1. bluelon's Insane (4.15 stars, 883 notes)
2. Nie (new) (2.27 stars, 95 notes)
3. Nie (4.69 stars, 1060 notes)

forget these awkward cw (old ver.) xD

最喜欢的歌之一，当初听到旋律的时候就已经想作这首歌的谱了
连作了将近十个小时没停下来....
（不过音效还是不会搭配...）

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あなた方が求めているものは都合の良い人方
你们想要的不过是对自己有利的人选
そんなにもこの蛍を崇めたいですか
就这么想要捧高这萤火虫吗？
绮丽事なのだと そんなにも报いの振りなさりたいのですか
还以为是做好事？ 你们就这么想得到报应吗？
鬼より アヤカシよりも 何より人こそが恐ろくおぞましいもの
比起鬼 比起妖怪 比起任何东西 人类才是真正可怕又恐怖的
わかりませんか
这还不明白吗？
ならば わたくしがあなた方に正体を
既然如此 我就让你们看看我这本来面目
この村に救う 丑い姿を曝け出しましょう
被这村子所救 原本丑陋的姿态展现出来吧
あら このわたくしのどこが汚れのない见えでありましょう っはは
啊啦 看这样的我哪一处是不脏的 呵呵

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Enjoy it :3

4/8 blueloniess's GD update

thanks for

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Bubblun
xDololow
Yoshino--
newton-
cooldude4232
samosita
Mistaken
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will remap in the future

6.18

03:59:467 - remap / 8.2

06:00:431 - remap / 8.3

06:23:360 - remap / 8.7 YACA

remap finished ready fix hs / 8.14

hs finished / 8.16

Rad- wrote:

Hello! From my queue.

This map is actually amazing, it surprised me so much! It actually looks alot like a map Hollow Wings would do, but alot more playable so you are far better

This obviously isn't your first map, but you can tell that you have some experience in making something with good quality, there are alot of issues still which i will try to tell you, but for me it was still a nice effort you did!

Huge Wall of Text

-First off, you don't need Tamayurahotaru ABSOLUTE CASTAWAY as tags, as those are already the title of the map.
-Second, the timing is wrong, these are what i think are more correct, but you can probably find an even more accurate:

All points need the 3/4 waltz timing to fit best. And also to set offset, just look at the time and type it on the offset bar, example: 00:50:409 = 50409 offset; 1:00:860 = 60860 (the first 60 means one minute passed, thats why 1 minute = 60 000 offset, easy math
Also all these timing points mean you need to fix the whole inherited points (green lines), fix slider lengths, etc, so now i did a new diff for me to just show the other stuff of the map with the timing you had

00:09:964 (3) - Don't place this circle behind the slider, (overlapping this is called) makes it hard to read.
00:39:964 (1,1,1) - I think you should remove all these New Combos, having these 4 circles 00:39:535 (1,1,1,1) - be the same combo is better looking and less confusing.
00:43:178 (1,1,1) - Remove, same as above ^
00:45:428 (1,1,1) - ^
00:46:821 (1,1) - Make this slider longer, just like in 00:41:357 (1) - , because it is confusing, the first slider was slower and the player was used to move less than now, so making the slider have different speed but being same size makes it hard to read.
00:48:107 (1,1) - Remove combo again
00:50:357 (2) - Please add New combo here, different slider speed = different combo
00:51:214 (1,1) - Remove combo
00:53:464 (2) - New combo
00:53:892 (1) - Remove combo
01:06:857 (1,2) - Switch combo between these 2 notes (meaning remove combo on circle 1 and add combo on slider 2)
01:09:857 (3,1) - Switch combo here too
01:12:000 (3,1) - Switch combo
01:22:500 (1,2) - Switch combo
01:23:142 (1) - Remove Combo
01:23:571 (2) - NC (means New combo)
01:29:410 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,1) - This is the wrong rhythm, not following song correctly, you should do like this:

Also give all these circles the same spacing between each double: example: circle 1 to 2 have 0,5 spacing between, circle 3 to 4 have 0,5 spacing between, etc

