pimpG wrote:

m4m

you updated your map while i was modding it so maybe some sugestions are not valid fine

general

move your map to works in progress since two diffs are not done I tried to, but it keeps saying 'error' <.<
timing must to be the same in all diff's. its an unrankeable issue and must to be fixed i know, silly me didn't change it ~.~

normal

Unsnapped inherited (green) sections at:
00:18:686 - snap to 00:18:688
00:18:915 - snap to 00:18:917
00:19:602 - snap to 00:19:604
00:19:831 - snap to 00:19:833
00:46:739 - snap to 00:46:741

00:03:688 (1,2,3) - this arrangement looks random made, and hitsounding is inconsisntent , add a whistle at 00:04:604 -, remove whistle at 00:07:352 and - 00:09:184 - , i like it this way, but i changed something with the hitsounds : added the whistle, and made the whistles afterward more quiet
00:12:848 (4,5) - this slider shape is good but it does not looks good when you copy it and rotate it horizontally. i sugest you to make (5) a different shape i'll leave it, because when slider 5 appears, it's like an echo to 4, fits to the singing imo
00:14:222 - circle here. why not
00:15:825 - make a slider here that ends at the next white tick or just add a circle, thats to fil this gap and help to keep polarity. erm, no don't like it
00:18:344 (1) - remove clap at end fixed
00:26:130 (3) - add clap at start ,repeat, end
.... keep adding claps at 2nd and 4th white ticks in the measures (same logic as above).. don't know if i made it like that, but you gave me a nice idea
00:49:947 (1) - this spinner is way too long, its boring. please make this spinner end at 00:52:695 or 00:52:924 and make a new spinner at 00:53:153 - end at 00:54:527 done
01:49:947 (1) - same as above, but i dont know what is the best to do here.... probably making the spinner start at 01:53:611 and mapping all before that i put two spinners again


insane

00:11:819 (4) - Unsnapped circle.
01:12:735 (9) - Unsnapped circle.
01:18:346 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:22:010 (1) - Unsnapped slider (start).
01:22:468 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:22:697 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:22:926 (4) - Unsnapped circle.
01:23:155 (5) - Unsnapped circle.
01:23:384 (6) - Unsnapped circle.
01:23:842 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:24:071 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:42:048 (9) - Unsnapped circle.
01:47:659 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:51:323 (1) - Unsnapped slider (start).
01:51:781 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:010 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:239 (1) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:468 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:697 (3) - Unsnapped circle. i hope i fixed them, i personally don't know how to check that o.o

00:10:329 - add circle noo D:
00:16:970 - ^ stacked to previous note i'll see how it works :O
01:00:024 (5,6) - making them not line the slider starts would look better, try moving 6 to x244 y60 or somewhere arround it I like it that way ;D
01:01:169 (8,9,1) - this jumps are just too big, more than any other in this diff i gess. make them smaller please. should not be that challenge in that relaxing song i guess i found another placement.

good luck

thanks! was helpful ;D

Irreversible wrote:

00:11:819 (4) - Unsnapped circle.
01:12:735 (9) - Unsnapped circle.
01:18:346 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:22:010 (1) - Unsnapped slider (start).
01:22:468 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:22:697 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:22:926 (4) - Unsnapped circle.
01:23:155 (5) - Unsnapped circle.
01:23:384 (6) - Unsnapped circle.
01:23:842 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:24:071 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:42:048 (9) - Unsnapped circle.
01:47:659 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:51:323 (1) - Unsnapped slider (start).
01:51:781 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:010 (3) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:239 (1) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:468 (2) - Unsnapped circle.
01:52:697 (3) - Unsnapped circle. i hope i fixed them, i personally don't know how to check that o.o

U-S-A-G-I-D-U-R-A wrote:

It's my first mod and I suggest a few small things....

Normal

00:45:596
00:45:825 - those two notes are far compared with other notes.

00:53:153 - I think this slider is difficult for begginers because the time is very short and the sequence of sliders puzzled them.
I think 00:49:947's slider should be combined with it.

01:13:764
01:13:993 - those two notes are far compared with other notes.

01:43:077
01:43:306 - those two notes are far compared with other notes.

1. Tags are inconsistent through the difficulties.
2. The flower in the spinner circle isn't centered... which causes it to waggle around when spinning.

