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This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2014년 3월 2일 일요일 at 오후 7:37:02

Artist: Ayumi Fujimura
Title: Passionate Squall
Source: Seikon no Qwaser
Tags: ending 豊崎 愛生 茅原 実里 平野 綾 日笠 陽子 Toyosaki Aki Chihara Minori Hirano Aya Hisaka Youko
BPM: 120
Filesize: 5200kb
Play Time: 03:46
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (2.31 stars, 191 notes)
  2. Hard (4.84 stars, 407 notes)
  3. Normal (4 stars, 291 notes)
Download: Ayumi Fujimura - Passionate Squall
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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<3

Thanks for mod
2013-12-04: -Srui-
2013-12-07: tellertheworld
2013-12-09: AlexaBM
2013-12-11: [ Karen ]
2013-12-11: captin1
2013-12-12: Ethercastle
2013-12-14: AlpacaCokelat
2013-12-15: OstrichSupreme
2013-12-16: Spudgy
2013-12-22: vahn10
2014-01-06: HelloSCV
2014-01-07: Avishay
2014-01-17: Park-Hyun
2014-01-17: Spring Roll
2014-01-22: sjoy
2014-01-24: Rakuen
2014-01-30: Lolicore_Komari
2014-02-15: 10crystalmask01
2014-02-17: al2e10
2014-02-18: No Dap
2014-02-22: DexFrild
2014-02-24: Mei
DeletedUser_2010275
안녕하세요~ 오스 팬카페에서 왔습니다 ㅇㅂㅇ!

[General]
  • 으어 성흔의 퀘이서!! ㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋ
    그래도 노래는 좋네요~

    [Normal]
    • 00:06:830 (2,1) - 슬라이더 안 겹치게 해주세요
      00:07:830 (4) - (412,256)으로 옮기심이?
      00:39:080 (2,4) - 슬라이더 겹친거 떼어주시면 더 나을 것 같은데..
      00:50:330 (3) - 곡선을 조금만 줄여주세요
      00:51:080 (4,6) - 약간 겹친거 떼주세요
      01:40:580 (4) - 뉴콤보
      03:14:330 (1) ~ 03:27:330 (4) - 지루한 감이 약간 있는 듯 하네요..

      [Hard]
      • 00:27:580 (6) - (268,228)로 이동시켜주세요
        00:27:830 (7) - 위의 것을 하실거라면 이 슬라를 (164,204)로 이동시켜주세요 (00:26:080 (2) 와 겹치게)
        00:45:580 (1,2) - 이 부분 변속은 딱히 필요없어도 될 것 같은데요..
        00:48:580 (1) - ^
        00:48:580 (1,1) - 모양을 비슷하게 만들어보세요~
        01:17:580 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 간격 더 넓게 하셔도 될 듯 한데...
        01:39:830 (5) - 를 01:39:705 - 로 이동시키시고 01:40:080 - 여기서 끝나게 하는 리듬은 어떠신가요?
        02:56:080 - 서클 추가

        [Insane]
        • 01:17:330 (1) - 다른 슬라이더 모양을 사용해보시는 건 어떠실지..
          02:09:330 (1) ~ 02:10:830 (9) - 약간 어색한 듯 하네요

          모딩은 허접이라 도움이 될 지 모르겠네요;;
          그나저나 처음 만드신 맵 맞으신지 ㄷㄷㄷㄷ
          잘 만드셨어요!

          (여담으로 성흔의 퀘이서 짱짱맨!)
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

-Srui- wrote:

안녕하세요~ 오스 팬카페에서 왔습니다 ㅇㅂㅇ!

[General]
  • 으어 성흔의 퀘이서!! ㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋ
    그래도 노래는 좋네요~

    [Normal]
    • 00:06:830 (2,1) - 슬라이더 안 겹치게 해주세요
      00:07:830 (4) - (412,256)으로 옮기심이? - 패턴이 이상하게 되더군요 ㅠㅠ 죄송합니다.
      00:39:080 (2,4) - 슬라이더 겹친거 떼어주시면 더 나을 것 같은데.. - 죄송합니다.
      00:50:330 (3) - 곡선을 조금만 줄여주세요
      00:51:080 (4,6) - 약간 겹친거 떼주세요
      01:40:580 (4) - 뉴콤보
      03:14:330 (1) ~ 03:27:330 (4) - 지루한 감이 약간 있는 듯 하네요.. - 좋은 리듬이 떠오르질 않아서..;w;

      [Hard]
      • 00:27:580 (6) - (268,228)로 이동시켜주세요
        00:27:830 (7) - 위의 것을 하실거라면 이 슬라를 (164,204)로 이동시켜주세요 (00:26:080 (2) 와 겹치게)
        00:45:580 (1,2) - 이 부분 변속은 딱히 필요없어도 될 것 같은데요..
        00:48:580 (1) - ^ - 일부러 노래에 맞춘 패턴이라서요..ㅎ
        00:48:580 (1,1) - 모양을 비슷하게 만들어보세요~
        01:17:580 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 간격 더 넓게 하셔도 될 듯 한데... - 넓게하면 배치가 이상하게 되더라구요 ㅠㅠ
        01:39:830 (5) - 를 01:39:705 - 로 이동시키시고 01:40:080 - 여기서 끝나게 하는 리듬은 어떠신가요?
        02:56:080 - 서클 추가

        [Insane]
        • 01:17:330 (1) - 다른 슬라이더 모양을 사용해보시는 건 어떠실지..
          02:09:330 (1) ~ 02:10:830 (9) - 약간 어색한 듯 하네요

          모딩은 허접이라 도움이 될 지 모르겠네요;;
          그나저나 처음 만드신 맵 맞으신지 ㄷㄷㄷㄷ
          잘 만드셨어요!

          (여담으로 성흔의 퀘이서 짱짱맨!)
HabiHolic
나중에 모딩해드릴게요,, ㄱㄷ리세요 ㅋㅋ
-Teina-
For M4M:
[BG]
Use this

[Insane]
open

^This is main rhythm.
00:13:705 (1) - before 1/4 to start slider and end at the same.
00:21:330 (2) - misreading
00:23:830 (3) - delete
00:23:955 (4) - before 1/4 to start slider and end at the same.
00:27:955 (2,3,4,1) - before 1/4 to start and end at the same.
00:44:330 (5,6,7) - something wrong in the rhythm
00:50:080 (3) - reduction 1/4
00:50:455 (4) - before 1/4 to start and end at the same.
01:10:080 (3,4) - uncoordinated in angle
01:11:330 (1) - move note X:376 Y:70

^Try to use this package
01:19:955 - circle here
01:20:080 - slider here 3/4
01:25:330 - slider here 2/4
01:25:705 - spinner start here
01:35:330 (1) - delete
01:35:455 - circle here
01:35:580 - slider here
01:35:830 - circle here
01:36:080 - circle here
01:36:705 - circle here
01:36:830 - slider stat here
01:44:080 (3) - reduction 1/4
01:44:330 - circle here
01:44:455 - slider here 2/4
01:44:830 - circle here
01:45:080 (7) - start at 01:45:205 -

^Try to use this package
02:04:205 (2) - 1/4 later

^Try to use this package
02:16:330 (1,2,3,4,5) - move note X:+60
02:18:705 (6) - detele
02:18:705 - slider start here
02:50:580 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - uncoordinated of rhythm
03:24:080 (3) - end at 03:24:205 -
03:24:330 - circle here
03:24:705 - slider start here

[General]
open
Try to improve for uncoordinated in the rhythm.
You can start the slider or circle when singing and sounding start.
Also ,please take carefully for the angle.
You can try to text your map more.
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

tellertheworld wrote:

For M4M:
[BG]
Use this

[Insane]
open

^This is main rhythm.
00:13:705 (1) - before 1/4 to start slider and end at the same. - Sorry, don't know what you mean
00:21:330 (2) - misreading - Umm.. I think it's okay..
00:23:830 (3) - delete
00:23:955 (4) - before 1/4 to start slider and end at the same.
00:27:955 (2,3,4,1) - before 1/4 to start and end at the same. - Sorry, don't know what you mean
00:44:330 (5,6,7) - something wrong in the rhythm - I think it's ok
00:50:080 (3) - reduction 1/4
00:50:455 (4) - before 1/4 to start and end at the same.
01:10:080 (3,4) - uncoordinated in angle - It is overlap with 01:11:705 (2) end
01:11:330 (1) - move note X:376 Y:70

^Try to use this package
01:19:955 - circle here
01:20:080 - slider here 3/4
01:25:330 - slider here 2/4
01:25:705 - spinner start here
01:35:330 (1) - delete
01:35:455 - circle here
01:35:580 - slider here
01:35:830 - circle here
01:36:080 - circle here
01:36:705 - circle here
01:36:830 - slider stat here

01:44:080 (3) - reduction 1/4
01:44:330 - circle here
01:44:455 - slider here 2/4
01:44:830 - circle here

01:45:080 (7) - start at 01:45:205 -

^Try to use this package
02:04:205 (2) - 1/4 later

^Try to use this package
02:16:330 (1,2,3,4,5) - move note X:+60
02:18:705 (6) - detele
02:18:705 - slider start here

02:50:580 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2) - uncoordinated of rhythm - I think it's ok..
03:24:080 (3) - end at 03:24:205 -
03:24:330 - circle here
03:24:705 - slider start here

[General]
open
write later~
Thanks for Modding!
-Teina-
Sorry, my English is poor...

00:13:705 (1) - start 00:13:830 - and end 00:14:080 -
00:27:955 (2) - delete
00:28:080 - 00:28:205 - 00:28:330 - circle here
00:28:455 - spinner here
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

tellertheworld wrote:

Sorry, my English is poor...

00:13:705 (1) - start 00:13:830 - and end 00:14:080 - - Sorry, I like mine.
00:27:955 (2) - delete
00:28:080 - 00:28:205 - 00:28:330 - circle here
00:28:455 - spinner here
- I like mine.
Thanks for modding tellertheworld!
My English is poor, too ;w;
AlexaBM
hi~ M4M

[Normal]
That diff is too hard for normal. Let's see..
00:08:080 (5) - Delete
00:09:330 (3) - Make one circle instead of slider
01:10:330 (5) - Delete
02:00:830 (3,4) - Make better blanket
03:20:330 (1,2,3,4,1) - Don't make jumps in Normal diff

[Hard]
00:18:580 (3,5) - Better blanket
01:06:830 (1,2,3) - ^

[Insane]
Sry, can't say anything

Nice map. GL~
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

AlexaBM wrote:

hi~ M4M

[Normal]
That diff is too hard for normal. Let's see..
00:08:080 (5) - Delete - I will fix this when it is mentioned again
00:09:330 (3) - Make one circle instead of slider - Sry, i keep mine
01:10:330 (5) - Delete - Why?
02:00:830 (3,4) - Make better blanket
03:20:330 (1,2,3,4,1) - Don't make jumps in Normal diff - I will fix this when it is mentioned again

[Hard]
00:18:580 (3,5) - Better blanket
01:06:830 (1,2,3) - ^

[Insane]
Sry, can't say anything

Nice map. GL~
Thanks for modding!
Lari
안녕하세요~ 모딩 잘하시는 않지만..
열시미 했습니다!

[Normal]

00:51:580 (5) - 뉴콤
00:56:330 (5) - ^
01:04:330 (4) - ^
01:40:580 (4) - ^
01:48:830 (5) - ^
03:08:580 (5) - ^
00:15:580 - 이부분 박자 수정이요

00:19:080 (5) - 박자 수정 이요

00:20:330 - 박자 수정이요

00:38:330 ~ 00:42:080 - 까지 박자 수정이요

01:25:330 (1) - 이부분 스핀으로 바꿔보시는게?
02:05:830 (5) ~02:08:080 (5) - 까지 박자 수정해보시는게..?


