This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2015年5月31日 at 11:43:01

Artist: yanaginagi
Title: Toaru Kaizoku Ou no Kimagure
Source: 終わりの惑星のLove Song
BPM: 180
Filesize: 8728kb
Play Time: 04:59
Difficulties Available:

1. Easy (1.8 stars, 332 notes)
2. Insane (4.74 stars, 927 notes)
3. Rakuen's Hard (3.95 stars, 800 notes)
4. Normal (2.38 stars, 425 notes)

Download: yanaginagi - Toaru Kaizoku Ou no Kimagure
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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#4 map
For rank
tellertheworld --> Done
Rakuen --> Done
tellertheworld --> Done
tellertheworld --> Done
Finish~ need some mod~

first

[呃kd >w<]
offset should be 311 ;D

Foreverends wrote:

[呃kd >w<]
offset should be 311 ;D

Thank~
Changed

Offset: 294,641ms BPM: 90.00
Offset: 299,065ms BPM: 88.15
TRY

From my queue~

Since this is almost 5 minutes I'll mod two difficulties.

[Normal]
00:08:644 (2,3) - this overlaps 00:07:477 (6) -
00:42:977 (3) - This can blanket 00:43:977 (1) - better
00:45:644 (5) - New combo here instead
00:52:144 (4) - The pattern you're going for here is hard to read for a normal
01:17:644 (1) - This shape is really weird
01:49:977 (1) - This shape is ugly and doesn't blanket 01:49:310 (5) - like you want it to
01:52:977 (2,3) - This also looks ugly and awkward
01:54:310 (1) - Please change this shape ;_;
02:00:644 (2) - Overlaps 01:59:644 (3). You could make 01:59:644 (3) - blanket
02:12:310 (2) - Consider changing this shape
02:17:644 (1) - and 02:18:977 (1) - these just don't look appealing, it doesn't look like you put much thought into it
02:50:977 (1) - Improve blanket
03:21:977 (2) - This is quite confusing for a normal diff


[Hard]
o god this is practically an insane. AR9 HP7 OD7, streams and lots of stacks, very overwhelming for a hard ^^;

Change AR to 8, OD to 6, and HP to 5 or 6 ;w;

00:02:977 (5) - New combo
00:07:977 (4,5,6) - Due to stacking I don't know if this turned out how you wanted
00:12:977 (6,7,8,9) - This stack is very boring, I would change
00:15:477 (5) - This could blanket the slider end of 00:14:977 (4) -
00:20:310 (1) - New combo
00:34:977 (6) - New combo
00:46:894 (5) - I would remove this
00:48:227 (6,1) - Stacking makes this look weird, but I would remove 00:48:227 (6) - anyway
00:50:810 (8,9) - Maybe stack these on 00:50:977 (1) -
00:57:560 (5) - Remove to keep consistency if you use the changes earlier
01:25:394 (9) - Remove this, and change pattern to make it fit
01:28:977 (3) - This can blanket 01:29:477 (4) - better
01:30:560 (8,9,10,11,12) - I cried, no streams in hards please ;w;
01:36:060 (9) - Remove
01:41:227 (8,9,10,11,12) - Again, no streams please
01:50:894 (5) - Remove
01:52:060 (11) - Remove and change pattern
01:57:310 (10,11,12,13) - ;w;
02:01:644 (6) - New combo
02:15:810 (8,9,10,11,12,13) - From now on I won't mention these streams, but please change them
02:51:644 (3) - The spacing here is really really big, consider making it smaller

The rest of it is fine. Or you could just rename hard to insane and save some hassle

Good luck~

Smug- wrote:

From my queue~

Since this is almost 5 minutes I'll mod two difficulties.

[Hard]
o god this is practically an insane. AR9 HP7 OD7, streams and lots of stacks, very overwhelming for a hard ^^;

Change AR to 8, OD to 6, and HP to 5 or 6 ;w;

00:02:977 (5) - New combo
00:07:977 (4,5,6) - Due to stacking I don't know if this turned out how you wanted
00:12:977 (6,7,8,9) - This stack is very boring, I would change
00:15:477 (5) - This could blanket the slider end of 00:14:977 (4) -
00:20:310 (1) - New combo
00:34:977 (6) - New combo
00:46:894 (5) - I would remove this
00:48:227 (6,1) - Stacking makes this look weird, but I would remove 00:48:227 (6) - anyway
00:50:810 (8,9) - Maybe stack these on 00:50:977 (1) -
00:57:560 (5) - Remove to keep consistency if you use the changes earlier
01:25:394 (9) - Remove this, and change pattern to make it fit
01:28:977 (3) - This can blanket 01:29:477 (4) - better
01:30:560 (8,9,10,11,12) - I cried, no streams in hards please ;w;
01:36:060 (9) - Remove
01:41:227 (8,9,10,11,12) - Again, no streams please
01:50:894 (5) - Remove
01:52:060 (11) - Remove and change pattern
01:57:310 (10,11,12,13) - ;w;
02:01:644 (6) - New combo
02:15:810 (8,9,10,11,12,13) - From now on I won't mention these streams, but please change them
02:51:644 (3) - The spacing here is really really big, consider making it smaller

The rest of it is fine. Or you could just rename hard to insane and save some hassle

Good luck~

Thanks for mods, changed the AR and some mods

Nothing removed, notes are 100% followed by the drums, altho you might feel hard (cuz it's hard)

Keep for streams, I feel no problem to rank it with standards now

For the combo I remain 2 big beat 1 combo, so no change

My diff: http://puu.sh/9yQGu/2951b05740.osu

Smug- wrote:

From my queue~

Since this is almost 5 minutes I'll mod two difficulties.

