Yoratama wrote:

Hi, NM from my kuehue
Indo aja ya :v

Oni of Despair

00:47:224 (93) - kat lebih enak imo, soalnya pas suaranya neken, karena Keliatanya follow drum sama vocal, sengaja biar 00:47:224 (93,94,95,96,97,98) - variativ dd-dk-kd. tapi jadi sadar kalo 00:53:041 - ini beda sendiri, changed that to k instead.
00:57:939 - 00:58:398 - ubah jadi triplet? tapi kyaknya bakal ngacauin timing nya. jadi kacau SV changenya. awal2nya bikin gampang aja trus yang kedua lebih susah
01:26:102 (60,61,62) - ddk atau kdk, alasanya sama kek mod pertama. karena (62) itu downbeat, gak pas kalo dikasih k. dibuat agar koheren dengan upbeat di 01:27:020 - ddd-ddk . changed 03:04:061 - to k instead for variation in 2nd kiai
01:31:306 (91,92) - CTRL+G lebih enak imo. pas sama vocalnya juga.downbeat di 91
01:32:837 (100) - kat ^^ ^^
02:04:673 (30) - don? Nada nya sam kyk 00:46:306 (89) - . kalo follow ini 02:14:469 (37) - biarin gitu aja di sesi yang ini emang polanya emang dibikin beda dari yang pertama. musicnya juga beda.
02:25:184 (94) - kat lebih enak imo, sama kyk mod pertama. tidak diganti karena lebih enak konsisten dengan 02:20:286 (73,74,75,76) -
02:49:673 (92,93) - CTRL+G? kyk 02:49:673 (92,93) - rip same timestamp lol. dipertahankan untuk downbeat rhytm
03:10:260 (24) - kyaknya pindah kat kesini 03:10:413 - engga, triplet yang sekarang lebih pas untuk menekankan 03:10:337 - setelah sedikit pause di vokal pada (22)
02:51:204 (102) - kat? keep for coherency with the drum
03:15:617 (62,63) - CTRL+G? agak weird imo buat variasi, di bagian kedua kiai kedua ini emang patternnya agak sedikit beda. dan pattern kayak gini udah dikasih hint di 03:10:183 (23,24,25) - lower level player biasanya emang bakal miss disini kalo gak terbiasa alternatenya hehe
04:08:806 (84) - kat? lebih pas diakhiri dengan d supaya konsisten dengan 04:10:183 -
04:39:877 (23) - Remove finisher? the guitar sound is more pressed
04:44:775 (14) - ^^ ^

Hope it help!
Lagunya mantap! (y)
Good luck, semoga ranked!

[R] wrote:

sempet ngakak ngecek ada file beginian di foldernya @@ lol that was supposed to be the bg for this map. idk why it can be there....

entahlah request dari jaman kapan :v
[Oni]
00:19:826 - maybe triplet bisa pindah ke belakang lebih noticable disini kok
00:56:102 - kat mungkin untuk variasi hmm variasinya di part kedua aja, karena gitarnya lebih aktif disana
01:05:745 (178) - change to kat, terlalu banyak dd di pattern ini sengaja banyak d biar kesannya lebih dalem dan menegangkan i
01:16:306 (12,1) - coba bikin ddd or kkd, itu bagian kosong ditengah ada suara added k between the notes.
02:49:826 - doba dibikin triplet, vokalnya barlanjut disini ehm dimana?
02:51:357 - delete ini ? kayak terasa berlebih patternnya, biar enak mukul finishernya juga keep supaya panjang patternnya gak beda jauh sama yang lain-lainnya disini.

GL panci

Backfire wrote:

[General]

If it were up to me, I would rank this ASAP. I don't think there is anything else to say, this just needs to be ranked. I saw almost no flaws.

[Oni]

01:22:428 - I have an idea little different than what you have currently, I feel like what you had did not fit so well. Try d d k ddd d k d k k d, that should fit better than what is there currently imo, for flow and sound, I suppose. And perhaps do it in the second kiai and third kiai as well with this repeating pattern? hmm it's a bit monotonous because i put d d k at 01:21:816 (34,35,36) - and the suggestion also start with same pattern. i'll keep it for now
03:10:260 - this kat should be here 03:10:413 - i think current placement is fine because can give more emphasis to 03:10:337 -

-Tenshi- wrote:

I'm soooo late, sorry!!

Some little suggestion, map has almost no flaws to me.

[Oni something]

00:29:163 I would put a don here, i feel like a long pattern fit more the end of a section. leaving it empty can represent the guitar better here.
02:07:581 Same here, also i think it sounds better than having no note here. the pattern will be too long imo, and the break here can give emphasis to chata's voice at 02:07:428 -

omg that ended up being the shortest mod ever, no kudosu please :3

Good luck ranking it

xtrem3x wrote:

Removing my laziness ...