[Hard]
02:05:830 (5) - NC
02:09:830 (7) - ^
02:15:830 (7) - NC 하고 02:16:330 - 여기있는 슬라이드도 NC 그뒤 02:17:580 - 여기있는 반복슬라이드 에서 NC
03:04:330 (1) - 여기서 부터 03:06:080 - 여기까지 같은색으로 해주세요

[Insane]
00:21:580 (3) 랑 00:21:830 (4) 이거 거리가 너무 머네요..
X:72 Y:144 ////// X:280 Y: 44 로 해보세요
00:27:080 - 00:27:330 - 여기 서클 겹쳐보시는게?..
01:04:455 (6) - NC
01:23:080 ~ 01:24:830 - 다시 생각해보시는게..
02:01:455 (6) - NC
02:09:330 ~ 02:09:830 - 여기도 다시 생각해보시는게 어떠세요..?
02:46:330 ~ 02:54:080 - 여기 스트림 부분.. 조절해보심이..?


킁킁..
이지랑 노멀밖에 안건들여봐서
하드나 인센은 박자를 잘 못잡겠네요..

음.. 처음 매핑이신데 잘하신..
그리고 노래하나는 좋네요 ㅋ.ㅋ
captin1
hi

try offset 6324 (-6), sounds a bit better to me

good luck!
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

[ Karen ] wrote:

안녕하세요~ 모딩 잘하시는 않지만..
열시미 했습니다!

[Normal]

00:51:580 (5) - 뉴콤
00:56:330 (5) - ^
01:04:330 (4) - ^
01:40:580 (4) - ^
01:48:830 (5) - ^
03:08:580 (5) - ^
00:15:580 - 이부분 박자 수정이요


00:19:080 (5) - 박자 수정 이요 - 다음에도 같은 내용이 나오면 수정해보도록 하겠습니다! 죄송합니다.

00:20:330 - 박자 수정이요 - ^

00:38:330 ~ 00:42:080 - 까지 박자 수정이요

01:25:330 (1) - 이부분 스핀으로 바꿔보시는게? - 노말 난이도에는 일부러 스핀을 많이 안넣으려고 생각하서 이렇게 만든거라.. 죄송합니다.
02:05:830 (5) ~02:08:080 (5) - 까지 박자 수정해보시는게..?


[Hard]
02:05:830 (5) - NC
02:09:830 (7) - ^
02:15:830 (7) - NC 하고 02:16:330 - 여기있는 슬라이드도 NC 그뒤 02:17:580 - 여기있는 반복슬라이드 에서 NC
03:04:330 (1) - 여기서 부터 03:06:080 - 여기까지 같은색으로 해주세요


[Insane]
00:21:580 (3) 랑 00:21:830 (4) 이거 거리가 너무 머네요..
X:72 Y:144 ////// X:280 Y: 44 로 해보세요

00:27:080 - 00:27:330 - 여기 서클 겹쳐보시는게?.. - 다음에도 같은 내용이 나오면 수정하겠습니다 ㅎㅎ
01:04:455 (6) - NC
01:23:080 ~ 01:24:830 - 다시 생각해보시는게..
02:01:455 (6) - NC
02:09:330 ~ 02:09:830 - 여기도 다시 생각해보시는게 어떠세요..?
02:46:330 ~ 02:54:080 - 여기 스트림 부분.. 조절해보심이..? - 음.. 괜찮다고 생각되는데 ㅇㅁㅇ; 이것도 역시 다음에 같은 내용이 나오면 수정하겠습니다 ㅎㅎ


킁킁..
이지랑 노멀밖에 안건들여봐서
하드나 인센은 박자를 잘 못잡겠네요..

음.. 처음 매핑이신데 잘하신..
그리고 노래하나는 좋네요 ㅋ.ㅋ

captin1 wrote:

hi

try offset 6324 (-6), sounds a bit better to me

good luck!
Thanks for modding!
Ethercastle
From my queue~

[General]
Pretty sure you need a easy diff that's below 3.5 stars.

Really need hitsounds... current hitsounding is way too random and lacking.. Will suggest that you start experimenting with the basics: clap on 2/4 white line and whistles on the red lines. Try soft hitsounds when following the vocals.

And you really need to follow the rhythm more... Slow the music down to 50% and listen might be a good idea.

[Insane]
00:07:949 (8) - this should start at the previous white line to follow the guitar
00:08:324 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - pretty sure this stream follows nothing. Suggest that you rework this part.
00:10:949 (4) - somewhere around (232,112) for better flow. Current one plays kinda awkward.
00:11:199 (5) - well don't like this slider. To long and the whistle sound it's following isn't even that noticeable
00:12:324 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - well this also doesn't follow the drums, which are mainly on the blue line
00:13:699 (1) - vocal strarts at the previous red line so imo if you are following the vocal later on you'd better follow it here too
00:16:324 (1) - make this curved or move to somewhere around (424,268) for better flow
00:17:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - here the vocal is clearly repeating the same thing for three times so I guess your can do similar things with the patterns. Current pattern is a bit random
00:38:324 (1,2) -
00:40:824 (1) - Cool, but I think this is probably unrankable as the speed is been manipulated too much by the anchors.
00:44:324 (5,6,7) - ctrl+G for 6? Anyway don't really like this pattern
00:48:574 (1) - certainly unrankable as it's impossible to tell the direction of the slider
01:09:824 (2) - strong beat is on the blue line so I guess replacing this with a circle?
01:11:199 - missing circle
01:13:449 (2) - nothing strong here so delete this?
01:13:574 (3) - again vocal emphasizes on the blue line so this slider does not fit well
01:16:574 (2,3) - ctrl+G to follow the previous pattern?
01:45:824 (1) - unrankable I guess
01:56:074 (2,3,4) - using slider end for vocal doesn't fit that well I guess. Strong beats should be clickable
02:06:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - stream doesn't fit
02:17:574 (1,2,3) - such arrangements with a triangle in the middle is...meh... really akward to play...
02:46:324 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - guess you should improve this stream...
02:50:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - ^ And I feel that the guitar solo part needs rework..

Skipping hard and normal.

Good luck ^ ^
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Ethercastle wrote:

From my queue~

[General]
Pretty sure you need a easy diff that's below 3.5 stars.

Really need hitsounds... current hitsounding is way too random and lacking.. Will suggest that you start experimenting with the basics: clap on 2/4 white line and whistles on the red lines. Try soft hitsounds when following the vocals.

And you really need to follow the rhythm more... Slow the music down to 50% and listen might be a good idea.

[Insane]
00:07:949 (8) - this should start at the previous white line to follow the guitar - I will fix this when it is mentioned again
00:08:324 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - pretty sure this stream follows nothing. Suggest that you rework this part. - ^
00:10:949 (4) - somewhere around (232,112) for better flow. Current one plays kinda awkward.
00:11:199 (5) - well don't like this slider. To long and the whistle sound it's following isn't even that noticeable - i keep mine
00:12:324 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - well this also doesn't follow the drums, which are mainly on the blue line - This diff is Insane. i think it is ok
00:13:699 (1) - vocal strarts at the previous red line so imo if you are following the vocal later on you'd better follow it here too
00:16:324 (1) - make this curved or move to somewhere around (424,268) for better flow - I will fix this when it is mentioned again
00:17:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - here the vocal is clearly repeating the same thing for three times so I guess your can do similar things with the patterns. Current pattern is a bit random - ^
00:38:324 (1,2) -
00:40:824 (1) - Cool, but I think this is probably unrankable as the speed is been manipulated too much by the anchors. - Ok, i consider it.
00:44:324 (5,6,7) - ctrl+G for 6? Anyway don't really like this pattern - i think it is ok.
00:48:574 (1) - certainly unrankable as it's impossible to tell the direction of the slider - Ok, i consider it.
01:09:824 (2) - strong beat is on the blue line so I guess replacing this with a circle? - i keep mine. sorry.
01:11:199 - missing circle - I think that it becomes even without
01:13:449 (2) - nothing strong here so delete this?
01:13:574 (3) - again vocal emphasizes on the blue line so this slider does not fit well
01:16:574 (2,3) - ctrl+G to follow the previous pattern?
01:45:824 (1) - unrankable I guess - consider it. thx :3
01:56:074 (2,3,4) - using slider end for vocal doesn't fit that well I guess. Strong beats should be clickable
02:06:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - stream doesn't fit - i think it is ok. but, i will fix this when it is mentioned again
02:17:574 (1,2,3) - such arrangements with a triangle in the middle is...meh... really akward to play... - ^
02:46:324 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - guess you should improve this stream...
02:50:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - ^ And I feel that the guitar solo part needs rework..

Skipping hard and normal.

Good luck ^ ^
Thanks for modding!
jyu
Hi~ trying to m4m. haven't mod for more than a month, i hope it's still fine. and sorry for grammar error -.-

[General]

  • 1. Consider adding 'Toyosaki Aki, Chihara Minori, Hirano Aya & Hisaka Youko' to Artist since they also sing the song. Some maps nowadays have multiple names in Artist, so i suppose it's fine (like https://osu.ppy.sh/s/122658) . If you follow my suggestions, here's the kanji (i hope it's correct) '豊崎 愛生, 茅原 実里, 平野 綾 & 日笠 陽子

    2. Remove 'anime' from Tags, it will be added to Genre. And i still don't know the meaning of breast milk in Tags ._.

    3. Your easiest diff has 4.06 stars, while the rule said that the easiest diff must have star difficulty around 2.5-3 stars, see this https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Ranking_Criteria#Mapset . You should make your normal easier or make a new Easy diff

    4. It would be better if you spice the map more with hitsounds like http://puu.sh/5LWEj.wav or http://puu.sh/5LWKI.wav, or you can find another hitsound which suit your preference, it's up to you

[Normal]

  • 00:06:324 (1,2,3,4,5) - rhythm suggestion
    00:12:324 (1,2,3,4) - it's really hard to read. Please use distance snap and rearrange the positions
    00:13:574 (1,2) - switch nc
    00:16:324 (4) - with the relatively slow AR, this hidden circle might really hard to see for beginners. Consider placing it somewhere else as long as it's not hidden
    00:19:074 (5) - the rhythm and vocal is quite familiar with 00:17:574 (1,2,3) - , making it a long slider is kinda awkward to me. My suggestion
    00:28:324 (1) - add finish
    01:11:324 (3) - nc this, it's the beginning of a new kiai
    01:16:074 (5) - same suggestion like 00:19:074 (5) -
    01:25:324 (1) - there's no particular beat in 01:25:824 - 01:26:324 - 01:26:824 - so it sounds really awkward. i suggest to change it into spinner which starts from 01:25:324 - end at 01:27:324 -
    01:35:324 (1) - add finish
    02:12:574 (3) - same suggestion like 00:19:074 (5) -
    02:17:574 (3) - how about making it a reversed slider? fits the vocal more. and also rhythm suggestion
    02:21:324 (2) - same suggestion like 00:19:074 (5) -
    02:22:324 (1) - add finish
    02:56:324 (5) - only suggestion. make sure the slider's tail won't touch previous slider's body
    02:58:324 (1) - finish at slider's head?
    03:00:074 (3) - same like 02:56:324 (5) -
    03:10:574 (4) - nc?
    03:30:324 (3) - nc this, it's the beginning of the kiai/chorus
    03:34:574 (4) - same like 00:19:074 (5) -
    03:43:074 (1) - finish at slider's tail
    03:44:324 (1) - finish

[Hard]

  • 00:08:074 - add a note?
    00:12:324 (1) - add one more reversed slider, so it will end at 00:12:699 - and make it easier to read 00:12:949 (2) -
    00:17:324 - add a note here? it feels empty
    00:18:574 (3) - only rhythm suggestion, since it's actually awkward to have a long slider when the vocal urge you to click on the beat, not to hold the slider
    00:22:324 (1) - add a note?
    00:27:324 (5) - add finish
    00:28:324 (1) - ^
    00:56:074 (5) - add a note here would be great, keep the flow running
    01:00:324 (5) - nc this? try not to make the combo too long here
    01:11:324 (4) - nc, it's the beginning of a new kiai
    01:11:324 (4) - add a note?
    01:15:324 (3) - add finish
    01:16:074 (1) - add finish at slider's tail
    01:20:324 - add a note. even though you're following the vocal, but there's a beat here
    01:22:324 - ^
    01:26:074 - while there's no beat here, the reversed slider sounds really awkward. Consider changing it into spinner
    01:37:824 (1) - i'm not really good at making slider, but try to lower the slider's head point a little bit (one grid), both ends will be balanced
    01:56:824 (4) - really hard to read. consider making it visible like 01:58:824 (3,4) -
    01:58:824 (3,4) - add a note. i hear a drum here
    02:08:324 (3) - nc, it's the beginning of a new kiai
    02:08:324 (3) - add a note?
    02:15:824 (1,2) - switch nc
    02:19:324 - add a note?
    02:22:324 (1) - add finish
    02:57:574 (7) - add finish at slider's tail
    03:02:824 (2,3,4) - nazi, not stacked properly
    03:10:574 (3,4,5) - ^
    03:30:324 (1) - add a note?
    03:40:324 (1,2,3) - also nazi, not stacked properly
    03:44:324 (1) - add finish

