Kotonoha wrote:

hello~m4m

• [Hard]

1. 00:01:019 - 00:13:769 - the nc'ing here is so weird.. ok there is a leading between 00:01:019 - 00:01:769 - and you decided to not nc at 00:01:769 (4) - , but that doesnt mean you should keep ncing at those spots later on and ignore the strong beats on the big white ticks. You should just Nc on every big white tick, 00:01:769 (4) - this one is optional you can keep them the same combo or nc there but please fix the nc's The NC problems are well known to me. Don't worry, i will change it all sooner or later.
2. 00:05:519 (5) - you can blanket with 00:05:269 (4) - , looks better Changed
3. 00:14:519 (2) - you can copy this shape and flip like ctrl+h+j so theyre the same shape, looks better Changed
4. 00:15:269 (2) - i see that youre following the violin with this long slider but youre completely ignoring the piano, which I think has a stronger presence than the violin changed
5. 00:18:769 (5) - I dont understand why you put a break when the music is getting more intense Because i was lazy and i still am
6. 00:47:894 (5) - angle the slider like this http://puu.sh/jp8XF.jpg, it looks better and flows more nicely into 00:48:456 (6) - Did
7. 01:33:644 (2) - tiny overlap Changed
8. 01:28:769 (1,2,3,4,5) - why so small ds? it breaks momentum 01:35:519 (3,4,5,6,1) - same Because i was told to
9. 01:56:519 (5) - can blanket with 01:56:331 (4) - Did
10. 02:52:019 - another weird break, I think its better to break at a calm part. so you also map this spinner 02:37:769 (1) - and break at 02:40:769 - , then end break at 02:52:769 - where more instruments are added i will think about it
11. 03:09:769 (6) - such a long repeat slider, and there is no beat at 03:09:769 (6) - , I think you should break it up into two repeat slider, one between 03:09:769 (6) - 03:09:769 (6) - and the other 03:09:769 (6) - 03:09:769 (6) - Ye
12. 03:12:269 (4) - you can instead make this slider into another 1/3 repeat slider, it follows the music and the rhythm transitions better into 03:13:019 (1) - , it sounds so harsh from 2/3 rhythm straight into 1/4 Changed
13. 03:30:269 (1,2,3,4) - it looks so cramped when its overlapped like that, I think you should make some space between them Yea
14. 04:01:769 (1) - end spinner here instead Ye
    
    [Lunatic]
15. 00:03:269 (1) - you should redraw this slider, because it using wrong slider algorhythm on this , try move around the white anchor point and you see what i mean.
16. 00:48:269 (1,2,3,4) - rotate this whole about -4° and stack 00:48:269 (1) - again Did
17. 01:01:769 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this is 1/3 rhythm, you currently use 1/4 Didn't even notice, thanks for mentioning.
18. 02:00:644 (5) - wrongly snapped, it should be 1/6 rhythm Changed
19. 02:01:769 (1,2) - same Changed
20. 02:22:019 (9,10,1) - try this rhythm instead http://puu.sh/jpatE.jpg, it follows the percussion better You might be right, it'll try it.
21. 04:01:769 (4) - consider breaking this up into 2 repeat sliders instead, to reflect the toms better as it changes at 04:02:144 - Did
22. 04:04:769 - end spinner here Ye
    
    You should keep in mind that you can't follow a 1/6 rhythm with 1/4 because theyre hitting completely different beats, its just wrongly snapped. However, its different if its something like 1/8, you can use 1/4 rhythm there because while youre missing half the beats, theyre still on point.
    
    [Full Moon]
23. same nc issues here as hard, you did it correctly on lunatic though Because Lunatic is my newest diff and i was already told about the NCs. But thanks for mentioning it anyway.
24. 00:05:519 (3,4) - just copy and flip 00:05:519 (3) - flows better http://puu.sh/jpb2B.jpg
25. 00:09:769 (1,2,3) - why this has lower ds? Because it's a part of something i tried a while ago, but forgot to change it back.
26. 00:16:269 (4,5) - stack these are more pleasent to play Did
27. 00:22:769 (1) - ctrl+h this flows better from the triplet and also very well into next circle Did
28. 00:25:769 (3,1) - swap these nc Did
29. 00:29:519 (1) - this is unnecessary ncv Changed
30. 00:30:269 (1,2) - they are so close, you should put some more distance Changed
31. 00:51:269 - there are a few spacing inconsistencies in these streams, for example the spacing is increasing on 00:52:019 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - ,and then it gets a bit sdmaller between 00:52:487 (6,7,8) - . is it because the piano stops at 00:52:487 (6) - ? then I can understand the reasoning, but it looks bad, I think you should use the same spacing between 00:52:487 (6,7,8,1) - - as between 00:52:394 (5,6) - Changed
32. 01:58:769 (5) - nc here Did
33. 02:01:769 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - incorrectly snapped, use 1/6 here 02:01:769 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - and either 1/6 or 1/3 on here 02:02:519 (9,10) - Changed
34. you should probably stop at 02:02:894 - instead like the percussion do Probably
35. 04:04:769 - end spinner here Did

good luck !! ~

Default wrote:

[Full Moon]

You missed a lot of important notes (especially the triples before the big white ticks on the chorus), so playing the map doesn't feel as good as it should.

