1. 00:58:070 (4,5) - ちょっと見にくいかも こんな感じでどうですか？ https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5474596
2. 01:10:756 (4,5,6) - Ctrl + Gの方がやりやすい気がします
3. 01:30:470 (2) - NC?
4. 01:35:956 (2) - Ctrl + Gの方がやりやすい気がします
5. 04:10:241 (2,3) - 重なってるのちょっと見づらかったのでこんな感じとかどうですか？ https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5474545

Homura- wrote:

01:19:499 (2) - うわ近ーッ！　 見た目重視で01:18:813 (2,3) - の中間(x:68 y:217)あたりにしない？ いいね

Shirasaka Koume wrote:

[Jewelry Box]

1. 00:58:070 (4,5) - ちょっと見にくいかも こんな感じでどうですか？https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5474596　そのあとのボーカルと合わせてあるのでkeepで
2. 01:10:756 (4,5,6) - Ctrl + Gの方がやりやすい気がします やりやすそうだけど今の流れの方が好きだからkeepで
3. 01:30:470 (2) - NC? NC入れるとSBの変更がだるいｗｗ keepします。。
4. 01:35:956 (2) - Ctrl + Gの方がやりやすい気がします おお、いいですね～
5. 04:10:241 (2,3) - 重なってるのちょっと見づらかったのでこんな感じとかどうですか？ https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5474545 ぼくはこれがすき。

SBいいね∧(川ヮO)∧　やったぜ

BeatofIke wrote:

Posting here, so i don't forget...
Please don't graveyard o3o

1. 00:40:413 (3) - おそらくNCミス・・・？
2. 01:23:784 (4) - ここから01:23:441 (2,3) - の横の流れを意識して、スライダーをもう少し右に移動してみるのでどうでしょう？次の01:23:956 (1) - にも繋がると思います。
3. 01:36:127 (3) - 若干上に移動して欲しい・・・！
4. 01:48:813 (2) - ここ1/4より1/2のサークルでまとめたほうが叩いてて面白いと思う
5. 02:12:299 (5) - 前半の00:19:499 - ここらへんにあわせてNew comboあってもいいかも
6. 04:18:899 (2,3,4) - ちょっと音取りすぎじゃない？(3)は聞こえたけど(2,4)が危うい・・・
7. 04:24:127 (3) - 始点じゃなくて終点にwhistle?

alacat wrote:

お中元Mod

[Jewelry Box]

1. 00:40:413 (3) - おそらくNCミス・・・？　ホゲーッｗｗｗ　OKです
2. 01:23:784 (4) - ここから01:23:441 (2,3) - の横の流れを意識して、スライダーをもう少し右に移動してみるのでどうでしょう？次の01:23:956 (1) - にも繋がると思います。 なるほど～　OKです
3. 01:36:127 (3) - 若干上に移動して欲しい・・・！ ちょっと動かした(違いがわからない)
4. 01:48:813 (2) - ここ1/4より1/2のサークルでまとめたほうが叩いてて面白いと思う　たしかに。　サークルにしました
5. 02:12:299 (5) - 前半の00:19:499 - ここらへんにあわせてNew comboあってもいいかも　新たなNCを追加することによって俺のSB修正が生まれるのでキープというのは冗談ですが(あながち冗談じゃないけど) 00:19:499 (1) - はデザイン的な感じでNC入れてるだけであって切れ目で分けるために入れてるわけじゃないのでこっちには必要ないかなーというのがボクの考えです
6. 04:18:899 (2,3,4) - ちょっと音取りすぎじゃない？(3)は聞こえたけど(2,4)が危うい・・・ はい(迫真)
7. 04:24:127 (3) - 始点じゃなくて終点にwhistle? おっしゃるとおりです

一応確認のためMetadataのリンクください どうぞ！ http://youhardcore.web.fc2.com/release/022/

1. SB\burst.png (1100x1100) is outside of the maximum allowed dimensions (640x1440 or 1920x480 for scrolling images) or (1366x768)

[ Jewelry Box]

