1. Easy (1.91 stars, 111 notes)
2. Hard (4.91 stars, 286 notes)
3. Normal (4.54 stars, 214 notes)

happy30 wrote:

wow! really good for a first map! thx :3

offset: 1.161 Change

[Easy]

00:12:14 (1) - This slider looks bit weird. remove the second waypoint... (A slider looks better with less) fixed
01:08:76 (1) - remove clap done

[Normal]

00:15:50 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - hey, I have a suggestion for the hitsounds.
you have claps on (1), (5), (7). I think you should change the pattern of claps and place claps on
(3) (6) [startpoint] (8) [startpoint] and continue following this rhythm
basically all claps 1 whole note, white tick, further. (this is for almost the whole map) I performed it according to your suggestion

01:39:16 (5) - a bit closer to (4) ? sorry, slipped off from (3),fixed
01:40:33 (1) - start this spinner 1/4 earlier or later　fixed

[Hard]

01:06:84 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I personally dont like this. changed it a little
01:30:71 (4) - remove clap done
01:30:92 (6) - remove clap on endpoint done
01:31:98 (8) - add clap on startpoint done
01:32:83 (10) - add clap on startpoint done
01:40:33 (1) - start this spinner 1/4 earlier or later fixed

well done.

blissfulyoshi wrote:

Offset: 1161 (did not see happy 30's post before I found this) 1161 changed.


Easy:

SPOILER

larger circle size? sorry ;_; I want to set,Because This diff is [Easy]

Combo mod:
00:12:12 (1) - unless this new combo is for the slowdown, remove it remove(fixed)
00:40:01 (1) - remove new combo done
00:44:23 (1,2) - add a new combo to 2 and remove 1's new combo (swap new combo) done
00:56:91 (2,1) - swap new combo done
01:23:95 (1,2) - swap new combo done

Timing section mod:
You should remove the unneeded timing sections in this difficulty such as:00:41:78, 00:42:00, 00:42:21
Because I was poor, it was not possible to understand ;_;

Normal:

SPOILER

Normal mod:
00:42:33 (2) - move a quarter note back done

Combo mod:
00:12:76 (1) - same as easy
Since you usually added a new combo when a line of lyrics finished in the beginning of the song, I am going to changea few things to be consistent with that. Change
00:43:81 (1) - remove new combo done
00:44:66 (1,3) - swap new combo done
00:52:69 (1) - remove new combo (if you want the combo to be shorter put a new combo on 00:51:00 (4)) done
01:04:52 (1) - remove new combo done
01:25:22 (8,1) - swap new combo done
01:38:32 (1) - remove new combo done

Hard:

SPOILER

lower the hp drain one notch? Change

Combo mod:
00:12:12 (1) - remove new combo done
01:20:57 (1) - remove new combo done
01:25:01 (11) - restack on the end of 10 (the trick is to turn off grid snap and turn distance snap to x0.0 done However, they shift and are displayed.;_;

01:26:91 (1) - remove new combo　done
01:38:32 (1) - remove new combo　done

Nice map. Star.

Mafiamaster wrote:

Great beatmap!
Star!

EEeee wrote:

Easy
Hahahaha, i'd expected to see some problems, but nice map
just a suggestion, maybe u can take away some inherit timing sections, the one's that are not in use, there are some check if u can stop em ^^　　　changed variously　^^

Normal
00:24:40 (5,6) - make sure this is spaced properly, 5 seems to be a bit too far atm, so space 5, then make sure 6 is still spaced ^^
resnap ^^ sorry,I was using other magnifications... I am Baka XD
that's it, whaaaaaaaa why are u making me mod a map without problems

Hard
damn, nothing, this diff kicks ass ^^ :3

definitely gonna star this map(also i'll star it so it's above 8 priority for ya, gets some BATs to look at this, it's really good)

Ichigo-Sora wrote:

[Easy]
01:22:71 - Add a note?　add~

[Hard]
00:36:86 (5) - New combo? (Since you did this earlier) done
01:17:85 (8) - Maybe shorten it so the first reverse is at 01:18:06 and reverse it twice more / reverse it once more and add a note at 01:18:69 done

A really nice map ^^

THX~

Lizbeth wrote:

this is your first map? awesome !! yeah XD

just a few suggestions

Hard
00:53:76 - maybe add note here? done
00:57:46 (8) - i think you miss the rhythm here, try this: remove this note, and add one at 00:57:25 done

normal
01:39:18 (11) - remove and add note 01:39:40 done

Easy
00:07:49 (2) - another repeat done
01:07:49 (4) - 1/2 beat earlier, and another repeat done
01:18:06 (4,5,6,7) - too hard for an easy imo... maybe turn this into a 1/2 beat slid then repeat it the times needed (there is a few more like this, do the same) just suggesting n_n fixed

if you re gonna do this changes, remember to fix the specing when its needed done~

good luck!
Star

THX~

miccoliasms wrote:

これが初めて作った譜面だなんて凄い…
そのセンス羨ましいです><

提案です♪
Normal
01:12:99 (4) - 01:13:30まで伸ばしてみてはどうでしょうか？ 伸ばしました

Hard
00:43:62 (x) - ここにCircleを追加してみては？
00:46:37 (x) - ^
00:49:11 (x) - ^
00:56:30 (x) - ^
01:02:63 (x) - ^
01:04:33 (x) - ^
01:26:72 (x) - ^
01:28:83 (x) - ^
01:38:13 (x) - ^
01:39:62 (x) - ^

インセインでないのとブレークタイムがない為小休止を入れたいのでサークル追加はしません。ごめんなさい

01:06:02 (8) - ちょっと位置がずれてるので直すといいかもしれません>A<　直しました

全て提案なのでスルーして頂いてもかまいません@-@
Nice Map desu!