01:33:857 (4) - NC
01:40:071 (1,2,3) - Very confusing and hard to read, please just turn the slider end, of slider 01:40:285 (3) - to the right, so it goes out instead of in the pattern (means no overlap)
02:10:285 (2) - NC
02:11:678 (2,3,4) - Please delete these circles, there is nothing in the music to be represented as a stream, and also the jump to next slider is too hard to do, specially when reading is hard
02:12:428 (2) - NC
02:12:857 (3) - NC
02:13:607 (1) - Remove NC
02:14:142 (6) - NC
02:15:000 (1,2) - Switch NC
02:16:285 (1) - Remove NC
02:16:714 (7) - NC
02:20:571 (4) - NC
02:23:142 (3) - NC
02:24:000 (1) - Remove NC
02:24:428 (5) - NC
02:24:642 (2,1,2) - Confusing triple, hard to read, place circle 02:24:642 (2) - on x:224 y:128
and also remove NC on 02:24:750 (1) -
02:25:285 (1) - Remove NC
02:25:714 (7) - NC
02:27:000 (4) - NC
02:32:357 (1) - Remve NC
02:32:785 (1) - Remove NC
02:32:785 (5,6) - Make these 2 more distant, too close means click too early, which is combo miss.
02:33:428 (7) - NC
02:34:285 (1) - Remove NC
02:36:000 (4) - NC
02:37:071 (1,2) - Switch NC
02:38:142 (1) - Remove NC
02:39:428 (1,2) - Switch NC
02:43:714 (4) - NC
02:44:142 (1) - remove NC
02:45:000 (5) - NC
02:55:285 (2,3) - NC like on the other parts similar
03:12:642 (1,1,1,1) - Remove these NC's
03:20:571 (4) - NC
03:22:928 (1,1) - Remove NC
03:26:785 (1) - Remove NC
03:27:428 (4) - NC
03:28:071 (1) - Remove NC
03:28:714 (5) - NC
03:32:142 (1,2) - Switch NC
03:33:428 (1) - Remove NC
03:34:714 (1,2) - Switch NC
03:36:000 (1) - Remove NC
03:36:428 (6) - NC
03:37:285 (2) - NC
03:39:857 (4) - NC
03:42:857 (5,1) - Switch NC
03:44:142 (4) - NC
03:45:000 (1) - Remove NC
03:45:000 (1,1) - Don't overlap this slider, hard to see and since slider speed change, it causes combo break too, i suggest placing it somewhere else
03:46:928 (4) - NC
03:47:357 (1) - Remove NC
03:50:678 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - Not good to place a stream here, doesn't fit the song well, i suggest deleting all blue ticks and give pattern more spacing
also 03:50:785 (4,1) - switch NC
03:54:428 (4) - NC
03:59:357 (4,1) - Switch Nc for better reading
04:06:000 (7) - NC
04:07:285 (1,2,1,2,6,7,1,2,1,1) - Switch NC on all these please, its better reading
04:12:428 (1) - Here you need to remove NC
04:13:607 (1,2,3) - Actually, triple doesn't start here, it starts 04:13:500 - here so move circles to this point
04:14:785 (1,2,3) - same here, move to red tick behind it.
04:15:428 (4) - NC
04:22:714 (6) - NC
04:23:142 (1) - Remove NC
04:22:714 (1) - This slider is also very distant, but if you really wanna keep it, at least point the end of slider to the next circle, for better movement.
04:24:000 (4) - NC
04:25:285 (7) - NC
04:27:857 (3) - NC
04:28:714 (1) - Remove NC
04:38:571 (5) - NC
04:44:571 (3) - NC
04:45:428 (1) - Remove NC
04:47:142 (3) - NC
04:48:428 (4,1) - Switch NC
04:49:714 (5,1) - Switch NC
04:51:000 (4) - NC
04:51:428 (2,1) - Give these more distance from slider 1, too close
04:53:571 (4) - NC
04:56:142 (3) - NC
05:04:500 (4) - Nc
05:04:928 (1,2,1) - I think it is better for reading and play to have this order:

and also remove 05:05:142 (1) - new combo

05:06:428 (4,5,6) - Give new combo to all these
05:21:428 (1) - Remove NC
05:21:857 (6) - NC
05:23:142 (6,1) - Switch NC
05:24:428 (6) - NC
05:27:000 (6) - NC
05:27:428 (1) - Remove NC
05:28:285 (6) - NC
05:29:142 (1) - Remove NC
05:29:571 (6) - NC
05:29:785 - This part should be a stream, it has many beats for it, and also it is very confusing spacing, so close, so please do something like this:


05:36:000 (3,4) - Give these sliders new combo color for each
05:43:928 (1,1) - Remove NC
05:45:214 (1,1) - ^
06:00:428 (2,3,4,5) - NC every note
06:07:071 (7) - NC
06:07:714 (1) - Remove NC
06:08:142 (7) - NC
06:10:928 (6) - NC
06:15:857 (3) - Nc
06:16:714 (3) - NC
06:17:142 (3) - NC
06:18:000 (1) - Remove NC
06:18:428 (5) - NC
06:22:285 (1,2,1,2) - Switch NC's like before
06:25:071 (1) - Remove NC
06:26:142 (7) - NC
06:28:714 (3) - NC
06:30:000 (3,1) - Switch NC
06:31:285 (4) - NC
06:32:571 (3) - NC
06:33:857 (3) - NC
06:35:142 (3,1) - Switch NC
06:36:428 (3) - NC
06:37:285 (1) - Remove NC
06:37:714 (8) - NC
06:38:571 (1) - Remove NC
06:39:000 (3) - NC
06:39:857 (1) - Remove NC
06:40:285 (3) - NC
06:41:142 (1) - Remove NC
06:41:571 (3) - NC
06:42:428 (1,3) - Switch NC
06:43:714 (1,3) - Switch NC
06:46:714 (3) - NC
06:48:000 (5) - NC
06:49:285 (4,1) - Switch NC
06:49:500 (2) - Invert the slider start with CTRL+G, and also invert 06:49:928 (3,4) -
06:50:571 (5) - NC
06:58:285 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Give NC to everything.

Well that's it really, hope you update soon because i can see the map being really fun, the timing part wil be hard to fix everything but i know you can do it!

Good luck!

Bubblun wrote:

Asked me to look at this.

Since you're new, I'm just gonna give you general tips so you can go back and fix some bits.


You need custom circle colors so the circles contrast the background (Also so you can actually rank / approve it)

You've placed hitsounds on most of the notes. Having too many will annoy the player, so you want to single-out the most important sounds and place a hitsound on those. An example would be removing the hitsounds on 03:42:431 (3,4) - so the importance is now on 03:42:860 (1) -

01:54:752 (2,1) - Circles can't cover reverse arrows according to the ranking criteria.

Certain parts could look better by shifting a couple notes. Patterns like 01:45:431 (4,5,6) - and 03:35:574 (3,5) - don't look very good because of the partial overlaps. Spacing out the pattern slightly will make it look better.

For good structure, you rarely want to hand place. Learn to use copy / rotate / flip so everything looks structured.
A part that could look better by using tools would be 03:54:431 (1,2,3) - Copy 1, and paste it where 2 would be, then press ctrl+r. This'll bring up the rotate window. Since this is a pattern of 3 bits, rotate the part 120 degrees and it should be able to fit in perfectly. Repeat for 3. Look back on other patterns like this to see what could look better.

Overall the map had a lot of nice concepts, but it's polishing still needs a lot of work.

Finally, a personal tip. Since you're a new mapper, you're going to have to learn a lot before you rank a set. I suggest practicing on shorter songs (Less than a minute) so you have an opportunity to learn without modders having too much work and not having so much information thrown at you.
Good luck on the map.

xDololow wrote:

Hi. From #modreq

[General]
First and Second Combo Color very dark. Make it more bright.
Make Stack Leniency lower for overlaps (not necessary)
Add some tags like album name, genre and ect.

[Nie]
00:09:751 (2) - no sound there. Need delete.
00:21:119 (2) - ^same
00:32:308 (2) - ^same
02:12:002 (1) - move closer to 02:11:895 (6)
03:24:431 (1) - remove NC
04:13:502 (1,2,3) - reduce spacing? fullscreen triple
04:14:788 (1,2,3) - ^
06:44:788 (1,2,3) - ^
04:15:431 (1) - move to 04:15:752
04:23:145 (2) - move closer to 04:22:717 (1)
07:20:145 - end spiner there

Good Luck

Yoshino-- wrote:

from q

Nie

00:35:329 (1,1,1) - idk if you need those NCs

00:38:118 - unsnapped timing point here

00:56:081 (2) - you previously had circles, why this slider now?

00:58:373 (1) - should silence the spinner end

01:00:445 (1,2) - idk if intentional but that stack is off (there are quite a few weird / off stacks in this section, check for them)

01:07:288 (1,2) - stack on 01:06:431 (3) -

01:29:860 (3,5,7,9) - maybe NC those to indicate 1/3

01:45:860 (5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6) - this part is a bit cluttered, try to use more of the play field

02:11:681 (4,5,6) - this is overmapped, delete it; the gap here 02:11:895 (6,1) - is way too big anyway

02:21:860 (1,2,3) - what even is this spacing, +there is no sound on 02:22:181 (2) -

I'll stop mentioning overmapped 1/4 notes here

02:37:288 (7,8,9) - this has the same spacing as 02:36:645 (3,4,5) - even though one is 1/2 and one is 1/4, can be easy to misread

02:56:574 (1) - since you're mapping the voice here I think you should map 02:57:431 - to 02:57:860 -

