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Kakihara Tetsuya - ocean flying

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Starfall9908
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Starfall9908
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on den 1 maj 2015 at 22:25:57

Artist: Kakihara Tetsuya
Title: ocean flying
Tags: Call Me Voice Actor Seiyuu Kiramune 宮崎誠 Miyazaki Makoto
BPM: 134
Filesize: 6132kb
Play Time: 04:14
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (1,37 stars, 221 notes)
  2. Hard (3,27 stars, 595 notes)
  3. Normal (1,81 stars, 341 notes)
Download: Kakihara Tetsuya - ocean flying
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My 4th beatmap

First ranked beatmap

I know that the BG is too hot for Osu!

Easy: 100%
Normal: 100%
Hard: 100%

Hollow Wings
Leorda

Thank You For Modding
  1. Loli Master
  2. Chaoslitz
  3. Owntrolf
  4. Pereira006
  5. Yuthuil
  6. Celizavia
  7. FlobuFlobs
  8. Turonant
  9. Okdesu
  10. Mood Breaker
  11. DraQue
  12. Gleipnir
  13. Mangocurry
  14. Z3R0Xx
  15. Gray Veyron
  16. CelsiusLK
  17. Neonat
  18. Sellenite
  19. VINXIS
  20. Jloughman14
  21. SukiNathan
  22. Pjecoo
  23. Makemek
  24. Mira-san
  25. Hollow Wings
  26. Leorda

Call Me

Call Me is Kakihara Tetsuya's third mini album and it was released 13/03/2013
Last edited by Starfall9908 , edited 93 times in total.
[ Nep ]
140 posts
Joined December 2012
[ Nep ]
Timing Mod

Timing Point/s:

00:07:357 - At 134 Bpm.

Good luck with the Beatmap! ;)
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908
Thanks for the help I've changed the timing :D
Chaoslitz
Elite Mapper / Elite Storyboarder
2,307 posts
Joined November 2013
Chaoslitz
Hi,it's me :3/

00:43:177 (1) - Change the shape of the slider
Example: http://puu.sh/blgv5/b12c58c8ed.jpg
01:25:715 (1) - Spinner
Start from 01:26:162 (1) with a stronger rhythm in my opinion
02:03:327 (2) - Not really following the rhythm
Suggest: http://puu.sh/blgPx/abe87d436e.jpg

I hope this is helpful :3
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908

Chaoslitz wrote:

Hi,it's me :3/

00:43:177 (1) - Change the shape of the slider
Example: http://puu.sh/blgv5/b12c58c8ed.jpg Changed
01:25:715 (1) - Spinner
Start from 01:26:162 (1) with a stronger rhythm in my opinion Changed
02:03:327 (2) - Not really following the rhythm
Suggest: http://puu.sh/blgPx/abe87d436e.jpg Is it better now?

I hope this is helpful :3
Thank you for modding I updated the map so If you don't mind please take a look
Chaoslitz
Elite Mapper / Elite Storyboarder
2,307 posts
Joined November 2013
Chaoslitz
Normal

00:26:162 (1,2) - Don't stack it ;-; (Just my opinion)
00:57:506 (1,2,3) - Add two more notes 00:58:849 (4,5) - And start spinner at 00:59:297
01:55:267 (2,3) - Same as 00:26:162 (1,2)
02:33:103 (1) - Spinner 02:33:327 (1) -
02:36:909 (2,3) Same stacked sliders
03:31:759-03:34:894 Try not to empty at here
03:47:879 (1) - Spinner start at 03:48:103 (1) with same place to end
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908
I made the changes. Thank you :D
Owntrolf
546 posts
Joined December 2013
Owntrolf
Le Modformod

I might do the GD when I have the time

Hard
  1. 00:07:356 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Might want to make sliders align with the circles for it to look better
  2. 00:14:521 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - This area is a bit cramped and confusing to read
  3. 00:21:909 - Could probably have a circle here for better flow or replace 00:21:685 (1) with a slider to the red tick
  4. 00:22:133 (2,3,4,1,2,3,1) - Could probably look nicer by spacing them a little bit more since they're overlapping the edge a little bit
  5. 00:36:013 (1,2,3,1) - Same thing here
  6. 00:51:013 - Might need a circle here
  7. 01:52:133 (3,4) - Has some edge overlap
  8. 01:53:028 (1,2,3,1) - More edge overlap
  9. 01:55:491 (3,4) - Edge overlap
  10. 01:56:274 (5,6) - Feels awkward wan played, 5 isnt needed
  11. 02:10:491 (4) - End earlier on the red tick and have a circle on the white tick
  12. 02:16:983 (2,3,4) - Could remove 2,3 and move 4 to the red tick and have circles placed on the white and red tick after it
  13. 02:52:133 - This section feels like theres too many triplets
CreepyguyinsexyposeasBG
Starfall9908
663 posts
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Starfall9908

Owntrolf wrote:

Le Modformod

I might do the GD when I have the time

Hard
  1. 00:07:356 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Might want to make sliders align with the circles for it to look better Is this better?
  2. 00:14:521 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - This area is a bit cramped and confusing to read Changed
  3. 00:21:909 - Could probably have a circle here for better flow or replace 00:21:685 (1) with a slider to the red tick Changed
  4. 00:22:133 (2,3,4,1,2,3,1) - Could probably look nicer by spacing them a little bit more since they're overlapping the edge a little bit Changed
  5. 00:36:013 (1,2,3,1) - Same thing here Changed
  6. 00:51:013 - Might need a circle here Added
  7. 01:52:133 (3,4) - Has some edge overlap Changed
  8. 01:53:028 (1,2,3,1) - More edge overlap Changed
  9. 01:55:491 (3,4) - Edge overlap Changed
  10. 01:56:274 (5,6) - Feels awkward wan played, 5 isnt needed Changed it
  11. 02:10:491 (4) - End earlier on the red tick and have a circle on the white tick Changed. It's a lot better now
  12. 02:16:983 (2,3,4) - Could remove 2,3 and move 4 to the red tick and have circles placed on the white and red tick after it Changed
  13. 02:52:133 - This section feels like theres too many triplets Changed


CreepyguyinsexyposeasBG
Chaoslitz
Elite Mapper / Elite Storyboarder
2,307 posts
Joined November 2013
Chaoslitz
NM from my queue

Hard
00:10:939 (1,2,3) - Move this a little bit upper
00:38:700 (4) - Move to x:404 y:56
00:43:177 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - This part seems a lot of single note overlap together ;-;
00:51:237 (2) - Don't overlap this :3
01:01:088 This part have many empty place, try add more notes.

Rhythm is nice, but try not to overlap few single notes together :3
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908
Hard Difficulty is updated
Pereira006
osu! Alumni
2,801 posts
Joined October 2010
Pereira006
Hi, ty m4m

General

The combo 1 and combo 5 they are very similiar, you don't have to do that, and that so hard read, remove Combo 5, if you do that, you have re-combo color for all diff's
Remove "Ocean Flying" from tags, there aldready in title so everbody will be easy search, no need this in tags, remove it

[Ocean]

Setup:

HP +1
Od -1

lot better and better read

hitsound:

  • 00:20:342 (3) - end slider, i don't feel clap fit this, remove it
    00:25:267 (1) - end slider, the sampleset you missing change soft to drum
Gameplay:

  • 00:08:700 (5) - Overlay with 00:09:371 (2,3) is kindy bad nad hard read, try avoid this overlay
    00:09:371 (2,3) - inconsistency spacing
    00:20:789 (4,1) - inconsistency spacing
    00:53:924 (1) - New combo color, The lyrics and drum start high, still fit if new combo
    01:44:073 (1,2,1) - Swap new combo I mean this http://puu.sh/bwpyE/3883decba9.jpg
    01:57:282 (2,3) - this spacing is confuse, this timing (01:57:394) should remove and fix spacing, this just confuse
    02:55:715 (7) - New combo
[Normal]

Setup:

OD -1

Gameplay:

  • 00:12:282 (4) - Stack with 00:10:491 (3) ? if you do carefully spacing
    00:32:879 (2) - Need improve blanket with 00:34:222 (1)
    01:18:998 (1,2) - that note stack in end sldier is kindy lot hard for this normal, could be unstack, don't forget spacing
    01:40:939 (2,3) - the (2) in start is hidden that repeat slider in 01:41:834 (3), this is too later read, and nobody know this slider have repeat or not, is not good in normal, change place or remap this part.
    02:00:640 (2) - need improve blanket with 02:01:983 (1)
    02:22:133 (3,4,5) - too hard this stack, should be unstack
    03:31:759 - 03:34:894 add something, HP is dying a lot
[Easy]

Setup

http://puu.sh/bwsIU/0bf4b892b4.png is better a lot for this diff my opinion


Gameplay:

  • 00:13:177 (3,1) - Swap new combo and put new combo color in 00:14:968 (3) http://puu.sh/bwsQj/b883e13c96.jpg
    00:34:222 (3,4,1) - kindy lot overlay and hard read
    00:34:222 (3,4) - Is not fine stack in end slider, this is easy, so should be unstack
    01:47:655 (1,2) - inconsistency spacing
    02:30:640 (1,2) - is hard stack, unstack
    03:46:312 (1,2) - ^ same
[]
Gameplay should be improve a lot
The histound really need more work, there kindy lot missing, missing pattern hitsound, Example in Normal 01:08:252 (1) - this slider have clap but in Ocean 01:08:476 (2) - in end slider don't have clap, why? all hitsound pattern should be same all diff's is better a lot
So, Gameplay is nice but need improve, and hitsound really need more work
I wish good luck you map, and keep it strong
Yuthuil
476 posts
Joined April 2014
Yuthuil
General:
01:01:088 Put Kiai here.

