• 
  00:22:063 (7) - сделай (x:100 , y:188)
  00:33:097 (7) - (x:440 , y:280)
  00:49:304 - 00:49:391 - 00:49:477 - так и просится тройник

Leorda wrote:

Hi there

[General]
* Silence spinnerspin and spinnerbonus are unrankable (dunno if I am right orz) hmm, I would like to know precisely, but its really incorrectly. I delete spinnerspin file.

[Marmo's Normal]
00:32:580 (2) - Spacing too far from previous one
00:54:649 (6) - Move further away from previous note to make it readable. It almost covered by hitjudgements btw

[Hard]
01:09:046 (4) - This triplet were too sudden for me... remove this note?
01:09:304 (6) - Add finish for endings? lol

[Insane]
00:53:960 (1) - Reverse this slider to make a zigzag flow?
01:05:684 (3) - Reverse this note to make a circular flow?
01:09:304 (7) - Add finish for endings? lol

That's all I got, good luck

Gordon123 wrote:

Have my star <3

Namki wrote:

Now we raise against the sun~

Мармо Еази

00:21:546 (2,1) - оверлап, ай донт лайк ит
больше ничего не нашел, ты молодец

Мармо Нормал

check AiMod
я больше ничего не нашел, честно-честно ;w;

Hard

00:16:546 (8,1) - спейсинг?
00:16:546 (8,1) - and here
00:25:684 (4) - немного больше прогнуть слайдер
00:29:822 (9,10,11) - не нравится, как-то не красиво
00:31:201 (2) - опустить конец этого
00:31:891 (4) - и поднять конец этого, ибо флоу
00:58:097 (1,4,5) - по-моему там музыка не меняется, а слайдер стоит далеко
мне нравится<3

Kyubey wrote:

[General]
Добавь «monstercat» в теги, а то совсем пусто.
Третий комбоцвет слишком тёмный, на затемнённых бг будет ужасно читаться, лучше сделай поярче.
Поотключай везде ненужный вайдскрин саппорт.
Твоё видео вызвало у меня ужасающие лаги, либо как-то порежь его, либо удали, либо я не знаю, но что-то тут явно не так.
поправила всё
[Hard]
00:21:891 (6,7,1) - возможно, это какая-то фишка, но на деле разный спейсинг тут выглядит некрасиво и неаккуратно, я бы выровнил
00:29:822 - сладер тут подойдёт намного лучше нот, и позволит избежать излишней сложности, из-за которой хард может оказаться слишком сложным по сравнению с нормалом
00:32:925 (6,7,1) - тут бы я тоже выровнял
00:35:339 (8,1,2,3,4) - куча сингла, после неё трипл, а потом ещё и слайдер с 1/2 промежутком, выглядит слишком сложно для такого тихого момента. тут бы больше слайдеров. http://kyubey.s-ul.eu/EVuI6nHf.png такой ритм мне нравится куда больше
00:48:097 (5) - 00:50:856 (5) - 00:53:614 (5) - 00:56:373 (5) - 01:00:511 (9) - 01:03:270 (9) - 01:06:028 (9) - вот эти вещи нужно облегчить, 1/1 джампы требуют ОГРОМНОЙ концетрации, и в харде они просто не нужны, это слишком сложно и вызывает слишком большую разницу с нормалом по сложности, ломая спред
01:09:304 (6) - ну вообще не в тему звучит, серьёзно
01:09:046 (4,5) - это тоже кстати, если карту закончить на 01:08:960 - этом тике, то всё звучит намного приятнее, ибо дальше звуков нет, которые стоило бы замапать
[Insane]
00:13:960 (1,2) - не в тему такой большой спейсинг смотрится, в музыке ничто не взывает к нему
00:49:132 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - в музыке нет ничего, под что подходил бы этот стрим, два трипла звучат намного лучше и в тему
00:54:649 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - тоже
00:58:097 (1,2,3,4,5) - это флоу играется как-то неприятно и скучно, попробуй подвинуть двойку как тут http://kyubey.s-ul.eu/X9938hgY.png . и уменьшить спейсинг, ибо такой спейсинг как-то не в тему смотрится с тем, что идёт дальше
01:03:615 (1,2,3,4,5) - и тут бы тоже уменьшил
01:09:046 (5,6,7) - тоже удалил бы, как и в харде
И кстати, если у меня с видео будет всё так же лагать, то я не смогу номинировать эту карту, ибо не буду способен на нормальный тест, и это будет значить, что карта, возможно, и на других слабых компьютерах лагает.

Kyubey wrote:

Ленивые.

ZLOdeuka- wrote:

Kyubey wrote:

Ленивые.

ты <3

ByBy13 wrote:

Congratz ZLOdeuka-!

