NatsumeRin wrote:

modded in irc.
20:53 <NatsumeRin> : i think... orz, most of your map should be replaced or remapped.
some examples:

Lybydose wrote:

Use offset +15 (6,325)

BPM is fine.

pete2528 wrote:

[Normal]
00:07:409 (1) add clap hit sound at the end of slider
00:08:855 (6) add clap hit sound at the begin of slider
00:09:578 (2)(3) remove clap hit sound
00:10:300 (4) add clap hit sound
00:13:192 (3) ^
00:37:047 (3) เสียงนกหวีดเพี้ยนๆไปนะ ลองลบเสียงออกแล้วเพิ่มเสียงที่หัวและท้ายโน้ตโดยตรงดู
00:44:638 (1) add clap hit sound
00:45:361 (2) ^
00:45:722 (2) ^
01:08:132 (1) ^ all of them
01:08:855 (2) remove clap hit sound
01:10:481 (4) add clap hit sound
01:10:662 (4) ^
01:14:638 ลองใส่ spinner อีกสักอันสิ แล้วให้จบที่ 01:15:722 ยากดี ฮ่ะๆ
01:33:975 (1) make that slider end at 01:34:517

SPOILER

01:39:216 (8) remove finish hit sonnd and add finish hit sound at the end of slider
01:46:445 (spinner) let it begin at 01:46:084 and end at 01:51:867
01:53:674 (4) add clap hit sound
01:58:734 (2) ^
02:00:903 (8) ^
02:01:264 (10) ^ at the end of slider
02:03:433 Add Note and finish hit sound
02:04:517 (2) add clap hit sound
02:07:409 (2) ^
02:16:084 (1) ^ only at the begin ใส่เฉพาะส่วนหัวเท่านั้น
02:58:734 (1) ^ ใส่เฉพาะส่วนหัวเท่านั้น

02:39:939 (4) add clap hit sound
02:40:300 ^


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• Match the center of the spinner-circle.png

• Hitsounds is too noisy
  
  I suggest you add clap here:
  

• 01:17:168(2):Finish

• 00:28:011 Set like this:
  
  
  00:36:144(1):Move this finish to 00:36:686
  00:48:252(2):Symmetry
  01:00:541(2):^
  02:50:059(5):Repeat-1

• 00:11:204(8):Use bezier slider

impossiblexu wrote:

My suggestions:
[General]

• Match the center of the spinner-circle.png

[Easy]

• Hitsounds is too noisy
  
  I suggest you add clap here:
  [attachment=0:bcfc1]mod5.JPG[/attachment:bcfc1]

[Normal]

• 01:17:168(2):Finish

[vincerio's busters]

• 00:28:011 Set like this:
  [attachment=1:bcfc1]mod6.JPG[/attachment:bcfc1]
  
  00:36:144(1):Move this finish to 00:36:686
  00:48:252(2):Symmetry
  01:00:541(2):^
  02:50:059(5):Repeat-1

[Insane]

• 00:11:204(8):Use bezier slider

Good map!! ~STAR~

impossiblexu wrote:

My suggestions:

[vincerio's busters]

00:48:252(2):Symmetry
01:00:541(2):^
^ fix

Beuchi-chan wrote:

Hi hi!!
Hi Hi >w</


~vincerio's busters~
01:34:156 (8) - It would be nice if you can make the hear a bit prettier >.<
02:56:565 (3) - ^

more prettier... i think >w<''

Shulin wrote:

General:


vincerio's buster:

-- Offset is different to the other difficulties. Make them the same and remember to resnap.
^ fixed

00:27:273 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - This looks weird, move it so it looks better in game.
00:52:575 (2) - Shouldn't there be a soft finish here?
00:56:189 (7) - Finish sounds odd here.
01:04:141 (1) - Add finish.
01:34:141 (8) - This slider looks odd, could you make it look better?
02:14:984 (3) - Add finish.
02:56:550 (3) - Same slider, I think you could make it look better ^_^
03:12:816 -- Could do with raising the volume here a little.
^ fixed
03:47:514 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Honestly I think these streams are kind of pointless, they sound tacked on, there's nothing even stream sounding in the music.
03:54:744 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - ^
03:56:189 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^
03:57:635 -- If you desperately wanted streams they would sound better around here.
Rearrange some part of stream i think it better now

Beuchi-chan wrote:

Hi hi!!