Easy:

You have a few DS problems, fix.
00:07:356 (1,2) - Blanket properly. (This is very important, it is terrible to look at a map with bad blanketing) Use the approach circle as a guide. [url]puu.sh/bxfTc/7db5541b80.jpg[/url]
00:08:252 (2,3) - ^
00:23:476 (4) - End point x344 y76.
00:25:267 (1,2) - Blanket properly.
00:27:058 (3,4) - Blanket properly.
00:32:431 (1) - Move to x432 y224.
00:32:431 (1,2,3) - Try this? http://puu.sh/bxg4w/db3bcfe6a5.jpg
00:38:700 (3,4) - Stacking is not easy friendly. Rearrange.
00:39:595 (1,2) - Blanket properly.
00:43:177 (1) - Bad slider placement, try thinking of new one?
00:44:968 (2,1) - Blanket properly.
00:46:759 (1,3) - ^
00:51:237 (2,3) - Rearrange.
00:53:476 (5) - Move to x348 y296, to align with four properly.
00:57:506 (1) - lol map this, there's so much to map.
01:02:431 (2,3) - Blanket properly.
01:04:222 (1,2) - move one tick forward? It suits background music and vocal more imo
01:06:909 (4,5) - Rearrange, don't stack
01:14:073 (1) - Lol, i think you should map imo, feels kinda forced
01:16:759 (2,3) - Rearrange.
01:18:998 (1,2) - Blanket properly.
01:22:580 (3) - move to x60 y296
01:26:162 (1) - end here ---> 01:29:968
01:40:491 (1,2) - Blanket properly.
01:44:521 (2) - overlap is ugly, fix
01:57:506 (2,3) - rearrange.
01:58:401 (1,2) - Find a better way for this
02:09:148 (1,2) - Blanket properly.
02:21:237 (2,1) - rearrange.
02:22:133 (2) - x232 y312
02:26:610 (4,1) - rearrange.
02:28:401 (3,4) - ^
02:32:431 (1) - Map imo, or move to 02:33:327.
02:35:565 (2,3) - rearrange.
02:43:625 (1) - move to red tick in front.
02:57:506 (1) - avoid this in easy or normal.
03:07:804 (2,3) - try this, [url]puu.sh/bxhsj/ef1c6d1667.jpg[/url]
03:14:073 (1) - I don't know why this is here. aswell, it's way too long for easy mode.
03:25:267 (1,1,2) - rearrange, too confusing for easy.
03:37:804 (4,5) - Rearrange.
03:41:834 (4,1) - ^
03:50:789 (2,3) - ^
04:08:700 (3,4) - ^
04:10:491 (2,3) - ^
04:11:386 (1) - leaves too little reaction time for beginners, remove imo
04:13:177 (1) - slider and hitcircle works better here imo.

Sorry am busy at mo will mod other diffs maybe tomoz

GL
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908
Thank you for the mod. I made the changes (not all of them though)
KUURAhoshi
585 posts
Joined January 2014
KUURAhoshi
EDIT : After i take a look on your beatmap,
Your beatmap was terrible ..

Seriously.. You use bad quality song..
Hear the ending...

I recommend you to download the better quality of this song..

Small mod : Remove Tetsuya Kakihara from the tags.. Artist has contain this Metadata..

Cancelled by 09/14/2014
I apologize for having done this.. Take my star..
Celizavia
568 posts
Joined October 2013
Celizavia

Kazamastar11 wrote:

EDIT : After i take a look on your beatmap,
Your beatmap was terrible ..

please, eventhough he/she isnt a great mapper in your opinion please dont say any rude words to the map, its breaking his/her heart

Random mod :D

General
  1. i think there is something wrong with your bpm, consider asking a bat or someone experienced to solve this
  2. i think the "ocean" diff should be just named Hard, what does Ocean stands for :v
Easy
  1. CS 3 please, imo CS 2 is too big and doesnt look really pretty
  2. from 00:09:595(1) until 00:12:730
  3. 00:17:654(2) blanket better
  4. 00:36:461(2) ^
  5. 01:20:789(1,2)
  6. 02:08:700 add a note?
  7. 02:32:431(1) overlap, please place this to somewhere else
  8. 02:42:730 add a note
  9. 02:43:177(1) remove NC
Normal
  1. at 00:27:506, u can clearly see that the slider (2) and the circle (5) are overlapped in a bad way, plase fix this
  2. overlapped issues, u can see it at 01:22:804
  3. please dont make a awkward break at 01:24:819
  4. the spinner should starts at 02:17:879
  5. the spinner should ended at 02:34:222
  6. 02:40:043(3) this spinner breaks the flow, maybe this? http://puu.sh/byrvU/0cdab77343.jpg
Ocean

  • overall this diff has already got the rhtym, but the placement isnt nearly great, i suggest u make some consistent DS and some jumps at the kiai
Good luck
FlobuFlobs
583 posts
Joined June 2011
FlobuFlobs
From mah queue
i dont know too much about hard diffs and even less about normal/easy so i let them out


[General]Are there more tags like album or such things?Dat Mp3 cut lol, do you another version of this song?

[Ocean]00:08:700 (5,3) - this overlapp looks ugly lol, move 00:08:700 (5,1,2) - lower?
SPOILER
00:12:058 (4) - stack this one behind 00:11:162 (2) - ? and snap 00:12:282 (5) - ? just for the look00:15:640 (4) - this one is extremly bad to play because 00:15:416 - here's the loud beat but the repeat stops here
so remove reapeat, and add slider at the following 2 white ticks instead
SPOILER
00:16:759 (3,4,5) - ^00:19:222 (5,6,1,2,3) - fix the blanket lol00:32:207 (7,1,2) - this is not really readable, the spacing 00:32:431 (1,2) - here looks exactly like 00:32:207 (7,1) -
space 00:32:879 (2) - more00:32:879 (2,4) - copy pasta one of them, looks better (ctrl+c - copy) (ctrl + v - paste)00:58:849 (1) - short this repeat by 1 and let the next slider start here 00:59:297 -
follow the rhythm better01:04:670 (1,2,3) - 01:04:670 (1,2,3) - ctrl g , flows better01:22:133 (4,2) - again copy pasta one of them 02:07:357 (1) - ctrl+g here for a circle flow?02:07:804 (2) - stack better02:25:267 (1) - this one should look to the next slider, flows better
SPOILER
02:34:670 - a slider should start here to emphasize the vocals better02:57:506 (1) - Unrankable03:08:588 (2) - move to X244 Y148 for smoother transition?03:09:371 (5) - let the one look at 03:09:819 (6) -
SPOILER
03:12:954 (3,4,5) - move them a bit lower to avoid overlapping03:53:924 (4,5,6,1) - copy pasta one of them again
Last edited by FlobuFlobs , edited 1 time in total.
FlobuFlobs
583 posts
Joined June 2011
FlobuFlobs
Waaaatafark noooooo it fucked up my post Q_Q and i cant edit q________________q

fuck this shit, fixxed
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908

FlobuFlobs wrote:

From mah queue
i dont know too much about hard diffs and even less about normal/easy so i let them out


[General]Are there more tags like album or such things? AddedDat Mp3 cut lol, do you another version of this song? I searched for another mp3 file but didn't find any.