02:59:145 - map the part before this and start the break here, better imo :v

03:11:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18,19) - get some NCs in here

03:33:645 (5,6) - the reverse arrow is kinda hidden because of the overlap with 03:33:645 (5) - you should change that

03:53:145 (2,1,2,3) - idk if putting that triple directly under the slider is a good idea, makes it pretty hard to read

03:59:360 (1,2,3,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - this part is way too hard to read with all the overlaps, try to stack less here

04:01:717 (2,1,2) - also this touches the HP bar, so you should move it down a bit

04:04:288 (1) - reverse arrow sort of hidden again

04:13:288 (3,1) - stacking kills flow here, move 04:13:502 (1) - somewhere else so you don't have an anti jump here

04:13:502 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - there is literally no reason to have spacing this big here, it also plays really bad, because nobody expects spacing like that

04:22:717 (1,2) - turn down the spacing here, it's almost impossible to hit both notes with a 300

05:29:788 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,1) - stuff like that just doesn't fit in this map; it usually requires the map to be built around it, putting it in randomly really throws off the player, so don't do that

05:31:288 (2,2,1,1) - sliders with multiple repeats are usually somewhat difficult to read and play pretty boring as well, just change it to 1/2 sliders or something idk

05:43:717 (1,2,3,1) - this is unrankable, as well as super annoying to read because of the perfectly overlapping sliders

05:45:002 (1,2,3,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - also applies here

Overall I'd say you need to calm down with spacing a little bit, especially stuff like this 06:09:860 (1,2,3,4,5) - just doesn't play well and is really unexpected.
Anyway, good luck in future mapping!

gottagof4ast wrote:

NM form my queue

Nie

00:33:935 (1,2,3) - If you start making the spacing shorter, then keep making it shorter and don't make it larger again like you have doen with 23.

00:40:876 (4,1) - Overlap

00:46:324 (4,1) - ^

01:01:074 (2) - What sound is this note snapped to? i don't hear it.

01:02:360 (2) - ^ also overlap with 01:03:002 (1)

01:03:645 (2) - ^, I think this about alot of the 2's

01:30:431 (2,1) and 01:30:860 (2,1) - Keep spacing consistent between NC's here

01:36:860 (2,3) - I understand alot of the full overlaps but I don't think this looks nice

03:11:574 (1,3) - This overlap also doesn't look nice

03:30:002 (4) - I would make this slider more circle shaped

03:43:502 (2,1) - Place it more like this so you have a blanket https://imgur-archive.ppy.sh/08alyYR.png

04:03:431 (2) - This slider goes too much to the bottom of the screen

05:04:931 (1,2,3) - I would make it so the 3's end on the same spot so it's clear these are 2 different tripples

05:09:002 (1,2) - useless overlap

06:39:002 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - Up until that point i could see the pattern in all of the jumps but here I don't see it.

06:53:145 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - Wow, these jumps

Overall your mapping style is so different but really pretty to look at and also fun to play once you got some of the patterns down, there are a lot of things here that conventional maps wouldn't have but thats what makes this map fun. It's difficult to critique these points since you can always argue that it fits the style of the rest of the map, but more often than not I think it fits, so great job on this map even though I still think some of the jumps are a bit too large

1. combo colors contrast too much with the background, use more subdued shades of brown and gray to fit with bg

1. in general try to arrange your objects into neat shapes and stuff
2. hitsounds are a bit too quiet, i'd suggest turning them up a bit
3. the entire song is 3/4, why are some parts 4/4 on timeline
4. 00:33:935 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - you could make this curve a bit neater
5. 00:39:515 (1,2,3,4,1) - maybe you could do a pentagon here? (same with 00:44:962 (1,2,3,4,1) - )
6. 00:42:692 (1,2,3,4) - then a square here or something
7. 00:47:686 (1,2,3,1) - fix square
8. 00:50:409 (1,2,3,4) - could be a square
9. 01:08:574 (1,2) - could be misread as 1/2 since you established before that circle under sliderend = 1/2
10. 01:14:574 (1,2) - ^
11. 01:22:502 (4) - ctrl+g for playability
12. 01:24:860 (1,3) - blanket could be improved
13. 01:26:788 (2,3) - ctrl+g for consistency with previous patterns like this
14. 01:31:288 (1) - remove nc for consistency with previous doubles, add it on 01:31:502 (2) - instead
15. 01:36:431 (1,2) - could make these parallel
16. 01:40:288 (6) - nc for indication that sv changed
17. 01:54:860 (1) - ctrl+g for consistency with previous patterns?
18. 01:57:002 (3) - you can stack this on 01:56:145 (1) -
19. 02:43:502 (2,3,1) - stack on 02:44:145 (3) - instead for playability?
20. 02:48:002 (1) - ctrl+g for more comfortable flow maybe
21. 02:49:717 (1) - ^
22. 02:50:145 (1) - ^
23. 02:54:002 (1,1) - why don't you map these like you did before in 02:07:717 (1,1) - ? they're the same sound so they should be mapped the same
24. 03:50:145 (3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - is hard to play because it's not one continous motion due to stacks. unstack parts of the stream
25. 03:53:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - not sure there's any need for the stream to decelerate
26. 04:09:002 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - nerf spacing, it's way too high for such a calm part in the song
27. 04:15:431 (1) - could layer this on top of 04:16:288 (1) - instead like this
28. 05:05:145 (3,1,1,1) - map these like you mapped 02:07:717 (1,1) - for consistency
29. 05:29:788 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1) - i don't think this has to decelerate either
30. 06:00:431 (1,1,1,1) - map similarly to 02:07:717 (1,1) - for consistency
31. 06:53:145 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - nerf spacing by a bit, i get that it's the most intense part of the song but this spacing is just overkill imo

