Akiba007 wrote:

Great Map

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  Please check these :3

1. Artist : みかくにんぐッ！
2. Source : 未確認で進行形 (you must change Normal and Hard diff)
3. Tag : mikakunin de shinkoukei junky haruka terui eriko matsui yuri yoshida 照井春佳 松井恵理子 吉田有里 tv size
   

1. HP Drain rate +1.
2. 00:08:648 (2) - prefer to add a finish here. it would fit well with this kind of music.
3. 00:10:898 - add a finish to the head of the slider here to follow the crash cymbal in the music. like your next slider 00:16:898 (1) -
4. 00:12:773 (2) - ,00:14:273 - I recommend you to add a clap with constant rhythm for beginner. So you should be able to apply my suggestion of clap for the rest of the part
5. 00:16:898 (1) - please remove a clap from the head of the slider since it follows nothing. then, it's better to add it to the tail.
6. 00:22:898 (2) - missing a new combo
7. 00:34:523 - ^ clap
8. 00:35:273 (2) - Flow suggestion : how about moving this slider left for the next slider ? it would flow more naturally and beautifully.
   
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9. 00:36:398 (3) - i hope you make symmetrical slider here. i think it would look better
10. 00:42:398 (1) - as you can see your pattern of new combo, it's not necessary at here. so you should consider removing it.
11. 00:54:398 (1) - ^ same
12. 00:55:148 - ~ 00:55:898 (1) - How about increasing the volume gradually to finish sound ? It is a minor adjustment to increase the tension leading into the sounds around 60 70 80
13. 01:01:148 - I feel kind of empty here. So please add a finish to the tail of the slider.
14. 01:01:898 - ^ again
15. 01:18:023 (2) - hmm.. i think you should put 1/1 slider here for easy diff. i would remove this slider for better rhythm. Fix this one, so it prevents the player from misreading
16. 01:24:210 (2) - ^ Same. Please try to make my suggestion of rhythm. you would follow the better rhythm.
    

1. 00:12:773 - Same as easy diff. Please check your pattern of hitsounds.
2. 00:37:898 (1) - add a finish to the head of the slider.
3. 00:51:398 (3) - a bit nazi mod, this slider looks a bit bad to me. how about remaking this ?
   
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4. 00:59:273 - clap
5. 01:00:585 - I feel kind of empty this part. it's better to put a note or slider. for example
   
   so you will be able to follow here 01:01:148 - also add a finish.
6. 01:01:898 - finish
7. 01:06:398 - i feel it has strong sound here. so you should consider adding a note. don't forget to add a finish

1. 00:10:898 - finish
2. 00:43:898 (1,2) - Rhythm suggestion : it's better to follow the background music here. it would fit well with this kind of music. So please try to use two 1/2 sliders. you can follow here 00:44:273 - and add a clap to the head of the slider.
   
3. 00:52:898 (1,2) - it would look better if you make symmetrical to these sliders.
4. 01:25:148 - ,01:25:335 - ,01:25:710 - whistle to follow bass drum :3

1. 00:10:898 - finish
2. 00:15:866 (4) - hmm.. i would remove this note for better rhythm. it follows nothing imo
3. 00:21:023 (5) - missing a clap.
4. 00:28:335 (7,8) - Flow suggestion : please use ctrl +g to these notes. it would be nice flow :3 like this
   
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5. 00:37:804 (4,1) - i don't agree this stack. it seems "stop" to me for flow. So i recommend you to put the distance between circle and slider.
6. 00:37:898 - ,01:01:898 - finish
7. 01:13:898 - this sudden drum sound could confuse players imo. and it's not fit here.
8. 01:24:585 - i feel kind of empty here, it is better to use 1/2 rhythm for playing also i can hear clap sound . So you should consider adding a note here and clap.

tokainitomarou wrote:

sound big
my heat bad///
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1. Clean

1. 00:05:273 (3,4,1) - this rhythm is really hard to get in first play D:, what about using two 1/4 sliders instead? like:
   