[Ocean]00:08:700 (5,3) - this overlapp looks ugly lol, move 00:08:700 (5,1,2) - lower?
SPOILER
00:12:058 (4) - stack this one behind 00:11:162 (2) - ? and snap 00:12:282 (5) - ? just for the look00:15:640 (4) - this one is extremly bad to play because 00:15:416 - here's the loud beat but the repeat stops here
so remove reapeat, and add slider at the following 2 white ticks instead
SPOILER
00:16:759 (3,4,5) - ^00:19:222 (5,6,1,2,3) - fix the blanket lol00:32:207 (7,1,2) - this is not really readable, the spacing 00:32:431 (1,2) - here looks exactly like 00:32:207 (7,1) -
space 00:32:879 (2) - more00:32:879 (2,4) - copy pasta one of them, looks better (ctrl+c - copy) (ctrl + v - paste)00:58:849 (1) - short this repeat by 1 and let the next slider start here 00:59:297 -
follow the rhythm better01:04:670 (1,2,3) - 01:04:670 (1,2,3) - ctrl g , flows better01:22:133 (4,2) - again copy pasta one of them 02:07:357 (1) - ctrl+g here for a circle flow?02:07:804 (2) - stack better02:25:267 (1) - this one should look to the next slider, flows better
SPOILER
02:34:670 - a slider should start here to emphasize the vocals better02:57:506 (1) - Unrankable I didn't actually want to delete it but since it's unrankable so do I have no other choises Q _ Q03:08:588 (2) - move to X244 Y148 for smoother transition?03:09:371 (5) - let the one look at 03:09:819 (6) -
SPOILER
03:12:954 (3,4,5) - move them a bit lower to avoid overlapping03:53:924 (4,5,6,1) - copy pasta one of them again
Thank you for modding the rest that I didn't comment is changed.
truonant
408 posts
Joined October 2013
truonant

Kazamastar11 wrote:

EDIT : After i take a look on your beatmap,
Your beatmap was terrible ..
That's very rude to say

Anyways.. M4M


You have many upbeat sliders and as a result it leaves the downbeats unstressed and it feels awkward to play
The hitsounds left me confused. There are claps on the first downbeat and then on the red tick just after the upbeat when there isn’t really anything there that needs a clap. The claps should be on every 2nd and 4th beat.
00:10:043 (4) - Could be blanketed better
00:12:058 (4) – Not perfectly stacked on top of 00:10:939 (1) –
00:14:968 (3) - better blanket
00:25:267 (1,1) - better blanket on 00:26:610 (2) –
00:25:267 (1,2,1) - you can make these symmetrical
00:32:431 (1) – not a perfect stack
00:56:386 (2,3,4) – stack perfectly on slider tail of 00:55:267 (4) –
02:04:670 (5) – Make this symmetrical with 02:04:222 (3) –
02:12:730 (1,2) – increase distance between the two
02:24:371 (4) – more distance
02:31:536 (4) – stack on 02:30:192 (5) –
02:32:431 (1) – stack on 02:31:088 (3) –
02:56:610 (3,5) - Try stacking on slider tail of 02:55:267 (6) –
02:57:282 (6) – stack on slider head of 02:55:267 (6) –
At this point there are a lot of places where you could make better blankets
blankets
00:29:968 (5) –
00:48:103 (5) –
00:50:342 (1) –
01:58:849 (3,4,5) –
02:00:640 (3,4,5) –
02:02:431 (3) –
02:03:774 (1,2,3) –
02:07:357 (1,2,3,4,5) - 02:12:730 (1) –
02:36:237 (2) –
02:52:133 (1,2) –
02:55:267 (6) –
02:55:939 (2) –
03:47:207 (3) -
 



00:13:177 (2,1) – blanket
00:31:088 (2,1) -^
00:32:879 (2,1) – ^
00:45:416 (2,1,2) - ^
01:02:879 (1) – stack perfect on 01:01:088 (1) –
01:23:476 (2,2) – blanket
01:40:939 (2,3) - ^
02:09:148 (1,2) - ^
02:12:282 (3,4) – ^
02:43:177 (1,2) - ^
03:42:282 (1,2) –
04:04:222 (3,1) –
04:06:013 (2,1,2,3) -

The blankets distracted me so it's what I focused this mod on, but I think you should also rethink the hitsounds. Good luck with your map! If you have any questions, or would like to watch me testplay your map, feel free to message me in-game
okdesu_old
76 posts
Joined November 2012
okdesu_old
from Endless modding queue~

suggestion
should fix
must fix

[Hard]
  1. 00:20:789 (4) - 1 more tick
  2. 00:55:155 (3) - remove
  3. 00:59:968 (4) - fill all except blue tick
  4. 01:01:759 (2,4) - remove
  5. 01:02:655 - add note
  6. 01:03:551 - add note
  7. 01:06:461 (1,2,3) - move 2 here 01:07:133 - , move 3 here 01:07:357 -
  8. 01:50:230 (4) - move here 01:50:454 -
  9. 02:04:558 (4) - remove
  10. 02:04:670 (5) - replace with stream
  11. 02:13:961 (3) - remove
  12. 02:18:774 (2) - stop here 02:19:222 - , add note here 02:19:446 -
  13. 02:23:252 - add note
  14. 02:24:148 - add note
  15. 02:25:939 - add note
  16. 02:29:745 (4) -
  17. 02:33:327 (3) -
  18. 02:40:267 - add note
  19. 03:03:886 (2) - remove
  20. 03:50:454 (2) - remove
  21. 04:14:432 - ?????? (；・∀・)
gl (｀・ω・´)ｼｬｷｰﾝ
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908

okdesu wrote:

from Endless modding queue~

suggestion
should fix
must fix

[Hard]
  1. 00:20:789 (4) - 1 more tick
  2. 00:55:155 (3) - remove
  3. 00:59:968 (4) - fill all except blue tick It didn't sound beautiful so I'm not doing it.
  4. 01:01:759 (2,4) - remove
  5. 01:02:655 - add note
  6. 01:03:551 - add note
  7. 01:06:461 (1,2,3) - move 2 here 01:07:133 - , move 3 here 01:07:357 -
  8. 01:50:230 (4) - move here 01:50:454 -
  9. 02:04:558 (4) - remove
  10. 02:04:670 (5) - replace with stream
  11. 02:13:961 (3) - remove
  12. 02:18:774 (2) - stop here 02:19:222 - , add note here 02:19:446 -
  13. 02:23:252 - add note
  14. 02:24:148 - add note
  15. 02:25:939 - add note
  16. 02:29:745 (4) -
  17. 02:33:327 (3) -
  18. 02:40:267 - add note
  19. 03:03:886 (2) - remove
  20. 03:50:454 (2) - remove
  21. 04:14:432 - ?????? (；・∀・) All the mp3 files I found had the same mp3 cut ;-;
gl (｀・ω・´)ｼｬｷｰﾝ

Thank you
Mood Breaker
240 posts
Joined February 2011
Mood Breaker
hello :D
i'm here for m4m. please accept my little mod ._.

[Hard]
00:42:954 (7) - move this to the same place with (6)
01:05:565 (1,2,3) - make it like 01:04:670 (1,2,3) - but with reverse selection.
02:13:625 (2) - move to 02:13:401 ?
03:31:536 give this break?

For the kiai time i think u should give some note where have some long gap between note because kiai time should be more energic while playing.

good luck :)
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908

Mood Breaker wrote:

hello :D
i'm here for m4m. please accept my little mod ._. Thank you for modding

[Hard]
00:42:954 (7) - move this to the same place with (6) I like it in the way it was before more.
01:05:565 (1,2,3) - make it like 01:04:670 (1,2,3) - but with reverse selection. The way before is a lot better
02:13:625 (2) - move to 02:13:401 ? Sounds a lot better now. I added two circles to not let it sound empty
03:31:536 give this break? Added

For the kiai time i think u should give some note where have some long gap between note because kiai time should be more energic while playing. There's no need to it.

good luck :)
Manuxz
642 posts
Joined July 2012
Manuxz
I leave a star, sorry for no mod I will not have time ):
DraQeu
121 posts
Joined May 2014
DraQeu
Hi from my mod queue

[General]

  • 01:24:371 End kiai here?
    02:43:177 ^
    03:58:401 ^
    This BG tho
[Hard]

  • Would recommend AR7
    00:07:356 (1,2,3,4,5) - This looks weird
    00:42:730 (6,7) - This flows weird
    01:59:745 (6,7,1,2) - This flows weird
    02:53:252 (5,1) - This flow feels a little bit forced
    03:00:864 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
    03:54:819 (7) - NC?
    04:11:162 (9) - Nc here and remove it 04:11:386 (1) - here?
[Normal]

  • Lots of stacked notes which I don't like in Normal diffs
    And some part don't look appealing to the eye
    02:40:043 (3) - Would recommend to curve this the other way
[Easy]
Good luck with your beatmap
Skyhmer
372 posts
Joined November 2013
Skyhmer
M4M

Easy
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00:48:103 (3) - Would sound much better if it was the same length as 00:47:207 (2)

02:26:610 (4) - IMO I think this should have a clap instead. - And 02:27:058 (1) a finish hitsound instead.

03:41:834 (4,1) - ^ Same

02:57:506 (1) - Is a design like this good for easy difficulty? it might confuse new players.


Normal
-----------------------------------

00:12:730 (1,2) - These two are not on slightly top of each other like the rest in the song. For example, 00:07:356 (1,2)

02:40:043 (3,4) - ^Same

00:46:983 - Add a note?


Hard (This is really good ^^)
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01:01:759 - Note here would be super nice.
aigoh
398 posts
Joined February 2014
aigoh
Hello~ for M4M.

[General]
1) Ranking criteria: You must change this. image size for ranking criteria is 1024x768 pixels or 1366x768.