[Insane]

  • 00:28:324 (1) - only suggestion
    00:22:324 (3) - add finish at slider's head
    00:40:824 (1) - usually slider like this is the cause of unrank, since it's categorized as Burai Sliders. maybe you should ask a BAT about this slider
    00:48:574 (1) - ^, this one is more confusing though lol
    00:51:324 (1,2,3,4) - imo, the pattern is a bit loose to me when most of the other patterns are really dense like 00:49:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - . consider adding notes 00:52:199 - 00:51:949 -
    01:45:824 (1) - same like 00:40:824 (1) -
    02:08:324 (1) - add finish at slider's head
    02:22:449 (1) - add finish
    03:04:324 (1,2,3,4) - why not make the combo like 02:56:324 (1,1,1,1) - ?
    03:20:324 (4,1,2,3,4) - really hard to read x.x
    03:44:449 (1) - add finish
ok i hope it helps
good luck~
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

AlpacaCokelat wrote:

Hi~ trying to m4m. haven't mod for more than a month, i hope it's still fine. and sorry for grammar error -.-

[General]

  • 1. Consider adding 'Toyosaki Aki, Chihara Minori, Hirano Aya & Hisaka Youko' to Artist since they also sing the song. Some maps nowadays have multiple names in Artist, so i suppose it's fine (like https://osu.ppy.sh/s/122658) . If you follow my suggestions, here's the kanji (i hope it's correct) '豊崎 愛生, 茅原 実里, 平野 綾 & 日笠 陽子

    2. Remove 'anime' from Tags, it will be added to Genre. And i still don't know the meaning of breast milk in Tags ._.

    3. Your easiest diff has 4.06 stars, while the rule said that the easiest diff must have star difficulty around 2.5-3 stars, see this https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Ranking_Criteria#Mapset . You should make your normal easier or make a new Easy diff

    4. It would be better if you spice the map more with hitsounds like http://puu.sh/5LWEj.wav or http://puu.sh/5LWKI.wav, or you can find another hitsound which suit your preference, it's up to you

[Normal]

  • 00:06:324 (1,2,3,4,5) - rhythm suggestion
    00:12:324 (1,2,3,4) - it's really hard to read. Please use distance snap and rearrange the positions - I will fix this when it is mentioned again
    00:13:574 (1,2) - switch nc
    00:16:324 (4) - with the relatively slow AR, this hidden circle might really hard to see for beginners. Consider placing it somewhere else as long as it's not hidden
    00:19:074 (5) - the rhythm and vocal is quite familiar with 00:17:574 (1,2,3) - , making it a long slider is kinda awkward to me. My suggestion
    00:28:324 (1) - add finish
    01:11:324 (3) - nc this, it's the beginning of a new kiai

    01:16:074 (5) - same suggestion like 00:19:074 (5) -
    01:25:324 (1) - there's no particular beat in 01:25:824 - 01:26:324 - 01:26:824 - so it sounds really awkward. i suggest to change it into spinner which starts from 01:25:324 - end at 01:27:324 -
    01:35:324 (1) - add finish
    02:12:574 (3) - same suggestion like 00:19:074 (5) -
    02:17:574 (3) - how about making it a reversed slider? fits the vocal more. and also rhythm suggestion
    02:21:324 (2) - same suggestion like 00:19:074 (5) -
    02:22:324 (1) - add finish

    02:56:324 (5) - only suggestion. make sure the slider's tail won't touch previous slider's body
    02:58:324 (1) - finish at slider's head?
    03:00:074 (3) - same like 02:56:324 (5) -

    03:10:574 (4) - nc?
    03:30:324 (3) - nc this, it's the beginning of the kiai/chorus
    03:34:574 (4) - same like 00:19:074 (5) -
    03:43:074 (1) - finish at slider's tail
    03:44:324 (1) - finish

[Hard]

  • 00:08:074 - add a note?
    00:12:324 (1) - add one more reversed slider, so it will end at 00:12:699 - and make it easier to read 00:12:949 (2) -
    00:17:324 - add a note here? it feels empty
    00:18:574 (3) - only rhythm suggestion, since it's actually awkward to have a long slider when the vocal urge you to click on the beat, not to hold the slider
    00:22:324 (1) - add a note? - hmm.. why?
    00:27:324 (5) - add finish
    00:28:324 (1) - ^
    00:56:074 (5) - add a note here would be great, keep the flow running
    01:00:324 (5) - nc this? try not to make the combo too long here
    01:11:324 (4) - nc, it's the beginning of a new kiai
    01:11:324 (4) - add a note? - Sorry...
    01:15:324 (3) - add finish
    01:16:074 (1) - add finish at slider's tail

    01:20:324 - add a note. even though you're following the vocal, but there's a beat here
    01:22:324 - ^
    01:26:074 - while there's no beat here, the reversed slider sounds really awkward. Consider changing it into spinner
    01:37:824 (1) - i'm not really good at making slider, but try to lower the slider's head point a little bit (one grid), both ends will be balanced
    01:56:824 (4) - really hard to read. consider making it visible like 01:58:824 (3,4) -
    01:58:824 (3,4) - add a note. i hear a drum here - Sorry.
    02:08:324 (3) - nc, it's the beginning of a new kiai
    02:08:324 (3) - add a note? - Sorry.
    02:15:824 (1,2) - switch nc
    02:19:324 - add a note?
    02:22:324 (1) - add finish
    02:57:574 (7) - add finish at slider's tail
    03:02:824 (2,3,4) - nazi, not stacked properly
    03:10:574 (3,4,5) - ^
    03:30:324 (1) - add a note? - Sorry.
    03:40:324 (1,2,3) - also nazi, not stacked properly
    03:44:324 (1) - add finish

[Insane]

  • 00:28:324 (1) - only suggestion - Sorry, I don't know what you mean ;w;
    00:22:324 (3) - add finish at slider's head
    00:40:824 (1) - usually slider like this is the cause of unrank, since it's categorized as Burai Sliders. maybe you should ask a BAT about this slider
    00:48:574 (1) - ^, this one is more confusing though lol
    00:51:324 (1,2,3,4) - imo, the pattern is a bit loose to me when most of the other patterns are really dense like
    00:49:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - . consider adding notes 00:52:199 - 00:51:949 - - fix something
    01:45:824 (1) - same like 00:40:824 (1) -
    02:08:324 (1) - add finish at slider's head
    02:22:449 (1) - add finish
    03:04:324 (1,2,3,4) - why not make the combo like 02:56:324 (1,1,1,1) - ?
    03:20:324 (4,1,2,3,4) - really hard to read x.x - I keep mine :3
    03:44:449 (1) - add finish
ok i hope it helps
good luck~
Thanks for modding!!
OmgHahaLOLxD
Hello! M4M here!

Normal

00:06:824 (2) - I would shorten this note by a tick...
00:07:574 (3) - and bring this slider back a tick!
00:12:324 (1,2,3,4) - This pattern is nice, but in a normal diff? You may want to make it easier for the not as adept players
00:20:074 (8) - new combo
01:48:574 (4) - ^
02:15:407 (4) - I would move this to x300 and y76 to be symmetrical with 02:15:824 (5) -
02:20:074 (3) - Make this one symmetrical also
03:06:324 (1) - fix the nodes on this slider to look more appealing
03:10:574 (1) - ^

Hard

00:11:949 - New combo
00:12:199 (1) - remove new combo
01:10:574 (1,2,3) - Give these clap
01:16:574 (2) - shorten this note to half of what it currently is, and make it repeat back. Adjust rest of this area for flow
01:25:449 (1) - give this finish
01:45:824 (1) - fix these nodes up a bit

That's all I got, couldn't find much in insane. Anyways, good luck with your map!
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

OstrichSupreme wrote:

Hello! M4M here!

Normal

00:06:824 (2) - I would shorten this note by a tick...
00:07:574 (3) - and bring this slider back a tick!
00:12:324 (1,2,3,4) - This pattern is nice, but in a normal diff? You may want to make it easier for the not as adept players
00:20:074 (8) - new combo
01:48:574 (4) - ^
02:15:407 (4) - I would move this to x300 and y76 to be symmetrical with 02:15:824 (5) - - Sorry, i keep mine
02:20:074 (3) - Make this one symmetrical also - ^
03:06:324 (1) - fix the nodes on this slider to look more appealing - I will fix this when it is mentioned again
03:10:574 (1) - ^ - ^

Hard

00:11:949 - New combo
00:12:199 (1) - remove new combo
01:10:574 (1,2,3) - Give these clap - it seems a little awkward
01:16:574 (2) - shorten this note to half of what it currently is, and make it repeat back. Adjust rest of this area for flow - Ok, i consider it.
01:25:449 (1) - give this finish - Umm.. why?
01:45:824 (1) - fix these nodes up a bit - I will fix this when it is mentioned again

That's all I got, couldn't find much in insane. Anyways, good luck with your map!
Thanks for modding!
jyu

[ Raphael ] wrote:

[Insane]

00:28:324 (1) - only suggestion - Sorry, I don't know what you mean ;w;
i mean, you could start this spinner at 00:28:324 (1) - then add a circle here 00:28:324 - , it might be better
[ Joey ]
Hello, m4m here!

Easy

00:24:324 (4) - Try to match the same shape as 00:22:324 (1) -
00:39:324 (2,3) - I wouldn't overlap these
00:41:574 (5) - Start a new combo here to match the vocals
00:54:824 (1,2,3) - Blanket better
01:02:324 (1) - and 01:02:824 (2) - should be same distance as 01:02:824 (2) - and 01:03:824 (3) -. And try to make same shape. Here is a pic to show you what I mean: It's a really small detail. And I might be wrong.
01:09:074 (4) - Slider matches vocals better here?
02:06:074 (3) - ^
02:44:324 (1,2) - Started these sliders on red ticks sounds funny here. Consider moving them back a tick to start on white ticks.
03:16:324 - Finish hitsound
03:24:324 (2) - ^
03:26:324 (3,4,5) - Don't overlap
03:31:574 (2) - Better blanket if you move to x:259 y:77

Normal

00:12:949 (3,4) - Two hit circles next to each other on blue ticks is weird. Try this instead:
00:23:324 - Hit circle here
01:24:574 (3) - ctrl + g this and move 01:25:074 (4) - to x:276 y:188. Makes it flow better.
02:54:324 (1,2,3,4) - If you put all of these at an angle, it would look cool.
03:14:324 (1,2,3,4) - Overlapping all these is kinda boring =/
03:22:324 (1,2,3,4) - ^
03:29:574 (1,2) - Combo too short?

Hard

00:49:949 (2) - Remove
01:10:574 (1,2,3) - Its more fun if you spread these out, maybe at like a 1.5x distance snap?
01:47:324 (4) - Slider shouldn't end on a blue tick. Shorten this slider by a tick and then move 01:47:699 (5) - back to the blue tick here 01:47:699 (5) -
02:08:699 (2) - Remove this hit circle. Move this slider02:08:824 (3) - back to the blue tick, and also lengthen the slider by a tick. So it looks like this:
pic

02:46:574 (1) - Shouldn't end on blue tick.
03:16:324 (1) - Finish hitsound

Insane

Sorry, I won't be too helpful at modding this one, because it is above my skill level.
00:28:199 (3) - Remove
00:44:324 (5,6,7) - These don't go well with the vocals.Try putting a 1/2 slider here 00:44:324 - , here 00:44:699 -, and here 00:45:074 -
01:37:824 (1) - Make this a 1/1 slider, so it ends on a white tick
03:20:324 (4) - Slider maybe? to match vocals
Sorry, that's all I see with this difficulty.