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2. 00:06:398 (1,3) - ah you can improve a bit this blanket
3. 00:09:398 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - normal samples fit better imo
4. 00:09:023 (4) - try to stack this with 00:10:523 (2) - better? just for better design
5. 00:25:429 remove this green line you're not using it
6. 00:25:523 (1) - ^
7. 00:26:648 (7) - add NC? will be consistent with the ones at the beginning
8. 00:27:210 (10,3) - stack them properly
9. 00:28:898 (1,2) - ^
10. 00:30:960 (2) - use two circles instead? they will follow better the vocals
11. 00:31:523 (5) - add finish? sound nice with the highest pitch in the vocals here
12. 00:33:491 add a circle? since you was mapping the vocals in almost all the diff, I don't get why you're ignoring this one
13. 00:34:898 (11,1) - swap NC
14. 00:36:398 (5) - add NC following your every one stanza pattern?
15. 00:37:898 (1) - use finish + whistle? like you was doing before
16. 00:39:398 (8,1) - swap NC
17. 00:42:398 (5) - missing NC
18. 00:43:898 (1,2) - I really don't like this rhythm orz, since It doesn't follow the song properly, my suggestion:
    
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19. 00:46:898 (10,1) - swap NC
20. 00:50:273 (3,5) - I don't get what are you following with this sliders o:, since the first 1/1 slider sound better as two 1/2 slider and the last extended one sound better as 1/2 too, my suggestion:
    
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21. 00:54:398 (4,5,6) - stack this properly?
22. 01:05:835 (3) - 2 circles fit better the vocals and music
23. 01:08:460 (3,4) - CTRL G? rhythm will follow better the drum line and vocals
24. 01:09:960 (3,4) - same as above
25. 01:15:398 (6) - missing NC
26. 01:18:398 (5,1) - swap NC
27. 01:22:898 (4) - you should add NC here following your pattern
28. 01:24:398 (8,1) - swap NC
29. 01:25:898 I guess you're missing one here too
    

1. OD and HP +1 (6) for better diff spread
2. your comboing seems kinda not consistent for me, try to change them in this way if you agree:
3. 00:12:398 (4,1) - swap NC
4. 00:13:898 (3,1) - ^
5. 00:15:398 add NC
6. 00:16:148 remove NC
7. 00:16:898 (3,1) - swap NC
8. 00:18:398 (3,1) - ^
9. 00:19:898 (3,1) - ^
10. 00:21:398 (3) - add NC
11. 00:22:148 (1) - remove NC
12. 00:24:398 (3) - mising NC, I suppose
13. 00:25:523 consider adding a circle here following the vocals
14. 00:28:898 (6,1) - swap NC (having a stanza patter will be better imo)
15. 00:30:398 (2) - missing NC ( just if you follow the previous suggestion)
16. 00:34:898 (5,1) - same as 00:28:898
17. 00:36:398 (3) - same as 00:30:398
18. 00:37:523 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - this part look kinda dirty for the overlaps maybe rearrange them to avoid they
19. 00:42:398 (3) - missing NC
20. 00:46:710 (7) - ending sliders in strong beats doesn't follow the song nicely and broke your combo pattern, try this:
    
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21. 00:48:398 (5,1) - swap NC
22. 00:51:398 (5) - missing NC
23. 00:54:398 (3) - ^
24. 01:00:585 (5) - add NC and remove it from 01:01:335 (1) -
25. 01:12:773 (5) - missing NC being consistent with 01:06:773 (1) -
26. 01:21:398 (5) - missing NC here too
27. 01:24:398 (4,1) - swap NC
28. 01:25:898 (6) - add NC

1. same as Hard, OD and HP +1 (4) for better diff spread
2. 00:11:648 (2) - avoid using this repeat slider, there is not way to know how many repeats it have
3. 00:11:648 (2,1,2) - also try to avoid the overlaps :l
4. 00:14:648 (4) - there is not way to know how many repeats it have
5. 00:17:648 (2) - ^
6. 00:18:398 (3,1) - swap NC to keep your comboing consistent
7. 00:19:898 (3,1) - ^
8. 00:20:648 (1) - same as 00:14:648
9. 00:21:398 (2) - missing NC
10. 00:22:898 (1) - this one is oks since the slider is long enough to give the player the time to notice the double repeat
11. 00:25:148 (4) - this green line is not necessary
12. 00:28:898 (4,1) - swap NC
13. 00:36:398 (4) - this should be NC too being consistent with previous pattern
14. 00:42:398 (3) - ^
15. 01:07:898 (1,3) - try to avoid the overlap
16. same as hard, your combo pattern seems really inconsistent, try to use every 1 stanza or 2 imo
    

1. 00:21:398 (1,2,3) - parts like this make your combo pattern inconsistent, this is the only issue i have with your mapset try to keep them consistent
   
   

GL P A N

BeatofIke wrote:

Poke Poke Poke....