General:

don = d
kat = k
Big Don = D
Big Kat = K

Oni of DesperaVolta

• 
  00:03:143 - Reduce this slider until 00:04:980- and add 3 d notes in ... 00:05:286- , 00:05:439- . 00:05:592- ... in first place a slider because why this sound is long (with no other sound). the long sound ends at 00:05:592 - so current slider is fine
  
  00:10:184 - Add d note here and ...
  00:10:337 - Here ...
  00:12:633 - Here ...
  00:12:786 - Here too ... complementary with above point. i don't think i want to make the intro denser.
  
  00:18:755- to 00:20:285 - in this section all notes have same percussion tone ... all in d to complement with the guitar sound too, i put some k in it
  
  00:38:347 - in this section is more fit a combination as ... ddd d kkk d k ddk k D ... is more compactible with percussion sound. can work too, but it prefer using various pattern here
  
  00:46:153 - why this note is different? ... have same sound as 00:41:255- and 00:43:704- ... (yeah I know, variety bla bla bla, but not here .-. ) fixed
  00:48:602 - Same ...
  00:55:949 - Same ...
  
  00:57:939 - this section sounds better with kkddkdkdkdD ... (yeah have percussion to have pure d note) but is nessesary have variety specifically to combine with vocal sound. considering i followed percussion+guitar in previous section, it would be awkward if suddenly change to vocal
  
  01:43:551 - in this Break can fill with pure d note following percussion ... (?) no
  
  02:27:530 - if your focus is in vocal sound and "possible" high sounds is here... change notes to k... umm..wrong timestamp? it leads to empty note
  
  03:15:617 - ctrl+g with next note ... have bad position these notes ... if you hear carefully this fits with the drum well
  
  03:16:459 - is good a variation here ... Change this note to k d is more fits as the percussion sound going lower
  
  04:22:734 - this part is better with ... ddkdk ... is rare a focus in 3rd note but is nessesary a combination with 2 blue notes ... hmm no change
  
  05:19:850 - oh please, ninja note in a literally slow (really slow) part? .. NO!! ... is better maintain this focus with this = inherited point with 0.40x velocity

this ninja is to make you feel the despair..

is good, a bit repetitive but good .. 2 stars (owo)/*

1. 00:57:938 (141,142) - Triplet would fit to the drums well.
2. 00:59:469 - why is SV keeping 0.89x? 0.90x works good enough.
3. 01:38:806 (1) - Hitsound seems bit too loud. I'd recommend 60~50%
4. 02:55:795 (133,134,135,136,137) - I don't think this color is the best, because drums sounds like d-kkd. I suggest d-dkd, it makes good pattern with 03:15:388 (59,60,61,62,63) -
5. 01:37:428 (131,132,133,134,135) - same. d-kkd?
   
   
6. 03:32:683 (3,1,2) - kkd for consistency with 03:52:275 (3,4,5) - ?
   
7. 04:14:163 (120,121,122,123,124) - see above. (d-dkk) 04:33:755 (62,63,64,65,66) -
   
   
8. In outro part, hitsound seems loud. should be lower. (70%-80%, spinner 50%)
9. 05:19:850 (1) - No Ninja please

tasuke912 wrote:

Hi.
[ Oni]

1. 00:57:938 (141,142) - Triplet would fit to the drums well. keep to a long 1/2 pattern in this section and to retain smooth slow down
2. 00:59:469 - why is SV keeping 0.89x? 0.90x works good enough. fixed
3. 01:38:806 (1) - Hitsound seems bit too loud. I'd recommend 60~50% added green line with 70% at 01:38:806 - and constantly lowering volume till spinner end
4. 02:55:795 (133,134,135,136,137) - I don't think this color is the best, because drums sounds like d-kkd. I suggest d-dkd, it makes good pattern with 03:15:388 (59,60,61,62,63) - oo fixed
5. 01:37:428 (131,132,133,134,135) - same. d-kkd? ddk instead to complement the vocal
   
   
6. 03:32:683 (3,1,2) - kkd for consistency with 03:52:275 (3,4,5) - ? fixed
   
7. 04:14:163 (120,121,122,123,124) - see above. (d-dkk) 04:33:755 (62,63,64,65,66) - fixed
   
   
8. In outro part, hitsound seems loud. should be lower. (70%-80%, spinner 50%) alright
9. 05:19:850 (1) - No Ninja please everyone seems doesn't like ninja reduced the speed by half (3.00x --> 1.5x) i hope this give enough time to react even if player finish spinner too early and think the song's ended

call me back

• [Oni of Despair]