00:33:206 - Missing note.
00:33:925 - Missing note.
00:35:800 - Missing note.
00:36:362 - Missing note.
00:39:175 - Missing note.

The streams would be much better if you just followed the piano intead of just making it constant 1/4 notes. However you should ask someone else before doing it as I might be wrong and it's a major change. I was told that the streams are more or less okay. Only some some shapes should be changed maybe and stuff like that.

01:28:675 Missing note.
01:34:675 Missing note.
01:40:675 Missing note.
01:46:675 Missing note.

02:03:269 (1) - I would rather keep going with the stream instead of that abrupt pause + spinner. I think it's actually okay like it is.

02:32:894 (5) - That long slider feels a bit forced.

03:18:175 - Missing note.
03:24:175 - Missing note.
03:30:175 - Missing note.
03:36:175 - Missing note.

03:51:550 (7,9) - Sliders that start on blue ticks and end on white ticks are a bad idea, they are hard to follow. Start the sliders on the red ticks and add the hitcircles after them.

Bonsai wrote:

I'm glad we decided not to do this in irc because it turned out to be quite a lot ^^ I hope it helps!

[Full Moon]

1. To be exact, the true timing settings of the intro are either 80bpm with 2/4-time signature or 240bpm with 3/4-signature (or 6/8 but the editor doesn't allow that), since it is a waltz. I guess you can leave it as it is, at least I've seen other maps doing that, but you still have to keep that in mind for the following reasons:
   1. The NCs should generally be set on every (for the 2/4- and 6/8-setting) or every second (for 3/4) big white tic. As a guideline if you don't change it: NCs should be at 00:01:769 - 00:03:269 - 00:04:769 - 00:06:269 - ..and so on.
   2. Generally, every third beat is more important than the two beats in-between, so sqaures and other patterns that need 'groups' of four rarely work. For example at 00:02:519 (2,3,4,5) - the (5) should be differentiated from 2-3-4 as it belongs to a new 'group' and therefore deserves more/different emphasis. Most of the next few points go back to this.
2. 00:01:019 (1,2,3,4,5) - imo in the song the notes at 1, 2 and 3 are equally important and form a 'buil-dup' to 5, the most important note here. But stacking 2 under 1 gives the 2 no emphasis and relatively much to the 3, and since 5 goes in the same direction as 3-4-5 it gets no emphasis at all, especially since 3-4-5 forces you to move faster than sliderspeed. Soo I'd suggest to unstack 1 and 2 and rotate 5 so that you have to move in a sharp angle there to give it its deserved emphasis.
3. 00:03:769 (1,2,3,4) - The (3) is the most important beat here. Now in triplets it is kinda impossible to emphasize the last note primarily, but what influences it is the angle to the following note. Currently, 1-2-3 flows perfectly into 4. The result of that is that the 3 is not emphasized at all because you don't have to actively do anything there. If you place the 4 like this you have to change direction there, giving it some emphasis. (actually learned that from Jenny ^^)
4. 00:04:769 (1,2,3) - Again, the (3) is the most important beat but gets no emphasis since 1-2 flows perfectly into 2-3 and 2-3 flows perfectly into the direction of the slider. -> move the slider somewhere else
5. 00:05:519 (3,4) - (4) is very important again but barely emphasized as it's extremely close to 3, especially since you can leave (3) early due to slider-leniency
6. 00:06:269 (4,1,2,3) - Again because of this part being a waltz (4) and (3) should be the most important notes, but you strongly emphasized (1) by spacing it so much and placing it 180° from the slider

These problems occur multiple times in the rest of the intro, so I won't point those out anymore.

1. 00:16:269 (4,5,6,7,1) - uuh (5) is overmapped, and if it weren't this is incredibly hard to play (relatively) because of the many changes of direction D:
2. Just to be sure, if you changed the timing settings of the intro 00:25:019 would be where it changes to 160bpm, and you'd need to set another 160bpm-timing point at 00:25:769 so the big white tics are aligned correctly again
3. 00:25:769 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2) - The song stays rhythmically the exact same in these three combos, but in the first and third one you map only 1/1 and in the second one you map 1/2 - choose one, stay consistent with what you map. Did you want to emphasize the major beats at 00:28:769 - 00:29:519 and 00:30:269 ? First of all, you can give them enough emphasis by simply spacing/angling/hitsounding them, and you'd have to do it equally with 00:25:769 - 00:26:519 and 00:27:269 - (definitely don't stack 00:26:144 (2,3) anyways ^^)
4. Since you mapped 00:35:800 (6) and 00:36:362 (2) it would be logical to map 00:36:737 too. Alternatively, don't map 00:36:362 (2) too.
5. 00:43:019 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - (2) is actually overmapped - Since I previously critized overmaps like these on other maps too (= those of the german beatmap contest) I do know now that appearently nobody cares about that when it's 'undetectable' because of the hitsounds, but I'm still not a fan of it. But that's not what bugs me here, my problem is that according to the actual rhythm (5) is (next to (1)) the most important note here, as (3,4) are building up onto that note. -> change this in a way that (5) gets more emphasis - the minimum would be to curve (5,6,7,8) in the same way as (1,2,3,4) but in the other direction, that way you have to turn at (5) giving it some of its deserved emphasis.
6. 00:49:019 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - same as above

Ok now here's something major: From 00:51:269 until 01:26:519 you mapped all 1/4 (the minor exceptions are irrelevant). But there is not a single instrument that has permanent 1/4-beats here, they just have breaks on different beats so there's always something that plays. This is extremely boring to play and actually not fitting to the song, because in different parts different instuments are more important than the others, they are not all equally important!