1. All clean~

1. 00:05:273 (3,4) - Feels better if you will stack them perfectly
2. 00:10:523 (2,3,1) - Kinda weird to play, try something like this for smoother flow:
   
   
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3. 00:15:773 (3,4) - This stack feels here kinda random and does not express feelings of strong and powerful part like this. I'd suggest slighty redo this stuck to little jump for better playability, something like this:
   
   
   SPOILER

   
   
   Code (would work for 00:15:398 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) -
   
   

   192,277,15398,5,2,0:0:0:0:
   327,165,15585,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,15773,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   150,177,15960,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,16148,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,16241,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,16335,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   234,103,16523,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   192,277,16710,1,2,0:0:0:0:

4. 00:28:898 (1,2) - That's works kinda tricky and it may be hard to tell rhythm what these notes represents, especially with hidden on; i'd recommend unstack it and make a little blanket with 00:29:648 (4) - looks better, and will be easier to catch:
   
   
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5. 00:32:366 (6,7,8) - Circular flow doesn't looks here smooth & natural, perhaps try something like this?
   
   
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6. 00:34:898 (11,1) - Swap NCs follow lyrics
7. 00:39:398 (1,2,3,4,5) - I was expecting here same spacing as at 00:37:898 (1,2,3,4,5) - , such sudden decreace plays bad. Thought i personally prefer if you'd decrease spacing at 00:37:898 (1,2,3,4,5) -
8. 00:40:898 (1,2,3,4) - I personally prefer if you'd simple copy and rotate 00:40:898 (1) - for more smooth flow
9. 00:42:960 (2,3,4) - Linear pattern doesn't looks smooth here compare to the rest of map. Try this?
   
   
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10. 00:44:085 (2,3,4) - This part will feels better if you would stack them perfectly
11. 00:51:398 (1,2) - This rhythm feels kinda weird since you have continiued section of vocals... try something like this instead?
    
    
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12. 00:52:898 (1,2) - After 1/2 intense jump section two 1/1 sliders feels kinda boring and doesn't represents song's tempo well, either not plays good. Consider using 1/2 rhythm here too?
13. 00:55:898 (1,2) - Same here
14. 01:04:898 (1,2) - It is very not recommended to have strong beats on slidertails since they are passive hitobjects and does not require hitting, which feels weird while playing. Try to re-arrange your rhythm to something like this to improve playability:
    
    
    SPOILER

    
15. 01:09:210 (6,1,2,3) - - Heh, i was expecting jump here more than spacing decrease. Try something like this?
    
    
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16. 01:14:648 (4,5,6,7) - Pretty strange that this is onliest symmetrial pattern what was used at the whole diff.

1. 00:14:648 (2) - Curved slider doesn't flows well, try this:
   
   
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2. 00:18:398 (1,3) - overlap :<
3. 00:22:898 (1,2) - Suggesting check spacing for all similiar patterns if you are going to keep stacked slider heads like this - usually it may looks cool in editor but you will have pretty huge antijump while playing which may beels very weird.
4. 00:35:648 (2,3) - I'd keep them with same snape for smoother pattern
5. 00:51:398 (1) - Flows bad, try this:
   
   
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6. 00:59:741 (4) - Mute this slidertick since it goes off-beat here
7. 01:16:523 (4,5,1) - Pretty strange that this is only one stack like this for a whole diff, suggesting unstack a bit

1. 00:11:648 (2) - short multiple-repeat sliders are highly not recommended to use since they simple goest too fast to let beginners react - thought, if you really want to keep it for the sake of proper rhythm i's suggest to separate it to two 1/2 sliders. Same goes to all sliders like that.
2. 00:13:148 (2) - I'd make it linear. Also suggesting make blanket with 00:12:398 (1) -
3. 01:05:460 (2) - looks bad, try this?
   
   
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1. 01:03:023 - Feels empty without note here
2. 01:09:023 - ^
3. 01:19:898 (1,2,3) - Eeh, only one linear pattern for a whole diff feels kinda out of place

Kodora wrote:

yo, as requested

[General]

1. All clean~

[Insane]

*Consider reduse Stack Leniency to 0.4 for more neat stacked patterns.

1. 00:05:273 (3,4) - Feels better if you will stack them perfectly the spacing to 00:05:835 (2) will decrease down and not balance so i will keep this one ;w;
2. 00:10:523 (2,3,1) - Kinda weird to play, try something like this for smoother flow: ok
   
   
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3. 00:15:773 (3,4) - This stack feels here kinda random and does not express feelings of strong and powerful part like this. I'd suggest slighty redo this stuck to little jump for better playability, something like this: hmm I think stack is more playable than some note that have low spacing, I think it's weird to play when spacing is not balance but stacking is just stop then jump to the next note in equal spacing.
   
