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Diana Garnet - Spinning World

posted 2015-08-10T09:59:02+00:00

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HappyRocket88

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HappyRocket88 2015-08-22T14:41:30+00:00

Hi! HB24 I'm here because of my queue and also because you're a friend, means free mod. Btw, Hi um... umbrellas >w<)/

Good aspects:

Your map is well mapped. Not such as another first maps that I've modded before, but this one has a special hint that makes it enjoyable. The most remarkable issue in your map are the hitsounds. For me, it's the best thing of it, because it really fits with the music. I realized you put effort in this set, so Good job! <3. Also, I might dare to say that the harder diffs have amazing jumps and patterns. I played them and I had fun because I tried them until get SS. xD Also, the video makes the map a naturish-set. You really should teach me how to make jumps! Congratulations for the mapset!

Stuffs to work on

Well, digging through the mapset I found out some issues that you should take into a count if you want to get this ranked. I must clarify that these are not suggestions, most of them are unrankable/not allowed issued that should be fixed to avoid confusing patterns and other stuffs:
[General]
Here I append a list of what you should keep on mind:

Well, I think the sasuke-sharingan-rinnegan-eyes-naruto-sage-of-six-path-iitheyahikodarkii.jpg could have a better name for a bg file. o.o The current one is a bit long.
There are inconsistencies in the combo colors and this is an important inssue of Ranking Criteria, which says that all the diffs should have the same combo colors. So tell ZLOdeuka- to use the Default ones as you and Coach have. Or in the case you want to use his/her combo colors, mayke sure the other diffs have the same combo colors.
Guest Mappers can set their own kiai time in the diff. But, in this case, I don't see the sense why Umbrellas set it different of the rest. The kiai's time should finish here 01:19:696 in all the diffs.
Uncheck "letterbox during breaks". As well as you don't have storyboard either lyrics files in the mapset, there's no need to have this option enable.
The vol of the hitsounds of the map is too noisy, consider reducing as well as ZLOdeuka- did.
As you don't have too many info into tags, you can include these ones:
1. theme: because it's a theme ending, not just an ending. lol
2. ダイアナガーネット: because this is the romanised artist name.
3. single: Do I really have to explain this one? lol
I don't know if I'm bugged but Umbrella's Insane doesn't have the video. Pleae, do not exclude him. u.u
I'm not really sure about the offset of the video, but I think it goes on 50~100 ms.
The gap between the Normal and the Hard diff is too high. Because Normal is mapped to 1/1 notes and the hard even have 1/4 notes, so you might want to add an advanced diff here to fix this spread.
The current Audio leadin is 638ms,which differs of the minimal requirement of 2000ms. In other words, is the time that osu! give to the players to click the first note. The bigger it is, the more time players will have to click the note. You can fix this by opening the osu. file and look for audio leadin and write it down 2000 and that's all.

[Normal]

Please, seeing a (10) or (8) on counting combo is uneven seen on normal diffs. So please, I'd suggest you to adapt the normal to this NC combing.
NC here: In summary, every two white big ticks should have NC. Some example of them are: 00:03:814 (1) - 00:09:461 (6) - 00:14:755 (6) - 00:20:402 (5) (etc) I hope you get what I meant.
AR -1 because of the patterns and the flow are better seen on Easys.
00:03:814 (6) Just a nazi suggestion, but you can stack that slider's end into this slider 00:02:049 (4) 's end.
00:16:520 (9) Is there any reason to make this slider shape? Why not continue with the curvy sliders?
00:17:579 (1) Add finish to this slider's head.
00:33:814 (1) ^
00:57:108 (1) ^
00:21:814 (7) Place it here x=280|y=8 to improve the flow according to the previous slider. Otherwise you might have to fix the blanket between these 00:21:814 (7,8)
00:40:873 (4,5) Fix this blanket.
00:58:520 (3,4) ^
00:44:402 (9) Make this slider shape like a roof as you did with 00:45:108 (10) Just for a symmetric pattern.
01:02:402 (2,3,4) The flow here is a bit forced and stuck for beginners. Taking into a count this is the easiest diff of the mapset, try something more intuitive to play.
01:09:814 (5) Probably the overlap that you made with this 01:08:402 (3) is really noticeable. I'd suggest you to stack that 01:09:814 (5) 's end into this 01:08:402 (3) 's end.
01:19:696 (1,1) As the BPM is bigger than 160, you must give at least two white ticks of difference after a spinner to set a note, just as this forum suggests t/241019