*************************************************

As a side note, there are areas where your hitsounds are too quiet, and I can barely hear them. Look for that and fix it.
Anyways, I hope my mod helps. Good luck, and message me anytime if you have any questions!! :D
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Spudgy wrote:

Hello, m4m here!

Easy

00:24:324 (4) - Try to match the same shape as 00:22:324 (1) -
00:39:324 (2,3) - I wouldn't overlap these - I will fix this when it is mentioned again
00:41:574 (5) - Start a new combo here to match the vocals
00:54:824 (1,2,3) - Blanket better
01:02:324 (1) - and 01:02:824 (2) - should be same distance as 01:02:824 (2) - and 01:03:824 (3) -. And try to make same shape. Here is a pic to show you what I mean: It's a really small detail. And I might be wrong.
01:09:074 (4) - Slider matches vocals better here? - I will fix this when it is mentioned again
02:06:074 (3) - ^ - ^
02:44:324 (1,2) - Started these sliders on red ticks sounds funny here. Consider moving them back a tick to start on white ticks. - OK, i consider it.
03:16:324 - Finish hitsound - no, sorry.
03:24:324 (2) - ^ - ^
03:26:324 (3,4,5) - Don't overlap
03:31:574 (2) - Better blanket if you move to x:259 y:77

Normal

00:12:949 (3,4) - Two hit circles next to each other on blue ticks is weird. Try this instead: - i consider it.
00:23:324 - Hit circle here - sorry.
01:24:574 (3) - ctrl + g this and move 01:25:074 (4) - to x:276 y:188. Makes it flow better.
02:54:324 (1,2,3,4) - If you put all of these at an angle, it would look cool. - consider it.
03:14:324 (1,2,3,4) - Overlapping all these is kinda boring =/
03:22:324 (1,2,3,4) - ^
03:29:574 (1,2) - Combo too short? - it's the beginning of a new kiai

Hard

00:49:949 (2) - Remove
01:10:574 (1,2,3) - Its more fun if you spread these out, maybe at like a 1.5x distance snap?
01:47:324 (4) - Slider shouldn't end on a blue tick. Shorten this slider by a tick and then move 01:47:699 (5) - back to the blue tick here 01:47:699 (5) -
02:08:699 (2) - Remove this hit circle. Move this slider02:08:824 (3) - back to the blue tick, and also lengthen the slider by a tick. So it looks like this:
pic

02:46:574 (1) - Shouldn't end on blue tick.
03:16:324 (1) - Finish hitsound - no

Insane

Sorry, I won't be too helpful at modding this one, because it is above my skill level.
00:28:199 (3) - Remove - Why?
00:44:324 (5,6,7) - These don't go well with the vocals.Try putting a 1/2 slider here 00:44:324 - , here 00:44:699 -, and here 00:45:074 - - Sorry, i keep mine
01:37:824 (1) - Make this a 1/1 slider, so it ends on a white tick
03:20:324 (4) - Slider maybe? to match vocals
Sorry, that's all I see with this difficulty.

*************************************************

As a side note, there are areas where your hitsounds are too quiet, and I can barely hear them. Look for that and fix it.
Anyways, I hope my mod helps. Good luck, and message me anytime if you have any questions!! :D
Ayesha Altugle
Dear, Modders
Read This before posting something here in this thread!. The beatmap title is too long. As you save it, rename it to random ones but shorter than the one stated in the osz file like 012345 or abcdef etc.. If you do not read this, you will end up this beatmap not loaded into osu! just like in this map. OR extract this one manually using 7-zip or WinRar
I made the text larger so everybody can see it
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

vahn10 wrote:

Dear, Modders
Read This before posting something here in this thread!. The beatmap title is too long. As you save it, rename it to random ones but shorter than the one stated in the osz file like 012345 or abcdef etc.. If you do not read this, you will end up this beatmap not loaded into osu! just like in this map. OR extract this one manually using 7-zip or WinRar
I made the text larger so everybody can see it
Fix. Thanks :3
HelloSCV
쿠도스 안주셔도 돼요

[General]
  1. 이지에 태그 ending breast milk 추가해주세요, 이지만 빠져있네요
  2. 그리고 제목에 squall은 대문자로 S가 들어가야 되지 않나요? 대부분의 노래가 그래서 ㅋㅋ 저도 잘은 모르겠네요
[Insane]
  1. 대체로 뉴콤보가 좀 정신없이 들어가있는거 같은데, 00:38:324 (1) - 이파트나 01:35:324 (1) - 이파트에서는 뉴콤보를 긴 흰색 틱에만 넣으셔서 일관성 지켜주시는게 좋을꺼같아요
  2. 00:07:949 (8) - 이부분은 리듬에 안맞는거 같은데 이것처럼 바꿔보시는게 어때요?
  3. 00:11:199 (5) - 이 슬라이더도 좀 뜬금없는거 같은데, 슬라이더 지우시고 음에 맞게 오브젝트 재배치 해보심이
  4. 00:13:574 (1) - 뉴콤보 지워주세요,
  5. 00:24:324 (1) - 역시 뉴콤보 지워주세요, 쓸모없어 보이네요
  6. 00:27:074 (1) - 이 뉴콤보도 지워주세요
  7. 00:28:324 (1) - 피니시 빼먹으신듯 하네요
  8. 00:54:324 - 여긴 샘플셋 소프트로 해두시는게 음악과 어울려보여요 00:54:824 - 여기나 00:55:824 - 이런곳에는 샘플셋 노말로 직접 설정해주시구요
  9. 01:12:324 (1) - 뉴콤보 지워주세요 역시 불필요해요.
  10. 01:23:074 (1) - 여기 뉴콤보도 지워주시고 01:24:074 (4) - 여기에다 뉴콤보 넣어주세요
  11. 01:51:324 - 이전 파트하고 같은 의견이에요, 소프트 샘플셋 추천드려요
  12. 02:07:574 (1) - 뉴콤보 지워주세요, 일관성 지켜주시는게 나을듯
  13. 03:15:574 (2) - 여긴 강조때문에도 그렇고 리듬도 좀 바껴서 뉴콤보 넣으시는게 좋을꺼같아요
  14. 03:18:074 (1) - 이건 어울리지 않으니 뉴콤보 지워주시구요
아직까진 더 많은 경험이 필요하신듯하네요, 그래도 이정도면 꽤 나쁘지 않으니 힘내세요!
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

HelloSCV wrote:

쿠도스 안주셔도 돼요

[General]
  1. 이지에 태그 ending breast milk 추가해주세요, 이지만 빠져있네요
  2. 그리고 제목에 squall은 대문자로 S가 들어가야 되지 않나요? 대부분의 노래가 그래서 ㅋㅋ 저도 잘은 모르겠네요
[Insane]
  1. 대체로 뉴콤보가 좀 정신없이 들어가있는거 같은데, 00:38:324 (1) - 이파트나 01:35:324 (1) - 이파트에서는 뉴콤보를 긴 흰색 틱에만 넣으셔서 일관성 지켜주시는게 좋을꺼같아요
  2. 00:07:949 (8) - 이부분은 리듬에 안맞는거 같은데 이것처럼 바꿔보시는게 어때요?
  3. 00:11:199 (5) - 이 슬라이더도 좀 뜬금없는거 같은데, 슬라이더 지우시고 음에 맞게 오브젝트 재배치 해보심이
  4. 00:13:574 (1) - 뉴콤보 지워주세요,
  5. 00:24:324 (1) - 역시 뉴콤보 지워주세요, 쓸모없어 보이네요
  6. 00:27:074 (1) - 이 뉴콤보도 지워주세요
  7. 00:28:324 (1) - 피니시 빼먹으신듯 하네요
  8. 00:54:324 - 여긴 샘플셋 소프트로 해두시는게 음악과 어울려보여요 00:54:824 - 여기나 00:55:824 - 이런곳에는 샘플셋 노말로 직접 설정해주시구요
  9. 01:12:324 (1) - 뉴콤보 지워주세요 역시 불필요해요.
  10. 01:23:074 (1) - 여기 뉴콤보도 지워주시고 01:24:074 (4) - 여기에다 뉴콤보 넣어주세요
  11. 01:51:324 - 이전 파트하고 같은 의견이에요, 소프트 샘플셋 추천드려요
  12. 02:07:574 (1) - 뉴콤보 지워주세요, 일관성 지켜주시는게 나을듯
  13. 03:15:574 (2) - 여긴 강조때문에도 그렇고 리듬도 좀 바껴서 뉴콤보 넣으시는게 좋을꺼같아요
  14. 03:18:074 (1) - 이건 어울리지 않으니 뉴콤보 지워주시구요
아직까진 더 많은 경험이 필요하신듯하네요, 그래도 이정도면 꽤 나쁘지 않으니 힘내세요!
전부 수정했습니다 :3
모딩과 격려 감사합니다 ㅠㅠ
Avishay
Hey, M4M!

[General]
Tags are not the same in all of the diffs.
Also, how breast milk is related here? o.O Is it the name of the anime?
You use more than 3 Slider Velocities and it makes the map unrankable, if you aren't sure that it is true, read it here:
http://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Ranking_Criteria

[Insane]
00:15:574 (5,6) - I think making those sliders curvier will flow better and will look much better
00:22:949 (5) - Intead of stacking it on 6 put it between 4 and 6
00:24:324 (4) - CTRL + G flows better in my opinion
00:44:324 (5,6,7) - I am not sure if you're trying to follow the vocal or the rhytm here, it just felt weird to me in a testplay
01:14:324 (5,6,7,8) - This stream doesn't fit at all, there's no vocal and it feels realllly wierd. My suggestion is adding a 1/2 beat slider at 01:14:574
01:53:324 (5,6) - Make better flow here, one of the possible things is this:
02:00:949 (4) - I don't think it fits, I like this part more when this circle is removed
02:56:699 (2,2) - Make both of those 1/2 beat repeated slider, it fits with the drum in the background
03:16:324 (3) - Add finish here as well (on other diffs as well)
03:22:949 (3,4) - Be more creative and don't stak them on 2, try placing them like that:
03:35:574 (3) - Why is the pattern different from 03:35:074 (1,2) ? You didn't ignore the drum in the previous pattern, so why you do in this one?

[Hard]
00:25:074 (4) - Change it to a slider and extend it until 00:25:324
00:45:574 (1) - The slider starts on a red line (mid beat) and it doesn't fit that good, make it longer and start it at 00:45:324
01:04:574 (4) - Remove it, create a slider at 01:04:449 and extend it until 01:04:574
01:10:074 (4) - Change it to 1/4 beat reversed slider, there's a drum there
01:54:324 (6) - Try moving this slider to X:396 Y:176
02:14:074 (4) - The slider doesn't fit neither with the vocal / rhytm, put a circle in his place then start the slider at 02:14:324
02:46:074 (6) - There's a drum in the middle of the slider, change it to a 1/4 beat reversed slider
02:50:324 (1,2,3,4) - It is hard to know when the sliders 1 and 3 will stop, so don't make them reversed and just add an other slider, like this:
and here's the pattern I did:
(it is the same on both)
03:04:324 (1,2) - The flow is bad with the timing, either make their metting closer or make them curvier :)

[Normal]
00:12:324 (1,2,3,4) - The spacing here is really confusing betwen 2 and 3, consider changing it
00:13:574 (5) - Add a clap here? The vocal starts but it sounds rather weird without a proper hitsounds there
Just a note, this diff is sometimes confusing with the spacing and since it is a Normal diff I'm asking you to go over the diff and think if it is good for beginners

[Easy]
Seems good to me (I suck at modding Easy / Normal mostly ._.)


Good luck!
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Avishay wrote:

Hey, M4M!

