BURTON - Shinonomegiku · forum

10nya

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-02-16T07:45:12+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2013年5月17日 at 2:03:58

Artist: BURTON
Title: Shinonomegiku
Source: Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
Tags: palette Lally original soundtrack ost visual novel eroge ましろ色シンフォニー mashifoni
BPM: 90
Filesize: 4579kb
Play Time: 02:25
Difficulties Available:

10nya (4.26 stars, 211 notes)
Lally (2.14 stars, 113 notes)

Download: BURTON - Shinonomegiku
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
---------------
soft-finish took from Fumika's map
First time mapping an Instrumental song, I hope I did good >_<
Inspired to map this cause of Gloria Guard 's map (:'3)rz

Track 06 from Mashiro-Iro Symphony PC Game OST
Lally (Normal): Lally
10nya (Hard): Me

Thank you for Bubble popner and Rank Kawayi Rika
And All who modded this map

Last edited by 10nya 2013-05-24T02:18:59+00:00, edited 44 times in total.

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-02-20T09:21:52+00:00

first \o3o/

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-02-20T11:46:46+00:00

w star arigato

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-04T01:15:30+00:00

ohai >u<)/ sorry for delay

suggestions

i suggest to use this colours they fit a little bit more with BG:

Combo1 : 209,224,148
Combo2 : 241,174,249
Combo3 : 180,129,248

ma diff o3o

osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: CD 1 06 Shinonomegiku.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 106977
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1
BeatDivisor: 8
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:Shinonomegiku
TitleUnicode:東雲菊
Artist:BURTON
ArtistUnicode:BURTON
Creator:- t e n n y a -
Version:Lally's Normal
Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
Tags:palette Lally
BeatmapID:0
BeatmapSetID:-1

[Difficulty]
HPDrainRate:4
CircleSize:3
OverallDifficulty:4
ApproachRate:5
SliderMultiplier:1.2
SliderTickRate:1

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BGi.jpg",1,1
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255

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10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-04T09:20:40+00:00

Lally wrote:

ohai >u<)/ sorry for delay

suggestions

i suggest to use this colours they fit a little bit more with BG:

Combo1 : 209,224,148
Combo2 : 241,174,249
Combo3 : 180,129,248

ma diff o3o

osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: CD 1 06 Shinonomegiku.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 106977
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1
BeatDivisor: 8
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:Shinonomegiku
TitleUnicode:東雲菊
Artist:BURTON
ArtistUnicode:BURTON
Creator:- t e n n y a -
Version:Lally's Normal
Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
Tags:palette Lally
BeatmapID:0
BeatmapSetID:-1

[Difficulty]
HPDrainRate:4
CircleSize:3
OverallDifficulty:4
ApproachRate:5
SliderMultiplier:1.2
SliderTickRate:1

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BGi.jpg",1,1
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255

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107477,-100,4,2,1,50,0,1
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Thanks for combos suggestion and the diff <3
I'll add them when I can online at my own Laptop ;_; *my Laptop was hidden by my mom Dx*

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-04T16:44:54+00:00

- t e n n y a - wrote:
Thanks for combos suggestion and the diff <3
I'll add them when I can online at my own Laptop ;_; *my Laptop was hidden by my mom Dx*

T_T)/ poor you awwww

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-05T07:00:18+00:00

Lally wrote:
- t e n n y a - wrote:
Thanks for combos suggestion and the diff <3
I'll add them when I can online at my own Laptop ;_; *my Laptop was hidden by my mom Dx*
T_T)/ poor you awwww

yeaa lol she keep telling me to study xDDDD~

EDIT: secretly online at my dad's laptop yay o3o)/ moved to pendingg

qkenan

134 posts

Joined October 2010

qkenan 2013-03-06T14:29:16+00:00

Red = Unrankable
Blue = It should be modified
Black = My suggestion

M4M from qkenan's queue _(:з」∠)_

General

too high mp3 quality.128~192 is acceptable
about bg size.suggest to use 1024x768 or 800x600. the current is not so good

Normal

00:46:143 (1) - make head and tail horizontal ?
01:12:810 (3,4) - blanket ?
01:56:477 (6) - not suggest to use multiple repeat slider in normal diff

10nya

00:27:477 (3,4,5,6) - make them into 2 perfect triangles?
00:37:144 (7,8) - how about facing to the left ?
00:56:144 (4) - moving its tail point to x212y48 seems better
01:15:477 (3) - make head and tail horizontal ?
imo many notes in 10nya seem random, may due to the relaxing music. But you'd better add more pretty patterns to make the diff beatuful.

I like this song~ Good luck !