1. Pay attention to your hitsounding. You repetitively introduce new things, mainly attempts at clap patterns, but stop them instantly due to your object placement. It makes it very inconsistent and that sounds bad. The end could also use a few more hitsounds.
2. 00:35:749 (1,2) - Easily improvable blanket !

1. This could use bigger circle size. This kind of circle size in a Normal is rather unusual.
2. 00:16:054 (7,1,2,3,4) - It would be nice to rearrange this so that the pattern is symmetric.
3. 00:29:336 (6) - At this point you somehow... misuse claps and put them on the wrong ticks (first and third white ticks). You probably meant to place the clap on 00:28:878 (5) -
4. 00:39:184 (1) - Starting here and until the spinner, I don't tihnk you should use claps - just focus on whistles. You focus on the vocals at this point, and you know that you won't be able to sustain the clap pattern. Trying to use it anyway introduces holes in the hitsounding and make sit sound bad.
5. 01:35:062 (1) - I wouldn't recommend going out of a break in a Normal with a red tick note... it's pretty confusing, especially in a stack, because it's hard to read
6. 01:35:978 (3) - This could blanket 01:35:291 (2) - in a better way o:

1. 00:25:214 (2) - missing clap. I understand what you went for, but I think it's better to change the hitsounding on the big white tick - it looks less like you just forgot something.
2. 00:31:856 (1) - The part after this is pretty dense... That goes against consistency, as the rest of the diff has regular small breaks, but this part doesn't - and should, as you're following the vocals.
3. 00:43:535 (2) - 00:44:451 - missing clap. At this point, it's important, because you changed the hitsounding on purpose - having holes in it is counterproductive

1. 00:04:488 (2,3) - These two notes are hidden under the stream, which makes them quite surprising once they become readable. It'd be better to move them somewhere else.
2. 01:08:268 (3,1,2,3) - Thisis very counter-intuitive - the triples goes entirely against the cursor at this point. Make the triple follow the movement from 01:08:268 (3) - to 01:08:497 (1) -

1. Nonsensical diff name. Why use a weirdly picked word instead of the standard naming conventions...
2. 00:04:146 (2) - hidden under the stream, and gonig back there is quite unintuitive...
3. 00:05:062 (4,5) - 00:36:436 (1) - 00:58:191 (5) - Huh... a jump here why not but... that's horribly counter-intuitive and kills the flow... the slider goes against the jump
4. 00:07:352 (4) - 00:10:100 (6) - 00:14:222 (5) - Nonsense. Nothing in the song warrants something like this. This is blatant overmapping.
5. 00:18:344 (1) - I assume this is a mistake. The slider's end is't even snapped, and the spacing between 00:18:344 (1,2,3) - is horribly wrong
6. 00:19:489 (5,6,7) - hm... make a triangle of these, rather than this, I think it would play better and be a bit more intuitive
7. 00:19:947 (7) - 00:21:321 (3) - Here again, unsnapped slider end
8. 00:40:329 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - that was rather nice
9. 00:45:825 (1,2,3,4) - Move 3 and 4 so that you have two triangles, 123 and 124, then move 00:46:741 (5) - to make a triangle with 345, and make (5) point towards (6), like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/761430
10. 00:55:901 (3,4,5,1) - 01:27:275 (5,6,7,1) - pretty much same idea
11. 01:09:413 (7) - this should form a triangle with 01:08:268 (2,4) -
12. 01:37:123 (1) - If you're going to silence the spinner's end, don't place it so soon before the next note, it's extremely confusing
13. 01:47:199 (2) - why reverse this why, it could have been a very good pattern, but reversing this makes the whole flow absolutely unintuitive and... kills it

1. Don't forget to insert the video in all of your difficulties. You only inserted the video file in your Insane difficulty.
2. As mentioned on Shiro's mod explained, you have inconsistent tags in Dekaane's Hard, Insane, and Konei's Heart difficulties. Make sure to add all of these tags in all of your difficulties. Tags should be as folows:
   
   Tags: future has already begun vn visual novel eroge unisonshift blossom Konei DakeDekaane Leader
3. I would try to make the Kiai Sections consistent for all of your difficulties, unless if there is a reason for the inconsistency.