1. 00:24:877 (56) - consider changing this note to d ? This would help emphasize the next kat at 00:25:183 -
2. 00:34:673 (29) - same as ^
3. 01:10:337 (201) - maybe k to accompany the pitch increase of vocal there ?
4. 01:12:785 (215) - same as ^
5. 01:20:439 (27,28,29,30,31,32) - try k d d k d k instead of d k d k k d to vary the 1/2 notes a bit ? The vocal pattern here is in fact quite different from 01:22:734 -
6. 01:33:449 (105) - same as 01:10:337 (201) -
7. 02:18:296 - you may want to use 0.9x SV here to keep the same speed as the session from 00:59:928 to 01:07:734 -
8. 02:26:102 - this timing point could be removed if you apply ^
9. 02:28:704 (114) and 02:31:153 (130) - same as 01:10:337 (201) -
10. 02:38:806 (28,29,30,31,32,33) - same pattern suggestion as 01:20:439 (27,28,29,30,31,32) -
11. 03:05:515 (192) - you can add d here and change 03:05:898 (196) - to d in order to give more power to the 2nd half of the second kiai. Moreover, this would avoid using the same 1/2 structure (i.e. k d k d k k d) consecutively.
12. 03:21:663 (98) - move to 03:21:816 - and change to k to keep it consistent with 03:16:918 - ?
13. 03:41:255 (4) - same as ^
14. From 04:27:939 to 04:29:163 - consider reforming the pattern like this for a smoother flow ? (cursor at 04:28:551 - )
15. 04:32:531 (52) - I think you may have missed the finish here ?
16. 04:39:724 (22) and 04:44:622 (13) - maybe delete these notes ? They sound a bit unnecessary at this pace of music.
17. 04:51:969 - 0.85x SV would be much better as the current slider covers the next note substantially. Readjust the slider end back to 04:53:500 - afterwards.

Nardoxyribonucleic wrote:

Hi, here is the M4M as requested.

• [Oni of Despair]

1. 00:24:877 (56) - consider changing this note to d ? This would help emphasize the next kat at 00:25:183 - k is also fine to reflect the same guitar sound with previous note (00:24:571 - )
2. 00:34:673 (29) - same as ^ same as ^
3. 01:10:337 (201) - maybe k to accompany the pitch increase of vocal there ? keep, but changed next point as the pitch is higher
4. 01:12:785 (215) - same as ^ changed ^
5. 01:20:439 (27,28,29,30,31,32) - try k d d k d k instead of d k d k k d to vary the 1/2 notes a bit ? The vocal pattern here is in fact quite different from 01:22:734 - i think it's fine to have coherency in drumming
6. 01:33:449 (105) - same as 01:10:337 (201) - retained the note as d can give more eerie feeling and more fits with the drum imo
7. 02:18:296 - you may want to use 0.9x SV here to keep the same speed as the session from 00:59:928 to 01:07:734 - fixed
8. 02:26:102 - this timing point could be removed if you apply ^ fixed
9. 02:28:704 (114) and 02:31:153 (130) - same as 01:10:337 (201) - changed 02:31:153 - to k
10. 02:38:806 (28,29,30,31,32,33) - same pattern suggestion as 01:20:439 (27,28,29,30,31,32) - same as before
11. 03:05:515 (192) - you can add d here and change 03:05:898 (196) - to d in order to give more power to the 2nd half of the second kiai. Moreover, this would avoid using the same 1/2 structure (i.e. k d k d k k d) consecutively. seems good. changed :3
12. 03:21:663 (98) - move to 03:21:816 - and change to k to keep it consistent with 03:16:918 - ? dd dk can follow the drum and give nice variation imo,
13. 03:41:255 (4) - same as ^ same as ^
14. From 04:27:939 to 04:29:163 - consider reforming the pattern like this for a smoother flow ? (cursor at 04:28:551 - )changed in alternative way, i prefer to end the sequence with d to cohere with the drum
15. 04:32:531 (52) - I think you may have missed the finish here ? right, fixed
16. 04:39:724 (22) and 04:44:622 (13) - maybe delete these notes ? They sound a bit unnecessary at this pace of music.good idea
17. 04:51:969 - 0.85x SV would be much better as the current slider covers the next note substantially. Readjust the slider end back to 04:53:500 - afterwards. fixed

You may call me back after that~

Raiden wrote:

[Oni of Despair]00:58:015 - missing 1/4 note intentional because i mostly use 1/2 pattern in this section, and get denser in the same part in next section
05:19:850 (1) - you should probably lower like a lot the volume of this note fixed