Hi oko :3
General
Kantan
General
- Wouldn't it be better to use an extra timing point at 00:16:842 - and 00:22:327 to match the gradual increase from 00:11:356? Also main volume would start from 00:22:327.
Kantan
- Would be nicer for structure if you make 00:00:385 D and 00:05:870 d, would be nice for overall ddkk structure on the downbeats in the intro and have this structure across all diffs.
- 00:09:985 (9,10,11,12,13) kkkkDk would make a better transition the next part with the drums imo.
- 00:22:327 D would fit better imo because you also have a low sound here.
- I feel like 00:44:270 would sound better as D to transition into the calmer part. Applies to all diffs.
- Would sound better for emphais if you change 00:55:242 to D and move 00:55:585 to 00:55:927, it looks better this way with the vocal as well, since you use a larger spacing after 00:57:985 as well for example.
- Better make spacing of 01:06:899 (100,101,102) and 01:09:642 (104,105,106) similar in some way, I'd suggest moving 01:07:413 to 01:07:585 and adding a k on 01:08:270 as you're indicating that you're following the instruments with the clap on 01:06:899.
- 01:25:070 - remove, looks better for structure
- How about moving 00:12:042 to 00:11:699 and make 00:11:013 (21,22,23) kDk, would fit better with the high sound and clap on 00:11:013 and 00:11:699.
- I'd consider removing 00:17:185 (37), you have a fairly long note chain here otherwise, may also remove 00:18:556 for consistency with this. Applies to the pattern starting from 01:00:727 as well.
- Similar to previous suggestions, I'd make 00:22:327 D and 00:32:956 (26,27) kD, I think it works better if the following finish is the opposite colour in these longer patterns and it goes better with the overall drum structure as well.
- d would sound better on 01:08:956, the long instrument sound is low.
- I'd suggest you change 01:12:042 (15,16,17,18,19,20,21) to kkkdddd, would fit better because of the low background sounds on the last 4 notes of this pattern.
- Better remove 00:19:070 , feels unfitting in this buildup imo.
- You could remove 00:23:527 and move 00:24:385 to 00:24:899 , the pattern is a bit long otherwise even though the song is not that intense here, and having 00:23:185 (75,76) stand alone a bit would be nice for similar structure to 00:25:927.
- How about moving 00:29:870 to 00:29:699? Would make a nice pattern imo.
- Better move 00:33:127 to and change to d, would look better to have two doubles here followed by a space for emphasis of the finish.
- I think you could remove 00:40:327 and maybe ctrl+g 00:41:013 (150,151) to follow the melody, I'd also recommend you change 00:41:870 to k for the stronger sound compared to 00:42:556.
- It would sound nice if you move 00:43:328 to 00:43:156 and change the resulting triple to ddd and ctrl+g 00:43:413 (163,164) and change 00:44:270 to D to get a K ddd d kkk k D pattern starting from 00:42:899. Fits better with the instruments imo.
- I'd suggest you make 00:45:470 k for the vocal and have 00:46:499 (174,175,176,177) as either dkkd or kkkd, it would sound better if you have d on the low instrument sound on the last note.
- How about moving 01:10:499 to 01:10:327 ? Fits better with surrounding pattern imo, or you could add a note on 01:08:956 instead.
- You could remove 01:17:013 for better vocal emphasis here, the sound on this note is also slightly weaker so it wouldn't take anything away to leave a space here.
- Maybe remove 01:18:385 as well and move 01:21:127 to 01:21:813 and change to d, would look better if you have 5 notes in 1/2 followed by a 171 spacing to a single note and then the next pattern, would be nice for emphasis of the single note on the downbeats in this part.
- 01:38:099 (401,402,403,404) - ddd k and 01:39:127 D would sound better for the instruments I think.
- 00:05:699 remove and 00:05:870 d and 00:00:385 D as well for the ddkk structure I was talking about in Kantan.
- I'd suggest you make pattern like 00:17:356 (1,2,1,1,1,1) ddk k d d instead, the k in the triples feels really strong compared to what the music provides here imo.
- Something like k ddd or d kdd would work better for 00:24:213 (13,14,15,16) to have the emphasis of k on the instrument of 00:24:727 (17,18) in contrast to the weaker sound of 00:24:556.
- 00:45:642 (5,6,7,8) ddkd or dkkd, would be better for instrument emphasis of the high sound on 00:45:985 and the low on 00:45:642.
- 00:46:842 (11,12) ctrl+g, similar reason as ^
- 00:49:585 (20,21,22) kdd and 00:51:127 (25,26) dd as well, conflicts with instruments otherwise, and vocal is not that intense so d works too.
- 00:52:327 (27,28,29,30,31) kkd d k and 00:53:527 (35,36,37) dkd.
- Would sound better if you have 01:22:327 (205,206,207,208,209) as kkddk for the low sound on 01:22:670 and clap on 01:23:013. You could move 01:22:842 to 01:22:156 as well, it would fit better with the longer instrument and vocal sound if you have a 1/1 spacing after 01:22:670.
- Stuff like 01:38:785 (1,2,3) would sound better if the ending finish is in contrast to the note before imo.