General

1. 00:21:041 (2,3,4) - This being a triplet makes the next two patterns of 00:21:384 (1,2,3,1) - heavily inconsistent. The player is expecting these patterns to play like 00:21:041 (2,3,4) - , but they don't, and it can lead to some misreading. I would change 00:21:041 (2,3) - to a slider and use the same pattern as you did at 00:21:384 (1,2) - and 00:21:727 (3,1) - .
2. 00:27:299 (3) - Why not do a triplet instead? For consistency with your other rhythms.
3. 00:42:813 (1,2,3) - Some more spacing between these would be nice to give a more clear indication that they're 1/2 coming out of the stream.
4. 01:23:784 - ctrl+g here for better flow out of 01:23:613 (3) - and into 01:23:956 (1) - ?
5. 02:09:041 (8) - ctrl+g here i think makes a better pattern than the double upwards facing sliders.
6. 02:10:241 (1,2) - why are these so close compared to 02:11:613 (1,2) - ???
7. 03:05:270 (3) - same as before with this downwards facing buzzslider (
8. 03:12:127 - Maybe you could add a note here? Seems there could be room for something and you could form a triangle pattern with 03:11:956 (1,2) - .
9. 03:22:413 (1) - Missing repeat? No reason to remove it here
10. 03:44:699 - Also missing a note here, plus it avoids an awkward stack you have at 03:44:527 (4,5) - .

Ascendance wrote:

Sorry

Popping the bubble due to a SB image with dimensions that are too big.

Storyboard

1. SB\burst.png (1100x1100) is outside of the maximum allowed dimensions (640x1440 or 1920x480 for scrolling images) or (1366x768)

some minor things in the map:

[ Jewelry Box]

General

1. 00:21:041 (2,3,4) - This being a triplet makes the next two patterns of 00:21:384 (1,2,3,1) - heavily inconsistent. The player is expecting these patterns to play like 00:21:041 (2,3,4) - , but they don't, and it can lead to some misreading. I would change 00:21:041 (2,3) - to a slider and use the same pattern as you did at 00:21:384 (1,2) - and 00:21:727 (3,1) - . it is not inconsistent. because i don't think no need to use same rhythms on same sounds. and i like this pattern. keep
2. 00:27:299 (3) - Why not do a triplet instead? For consistency with your other rhythms. keeping same rhythm is bored for me. so i used this.
3. 00:42:813 (1,2,3) - Some more spacing between these would be nice to give a more clear indication that they're 1/2 coming out of the stream. this pattern has been put in consideration of the gap between the previous sound.
4. 01:23:784 - ctrl+g here for better flow out of 01:23:613 (3) - and into 01:23:956 (1) - ? no. i wanna keep direction of kick sliders.
5. 02:09:041 (8) - ctrl+g here i think makes a better pattern than the double upwards facing sliders. umm keep. i don't have enough reason but i don't wanna change. sorry
6. 02:10:241 (1,2) - why are these so close compared to 02:11:613 (1,2) - ??? these are symmetry patterns. and almost players haven't missed on here. i think no problem.
7. 03:05:270 (3) - same as before with this downwards facing buzzslider ( same
8. 03:12:127 - Maybe you could add a note here? Seems there could be room for something and you could form a triangle pattern with 03:11:956 (1,2) - . no
9. 03:22:413 (1) - Missing repeat? No reason to remove it here i didn't make reverse deliberately. i think this rhythm is more fit with song.
10. 03:44:699 - Also missing a note here, plus it avoids an awkward stack you have at 03:44:527 (4,5) - . why is this awkward lol i think this patterns are good in playing. keep

okay~

[C u r i] wrote:

wooo rank soon?

Worminators wrote:

01:50:013 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Why break in the stream? I can clearly hear a note at 01:50:441 -

also if this get DQ, pls fix 00:10:070 (1,3) - for not being perfectly parallel ;w;
02:55:156 (1,2) - and that wrong blanket
04:09:727 (2,1) - and this one too

Meg wrote:

Worminators wrote:

01:50:013 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Why break in the stream? I can clearly hear a note at 01:50:441 -

also if this get DQ, pls fix 00:10:070 (1,3) - for not being perfectly parallel ;w;
02:55:156 (1,2) - and that wrong blanket
04:09:727 (2,1) - and this one too

all things are not problem imo, looks you want to make DQ lol
if it was overmapped, i would think it.
But thank you for checking

I didn't want to DQ it but I just don't want to see your map ranked with these problems
I wanna see the opinion of a BN/QAT about this

Worminators wrote:

01:50:013 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Why break in the stream? I can clearly hear a note at 01:50:441 - I think by making blank on 01:50:441 - can emphasize more from vocals

also if this get DQ, pls fix 00:10:070 (1,3) - for not being perfectly parallel ;w;
02:55:156 (1,2) - and that wrong blanket
04:09:727 (2,1) - and this one too

Worminators wrote:

01:50:013 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Why break in the stream? I can clearly hear a note at 01:50:441 -

also if this get DQ, pls fix 00:10:070 (1,3) - for not being perfectly parallel ;w;
02:55:156 (1,2) - and that wrong blanket
04:09:727 (2,1) - and this one too

I didn't want to DQ it but I just don't want to see your map ranked with these problems
I wanna see the opinion of a BN/QAT about this

Meg wrote:

thank you for fuckin modding >w<