Here are some suggestions for your map, you don't have to change them if you don't agree with me
Let's go!!

~All Diffs~
- I think the title should be "Alicemagic (Blasterhead Remix)". Read this thread viewtopic.php?f=56&t=24443 if you're going to do it
- Change Source to "Little Busters! EX".
- Please use the same combocolors on all diffs (vincerio's diff has different colors).
- Delete these unused files: "cursor.png" (I'll tell you why later), "spinner-background1.png".
Skin:
- Could you find a better image for the comboburst? Not a big deal, though.
- Use "cursor3.png" as your cursor and delete the one you have now as default, it isn't round and looks so weird when playing.
Storyboard: Ugh, you'll have to work hard on this xwx;
- Max. size for storyboard elements is 800x600px, you'll have to resize all the images you're using.
- About lyrics, some of them fade, some of them don't fade, some of them fade faster, some of them fade slower... You should fix this and make all the lyrics texts have the same animation, as smooth as possible, it'll look way better and pretty.
- Another point about the lyrics, some of the lines appear a bit earlier than the line on the song. This isn't that bad, but it'll be nice if you fix it.
- About the background images, first, they appear so suddenly on the storyboard, so you should make them fade in to make a nice animation. Second, I recommend you to make a fade transition between images instead of just fading them out and seeing the background, because this looks so weird and ugly.
- About the flash effect, same as the text images, make all the animations the same, as smooth as possible.

~Easy~
- Could you map this at least until Normal's end?

00:08:132 (3) - Add a repeat here?
00:34:156 (6) - New Combo.
00:35:240 (7) - Move the reverse arrow point away from other notes (http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/11874)
00:54:035 (3) - Delete one repeat.
01:37:770 (5) - New Combo.

~Normal~
00:13:915 (6) - New Combo.
00:52:228 (x) - Add a note here?
00:55:120 (5) - Add a repeat or add a note on 00:55:481.
00:58:734 (6) - New Combo.
02:00:180 (6) - ^

~vincerio's busters~
01:34:156 (8) - It would be nice if you can make the hear a bit prettier >.<
02:56:565 (3) - ^

~Insane~
01:09:216 (2) - Fix Spacing.
01:52:409 (2) - Move the reverse arrow point away from circles (http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/11875)
02:28:192 (2,3) - This was confusing both times I played this. Could you move away the slider? It's hard to tell on play mode if (2) is or isn't the slider :/
03:50:602 (1) - This jump was really unexpected.
03:56:927 (1) - ^

Not bad... but you have to work a lot to make the storyboard nicer. Also, Insane sounds a bit weird in general, sometimes you're following a weird rythm that doesn't belong to anything on the song, but well... I don't think it's that bad... Good luck with this~

Shulin wrote:

General:

-- Remove the audio lead in it isn't needed.
-- Do the SB stuff beuchi mentioned (Yes, I have the latest version), especially at 62620ms looks so strange o_o
-- Why is stacking leniency set to max? Imo it should be set to default, looks better.
-- Your map is kinda long... 4 mins...
-- Source should be "Little Busters! EX" ~ this has been mentioned before...

Easy:

-- Quite a few alignment issues here you might want to go through and make sure things are neatly placed, I'll point out the ones I noticed when playing.
-- The hitsounds could do with some work, you could follow a consistent pattern with claps or w/e but at the moment the hitsound placement seems somewhat random. (And probably too many finishes =P)
-- Map this to the same length as Normal.

