01:27:996 (1,2,3) - Up 1 tick.

Normal
00:18:844 (2) - This looks really bad. Sorry :|.

Hard
00:35:929 (1) - No new Combo.

Insane
00:36:945 (5) - Same like in Easy.

That's all!
S o r d a
1,576 posts
Joined July 2009
S o r d a
star~ :)
Lesjuh
Elite Mapper
2,442 posts
Joined October 2008
Lesjuh
Offset 956

Insane
01:12:539 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Please use distance snap here so players can see when to hit these notes.

Normal
Some hitsounds are used different from you other difficulties here. Take a look. You might want to use them in your other difficulties or remove them.

That's it! Contact me again and I'll see if I can bubble it.
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
Thanks :)
I fixed.
Lesjuh
Elite Mapper
2,442 posts
Joined October 2008
Lesjuh
That's the way!
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
Thanks!
Kotone
2,402 posts
Joined August 2008
Kotone
wow bubbled!
great job
Shiro
Global Moderator
4,984 posts
Joined May 2009
Shiro
Why is this not bubbled when Lesjuh bubbled it ? I'll repair the bubble because there's nothing worth a pop, but have a look at the mod too.

Normal:
00:21:498 (1) - hidden by the slider
00:44:074 (1) - ^

Hard
is good

Insane
00:47:939 (1) - Place it under (2) for spacing consistency
01:02:583 (1,2) - replace that with three circles as it doesn't play well
01:12:549 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - these 1/6 are really surprising. you shouldn't follow the vocals here as they're untimable, do something simpler in 1/2s
01:15:600 (1,2) - replace with three circles ?

ying's Easy
00:18:854 (2) - make symmetrical ?
00:22:922 (2,3) - unstack ? stacks are hard to play for new players
00:28:006 (1,2) - might be too hard to play
00:30:244 (4,5) - unstack ? stacks are hard to play for new players
00:31:261 (1,2) - might be too hard to play
00:33:498 (4,5) - unstack ?

If you update your map you will pop the bubble, turn to Lesjuh to rebubble it as he's the one who bubbled it in the first place.
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
Thanks!
Sorry, but no change.
swish
1,194 posts
Joined February 2009
swish
good map~ :D
Sakura
osu! Alumni
7,979 posts
Joined March 2010
Sakura
[Hard]
Remove unnecessary audio lead-in

[Normal]
Remove unnecessary audio lead-in
00:13:159 (3,4) - Spacing too far

[Easy]
Remove unncessary audio lead-in
00:10:718 (3) - Whistle doesn't fit this slider body.
00:34:515 (1) - Start 1/2 earlier, end at same spot.
00:40:820 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Do you really need to use the exact same pattern 4 times in a row?, i suggest you think of something else for these instead of copy/paste.

These need to be fixed before ranking, so i'm sorry i'll have to pop the bubble, message me when you have fixed and i'll return the bubble.
Kotone
2,402 posts
Joined August 2008
Kotone
>~<
Sakura
osu! Alumni
7,979 posts
Joined March 2010
Sakura
Ok, that's good
Rebubbled~
umesyu
3 posts
Joined March 2010
umesyu
good map!
Xgor
Elite Mapper
2,534 posts
Joined April 2009
Xgor
Random Bubble check!

Not that bad, Insane a bit messy but not unrankible.
Holoaz
358 posts
Joined November 2009
Holoaz
(^´л｀)つミ☆
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
Thanks
>swish umesyu Xgor Holoaz :)
vivere
752 posts
Joined April 2009
vivere
Hi~ :)

This modding is more Nazi

[Easy]:

00:18:854- Download 2 grid.

