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hi hi Laurier :3 m4m

[Insane]
  1. I think add note on 00:20:652 and 00:20:989 is more fit the song and more playable. you can make it stack with the old two note or new pattern ><
  2. nazi here, move 00:24:866 (3) to 409|183 for perfect stack :3
  3. 00:24:866 (3) - move to 230|267 for ^
  4. what about add clap on 00:39:023 (7) head instead of whis?
  5. 00:45:933 (5) - move to 164|342 perfect stack.
  6. hmm 01:01:607 (3,4,5) is the only part that you not use streams, maybe change it to same with other? the stream is better fit too imo.
  7. 01:11:382 (1) - make it more stack? its too obvious ff you not intentional.
  8. 01:25:034 (2,3) - ^
  9. 02:23:686 (4) - move to 240|252? better blanket.
  10. 03:57:393 (3) - NC?
  11. 04:03:123 (4) - move to 173|182
  12. 04:09:528 (2) - move to 140|257


[Hard]
  1. 00:08:012 (3) - maybe change to thisrhythm? more fit imo :X
  2. 00:50:652 (2) - better blanket?
  3. 02:28:068 (3) - better stack
  4. 02:40:371 (4) - ctrl+g is more flow here :|
  5. 03:42:056 (1,2) - better blanket?
  6. 04:03:292 (3) - move to 124|248 for better blanket


[Normal]
  1. 00:39:360 (1) - move tail to 360|204 for better blanket.
  2. 01:34:641 (1) - maybe remove NC here? beginner see (1) 2 note can get confuse imo.
  3. 03:07:675 (1,2,1) - make them more balance blanket? like this
    171,191,187675,6,0,P|241:158|310:196,1,160,4|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    236,248,188686,1,8,0:0:0:0:
    164,300,189023,6,0,P|236:340|304:308,2,160,2|2|4,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
  4. 03:15:764 (1) - move to 258|311
  5. 04:14:078 (1) - move tail to 232|298?


sorry for have so many nazi >< very nice map
star! :D
posted
konnichiwa laurier san

[General]
  1. sourceに"劇場版 魔法少女まどか☆マギカ[新編]叛逆の物語"を追加
    Tagsにもローマ字読みで追加しても良いと思います。

[Normal]
  1. 00:51:495 (1) - 00:50:821 (2) - をblanketしたほうが綺麗にみえたのでどうでしょうか。
  2. 01:37:675 (1) - 1grid右にずらしてx336に移動すると丁度1.10になると思います。
  3. 03:20:652 (2) - 始端にWhistle付けてもいいと思います。

[Hard]

  • 流れよくて特になかったです。
    nice map!

[Insane]
  1. 02:58:910 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - pianoの音をとっているならここは1/3で置かないとBack音に合わないと思います。
  2. 03:19:135 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - ^
  3. 04:04:387 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^



nice map です!
2014期待! :):)
posted
thanks!!
posted
01:29:332 (1) - to 01:34:304 (1) - add break? it's kind of stressful without ><.

Also I can only say that, it's so good for me xD
Good job, good luck :)

(No ks, ofc).
posted
I want to keep non break >.<
posted
my mod as promised~
sorry I can't mod hitsound since I'm suck at it :(

[General]

  • Nice map as usual Laurier, so maybe I'll just have to throw up a little suggestion XD
  1. Um.. I'm not sure for the source written in japanese (or is it a new rule?), personally I prefer the english source since not many people can read japanese. If you consider this, you could put the japanese source in tags field instead
  2. Please add some tags (mahou shoujo movie opening etc.) I think you know better than me



[Insane]