[General]
Tags are not the same in all of the diffs.
Also, how breast milk is related here? o.O Is it the name of the anime?
You use more than 3 Slider Velocities and it makes the map unrankable, if you aren't sure that it is true, read it here:
http://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Ranking_Criteria

[Insane]
00:15:574 (5,6) - I think making those sliders curvier will flow better and will look much better - sorry, i'll keep mine
00:22:949 (5) - Intead of stacking it on 6 put it between 4 and 6
00:24:324 (4) - CTRL + G flows better in my opinion
00:44:324 (5,6,7) - I am not sure if you're trying to follow the vocal or the rhytm here, it just felt weird to me in a testplay
01:14:324 (5,6,7,8) - This stream doesn't fit at all, there's no vocal and it feels realllly wierd. My suggestion is adding a 1/2 beat slider at 01:14:574
01:53:324 (5,6) - Make better flow here, one of the possible things is this:
02:00:949 (4) - I don't think it fits, I like this part more when this circle is removed
02:56:699 (2,2) - Make both of those 1/2 beat repeated slider, it fits with the drum in the background - sorry
03:16:324 (3) - Add finish here as well (on other diffs as well)
03:22:949 (3,4) - Be more creative and don't stak them on 2, try placing them like that:
03:35:574 (3) - Why is the pattern different from 03:35:074 (1,2) ? You didn't ignore the drum in the previous pattern, so why you do in this one?

[Hard]
00:25:074 (4) - Change it to a slider and extend it until 00:25:324
00:45:574 (1) - The slider starts on a red line (mid beat) and it doesn't fit that good, make it longer and start it at 00:45:324
01:04:574 (4) - Remove it, create a slider at 01:04:449 and extend it until 01:04:574 - sorry.
01:10:074 (4) - Change it to 1/4 beat reversed slider, there's a drum there
01:54:324 (6) - Try moving this slider to X:396 Y:176 - no
02:14:074 (4) - The slider doesn't fit neither with the vocal / rhytm, put a circle in his place then start the slider at 02:14:324
02:46:074 (6) - There's a drum in the middle of the slider, change it to a 1/4 beat reversed slider
02:50:324 (1,2,3,4) - It is hard to know when the sliders 1 and 3 will stop, so don't make them reversed and just add an other slider, like this:
and here's the pattern I did:
(it is the same on both)
03:04:324 (1,2) - The flow is bad with the timing, either make their metting closer or make them curvier :) - ok, i consider it. thx

[Normal]
00:12:324 (1,2,3,4) - The spacing here is really confusing betwen 2 and 3, consider changing it
00:13:574 (5) - Add a clap here? The vocal starts but it sounds rather weird without a proper hitsounds there
Just a note, this diff is sometimes confusing with the spacing and since it is a Normal diff I'm asking you to go over the diff and think if it is good for beginners
- fix, but not your suggestion

[Easy]
Seems good to me (I suck at modding Easy / Normal mostly ._.)


Good luck!
Thanks for modding!
Park-Hyun
Hi, M4M. Here are a few suggestions:

Easy
00:06:324 - You should start mapping here like in the other difficulties.
00:23:824 (3) - Move slider end to x:452, y:96
00:24:324 (4) - Move slider start to x:476, y:148
=> http://puu.sh/6nmxV
00:25:574 (1) - Move start to x:336, y:248
00:27:074 (2) - Move start to x:432, y:312
00:28:074 (3) - Move to x:328, y:360
=> http://puu.sh/6nnfi
01:09:074 (4,5) - Here's my suggestion: http://puu.sh/6nnOm
03:22:324 - Remove Kiai

Normal
01:25:074 (4) - Move to x:324, y:256
03:12:324 (1,2,3,4,1) - Inconsistent spacing. Set beat snap divisor to 1/2, then create a pentagon with 1.4 distance snap and change the circles order so to have something like this:
=> http://puu.sh/6npye
03:14:324 - Remove Kiai
03:20:324 (1,2,3,4,1) - Same as above. Create pentagon with 1.4 distance snap and rotate by 54°, then change the order:
=> http://puu.sh/6np6W
03:22:324 - Remove Kiai

Hard
00:48:199 (5) - This is not very smooth. Try this http://puu.sh/6nq0b
01:17:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I find it a bit weird. Here's my suggestion:
=> http://puu.sh/6nsmo
=> http://puu.sh/6nsq6
03:14:324 - Remove Kiai
03:22:324 - ^
03:28:324 (1) - I'd make it end at 03:29:824 -

Insane
00:28:324 (1) - Add a circle and make spinner start at 00:28:574 - like this:
=> http://puu.sh/6nqJV
03:14:324 - Remove Kiai
03:22:324 - ^

I hope this helps and don't hesitate to contact me if anything's not clear.
Good luck!
Spring Roll
hello,mod from my queue~

General

  1. the artist you type in song setup is 'Fujimura Ayumi',but the romanised artist you write is 'Ayumi Fujimura',i don't know if it is ok..maybe you can ask others who is more experienced
  2. use an empty hitsound for sliderslide
  3. hitsound is far from enough,spend more time on it plz

Easy

  1. 02:44:574 (1) - i think it can start at02:44:324 - ,end at02:45:074 -
  2. 00:25:574 (1) - one reverse is more comfortable when playing .of course add a note at 00:26:324 -
  3. 01:22:574 (1) - ^
  4. 01:54:574 (4) - ^
  5. 01:58:574 (5,1) - yeah,this is comfortable!
  6. 00:28:324 (1) - spinner can start at00:28:574 - and add a note at 00:28:324 -
  7. 01:25:324 (1) - ^
  8. 02:22:324 (1) - ^
  9. 03:44:324 (1) - ^
  10. 00:39:324 (2,3) - don't stack .i think its a little hard for a fresh player
  11. 03:28:324 (5) - move to (280.132)will make the distance a little comfortable

Normal

  1. harder than normal i think,maybe you can change the diff name to 'Normal+'
  2. 00:10:824 (3) - slider can end at00:11:199 -
  3. 00:12:949 (3) - end at00:13:324 - ,and 00:13:574 (4) - start from00:13:449 - end at00:14:074 - ,just a suggestion
  4. 00:28:324 (1,1,1,1) - the same as Easy diff
  5. 03:12:324 (1) - distance

Hard

  1. 00:08:074 (5) - try thishttp://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1256740
  2. 00:48:199 (5) - move to (192.268)
  3. 01:12:324 (3,1) - snap the distance
  4. 01:14:324 - add a note
  5. 01:25:324 (1,1,1) - the same as Easy diff
  6. 01:53:324 (4) - Ctrl+G
  7. 02:07:324 - add a note
  8. 03:11:199 (4,5) - they will stack with each other when you are playing,,and looks not so good.so don't stack like this ,even a small gird movement looks better
  9. 03:30:324 (1) - ^

Insane

  1. 00:07:199 (7,8) - i don't think 3.0X jump is suitable here
  2. 00:09:949 (6,1) - ^
  3. 00:22:949 (5) - remove the note
  4. 00:59:824 (5,6,7) - the same as the hard
  5. 01:20:199 (6,1,2,3) - i think the rhythm is strange when i play this diff
  6. 00:28:324 (1,1) - the same as Easy diff

hope this helps :D
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Park-Hyun wrote:

Hi, M4M. Here are a few suggestions:

Easy
00:06:324 - You should start mapping here like in the other difficulties. - ok, i consider it. thx
00:23:824 (3) - Move slider end to x:452, y:96
00:24:324 (4) - Move slider start to x:476, y:148
=> http://puu.sh/6nmxV
00:25:574 (1) - Move start to x:336, y:248
00:27:074 (2) - Move start to x:432, y:312
00:28:074 (3) - Move to x:328, y:360

=> http://puu.sh/6nnfi
01:09:074 (4,5) - Here's my suggestion: http://puu.sh/6nnOm
03:22:324 - Remove Kiai - Why?

Normal
01:25:074 (4) - Move to x:324, y:256
03:12:324 (1,2,3,4,1) - Inconsistent spacing. Set beat snap divisor to 1/2, then create a pentagon with 1.4 distance snap and change the circles order so to have something like this:
=> http://puu.sh/6npye
03:14:324 - Remove Kiai - Why??
03:20:324 (1,2,3,4,1) - Same as above. Create pentagon with 1.4 distance snap and rotate by 54°, then change the order:
=> http://puu.sh/6np6W
03:22:324 - Remove Kiai

Hard
00:48:199 (5) - This is not very smooth. Try this http://puu.sh/6nq0b
01:17:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I find it a bit weird. Here's my suggestion: - sorry, i keep mine
=> http://puu.sh/6nsmo
=> http://puu.sh/6nsq6
03:14:324 - Remove Kiai
03:22:324 - ^

03:28:324 (1) - I'd make it end at 03:29:824 - - Sorry.

Insane
00:28:324 (1) - Add a circle and make spinner start at 00:28:574 - like this: - Sorry.
=> http://puu.sh/6nqJV
03:14:324 - Remove Kiai
03:22:324 - ^


I hope this helps and don't hesitate to contact me if anything's not clear.
Good luck!
Thanks for modding ^^
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Spring Roll wrote:

hello,mod from my queue~

General

  1. the artist you type in song setup is 'Fujimura Ayumi',but the romanised artist you write is 'Ayumi Fujimura',i don't know if it is ok..maybe you can ask others who is more experienced
  2. use an empty hitsound for sliderslide
  3. hitsound is far from enough,spend more time on it plz

Easy

  1. 02:44:574 (1) - i think it can start at02:44:324 - ,end at02:45:074 - - Sorry.
  2. 00:25:574 (1) - one reverse is more comfortable when playing .of course add a note at 00:26:324 -
  3. 01:22:574 (1) - ^
  4. 01:54:574 (4) - ^
  5. 01:58:574 (5,1) - yeah,this is comfortable! - >w<
  6. 00:28:324 (1) - spinner can start at00:28:574 - and add a note at 00:28:324 - - Sorry.
  7. 01:25:324 (1) - ^
  8. 02:22:324 (1) - ^
  9. 03:44:324 (1) - ^
  10. 00:39:324 (2,3) - don't stack .i think its a little hard for a fresh player - I will fix this when it is mentioned again. thx.
  11. 03:28:324 (5) - move to (280.132)will make the distance a little comfortable

Normal

  1. harder than normal i think,maybe you can change the diff name to 'Normal+' - ok, i consider it.
  2. 00:10:824 (3) - slider can end at00:11:199 - - fix, but not your suggestion.
  3. 00:12:949 (3) - end at00:13:324 - ,and 00:13:574 (4) - start from00:13:449 - end at00:14:074 - ,just a suggestion - Sorry.
  4. 00:28:324 (1,1,1,1) - the same as Easy diff
  5. 03:12:324 (1) - distance

Hard

  1. 00:08:074 (5) - try thishttp://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1256740
  2. 00:48:199 (5) - move to (192.268)
  3. 01:12:324 (3,1) - snap the distance
  4. 01:14:324 - add a note
  5. 01:25:324 (1,1,1) - the same as Easy diff
  6. 01:53:324 (4) - Ctrl+G
  7. 02:07:324 - add a note
  8. 03:11:199 (4,5) - they will stack with each other when you are playing,,and looks not so good.so don't stack like this ,even a small gird movement looks better
  9. 03:30:324 (1) - ^