[Hard]
00:13:737 (4,1) – 00:21:685 (1,2) - space these out, so that the distances are consistent with other patterns you used!
01:24:371 (1) – 01:47:655 (1) - 01:51:237 (1) - 02:05:565 (1) - 03:27:954 (1) - 03:30:416 (2) - 03:31:536 (1) - 03:42:282 (1) - hitfinish
04:13:849 (6) –03:48:551 (5) - hitfinish on slider tail
02:11:834 (10) –02:12:282 (11) - 02:12:730 (1) - hitfinish on slider head
01:59:185 (4) - 02:00:976 (4) - 02:02:879 (4) -02:14:521 (1) - 02:15:304 (3) - 02:15:416 (4) - 02:16:312 (1) - 03:43:289 (3) –03:46:759 (2) - 03:50:454 (2) - 02:38:140 (2) - 03:38:700 (1) - 03:39:595 (2) - 03:43:289 (3) - 03:46:759 (2) - 03:50:454 (2) - 03:52:245 (5) - remove hitfinish. Using hitfinish on blue or red seems out of blue. Place hitfinish on white marks instead.
00:26:610 (2) - 00:27:954 (2) –00:28:401 (3) - 00:37:357 (1,2,3,4,5) - I think whistle would work better than clap.
01:40:491 (1) –to 01:44:521 (2) –I think you should use drum hitsounds instead of normal hitsounds.
01:48:103 (3) –remove hitfinish on reverse arrow
02:16:312 (1) –02:18:103 (1) - hitfinish on slider head
03:42:282 (1) –hitfinish

[Normal]
00:10:939 (1,2) – blanket
00:12:282 (4,1) –blanket
00:14:968 (2) –ctrl J
00:17:655 (3,1) –blanket
00:34:222 (1,3) – 00:36:013 (1) - 00:41:834 (2) - could curve these sliders just a little bit. Juuust a little.
01:46:312 (4) – make it into “V” shape so that it goes with 01:41:834 (3) –
03:23:700 (2,1) – flow seems off. Stack these with 03:22:580 (1) –

[Easy]
I liked this difficulty the most! Good job 
02:39:148 (2) –curve into “U” shape
[ Nyx ]
102 posts
Joined January 2014
[ Nyx ]
Doing another M4M from your queue (here: t/241838)

These are only suggestions!

[Easy]

00:25:267 (1,2) - Blanket better
00:39:595 (1,2,1,2) - A whistle or clap on the slider heads to better emphasize the vocals/beat
00:51:237 (2,1) - Stack these better
01:06:013 (3) - Why whistle when you can clap? Also, fix up the blanket a bit.
02:23:476 (1,2) - Rotate these slider by 10 degrees. Just so that (3) blankets the entire slider much better

[Normal]

02:16:312 (1) - no need for a clap here
03:24:819 - Add a note here, just so you dont start on a red tick
03:49:894 - Your hit sounds need to follow a rhythm, try placing them on every 2nd and 4th beat

[Hard]

00:16:759 (3,4) - Blanket better
00:49:894 (6,1) - You could blanket these two
01:12:954 (5,1) - Make these two slider the same shape with copy paste
01:54:371 (3,1,2) - inconsistent spacing
02:35:789 (7,2) - make it so (2) blankets (7)
03:59:073 (2) - Move this slider up a few units to better match the flow of the slider before it
04:07:357 (1,2) - Blanket?

That's all for me! Good Luck!
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908
The map is updated
Cerulean Veyron
2,090 posts
Joined August 2012
Cerulean Veyron
Hi, From my queue! Sorry for a huge delay, too busy with MBC #7. Please, Forgive me ;_;

Yes, BG is too hot for osu!, and also too hot when modding XD
Oh em gee, TU KOODO PAOWR
[> General <]
  1. - Your Background is 1024x704, Resize the height to 768. I might help a bit :-
    OMFG Y ASIAN HUMANS R SO HAWT
  2. - I checked the whole mapset looking for the Storyboard you've added on the beatmap folder, but it seems you don't use it once. Or is it just me?
[> Easy <]
  1. - About this diff, It's quite okay, but the NCs here are likely inconsistent, How about using it on the next two new tracks like this kind of rhythm. Or if you'd like to make it more sensitive consistency, add NC on every new tracks you see on the long white tick.
  2. 00:09:148 (3,1) - Here's the example to consist the NC for the diff spreads, try swapping them. You might also find more on other parts, so to avoid huge mod of NCs, find it yourself.
  3. 00:10:939 (3,4) - Try double-blanketing here, flow won't be really soft for the song track.
  4. 00:14:968 (1,1) - You should avoid overlaps like this, split them, sliders must be very clear for beginners to read. I also have an idea for this pattern, try a Cycle formation here(copy-paste one slider and rotate 120*), watch your spacing, too > http://puu.sh/c7Qsk/bedd6b890d.jpg
  5. 00:25:267 (1,2,3) - Recorrect your spacing here
  6. 00:28:849 (1,2) - Very good blanket, but make a little more curving for a perfect blanket, here's my example > http://puu.sh/c7QDJ/a769b8ddd5.jpg
  7. 00:30:640 (2,1) - This Spacing is too big for beginners to play, use only one Spacing at a time.
  8. 00:36:461 (2,1) - Same as 00:14:968 (1,1) - , if you want to keep it, you should have a good reason why you purposely overlap this on easier diffs.
  9. 00:49:894 (1) - I think the new track here must be clickable for the rhythm, reduce this slider and add a circle next to it... that'd perform a downbeat, if you follow this, Ctrl + G.
  10. 00:51:237 (2,3,4,5,1) - Too straightic, How about a Square or a Triangle formation here?
  11. 01:01:088 (1,2) - Nazi, Recorrect your blanket here by moving slider (2) one downgrid.
  12. 01:14:073 (1,1) - I think this looks Unrankable because beginners weren't ready for clicking after the spinner. So you should remove the spinner and map the part, or remove slider (1). Read this thread if you have time.
  13. 01:17:655 (1,2) - Flow just broke here, try to curve slider (1) and make a head on circle (2) to keep the flow on-going.
  14. 01:40:939 (2,3,4) - How about a symmetry blanket here? > http://puu.sh/c7RqD/3c792fb717.jpg
  15. 01:46:312 (3,4,5,1) - Remake this pattern to a Diamond or Square formation. Just telling this for a nicer flow.
  16. 01:47:655 (1,2) - Make a double blanket here, You just need to rotate them a little.
  17. 01:58:401 (1,2) - Nazi, Recorrect your blanket here.
  18. 02:03:327 (2,3,4,1) - Make a square formation here, avoiding overlap on circle (2) and (1).
  19. 02:09:148 (1,1) - If you select these both sliders, you might know it's not stacked pretty well, so do that.
  20. 02:18:103 (1,1) - Same as 01:14:073 (1,1) -
  21. 02:21:685 (1,2,1) - Recorrect your spacing here, make a triangle formation ofc.
  22. 02:39:148 (2,3) - Make a blanket? Also the downbeat issue as the same reason before.
  23. 02:57:506 (1) - I might think this slider is too hideous or too confusing for an Easy diff, how about making a normal curved slider for some blanket and on going flows.
  24. 03:09:148 (3,1) - A blanket here will let the flow go smoother for beginners to play, here's my example > http://puu.sh/c7SzG/ebac547191.jpg
  25. 03:26:162 (1,2) - Nazi, recorrect your blanket by moving slider (2) one leftgrid.
  26. 03:48:103 (1,1) - Same as 01:14:073 (1,1) -
  27. 03:51:685 (1,2,3,1) - Again, Diamond or Square formation.
  28. 03:59:745 (1,1) - Same as 01:14:073 (1,1) -
  29. 04:07:357 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - Pattern is too straightic, curve the flow or sliders a little.
  30. 04:11:386 (1,1) - Blanket slider tail.
  31. - Overall, mapping is okay, but you need a little work with the rhythm, Try reading this wikia about rhythm changes, Well, it's up to you if you'd like to rework with the diff.
[> Normal <]
  1. - Same reason as the previous diff about NCs and downbeats, but it's less often came out here.
  2. 00:14:521 (1,2) - Just my suggestion, reposition slider (1) on slider (2)'s head, keeping the flow on going.
  3. 00:14:968 (2,1) - Check your spacing here, it's too big, alike a jump would make it unrankable.
  4. 00:26:610 (2,3,4,5) - Make a Diamond formation here, and avoiding nazi overlaps.
  5. 00:32:879 (2,1) - Still nazi, Recorrect your blanket here.
  6. 00:38:252 (3,4,5) - Instead on stacking, make a triangle formation, players want to have fun by moving and clicking circles and holding sliders.
  7. 00:48:774 (6,7) - I can hear a strong vocal track here, so try to shorten the slider and add a circle or make slider (7) as a 1/2 reversed slider to follow the vocal track.
  8. 00:55:715 (1,2,3) - Too straightic, try curving one of them to make the flow smoother to play.
  9. 00:59:297 (1,1) - Same reason as the previous diff
  10. 01:11:386 (4,1,2) - Recorrect your triangle formation here, looks a bit unstable to play.
  11. 01:13:625 (1,1) - Same as 00:59:297 (1,1) -
  12. 01:18:998 (1,2,3,4) - Flow broke here, try to curve the two sliders and make a symmetry, for the flow to be on going without any struggles.
  13. 01:23:476 (2,3,1,2) - I think a blanket here doesn't look important for the song track here, a Square formation would fit here much better.
  14. 01:46:312 (4,1,2) - Try this pattern a little bit for a nicer blanket, This is just my suggestion. > http://puu.sh/c7U7w/1fca548fe2.jpg
  15. 01:51:685 (2,3,4) - Make symmetry here, looks a little neat.
  16. 02:09:148 (1,2) - I highly recommend making a double blanket here. Well, same reason as the previous diff.
  17. 02:22:133 (3,4) - Check your spacing here.
  18. 02:33:103 (1,1) - Same as 00:59:297 (1,1) -
  19. 02:52:133 (1,2) - I think a stack here doesn't look important to do that, So just make a double blanket or a wave flow.
  20. 02:57:506 (1) - Hmmm... Same reason as the previous diff, but if you really did this on purpose, the slider's border should be visible a little.
  21. 03:08:700 (2,3,4,1) - Try selecting these notes, stack then.
  22. 03:46:312 (3,4,5) - Try a symmetry here, or make a wave slider.
  23. 03:48:103 (1,1) - Same as 00:59:297 (1,1) -
  24. 04:04:222 (3,1) - Blanket?
  25. - Well, some nice patterns you made, but need less work than the Easy diff. Anyway, GJ!
[> Hard <]
  1. - Very good, just some suggestions on the mod below.
  2. 00:07:356 (1,3) - Stack these two, for a fresh start, instead of staying in one and boring grid.
  3. 00:10:939 (1,3) - ^
  4. 00:12:730 (1,3) - ^
  5. 00:14:521 (1,3) - ^... Do i need to mention all for you? just find them yourself, avoid big mod.
  6. 00:16:759 (3,4,5) - Try making a Cycle formation here, well, i hope you know how to make one without me showing an example of it.
  7. 00:22:580 (4,1) - nazi, split them up to not make a tiny overlap.
  8. 00:51:685 (6,1,2,3) - Try making little jumps here, Flow would be challenging, but nice and sharp, Example > http://puu.sh/c7URj/991f50e3f3.jpg
  9. 01:04:670 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - Mind you make a Hexagon formation here? Example > http://puu.sh/c7V0I/b6c39cb775.jpg
  10. 01:10:267 (2,3,4) - Check your spacing
  11. 01:44:521 (2,3,4) - ^
  12. 01:51:685 (2,3,4) - Triangle formation here?
  13. 02:10:939 (5) - Add NC, new track.
  14. 02:12:282 (11,1) - Blanket?
  15. 02:36:237 (2,3,4,5) - Make symmetry for blanket on circle (7).
  16. 02:57:506 (1) - Whistle on the slider trail sounds pretty noisy, remove it. Also a weird slider.
  17. 03:12:282 (2,5) - Make a double blanket here.
  18. 03:44:297 (2,3) - Ctrl + G, don't worry, it won't hurt the flow much, it's likely the same as 00:51:685 (6,1,2,3) -
  19. 03:47:879 (2,3) - ^
  20. - Same again, Very good, I get lazy when modding from easy to this diff. But also, you should add more circles for the song track, since it's a Hard diff, it should be more challenging than other diffs you made, like the 1/4 circles/sliders you made, it should make them in-use more often.