The biggest problem in this diff is that you map in a constant 1/1 notes and you're not follwing the drums or the vocals. Some partsreally need to have a mini "break" of ticks of difference to don't make boring the mapset. Also, there's something you should work on and they're the hitsounds, you should add whistles and finishes too to don't overuse the clap in the whole diff.

[ZLO's Hard]

I'm not a big fan of spaced circles, bt this diff is very well done! What about AR-0.5 to keep consistency with the Insane diffs? I mean the change of the normal to the hard is a bit high.

[Insane]

00:03:814 (4,6) Imo, the overlap here looks very odd. Try putting it somewhere else.
00:06:285 (1,2) This blanket can be improved.
00:08:932 (1) Just a visual pattern, but you can use the same slider shape as you did with 00:09:285 (2)
00:11:402 (1,2,3,4,5,6) The way you place this streams are a bit lack. What about a "S" or a "C"?
00:17:402 (1,2,3) Please, you same DS here to don't force the spacing here too much.
00:33:990 (5,6,7,8,9,10,1) Try something more symmetric, like: http://puu.sh/jKtoC/83dcfc8b5b.jpg
00:36:461 (6) I really don't know if the unstack is on purpose but visually this looks odd.
00:43:873 (8) Put it here x=176|y=122 to fix this slider pentagon pattern.
00:44:049 (9) ^ x=256|y=32
00:48:285 (3) Stack this slider's end into this circle 00:47:755 (1)

Starset

652 posts

Joined April 2015

Topic Starter

Starset 2015-08-22T17:56:54+00:00

Hi and thx for such compliments *-*

HappyRocket88 wrote:

Hi! HB24 I'm here because of my queue and also because you're a friend, means free mod. Btw, Hi um... umbrellas >w<)/
Good aspects:

Your map is well mapped. Not such as another first maps that I've modded before, but this one has a special hint that makes it enjoyable. The most remarkable issue in your map are the hitsounds. For me, it's the best thing of it, because it really fits with the music. I realized you put effort in this set, so Good job! <3. Also, I might dare to say that the harder diffs have amazing jumps and patterns. I played them and I had fun because I tried them until get SS. xD Also, the video makes the map a naturish-set. You really should teach me how to make jumps! Congratulations for the mapset!
Stuffs to work on
Well, digging through the mapset I found out some issues that you should take into a count if you want to get this ranked. I must clarify that these are not suggestions, most of them are unrankable/not allowed issued that should be fixed to avoid confusing patterns and other stuffs:
[General]
Here I append a list of what you should keep on mind:
Well, I think the sasuke-sharingan-rinnegan-eyes-naruto-sage-of-six-path-iitheyahikodarkii.jpg could have a better name for a bg file. o.o The current one is a bit long. fixed
There are inconsistencies in the combo colors and this is an important inssue of Ranking Criteria, which says that all the diffs should have the same combo colors. So tell ZLOdeuka- to use the Default ones as you and Coach have. Or in the case you want to use his/her combo colors, mayke sure the other diffs have the same combo colors. fixed
Guest Mappers can set their own kiai time in the diff. But, in this case, I don't see the sense why Umbrellas set it different of the rest. The kiai's time should finish here 01:19:696 in all the diffs. fixed
Uncheck "letterbox during breaks". As well as you don't have storyboard either lyrics files in the mapset, there's no need to have this option enable. fixed
The vol of the hitsounds of the map is too noisy, consider reducing as well as ZLOdeuka- did. fixed
As you don't have too many info into tags, you can include these ones: done
theme: because it's a theme ending, not just an ending. lol
ダイアナガーネット: because this is the romanised artist name.
single: Do I really have to explain this one? lol
I don't know if I'm bugged but Umbrella's Insane doesn't have the video. Pleae, do not exclude him. u.u fixed
I'm not really sure about the offset of the video, but I think it goes on 50~100 ms. 50 for now ^^
The gap between the Normal and the Hard diff is too high. Because Normal is mapped to 1/1 notes and the hard even have 1/4 notes, so you might want to add an advanced diff here to fix this spread. okay
The current Audio leadin is 638ms,which differs of the minimal requirement of 2000ms. In other words, is the time that osu! give to the players to click the first note. The bigger it is, the more time players will have to click the note. You can fix this by opening the osu. file and look for audio leadin and write it down 2000 fixed and that's all.

