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FictionJunction - Toki no Mukou, Maboroshi no Sora (TV Size)

posted 2010-03-11T02:07:48+00:00

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gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-11T02:07:48+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Tuesday, March 30, 2010 at 2:37:20 PM

Artist: FictionJunction
Title: Toki no Mukou, Maboroshi no Sora (TV Size)
Source: Ookami kakushi
Tags: Jouga Wolves Psp
BPM: 156
Filesize: 4189kb
Play Time: 01:24
Difficulties Available:

Hard (4.59 stars, 164 notes)
Normal (3.64 stars, 117 notes)

Download: FictionJunction - Toki no Mukou, Maboroshi no Sora (TV Size)
Download: FictionJunction - Toki no Mukou, Maboroshi no Sora (TV Size) (no video)
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Enjoy ^^

Changed Background.
Please redownload if you downloaded this before 03/20/2010. ^^

Last edited by gfbrd 2010-03-30T21:37:23+00:00, edited 17 times in total.

blade3285

Joined January 2009

blade3285 2010-03-11T04:16:31+00:00

Normal

00:10:545 - make note longer to match the word?
00:13:045 - make it a slider? might be hard for normal
00:16:122 - ^
00:22:852 - same as first comment
00:25:352 - make slider?
00:30:173 - (3) and (4) and the following stream don't seem to be matching anything, unless that's intentional
00:54:006 - This instrumental part seems kinda strange... is the timing okay here?

Hard

00:29:391 - doesn't seem to be matching the song
00:55:352 - what a big jump

I like your hard better lol

Astom

Joined October 2008

Astom 2010-03-11T05:26:10+00:00

In blue suggestions, in red maybe imporatant
[General]
-Search for a better bg and resize to 1024x768

[Normal]
-Acc 100%

[Hard]
-Acc 94%
-Change color of hitcircles, why? only see this

Nice song star :3

Furawa

Joined April 2009

Furawa 2010-03-11T06:59:48+00:00

like this song

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-12T01:54:46+00:00

Thank you Blade3285 and Astom for your help. ^^

SOGASOGAMO: Yea, I like that song too. ^^

vytalibus

osu! Alumni

Joined May 2008

vytalibus 2010-03-12T03:37:01+00:00

[Hard]
00:07:817 (1,2) - ? This pattern doesn't sound right here. I suggest you just replace these with a single slider.
00:20:124 (1,2) - ^
00:36:278 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - This combo is friggin' long, time-wise. I suggest you add a new combo at (5).
00:52:432 (5) - Unless you can justify why you placed a slowdown here, remove it.
00:54:547 (4,1) - More of a personal thing, but this is a rather far and quick jump.
01:16:855 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - Somehow, I don't approve of this stream. It looked like it came out of nowhere, and it does not fit the music.

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-12T04:10:56+00:00

Thank you for your help vytalibus. ^^

Colin Hou

osu! Alumni

Joined November 2009

Colin Hou 2010-03-13T20:01:42+00:00

nice map.

some sugguestions:

[Normal]

decrease the use of whistle,imo
[01:24:355(1)] how about start the spinner at [01:24:740]?
[01:27:817] cancel the whistle and add a finish at the end.

[Hard]

add finish sound at the end spinner.
[01:06:855(5)] make this circle snapped to the end of (4).

check the hitsounds and improve your map. star~

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-14T04:45:13+00:00

Thank you Colin Hou for your help. ^^

Leorda

Joined June 2009

Leorda 2010-03-15T06:32:36+00:00

Hi!

[Normal]
This diff need to rename, rename it to Normal+

[Hard]
00:10:509 (8) - Reverse this slider, it's confusing
00:22:817 (8) - ^
00:44:740 (3) - New combo?

Good song
STAR

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-16T05:48:55+00:00

Thank you for your help Leorda. ^^

Breeze

osu! Alumni

Joined March 2009

Breeze 2010-03-17T03:02:11+00:00

Timing sounds fine

[General]

source : Ookami Kakushi, leave a space better
Black combo colour is hard to see while playing since there are many black colour in video and background

[Normal]

01:24:740 (x) - I feel spinner starts here better, maybe add a note at 01:24:355
01:27:817 (S) - I prefer to silence the end

[Hard]