00:09:578 (5) - New combo.
00:25:843 (4) - Left 1 square.
00:29:818 (1,2,3) - Align this.
00:56:565 (1) - This is a bit too close to 00:54:035 (3) - imo, with the low OD it can be confusing to read.
01:17:168 (x) - Add a note here so the kiai burst looks better.
01:17:529 (2) - Down 1 square.
01:19:698 (6) - New combo.
01:23:312 (1,2,3,4) - You might want to consider moving all of this down 3 squares so it's aligned with 01:21:867 (8) - , looks odd atm.
01:36:325 (3) - Move this right 2 squares so it aligns with the end of the slider.

It's okay for an Easy difficulty, some of the rhythms like 01:19:698 (5,6,7) - might be hard to follow at first, but nothing that can't be done with practice.

Normal:

-- + 2-3 overall difficulty.
-- + 1 Drain. (The current setup is too similar to Easy)
-- You could make the hitsounds more consistent here to, but it doesn't matter that much.

00:35:782 (8) - Imo move this to 00:35:963 ~ much easier.
01:14:638 (1) - Hmm, this additional spinner is a bit unexpected for a Normal, maybe extend 01:11:023 (1) - instead.
01:30:541 (4,1,2,3) - This is confusing for a normal, a bit too clustered maybe?
01:33:614 (7,1) - Align these.
01:38:132 (5,6,7) - ^
02:39:035 (1,2,3) - Can be hard to read after a spinner? Idk.
02:39:578 (x) - Add a note here for the kiai burst.

Yeah, more of a Normal + really... a higher OD makes this much easier to read/play though ^_^

vincerio's buster:

-- Offset is different to the other difficulties. Make them the same and remember to resnap.
-- The mix between soft and normal hitsounds doesn't work so well imo.

00:27:273 (6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - This looks weird, move it so it looks better in game.
00:52:575 (2) - Shouldn't there be a soft finish here?
00:56:189 (7) - Finish sounds odd here.
01:04:141 (1) - Add finish.
01:34:141 (8) - This slider looks odd, could you make it look better?
02:14:984 (3) - Add finish.
02:56:550 (3) - Same slider, I think you could make it look better ^_^
03:12:816 -- Could do with raising the volume here a little.
03:47:514 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Honestly I think these streams are kind of pointless, they sound tacked on, there's nothing even stream sounding in the music.
03:54:744 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - ^
03:56:189 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^
03:57:635 -- If you desperately wanted streams they would sound better around here.

Insane:

-- So many short returning sliders =/ << i reduce a bit now i thinks it's fine now

01:10:662 -- Break is a little odd? It's not on the other diffs either.
01:37:951 (5) - The number of returns is confusing imo.

Overall for this diff, I think you should use less returning sliders and maybe work on your patterns a little more.

Not bad for a first map, star.

Beuchi-chan wrote:

Quick Storyboard re-check!

- 5602ms: Make this image completely transparent at this point, it still appears so suddenly.
- 14276ms: Make "LB_01" with no fade here, and make it completely transparent at 15541ms
- 62620ms: You can see the background image here for a short moment, maybe delete the fade on "rin01" at the beginning. << i doing a different way but i'm sure it's fine now
- 172590ms: Make a Fade animation to "yuiko03" at the beginning.
- 246324ms: Fade "allwsaya", it dissapears so suddenly

Much better than before, great work!! :3
*star*

aspara wrote:

hi
I checked romaji lyrics
reference: http://uniyarou.blog78.fc2.com/blog-entry-117.html

etext22.png
"takai kono bashou de" -> "takai kono basho de"

SPOILER

<<< done

etext33.png
"bokura no tabi mada" -> "bokura no tabi mata"

SPOILER

<<< done

etext39.png
"hatasenakata yakusoku" -> "hatasenakatta yakusoku"

SPOILER

<<< done

etext4a.png
"owaranai owari nan de nai koto" -> "owaranai owari nante nai koto"

SPOILER

<<< done


that's all
gogo regenz!!

Shinxyn wrote:

O.o~
Maybe add a cursortail and spinnerappoarch for safety?