1. 00:11:016 (1,2) - Since the rhythm is the same as 00:03:688 (1,2,1), I would just use that same pattern.
2. 00:24:527 (1) - For better polarity and readabilty for novice players, I would extend this slider to end at 00:25:214 (2).
3. 00:25:672 (2,3) - I would try this rhythm instead since it follows the vocals better and it is easier for beginners to read.
   
4. 00:29:336 (3,4,5) - Similar suggestion as 00:25:672 (2,3). Try following a more readable rhythm instead. Notice the polarity.
   
5. 00:33:001 (1,2) - Another lack of polarity here. I would consider changing these circles with a 3/2 slider (ending at 00:33:688 (3)) for better readability.
6. 00:41:245 (3) - You missed a clap at this slider reverse.
7. 00:46:741 (1) - Consider adding a clap at the end of this slider to emphasize the percussions.
8. 01:24:298: I would end the kiai section here, since the rest of the difficulties end it here.
9. 01:35:291 (4) - Insert a new combo here to be consistent with your combos.
10. 01:33:001 (2,3,5) - I believe you are missing claps on these slider heads. Also add a clap at the slider reverse at 01:37:123 (6). Adding one would add emphasis to the percussions.
11. 01:38:955 (1) - Another missing clap at the end of this slider.
12. 01:52:924 (1) - I would end the spinner at 01:57:046 instead since the last beat of the song ends here.

1. 00:17:886 (4,1) - Inconsistent spacing? If intentional, ignore. Other wise fix spacing.
2. 00:12:848 (4,5) - Try rearranging the rhythm and the slider shapes.
   
3. 00:23:153 (3,4) - This pattern is nice but the spacing could be a problem. Personally, I would replace these notes with a 1/2 reverse slider, but thats up to you.

1. 00:28:191 (1,2) - Notice the spacing difference here. It is not the same as 00:28:649 (3,4). I would move circle 2 a little upward to fix the spacing.
2. 01:50:634 (4) - That heart-shaped slider could be much more smoother and more attracting, but you don't have to change it.

pimpG wrote:

konei's heart

00:07:336 (4) - make it 1/4 slider instead of 1/6, anyways i dont think its a good idea to follow this fast piano here, feels sudden yep
00:07:794 - make a half beat slider here and remove circle at next red tick, or just add another circle here current feels fine to me.
00:09:511 (4,5,6) - looks random made changed up a bit.
00:10:084 (6) - make it 1/4 slider instead of 1/6, and add more two repeats Fixed.
00:14:206 (5) - should be 1/4 Yep
00:19:931 (7) - not a nice shape imo Changed.
00:23:137 (7,1) - swift new combo Okay.
00:24:511 - please map this gap, i know what you wanted to do, but it does not fits that much Added something.
00:30:465 (4) - not a nice shape imo Fixed.
00:49:015 - make a circle here and make a half beat slider at 00:49:244 stacked on circle, and make another slider at 00:49:702 Naah, I dont like the feeling it gives.
01:40:542 (6) - this slider shape does not fits the style you are using in this diff imo Fine to me o.o
01:51:763 (4,5,6,7,8,1) - dont like this arrangement, symmetry looks to not work here Fits quite good here imo
01:52:908 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - same here ^
01:55:885 (2,3,1,2,3,4) - and here ^

style changed a lot since the 3rd kiai, i personally dont like the end, would be nice if you remap the end. anyways its a nice diff, you improved alot *w*

372,96,8955,2,0,P|388:146|421:169,1,84,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

1. You forgot to insert video for the rest of the difficulties other than Insane.

1. Optional but if you want, try adding soft-whistles on this stream. I think it would be sound more interesting as the soft-whistles can emphasize the piano sounds. :3
2. 00:13:764 (7) - I would probably add a note here, since you added a note at 00:06:436 (1). If this is intentional for variety purposes, feel free to ignore.
3. 01:20:634 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Nice patters, but I'm not sure which part in the music are the notes going to?
4. 01:27:275 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - I guess, make a perfect pentagon pattern? Optional suggestion.
5. 01:49:489 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - Same as 01:20:634 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9).