1. Your SB elements don't have to be in .png formap as they're just backgrounds. Converting them to .jpg should save ~2mb of space

1. The difficulty is screaming for AR3. It's intense 1/1 rhythm and SV are begging for faster Approach Rate.
2. 00:30:511 (1,1) - I would highly recommend to rotate the latter slider to avoid causing confusions.

1. 00:19:477 (1,2,3,4) - personally, I feel unhappy about the way you use overlaps here, it feels more random than intentional. If you agree to re-arrange this, feel free to ask me for any ideas and examples.

1. 00:57:408 - vocals are sort of choking here, adding a circle to represent it would feel amazing.
   Note: same happens in Insane, so be sure to consider fixing this as well!

Bakari wrote:

Hello!

We have found some potential issues that we feel are important enough to address before continuing:

Marmo's Easy

Non-emphasised downbeats

• 
  The downbeats do not get enough emphasis as they are unclickable. As a result of this, players are unable to feel the actual beat of the song. The best solution here is to make thse beats clickable. Actually these sliders there add some interesting variations to the rhythm and sound pretty nice with the music
  +00:14:994 (2) - the beat mapped with a slidertail has to be emphasized. You can either replace with two circles or use just one circle at the stronger beat. when i modded this map, i noticed this slider and it's placement, but i decided to not ask to change it because, actually, i really like how does this whole pattern sound with some swing before "touch" with that slider, then a note to point at short "the" and slider that epmhasizes the long "sky"

1. 00:22:235 - the downbeat needs some emphasis. Removing a repeat from 00:21:546 (2) - and adding a slider would solve the problem actually that downbeat doesn't sound really that loud to be really needing in that emphasize with a click. and the whole repeat slider covers all three words pretty nice and adds some variation to the rhythm again

Misleadig pattern

• 
  The following pattern is rather misleading for the easiest difficulty and can be easily replaced/fixed.

1. 00:27:408 (5,2) - beginner-level players will ot expect (2) to pop up right under (2). Please, consider an alternative placement for the circle. i don't think they won't notice a sloooow approach circle with different colour, and there's pretty enough time between these notes, so it doesn't really look as issueexample

Marmo's Normal

Inappropriate gamplay elements

• 
  The 1/4 slider used here can not be playable enough for a Normal difficulty. It does not appear understandable enough and seems to be out of the difficulty's context. normal players aren't that bad as easy players, and know something about repeat sliders, because 1/4 repeats appear not that rarely in normals nowadays, and because this is pretty easy to understand if slider is short, then it won't last long

1. 00:35:511 (3) -

Readability issues

• 
  Self-overlapping triangle pattern appears confusing to players. Re-adjusting placement of the hitobjects should resolve the matter.

1. 01:02:235 (5,1,2,3) - but it has different colours that help to read it, and these colous pretty different, aren't they? it more looks like some near to borderline pattern instead of inappropriate, but i want to say that again: normal players are better that easy ones and can play harder patterns, that can improve their skill and that don't look that unreadable. by the way, i did almost same pattern in one of my normals (http://osu.ppy.sh/b/640155 00:11:042 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - ) and QAT even approved that, because it can appear hard but it helps normal players to become better, otherwise they won't be able to get on Hard level, if we keep our normals easy as easies

If you disagree with these suggestions, please reply to this thread justifying why so we can discuss alternatives.

Otherwise, please reply to this thread when these issues are resolved.

Thanks for working with us towards higher quality beatmaps, we hope to see your beatmap ranked soon!

###EM

Kyubey wrote:

Bakari wrote:

Hello!

We have found some potential issues that we feel are important enough to address before continuing:

Marmo's Easy

Non-emphasised downbeats

• 
  The downbeats do not get enough emphasis as they are unclickable. As a result of this, players are unable to feel the actual beat of the song. The best solution here is to make thse beats clickable. Actually these sliders there add some interesting variations to the rhythm and sound pretty nice with the music
  +00:14:994 (2) - the beat mapped with a slidertail has to be emphasized. You can either replace with two circles or use just one circle at the stronger beat. when i modded this map, i noticed this slider and it's placement, but i decided to not ask to change it because, actually, i really like how does this whole pattern sound with some swing before "touch" with that slider, then a note to point at short "the" and slider that epmhasizes the long "sky" I see it as a rather awkward and forced movement from drums to vocals, which results in making both vocals AND drums mapped in an awkward way. Basically, the slider tries to catcht it all and follows nothing as the result.