Gloria Guard

2,273 posts

Joined May 2011

Gloria Guard 2013-03-06T14:34:11+00:00

wow tennya ~! nice BURTON lol

Edit : Offset 22180 check please

Zero__wind

osu! Alumni

3,314 posts

Joined August 2012

Zero__wind 2013-03-07T06:26:55+00:00

Hi tenya, earlier than expected m4m here

General
Finish sounds are a bit loud, maybe reduse only the finish hitsounds to 40%, of course in both diffs

Normal
AR-1
00:28:810 (3) - whistle on head
00:32:810 (4) - whistle at the mid, maybe not neccessary
01:08:810 (4,5,1) - spacing
01:28:144 (4) - NC?
01:55:477 (5) - whistle on head
01:56:477 (6) - http://puu.sh/2drYH
02:24:977 (1) - start on red tick

Hard
00:43:477 (2) - equal distance with (1) and (3)
00:48:477 (5) - remove whistle
00:51:477 (3,4) - the blancket can be better
01:27:810 (3) - remove this
01:30:477 (3,4,5) - what's the reason for big distance?
02:18:144 (4,5,6,1) - ^
01:42:810 (4) - change the shape of it to make (4) and (5) a blancket maybe

Hope this helps
Good luck
I love Miu

Niko-nyan

1,990 posts

Joined June 2011

Niko-nyan 2013-03-07T07:49:06+00:00

hi there moemoemoemoemoemoemoenya
10nya~
01:33:810 - kok rasanya kurang seimbang ya circlenya? (X:148-Y:244)

just that o3o
(no mod for lally's normal because TOO MOEMOEMOEMOELALLY)

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-07T07:59:37+00:00

aahh I was late to change the mp3 T^T

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-07T08:16:28+00:00

@Gloria Guard: wwwww yea I map this cause of your map =///3///=)v

qkenan's Mod o3o

qkenan wrote:
Red = Unrankable
Blue = It should be modified
Black = My suggestion
M4M from qkenan's queue _(:з」∠)_

General
too high mp3 quality.128~192 is acceptable [/color]
about bg size.suggest to use 1024x768 or 800x600. the current is not so goodchanged

10nya
00:27:477 (3,4,5,6) - make them into 2 perfect triangles? nope, but dragged 3's slider tail 1 grid up :3
00:37:144 (7,8) - how about facing to the left ? no
00:56:144 (4) - moving its tail point to x212y48 seems better ok!!! xD
01:15:477 (3) - make head and tail horizontal ? somehow fixed
imo many notes in 10nya seem random, may due to the relaxing music. But you'd better add more pretty patterns to make the diff beatuful.

I like this song~ Good luck !

ty for mods ><

Zero__wind's mod ><

Zero__wind wrote:
Hi tenya, earlier than expected m4m here w then I'll mod your map tonight >>>:DDD

General
Finish sounds are a bit loud, maybe reduse only the finish hitsounds to 40%, of course in both diffs I'll work on this later

Hard
00:43:477 (2) - equal distance with (1) and (3) I'll keep mine for now ><
00:48:477 (5) - remove whistle okkk
00:51:477 (3,4) - the blancket can be better somehow fixed owo
01:27:810 (3) - remove this okk
01:30:477 (3,4,5) - what's the reason for big distance? to make jump e_e
02:18:144 (4,5,6,1) - ^ ^
01:42:810 (4) - change the shape of it to make (4) and (5) a blancket maybe I'll keep mine since the part is relaxing owo

Hope this helps
Good luck
I love Miu I LOVE MIU TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

mod thanks xD

@Frans Niko: seimbang kok, cuma agak dimiringin ke atas aja itu orz

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-07T08:43:03+00:00

qkenan

qkenan wrote:
Normal
00:46:143 (1) - make head and tail horizontal ? i don't see any problems here o3o no changes
01:12:810 (3,4) - blanket ? the (4) is blanket for (2)
01:56:477 (6) - not suggest to use multiple repeat slider in normal diffyou mean in a easy diff in a normal diff is ok o3o

Zero__wind

Zero__wind wrote:
Normal
AR-1 i agree
00:28:810 (3) - whistle on head i don't sound good with the piano
00:32:810 (4) - whistle at the mid, maybe not neccessary i don't think so o3o
01:08:810 (4,5,1) - spacing i don't see spacing issues here i star to consider a spacing issues from more than 0.4 difference here is only 0.3
01:28:144 (4) - NC?yap o3o
01:55:477 (5) - whistle on head it will only ruin the hitsound pattern that i did i don't see any other whistles here, so to be consisten with the other hitsound i don't add it
01:56:477 (6) - http://puu.sh/2drYH i like it how it is atm o3o
02:24:977 (1) - start on red tick ok :V

ty for modding :3

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

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AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 106977
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
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GridSize: 4

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TitleUnicode:東雲菊
Artist:BURTON
ArtistUnicode:BURTON
Creator:- t e n n y a -
Version:Lally's Normal
Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
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10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-07T09:15:04+00:00

updated >v>

kajiyatta

1,421 posts

Joined April 2011

kajiyatta 2013-03-07T11:17:29+00:00

hi tennya. from #modreq to request M4M
General
preview time isn't same on both diffs, it's Unrankble.
Lally's Normal
Placement
00:55:533(2) this shape and flow isn't better for me, like this?

SPOILER

01:34:200(4) make a blanket with (3)?

SPOILER

Rhythm
01:25:200 I'll expect a note here because of back drum. add a note here?
01:56:533(6) twice times reverses seem difficult for newbie imo, so delete 1 reverse and add a note? e.g)

SPOILER

Hit Sonud
01:55:200(4) add a clap here? yeah I can hear back drum

10nya
Placement
00:24:199(4,5) umm... it's not beautiful. try to use this

476,80,24199,2,0,B|504:92|544:152|504:212|476:220,1,170,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
392,268,25199,1,8,0:1:0:0:

01:06:200(1) some grid down seems nice

SPOILER

01:25:533(6,7) to be symmetrical is fine

SPOILER

01:33:866(4) same height as (2) nice.
01:36:200(4,5,1) a it weird for me, make smoother?