[Normal]
Please, seeing a (10) or (8) on counting combo is uneven seen on normal diffs. So please, I'd suggest you to adapt the normal to this NC combing.
NC here: In summary, every two white big ticks should have NC. Some example of them are: 00:03:814 (1) - 00:09:461 (6) - 00:14:755 (6) - 00:20:402 (5) (etc) I hope you get what I meant. fixed
AR -1 because of the patterns and the flow are better seen on Easys. changed the normal into easy ^^
00:03:814 (6) Just a nazi suggestion, but you can stack that slider's end into this slider 00:02:049 (4) 's end. done
00:16:520 (9) Is there any reason to make this slider shape? Why not continue with the curvy sliders? idk i like it that way
00:17:579 (1) Add finish to this slider's head. done
00:33:814 (1) ^ done
00:57:108 (1) ^ done
00:21:814 (7) Place it here x=280|y=8 to improve the flow according to the previous slider. Otherwise you might have to fix the blanket between these 00:21:814 (7,8) done
00:40:873 (4,5) Fix this blanket. fixed
00:58:520 (3,4) ^ fixed
00:44:402 (9) Make this slider shape like a roof as you did with 00:45:108 (10) Just for a symmetric pattern. done
01:02:402 (2,3,4) The flow here is a bit forced and stuck for beginners. Taking into a count this is the easiest diff of the mapset, try something more intuitive to play. fixed
01:09:814 (5) Probably the overlap that you made with this 01:08:402 (3) is really noticeable. I'd suggest you to stack that 01:09:814 (5) 's end into this 01:08:402 (3) 's end. done
01:19:696 (1,1) As the BPM is bigger than 160, you must give at least two white ticks of difference after a spinner to set a note, just as this forum suggests t/241019 hmm didnt really understand but ill see

The biggest problem in this diff is that you map in a constant 1/1 notes and you're not follwing the drums or the vocals. Some partsreally need to have a mini "break" of ticks of difference to don't make boring the mapset. Also, there's something you should work on and they're the hitsounds, you should add whistles and finishes too to don't overuse the clap in the whole diff.
[ZLO's Hard]
I'm not a big fan of spaced circles, bt this diff is very well done! What about AR-0.5 to keep consistency with the Insane diffs? I mean the change of the normal to the hard is a bit high. fixed
[Insane]
00:03:814 (4,6) Imo, the overlap here looks very odd. Try putting it somewhere else. fixed
00:06:285 (1,2) This blanket can be improved. fixed
00:08:932 (1) Just a visual pattern, but you can use the same slider shape as you did with 00:09:285 (2) fixed
00:11:402 (1,2,3,4,5,6) The way you place this streams are a bit lack. What about a "S" or a "C"? fixed
00:17:402 (1,2,3) Please, you same DS here to don't force the spacing here too much. fixed
00:33:990 (5,6,7,8,9,10,1) Try something more symmetric, like: http://puu.sh/jKtoC/83dcfc8b5b.jpg idk i dont like symmetric streams :p
00:36:461 (6) I really don't know if the unstack is on purpose but visually this looks odd. fixed
00:43:873 (8) Put it here x=176|y=122 to fix this slider pentagon pattern. done
00:44:049 (9) ^ x=256|y=32 done
00:48:285 (3) Stack this slider's end into this circle 00:47:755 (1) fixed

Thx so much for modding my map <3

Sukii-chan_old

Sukii-chan_old 2015-08-28T00:40:35+00:00

It's time for th4t 0n3 m0d.