   
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   Code (would work for 00:15:398 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) -
   
   

   192,277,15398,5,2,0:0:0:0:
   327,165,15585,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,15773,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   150,177,15960,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,16148,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,16241,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   300,269,16335,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   234,103,16523,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   192,277,16710,1,2,0:0:0:0:

4. 00:28:898 (1,2) - That's works kinda tricky and it may be hard to tell rhythm what these notes represents, especially with hidden on; i'd recommend unstack it and make a little blanket with 00:29:648 (4) - looks better, and will be easier to catch: The hidden player should remember it since they want to hd and I try that, I think the flow is a bit weird.
   
   
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5. 00:32:366 (6,7,8) - Circular flow doesn't looks here smooth & natural, perhaps try something like this? It will not flow to 8 well imo.
   
   
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6. 00:34:898 (11,1) - Swap NCs follow lyrics sure
7. 00:39:398 (1,2,3,4,5) - I was expecting here same spacing as at 00:37:898 (1,2,3,4,5) - , such sudden decreace plays bad. Thought i personally prefer if you'd decrease spacing at 00:37:898 (1,2,3,4,5) - ok change a bit since the play field has a limit
8. 00:40:898 (1,2,3,4) - I personally prefer if you'd simple copy and rotate 00:40:898 (1) - for more smooth flow hmm I like the current one, can't tell the reason DX
9. 00:42:960 (2,3,4) - Linear pattern doesn't looks smooth here compare to the rest of map. Try this? I plan to player move their cursor to a straight line through so..
   
   
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10. 00:44:085 (2,3,4) - This part will feels better if you would stack them perfectly same as above, it's continue the above pattern.
11. 00:51:398 (1,2) - This rhythm feels kinda weird since you have continiued section of vocals... try something like this instead? hmm it want to but It will ruin my pattern ;w; if you have a idea to make pattern, it's ok
    
    
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12. 00:52:898 (1,2) - After 1/2 intense jump section two 1/1 sliders feels kinda boring and doesn't represents song's tempo well, either not plays good. Consider using 1/2 rhythm here too? hmm I follow vocal there and I can't here sound on 00:53:085 either so I prefer 1/1 but I will keep this
13. 00:55:898 (1,2) - Same here same as above, can't here sound on 00:56:085 and I want to follow the vocal too but I will keep this too.
14. 01:04:898 (1,2) - It is very not recommended to have strong beats on slidertails since they are passive hitobjects and does not require hitting, which feels weird while playing. Try to re-arrange your rhythm to something like this to improve playability: ok I'm shorter the slider and add note instead bacause 01:05:460 (3) is a long vocal sound too so I prefer it to head of slider.
    
    
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15. 01:09:210 (6,1,2,3) - - Heh, i was expecting jump here more than spacing decrease. Try something like this? lol that's is your style XD and I prefer this one since it has a pattern and the jump not that big.
    
    
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16. 01:14:648 (4,5,6,7) - Pretty strange that this is onliest symmetrial pattern what was used at the whole diff.

aw I think let it be XD

[Hard]

*Same about Stack Leniency
*Suggesting AR8 for better difficulty spread and to improve readability k
*I kinda afraid of diff spread, your Insane is quite challenging while Hard is kinda too easy :< Try to make it at least a bit harder. :(

1. 00:14:648 (2) - Curved slider doesn't flows well, try this: try different thing, I make it harder too.
   
   
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2. 00:18:398 (1,3) - overlap :< aw please
3. 00:22:898 (1,2) - Suggesting check spacing for all similiar patterns if you are going to keep stacked slider heads like this - usually it may looks cool in editor but you will have pretty huge antijump while playing which may beels very weird.ok
4. 00:35:648 (2,3) - I'd keep them with same snape for smoother pattern I just want to make them various :'(
5. 00:51:398 (1) - Flows bad, try this: how bad ;A; just slide your cursor continue the first slider until arrive the second
   
   
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6. 00:59:741 (4) - Mute this slidertick since it goes off-beat here ok
7. 01:16:523 (4,5,1) - Pretty strange that this is only one stack like this for a whole diff, suggesting unstack a bit ok a bit.

[Normal]

*Suggesting use ticksounds to keep consistent clap-patterns I will think about it since I think it's already fine now, you can hear clap sound obviously even don't have a hitsound but if BAT mention it, I will do.