SPOILER

Hit Sonud
00:37:533(8) delete whistle at end, silence here.

overall fine but notice to be consistency and symmetrical mapping. good luck & star

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-07T12:53:53+00:00

kajiyatta

kajiyatta wrote:
h
Lally's Normal
Placement
00:55:533(2) this shape and flow isn't better for me, like this? i prefere like it is atm
SPOILER
01:34:200(4) make a blanket with (3)? here was not supposed to be a blanket o3o
SPOILER
Rhythm
01:25:200 I'll expect a note here because of back drum. add a note here? true added
01:56:533(6) twice times reverses seem difficult for newbie imo, so delete 1 reverse and add a note? e.g)i prefere like it is atm
SPOILER

Hit Sonud
01:55:200(4) add a clap here? yeah I can hear back drum it don't sound nice :X

ty for modding

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: CD 1 06 Shinonomegiku.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 106977
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1
BeatDivisor: 4
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:Shinonomegiku
TitleUnicode:東雲菊
Artist:BURTON
ArtistUnicode:BURTON
Creator:- t e n n y a -
Version:Lally's Normal
Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
Tags:palette Lally original soundtrack ost visual novel eroge
BeatmapID:226861
BeatmapSetID:79207

[Difficulty]
HPDrainRate:4
CircleSize:3
OverallDifficulty:4
ApproachRate:4
SliderMultiplier:1.2
SliderTickRate:1

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BGi.jpg",1,1
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255

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10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-08T10:10:41+00:00

@kajiyatta: all has been fixed >w<

Updated~!

happy30

Featured Artist

2,064 posts

Joined August 2008

happy30 2013-03-08T13:34:21+00:00

[General]

- The offset is too early, use offset 225. Don't forget to resnap the timing sections as well
- The first part of the song's timing signature is actually 3/4. Go to the timing setup panel and choose 3/4 (waltz) for both diffs.
- Then make a new red timing section at 01:26:225 - and change it back to 4/4 since the timing signature changes here to normal.

Nice use of hitsounds

[Lally's Normal]
The AR, OD and HP are a bit high, maybe lower all with 1?
02:25:226 (1) - Make this spinner start 1/4 earlier? like in 10nya?

00:26:226 (1) - Add new combo
00:58:225 (4) - add new combo
00:59:559 (1) - remove new combo
01:28:226 (1) - remove new combo

[10nya]
01:39:892 (5) - add new combo
01:40:892 (1) - remove new combo
01:42:226 (5) - add new combo
02:06:559 (5) - add new combo

00:25:225 (5) - spacing
01:24:892 (5) - i don't get this jump, why is it here?
01:36:226 (4) - bad overlap
02:07:559 (3) - weird spacing, make prev/next on this note equal?
02:13:559 (3) - ^

Niva

Global Moderator

3,187 posts

Joined November 2009

Niva 2013-03-08T14:20:46+00:00

Hi - t e n n y a - (:

[General]

-> ~~Add 'tennya' to tags orz~~
-> Offset is VERY early you see my play using DT + HR back then though :3 and it's even gets more obvious on editor, in 25% playback I get around ~+39 o.o

[Lally's Normal]

-> Umm, I'm quite sad you stopped the whistles on 01:10:199 (1), although they changed instrument there are still many nice places (especially where the music hits high note) where whistle really fits >_<

00:22:199 (1,2) - Not copy-pasted perfectly, is it intentional? (not a big issue though)
00:28:866 (3,1,2) - Hmm, actually you can do something symmetrical here though (copy-paste (3) to current (2), and adjust (1)) - looks less forced compared with your current curves imo (:
SPOILER
00:36:200 (3,1,2) - On these three you can just make this pattern using 120° rotation to make it tidier actually, adjusting next (3) won't be hard though:
SPOILER
00:44:533 (4) - Move to 00:44:866? The music hits its big note on 00:44:199, but you forced the player somehow to change their concentration from the big note to the background piano... Would be best if players can enjoy that big note moment though~
00:51:533 (3,5) - Something like this flows more solid with your previous (2) imo:
SPOILER
01:02:866 (1) - I prefer to use this technique to create a smoother tilted slider wave though: (the left is your current one, the right is the one I used for comparation~)
SPOILER
```
340,131,62866,6,0,B|346:155|331:187|331:187|314:220|322:248,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
```
01:12:866 (3,4) - Would be nice imo if you can select both then move them a bit further (~x:105 y:180 for example) regardless of the spacing to avoid overlap >_< (yep, it won't be hard to catch at all)
01:20:200 (3) - Try to curve this a bit upward instead? Looks cute with (4) imo :3
01:36:866 (1) - Minor stuff, move to ~x:146 y:279 for symmetry?
01:44:200 (3) - Use a slider here (copy-paste from (2) and flip it) and start spinner 1/4 after? It'll leave a better impression on this part + flows much better along the music (:
SPOILER
01:45:033 (1) - Clap would fit here (for your 2/1 clapping pattern) - also whistle fits a lot here actually (relevant to my very first words about the whistling)
02:08:866 (2,3,1,2) - Another pattern alternative you can use here to make it tidier actually:
SPOILER
02:21:533 (1) - Would be better imo if you can make this symmetrical with the y-axis, adjusting next (2,3) for the ending won't be hard though xD
02:25:200 (1) - Start spinner 1/4 after (instead of 1/2 after) to blend better with the music?