[Normal]
00:08:644 (2,3) - this overlaps 00:07:477 (6) -
00:42:977 (3) - This can blanket 00:43:977 (1) - better
00:45:644 (5) - New combo here instead
00:52:144 (4) - The pattern you're going for here is hard to read for a normal
01:17:644 (1) - This shape is really weird
01:49:977 (1) - This shape is ugly and doesn't blanket 01:49:310 (5) - like you want it to
01:52:977 (2,3) - This also looks ugly and awkward
01:54:310 (1) - Please change this shape ;_;
02:00:644 (2) - Overlaps 01:59:644 (3). You could make 01:59:644 (3) - blanket
02:12:310 (2) - Consider changing this shape
02:17:644 (1) - and 02:18:977 (1) - these just don't look appealing, it doesn't look like you put much thought into it
02:50:977 (1) - Improve blanket
03:21:977 (2) - This is quite confusing for a normal diff

Good luck~

Thank your mod, changed some in pattern.

[insane]

1. 音乐很好听，map做的也不错。只是梗太少 5分钟的长歌 大部分时间都是在做单纯的拖动滑条和点击jumping circles..也许在kiai中变更一下其中的某些objects为梗不错。
2. 你在音效上花费的时间不少吧...很赞...
3. 一般情况下，nc都是在1/4白线上的。像 00:12:310 (6)。00:14:977 (5)。等等...
4. 图没有很大问题，等你凑够mod和sp时，直接去找bat咨询一下就可以，不用太大改动你的图。
5. 祝你好运。

[Insane]

1. 00:00:311 (1) - 加finish
2. 00:02:810 (1) - 取消NC
3. 00:03:477 (4) - NC
4. 00:05:144 (1) - 取消NC
5. 00:05:644 (4) - NC
6. 00:05:977 (1) - 取消NC
7. 00:10:144 (1) - 再加上finish
8. 00:17:477 (6,7) - 拖动的人声不宜放在最后，改为00:17:644、00:17:977开始拉滑条
9. 00:23:477 (2) - 加whistle
10. 00:23:644 (3) - 滑条头取消whistle
11. 00:25:644 不要静音这么低，50%也不错
12. 00:26:310 取消finish
13. 00:26:644 (1) - 尾巴改为finish
14. 00:27:310 (3) - 滑条尾改为whistle
15. 00:28:310 (6) - ^
16. 00:29:644 改为finish
17. 00:30:977 ^
18. 00:32:310 (3) - 滑条头加finish
19. 00:34:144 取消clap
20. 00:34:977 (1) - 滑条头不要静音，加finish
21. 接下来的kiai槽点比较多...很强的违和感，2/4clap是很合适的了，但被你拆断了很多，都改为2/4clap吧，就不一一提了
22. 00:40:310 (3) - 加finish
23. 00:43:310 (1) - ^
24. 00:44:644 (7) - ^
25. 00:48:310 (1) - 改为finish
26. 00:55:310 (3) - ^
27. 01:20:310 (3) - 滑条头加finish

[Rakuen's Hard]

1. 00:37:227 cancel clap
2. 00:37:394 ^
3. 00:37:477 add clap
4. 02:01:644 (1) - NC
5. 02:16:144 (12) - add clap
6. 02:26:810 (11) - ^
7. 03:16:144 (11) - ^
8. 03:21:477 (13) - ^

insane提到缺失的finish在normal和easy都补一下，就不重复了，insane自身的后面也缺失类似的finish，背景音有很明显的，听着放就可以了

good luck

Rank this!!!!!

Glooo wrote:

Rank this!!!!!

Thank your support,

But I have a job QAQ.

My work time at 9am to 1am ._.

From M4M

I can mod Only not in hard and insane. Hope It''ll ranked soon.

General


Rakuen's Hard

AR 8.5 Sounds too hard IMO. 7-8 Is better
And 3.95 stars For Hard Is too hard. Try reducing the stars or make new hard (I think this is light insane)
00:00:810 (2) - I think you should move this forward a little bit like x:168 y :112 And move other notes in the Combo To make flow little better
00:13:644 - Add a circle here and move slider by 1/2 beat see
01:36:060 (9) - Delete this note
02:25:644 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1) - IMO this part is too hard for me (especially 6 to stream) It is placed near each other and hard to read.
02:43:977 - Just a 1/2 slider here instead
03:07:477 (7,8) - Swap the silder and the circle (Dont mind the note placement. just watch the timeline) http://puu.sh/idjvt/48a6b94891.jpg
03:54:144 (7,8) - Same problem as above ^

Insane

General

Your Insane Is hard so HP 8 Is not recommended 7 Is better
IMO Clap is not so good. Try Normal HS Instead

00:00:977 (4) - Move to x:344 y:80 will improve the flow or stack (5) On (6) will better
00:08:477 (4) - Try to move it on the head of 00:08:810 (1) - Slider
00:30:310 - A jump here makes my hands pain. Try make a slider like this http://puu.sh/ieKhm/f260246c3a.jpg Will make flow much better
00:32:144 (2) - Try move to x:224 y:140
00:35:644 (3) - Try Move to x:152 y:336
00:37:644 (1) - No Finish here
00:42:644 (5) - Try x:64 y:220
01:00:310 (7) - Delete This slider and make some jumps
01:00:310 (7,8) - ฺBlanket? Try x:48 y:188
01:49:977 (4) - Move to x:324 y:240
If you mod ^ You should move 01:50:144 (5) - to x:196 y:40
02:54:977 - Make a break here?
03:05:644 (6) - No HS here Can make players Confused and skip to another note.

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