Insane

  1. 00:07:199 (7,8) - i don't think 3.0X jump is suitable here
  2. 00:09:949 (6,1) - ^ - Sorry.
  3. 00:22:949 (5) - remove the note
  4. 00:59:824 (5,6,7) - the same as the hard - Sorry.
  5. 01:20:199 (6,1,2,3) - i think the rhythm is strange when i play this diff
  6. 00:28:324 (1,1) - the same as Easy diff

hope this helps :D
Thanks for modding ^^
sjoy
M4M from my queue
[Easy]
00:20:074 (4) - stack it perfectly
00:28:074 (3) - delete it spinner start from here.it seems to be easy for newbie
01:17:074 (5) - stack it perfectly
01:25:074 (4) - the same as 00:28:074 (3)
02:06:074 (3,4) - conbine into a slider?
02:19:574 (1,2) - ^
02:22:074 (5) - the same as 00:28:074 (3)
02:58:324 (1) - add a fin
03:14:324 I suggest break this part .only a few notes is not good to play
03:41:574 (1,2) - conbine into a slider
[Normal]
00:24:324 (3,4) - http://puu.sh/6tXTX.jpg
00:25:574 (1,2,3,4) - http://puu.sh/6tXW8.jpg
00:41:074 (6,7) - delete them
01:08:324 (2) - change into 1/1slider
01:16:574 (6,7) - delete
01:18:324 (3) - start on 01:18:574
01:52:074 (2) - delete
02:06:574 (1) - ^
02:12:574 (3) - ^
03:03:574 (3) - ^
03:35:824 (2) - ^
03:37:074 (4,5) - http://puu.sh/6tYcl.jpg
[Hard]
00:48:074 (5,6) - http://puu.sh/6tYoQ.jpg
00:59:449 (3) - delete because of follow the vocal
01:23:574 (4) - ctrl+g
02:00:199 (2) - delete
02:05:324 (2,4) - ctrl+g
02:17:949 (2) - delete and add a note on02:18:074
[Insane]
00:07:824 (8) - too far from 00:07:199 (7) - ,maybe cause a misunderstand
00:21:574 (2,3,4) - imo,it's not suitable for jump
01:18:574 (2,3,4) - ^
01:18:574 (2) - too close with 01:17:324 (1) -
01:22:074 (6) - ctrl+g
01:36:824 (5) - too hard for play..I suggest delete 01:36:699 (4) -
02:00:324 (2) - ctrl+g
02:15:574 (2,3,4) - the same as 00:21:574 (2,3,4)
03:12:699 there is a obvious stream.why not set?
good luck with your map ~
Rakuen
( =`・ω・´) AIRakuen 愛楽園 (Mod/GD/M4M)

[General]
Good

[Easy]
00:14:324 (2) - Feel like first hit of KIAI should be NC, consider removing 00:13:574 (1) - or so (optional)
00:21:324 (6) - How bout' placing it on 00:21:574 - , helps to fill up vocal at 00:22:074 -
00:27:074 (2) - Put on left top of mapping area, and try to face left side, may help on reading after 00:25:574 (1) -
00:28:074 (3) - Remove this? May be easier
00:38:324 - Add note here to fit drum cover
00:39:574 - Circle
00:42:324 (2) - This is a little sticked to 00:40:824 (5) - , move it for a little
00:45:574 (7) - This pattern will be hard to read, both sliders are facing the same direction making it look like 1/2 continuing hits
00:54:824 - Try not to slow down Easy diffs next time, may affect the gameplay for newbies
^ You can try to space more between timing of each note
01:08:324 - Don't speed it up here, try on 01:09:324 - or 01:10:324 -
01:25:074 (4) - Remove?
01:51:324 (5) - Don't suggest to stack this, cuz 01:50:824 (4) - is timed far from 01:49:324 (3) - and it's slowed down here 01:51:824 (1) -
02:05:324 - Same as previous, try speeding up on 02:06:324 - or 02:07:324 -
02:18:074 - Circle
02:22:074 (5) - Remove? May be easier
02:43:824 - Something is missing here
02:53:824 (4) - Stack on tail of 02:51:324 (2) - , may help players to hit at place where they memorized
03:18:324 (3,4,5) - Space or NC them...DS is strict for Easy diff tho, not sure it's rankable or not
03:26:324 (3,4,5) - ^
03:28:824 (1) - If possible make this 0.9x DS by adjusting 03:28:324 (5) -
03:43:074 (4) - Put it on middle line

[Normal]
00:13:574 - Since Easy diff starts here, I suggest to make it same for Normal
00:27:074 (1) - Blanket?
00:41:574 (8) - ^
00:54:824 - Same as Easy, I dont suggest to slow it down tho cuz it's not really a very fast song
01:02:324 (5) - NC for SV change
01:08:324 (2) - Should NC here due to SV change, or follow Easy mods for the timing
01:18:324 (3) - Flow stopped here cuz many reverses
01:25:074 (4) - Remove and add reverse on 01:24:574 (3) - , the stacks are too close timed
01:59:324 (6) - NC for SV change
02:05:324 (4) - ^ or follow Easy's timing mods
02:06:824 (2) - Try not to use blue ticks, but you can keep this
02:09:574 (2) - A little bad flow here
02:13:324 (5,1) - Swap NC
02:42:324 - Try louder volume
03:12:324 (1) - DS? owo

[Hard]
00:21:574 (4) - NC for SV change
00:54:324 - Make here 1.0 SV still, then DS 00:54:324 (3) -
01:08:324 (5) - NC or follow Easy timing mods
01:51:324 - Make here 1.0 SV and DS 01:51:324 (5) -
02:57:449 - Circle

[Insane]
00:21:574 (3) - NC
00:22:074 (1) - Remove NC
00:22:324 (3) - NC
00:28:324 - Put something here and move spinner to 00:28:449 -
01:17:199 - Circle
01:18:574 (2) - NC
01:37:824 (8) - NC
02:03:199 - Circle
02:15:574 (2) - NC
03:37:574 (3) - ^
03:38:074 (1) - Remove NC
03:38:324 (2) - NC here
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

sjoy wrote:

M4M from my queue
[Easy]
00:20:074 (4) - stack it perfectly
00:28:074 (3) - delete it spinner start from here.it seems to be easy for newbie - I will fix this when it is mentioned again. thx.
01:17:074 (5) - stack it perfectly
01:25:074 (4) - the same as 00:28:074 (3)
02:06:074 (3,4) - conbine into a slider? - no, sorry.
02:19:574 (1,2) - ^
02:22:074 (5) - the same as 00:28:074 (3)
02:58:324 (1) - add a fin
03:14:324 I suggest break this part .only a few notes is not good to play
03:41:574 (1,2) - conbine into a slider
[Normal]
00:24:324 (3,4) - http://puu.sh/6tXTX.jpg - fix
00:25:574 (1,2,3,4) - http://puu.sh/6tXW8.jpg - sorry.
00:41:074 (6,7) - delete them
01:08:324 (2) - change into 1/1slider - ok, i consider it.
01:16:574 (6,7) - delete - fix, but not your suggestion
01:18:324 (3) - start on 01:18:574 - no
01:52:074 (2) - delete
02:06:574 (1) - ^
02:12:574 (3) - ^ - I will fix this when it is mentioned again. thx.
03:03:574 (3) - ^
03:35:824 (2) - ^
03:37:074 (4,5) - http://puu.sh/6tYcl.jpg - sorry.
[Hard]
00:48:074 (5,6) - http://puu.sh/6tYoQ.jpg - fix
00:59:449 (3) - delete because of follow the vocal
01:23:574 (4) - ctrl+g
02:00:199 (2) - delete
02:05:324 (2,4) - ctrl+g
02:17:949 (2) - delete and add a note on02:18:074
[Insane]
00:07:824 (8) - too far from 00:07:199 (7) - ,maybe cause a misunderstand - I will fix this when it is mentioned again. thx.
00:21:574 (2,3,4) - imo,it's not suitable for jump
01:18:574 (2,3,4) - ^
01:18:574 (2) - too close with 01:17:324 (1) - - because this circle is follow distance
01:22:074 (6) - ctrl+g - no
01:36:824 (5) - too hard for play..I suggest delete 01:36:699 (4) - - I will fix this when it is mentioned again. thx.
02:00:324 (2) - ctrl+g
02:15:574 (2,3,4) - the same as 00:21:574 (2,3,4) - sorry.
03:12:699 there is a obvious stream.why not set?
good luck with your map ~
Thanks for modding ^^
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Rakuen wrote:

( =`・ω・´) AIRakuen 愛楽園 (Mod/GD/M4M)

[General]
Good

[Easy]
00:14:324 (2) - Feel like first hit of KIAI should be NC, consider removing 00:13:574 (1) - or so (optional)
00:21:324 (6) - How bout' placing it on 00:21:574 - , helps to fill up vocal at 00:22:074 -
00:27:074 (2) - Put on left top of mapping area, and try to face left side, may help on reading after 00:25:574 (1) -
00:28:074 (3) - Remove this? May be easier
00:38:324 - Add note here to fit drum cover
00:39:574 - Circle - I think this is too hard.
00:42:324 (2) - This is a little sticked to 00:40:824 (5) - , move it for a little
00:45:574 (7) - This pattern will be hard to read, both sliders are facing the same direction making it look like 1/2 continuing hits - i consider it.
00:54:824 - Try not to slow down Easy diffs next time, may affect the gameplay for newbies
^ You can try to space more between timing of each note
- ^
01:08:324 - Don't speed it up here, try on 01:09:324 - or 01:10:324 -
01:25:074 (4) - Remove? - nope.
01:51:324 (5) - Don't suggest to stack this, cuz 01:50:824 (4) - is timed far from 01:49:324 (3) - and it's slowed down here 01:51:824 (1) -
02:05:324 - Same as previous, try speeding up on 02:06:324 - or 02:07:324 -
02:18:074 - Circle
02:22:074 (5) - Remove? May be easier
02:43:824 - Something is missing here
02:53:824 (4) - Stack on tail of 02:51:324 (2) - , may help players to hit at place where they memorized
03:18:324 (3,4,5) - Space or NC them...DS is strict for Easy diff tho, not sure it's rankable or not
03:26:324 (3,4,5) - ^
03:28:824 (1) - If possible make this 0.9x DS by adjusting 03:28:324 (5) -
03:43:074 (4) - Put it on middle line

[Normal]
00:13:574 - Since Easy diff starts here, I suggest to make it same for Normal
00:27:074 (1) - Blanket? - yes
00:41:574 (8) - ^
00:54:824 - Same as Easy, I dont suggest to slow it down tho cuz it's not really a very fast song - i consider it.
01:02:324 (5) - NC for SV change
01:08:324 (2) - Should NC here due to SV change, or follow Easy mods for the timing
01:18:324 (3) - Flow stopped here cuz many reverses
01:25:074 (4) - Remove and add reverse on 01:24:574 (3) - , the stacks are too close timed
01:59:324 (6) - NC for SV change
02:05:324 (4) - ^ or follow Easy's timing mods
02:06:824 (2) - Try not to use blue ticks, but you can keep this
02:09:574 (2) - A little bad flow here - I will fix this when it is mentioned again.
02:13:324 (5,1) - Swap NC
02:42:324 - Try louder volume
03:12:324 (1) - DS? owo

[Hard]
00:21:574 (4) - NC for SV change
00:54:324 - Make here 1.0 SV still, then DS 00:54:324 (3) -
01:08:324 (5) - NC or follow Easy timing mods
01:51:324 - Make here 1.0 SV and DS 01:51:324 (5) -
02:57:449 - Circle - no, sorry.

[Insane]
00:21:574 (3) - NC
00:22:074 (1) - Remove NC
00:22:324 (3) - NC
00:28:324 - Put something here and move spinner to 00:28:449 -
01:17:199 - Circle
01:18:574 (2) - NC
01:37:824 (8) - NC
02:03:199 - Circle - nope.
02:15:574 (2) - NC
03:37:574 (3) - ^
03:38:074 (1) - Remove NC
03:38:324 (2) - NC here
Thanks for modding ^^
Pretty Rhythm
Hi :3
From M4M Your Queue :D :D :D

[Easy]
00:14:324 (1) - 다음 슬라이더와 같이 놓고 봤을때 썩 좋아보이는 모양은 아닙니다. 곡선슬라이더로 바꾸시는걸 추천
00:25:574 (1) - 이지에서 리피트 두번은 별로 추천드리지 않습니다.
01:11:324 (2) - 처음에 00:14:324 (1) - 여기서와 똑같이 NC를 넣어주거나, 아니면 둘다 빼주거나 해주세요
01:11:324 (2,3) - DS
01:06:824 (2,3) - ^
01:14:574 (1,2,3) - 배치를 각자 떨어뜨려 놓거나 리피트슬라이더로 바꾸는걸 추천
01:20:574 (2) - 음악이랑 어울리는 슬라이더는 아닌듯 하네여. 리피트 하나 추가해보시는게..?
01:52:824 (2,3) - 완전히 겹쳐주세요
01:58:574 (5) - DS
02:06:074 (3) - ^
02:12:824 (4) - 노트 추가..?
03:08:324 (3) - 이지에서 리피트 두번은 별로 추천드리지 않습니다.
03:13:824 (4) - 노트 추가..?