[10nya]

-> I feel much more comfortable reading this with AR7 btw, but it's just me~ (also same about Lally's diff about whistle usage)

00:27:533 (3,4,5,6) - I feel really weird having the sudden jump on (4,5) here while (3,4) is using low spacing, to make it feel MUCH more natural I recommend accelerated spacing like this though: (works excellent with the piano!)
SPOILER
00:32:866 (5,6) - Considering the strong piano sound here, how about using 3/4 slider on (5) here followed by straight slider like this?
SPOILER
00:37:199 (7,8) - CTRL+G instead so these two will appear from the right? I think this plays good to both your previous (6) and next (1) :3
00:39:533 (3) - Not symmetrical with (1) here, is this intentional?
00:40:866 (6,1,2,3) - Again here, the anti-jump on (2,3) feels really, REALLY unnatural - I'd make the jump looks more equal at least, for example placing (1,2) in the following position would do good already (:
```
112,204,42866,5,2,0:0:0:0:
255,384,43533,1,2,0:0:0:0:
```
00:49:533 (7) - Change first whistle to clap? Alongside keeping your clap consistency, it also works emphasizing the rest two whistles xD
01:01:866 (6) - Stack above (4)'s start instead? Considering the music's emphasize the jump should be (6) to (1) here actually, not (5) to (6) o.o
01:05:200 (5,6,7) - If you're going for something linear here I recommend something like this though to make it connected to both (4) and (1) :
```
200,188,65200,1,8,0:1:0:0:
111,216,65533,1,10,0:0:0:0:
127,123,65866,1,0,0:0:0:0:
```
01:11:533 (2) - Put in ~x:333 y:68? It's much better if you put something moving here to flow with the piano, really ._.
01:16:200 (4) - Move to ~x:330 y:276? Would look better if (2,3,4) is arranged in a symmetry imo >_<
01:24:533 (4,5,6) - Err, again, this doesn't feel really correct with the music as well (standard spacing -> sudden big jump -> sudden anti-jump), a jump with equal distance like this should do better already though:
SPOILER
01:29:533 (2) - Split into 1/2 slider + circle? Previously you've followed drums on 01:27:200 (2), would be MUCH better if you keep going on the drums here also though (:
01:35:533 (3,4) - I really, REALLY don't recommend such overlap here - I get your point for a jump though, this should do better:
SPOILER
01:47:033 (7,8,9) - Add a slight crescendo (gradual volume increase) here to create a build-up here? Won't be hard to do though
01:54:366 (4) - I personally found your exit pattern for (1,2,3)'s symmetry is quite weird imo (especially (4)'s overlap with (1)), I'd continue with this though personally:
SPOILER
01:55:200 (4,1,2) - Then you can just continue with another symmetry like this (:
SPOILER
02:00:533 (4,1,2) - Umm, why don't you just create y-axis symmetry here ._.
02:20:533 (2,3,4) - Again, not symmetrical here, is it intentional?

There you go, overall some jumps feels unnatural though, there's still a lot room for improvement from what I see (:
Good luck with this map though :3

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-08T15:57:29+00:00

happy30

happy30 wrote:
[General]

- The offset is too early, use offset 225. Don't forget to resnap the timing sections as well
- The first part of the song's timing signature is actually 3/4. Go to the timing setup panel and choose 3/4 (waltz) for both diffs.
- Then make a new red timing section at 01:26:225 - and change it back to 4/4 since the timing signature changes here to normal.

i leave that to tennya o3o
Nice use of hitsounds

[Lally's Normal]
The AR, OD and HP are a bit high, maybe lower all with 1?
02:25:226 (1) - Make this spinner start 1/4 earlier? like in 10nya?ok rechanged again

00:26:226 (1) - Add new combo
00:58:225 (4) - add new combo
00:59:559 (1) - remove new combo
01:28:226 (1) - remove new combo

fixed NC

Niva

Niva wrote:
Hi - t e n n y a - (:

[General]

-> ~~Add 'tennya' to tags orz~~
-> Offset is VERY early you see my play using DT + HR back then though :3 and it's even gets more obvious on editor, in 25% playback I get around ~+39 o.o
i leave it to tennya
[Lally's Normal]