Easy-
Plays fair enough... don't really get how the claps flow though..

fix hit sounds

Normal-
00:11:023 (5,6,7) - ... make the spacing equal here~?
01:00:180 (1,2,3) - have spacing equal? (3 down a tick)
02:33:071 (5,6,7) - ^ (7 right a tick..?)
Distance snap is silly sometimes ._.
.... most of the claps sound.. like they're just there for the sake of having hitsounds...
Try to repeat some of the clap patterns you added (like... clap-clap... then a little later add another clap-clap... at a paced flow.... which you sorta have on some parts)... basically try to keep a more constant clap pace.. it comes and goes as it is.
This plays fine though

^done + fix hit sounds

Insane-
Wow, is this a case of "too many kickstreams" ._.;
The vocal makes this difficult to follow, since most of the notes just follow a 1/2 pace, while I get trapped to thinking the notes should be sliders or not because of the held vocal
00:48:975 (3) - ....vocal is trap... D:!
02:25:843 (2) - blah, might as well stack this under 8 better or don't overlap like this
02:27:288 - add note?
Hitsound could be more constant as well...
Didn't like how this one played... the sheer amount of kickstreams and slider+notes following the 1/2 pace while being distracted on whether you mapped to vocal or not >___<...

remapped due a lot of fix kickstreams lol also fix hitsounds

In the storyboard, the Fail section = spinner-background? huh? it doesn't do anything though?
^ fix

• • 02:30:541 (1) - Delete this circle. Also, Add a slider (start: 02:30:180 // end: 02:30:541)

• • Enable countdown
  • 01:34:156 (8) - I don't like this slider: delete it and do something different
  • 02:56:565 (3) - ^

• • 01:01:000 (break) - Is this break necessary? Delete it and add some patterns

xxheroxx wrote:

[Mod Infos]

Azure: Suggestions.
Blue: You should fix this.
______________________________________________
______________________________________________
______________________________________________

[Easy]

• • 02:30:541 (1) - Delete this circle. Also, Add a slider (start: 02:30:180 // end: 02:30:541)

^ fix done

[Insane]

• • 01:01:000 (break) - Is this break necessary? Delete it and add some patterns

^ some tester are tired at that time coz a lot of jump. so i 'll insert a spinner instead.

Shulin wrote:

Mainly focused on Insane because that's where the most changes were ~

General:

-- The new hitcircle overlay is a bit hard to read at parts, I preferred the old one <_< << I think it's look like a casino coins * may be you are misunderstood . did you mean approachcircle ?

Easy:

-- There's a lot of clapping here (almost all the map?), maybe try to reduce the amount of times you use clap. << i 'm not good for add hitsounds at this diff i 'll continue suggest with other.

00:51:144 (3,4) - Imo try to avoid overlapping with 00:49:698 (2) - << done

It could probably be easier I think, but it's okay.

Normal:

-- Hitsounds are looking better.

00:24:035 (2) - Shouldn't there be a clap here? =S <fix
00:40:662 (1) - Imo this sounds better starting on 00:40:481 it follows the synth then. <fix
01:33:975 (1) - Start this on 01:34:156 imo, then it's following the vocal like the majority of the map. <fix
02:11:204 (2) - This note might be hard to catch for a normal. <fix add slider instead
02:34:156 (x) - Add note? <fix
02:40:481 (7) - Imo it would be easier if you deleted this note. <fix

vincerio's busters:

No changes? I'll skip this then.

Insane:

-- As I said before this is a bit too long imo.

In general for this difficulty I think there are too many huge jumps where there is nothing in the music to justify it (examples ~ 00:52:590 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 01:20:602 (6,1,2) - 01:37:951 (2,3,4,5) - and others), jumps for the sake of jumps? << there are alot because it's a mass jump map that 's why.