Easy

00:22:873 (5) this doesn't really follow anything, it's the same rhythm as when you were just using two sliders
00:32:755 (4) x:248 y:53 blanket
00:33:814 (1) x:360 y:256 blanket
Might want to move the spinner to 00:53:932 to follow the vocal

Normal

00:21:108 (4) x:290 y:251 blanket
00:32:402 (1) x:196 y:189 Move to be blanketed
01:24:285 (4) x:277 y:341 blanket

Z Hard

00:10:167 (1) x:238 y:332 blanket
00:51:461 (1) x:70 y:250 blanket
01:12:461 (1) x:38 y:221 blanket

Even though the hitsounding is different than the other two diffs, it still matches well with the song.

Insane

Move 00:05:049 (7) to match the head of 00:04:343 (5)
On the head of 00:10:167 (5) there should be a finish to match all the other finishes
01:26:402 (8) x:429 y:126 blanket

C Insane

00:00:638 (1) x:128 y:131 blanket
Make the curve of 00:16:167 (1) smoother
00:21:285 (5,6) would follow the vocals better if it were a slider then circle, http://i.imgur.com/PYt593c.png currently it feels kind of off. since that vocal part is important

Overall, this diff isn't bad. The variety in hitsounds for each section is good. But it focuses more on jumps than the vocals. So it's a bit lacking there.

In general, it seems kind of weird to not have a kiai from 00:34:520 to 00:45:814 because it's basically the same intensity as the kiai that's already there
And I like your choices of hitsounds for this map.

Starset

652 posts

Joined April 2015

Topic Starter

Starset 2015-08-28T10:22:50+00:00

Sukii-chan wrote:
It's time for th4t 0n3 m0d.

Easy
00:22:873 (5) this doesn't really follow anything, it's the same rhythm as when you were just using two sliders fixed
00:32:755 (4) x:248 y:53 blanket fixed
00:33:814 (1) x:360 y:256 blanket fixed
Might want to move the spinner to 00:53:932 to follow the vocal fixed

Normal
00:21:108 (4) x:290 y:251 blanket fixed
00:32:402 (1) x:196 y:189 Move to be blanketed fixed
01:24:285 (4) x:277 y:341 blanket fixed

Z Hard
00:10:167 (1) x:238 y:332 blanket
00:51:461 (1) x:70 y:250 blanket
01:12:461 (1) x:38 y:221 blanket
i ll tell GD
Even though the hitsounding is different than the other two diffs, it still matches well with the song.

Insane
Move 00:05:049 (7) to match the head of 00:04:343 (5) fixed
On the head of 00:10:167 (5) there should be a finish to match all the other finishes fixed
01:26:402 (8) x:429 y:126 blanket fixed

C Insane
00:00:638 (1) x:128 y:131 blanket
Make the curve of 00:16:167 (1) smoother
00:21:285 (5,6) would follow the vocals better if it were a slider then circle, http://i.imgur.com/PYt593c.png currently it feels kind of off. since that vocal part is important
i ll tell GD
Overall, this diff isn't bad. The variety in hitsounds for each section is good. But it focuses more on jumps than the vocals. So it's a bit lacking there.

In general, it seems kind of weird to not have a kiai from 00:34:520 to 00:45:814 because it's basically the same intensity as the kiai that's already there
And I like your choices of hitsounds for this map.

Thank you so much for modding my map <3

Synpoo

616 posts

Joined August 2013

Synpoo 2015-09-01T05:07:12+00:00

hello, as requested from my q

Easy

00:11:932 - 00:23:579 - Needs hitsounding
00:16:520 (4,2) - Ugly overlap
00:25:343 (5,7) - ^
00:37:343 (2,3) - Normally I don't point out blankets but if this is supposed to be one then yea
00:45:814 - Don't change slider velocity in easy/normals, it just confused players. I'm pretty sure it's unrankable
00:50:402 - Missed a beat
00:53:932 (1,1) - Unrankable spinner: t/241019
01:03:108 (3,1) - This is bad flow for an easy, place notes so that they flow properly and follow the curve of the slider
01:19:696 (1,1) - Spinner thingy