newton- wrote:

hi, from queue
your mapping style seems familiar and i don't know why

[general]

1. combo colors contrast too much with the background, use more subdued shades of brown and gray to fit with bg

[ nie]

1. in general try to arrange your objects into neat shapes and stuff
2. hitsounds are a bit too quiet, i'd suggest turning them up a bit
3. the entire song is 3/4, why are some parts 4/4 on timeline
4. 00:33:935 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - you could make this curve a bit neater
5. 00:39:515 (1,2,3,4,1) - maybe you could do a pentagon here? (same with 00:44:962 (1,2,3,4,1) - )
6. 00:42:692 (1,2,3,4) - then a square here or something
7. 00:47:686 (1,2,3,1) - fix square
8. 00:50:409 (1,2,3,4) - could be a square
9. 01:08:574 (1,2) - could be misread as 1/2 since you established before that circle under sliderend = 1/2
10. 01:14:574 (1,2) - ^
11. 01:22:502 (4) - ctrl+g for playability
12. 01:24:860 (1,3) - blanket could be improved
13. 01:26:788 (2,3) - ctrl+g for consistency with previous patterns like this
14. 01:31:288 (1) - remove nc for consistency with previous doubles, add it on 01:31:502 (2) - instead
15. 01:36:431 (1,2) - could make these parallel
16. 01:40:288 (6) - nc for indication that sv changed
17. 01:54:860 (1) - ctrl+g for consistency with previous patterns?
18. 01:57:002 (3) - you can stack this on 01:56:145 (1) -
19. 02:43:502 (2,3,1) - stack on 02:44:145 (3) - instead for playability?
20. 02:48:002 (1) - ctrl+g for more comfortable flow maybe
21. 02:49:717 (1) - ^
22. 02:50:145 (1) - ^
23. 02:54:002 (1,1) - why don't you map these like you did before in 02:07:717 (1,1) - ? they're the same sound so they should be mapped the same
24. 03:50:145 (3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - is hard to play because it's not one continous motion due to stacks. unstack parts of the stream
25. 03:53:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - not sure there's any need for the stream to decelerate
26. 04:09:002 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - nerf spacing, it's way too high for such a calm part in the song
27. 04:15:431 (1) - could layer this on top of 04:16:288 (1) - instead like this
28. 05:05:145 (3,1,1,1) - map these like you mapped 02:07:717 (1,1) - for consistency
29. 05:29:788 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1) - i don't think this has to decelerate either
30. 06:00:431 (1,1,1,1) - map similarly to 02:07:717 (1,1) - for consistency
31. 06:53:145 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - nerf spacing by a bit, i get that it's the most intense part of the song but this spacing is just overkill imo

i think if you polished this map a bit aesthetics wise, it would turn out really great. i really like your mapping style too, it's fun to play.
have a star!

cooldude4232 wrote:

From my Q

Nice map, had some interesting patterns, but were still surprisingly playable

This is more of a personal thing but I think mappers should avoid too many cross screen jumps, they just feel overdone, and your map has a lot