00:47:168 (3) - Touching the hp bar, maybe move 00:46:806 (2,3) - down. <fix 1 4 also for symmetric purpose
01:08:132 (1,2,3) - This jump is huge o_o <fix reduce by 1 grid each side
01:17:168 (4) - New combo for the start of kiai. <fix
01:17:891 (1) - Remove new combo here <fix
01:34:156 (6) - New combo. <fix
01:36:144 (13) - The end of the slider is hidden, I think it might be better to make this more visible (different direction?) < create a symmetric jump instead

SPOILER

02:00:541 (2,3,4,5) - Make these more symmetrical <fix but imo it's too hard too make symmetric here but i 'll try best

SPOILER

02:17:529 (1,2,3,4) - This is practically a full screen jump u_u << i think it's important style for my map i 'll not fix it.
02:39:578 (2) - Think there should be a new combo here for the start of kiai. <fix
02:56:927 (2,3,4) - The rhythm here is a little strange, I expected a return on 02:56:927 (2) - <fix make a little symmetric here

SPOILER

Also the new combo's could do with some work, maybe you followed jump = new combo too strictly? But these are my opinions feel free to ignore them. << i'm not sure a rules with this too .some pattern of rankmap don't start newcombo with new jump like border of death ( http://osu.ppy.sh/b/53380 * lunatic diff ) Beuchi-chan told me to use this method and i think it's ok because my map has a lot of JUMP . imo it's not too hard as super jump like some map. 1/2 jump are less distance but 1/1 jump are full map i think it's can play depending which it's 1/1 or 1/2

Thankyou verymuch Shulin you make my map improve alot!

osuplayer111 wrote:

[Overall]

I'll highly suggest to force the default skin on all the difficulties.

For what is used the file "hitcirclexx.png" into the folder? Remove it and do a full submission.

^ my mistake thanks it's fix

[Difficulties]

[Normal]

02:59:457 (4,5) - Spacing.

^ fix

[vincerio's busters]

Why countdown here isn't enabled and on the other difficulties yes? If you want to disable it make sure to remove it on all the difficulties.

^ fix

[Insane]

This difficulty is really good, but I think it would be better if you reduce some jumps spacing for example this: 03:54:397 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2).

00:21:686 (1,2,3) - reduce jump 2 grid each

SPOILER

00:30:180 (3,5) - reduce jump 1 grid each

SPOILER

00:33:614 (1,2,3,4) - reduce jump 1 grid each

SPOILER

00:34:517 (1,2,3,4) - reduce jump 1 grid each

SPOILER

00:52:590 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - reduce jump 1 grid each

SPOILER

03:44:638 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - reduce jump by 2 grid each

SPOILER

03:54:397 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - reduce jump by 2 grid each

SPOILER

I sure this is enough . but let me know if it has another point to fix.

osuplayer111 wrote:

You still forget to force the default skin on all the difficulties.

^^ sorry i'm newbie mapper. it 's fix now!

[Insane]

01:30:541 (11) - New combo should be here because of the jump.
01:30:722 (1) - Remove new combo here, then.
02:27:288 (5) - This should go 1 square to the left.
^ all fix

Thankyou

1. I'd like you to drop more beats on white ticks. Kind of an awkward rhythm.

Gens wrote:

For a second I thought this had video for the filesize. There are a bunch of 800x600 images... You could try resizing some of them for better performance and size. Converting them to JPG can work as well...

And... use offset 6,333.

^ resize all image that can resize change some png that not has a transparent to jpg
** some of image can't resize for a special purpose of SB sorry. but I think it's ok now 14MB reduce to 10.9 MB

[Easy]

1. I'd like you to drop more beats on white ticks. Kind of an awkward rhythm.

^ Fix


[Insane]

02:35:602 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Not very readable... the slidertracks get mostly covered up while playing, at least for me. < fix
03:40:300 (1,2) - Inconsistent jump with 03:37:047 (5,1,1) and very confusing...
^ i think u compare both 03:40:300 (1,2) and 03:37:047 (5,1,1)
first jump has 1/1 room for a jump but second has 1/2 jump with same distance . ( I think it's this )
i think it's ok now (fix)
Small pop.

NatsumeRin wrote:

congrats~

osuplayer111 wrote:

Heart fixed. >_>

osuplayer111 wrote:

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That's why you are having some problems.