Normal

00:01:696 (4,5,6,7) - This pattern is incredibly messy and hard to read. 7 is so hidden by the tail of 4, change this pattern
00:09:637 (2,3) - Yeah normally I won't point blankets out unless they're really bad
00:11:932 - 00:23:579 - Needs hitsounding in this diff too, two whistles isn't enough
00:17:226 (4) - You can make this circle+1/2 slider instead
00:45:814 - Same thing, don't change slider velocity in normal diffs, it's unrankable
01:01:520 - Circle?
01:08:049 (3) - This slider should start on the red tick, it doesn't actually follow anything starting here
01:19:343 (1,1) - t/241019

ZLO's Hard

00:33:814 (5,6,1) - This is really hard to read, and it's bad to play with the 1/4 slider starting on the blue tick
01:11:755 (3,1) - Looks a lot cleaner when the tail of 3 is properly in the body of 1
SPOILER

Insane
Not gonna go in-depth with this diff as there's so many issues that I would just be repeating myself so I'll give out a couple pointers and you can apply them elsewhere in the map yourself.

00:04:343 (5,6) - This slider starts on a weak beat (red tick) and ends on a strong beat (white tick), also known as a passive slider. Start these on a white tick instead. There's places where starting sliders on red ticks is obviously correct but here is not one of them
00:13:167 (5) - Another passive slider (just another example, there's a lot of them in the map so I won't list anymore)
00:23:226 - You should never skip beats like this one
00:39:637 (3,4,5) - Spacing like this is wrong. Since 4 is the weaker beat it needs less of a jump whereas 5 being the stronger beat needs a larger jump. What you did here 00:42:461 (3,4,5) - is good
00:42:990 (5,8) - Minor overlaps like this don't look good and make the map look unpolished
00:45:814 (1) - Instead of a 2/1 this should be a 1/1 repeat slider so that you don't skip the snare drum in the middle
00:46:873 - On the topic of skipping beats, don't skip these. These ones too (etc etc): 00:51:814 - 00:51:990 - 00:51:990

Also, lower the OD to 7.5 and HP to 6.5, it shouldn't be the same as the diff higher than it

Gl!

Starset

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Joined April 2015

Topic Starter

Starset 2015-09-01T12:01:43+00:00

Synpoo wrote:
hello, as requested from my q

Easy
00:11:932 - 00:23:579 - Needs hitsounding Fixed
00:16:520 (4,2) - Ugly overlap Fixed
00:25:343 (5,7) - ^ Fixed
00:37:343 (2,3) - Normally I don't point out blankets but if this is supposed to be one then yea Fixed
00:45:814 - Don't change slider velocity in easy/normals, it just confused players. I'm pretty sure it's unrankable Fixed
00:50:402 - Missed a beat Fixed
00:53:932 (1,1) - Unrankable spinner: t/241019 Fixed
01:03:108 (3,1) - This is bad flow for an easy, place notes so that they flow properly and follow the curve of the slider Fixed
01:19:696 (1,1) - Spinner thingy Fixed
Normal
00:01:696 (4,5,6,7) - This pattern is incredibly messy and hard to read. 7 is so hidden by the tail of 4, change this pattern Fixed
00:09:637 (2,3) - Yeah normally I won't point blankets out unless they're really bad Fixed
00:11:932 - 00:23:579 - Needs hitsounding in this diff too, two whistles isn't enough Fixed
00:17:226 (4) - You can make this circle+1/2 slider instead Fixed
00:45:814 - Same thing, don't change slider velocity in normal diffs, it's unrankable Fixed
01:01:520 - Circle? Fixed
01:08:049 (3) - This slider should start on the red tick, it doesn't actually follow anything starting here Fixed
01:19:343 (1,1) - t/241019 Fixed

ZLO's Hard
00:33:814 (5,6,1) - This is really hard to read, and it's bad to play with the 1/4 slider starting on the blue tick
01:11:755 (3,1) - Looks a lot cleaner when the tail of 3 is properly in the body of 1
SPOILER