Nie

1. 01:29:431 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - consider mapping this more passively with sliders, because it's really easy to get a ton of 100s on this section and ends up just feeling super weird
2. 01:48:431 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - I think it would look better here if you blanketed all the slider ends for this section
3. 02:32:788 (5) - this feels like it should be spaced out a tad bit more
4. 02:56:574 (1) - I think you should have a circle where the end of this slider tail is
5. 03:46:288 (3,1,2,3) - maybe blanket these?
6. 04:12:860 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - this really threw me off when I played it, maybe map the triple passively with a 1/4 reverse slider
7. 04:21:431 (1,2) - blanket this
8. 05:01:717 (1,2,3,4,5) - this threw me off quite a bit too, you use so much repetition leading up to it doing this feels unnatural
9. 05:49:717 (1) - I think there should just be a break here instead of a slider, there's not really any music anyways
10. 06:45:002 (1) - consider breaking this up int two repeater sliders
11. remove NC here 02:16:502 (1) and add one here 02:15:431 (6) and here 02:16:717 (1)
12. 05:30:860 (1) - space this out more like this http://puu.sh/v3SgM.jpg instead because it ends up looking kinda weird if you stack it
13. 06:03:002 (1) - I think a slider would work well here because of the held note
    
14. kinda minor thing, but a lot of your sliders have red anchors on the end of them when they really don't need them like this http://puu.sh/v3SyJ.jpg

samosita wrote:

From my mod q~

!!!! this map had pretty patterns, commending u for that

mods

[Nie]

1. 00:17:093 (1,1) - 00:28:357 (1,1) - this would sound better if you change hitsound of the slider ends to soft-hitnormal2
2. 01:40:717 (1,1,1) - ^
3. 02:54:002 (1,1) - ^
4. 03:51:860 (1,2,1) - ^
5. 00:39:044 - (minor suggestion) you could try mapping the eerie buzzing sound by putting a slider
6. 00:44:054 (4) - you can make this a slider to be consistent with what you did with 00:41:330 (1)
7. 01:29:431 (1,1,1,1,1) - snap to blue tick
8. 02:02:145 - triple here so the finish at 02:02:574 (2) would be more ~spicy~
9. 02:29:360 - a triple here sounds fitting because you did the same for 02:27:645 (2,3,4) and 02:24:645 (2,3,4)
10. 02:30:645 - ^
11. 02:58:502 - triple here to complement with the drumss
12. 03:48:538 (2,3,4,5) - really hard play here. consider ctrl g for 03:48:538 (2,3,4)
13. 04:10:288 (1,3,1) - these are too close to the hit error box down there. consider changing placement
14. 04:30:217 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,1,2) - consider adding a triple every 4th or 8th count to add fun in playng this jump pattern ^_^
15. 05:04:931 (1,2,3) - fix spacing (3 is relatively farther than 2). I suggest to copy pasta 05:04:502 (1,2,3) then (ctrl +.) once
16. 05:07:717 (1) - slider pls
17. 06:24:860 (1) - remove nc, switch to 06:25:074 (2) instead because i thought it would be a hard read.
18. 06:26:145 - turn on kiai here again , then turn off here 06:46:502
19. 06:46:717 - turn on kiai here again, then off here 06:57:002
20. 06:51:860 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - wowza jumps (minor suggestion to tone down a bit over here haha)
21. 07:04:717 (1) - slider pls

[Soul] wrote:

Hello sorry for the late mod but its a long map... From the OSUWOT Mod Queue.

Mod

01:06:431 (3,4) - 3 and 4 could be sliders if you want to play around with rhythm but up to you. I think it sounds interesting and fills up some empty space. 3 could also turn into a reverse slider and then a note could be placed on the red tick before the next NC.
01:13:288 (1) - Could be a reverse slider or jump.
01:21:431 (1,2,3,4) - Remove 2
01:48:431 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Personally I dislike things overlapping in the same phrase of music but I understand its you style of mapping but to me slider overlap along with pattern overlap looks messy and rushed. Though you dont need to change your patterning I'd look back at some of your sections where it overlaps a whole bunch in a chunk of music and consider either spacing it out or changing the pattering of it. imo. You dont need to change it but I think it would be overall cleaner.
02:32:360 (2,3,4) - Spacing is different for each make it consistant.
02:39:431 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - Looks messy and crunched together.
02:45:860 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - I actually enjoy this one more than the other one.
03:25:717 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - Maybe extend the spacing on this part?
03:28:717 (1,2,3,4) - Sliderends slightly overlap eachother and dont look as clean as that second 1,1,1,etc slider spam.
03:37:288 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - I dont think this choice really fits the music that well. Try keeping 1 and 2 but make 3 a note and on the white tick make a slider from white to red. (https://puu.sh/v8ACr/7aa477c67a.png)
03:46:931 (1,2,3,1,1,2,1,2,3,4,1) - Again messy and too crunched together. Also the spacing on the last 4 to 1 is a bit far for a stream imo.
03:49:288 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Same thing applies here too. Also would rethink the stream's shape
03:53:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Make it rounder. Reading this is like hell.
04:43:288 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Make the spacing consistant
05:04:931 (1,2,3) - A little too extreme.
05:29:788 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Again the shape should be rounder.
06:09:860 (1,2,3,4,5) - Make the spacing closer. It changes on each note again.
06:48:002 (1) - Remove a reverse and add a note on the red tick.
07:00:860 (1) - Before this slider add two notes on the white and red to follow what you have been doing before.
07:06:110 (1) - Lowkey feels like the slider is a little too long in my opinion. Shorten it a little or remove it in general.