-> Umm, I'm quite sad you stopped the whistles on 01:10:199 (1), although they changed instrument there are still many nice places (especially where the music hits high note) where whistle really fits >_< i stopped they because of music change o3o
00:22:199 (1,2) - Not copy-pasted perfectly, is it intentional? (not a big issue though)yap it is intentional copypasted is not a pefect pattern for me this is because it's a little bit different
00:28:866 (3,1,2) - Hmm, actually you can do something symmetrical here though (copy-paste (3) to current (2), and adjust (1)) - looks less forced compared with your current curves imo (:changed it a bit :3
SPOILER
00:36:200 (3,1,2) - On these three you can just make this pattern using 120° rotation to make it tidier actually, adjusting next (3) won't be hard though:hope i did it right ^-^
SPOILER
00:44:533 (4) - Move to 00:44:866? The music hits its big note on 00:44:199, but you forced the player somehow to change their concentration from the big note to the background piano... Would be best if players can enjoy that big note moment though~fixed
00:51:533 (3,5) - Something like this flows more solid with your previous (2) imo:i don't really like to change they actualy i don't see a problem here and i like my pattern o3o so no changes
SPOILER
01:02:866 (1) - I prefer to use this technique to create a smoother tilted slider wave though: (the left is your current one, the right is the one I used for comparation~) looks cute :3 changed
SPOILER
340,131,62866,6,0,B|346:155|331:187|331:187|314:220|322:248,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
01:12:866 (3,4) - Would be nice imo if you can select both then move them a bit further (~x:105 y:180 for example) regardless of the spacing to avoid overlap >_< (yep, it won't be hard to catch at all) fixed
01:20:200 (3) - Try to curve this a bit upward instead? Looks cute with (4) imo :3 hope fixed
01:36:866 (1) - Minor stuff, move to ~x:146 y:279 for symmetry? >u< fixed
01:44:200 (3) - Use a slider here (copy-paste from (2) and flip it) and start spinner 1/4 after? It'll leave a better impression on this part + flows much better along the music (:true u.u added a slider here
SPOILER
01:45:033 (1) - Clap would fit here (for your 2/1 clapping pattern) - also whistle fits a lot here actually (relevant to my very first words about the whistling)ok added
02:08:866 (2,3,1,2) - Another pattern alternative you can use here to make it tidier actually:i prefer to keep mine here
SPOILER
02:21:533 (1) - Would be better imo if you can make this symmetrical with the y-axis, adjusting next (2,3) for the ending won't be hard though xDok o3o
02:25:200 (1) - Start spinner 1/4 after (instead of 1/2 after) to blend better with the music?fixed by happy30 mod

ty all for modding >u<

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

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10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-10T11:22:59+00:00

happy30 wrote:
[General]

- The offset is too early, use offset 225. Don't forget to resnap the timing sections as well
- The first part of the song's timing signature is actually 3/4. Go to the timing setup panel and choose 3/4 (waltz) for both diffs.
- Then make a new red timing section at 01:26:225 - and change it back to 4/4 since the timing signature changes here to normal.

Nice use of hitsounds

[10nya]
01:39:892 (5) - add new combo
01:40:892 (1) - remove new combo
01:42:226 (5) - add new combo
02:06:559 (5) - add new combo

00:25:225 (5) - spacing
01:24:892 (5) - i don't get this jump, why is it here?
01:36:226 (4) - bad overlap
02:07:559 (3) - weird spacing, make prev/next on this note equal?
02:13:559 (3) - ^
all fixed

Niva wrote:
Hi - t e n n y a - (: hi

[General]

-> ~~Add 'tennya' to tags orz~~
-> Offset is VERY early you see my play using DT + HR back then though :3 and it's even gets more obvious on editor, in 25% playback I get around ~+39 o.o fixed

[10nya]

-> I feel much more comfortable reading this with AR7 btw, but it's just me~ (also same about Lally's diff about whistle usage) AR changed, also I think the music changed so there's no need to add whistle
00:27:533 (3,4,5,6) - I feel really weird having the sudden jump on (4,5) here while (3,4) is using low spacing, to make it feel MUCH more natural I recommend accelerated spacing like this though: (works excellent with the piano!)
SPOILER
somehow fixed
00:32:866 (5,6) - Considering the strong piano sound here, how about using 3/4 slider on (5) here followed by straight slider like this?
SPOILER
changed
00:37:199 (7,8) - CTRL+G instead so these two will appear from the right? I think this plays good to both your previous (6) and next (1) :3
changed
00:39:533 (3) - Not symmetrical with (1) here, is this intentional? changed
00:40:866 (6,1,2,3) - Again here, the anti-jump on (2,3) feels really, REALLY unnatural - I'd make the jump looks more equal at least, for example placing (1,2) in the following position would do good already (:
112,204,42866,5,2,0:0:0:0:
255,384,43533,1,2,0:0:0:0:
changed
00:49:533 (7) - Change first whistle to clap? Alongside keeping your clap consistency, it also works emphasizing the rest two whistles xD how can I forget this orz changed
01:01:866 (6) - Stack above (4)'s start instead? Considering the music's emphasize the jump should be (6) to (1) here actually, not (5) to (6) o.o
ah ok!
01:05:200 (5,6,7) - If you're going for something linear here I recommend something like this though to make it connected to both (4) and (1) :
200,188,65200,1,8,0:1:0:0:
111,216,65533,1,10,0:0:0:0:
127,123,65866,1,0,0:0:0:0:
changed
01:11:533 (2) - Put in ~x:333 y:68? It's much better if you put something moving here to flow with the piano, really ._. changed
01:16:200 (4) - Move to ~x:330 y:276? Would look better if (2,3,4) is arranged in a symmetry imo >_< ah sorry for didn't notice this =w= changed
01:24:533 (4,5,6) - Err, again, this doesn't feel really correct with the music as well (standard spacing -> sudden big jump -> sudden anti-jump), a jump with equal distance like this should do better already though:
SPOILER
fixed according 1.40 distance
01:29:533 (2) - Split into 1/2 slider + circle? Previously you've followed drums on 01:27:200 (2), would be MUCH better if you keep going on the drums here also though (:
fixed
01:35:533 (3,4) - I really, REALLY don't recommend such overlap here - I get your point for a jump though, this should do better:
SPOILER
somehow fixed
01:47:033 (7,8,9) - Add a slight crescendo (gradual volume increase) here to create a build-up here? Won't be hard to do though
ah ok~!
01:54:366 (4) - I personally found your exit pattern for (1,2,3)'s symmetry is quite weird imo (especially (4)'s overlap with (1)), I'd continue with this though personally:
SPOILER
01:55:200 (4,1,2) - Then you can just continue with another symmetry like this (:
SPOILER
somehow changed
02:00:533 (4,1,2) - Umm, why don't you just create y-axis symmetry here ._.
changed
02:20:533 (2,3,4) - Again, not symmetrical here, is it intentional?
forgot, changed
There you go, overall some jumps feels unnatural though, there's still a lot room for improvement from what I see (: yeaaa
Good luck with this map though :3 tks