Omg, I've modded a whole mapset, and almost made a big mod, I hope you have time for that.
Best of Luck, nadapan! o3o/
Iceskulls
1,612 posts
Joined February 2012
Iceskulls
Hi

[General]
  • omfg BG is so hot
  1. Just say that don't try to shoot your stars to your map too much like this some modders tend to dislike thing like this and will not mod it
  2. Not sure tho why you add call me at tags?
  3. offset=7341 seems to be balance the accuracy very well imo
[Hard]
  1. 00:07:804 (3,4) - Currently this is a bit bad flow you can try make (3) curve a bit more smoother it might give smooth feeling to the players
  2. 00:10:043 (4) - Ctrl+G for better flow imo
  3. 00:12:058 (4,5) - Blanket
  4. 00:14:968 (3,4) - ^
  5. 00:15:416 (4,5) - ^
  6. 00:15:864 (5,1,2) - Hmm...this flow pretty bad because (5)'s tail facing toward (2) and you place (1) right next to (2) player might make a mistake here by moving their cursor to (2) and realize (1) is right next to it but too late to click it
  7. 00:16:759 (3,4) - Blanket
  8. 00:17:207 (4,5) - ^ I'm pretty sure you need to check your blanket on this diff because I don't to waste any sapce here saying blanket...blanket...blanket
  9. Not sure tho why you skip the beat here it plays pretty nice if you add notes there 01:04:446 - ,01:05:342 - ,01:06:237 - ,01:07:133 - ,01:08:028 - ,01:08:924 - ,01:09:819 - ,01:10:715 - ,01:11:610 - ,01:12:506 - ,01:13:401 - ,01:16:088 - ,01:16:983 - ,01:17:879 - ,01:18:774 - ,01:21:461 -
  10. 01:45:864 (3,4,5,6) - Spacing pretty inconsistent also aesthetic-wise bad square try use DS 1.2x or 1.0x on all notes here
  11. 02:19:894 (1) - 1/2 repeat slider plays pretty weird here I would use only 1/1 slider here
  12. 02:42:282 (1,2,3,4) - You can improve square here try use the same DS on every notes here
  13. 03:12:282 (2,5) - Bad symmetry try copy-paste (2)
  14. 04:04:670 (4) - Ctrl+G for better flow imo
  15. 04:05:901 (2) - It pretty weird to repeating slider so much like this I would use this rhythm instead
    SPOILER
  16. 04:07:804 (2,3,4,5,6) - Stack too much notes at slider tail may be a bit too confusing I would not stack this
  17. 04:14:297 - Why the song suddenly stop?
    This diff need some work on rhythm,flow and aesthetic I recommend you to try using more 1/2 notes because I see that you skipped a lots of 1/2 notes at kiai time it pretty play weird there I would not try to have a lots of short break like this in Hard and I suggest you check some blankets some are still a bit off for me also try making slider more natural I see that sometimes you just use straight slider on some part but it flow not so natural so I would recommend you to use more curve slider for this diff
[Normal]
  1. 00:14:521 (1,2) - I wouldn't stack notes at slider tail it a bit too confusing for Normal and Easy
  2. 00:26:610 (2,3,4) - Maybe flow here is a bit too confusing for Normal I think most player will tend to move cursor to (4) instead of (3)
  3. 00:37:357 (1,2,3) - I suggest you line these up properly currently the slope here looks pretty bad for me
  4. 00:47:879 (4,6) - These 1/2 notes is a bit unnecessary for Normal since the beat doesn't sound so loud here
  5. 02:17:879 (1) - Move to 02:18:103 - You need some recovery time for spinner here
  6. 02:38:028 (4,4) - Unnecessary 1/2 notes imo
  7. 02:42:282 (1) - Don't know why you NC this but I don't see anything new here
    This diff need some work on rhythm really some rhythm is a bit overmapped and some is also undermapped in the same time I suggest you try to map every part that you find it emphasized and also try to make the flow not too confusing too and some blanket still a bit off for me try to check those too
[Easy]
  1. Don't know why you use a lots of 1/1 sliders in the beginning I recommend that you try to decrease the number of 1/1 sliders here it kinda too complex for beginner to just click a lots like this
  2. 00:30:640 (2,1) - Flow is a bit too complex for beginner here I would try to make this flow like this
    SPOILER
  3. 00:53:476 (5,2) - Stack maybe might give you more basic flow for Easy
  4. 00:56:610 (3) - Curve to the right so it would not confuse beginner
  5. 01:11:834 (2,2) - Aesthetic-wise stack properly
  6. 02:01:983 (1,2) - Make these flow like this maybe
    SPOILER
    would be good to use more simple flow for beginners here
  7. 03:14:073 (1) - Move to 03:14:521 - Spinner in Easy need to be like that you need some recovery time for beginner
    This diff need some work on flow and rhythm you need to reduce the number of 1/1 sliders here it kinda not so good to let beginners clicking so much like this and for the flow try to make the flow basic as possible so that it easy for beginner to navigate to the next note
Overall you need some work on flow and rhythm for this mapset and if you can fix the mp3 problem, do it since it sound weird that the song suddenly stop in the end

Hope my mods help
Good luck :)
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908

CelsiusLK wrote:

Hi

[General]
  • omfg BG is so hot
  1. Just say that don't try to shoot your stars to your map too much like this some modders tend to dislike thing like this and will not mod it I've though about doing it actually .__.
  2. Not sure tho why you add call me at tags? "Call Me" Is the name of the album the same came from OwO
  3. offset=7341 seems to be balance the accuracy very well imo I like the one I have right now
[Hard]
  1. 00:07:804 (3,4) - Currently this is a bit bad flow you can try make (3) curve a bit more smoother it might give smooth feeling to the players Fixed
  2. 00:10:043 (4) - Ctrl+G for better flow imo Fixed
  3. 00:12:058 (4,5) - Blanket Fixed
  4. 00:14:968 (3,4) - ^ ^
  5. 00:15:416 (4,5) - ^ ^
  6. 00:15:864 (5,1,2) - Hmm...this flow pretty bad because (5)'s tail facing toward (2) and you place (1) right next to (2) player might make a mistake here by moving their cursor to (2) and realize (1) is right next to it but too late to click it It's not necessary
  7. 00:16:759 (3,4) - Blanket Fixed
  8. 00:17:207 (4,5) - ^ I'm pretty sure you need to check your blanket on this diff because I don't to waste any sapce here saying blanket...blanket...blanket ^
  9. Not sure tho why you skip the beat here it plays pretty nice if you add notes there 01:04:446 - ,01:05:342 - ,01:06:237 - ,01:07:133 - ,01:08:028 - ,01:08:924 - ,01:09:819 - ,01:10:715 - ,01:11:610 - ,01:12:506 - ,01:13:401 - ,01:16:088 - ,01:16:983 - ,01:17:879 - ,01:18:774 - ,01:21:461 - Fixed
  10. 01:45:864 (3,4,5,6) - Spacing pretty inconsistent also aesthetic-wise bad square try use DS 1.2x or 1.0x on all notes here
  11. 02:19:894 (1) - 1/2 repeat slider plays pretty weird here I would use only 1/1 slider here
  12. 02:42:282 (1,2,3,4) - You can improve square here try use the same DS on every notes here
  13. 03:12:282 (2,5) - Bad symmetry try copy-paste (2) Fixed
  14. 04:04:670 (4) - Ctrl+G for better flow imo Fixed
  15. 04:05:901 (2) - It pretty weird to repeating slider so much like this I would use this rhythm instead Fixed
    SPOILER
  16. 04:07:804 (2,3,4,5,6) - Stack too much notes at slider tail may be a bit too confusing I would not stack this Fixed
  17. 04:14:297 - Why the song suddenly stop? It's the Mp3 cut. I've no idea if it's supposed to be like that or not. But I tired to find other mp3 files but they all had the mp3 cut.
    This diff need some work on rhythm,flow and aesthetic I recommend you to try using more 1/2 notes because I see that you skipped a lots of 1/2 notes at kiai time it pretty play weird there I would not try to have a lots of short break like this in Hard and I suggest you check some blankets some are still a bit off for me also try making slider more natural I see that sometimes you just use straight slider on some part but it flow not so natural so I would recommend you to use more curve slider for this diff
[Normal]
  1. 00:14:521 (1,2) - I wouldn't stack notes at slider tail it a bit too confusing for Normal and Easy Fixed
  2. 00:26:610 (2,3,4) - Maybe flow here is a bit too confusing for Normal I think most player will tend to move cursor to (4) instead of (3) Fixed
  3. 00:37:357 (1,2,3) - I suggest you line these up properly currently the slope here looks pretty bad for me Fixed
  4. 00:47:879 (4,6) - These 1/2 notes is a bit unnecessary for Normal since the beat doesn't sound so loud here Fixed
  5. 02:17:879 (1) - Move to 02:18:103 - You need some recovery time for spinner here
  6. 02:38:028 (4,4) - Unnecessary 1/2 notes imo Fixed
  7. 02:42:282 (1) - Don't know why you NC this but I don't see anything new here I accidently put a NC there xD I fixed it.
    This diff need some work on rhythm really some rhythm is a bit overmapped and some is also undermapped in the same time I suggest you try to map every part that you find it emphasized and also try to make the flow not too confusing too and some blanket still a bit off for me try to check those too
[Easy]
  1. Don't know why you use a lots of 1/1 sliders in the beginning I recommend that you try to decrease the number of 1/1 sliders here it kinda too complex for beginner to just click a lots like this
  2. 00:30:640 (2,1) - Flow is a bit too complex for beginner here I would try to make this flow like this
    SPOILER
  3. 00:53:476 (5,2) - Stack maybe might give you more basic flow for Easy
  4. 00:56:610 (3) - Curve to the right so it would not confuse beginner
  5. 01:11:834 (2,2) - Aesthetic-wise stack properly
  6. 02:01:983 (1,2) - Make these flow like this maybe
    SPOILER
    would be good to use more simple flow for beginners here
  7. 03:14:073 (1) - Move to 03:14:521 - Spinner in Easy need to be like that you need some recovery time for beginner Fixed
    This diff need some work on flow and rhythm you need to reduce the number of 1/1 sliders here it kinda not so good to let beginners clicking so much like this and for the flow try to make the flow basic as possible so that it easy for beginner to navigate to the next note
Overall you need some work on flow and rhythm for this mapset and if you can fix the mp3 problem, do it since it sound weird that the song suddenly stop in the end

Hope my mods help
Good luck :)
neonat
Beatmap Nominator
3,528 posts
Joined April 2012
neonat
Easy

00:15:864 (3,1) - aesthetically, this doesn't look good, I'm sure this can be placed better
00:25:267 (1,2) - blanket nicely
00:27:058 (3,4) - ^
00:28:849 (1,2) - the spacing here is not as constant as the rest, this is 0.05x off the usual constant 1.1x spacing
00:39:148 (4,1) - blanket is off
00:39:595 (1,2) - too close together in terms of spacing
00:53:924 (1) - at least have a finish here on the start of the slider to go with the cymbals in the song
01:01:088 (1) - ^
01:13:625 (2,3) - curve the slider nicely around the circle
01:26:162 (1) - should end at 01:29:745
02:19:894 (1) - finish should be here at the start of the slider, rather than on 02:18:103 (3)
03:31:536 (1,2) - the 0.05x spacing difference from usual spacing is too far from the constant to have any leeway
03:35:118 (1) - finish on start of slider
04:07:357 (1) - finish

I only just highlighted some parts for the finishes, but honestly it lacks a lot of finishes that could go with the cymbals found in the song, expecially in the parts just before the chorus and during the chorus
Most, if not all, of the objects that you attempted to blanket each other, do not blanket well enough, they need more adjustments to look better
I still feel placement of objects can be better

Normal

Could use more finishes with the cymbals

00:28:401 (5,1) - spacing error
00:36:013 (1,2) - don't have the flow be too angled here
00:52:580 (5,6,1) - you can have the finishes here for example
00:57:954 (2,3,4,5,1) - this is quite click-intensive, at least for Normal imo
02:18:103 (5,6) - don't let them touch each other
02:38:252 (4,5,1,2,3) - I believe this could look better, and have better flow
02:54:371 (2,3,4) - can you make them more aligned so the flow is smoother
03:48:103 (6) - this isn't a good shape
03:56:610 (1,2) - align them straight up

I find the stacks a bit too much for the Normal, they don't really fit exactly. Stacks like 02:22:804 (4,5) and 02:08:700 (2,1) and 02:21:685 (1,2,3)
The patterns need to look neater as well, when patterns look off like 03:04:670 (1,2,3,4,5) when 03:04:670 (1,2,3) doesn't look straight, the pattern looks less nice. Patterns like 03:46:312 (3,4,5) also do not really flow well

Hard

The rhythm is quite plain, there is too much repetition of 1/2 beats all the way
00:57:506 (1,2,3) - stacks like these don't really fit well
01:04:670 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - it would be better if you followed the vocals for better emphasis, you follow Background Music too much, it gets boring
02:10:043 (2,3,4) - this isn't good flow
02:19:894 (1) - finish on start of slider
04:07:804 (2,3,4,5,6) - this double arch movement is not good flow
Lacking the finishes like Normal and Easy as well
Too many unnecessary stacks, it holds back the flow, which hinders movement of the map. Stacks like 02:03:774 (1,2,3) and 02:34:222 (1,2,3) are not fitting well with the song
You need to map more to the vocals to make the rhythm more diversified and interesting, or else the map gets too dull


Good Luck
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908

neonat wrote:

Easy

00:15:864 (3,1) - aesthetically, this doesn't look good, I'm sure this can be placed better
00:25:267 (1,2) - blanket nicely
00:27:058 (3,4) - ^
00:28:849 (1,2) - the spacing here is not as constant as the rest, this is 0.05x off the usual constant 1.1x spacing I tried to fix the spacing but the blanket ended up being off. It took me some time to fix it so I hope it's good now.
00:39:148 (4,1) - blanket is off
00:39:595 (1,2) - too close together in terms of spacing If I change it so will both blanket and stack be off so I'll skip it.
00:53:924 (1) - at least have a finish here on the start of the slider to go with the cymbals in the song
01:01:088 (1) - ^
01:13:625 (2,3) - curve the slider nicely around the circle
01:26:162 (1) - should end at 01:29:745
02:19:894 (1) - finish should be here at the start of the slider, rather than on 02:18:103 (3) Finish sounds better in the place it already is on.
03:31:536 (1,2) - the 0.05x spacing difference from usual spacing is too far from the constant to have any leeway
03:35:118 (1) - finish on start of slider
04:07:357 (1) - finish

I only just highlighted some parts for the finishes, but honestly it lacks a lot of finishes that could go with the cymbals found in the song, expecially in the parts just before the chorus and during the chorus
Most, if not all, of the objects that you attempted to blanket each other, do not blanket well enough, they need more adjustments to look better
I still feel placement of objects can be better