1. From 00:51:269 to 00:57:269 either the piano or the drum-cymbals(?) are the prominent instruments and rhythms.
2. From 00:57:269 to 01:03:269 either the piano or the guitar are the most important ones. One example of why mapping everything 1/4 is that on many parts in this section the piano is playing 1/3 - 00:58:394 (7,8,1) and 01:00:269 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) and 01:01:769 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - but this gets ignored and it doesn't feel like you're playing to the song anymore since those 1/3s are covered by monotonous 1/4s
3. 01:08:331 (4,5,6,7,8,1) - Here, the drums are extremely important, but their rhythm gets covered by monotonous 1/4
4. beats like 01:20:987 (8) seem overmapped because the only instrument playing there, the piano, is extremely silent, unnoticable with hitsounds

..and so on. Always choose certain instruments/rhythms to focus on, don't just cover everything up

1. 01:27:644 (5) - the beat at 01:28:019 deserves more emphasis, the end of a short reverse-slider doesn't give any
2. 01:28:581 (8,9) - Those are two different beats by two different instruments, neither of them plays on both, but a triplet consisting of at least two circles would suggest that it's just one instrument playing all three beats. My solution would be making these two circles into a 1/4-slider. On 100% it sounds like both instruments are on the (8) anyways ^^
3. 01:29:894 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2) - You really need to think about what you want to emphasize. The first (1,2) are a build-up to (3), so they should not have that much emphasis (or (3) should have more, but that would be a difficulty spike). The beat at (5) is the next really important one, but it gets even less emphasis than the other notes because you barely have to change direction from 3-4 to 4-5. (7,8,9,10) are four very important notes, but they don't stand out in the map because they have the same emphasis as the less important notes (1,2,4,6). And the next four beats, which you mapped with two sliders, are exactly the same as (7,8,9,10) but you mapped them differently, which is inconsistent because nothing in the music changes to justify sliders, and sliders give less emphasis to their tails. (7,8,9,10) and these two sliders should be mapped with the same objects and with the same internal distance spacing, but still be seperated from another. You could do that for example with two squares that are rotated or change direction.
4. 01:42:269 (1,2) - (2) gets basically no emphasis since the first slider flows right into its head and the second slider continues in almost the same direction
5. 01:51:175 - since you mapped the previous barely audible 1/4s you should map this one too, it's exactly the same
6. 01:51:644 (2,3) - 01:52:769 (1,2,3) - 01:54:269 (1) - those are actually 1/3
7. 02:03:269 (1) - there is no sound at all that justifies this spinner - you could just remove it and extend the draining time or whatever like this
8. Previously you mapped a section like the one starting at 02:10:769 with 1/4-only but now you map barely 1/4 any at all? Either you map only sliders like 02:10:769 (1,2,3) and 02:12:269 (1,2,3) until 02:16:019 - without any circles in-between, as those beats are all the same - or you map all of the 1/4s from the guitars, but only mapping 02:13:769 (1) and 02:14:519 (4) is just very random and inconsistent
9. Again the point with mapping 1/4-only from 02:16:769 to 02:28:769 but then stopping it although nothing really changes - decide and stay consistent with it
10. You will obviously need hitsounding for rank
11. The map is not really aesthetically pleasing - try to have a general design for the map, blanket things, make some sliders parallel, do some squares, triangles, and other patterns - I guess basically what this map needs is what some call 'quality' : \

So yeah, I'll stop now since it's just the same problems over and over again, if you understand my points then you should be able to figure out everything else too. I won't mod the other difficulties because this already took me really long, and I'm pretty sure that what I pointed out in this one applies at least to some degree to the others too. But I hope it doesn't demotivate you and that you understand my points and can learn from them, good luck!

Kotori-Chan wrote:

as requested ;w;

-FULL MOON-

00:35:144 (3,4) - put these two at the end of 00:35:894 (7) -

put this 03:31:769 (1) - at the end of 03:32:519 (5) -

maybe make this one 01:35:144 (2) - blanket a little bit better with 01:35:894 (4) -

-LUNATIC-

First of all,you really should fix that unsnapped slider objects D: that ai mod shows

01:47:706 (6) - i dont really know,but somehow this one should have the same distance as the jumps before,up to you if change or not
ofc you have to place that slider 01:47:894 (7) - somewhere else if you decide to change ;w;



acutally thats all,sry for small mod,but most stuff is already fixed ><
well,good luck with ranking >w</