updated

Nichiyouki

1,579 posts

Joined August 2011

Nichiyouki 2013-03-10T19:12:38+00:00

Hi, tennya owo

M4M request from my modding queue

Red = Unrankable
Blue = You should consider
Black = My suggestion

General

Okay, clear

Lally's Normal

00:28:891 (3) - Add whistle on slider begin? I think it may suit to putting it.
00:38:225 (4) - Add NC here to follow the rhythm.
01:17:558 (4) - It wil be better if you change into straight slider or move 2nd point of slider to down 2 grids imo.
01:26:200 ~ 02:28:866 - Unsnapped all note after tennya change offset. Please resnap these.
01:36:558 - I suggest that add a circle or change a circle on 01:36:225 into a slider on 01:36:225 ~ 01:36:558. Because this rhythm has music sound.

10nya

00:24:225 (4,5,6) - Move (4) to down 1 grid and right 2 grids. It will be more beautiful when you have noticed (3,4). Then on (5,6), spacing between (4,5) and (6,1) are too far, which these are make to look strange. So I will suggest that move (5) to up 1 grids and right 3 grids, and move (6) to up 4 grids and right 1 grid. All these will be more beautiful and perfect imo.
00:42:891 (1,2) - I don't think it isn't the problem, but it will be better if you reduce spacing.
00:56:891 (1) - Move to right 1 grid.
01:11:891 (3) - Spacing between (2) and this is too close. Please move it to down 1 grid and left 2 grids.
01:35:225 (2,3,4,5,1) - I feel that on (2,3,4) is cluttered. I think that move (4) to x:284 y:28 will be better, and I've noticed spacing between (4,5,1) are not equal. Please try move some these note to make to spacing are equal.
02:23:558 (2) - Ctrl+G will be more smoothly imo.

Comment: Nice map. I think it's look good for me, but don't forget resnap notes on Lally's Normal, too. Now I will give a star to you

Hope my mod will be useful for you.

Good luck~

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-10T23:27:33+00:00

Nichiyouki

Nichiyouki wrote:
Lally's Normal
00:28:891 (3) - Add whistle on slider begin? I think it may suit to putting it. it don't fits very well with the piano here
00:38:225 (4) - Add NC here to follow the rhythm. done
01:17:558 (4) - It wil be better if you change into straight slider or move 2nd point of slider to down 2 grids imo. fixed and fixed spacing
01:26:200 ~ 02:28:866 - Unsnapped all note after tennya change offset. Please resnap these. resnapped all
01:36:558 - I suggest that add a circle or change a circle on 01:36:225 into a slider on 01:36:225 ~ 01:36:558. Because this rhythm has music sound. added a circle here

ty for modding C:

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

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AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 86225
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10nya

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10nya 2013-03-11T09:16:27+00:00

Nichiyouki wrote:

Hi, tennya owo Hi Nich-san :3

M4M request from my modding queue

Red = Unrankable
Blue = You should consider
Black = My suggestion

General
Okay, clear

10nya
00:24:225 (4,5,6) - Move (4) to down 1 grid and right 2 grids. It will be more beautiful when you have noticed (3,4). Then on (5,6), spacing between (4,5) and (6,1) are too far, which these are make to look strange. So I will suggest that move (5) to up 1 grids and right 3 grids, and move (6) to up 4 grids and right 1 grid. All these will be more beautiful and perfect imo.
nice, changed :3
00:42:891 (1,2) - I don't think it isn't the problem, but it will be better if you reduce spacing. changed
00:56:891 (1) - Move to right 1 grid. ok
01:11:891 (3) - Spacing between (2) and this is too close. Please move it to down 1 grid and left 2 grids. I'll keep current one, cause it have same y axis as 01:13:225 (5,6) :3
01:35:225 (2,3,4,5,1) - I feel that on (2,3,4) is cluttered. I think that move (4) to x:284 y:28 will be better, and I've noticed spacing between (4,5,1) are not equal. Please try move some these note to make to spacing are equal. changed thanks
02:23:558 (2) - Ctrl+G will be more smoothly imo. I'll keep my current one

Comment: Nice map. I think it's look good for me, but don't forget resnap notes on Lally's Normal, too. Now I will give a star to you star thank youuu >w<

Hope my mod will be useful for you.