1. 00:11:648 (2) - short multiple-repeat sliders are highly not recommended to use since they simple goest too fast to let beginners react - thought, if you really want to keep it for the sake of proper rhythm i's suggest to separate it to two 1/2 sliders. Same goes to all sliders like that.OKKK!! every people say about this but I see some map has map it, but some I use 1 repeat + one note instead, hope that's ok
2. 00:13:148 (2) - I'd make it linear. Also suggesting make blanket with 00:12:398 (1) - hmm I want to keep (3)'s tail perfect stack so not for this.
3. 01:05:460 (2) - looks bad, try this? sure
   
   
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[Easy]

*Suggesting use ticksounds to keep consistent clap-patterns as I tell on normal

1. 01:03:023 - Feels empty without note here I will keep this, I know where should I put a note but I want to follow the vocal now.
2. 01:09:023 - ^ same as above
3. 01:19:898 (1,2,3) - Eeh, only one linear pattern for a whole diff feels kinda out of place

nah let them be XD

Well, that's it, cute song & nice map. Good luck!

P A N wrote:

hmm it want to but It will ruin my pattern ;w; if you have a idea to make pattern, it's ok

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188,315,51023,2,0,P|128:285|109:216,1,135,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
108,223,51398,2,0,P|113:180|146:137,1,90
264,108,51773,1,0,0:0:0:0:

Quenser wrote:

cool map!!

1. This mp3 has clipping noise imo. So you can use this if you want change. http://puu.sh/7VyxH.mp3

1. 00:07:898 (1) - add whistle.
2. 00:13:148 (3) - add whistle slider head.
3. 00:14:648 (2) - add whistle.
4. 00:15:398 (1) - add whistle slider head & end?

1. 00:15:398 (1) - add whistle slider head & end? same as 00:10:898 (1,1,1) -
2. 00:16:898 (1) - add whistle slider end.
3. 00:19:148 (1) - add whistle slider head.
4. 00:21:398 (1) - ^
5. 00:22:148 (2) - add whistle slider head.

1. 00:14:648 (2) - add whistle slider head.
2. 00:22:148 (5) - ^
3. 00:32:273 (4,5,6) - same hitsound pattern as 00:26:460 (3,4,5) - is better imo.

Mashiro kawaii <3

1. Airtist: みかくにんぐッ！
2. tags suggetion:
   ending

1. 01:25:898 (1) - it's too short sppiner for easy, imo...

1. 00:52:898 (1,2) - I prefer symmetric sliders
   
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2. 01:15:960- add a note

1. 00:46:710 (7,8) - I prefer slider
   

1. 00:44:835 (6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5) - you can make more symmetric
   
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   341,105,44835,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   395,241,45023,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   395,241,45116,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   395,241,45210,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   419,77,45398,5,2,0:0:0:0:
   263,133,45585,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   407,159,45773,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   309,8,45960,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   329,187,46148,1,2,0:0:0:0:

2. 00:46:335 (6) - how about stack on 00:44:648 (5) - ?
3. 00:51:023 (6,1) - I prefer not to stack

10crystalmask01 wrote:

Hey, mod from queue

[Insane]
00:09:398 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - Is this cluster international? I think a curved flow would look more neater for this stream. I think it's fine since many people can play it will

[Easy]
01:19:898 (1,3) - Curved sliders would look better, because those can actually create nice blankets. That's really up to you though, since there's nothing wrong with using these straight sliders really. It's just that they look really....dull. I want to make it as simple as much for easiest diff so I will keep this

Nice mapset Good luck!

1. 00:59:648 (2,3) - one suggestion
2. 01:04:898 (1,2,3,4) - ↑
3. 01:12:398 (3) - to fit the vocal better

1. 00:22:898 (1) - 建议分开
2. 00:25:523 - 添一个Note
3. 00:58:898 (1,2) - 建议配合乐声，使用滑条
4. 01:22:898 (1,2,3,4,5) - suggestion

1. 00:59:648 (3,4) - 不建议

1. 音效需要调整

ids wrote:

for M4M

Another

1. 00:59:648 (2,3) - one suggestion
2. 01:04:898 (1,2,3,4) - ↑
3. 01:12:398 (3) - to fit the vocal better

Normal

1. 00:22:898 (1) - 建议分开
2. 00:25:523 - 添一个Note
3. 00:58:898 (1,2) - 建议配合乐声，使用滑条
4. 01:22:898 (1,2,3,4,5) - suggestion

Hard

1. 00:59:648 (3,4) - 不建议

Insane

1. 音效需要调整

Zero__wind wrote:

Ranked

No Dap wrote:

gratz P A N ~ con queso

Oyatsu wrote:

Moe map! =o=
Congratz! PAN-chan