  1. 00:35:989 (4) Blanket it better with (2)
  2. 00:36:663(1,2,3,4,5) I don't think this consecutive repetition pattern fits here. Well, it's indeed fun to play, but the music doesn't provide it since the music itself is keeping a constant tone and volume
  3. 01:02:028 (4,5) Is it intentional not to put these straight with (3)?
  4. 01:12:731 (1,2) I think it's important to make a 1/4 slider jump to be leaned up to each other, so it would flow better. In addition, I think you should move
  5. 01:11:888 (2) to x:224 y:48 so that it can be stacked well with 01:12:899 (2)
  6. 01:14:416 (1) Why not try to stack it with the shadow of 01:12:394 (5)? I'm sure I heard a rise of tone on the slider tail, so it would be better to make a little jump between this slider and the next circle
  7. 01:18:798 (3) Try to ctrl+g, since I'm sure the volume rises on the triplet 01:19:135 (4,5,6) instead of (3), so I think it's more reasonable to make a jump to the triplet instead
  8. 02:15:933 (3,4,5) Make a proper triangle? I think (5) doesn't need to be stacked. Inststead, it's better to stack 02:16:944 (2) to the new position of (5)
  9. 02:24:191 (1,2,1) Lean it to each other, and it's better to curve the 1/2 slider a bit to make a better flow
  10. 02:35:315 (1,2) How about this? But well, I think you can do better than this
  11. 03:39:022 (1,2,1) Hm.. not sure about this, somehow it's quite tricky to play
  12. 04:06:831 (3) Curve it better so it can blanket with 04:07:505 (5)?
  13. 04:21:157 (1,2) lol somehow this antijump feels so sudden. Well, up to you if you wanna keep it
  14. 04:23:516 (4) Maybe ctrl+g



[Hard]

  1. 00:35:315 (1) Curve it a little?
  2. 00:39:866 (2,3) I think it's better if these not be stacked since the vocal in this part is rising gradually
  3. 01:00:259 (1,2,3,4) Just wondering why you even need 3 anchor here, I think 2 are enough
  4. 01:12:394 (3) I prefer make the rhythm similar with 02:23:517 (3,4,5) sounds nicer to me
  5. 01:34:641 (1,3) You sure don't want to make these symmetrical?
  6. 01:43:236 (3) Two anchor is enough
  7. 01:43:236 (2) ^
  8. 01:54:191 (2,3) Maybe ctrl+g, it will make an interesting flow, here's an illustration, maybe you can adjust it a little later
  9. 03:35:988 (3,4) Two anchor is enough
  10. 04:20:146 (2,3) ^
  11. 04:21:831 (3) I'm sure this section has the same rhythm with 04:22:505 so why it's being a 1/1 slider while the other's being a 1/2 slider?



[Normal]

  1. 00:09:698 (2) Somehow the slidertick here sound a little noisy, silence it?
  2. 00:51:495 (1) Nazi, move the slider tail 1 grid upward
  3. 01:05:989 (2) Two anchor is enough
  4. 02:09:697 (1) I think it's better to use soft slidertick-3 instead, the recent slidertick sounds noisy
  5. 02:31:944 (2) Two anchor is enough
  6. 02:32:618 (1,1) Well, somehow the rhythm emptiness here doesn't sound good, see 01:21:158 for reference
  7. 03:11:719 (1) Two anchor
  8. 03:23:180 (3) ^
  9. 03:35:651 (2) ^
  10. 03:44:415 (2) Two anchor or curve it more like the next (2)


this is a good map, so it's better to rise the priority a little~
have my star o/
posted

El SolarBeam wrote:

my mod as promised~
sorry I can't mod hitsound since I'm suck at it :(

[General]

[list]Nice map as usual Laurier, so maybe I'll just have to throw up a little suggestion XD
[*]Um.. I'm not sure for the source written in japanese (or is it a new rule?), personally I prefer the english source since not many people can read japanese. If you consider this, you could put the japanese source in tags field instead

[Insane]

[*]01:02:028 (4,5) Is it intentional not to put these straight with (3)?
[*]01:18:798 (3) Try to ctrl+g, since I'm sure the volume rises on the triplet 01:19:135 (4,5,6) instead of (3), so I think it's more reasonable to make a jump to the triplet instead
[*]04:06:831 (3) Curve it better so it can blanket with 04:07:505 (5)?

