ursa wrote:

A little suggestion that i think it'll be useful for your map

1. 00:43:960 (2,3) - i think giving a distance like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5283166 or giving some distance would be good instead making the beat stacked Sorry I really like the shape when its stacked and it fit well
2. 00:52:142 (3,4) - beat stacked issue ,i think moving 00:52:312 (4) - to x=160 would make it better Moved to x:176
3. 01:07:653 (5,6,1,2) - I feels the jump flow can cause miss , because the flow after catching 01:08:164 (1,2) - . so i think it would be better to move
   01:08:164 (1,2) - for few grinds to left (like x=112) I don't think so, the spacing is good for the transition, sorry
4. 01:23:846 (4,5,6) - I think you can move 1 grid to right (x=368) to make the jump flow more flexible to catch
5. 02:34:414 (3,4,5,6) - well , i think the pattern are visually can be tricky to catch, because the previous pattern had a high dash flow. maybe, by moving to 02:34:585 (4,5,6) - to x=176 would be better Fixed in my way
6. 02:43:619 (1,2) - the 02:43:619 (1) - the half shape on this slider are offscreen , & it cause the slider hit the wall (the movement slider also blocked by the wall), so moving 02:43:619 (1,2) - 1 grid to left (x=432) will fix this
7. 02:59:642 (5,1) - got a slider offscreen issue here , but i think moving 02:59:642 (5,1) - 1-2 grids to left (x=288) would fix this without deleting the 02:59:642 (5) - hyper Fixed in my way too
8. 05:36:971 (10) - i think , should really need to put beat here , because it's for neutralize the movement after cathing the 1/4 hyper

It's a good map & It'll have a nice flow , Goodluck

1. 00:54:869 (2,3,4,5) - I think you could rearrange them as https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307334, which is more consistent with your previous patterning. To fix flow to the next object, you can Ctrl+H 00:55:892 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5) -
2. 01:45:323 (3,4) - and 01:46:004 (3,4) - are quite unexpected movements, so they break the flow. I suggest making them follow the left-right movement (i.e. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307382).
3. 02:34:585 (4,5,6) - This is rather close to the previous note, which makes it inconsistent with other similar patterns. This works nicely: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307447
4. 02:36:971 (2,3,4,5,6) - Same on this one, I think the easiest way to fix is to swap (2) and (3)'s positions
5. 02:45:494 (4,5,6,7,8) - I think it's better to reppatern this to make it more consistent with previous usage, e.g. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307434
6. 02:46:346 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Similar stuff, could be rearranged as https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307464
7. 03:36:801 (1,2,3,4) - Since each of the sounds is strong, left-right movement properly emphasizes them https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307490
8. 03:40:210 (3) - If you're focusing on vocals, this note could be removed. It feels a bit off, especially since you didn't map the next 1/2 beat with a piano sound.
9. 03:42:255 (1,2) - This could be mapped as a single 1/1 slider to follow the vocals. It would also serve to increase the emphasis 03:42:767 (2) - sets on the vocals. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307513
10. 03:53:164 (7,8,9,1,2,3) - I think you could rearrange this pattern like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307554 to have two hyperdashes. Note how this part is the same as 03:42:255 (1,2) -, except a little stronger
11. 04:07:994 (4,1) - The antiflow between these doesn't play too well. I'd Ctrl+H 04:08:164 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - and then rearrange 04:10:210 (4,5) - as https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307568
12. 04:37:483 (1,2) - This is another of those awkwardly short distances that trigger me. You could make a left-right movement on 04:37:483 (1,2,3) - (i.e. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307620) and Ctrl+G 04:37:994 (4,5) - to fix the flow to it.
13. 05:05:096 (7,8) - This distance is rather tricky after the hyperdash. I'd move (8) a bit to the right.
14. 05:07:483 (4,5) - This short distance is awkward and inconsistent with your previous patterns (like 04:56:403 (3,4,5,6) -). Consider moving 05:07:653 (5) - to the right of the pattern.
15. 05:26:233 (2,3) - I think this distance is a bit tricky after the hyperdash. I'd shorten it a bit by moving (3) to x:288.

ZiRoX wrote:

Don't give kudosu for this.

1. 00:54:869 (2,3,4,5) - I think you could rearrange them as https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307334, which is more consistent with your previous patterning. To fix flow to the next object, you can Ctrl+H 00:55:892 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5) -
2. 01:45:323 (3,4) - and 01:46:004 (3,4) - are quite unexpected movements, so they break the flow. I suggest making them follow the left-right movement (i.e. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307382).
3. 02:34:585 (4,5,6) - This is rather close to the previous note, which makes it inconsistent with other similar patterns. This works nicely: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307447
4. 02:36:971 (2,3,4,5,6) - Same on this one, I think the easiest way to fix is to swap (2) and (3)'s positions
5. 02:45:494 (4,5,6,7,8) - I think it's better to reppatern this to make it more consistent with previous usage, e.g. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307434 No sorry I want to use new pattern to make the map less repetitive
6. 02:46:346 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Similar stuff, could be rearranged as https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307464
7. 03:36:801 (1,2,3,4) - Since each of the sounds is strong, left-right movement properly emphasizes them https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307490
8. 03:40:210 (3) - If you're focusing on vocals, this note could be removed. It feels a bit off, especially since you didn't map the next 1/2 beat with a piano sound.
9. 03:42:255 (1,2) - This could be mapped as a single 1/1 slider to follow the vocals. It would also serve to increase the emphasis 03:42:767 (2) - sets on the vocals. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307513 Mapped as a single 1/1 slider, but to x:288
10. 03:53:164 (7,8,9,1,2,3) - I think you could rearrange this pattern like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307554 to have two hyperdashes. Note how this part is the same as 03:42:255 (1,2) -, except a little stronger
11. 04:07:994 (4,1) - The antiflow between these doesn't play too well. I'd Ctrl+H 04:08:164 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - and then rearrange 04:10:210 (4,5) - as https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307568 No the flow is good as it is imo, and I really like it, sorry but no changes here
12. 04:37:483 (1,2) - This is another of those awkwardly short distances that trigger me. You could make a left-right movement on 04:37:483 (1,2,3) - (i.e. https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5307620) and Ctrl+G 04:37:994 (4,5) - to fix the flow to it.
13. 05:05:096 (7,8) - This distance is rather tricky after the hyperdash. I'd move (8) a bit to the right.
14. 05:07:483 (4,5) - This short distance is awkward and inconsistent with your previous patterns (like 04:56:403 (3,4,5,6) -). Consider moving 05:07:653 (5) - to the right of the pattern.
15. 05:26:233 (2,3) - I think this distance is a bit tricky after the hyperdash. I'd shorten it a bit by moving (3) to x:288.

There are also some weird NC usages:

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