Good luck~

thanks for modding~ updated c:

@Lally~~onee-chan~~ : sorry for not noticing unsnapped notes ;;n;;

UnitedWeSin

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Joined July 2012

UnitedWeSin 2013-03-14T08:50:54+00:00

Hi hi

Modding here as you requested! Sorry super late. I've been struggling with motivation for modding.

All just suggestions, please do not make the change if you do not want to/ do no like it. I'll provide pictures just to make a point more clear. Please make the change in a way that keeps with your own style and your own intentions, not mine.

[10nya]

Map Design/Rhythm

00:24:225 (4) - Why so many points on this slider? o.o
00:24:225 (4,5) - I'm not seeing the reason for the spacing increase here. I would make more sense if you evened out the spacing from the 4 to the 5 and then had a jump into the next combo on the 00:26:225 (1).
00:28:891 (6,7,8,9) - I'm not a big fan of this placement honestly. The stack doesn't look or play very nice, and the spacing increase for the 00:28:225 (4,5,6) is kinda meh. Try some different placements here, perhaps stacking the 5 and the 6 instead would feel better. Also a nice back and forth pattern and small jump to the triplet might play well here.
00:30:225 (1,2) - Flow is kinda broken here and it feels bad with this nice song imo. Try flipping the slider around and adjusting placement to make a blanket.
00:36:225 (5,6,7) - Do you want to make this perfectly symmetrical on the y-axis? If you do then make the 5 and 7 the same slider by just copying the 5 and flipping it over, right now they are different. Also maybe move the pattern to the right slightly so that the 00:36:891 (6) is centered perfectly.
00:37:225 (7,8,1) - Again flow is kinda broken through here imo. I would prefer to have more of a circular flow into the 1. Try making the 8 blanket and placing the 1 differently.
00:56:891 (5,6,1) - Try and even out the spacing here. A bit strange imo to have lesser spacing to the 1.
00:58:224 (1,2,3,4) - Personally I didn't really like the flow here when the 3 is stacked on the head of the 2. It plays better to me if you stack the 3 on the head of the 1 instead and maybe have the 4 blanket the 2.
01:01:891 (6,1) - The jump is too much imo. It breaks flow because nothing in the song calls for a jump this large, it's the largest in the map. Try placing the 6 to the right of the 01:00:891 (5) near its endpoint and have a smaller jump into the next combo.
01:12:224 (4,5,6) - I don't like this placement. It feels weird that there is no movement to the 6 because it's the most accented note in the phrase given that it has the clap on it. I suggest moving the 5 up and having a downward flow into the 6.
01:16:224 (4,5,6) - Same as earlier, I don't really like the flow from the 4 to the 5. I suggest flipping the 4 around and having it blanket the 5 or the 6 in a constant spacing.
01:42:891 (2) - The slider shape was a bit strange to me. Try giving it a curve in each half and having it blanket the 01:44:558 (3).
01:46:891 (6,7,8,9,1) - It would be nicer imo to give the stream a bit of a curve and have it match the 1. You could even have larger spacing for the stream since this is essentially the climax of the song. Also I think it would be better to replace the 01:46:225 (4) with just a single circle and have the stream start at 01:46:558 since that note is quite accented and it's strange for it to be on the end of the slider.

Bleh that's not very good. I just made the stream and put it in a random spot. Anyways, you'd have to rearrange the combo before this, but I think the stream in 1.0 spacing feels really nice as a lead into the kiai.
02:23:558 (2,3,1) - Maybe instead of another blanket here you could try a more interesting placement and have the finishing note of the song be in the center of the screen. I think it makes for a better ending to the beatmap.

Hitsounds

01:46:891 (6,7,8,9) - To fit with the song nicer, try making the 6 a drum clap and having the 8 and 9 be drum finishes. So you would have a drum clap on the 6 and 7, and then a drum finish on the 8 and 9. That fits the sounds in the music better imo.

[Lally's Normal]

Map Design/Rhythm

00:34:891 (1,2,3) - Imo it looks better if you make the 1 and the 3 the same slider. To have two different curves in this same combo looks weird to me. Copy the 1 and flip is over to do so.
00:44:891 (4,5) - Again make these sliders the same. It would be better if each had the same curve. Give each a curve similar to the 5 would be better.
00:49:558 (1,2) - Maybe play with the placements here a bit so that you could have the 2 centered on the grid and be in a pattern with the rest of the combo, and also avoid the overlap with the 1 and the previous combo.
01:02:891 (1,2,3) - Personally I think the flow is a bit nicer if you flip these sliders around.
01:07:558 (3) - Hm, I think we can follow the drum transition better here with a different rhythm.