Insane
Not gonna go in-depth with this diff as there's so many issues that I would just be repeating myself so I'll give out a couple pointers and you can apply them elsewhere in the map yourself.
00:04:343 (5,6) - This slider starts on a weak beat (red tick) and ends on a strong beat (white tick), also known as a passive slider. Start these on a white tick instead. There's places where starting sliders on red ticks is obviously correct but here is not one of them ill do my best to fix em ^^
00:13:167 (5) - Another passive slider (just another example, there's a lot of them in the map so I won't list anymore)
00:23:226 - You should never skip beats like this one Fixed
00:39:637 (3,4,5) - Spacing like this is wrong. Since 4 is the weaker beat it needs less of a jump whereas 5 being the stronger beat needs a larger jump. FixedWhat you did here 00:42:461 (3,4,5) - is good
00:42:990 (5,8) - Minor overlaps like this don't look good and make the map look unpolished Fixed
00:45:814 (1) - Instead of a 2/1 this should be a 1/1 repeat slider so that you don't skip the snare drum in the middle Fixed
00:46:873 - On the topic of skipping beats, don't skip these. These ones too (etc etc): 00:51:814 - 00:51:990 - 00:51:990
Fixed

Also, lower the OD to 7.5 and HP to 6.5, it shouldn't be the same as the diff higher than it Done
Gl!

Thank you for modding my map <3

George

George 2015-09-04T01:21:14+00:00

Someone seems mad. (I'm only modding your diffs because I needed to crunch my time)

Easy
00:03:814 (1,2,3) - I would make this more of a fluid shape to fix the flow
00:39:461 (1,2) - I would make this a blanket, (if its already trying to be one then move these notes left more)
00:57:108 (1) - I would of made this slider start 00:56:932 here so its synced to the vocal

Normal
00:11:226 (4,5) - I would move these up more to make the map look better
01:00:637 (4) - imo I think this slider is too curved, I would try to curve it less
01:18:637 (5) - Move this up

Insane
I would try to lower the AR for the diff, it seems too fast
00:04:873 (6) - Make this a flipped copy of 00:04:520 (5) -
00:12:637 (3,4) - I would try to do something more creative with this pattern thing besides two sliders going the same direction
01:08:932 (5,6,7) - imo this kind of form is pretty ugly, I'd try to change it
I don't really mod many insane diffs so I probably missed stuff

I'm still short on time

Starset

652 posts

Joined April 2015

Topic Starter

Starset 2015-09-04T08:48:21+00:00

George wrote:
Someone seems mad. (I'm only modding your diffs because I needed to crunch my time)

Easy
00:03:814 (1,2,3) - I would make this more of a fluid shape to fix the flow Fixed
00:39:461 (1,2) - I would make this a blanket, (if its already trying to be one then move these notes left more) Fixed
00:57:108 (1) - I would of made this slider start 00:56:932 here so its synced to the vocal

Normal
00:11:226 (4,5) - I would move these up more to make the map look better huh?
01:00:637 (4) - imo I think this slider is too curved, I would try to curve it less Fixed
01:18:637 (5) - Move this up Fixed

Insane
I would try to lower the AR for the diff, it seems too fast nah its fine
00:04:873 (6) - Make this a flipped copy of 00:04:520 (5) - Fixed
00:12:637 (3,4) - I would try to do something more creative with this pattern thing besides two sliders going the same direction Fixed
01:08:932 (5,6,7) - imo this kind of form is pretty ugly, I'd try to change it made it better
I don't really mod many insane diffs so I probably missed stuff

I'm still short on time

Crimmi

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Crimmi 2015-09-04T22:00:15+00:00

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HappyRocket88 wrote:

Good aspects:

Stuffs to work on

Sukii-chan wrote:

Synpoo wrote:

George wrote:

Yoges wrote:

MokouSmoke wrote:

General

CoachUmbrellas's Insane

Insane

KASUM1 wrote:

Insane

General

CoachUmbrellas's Insane

Lasse wrote:

Lasse wrote:

Possseidon wrote:

Lumael wrote:

Lumael wrote:

Milan- wrote:

Milan- wrote:

ohyeahitsjustme wrote:

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