[Insane]
HP드레인 1 낮춰주세요
00:15:824 (6) - 이 슬라이더를 00:15:324 (4,5) - 번 배치처럼 해주면 Playable한 패턴이 되지 않을까여
00:44:324 (5,6,7,8,9) - 약간 구곡느낌나는 배치네요
00:53:824 (3,4) - 꼬리에 클랩 제거
01:10:449 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - 음악이랑 약간 안어울리는 노트네요
01:12:949 (9) - 노트 제거
01:37:824 (1) - 이런 슬라이더 쓰면 언랭요소입니다. 룰 바뀌었어요

하드랑 노말은 잘 못봐서 패스할게요 :? :? :?
Good Luck
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Lolicore_Komari wrote:

Hi :3
From M4M Your Queue :D :D :D

[Easy]
00:14:324 (1) - 다음 슬라이더와 같이 놓고 봤을때 썩 좋아보이는 모양은 아닙니다. 곡선슬라이더로 바꾸시는걸 추천 - 고려해보겠습니다
00:25:574 (1) - 이지에서 리피트 두번은 별로 추천드리지 않습니다.
01:11:324 (2) - 처음에 00:14:324 (1) - 여기서와 똑같이 NC를 넣어주거나, 아니면 둘다 빼주거나 해주세요
01:11:324 (2,3) - DS
01:06:824 (2,3) - ^
01:14:574 (1,2,3) - 배치를 각자 떨어뜨려 놓거나 리피트슬라이더로 바꾸는걸 추천 - 고려해보겠습니다
01:20:574 (2) - 음악이랑 어울리는 슬라이더는 아닌듯 하네여. 리피트 하나 추가해보시는게..?
01:52:824 (2,3) - 완전히 겹쳐주세요
01:58:574 (5) - DS
02:06:074 (3) - ^
02:12:824 (4) - 노트 추가..? - 죄송합니다.
03:08:324 (3) - 이지에서 리피트 두번은 별로 추천드리지 않습니다. - 한 번 더 언급되면 고칠게요
03:13:824 (4) - 노트 추가..? - 죄송합니다.

[Insane]
HP드레인 1 낮춰주세요
00:15:824 (6) - 이 슬라이더를 00:15:324 (4,5) - 번 배치처럼 해주면 Playable한 패턴이 되지 않을까여
00:44:324 (5,6,7,8,9) - 약간 구곡느낌나는 배치네요
00:53:824 (3,4) - 꼬리에 클랩 제거
01:10:449 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - 음악이랑 약간 안어울리는 노트네요 - 한 번 더 언급되면 수정하겠습니다
01:12:949 (9) - 노트 제거
01:37:824 (1) - 이런 슬라이더 쓰면 언랭요소입니다. 룰 바뀌었어요

하드랑 노말은 잘 못봐서 패스할게요 :? :? :?
Good Luck
모딩 감사합니다!
10crystalmask01
Ello, mod as requested o̿ ̭ o̿
[General]
*BG needs to be1024x768 or 1366x768
[Easy]
00:38:324 (1,2,3,4) - This rhythm might be too complicated for new players to red. Instead, try using these objects at 00:38:574 - 00:40:324:

00:57:824 (5) - Using mini-sliders is highly discouraged in this diff, since in all honesty you can't really tell when it will finish. Try removing notes 00:57:574 (4,5) - , and extend the tail of 00:56:324 (3) - to 00:58:324 like this:

It can actually work here, since it follows the long hold on the words 'o'
01:03:824 - 01:05:824:

Where 01:03:824 hits the 'tsu' in hitotsu. And the long slider will follow the vocals long hold on the ni
01:14:574 (1,2,3) - Yikes! Try turning this into a 1/2 slider with 2 reverse?
01:53:324 (3,4) - Same suggestion as 00:57:824 (5) -
01:58:574 (5,1) - Don't stack! >///<
03:10:324 - 03:14:324 Another rhythm suggestion:

Because 03:08:324 (3,4) - Doesn't look very nice side by side, and :S and adding a 1/1 slider at 03:13:824 will help cover the words drum rolls heard in the background music.
03:36:324 (5) - Add finish on the head.

Overall, I'd say the flow is pretty neat, and there's consistency in the rhythm - but, the rhythm might be a bit to challenging for Easy, since there are many hit circles and mini-sliders that are being placed 1/2 beats apart :?

[Normal]
00:06:324 - 00:12:324 Indeed, this is a very complex rhythm :(
Sicne it's a Normldiff, I suppose it'd be alright to simply remove all the objects here, and have the playtime start at 00:12:324 instead.
00:39:824 (5) - Doesn't sound quite right here. I found a way to fix this, but it involves changing the entire rhythm between 00:39:324 - 00:40:824:

The note at 00:40:074 will hit the 'i', and the slider at 00:40:199 will follow the long hold on the 'te' in zawameite
00:48:074 - 00:49:324 New rhythm suggestion:

03:12:324 (1,1) - Forgot finish here.

The rhythm could still use a bit bit of work. Some of the blankets you've made with your objects still needs some work (eg. 00:43:324 (2,3) - 01:08:324 (1,2) - ), but overall this diff is so-so.

[Hard]
Ar - 1?
00:06:324 - 00:12:324 New rhythm suggestion:
-
00:39:824 (3) - Shrink it's tail to 00:40:074, and at a note at 00:40:199. The rhythm here in this diff shouldn't be easier then the one in the Normal diff.
00:57:199 - 00:58:074 Rhythm suggestion:

01:01:199 - 01:02:074 ^
01:17:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Very wrong jumps in the circle format. Have them on the opposite sides:


This diff is ok.

10crystalmask wrote:

3 ~ 4 minutes = 3 diffs
Hope this helps.
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

10crystalmask01 wrote:

Ello, mod as requested o̿ ̭ o̿
[General]
*BG needs to be1024x768 or 1366x768
[Easy]
00:38:324 (1,2,3,4) - This rhythm might be too complicated for new players to red. Instead, try using these objects at 00:38:574 - 00:40:324:

00:57:824 (5) - Using mini-sliders is highly discouraged in this diff, since in all honesty you can't really tell when it will finish. Try removing notes 00:57:574 (4,5) - , and extend the tail of 00:56:324 (3) - to 00:58:324 like this:

It can actually work here, since it follows the long hold on the words 'o'
01:03:824 - 01:05:824:

Where 01:03:824 hits the 'tsu' in hitotsu. And the long slider will follow the vocals long hold on the ni
01:14:574 (1,2,3) - Yikes! Try turning this into a 1/2 slider with 2 reverse?
01:53:324 (3,4) - Same suggestion as 00:57:824 (5) -
01:58:574 (5,1) - Don't stack! >///< - I will fix this when it is mentioned again.
03:10:324 - 03:14:324 Another rhythm suggestion:

Because 03:08:324 (3,4) - Doesn't look very nice side by side, and :S and adding a 1/1 slider at 03:13:824 will help cover the words drum rolls heard in the background music.
03:36:324 (5) - Add finish on the head.

Overall, I'd say the flow is pretty neat, and there's consistency in the rhythm - but, the rhythm might be a bit to challenging for Easy, since there are many hit circles and mini-sliders that are being placed 1/2 beats apart :?

[Normal]
00:06:324 - 00:12:324 Indeed, this is a very complex rhythm :(
Sicne it's a Normldiff, I suppose it'd be alright to simply remove all the objects here, and have the playtime start at 00:12:324 instead.
00:39:824 (5) - Doesn't sound quite right here. I found a way to fix this, but it involves changing the entire rhythm between 00:39:324 - 00:40:824:

The note at 00:40:074 will hit the 'i', and the slider at 00:40:199 will follow the long hold on the 'te' in zawameite

00:48:074 - 00:49:324 New rhythm suggestion: - fix, but not your suggestion.

03:12:324 (1,1) - Forgot finish here.

The rhythm could still use a bit bit of work. Some of the blankets you've made with your objects still needs some work (eg. 00:43:324 (2,3) - 01:08:324 (1,2) - ), but overall this diff is so-so.

[Hard]
Ar - 1?
00:06:324 - 00:12:324 New rhythm suggestion:
-
00:39:824 (3) - Shrink it's tail to 00:40:074, and at a note at 00:40:199. The rhythm here in this diff shouldn't be easier then the one in the Normal diff.
00:57:199 - 00:58:074 Rhythm suggestion:

01:01:199 - 01:02:074 ^
01:17:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Very wrong jumps in the circle format. Have them on the opposite sides:


This diff is ok.

10crystalmask wrote:

3 ~ 4 minutes = 3 diffs
Hope this helps.
Thanks for modding!
al2e10
Sorry for my big late mod
By AL2 modding queue
==General==

==Insane==
-- Combo Problem --
00:40:199 (7) - Change the combo here but not 00:40:324 (1)
01:19:949 (5) - Change combo here and remove 01:19:324 (1) because of the spacing change
02:07:574 (8) - NC for jumping
02:54:074 (6) - New combo here is better
03:21:824 (5) - new combo and remove 03:22:324 (1)
-- Sound --
-- Spacing --
02:20:699 (4,1,2) - A fake spacing 1.remove new combo for 1. 2. move a bit far for 2
-- Other(S) --
00:10:949 (4) - Better change it as a note instead of a slider

==Hard==
-- Combo Problem --
00:12:949 (6) - better new combo
00:22:324 (1) - no point to nc
-- Sound --
-- Spacing --
00:49:574 (1,2,3) - Mind yuor sapcing
01:01:199 (3,4,5,6) - ^
-- Other(S) --
00:39:824 (3,4) - better not cover the note if it change the timing for 1/4
00:42:699 (3) - Change it to 00:42:574 nad add a note in 00:42:824 is better for hard
In hard difficulty, it is better not change the timing section. As your timing line change some slider to x1.2. But im wondering 2 things:
1. Why it is x1.2 but Insane is slower?
2. Is that rankable for so many timing change in the timing section?


==OVERALL==
LIKE :
IMPROVEMENT : Better use more sounding :3
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

al2e10 wrote:

Sorry for my big late mod
By AL2 modding queue
==General==

==Insane==
-- Combo Problem --
00:40:199 (7) - Change the combo here but not 00:40:324 (1) - sorry.
01:19:949 (5) - Change combo here and remove 01:19:324 (1) because of the spacing change
02:07:574 (8) - NC for jumping
02:54:074 (6) - New combo here is better
03:21:824 (5) - new combo and remove 03:22:324 (1)
-- Sound --
-- Spacing --
02:20:699 (4,1,2) - A fake spacing 1.remove new combo for 1. 2. move a bit far for 2 - sorry, i don't understand what you mean.
-- Other(S) --
00:10:949 (4) - Better change it as a note instead of a slider

==Hard==
-- Combo Problem --
00:12:949 (6) - better new combo
00:22:324 (1) - no point to nc
-- Sound --
-- Spacing --
00:49:574 (1,2,3) - Mind yuor sapcing
01:01:199 (3,4,5,6) - ^
-- Other(S) --
00:39:824 (3,4) - better not cover the note if it change the timing for 1/4
00:42:699 (3) - Change it to 00:42:574 nad add a note in 00:42:824 is better for hard
In hard difficulty, it is better not change the timing section. As your timing line change some slider to x1.2. But im wondering 2 things:
1. Why it is x1.2 but Insane is slower?
2. Is that rankable for so many timing change in the timing section?