1. 00:22:235 - the downbeat needs some emphasis. Removing a repeat from 00:21:546 (2) - and adding a slider would solve the problem actually that downbeat doesn't sound really that loud to be really needing in that emphasize with a click. and the whole repeat slider covers all three words pretty nice and adds some variation to the rhythm again and yet, 00:22:580 (1) - is left out following nothing. Its head has no reason to be where it begins at, so I would still insist on moving (1) sliderhead to the downbeat

Misleadig pattern

• 
  The following pattern is rather misleading for the easiest difficulty and can be easily replaced/fixed.

1. 00:27:408 (5,2) - beginner-level players will ot expect (2) to pop up right under (2). Please, consider an alternative placement for the circle. i don't think they won't notice a sloooow approach circle with different colour, and there's pretty enough time between these notes, so it doesn't really look as issue It is still an issue in my eyes, as the players have less time to react to the object and to read it. Basically, it creates an unnatural difficulty increase here for no reason.
   
   Marmo's Normal
   
   Inappropriate gamplay elements
   
   • 
     The 1/4 slider used here can not be playable enough for a Normal difficulty. It does not appear understandable enough and seems to be out of the difficulty's context. normal players aren't that bad as easy players, and know something about repeat sliders, because 1/4 repeats appear not that rarely in normals nowadays, and because this is pretty easy to understand if slider is short, then it won't last long and yet, it's a 174 BPM 1/4 slider. fast and confusing, not to mention, it is the only pattern in the whole difficulty, which makes it feel really random
   1. 00:35:511 (3) -
   Readability issues
   
   • 
     Self-overlapping triangle pattern appears confusing to players. Re-adjusting placement of the hitobjects should resolve the matter.
   1. 01:02:235 (5,1,2,3) - but it has different colours that help to read it, and these colous pretty different, aren't they? it more looks like some near to borderline pattern instead of inappropriate, but i want to say that again: normal players are better that easy ones and can play harder patterns, that can improve their skill and that don't look that unreadable. by the way, i did almost same pattern in one of my normals (http://osu.ppy.sh/b/640155 00:11:042 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - ) and QAT even approved that, because it can appear hard but it help normal players to become better, otherwise they won't be able to get on Hard level, if we keep our normals easy as easies I still believe that players are supposed to learn this kind of overlaps in harder difficulties, as the BPM and rhythm in Normal make it difficult enough. In addition to that, I did not see anything similar to this pattern in higher difficulties, which also makes the pattern appear random

If you disagree with these suggestions, please reply to this thread justifying why so we can discuss alternatives.

Otherwise, please reply to this thread when these issues are resolved.

Thanks for working with us towards higher quality beatmaps, we hope to see your beatmap ranked soon!

###EM

Bakari wrote:

Apart from that I would like to drop a few points, which will also be in English for transparency purposes.


[General]

1. Your SB elements don't have to be in .png formap as they're just backgrounds. Converting them to .jpg should save ~2mb of space

fixed

[Hard]

1. 00:57:408 - vocals are sort of choking here, adding a circle to represent it would feel amazing.
   Note: same happens in Insane, so be sure to consider fixing this as well!

not fixed.It sounds frankly not very good. especially not here emphasizes vocals


This is prettty much all I believe has to be pointed out. You are welcome to ask/clarify or discuss these things here or via PM, if you feel more comfortable while doing so.

Best of luck!

Lanturn wrote:

Really cool to see someone map this song. I eventually wanted to map this but never got around to it. Congrats

Some minor modding if this gets DQ'd

There's a slight metadata error (1)*check 19 Endeavor (2)
The youtube video from monstercat (3) had a typo fixed

BPM is doubled. It should be halved. You probably won't have to change this, but I just felt like pointing it out. not fixed. I specifically it doubled, and I think that there is nothing wrong

Why is the mp3 5000kb? a standard 192kbs file should be 2000kb at the most. Something went wrong with your encoding. That said, the png files could be swapped over to jpg to save another few MB.
All in all, I'm guessing a good 3-5mb could be saved here with some file changes. not fixed. I have previously ranked map with such quality. and I can not change it :<


Insane:
00:59:132 (6,7,1) - I feel like these could be arranged better so the 00:59:477 (1) - blankets around the 00:58:787 (5) - cleaner. You can also achieve this by moving 00:58:270 (2,3,4) - over to the left a little allowing more room for (5). Definitely a lot of freedom here. not fixed. I want to leave it as is
01:07:580 (7) - Honestly I don't think this note is really needed. The song's last major hit before the spinner would just be 01:07:408 (6) - An alternative is to use a 1/2 slider like 01:07:063 (5) - not fixed I want to leave it as is

Mercurial wrote:

It was bound to happen, good luck further, ZLO.

1. 00:24:304 (3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - а ты можешь пересмотреть всю вот эту часть? Там точно можно мапать без оверлапов и будет намного чище игграться/смотреться.