Ok, mod as promised (I believe it was M4M?)
General:
There is a timing issue with this map.
Change the offset to 5573 and keep the BPM at exactly 130.000.
The smokescreen in the storyboard starts to come off at points in time:
Piano00:15:957 (1) - As the sounds in the song are less evident, it is better to start the map here: 00:15:957 (1) instead.
00:16:649 (2) - If you are aiming to make a simple bend, it is best to only use 3-point sliders.
00:25:419 (2,1) - In normal and easy diffs, it is best to space notes in a 2/1 and 1/1 manner (2 beat separation and 1 beat separation). Here, the gap is too large.
00:37:649 (5,7) - In normal and easy diffs, avoid overlapping notes that are close together on the timeline.
00:45:265 (5,6,7) - Avoid using blue ticks in a normal/easy diff.
00:46:649 - Why leave a break here? I reckon this is just as great a spot as the others to put in notes.
00:57:496 (3) - It is actually better to start notes on the downbeat/big white tick compared to red ticks and small white ticks.
01:08:342 (1,2,3) - Pay closer attention to how your cursor would have to move in this part of the song. Note that it is not as easy for you to move your cursor in a comfortable circular direction.
01:12:034 (2) - As players are not yet used to short repeating sliders like this, try to shorten this to only one repeat and fill the space after that with notes.
AGuitar00:41:111 (3,4) - The cursor movement from 3 to 4 destroys circular flow.
Drum00:12:150 (1) - Avoid starting the map on confusing ticks like this. Start on a white tick instead.
The best way to prevent your streams from being too square would be to use "Convert slider to screen" option in the top bar, and turn off grid snap.
Ok, good effort on your first map. You've got a lot to learn.
Don't try and attempt to rank this map, as it will take you more time than you really need (many months, maybe even years). Instead, make other practice maps to try and improve on your mapping so that it can get ranked.
I reckon you should also have a good watch at Pishifat's videos here:
https://www.youtube.com/user/Pishifat