==OVERALL==
LIKE :
IMPROVEMENT : Better use more sounding :3
Thanks for modding!
No Dap
헉 잘만드셨네요. 스타드리고 도망

[Easy]
00:28:074 (4,1) - 4 를 삭제하고 아예 4부터 스피너를 시작하는게 더 좋을거같습니다.
01:25:074 (4,1) - ^
01:50:824 (4,5,1) - 뭔가 흐름이 이상한 느낌이 드네요 왼쪽 밑에 흐릿하게 보이는 3이 슬라이더입니다..01:58:574 (5,1) - 음 이지에서 이런겹놋은 추천 드리고싶지 않네요.
02:06:574 (1) - 뉴콤
02:22:074 (3,1) - 전에 말씀드린것처럼 4삭제하고 스피너
02:46:324 (3,4) - 담요가 약간 빗나간거 같네요. 다듬어 주실수 있으시면 다듬어주세요~
03:08:324 (3) - 이지 난이도에서 반복2번이상 하는거는 추천하지 않아요.
03:43:074 (2) - 슬라가 이상하네요 그냥 펴주시는게 좋을거같습니다
03:44:074 (3,1) - 3삭제하시고 스피너

[Normal]
00:12:324 (1,2,3) - 보기도 이상하고 블루틱이라서 치기도 힘들거 같습니다 초보들에게는


짧은모딩 죄송 ㅠㅠ 파이팅!!
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

No Dap wrote:

헉 잘만드셨네요. 스타드리고 도망

[Easy]
00:28:074 (4,1) - 4 를 삭제하고 아예 4부터 스피너를 시작하는게 더 좋을거같습니다.
01:25:074 (4,1) - ^
01:50:824 (4,5,1) - 뭔가 흐름이 이상한 느낌이 드네요 왼쪽 밑에 흐릿하게 보이는 3이 슬라이더입니다..01:58:574 (5,1) - 음 이지에서 이런겹놋은 추천 드리고싶지 않네요.
02:06:574 (1) - 뉴콤
02:22:074 (3,1) - 전에 말씀드린것처럼 4삭제하고 스피너
02:46:324 (3,4) - 담요가 약간 빗나간거 같네요. 다듬어 주실수 있으시면 다듬어주세요~
03:08:324 (3) - 이지 난이도에서 반복2번이상 하는거는 추천하지 않아요.
03:43:074 (2) - 슬라가 이상하네요 그냥 펴주시는게 좋을거같습니다
03:44:074 (3,1) - 3삭제하시고 스피너

전부 수정했습니다!

[Normal]
00:12:324 (1,2,3) - 보기도 이상하고 블루틱이라서 치기도 힘들거 같습니다 초보들에게는 - 블루틱이 아니면 박자도 안맞고 해서요 ;w;


짧은모딩 죄송 ㅠㅠ 파이팅!!
모딩과 스타 감사합니다 :)
DexFrild
Hi~ M4M from your queue.
[General]
• Remove Widescreen support. It's for SB and you don't use it.
• bg.jpg is 960x768, which differs from the recommended size of 1024x768.
[Easy]
• 01:10:574 (6) - NC
• 01:14:574 (1) - Don't make more repeats on Easy diffs. It's hard for begginers. Change to 2 sliders.
Example1 >>> http://puu.sh/761NU.png
Example2 >>> http://puu.sh/761Q7.png
• 01:18:574 (7) - NC
• 01:46:574 (6) - ^
• 01:50:824 (4) - ^
• 01:59:324 (1) - Remove NC here or add NC here 02:03:324 (6) But I recommend Remove on 01:59:324 (1)
• 02:09:574 (2,3) - Stacks in Easy is too bad idea. More begginers don't know how to pass stacks. Think how you can make a better.
• 02:10:324 (1) - Look, you have set NC here, but here not: 02:18:324 (5) Why? Remove on 02:10:324 (1)
• 03:14:324 - 03:16:324 - 03:18:324 - Insert Break Time.
• 03:22:324 - 03:24:324 - 03:26:324 - ^
[Normal]
OD -1 And it's more Hard than Normal (AiMod accepted with me :D). Make patterns more easy and don't use blue ticks in normal.
• 00:43:574 (3) - Make blanket of 00:43:324 (2) more correctly. Like 00:42:324 (1) Example >>> http://puu.sh/763m1.png
• 00:47:574 (3) - ^
• 01:19:324 (1) - ^
• 01:24:574 (3) - ^ etc.. check all blankets, pls :3
• 01:45:824 (5) - Slider end to 01:46:324
• 03:14:324 - 03:16:324 - 03:18:324 - Insert Break Time.
• 03:22:324 - 03:24:324 - 03:26:324 - ^
Not bad, but need more work.. Check flow, DS, blankets and make slider more better.
[Hard]
Rename to Hard+
• 02:55:699 (2,3) - Hard to read this jump.
• 03:01:074 (2) - Stack it was bad idea. Move it more apart.
• 03:12:324 (1,2,3,4,5) - Move apart of 03:11:324 (5)
• 03:14:324 - 03:16:324 - 03:17:574 - Insert Break Time.
• 03:22:324 - 03:24:324 - 03:25:574 - ^
• 03:26:574 (4) - Ctrl+G
• 2'nd anchor point move to 248:168
Generally, not bad. Check flow and DS. Respecting these two points, map looks mooore better. Don't forget it. :)
[Insane]
AR 9 too fast for this slider velocity. Change to AR 8
• 00:44:824 (7,8,9) - Are you sure? May be you'll make same other pattern? it's unreadable.
• 02:06:949 (4) - You can add here slider with repeat. Change Beat Snap Divisor to 1/8 and here is example>>> http://puu.sh/7679o.png
• 02:14:324 (1) - Ugly a few.. Try to make more beautiful.
Nice song. Mapable, but you need more practice. You have a potential.
Symmetry in some pattern will not interfere :3
Good luck~
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

DexFrild wrote:

Hi~ M4M from your queue.
[General]
• Remove Widescreen support. It's for SB and you don't use it.
• bg.jpg is 960x768, which differs from the recommended size of 1024x768.
[Easy]
• 01:10:574 (6) - NC
• 01:14:574 (1) - Don't make more repeats on Easy diffs. It's hard for begginers. Change to 2 sliders.
Example1 >>> http://puu.sh/761NU.png
Example2 >>> http://puu.sh/761Q7.png
• 01:18:574 (7) - NC
• 01:46:574 (6) - ^
• 01:50:824 (4) - ^
• 01:59:324 (1) - Remove NC here or add NC here 02:03:324 (6) But I recommend Remove on 01:59:324 (1)
• 02:09:574 (2,3) - Stacks in Easy is too bad idea. More begginers don't know how to pass stacks. Think how you can make a better. - I will fix this when it is mentioned again.
• 02:10:324 (1) - Look, you have set NC here, but here not: 02:18:324 (5) Why? Remove on 02:10:324 (1)
• 03:14:324 - 03:16:324 - 03:18:324 - Insert Break Time.
• 03:22:324 - 03:24:324 - 03:26:324 - ^
[Normal]
OD -1 And it's more Hard than Normal (AiMod accepted with me :D). Make patterns more easy and don't use blue ticks in normal.
• 00:43:574 (3) - Make blanket of 00:43:324 (2) more correctly. Like 00:42:324 (1) Example >>> http://puu.sh/763m1.png
• 00:47:574 (3) - ^
• 01:19:324 (1) - ^
• 01:24:574 (3) - ^ etc.. check all blankets, pls :3
• 01:45:824 (5) - Slider end to 01:46:324
• 03:14:324 - 03:16:324 - 03:18:324 - Insert Break Time.
• 03:22:324 - 03:24:324 - 03:26:324 - ^
Not bad, but need more work.. Check flow, DS, blankets and make slider more better.
[Hard]
Rename to Hard+ - I will consider it.
• 02:55:699 (2,3) - Hard to read this jump.
• 03:01:074 (2) - Stack it was bad idea. Move it more apart. - I will fix this when it is mentioned again.
• 03:12:324 (1,2,3,4,5) - Move apart of 03:11:324 (5) - ^
• 03:14:324 - 03:16:324 - 03:17:574 - Insert Break Time.
• 03:22:324 - 03:24:324 - 03:25:574 - ^
• 03:26:574 (4) - Ctrl+G
• 2'nd anchor point move to 248:168
Generally, not bad. Check flow and DS. Respecting these two points, map looks mooore better. Don't forget it. :)
[Insane]
AR 9 too fast for this slider velocity. Change to AR 8 - I will consider it.
• 00:44:824 (7,8,9) - Are you sure? May be you'll make same other pattern? it's unreadable.
• 02:06:949 (4) - You can add here slider with repeat. Change Beat Snap Divisor to 1/8 and here is example>>> http://puu.sh/7679o.png - oops, error occurred in puush... i can't see image ;w;
• 02:14:324 (1) - Ugly a few.. Try to make more beautiful.

Nice song. Mapable, but you need more practice. You have a potential.
Symmetry in some pattern will not interfere :3
Good luck~
Mei
hi
I am too lazy to mod NM and EZ QAQ but I tried to give you some advices on the other 2 diffs

[Insane]

  • * 00:08:449 (1,2,3) - I suggest you to make a it a little jumpy there like this

    * 00:07:199 (7) - nc or change the parttern. ... this is kind misleading for me

    * 00:14:699 (2) - no vocal for this note

    * 00:16:324 (1,2,3) - kind of weird..... I suggest you to use 25% playback to check your rythmn. This is what I got
    the lyrics is " ka ka yai te" the first slder correspond to 'ka ka' , the second slider coreespond to "yai", and the third one correspond to "te". make sure your notes always follow your song

    * 00:18:074 (4,5) - i suggest you to change the slider to 3 1/4 notes and remove (5)

    * 00:19:449 (2) - remove this

    * 00:24:949 also missed somthing there

    * 00:43:699 (1,5) - swap nc

    * 00:52:574 misseed some vocal there

    * 00:58:574 (2) - you can remove this note

    * 01:20:199 (6,7) - this jump is kind ridiculus. it may mis lead people hit 01:20:574 (1) - earlier

    well I just found this there's a lot work need to be done if you want this ranked x_x. those jump are too randomly and the whole mapset seems not really clean. Maybe you need to learn more tricks from those ranked maps :3


[hard]

  • In my mind symmetric in hard is really not a good choice when it isn;t the last diff. I suggest you to kepp "distace snap" open when you placing notes and sliders.
    And one thing is that blanket is not really necessary. Some times it may break the flow. For example, 00:07:824 (3,4,5) - . you dont have to force it to blanket pattern but you can do like this

    Also if it is a hard od should not be 7. It should be reduce 1 or 2

    * 00:50:324 (3,4) - rythmn problem. It should be like this

    * 01:44:824 (4) - change to

    * 02:21:574 (2,3) - maybe you forget blanket


well in honest I think you need more practice ._. You map doesn't have have enough quality to be ranked (sorry I am not going to be too mean :(

Anyway good luck to you and the song is nice ww
Topic Starter
DeletedUser_3611598

Mei wrote:

hi
I am too lazy to mod NM and EZ QAQ but I tried to give you some advices on the other 2 diffs

[Insane]

  • * 00:08:449 (1,2,3) - I suggest you to make a it a little jumpy there like this

    * 00:07:199 (7) - nc or change the parttern. ... this is kind misleading for me

    * 00:14:699 (2) - no vocal for this note

    * 00:16:324 (1,2,3) - kind of weird..... I suggest you to use 25% playback to check your rythmn. This is what I got
    the lyrics is " ka ka yai te" the first slder correspond to 'ka ka' , the second slider coreespond to "yai", and the third one correspond to "te". make sure your notes always follow your song

    * 00:18:074 (4,5) - i suggest you to change the slider to 3 1/4 notes and remove (5)

    * 00:19:449 (2) - remove this

    * 00:24:949 also missed somthing there

    * 00:43:699 (1,5) - swap nc

    * 00:52:574 misseed some vocal there

    * 00:58:574 (2) - you can remove this note

    * 01:20:199 (6,7) - this jump is kind ridiculus. it may mis lead people hit 01:20:574 (1) - earlier

    well I just found this there's a lot work need to be done if you want this ranked x_x. those jump are too randomly and the whole mapset seems not really clean. Maybe you need to learn more tricks from those ranked maps :3


[hard]

  • In my mind symmetric in hard is really not a good choice when it isn;t the last diff. I suggest you to kepp "distace snap" open when you placing notes and sliders.
    And one thing is that blanket is not really necessary. Some times it may break the flow. For example, 00:07:824 (3,4,5) - . you dont have to force it to blanket pattern but you can do like this

    Also if it is a hard od should not be 7. It should be reduce 1 or 2

    * 00:50:324 (3,4) - rythmn problem. It should be like this

    * 01:44:824 (4) - change to

    * 02:21:574 (2,3) - maybe you forget blanket


well in honest I think you need more practice ._. You map doesn't have have enough quality to be ranked (sorry I am not going to be too mean :(

Anyway good luck to you and the song is nice ww
All fix!

Thanks for modding :)
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