01:28:413- move 1 grid to the left.
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[Normal]:

00:09:905- upload a grid.
00:10:718 (4, 5)- ^
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[Hard]:

00:56:684 (3)- move 1 grid to the left.
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[Insane]:

what I put now isn't obligatory~

00:06:142- put a circle?
00:06:549- ^
00:41:939- ^
00:42:549- ^
00:48:854- ^
01:05:735- ^
01:19:159- ^
01:19:261- ^
01:19:566- ^
01:19:667- ^
01:19:972- ^
01:20:074- ^

as I said, this isn't obligatory...
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Okay... good map and song :>

+ Starrr
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
Thanks , but no change sorry. :(
Rigeru_old
426 posts
Joined January 2009
Rigeru_old
:roll:
Beuchi
osu! Alumni
2,288 posts
Joined February 2009
Beuchi
Let's check this month-old bubble! :)

~ying's Easy~
00:54:244 (1,2,3,1,2) - Let's see... there's no real problem here, but I do worry about these notes being completely offbeat and random placed when the whole diff is following the lyrics :/ Try moving all these notes 1/1 later (at 00:54:650) and you'll see it sounds WAY better, Also remember, you'll have to change the spacing to not to make a jump on 00:57:091 (2,3) if you change this!

~Normal~
No problems here!!

~Hard~
No problems here!!

~Insane~
00:32:888 (4) - I'd totally recommend to unstack this note and distance snap it between (3) and (5). It breaks the flow because it would make the player stop to click (4) and right after it go to (5), that makes a little jump.
01:12:549 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I'm not really sure what does this follow being on 1/3 snap, but besides this, it feels pretty slow and weird and I think it will sound better if you make a 1/4 stream instead of a 1/3 one... =x

So... Pretty sorry for pop this, but I really think these changes will improve your map...
Nice map btw! Insane was fun and the diff spread is perfect! :) *star*
Kotone
2,402 posts
Joined August 2008
Kotone
um. like this?
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
Thanks <Rigeru Beuchi-chan :)
Beuchi
osu! Alumni
2,288 posts
Joined February 2009
Beuchi
~Insane~
00:33:091 (1) - Gaaah what have you done ;~; The reverse arrow of the slider is totally hidden and this is unrankable >A<;

Move (9) and do something like this please: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/39711

Fix this and now yes, I'll rebubble, I promise!! :oops:
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring

Beuchi-chan wrote:

~Insane~
00:33:091 (1) - Gaaah what have you done ;~; The reverse arrow of the slider is totally hidden and this is unrankable >A<;

Move (9) and do something like this please: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/39711 fixed

Fix this and now yes, I'll rebubble, I promise!! :oops:

OH... It was careless of me.XD
Beuchi
osu! Alumni
2,288 posts
Joined February 2009
Beuchi
Lovely!! :)

And now, the well deserved...

RE-BUBBLED!!
deepsea
osu! Alumni
855 posts
Joined April 2008
deepsea
Spinners in [Insane] have no new combo due to editor bug, other than that there is no problem.

Fix this and I will rank it.
arien666
6,290 posts
Joined May 2009
arien666
I'd watched this anime ;_;
So nice ;_;
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring

deepsea wrote:

Spinners in [Insane] have no new combo due to editor bug, other than that there is no problem.

Fix this and I will rank it.
I fixed it!

Thanks star!< deepsea arien666
deepsea
osu! Alumni
855 posts
Joined April 2008
deepsea
JINKELA/
vivere
752 posts
Joined April 2009
vivere
congratulations on your first map ranked! :)
S o r d a
1,576 posts
Joined July 2009
S o r d a
omedeto-!!
wring
596 posts
Joined February 2010
Topic Starter
wring
Thank you!! :)
Sakura
osu! Alumni
7,979 posts
Joined March 2010
Sakura
Congratz!
arien666
6,290 posts
Joined May 2009
arien666
Good job XD
Anyway, good luck on your next song :3
banvi
1,793 posts
Joined June 2009
banvi
congratz :cry:
Kotone
2,402 posts
Joined August 2008
Kotone
Good job <3
MoonShade
487 posts
Joined February 2010
MoonShade
I can't believe this one is ranked, but wow, you did it!
I saw quite the whole development of the map, you didn't gave up and did your best, so my congratulations you finally get this ranked :3
Komeiji Yuki
1,264 posts
Joined March 2010
Komeiji Yuki
the anime companied me when I was a child~

so glad to see it ranked

late congratulations~ :)
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