01:24:740 (x) - I feel spinner starts here better, maybe add some notes before
01:27:817 (S) - I prefer to silence the end

nice map
star

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-17T05:12:46+00:00

Thank you Breeze. ^^

Breeze

osu! Alumni

Joined March 2009

Breeze 2010-03-17T08:11:45+00:00

Get 8+SP and some more mod
Call me back when you need a pubble

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-17T22:26:39+00:00

kk thanks Breeze. ^^

Kecco

Joined September 2009

Kecco 2010-03-18T16:21:24+00:00

•Hard•
00:55:509 (1) - Bad jump, fix it. Please~

That's all~
Nice Map~
Star~

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-19T00:43:42+00:00

Thank you Kecco for your help. ^^

Hikato

Joined August 2008

Hikato 2010-03-19T00:55:11+00:00

Nice. o:

Didn't find anything. ;-;

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-19T02:01:30+00:00

Thanks for your help anyways Hikato. ^^

Vampiresonata

Joined January 2009

Vampiresonata 2010-03-19T02:53:39+00:00

Your doing great! :3 make more beatmaps!!

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-19T03:03:47+00:00

I'll think about it Vampiresonata. xD

James2250

osu! Alumni

Joined July 2008

James2250 2010-03-19T03:36:51+00:00

Normal:
00:13:586 (4) - extend to 00:14:740?
00:25:894 (4) - extend to 00:27:047?
00:36:278 (1) - remove new combo
00:38:201 (4) - new combo
00:45:894 (1) - remove new combo
01:01:663 (1,2) - align
01:01:663 (1) - remove new combo
01:03:201 (6) - new combo
01:04:355 (1) - remove new combo
01:06:278 (7) - new combo?
01:24:740 (1) - add whistle

Hard:
make sure all the timing sections (not including kiai) are placed 1/4 before the note
01:01:663 (1) - remove new combo
01:03:201 (3) - new combo
01:04:355 (1) - remove new combo
01:06:278 (7) - new combo

PM me after fixes and I will pubble
*star*

Pubbled!!

Diasios

Joined August 2008

Diasios 2010-03-19T08:04:29+00:00

[General]

• Offset 895 (resnap all notes)
• PreviewTime: 56663
• Why don't you make another diff?

[Normal]

• 01:24:741 (1) - Mute this slider

[Hard]

• 01:24:741 (1) - Mute this slider

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-20T00:34:22+00:00

Thank you for your help xxheroxx. ^^

Shulin

Joined August 2009

Shulin 2010-03-20T18:29:42+00:00

General:

-- Can you find a better quality wallpaper?
-- I'd remove the purple combo color the approach circle blends in with the BG sometimes. (Replace it with a lighter color imo)
-- Offset 125

Normal:

01:24:741 (1) - Make spinner silent?

Hard:

01:23:778 (3) - New combo for the slight jump.
01:24:740 (1) - Imo make the end of the spinner silent.

Nice map overall, you could add another difficulty but it's not essential

~ Star.

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-20T19:21:34+00:00

Thank you for your help Shulin. ^^

Unfortunately I cannot find a better background pic. I've been looking for a better one for a while now, still no luck. >.<

Shulin

Joined August 2009

Shulin 2010-03-20T19:53:25+00:00

Try this maybe.

And add "psp" to tags

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-20T23:16:05+00:00

Fixed.

Thanks for helping me find a better background picture. ^^

abalee

osu! Alumni

Joined June 2008

abalee 2010-03-27T04:06:50+00:00

Hard:
01:24:548 (5) - deleted?

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-03-27T05:32:10+00:00

Fixed. Thank you Abalee. ^^

yaya

osu! Alumni

Joined November 2008

yaya 2010-03-30T12:04:38+00:00

i think your claps are on wrong place.

like pic, will be better.

not on long white tick

abalee

osu! Alumni

Joined June 2008

abalee 2010-04-01T07:46:44+00:00

Bubbled.

yaya

osu! Alumni

Joined November 2008

yaya 2010-04-02T23:43:36+00:00

ranked

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-04-03T01:30:08+00:00

Awsome thanks. ^^

Sekuyi

Joined December 2009

Sekuyi 2010-04-04T10:53:52+00:00

Nice Maps. But maybe put a better vid

There's a lot of noise in it.

I've got one question to the BAT. Actually, how to get your attention for pending maps? For me it looks like the creation dates and stars doesn't care at all (ok, the star part everyone knows).

gfbrd

Joined May 2009

Topic Starter

gfbrd 2010-04-04T16:09:23+00:00

Thanks for your feedback Sekuyi, its pretty hard for me to find a video too, same with the background. I've tried looking for a better video before, but I couldn't find one so I used whatever I found. Also since its already ranked I'm not going to change aynthing. >_<

Also I can help you answer your question.
Try posting on modding queues for people to mod your map.

Heres the link:
viewforum.php?f=60

You can also try talking in #mod and try to get their attention there.
Hope it helps.

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