[Hard]



[Normal]

[*]00:51:495 (1) Nazi, move the slider tail 1 grid upward

this is a good map, so it's better to rise the priority a little~
have my star o/
fixed that's things.
I'll mod your map tonight
posted
Insane
01:26:045 (5) - スライダーのスピードを1.0に変えたほうがいいと思います。
02:01:270 (6,7,8,9) - オーバーマップだと思います。
02:34:809 (2,3,4,5) - オーバーマップだと思います。
03:15:427 (6,7,8,9) - オーバーマップだと思います。
04:19:471 (5,6,7,8) - オーバーマップだと思います。
04:20:483 (3) - ライダーのスピードを0.75に変えたほうがいいと思います。

いい譜面です!~
posted
Hi,Laurier,Forum PM req.

  1. Red words: Should be fix it.
  2. Blue words : I recommended suggestion.
  3. Black words : In my personal opinion.

[General]

Insane diff's widescreen no select,add it.

[Normal]

03:37:337 (4) - Forget add finish in slider end? (Look this 02:22:843 (1) is the same rhythm,but you add finish this here.)
(Feel 01:11:045 (2) this should add finish,too?)

04:07:674 (1) - Feel can add finish in slider head.

[Hard]

00:46:270 (1) - Forgot add whistle? (Nm diff have added.)
01:11:382 (4) - Forgot add finish? (Ins diff have added.)
01:22:506 (1) - Feel can add finish this here.(Feel seems can stack (2) slider,add hit sense.)
03:34:977 (3) - Move a bit :

03:37:674 (3) - Add finish (As the same with Easy diff)
03:38:348 (2) - (212|272),good pattern and better flow :

03:46:438 (1) - Stack crooked off.

[Insane]

02:16:944 (2) - Not stack?
03:25:203 (1) - Forgot add finish? (Hard diff have added.)
03:56:887 (1) - Remove clap,add whistle? (Because Hard diff add whistle at this here.)
04:22:168 (4) - (132|180)? (Blanket)

Good map.(Especially ins diff),so I shoot a star~ :)

[Other]
1.If you have any mod above problems, you can PM or in-game to me.
2.Hope to you ranked.
3.Hope my mod is useful to you.
posted
thanks!!!!!
posted
いい譜面です! まぁ...ローリエさんの譜面にはちょっと見えませんね...

01:12:731 (1,2) - いつから1/4sliderを使い始めたのでしょう>.>
素晴らしい感じですけど 以前の譜面にはこんなもの 見たことありませんから、今度初めて出るのがちょっと妙な感じ
この前はローリエさんが絶対1/4slider使わないと判断しました0 0


また1/3noteが出るのも驚きましたΣ(゚д゚lll) これもこの前出たことの少ない配置ですね

これからローリエさんの譜面にもっと面白い配置が出るのを期待します >.<
posted

sammy711 wrote:

いい譜面です! まぁ...ローリエさんの譜面にはちょっと見えませんね...

01:12:731 (1,2) - いつから1/4sliderを使い始めたのでしょう>.>
素晴らしい感じですけど 以前の譜面にはこんなもの 見たことありませんから、今度初めて出るのがちょっと妙な感じ
この前はローリエさんが絶対1/4slider使わないと判断しました0 0


また1/3noteが出るのも驚きましたΣ(゚д゚lll) これもこの前出たことの少ない配置ですね

これからローリエさんの譜面にもっと面白い配置が出るのを期待します >.<
たまにはいつもと違う感じでね!
色々なことに挑戦するんです
posted
m4m lol

Normal

00:44:079 (2) - What about putting a clap in the end instead of whistle? I think it can emphasize the drum in the song better. If you do it, apply this in every diff
01:50:483 (3,1) - I think something like this flows and looks better

03:07:675 (1,2,1) - I dont' like how it looks... The blanked between 03:07:675 (1,2) - is bad to my eyes, maybe you can fix it
04:01:438 (3,1) - Improve this blanket