Hope it helped.

Soul of the OSUWOT Modding Queue~

-NeBu- wrote:

nm

00:51:718 (4,1) - blanket?
01:07:288 (1,2,3) - ^
01:57:645 (1,2,3,4) - different ds/placement? unnecessary overlap because of 01:57:002 (3) - another patterns seem fine
02:17:574 (3) - you changed slider velocity, maybe nc?
02:24:217 (6) - overlap on slider end
02:43:502 (2,3,1) - I dont like this placement, kinda weird
03:26:145 (3) - Turn right to left
04:21:431 (1,2) - blanket
04:22:288 (3,4,5) - overlap
05:30:860 (1) - spread it from this circle? 05:30:752 (11) -

gl!

Adol Christin wrote:

受暗黑的忧伤之托而来
@Yugu remap得怎么样了？需要摸吗？需要的话我之后补在后面

Yugu wrote:

差不多要remap了，马上要期末考试时间有点少，考完了就可以沉迷作图了

Adol Christin wrote:

受暗黑的忧伤之托而来
@Yugu remap得怎么样了？需要摸吗？需要的话我之后补在后面

blueloniess

1. 01:01:717 (5,1) - 01:05:574 (9,1) - 我觉得诸如这样的距离变化实在太大，就一个LI级别的图来说显得太突兀。最好把距离控制在2左右或者以下。而且滑条尾和下个圈在视野范围内碰到了也不太好看。后面还有很多类似间距过大的，你自己找找看 额，我是想了想，我的flow要这么走的话这里距离就必须放大一点点了
2. 01:24:002 (2,4) - 可以包好一点OK
3. 02:07:716 (1,1,1,1,2) - 把鼓的音效去掉，跟后面保持一致好
4. 02:11:145 (1) - 我建议不用折返，用1/2滑条。后面类似的地方同理这里折返的感觉有不差
5. 02:18:003 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 这几个combo的123，每一次反复的时候移动的距离可以多一点，多移动现在两倍的距离。这样视觉上看着比较明显，打起来也舒服一些额，如果这样的话，对读图还有移动要求就更高了一些，图就变难了一点点。我现在这样的排列相当于定点跳，如果改成你那样就是flow跳,定点跳我觉得简单一点，好打。
6. 02:28:288 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 这一组试试每次反复旋转一个小角度？可能比现在的更好玩整个图放的都是渐变大的跳梗，加旋转感觉有点不合适
7. 02:37:288 (1,2,3) - 推荐把这里用1拍的滑条盖过去单点节奏也不是很差啦~
8. 02:41:360 (2,3,4,6) - 02:42:645 (2,3,4,6) - 碰到了，挺影响美观的没看出来哪里碰到了，挨得近是真的，不过这个图我的风格差不多都是挨得近的物件，互相重叠啥啥啥的，整体上来看应该不会说不怎么整洁把
9. 02:53:360 (1) - 跟上一个滑条拉远一点点。如果你在意堆叠的问题，那就把前面几个圈每一个都搞成不完全堆叠的，否则受上面缓慢移动的滑条影响，总有一个位置会变得难看的啊，这里也是我最纠结的地方。不过还是决定，就要叠233333333这一点点变距空间上也可以稍微强调一点点连打的感觉XD
10. 02:53:360 (1,2) - 做成这样的节奏，比较传统：
    
    那就起不到强调最后一个重音的明显效果啦~~
11. 03:15:860 (5,6,7) - 为了缓和距离压力，建议你这样摆。04:09:860 (1,2,3) - 类似：
    
    好
12. 03:24:431 (1) - 我觉得没有必要用3/4，因为1/2的位置有轻微的音。如果你坚持不改，那至少把滑条尾消音吧。好，这里强调人声
13. 03:38:574 (3,4) - 碰到了拉开了
14. 04:05:788 (2,1) - 这个包裹随手了点吧。。。改正
15. 04:52:288 (3) - 试试ctrl+g？一个3角反flow的尝试，我在不少图里面遇到这个梗，感觉挺不错的就抄过来了
16. 05:30:860 - 05:49:074 - 这段有人在说话，鼓的音效实在太吵了。。你可以借鉴一下Yugu主难度的音效音量调小了
17. 07:06:110 (1) - 转盘尾消音