Normal

Could use more finishes with the cymbals

00:28:401 (5,1) - spacing error
00:36:013 (1,2) - don't have the flow be too angled here Fixed?
00:52:580 (5,6,1) - you can have the finishes here for example
00:57:954 (2,3,4,5,1) - this is quite click-intensive, at least for Normal imo
02:18:103 (5,6) - don't let them touch each other
02:38:252 (4,5,1,2,3) - I believe this could look better, and have better flow
02:54:371 (2,3,4) - can you make them more aligned so the flow is smoother
03:48:103 (6) - this isn't a good shape
03:56:610 (1,2) - align them straight up

I find the stacks a bit too much for the Normal, they don't really fit exactly. Stacks like 02:22:804 (4,5) and 02:08:700 (2,1) and 02:21:685 (1,2,3)
The patterns need to look neater as well, when patterns look off like 03:04:670 (1,2,3,4,5) when 03:04:670 (1,2,3) doesn't look straight, the pattern looks less nice. Patterns like 03:46:312 (3,4,5) also do not really flow well

Hard

The rhythm is quite plain, there is too much repetition of 1/2 beats all the way
00:57:506 (1,2,3) - stacks like these don't really fit well
01:04:670 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - it would be better if you followed the vocals for better emphasis, you follow Background Music too much, it gets boring
02:10:043 (2,3,4) - this isn't good flow
02:19:894 (1) - finish on start of slider
04:07:804 (2,3,4,5,6) - this double arch movement is not good flow
Lacking the finishes like Normal and Easy as well
Too many unnecessary stacks, it holds back the flow, which hinders movement of the map. Stacks like 02:03:774 (1,2,3) and 02:34:222 (1,2,3) are not fitting well with the song
You need to map more to the vocals to make the rhythm more diversified and interesting, or else the map gets too dull I made some parts in the kiai mode where it goes after the vocal and not the background music.


Good Luck
Everything I didn't answer are things I changed
Sellenite
1,092 posts
Joined September 2013
Sellenite
[Hard]
  1. 00:14:521 (1) - hard to read imo,make people feel it's 1/4，let it place in 398,217
  2. 00:28:401 (3) - add whistle
  3. 00:59:968 (4) - consider stop at 01:00:528 and add a 1/2 reverse at 01:00:640？01:00:640 has a cymbal need hit imo
[Normal]
  1. 00:34:222 (1) - cancel nc?,no need to nc imo..
  2. 00:37:357 (1) - ^
  3. 01:17:431 (2) - remove this cuz 01:16:088 is empty too
  4. 01:55:939 (3) - slider end use soft sampleset whistle
  5. 02:06:909 (4) - slider head use soft sampleset whistle
  6. also these places need finish: 01:01:088、02:19:894、02:34:222 (7) - 、02:41:386、03:35:118、03:56:610、
[easy]
good
VINXIS
Featured Artist
3,161 posts
Joined April 2014
VINXIS
wb me

last mode this round for me dam n
from me modding q
quick mod
general
put alternative in the tags
in teh description u sud say that call me is the album so ppl don't get confused lol
bg quality is eh, kinda blurs the sexiness a little B)
Easy
00:10:939 (1) - x:320 y:180 and make 00:10:939 (1,2) - look identical
00:16:759 (4) - nc
00:17:655 (1) - remove nc
00:30:640 (2,1) - imperfect blanket
00:56:610 (3,1) - ^
02:07:357 (1) - straighen it
03:22:580 (1,1) - i'd recommend not putting them in the same place but ur choice. It'll mess up a lot of players
03:54:819 (1) - remove nc
normal
01:40:939 (2,3) - make them identical?
02:08:700 (2,1) - x:220 y:228
02:23:028 (5) - x:200 y:40
02:23:476 (1,2) - make them identical
03:31:536 (1) - remove nc
hardd
00:19:222 (5) - x:284 y:88
00:35:565 (6,7) - stackpls
01:01:759 (2) - make the triple here instead
01:05:342 - note
01:17:207 (1) - remove nc
01:17:655 (2) - nc
01:21:237 - note pls
02:57:506 (1) - eh this being slow doesn't really fit imo but yea
good luck!
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908

VINXIS wrote:

wb me

last mode this round for me dam n
from me modding q
quick mod
general
put alternative in the tags I didn't really get why but I put it anyway.
in teh description u sud say that call me is the album so ppl don't get confused lol Fixed!
bg quality is eh, kinda blurs the sexiness a little B)
Easy
00:10:939 (1) - x:320 y:180 and make 00:10:939 (1,2) - look identical Fixed
00:16:759 (4) - nc Fixed
00:17:655 (1) - remove nc Fixed
00:30:640 (2,1) - imperfect blanket Fixed
00:56:610 (3,1) - ^ ^
02:07:357 (1) - straighen it Fixed
03:22:580 (1,1) - i'd recommend not putting them in the same place but ur choice. It'll mess up a lot of players I think there's enough time for the player to react to it. So I don't think it's bad.
03:54:819 (1) - remove nc Fixed
normal
01:40:939 (2,3) - make them identical? I don't think it's neccesary
02:08:700 (2,1) - x:220 y:228 Fixed
02:23:028 (5) - x:200 y:40 Fixed
02:23:476 (1,2) - make them identical Fixed
03:31:536 (1) - remove nc Fixed
hardd
00:19:222 (5) - x:284 y:88 Fixed
00:35:565 (6,7) - stackpls Fixed
01:01:759 (2) - make the triple here instead It sounds better in the way it was before. No changes.
01:05:342 - note fixed
01:17:207 (1) - remove nc Fixed
01:17:655 (2) - nc Fixed
01:21:237 - note pls Fixed
02:57:506 (1) - eh this being slow doesn't really fit imo but yea I like it in the way it is now.
good luck!
Chaoslitz
Elite Mapper / Elite Storyboarder
2,307 posts
Joined November 2013
Chaoslitz
irc
21:45 Chaoslitz: o/
21:45 nadapan: ?
21:45 Chaoslitz: i am ingame now
21:45 nadapan: oh
21:45 nadapan: xD
21:45 Chaoslitz: xDD
21:46 *nadapan is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/s/1 Aoi Shouta & Ono Kensho - Childish Flower [Hard]]
21:46 nadapan: soon done
21:46 Chaoslitz: oh
21:46 nadapan: wtf
21:46 nadapan: that link ;-;
21:48 Chaoslitz: ?
21:48 Chaoslitz: lol
21:48 *nadapan is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/s/1 Aoi Shouta & Ono Kensho - Childish Flower [Hard]]
21:48 Chaoslitz: whyy
21:48 Chaoslitz: i start mod now?
21:48 nadapan: Thet map isn't evern made by me XD
21:48 nadapan: yah you can start
21:48 Chaoslitz: ok :3
21:49 *Chaoslitz is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/490914 Kakihara Tetsuya - Ocean Flying [Easy]]
21:49 Chaoslitz: ok theres no source for this song?
21:49 nadapan: no
21:49 Chaoslitz: :< ok
21:49 nadapan: it's a song from an album
21:49 Chaoslitz: okk
21:49 Chaoslitz: I am not good in seraching metadata :x
21:50 nadapan: XD
21:50 Chaoslitz: 00:09:595 (4) 
21:50 Chaoslitz: try something like this?
21:51 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fWOHh/d7e0e2bd97.jpg
21:51 Chaoslitz: symmetry
21:51 nadapan: ok
21:51 Chaoslitz: 00:14:968 (2,3,4) 
21:51 Chaoslitz: place this better D:
21:52 Chaoslitz: 00:16:759 (4) put this to x292 y268
21:52 Chaoslitz: * 00:16:759 (4)
21:53 nadapan: done
21:54 Chaoslitz: 00:17:655 (1,2,3) - try this pattern :3 http://puu.sh/fWOYZ/465d7bfee4.jpg
21:56 nadapan: done
21:56 Chaoslitz: okok :3
21:57 Chaoslitz: 00:32:431 (1) - just curve this down a bit for better blanket
21:57 nadapan: done
21:58 Chaoslitz: 00:48:103 (3,4,1) 
21:58 Chaoslitz: 00:48:103 (3) - i think this is not good to use a slider like this
21:59 Chaoslitz: try a note 00:48:103 following the vocal
21:59 Chaoslitz: 00:48:103
21:59 Chaoslitz: then 3 sliders
21:59 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fWPGL/946f6bcd61.jpg
22:03 nadapan: done
22:04 Chaoslitz: 01:03:774 (3,1) - try switching place in timeline? :D
22:06 nadapan: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2777303
22:06 nadapan: is this good?
22:07 Chaoslitz: yea nice
22:07 nadapan: OwO
22:07 Chaoslitz: owo?
22:07 *nadapan is happ
22:07 Chaoslitz: 01:08:700 (1,2,1) - try forming a curve :3
22:07 Chaoslitz: >w<
22:07 nadapan: Happy*
22:08 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fWQAj/b4ce282c50.jpg
22:08 Chaoslitz: for better flow
22:09 nadapan: done
22:09 Chaoslitz: 01:14:073 (3) - 
22:09 Chaoslitz: this slider DDDD:
22:09 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fWQKD/13cfbcc92c.jpg
22:09 Chaoslitz: something like this would look better
22:10 nadapan: ok
22:10 Chaoslitz: 01:16:759 (2,3) 
22:10 Chaoslitz: try put this two note below 01:15:864 (1) - 
22:10 Chaoslitz: better flow :DD
22:13 nadapan: DOne
22:13 Chaoslitz: 01:24:371 (2) - 
22:13 Chaoslitz: try using a long slider end at 01:25:715 - ?
22:14 nadapan: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2777363
22:14 nadapan: like this?
22:15 Chaoslitz: :D yes
22:15 Chaoslitz: 01:44:521 (2,3) - flow here not really good :x
22:15 Chaoslitz: try changing shape of 01:44:521 (2) - 
22:15 nadapan: OwO
22:15 Chaoslitz: o3o3o
22:17 nadapan: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2777393
22:18 Chaoslitz: ah i mean
22:19 nadapan: ?
22:19 Chaoslitz: not good to move up cursor after the slider
22:19 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fWRKH/8fd1c10891.jpg
22:19 Chaoslitz: this seems better :3
22:19 nadapan: oh
22:19 nadapan: ok
22:20 nadapan: done
22:22 Chaoslitz: 02:43:177 (4,1) - follow first kiai part?
22:22 nadapan: Sorry, I don't get what you mean ;_;
22:23 Chaoslitz: start spinner at 02:44:968 - 
22:23 Chaoslitz: and use long slider
22:24 nadapan: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2777447
22:24 nadapan: since my long sliders are always weird
22:24 Chaoslitz: a curve is good enough :c
22:25 nadapan: ok
22:25 nadapan: done
22:26 Chaoslitz: 03:10:043 (1,2,1) - 
22:27 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fWSwz/447fce5033.jpg try this
22:29 nadapan: done
22:29 nadapan: I made them to two curves
22:29 Chaoslitz: ok :3
22:29 Chaoslitz: 03:23:924 (1,1) - 
22:29 Chaoslitz: better not stack :c
22:31 nadapan: done
22:34 Chaoslitz: 04:10:939 (3,1) - 
22:34 Chaoslitz: switch place in timeline
22:35 nadapan: done
22:36 Chaoslitz: ok 
22:36 *Chaoslitz is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/494174 Kakihara Tetsuya - Ocean Flying [Normal]]
22:36 *nadapan is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/494174 Kakihara Tetsuya - Ocean Flying [Normal]]
22:36 Chaoslitz: 00:10:939 (1,2) - 
22:36 Chaoslitz: DS D: ????
22:37 nadapan: done
22:37 Chaoslitz: 00:18:551 (2) - place this bit lower
22:39 nadapan: done
22:39 Chaoslitz: 00:35:789 (6) - del this
22:40 nadapan: done
22:40 Chaoslitz: 00:36:685 (2) - 
22:40 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fWTWb/c5b6fc281c.jpg
22:41 nadapan: done
22:41 Chaoslitz: 00:37:357 (3,4) - slider instead?
22:43 nadapan: done
22:43 Chaoslitz: 00:44:968 (1,2) - use same pattern as 00:43:177 (1,2,3) ?
22:46 nadapan: done
22:47 Chaoslitz: 00:55:715 (1,2,3) - flow can be improved here :3
22:48 nadapan: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2777669
22:48 nadapan: better?
22:48 nadapan: I'm really bad at flow :/
22:49 Chaoslitz:   ah ok
22:50 Chaoslitz: 01:19:446 (2) - place below slider?
22:50 Chaoslitz: 01:20:342 (4) - above slider too
22:51 nadapan: done
22:52 Chaoslitz: 02:01:983 (1,2) - same
22:53 nadapan: done
22:53 Chaoslitz: 02:07:580 (5) - del
22:54 nadapan: done
22:54 Chaoslitz: 02:23:028 (5) - place under 02:22:804 (4) - ?
22:55 nadapan: done
22:56 Chaoslitz: 02:25:715 (2,3,4) - same
22:57 Chaoslitz: 02:39:148 (1,2,3) - flow can be improved o3o
22:57 Chaoslitz: 02:57:506 (1) - better map this out instead of a long slider >_>
23:00 nadapan: done
23:02 Chaoslitz: ah sorry for easy
23:02 Chaoslitz: 03:11:834 (2) - should be end at 03:13:065 
23:02 nadapan: ?
23:02 Chaoslitz: blue tick
23:03 Chaoslitz: for normal 03:12:954 (2,3,1) - 
23:03 Chaoslitz: use a slider instead start at 03:13:065 -  end at 03:13:401 - 
23:03 Chaoslitz: 03:26:162 (1) - 
23:04 Chaoslitz: place it same as 03:24:819 (2) - 
23:05 Chaoslitz: 03:31:759 (1) - spinner start 03:32:431 instead
23:05 Chaoslitz: 03:32:431 - 
23:05 Chaoslitz: 03:38:028 (4,5) - place this higher :33
23:05 Chaoslitz: 03:41:610 (3,4) - only this is different from others owo
23:07 Chaoslitz: ok :3?
23:07 nadapan: done
23:07 Chaoslitz: 03:48:103 (6) - same as before
23:07 Chaoslitz: 03:50:565 (2,3) - 03:51:237 (1,2) - follow what you did previously?
23:08 Chaoslitz: thats all for normal
23:08 Chaoslitz: rhythm feel good to me :3
23:09 *Chaoslitz is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/494934 Kakihara Tetsuya - Ocean Flying [Hard]]
23:09 Chaoslitz: 00:13:177 (3,4,1) - stacked ~_~
23:10 nadapan: chaos
23:10 Chaoslitz: ?
23:10 nadapan: you're going top fast
23:10 nadapan: too*
23:10 Chaoslitz: okok ;w;w;w;
23:14 nadapan: done
23:14 Chaoslitz: 00:14:968 (3,4,5) - 
23:14 Chaoslitz: place the better o3o
23:14 Chaoslitz: 00:15:864 (5,1) - and the flow not good here imo
23:18 nadapan: done
23:20 Chaoslitz: 00:16:759 (3,4,5) - same
23:20 Chaoslitz: 00:17:655 (5,1) - same also
23:21 nadapan: done
23:22 Chaoslitz: 00:20:789 (4) - you dont need jump here since 00:13:177 (3,4) have no jump
23:22 Chaoslitz: 00:21:685 (1,2,3) - too close
23:22 nadapan: chaos 00:20:789 (4) is not a jump
23:23 nadapan: If you look at the timeline so is it 1/2 beat break there
23:24 Chaoslitz: ah my fault :p
23:24 Chaoslitz: 00:26:610 (2,1,2,3) - this part feel empty owo
23:25 nadapan: It's really hard for me to find a place to not make it feel emty :/
23:27 Chaoslitz: ok then
23:27 Chaoslitz: 00:52:133 (1,2) - ctrl+g
23:28 nadapan: done
23:29 Chaoslitz: 01:04:670 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - fix the shape owo
23:29 Chaoslitz: you can use create polygon circle in "compose"
23:32 Chaoslitz: 01:20:342 (7) - place this around x389 y174
23:34 Chaoslitz: ok~?
23:34 nadapan: give me a second
23:34 Chaoslitz: okok >w<
23:37 nadapan: done
23:38 Chaoslitz: 01:47:207 (6) - place x268 y40
23:39 nadapan: done
23:39 Chaoslitz: 01:57:506 (3) - this is 1/6 rhythm
23:39 Chaoslitz: http://puu.sh/fX0rF/a9965aea46.jpg
23:40 nadapan: *^*
23:40 nadapan: That the first time I use 1/6
23:41 Chaoslitz: 02:43:177 (1) - suggest you to put this under 02:42:282 (1) 
23:41 Chaoslitz: oh :o
23:41 nadapan: It's seriously awesme XD
23:41 Chaoslitz: xDD
23:41 nadapan: Square
23:41 Chaoslitz: 02:56:834 (4) - place at x344 y244
23:41 Chaoslitz: yea
23:42 Chaoslitz: 02:57:506 (1) - map this out especailly it is a hard diff
23:43 Chaoslitz: 03:13:065 (4,5) - it will be nice if you switch place in timeline :D
23:47 Chaoslitz: 03:32:431 - missing spinner?
23:51 nadapan: done
23:51 Chaoslitz: 03:37:357 (3) - place x256 y72
23:52 nadapan: done
23:52 Chaoslitz: 03:48:551 (5) - you can try to start another slider at 03:48:998 
23:53 Chaoslitz: 03:51:797 (3) - del it triplet is not needed here :3
23:53 Chaoslitz: 03:59:073 (2) - same as 03:48:551 (5) - 
23:55 nadapan: OMFG CHAOS!
23:55 Chaoslitz: ?
23:55 nadapan: You know that BN Lust
23:55 Chaoslitz: yes
23:55 nadapan: he suddenly came and send me a PM
23:55 Chaoslitz: :O?
23:56 nadapan: apparently so was I a friend to his younger brother XD
23:56 Chaoslitz: oh xdd
23:56 nadapan: Was that everything for Hard?
23:56 Chaoslitz: yea thats all \:D/
Starfall9908
663 posts
Joined November 2013
Topic Starter
Starfall9908
Thanks chaos

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