譜面見てくれてありがとうございます

Hanyuu wrote:

Star

James2250 wrote:

Map flows very nicely
no problems found here
*star*, good luck getting it ranked

star THX~
I am glad. =V=

SOGASOGAMO wrote:

:) star

minyeob wrote:

お原氣ですが。 元気です！
私は　日本語 初心自です。　나는 영어의 초심자입니다 XD
You sent a PM ><　sorry!

All of these are just my suggestions. You don't have to change it.

[Hard]
00:49:33 (3) - この　スライドは　難時です。(This slider hides 00:50:38 (1,2), I think it's not good.) The slider was arranged.
1:00:527 (Blank) - Circleを追加してください。(Please add a circle on 1:00:527)　done

Bad Japanese すみません OTL

Greatmap.
BAT call go go

Yes wrote:

hi<3 here's just some things that stood out. they are just a few suggestions and not necessarily need to be changed.

hard
01:17:85 (8) - clap at 01:18:48 done
01:18:69 (9) - maybe add finish? done
01:26:93 (3) - clap done
01:29:89 (3,4,5,6) - i feel like this doesn't really go with the song I like this sorry... ;_;
01:33:69 (1) - take off finish ^
01:34:11 (4) - take off whistle ^
01:34:54 (7) - take off finish ^
I don't really like this part: maybe try changing to ^
01:33:69 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - move this whole section 1/2 beat forward so that 1 is at 01:33:48
01:35:38 (x) - if you do change ^ then add a note here (sorry if it's confusing ;_;) ;_;


normal
00:09:40 (x) - note here and move slider to start at 00:09:61 done
01:04:54 (7) - new combo? done
01:17:21 (4) - start at 01:17:00 done

easy
00:07:49 (2) - whistle on first return and end of slider? done
01:40:03 (1) - maybe make this louder finish done

i hope that helped!
this is very well done for your first map!!!! great job, really. have a star n_n

Thank you for the detailed account

satosid wrote:

star

ykcarrot wrote:

[Hard]
00:25:45 (1,1) - korewa distance snaped. I use distance snap,but It was not made accurately X_X fixed
00:18:69 (1,1) - shikashi, korewa jump desu. waza desuka? Mended, because it was not general... fixed

01:25:03 (11,12,13) - ookina mondaidewa arimasenga.. seems to strange, because stack. How about make it seems better? IMO
because stack ;_; I can't arrangement

good map. Hoshi wo agemasu. ^_^

Mystearica wrote:

Your map is awesome, it's 200x better than my first.

That being said, try +14 ms to all. I spent a lot of time testing and +14 ms offset felt the best to me.

Here's your star!

Tanmak wrote:

こんにちは。＞.＜
えーと、私はこの曲プレイしたが問題はないみたいですね。
よく作ったと思います。


Star さしあげます。＞.＜)/☆

Alace wrote:

This mapset is pretty cool

Timing is fine

<All diff>
before 00:15 i suggest use a slienced slidersound (see pic and file)
It can make your map sounding better

All diffs are good

Alace wrote:

<Normal>
00:04:97 (4) - cancel the sliderwhistle sound done
00:09:62 (2) - ^ done


<Hard>
00:04:97 (4) - cancel the sliderwhistle sound done

pete2528 wrote:

:)

very fun very good map

star


i give this map to my friend thai peoples.

PLAY THX~

alvisto wrote:

Very good for a first time mapper. ^.^

Blue = Suggestions
Red = Fix this

Normal
Good !
Nazi
01:21:03 (5,6) - Make these closer to 3 & 4 ?　 ended by 6

Hard (You can ignore those combo mod if you feel not comfortable changing it ;p)
00:16:80 (7) - Remove this combo to make it consistent with 00:20:189 and 00:23:569
00:42:58 (7) - New combo
00:43:85 (1) - Remove new combo
00:45:75 (6) - New combo
00:57:16 (6) - New combo
00:57:79 (1) - Remove new combo
00:59:06 (4) - New combo
01:00:11 (1) - Remove new combo

sorry,As for the combo that continues long, I do not like it. Roughly 12 or more. no Change X\X

Easy
00:12:16 (4) - Will this be too difficult for an Easy ? Change X1.0 speed
00:42:266 - Remove all the unused timing sections here. done
01:05:717 - ^ done
01:28:639 - ^ done

Don't give BAT any chances not to bubble/rank your map because of these tiny things !

I hold out.

Great job. Star !

Echona wrote:

ナイスファーストマップ～！

Pasonia wrote:

Okay, modding time, sorry that it was really late Bibendum, I know you asked since last week.

Important notes:

1. All your difficulties end at 01:41:73, so please shorten the MP3 time to around 2 minutes max. The mp3 file was cut in 2min

Modding wise, I have nothing for you except 01:25:04 (11,12,13) in Hard mode. Now, I don't know what's causing the problem but I would advise repattern. I've had a similar issue with one of my own maps so I know it's frustrating.

fixed.I do not understand the cause either. Arrangement was changed for that.

Map starred. It long should have been starred.

PicoLo wrote:

~Star.