Replaced the 01:07:558 (3) with a single circle and started a 1/1 slider at 01:08:225.
Totally up to you, I just felt that it played better than the two 1/2 sliders at 01:09:225.
01:25:558 (1,2) - NC is much better on the 2 imo. That is the downbeat, plus we're still following the drum transition with the 1. Don't say that you're following the violin with this NC because the 01:26:225 (2,3,4) is clearly following the drums very well.
02:08:891 (2,3) - Same as earlier, I think it might be better to make the 2 the same slider as the 3 and the next two sliders also.
02:14:225 (1) - Cool!
02:18:225 (2,3) - Strange rhythm imo. It fits much nicer with the song if you move the 3 to 02:20:225.
02:21:558 (1,2,3) - I really recommend rearranging this a bit so that you could have the 3 in the center of the screen. It really makes for a nicer end to a map.

Hitsounds

01:45:058 (1) - A drum clap on the end is better imo.

Ok that's all from me I think. I hope it helps. Nice mapset! :>

10nya

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10nya 2013-03-15T07:05:57+00:00

UnitedWeSin wrote:
Hi hi
Modding here as you requested! Sorry super late. I've been struggling with motivation for modding. Thanks for accepting <3

All just suggestions, please do not make the change if you do not want to/ do no like it. I'll provide pictures just to make a point more clear. Please make the change in a way that keeps with your own style and your own intentions, not mine.

[10nya]

Map Design/Rhythm

00:24:225 (4) - Why so many points on this slider? o.o to make the shape nicer I think =w= Kinda dislike new osu!'s slider thingy

00:24:225 (4,5) - I'm not seeing the reason for the spacing increase here. I would make more sense if you evened out the spacing from the 4 to the 5 and then had a jump into the next combo on the 00:26:225 (1).

fixed
00:28:891 (6,7,8,9) - I'm not a big fan of this placement honestly. The stack doesn't look or play very nice, and the spacing increase for the 00:28:225 (4,5,6) is kinda meh. Try some different placements here, perhaps stacking the 5 and the 6 instead would feel better. Also a nice back and forth pattern and small jump to the triplet might play well here.
changed
00:30:225 (1,2) - Flow is kinda broken here and it feels bad with this nice song imo. Try flipping the slider around and adjusting placement to make a blanket.

fixed~!
00:36:225 (5,6,7) - Do you want to make this perfectly symmetrical on the y-axis? If you do then make the 5 and 7 the same slider by just copying the 5 and flipping it over, right now they are different. Also maybe move the pattern to the right slightly so that the 00:36:891 (6) is centered perfectly.
I'll keep current one
00:37:225 (7,8,1) - Again flow is kinda broken through here imo. I would prefer to have more of a circular flow into the 1. Try making the 8 blanket and placing the 1 differently.
^
00:56:891 (5,6,1) - Try and even out the spacing here. A bit strange imo to have lesser spacing to the 1.
fixed
00:58:224 (1,2,3,4) - Personally I didn't really like the flow here when the 3 is stacked on the head of the 2. It plays better to me if you stack the 3 on the head of the 1 instead and maybe have the 4 blanket the 2.
3 stacked to 1's slider head
01:01:891 (6,1) - The jump is too much imo. It breaks flow because nothing in the song calls for a jump this large, it's the largest in the map. Try placing the 6 to the right of the 01:00:891 (5) near its endpoint and have a smaller jump into the next combo.
fixed
01:12:224 (4,5,6) - I don't like this placement. It feels weird that there is no movement to the 6 because it's the most accented note in the phrase given that it has the clap on it. I suggest moving the 5 up and having a downward flow into the 6.

I'll keep current ><
01:16:224 (4,5,6) - Same as earlier, I don't really like the flow from the 4 to the 5. I suggest flipping the 4 around and having it blanket the 5 or the 6 in a constant spacing.
changed
01:42:891 (2) - The slider shape was a bit strange to me. Try giving it a curve in each half and having it blanket the 01:44:558 (3).
oh changed!
01:46:891 (6,7,8,9,1) - It would be nicer imo to give the stream a bit of a curve and have it match the 1. You could even have larger spacing for the stream since this is essentially the climax of the song. Also I think it would be better to replace the 01:46:225 (4) with just a single circle and have the stream start at 01:46:558 since that note is quite accented and it's strange for it to be on the end of the slider.

Bleh that's not very good. I just made the stream and put it in a random spot. Anyways, you'd have to rearrange the combo before this, but I think the stream in 1.0 spacing feels really nice as a lead into the kiai.
fixed<3
02:23:558 (2,3,1) - Maybe instead of another blanket here you could try a more interesting placement and have the finishing note of the song be in the center of the screen. I think it makes for a better ending to the beatmap.
somehow changed

Hitsounds

01:46:891 (6,7,8,9) - To fit with the song nicer, try making the 6 a drum clap and having the 8 and 9 be drum finishes. So you would have a drum clap on the 6 and 7, and then a drum finish on the 8 and 9. That fits the sounds in the music better imo.
fixed~!

Ok that's all from me I think. I hope it helps. Nice mapset! :>

thank you for the mods >w<

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