1. 00:02:772 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I would make this stream straight.
2. 00:03:573 (8) - Add note? Since you can still hear the piano playing here. Doing this will require you to rearrange the stream at ]00:02:772 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7).
3. 00:10:558 (7) - Similar suggestion as above. I would add a note here so the map sounds fuller and not empty. Avoid leaving prominent notes unattended when possible.
4. 00:45:825 (1,2,3,4) - To be honest, the pattern flows better if you swap these notes at 00:46:283 (3,5).
5. 00:47:428 (1) - Try replacing the soft-finish with a soft-whistle here. It helps emphasize the tone of the BGM.

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RikiH_ wrote:

Dekaane's Hard

00:08:497 (1,2) - Thay are supposed to be blanketted but they touch... This is odd /*Yep, but it doesn't look bad for me though
00:27:504 (5) - The pattern is too straight, maybe move this 1 or 2 grid up or down /*Ok, moved down
00:49:947 (1) - Maybe it's better to add a note and start the spinner 1/4 later /*I don't like to use this kind of technique >-<
01:22:008 (4,5) - Oh please... Move these notes down, the overlap with the slider is awful /*Hue
01:22:466 (1) - Finish? /*It already has a finish o3o
01:53:955 (1) - I think you can start this 1/4 earlier... /*Well, it seems I mapped wrong here, done.

Nice sliders! /*Thanks :3

Nothing else, good luck

1. 00:16:494 (1) - Whistle on the repeat? Try to add it, I really don't know...
2. 00:17:868 (5) - whistle
3. 00:24:967 (1) - add a note right here to start new part of the map with new vocal line
4. 01:27:257 (1) - nc and delete nc on the 01:27:944 (1) and nc 01:29:318 (1) - here
5. 01:52:906 (1) - repeat on the blue tick looks weird. mb smth like this?
   

1. 00:02:753 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Mb whistles?
2. 00:08:479 (1,2,3) - ^
3. 00:09:395 (4) - and on the repeat of this slider
4. 00:10:196 (7,8) - whistles
5. 00:48:784 (6) - clap on the end(?)
6. 00:49:929 (1) - clap on the begin
7. 01:18:555 (5) - clap on the begin?
8. 01:40:540 (6) - clap on the repeat?

1. Pretty nice diff. I have nothing to point out :>

1. 00:08:937 (3) - whistle?

1. 00:41:227 (3) - delete clap on the end?

1. Kiais are inconsistent. Kiai #3 in your diffs ends at 01:46:150 but on guest [Hard] and [Insane] it ends at 01:46:151

1. Consider reducing HP Drain by one tick to keep diff spread more balanced. It will also make diff more enjoyable for beginners.
   Note: empty spaces like this are unpassable for beginners with HP:3. Well, they stress beginners a lot, I'd recommend you to use HP2 and fill this empty space somehow.
2. 00:25:654 (2) -nazi - you can follow vocals here and make this slider a bit more interesting for players! example So, moves of sliderball will match with lyrics better. o3o/
3. 00:27:257 (4) - to make rhythm consistent and to follow vocals closer, end this slider where vocals actually end - at 00:27:944. example
   Note: same goes for 00:31:838 (6) -00:34:586 (2) - it's quite important to keep consistent 1/1 rhythm because otherwise players won't be able to understandyour rhythm.
4. 00:40:311 (2) - have you missed a whistle on its head? Slider sounds kinda empty without it.
5. 00:43:059 (1,2) - here we are again. Almost the same as 00:27:257 (4) - but this time it's much harder to fix it. What to do? be creative!
   Note: red dots in (1)'s body match with vocals
6. 01:05:502 - after loooong slider players need something to recover their HP. An object here will perfectly fit with music and help players to recover after a long slider!
7. 01:37:105 (3) - it's reverse is TOO close to (1), so players may mistakenly click it. Consider moving (3)'s tail somewhere else. [url]example[/url]
8. 01:49:471 (1,1) - double spinners are confusing for beginners, a specially when second spinner appears TOO fast after first and players have no time to ntice and read it properly.