好

个人感觉，flow什么的挺好，打起来ok。但间距变化感觉目的性不强，有点随机，而且排版上感觉很粗糙。很多可以不碰的，可以包的更整齐的地方，都处理的不太好。如果未来有可能remap的话，多留意下排版整齐的问题吧。可以试试看1/2直滑条的角度统一在15度和75度的位置，这样做下来比较容易让排版更整洁。

好的，谢谢摸图，前段时间忙着比赛，没注意到这里，不好意思啦 其实，整洁上有些重叠是故意的，想尝试一下新的风格XD

kanor wrote:

Wave hitsounds with possible delay > 5ms:
normal-hitnormal.wav
normal-hitwhistle.wav
Nie里00:39:515 - 这里的红绿线音效不一致 啊...没注意到 fixed

[Nie]
开个头的滑条稍微带点弧度比较好，直直的感觉有点僵硬... 不是很想改
说个大概吧
变SV太多了，这么多我觉得可能不可读。本来你选的SV就比较低，一放慢立马就感受出来了，变得太频繁以至于对player缺乏足够的提示，很可能适应不了，而且因为你一变SV就要NC，整个NC看起来感觉会比较乱，所以要是能去掉一部分变SV就好了，不用变依然有办法可以达到那个效果
overlap有点多...比如02:16:717 (1,2,1,2) - ，如果你想叠尾巴的话，我会推荐完全stack，现在你的这种叠法看起来比较敷衍，有那个意思但是做的又不够精细，像blanket那样，然后是02:19:288 (1,2,3) - 这种，这里的节奏挺好的，梗也能懂，但是我会更推荐把这里的缩小一点或者放大一点，因为这种要lap不lap的其实挺难看的...你要不lap1/4或者一半都可以，只要让别人看出来你是想lap而不是看起来不小心lap了这样....不知道我说清楚了没有，像这样看起来意图很清楚 感觉没太大办法改 因为02:18:431 (1,3,1,1,3) - 和02:19:288 (1,2,3,2,1) - 我是要弄成个弧形的 同时02:19:610 (2,3,2,1,1,3) - 这里也要弄个弧形 02:20:895 (2,3,2,1) - 这里和02:22:181 (2,3,2) - 都是stack 要动的话就会动的飞起有点困难
02:34:717 - 从这里开始节奏突然就软下来了，然后02:41:145 (1,2,1) - 这里也是，其实我觉得特意去跟vocal其实不是特别必要，它也就是整个曲子的一个轨，这里包括前面的Kiai其实都是很激昂的，你1/2的鼓也塞了不少了，其实一直这么塞就可以了，突然这么停一下感觉很突兀 调快了speed 1.2x 感觉还是滑条最合适了
加油~

02:47:145 (1,1,1) - 可以再完善一下blanekt
fixed

kanor wrote:

[Blue]
跳有点缺乏规律...比如01:01:717 (5,1) - 和01:12:002 (5,6) - ，同样的地方，有个跳了有个没跳，这就有点inconsistent，整体的感觉是除了跳都偏简单了，大多数地方比较贪吃蛇，就像一个advanced的排列里突然混进几个做的不错的Extra的梗，不能说不好，只是不太合适，我个人是比较建议把主歌的排列再改改，加点跳跃感就更好了，很多本来可以小跳平衡难度的地方你都直接ds了，就感觉有点不合适（）我目前的水平感觉不出其他应该放跳的地方;w;太菜;w;
01:23:788 - 感觉这里是不是漏音了修复daze！
02:18:003 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 像这里，你这么摆的话大DS强调的都是4，但是5才是重音，这样你强调的地方和曲子强调的地方就错开了，所以我觉得4最好和123考得近一点而不是和5，像02:28:288 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 你后面这样
其他的还好已修复~

Binguo wrote:

[nie]
01:48:431 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - 你不应该只在这一团转 应该放开一些 排列摆开了点

02:02:145 (1,2,3) - 迷之三连 新手不要耍这些玩意 退一步来说你自己能说清楚为什么要放三连吗？ fixed

02:07:717 (1,1) - 尾部消音 fixed

02:12:002 (1) - 大加速 fixed

02:37:502 (2,3) - 位置互换 fixed 突然发现后面的都没NC

04:48:645 (3,4) - 同上 其他重复不提了 ^

06:27:431 (1) - 头尾互换ctrl+G 06:27:860 (2) - 同样 好