Hard

00:48:967 (1,2,3,4) - I think this kind of pattern is too hard for an Hard diff, especially for the 3,4 doublet...
00:50:146 (1,2) - (nazi) - Imporve the blanket
02:13:068 (3) - Be careful! This is 1/3, not 1/4 :!:
03:19:135 (2,3) - Okay, what's the problem here? the slider is 1/3, not 1/4 and the whole stream starts here: 03:19:135 (2) - So, I suggest to replace this 03:19:135 (2,3) - With an unique 1/3 slider

Insane

01:24:528 (1,2,3) - Stack these elements properly
01:28:405 (2,3,4,1) - I think this pattern is supposed to be symmetrical... So, 4 and 2 have different shapes, you should make them the same
02:13:068 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - As I said in Hard, this is 1/3

____________

Good map, take a star
posted
M4M~

NORMAL

00:32:281 (2) - I think this would be better if it was a single circle instead of a 1/2 slider since this part of the song is still slow so I think a 1/1 rhythm would be more appropriate

01:06:663 (1,2) - These notes are a bit too far up screen so it may be hard to view them. try (112,84) for 01:06:663 (1) - and (188,52) for 01:07:169 (2) -

01:50:483 (3) - This kind of overlaps with 01:48:124 (1) - because it hasnt really disappeared off screen yet, so try to make this a single circle instead to avoid the overlap



02:28:910 (2) - Add a note here because the strong rhythm point feels broken if there's a gap here

02:43:910 (2) - Try to make this end on white tick at 02:44:753

HARD

00:38:854 (4) - Add clap at the end of slider

01:37:843 (2) - NC this to make them a different color, the notes will be easier to read

02:14:922 (4) - The patten would flow better if this was stacked on the tail of 02:15:090 (1) - at (339,138)

02:16:439 (1) - A bit too off screen, make the head at (168,40)

04:24:865 (3) - Would look better if this last note was at (256,52) to make the last note a lot easier to spot

INSANE

00:51:495 (1) - Pattern would look nicer if this was stacked on top of 00:51:832 (3) - and leave 00:51:663 (2) - at same position

02:13:068 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) This is a 1/3 stream, so take note of the timing selection

04:18:797 (2,3) - Are they unstacked intentionally?

Insane is really good so not many errors I could spot

Hope I helped and its a really nice song. Love it
posted
almost fixed !!
posted
Some suggestions.

[Hard]

00:49:135 (2, 3, 4) - Overlap (3, 4) in (2)

01:11:888 (1) - Remove NC

01:24:528 (4) - Add NC

01:25:540 (1) - Remove NC

02:02:618 (4) - Move to x:344 y:252

02:10:371 (3, 4) - Use this rhythm http://puu.sh/60bjX.jpg o3o

02:56:551 (5) - Change this slider by a simple note and add a new one on 02:56:888, something like this http://puu.sh/60boD.jpg

[Insane]

01:01:607 (3, 4, 5) - Overlap (4, 5) in (3)


I guess I'll continue later, but it will be difficult since this map is awesome. :3
posted
Red - Unrankable
Blue - Highly recommended to fix
Black - Suggestion

[General]

Add Sho Watanabe to the tags since he's composed this song.
If you are able to, find a 192kbps mp3 for better quality. If you cannot find one, then tell me and I'll send you one if I'll find it in my PC.
03:57:561 - I think kiai should end when the violin ends, so keep this part still kiai and end it on 03:58:235, also it's mostly better when kiai ends on downbeat.
02:35:315 - Same about this, kiai should end on 02:40:708 I don't think it's sensible to turn kiai of when the refrain continues in music


[Normal]

00:34:641 (2) - In my opinion, it's better on 369;297 because it makes more natural flow with previous slider.
01:46:776 (1) - Move this slider on 312;91 for symmetry (previous slider is exactly in the center)
01:54:191 (1,2,1,2,3) - It is too confusing for Normal difficulty. Too many stacks might make a player to miss, so probably try something simplier like remaking first notes like this?