1. Consider using Overall Diff: 4 to keep diff spread more balanced. It'll bring some more fun to this diff, too!
2. 00:23:135 (3) - please, I'm begging you DO NOT use any jumps in [Easy]/[Normal] diffs. new players are unable to read jumps, so they will fail it for sure, what's more jumps are VERY uncommon for normal diffs and players don't even expect them here!
3. 00:46:723 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - try not to overuse 1/2 notes. Song is calm and relaxing, we don't even expect a lot of 1/2s here. Please, let players relax! If you have no idea how to, try this pattern
4. 00:54:280 - 00:54:624 - unused green lines should be removed. I guess we shouldn't flood map with useless things, right?
5. 01:14:662 - this beat is BEGGING for a circle! Please, please put something here to follow vocals.
   Note: 01:16:036 - 01:45:349 - almost the same as above. For music.
6. 01:44:204 (2,3) - inconsistent spacing is inconsistent. It is NOt jumps because DS changes are too low, but this is not a regular spacing, as well. Consider changing it.

1. HP Drain and OD here are too low! This is a [Hard] diff, remember? Try to increase them by one tick!
   
   Because you use a lot of long sliders diff looks lazy-mapped, but that's ok. Overall, diff is pretty well-mapped!

1. 00:04:470 (2) - you're mapping an [Insane] diff, it should be difficult for players, right. But please, DO NOT overmap. Remove this circle to follow music and playable rhythm.
2. 00:19:929 - and don't skip important beats like this one! It makes map emty and boring for skilled players!
   Note: 00:21:876 - 01:05:731 - 01:04:128 - same :<
3. 01:00:464 (7) - jumpy pattern starts here, and new par of vocals starts here as well. Consider placing a new combo here.
   
   Diff is pretty solid, but I've expected kinda harder [Insane] diff. Even for a relaxing song, this diff could be harder :<

1. 00:04:815 (3,4) - nazi - I'd swap them to make better flow. It just feels better wih circular flow :V
2. 00:40:082 - do not ignore beats like this one, it feels like this beat is missed, so I'm sure that players would like to see it mapped!
   Note: 01:36:876 - - same :<
   
   Oh God, I'm in love with this diff. Awesome flow and well-constructed patterns. What else can I say?

-Bakari- wrote:

yo

[General]

1. Kiais are inconsistent. Kiai #3 in your diffs ends at 01:46:150 but on guest [Hard] and [Insane] it ends at 01:46:151

-.- fixed xDD

[Normal]

1. Consider using Overall Diff: 4 to keep diff spread more balanced. It'll bring some more fun to this diff, too! why not
2. 00:23:135 (3) - please, I'm begging you DO NOT use any jumps in [Easy]/[Normal] diffs. new players are unable to read jumps, so they will fail it for sure, what's more jumps are VERY uncommon for normal diffs and players don't even expect them here! eh? D: i like this Q.Q if a BAT complains i'll fix it :3
3. 00:46:723 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - try not to overuse 1/2 notes. Song is calm and relaxing, we don't even expect a lot of 1/2s here. Please, let players relax! If you have no idea how to, try this pattern good suggestions, fixed
4. 00:54:280 - 00:54:624 - unused green lines should be removed. I guess we shouldn't flood map with useless things, right? sure
5. 01:14:662 - this beat is BEGGING for a circle! Please, please put something here to follow vocals. it's not D: why do you think it's following the vocals? o.o
   Note: 01:16:036 - 01:45:349 - almost the same as above. For music.
6. 01:44:204 (2,3) - inconsistent spacing is inconsistent. It is NOt jumps because DS changes are too low, but this is not a regular spacing, as well. Consider changing it.ehm o.o it is? did you try moving it ? xD it doesn't show me wrong D:

[Insane]

1. 00:04:470 (2) - you're mapping an [Insane] diff, it should be difficult for players, right. But please, DO NOT overmap. Remove this circle to follow music and playable rhythm. if more people complain about it yes. but i think it's pretty nice, and it's not overmapped at all o.o it is playable as well o:
2. 00:19:929 - and don't skip important beats like this one! It makes map emty and boring for skilled players! you forced me to do a jump here, EVERYTHING'S YOUR FAULT, fixed
   Note: 00:21:876 - 01:05:731 - 01:04:128 - same :< yes to all except the last one o.o it's mapped there xD I hope i did not put too heavy jumps
3. 01:00:464 (7) - jumpy pattern starts here, and new par of vocals starts here as well. Consider placing a new combo here. sure :3
   
   Diff is pretty solid, but I've expected kinda harder [Insane] diff. Even for a relaxing song, this diff could be harder :< ehm, well that's an opinion of taste, and we still have koneis diff right? :3 thanks though

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Good luck!