Coordinates: 01:54:191 (1) - 0;51 01:54:528 (2) - 65;110
02:05:652 (1,1) - Make a better blanket. Just to look visually better, nothing important.
02:40:877 (1) - I think it's too short spinner for a normal diff so it might end even before player realizes he should be spinning now. Maybe start it a little earlier, or end later. Better make it same as hard diff
03:39:359 (1) - 399;234, same reason as 01:46:776 (1), symmetry.

[Hard]

AR -1 for better gap between all diffs
01:45:090 (4,5,1) - This totally deserves to be linear stream. You've started linearly, but then it came to normal stream, that's in my opinion weird. Try this?

Also I don't think you should follow DS in stream when you are changing slider velocity, it makes the streams inconsistent.
04:24:865 (3) - Listen to this with 25% speed. This note is a bit out in my opinion. You can hear the hitsound first and then the sound in music, it's imo not 1/4 note.

[Insane]

Nothing to mention.

Quite awesome beatmap, mentioned only thinks I really didn't like for a reason. It doesn't need any critical changes.
Good luck~

Btw. Wanted M4M, but you closed when I started modding. If you want, mod it back, it has only 60 secs and 2 diffs, so I hope you could forgive me. http://osu.ppy.sh/s/137514
posted
[Insane]

03:37:674 (1) - out of screen


You should be fix :(
posted
解せぬ...
posted
From my queue~
Laurierさん、こんにちは~

[General]
  1. 検索機能としては今のtagでも十分ですが、tags suggetionとして一応これも:
    Puella Magi
    movie
    rebellion
  2. combo colourの1と2は見分けにくいような・・・

[Normal]
  1. 00:02:956 (3) - end at 00:03:630 低速なので出だしだけは1/1rhythmがありがたい
  2. 01:22:675 (1) - delete and add a note at 01:23:180- rhythm取りが難しいので(下手でごめん・・・)
  3. 01:56:214 (1) - move to x:137 y:258 (stack corretly)
  4. 02:36:326 (2) - move to x:296 y:29 (^)

[Hard]
  1. 00:20:484 (5) - NC
  2. 01:35:821- add a note
  3. 01:42:731 (1) - x:34 y:320 (stack corretly)
  4. 02:38:517 (2) - x:276 y:146 (^)
  5. 02:40:371 (4) - Ctrl+G. 次のspinnerまでの間隔が短いのでendが中央に近いとやりやすいです
  6. 03:08:686 (5) - x:426 y:203 (stack corretly)
  7. 03:21:495 (2) - x:308 y:112 (^)
  8. 03:33:966 (1) - x:184 y:199 (^)
  9. 03:35:314 (1) - x:184 y:199 (^)
  10. 03:42:898- remove clap?

[Insane]
  1. 01:21:495 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - star-pattern どうでしょう?
    29,166,81495,2,0,L|37:255,1,90,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    135,342,81832,1,2,0:0:0:0:
    107,211,82000,1,2,0:0:0:0:
    53,334,82169,1,8,0:0:0:0:
    170,266,82337,1,0,0:0:0:0:
    53,334,82506,5,12,0:0:0:0:
    29,166,82675,1,8,0:0:0:0:
    53,334,83012,1,2,0:0:0:0:
    135,342,83180,2,0,P|169:351|213:338,1,67.5000025749208
  2. 01:24:528 (1,2,3) - 意図的にずらしてます?
  3. 03:24:866 (6) - x:255 y:140 (stack corretly)
  4. 03:24:697 (5) - x:184 y:31 (^) (これは離れているのでどうでもよいかも)
  5. 04:07:337 (4) - x:142 y:257 (^)
  6. 04:23:179 (3,4) - どっちかCtrl+G


座標の提案はプレイ中はわからないので無視して良いです(あれ、デジャブ?)
~Good Luck~
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