morijo- wrote:

遅くなってしまいました
かなり完成しているようなのでほとんど気になる点なかったです！

一応気になった点だけ報告します！(他のmodderさんと被ったり違うこと言ってたらごめんなさい)

Oni

00:53:023 (287) - d(? 　
00:53:497 (291) - d(?
※kkd d kkd d の方が叩きやすく響きが良いように感じました
なるほど！　これはたしかに納得しました！　変更しておきます！
01:00:128 (336) - delete(?
※00:59:181 - ここが無しなので無しでもよく感じました　　No change. ここを変えてしまうとサビの休符の部分の構成をすべて変えなくてはいけないような感じがしたので変えません。　申し訳ない；；

以上です！
手短で申し訳ないです

qoot8123 wrote:

[General]

1. The volume on kiai is too large, try to use 70%(kantan~oni) ok! :3 changed volume 70%

[ Kantan]

Notes

1. 00:15:444 (3) - move to 00:17:970 - , because 00:15:444 - is pretty calm, put don on 00:15:444 - is a bit noisy ok! changed~
2. 00:26:181 (13,16) - reverse the finish between these two notes, 00:26:181 - here doesn't have any significant sounds ok!

[ Futsuu]

General

set the sv to 1.4? i think 1.4 is enough. ok

Notes

1. 00:18:602 - ~ 00:28:707 - could add a little more notes on this part, but this part should less dense than 00:28:707 - ~kiai as you mapped on oni ok~ add 3 notes
2. 00:41:654 (76,77,78,79,80) - i feel this pattern is not really good as i expect,try this　　ok!
3. 01:00:602 (7,8) - reverse them? i feel kd would more fit the song's pitch ok~!
4. 01:10:707 (29,30) - ^
5. 01:01:549 (9,10,11,12,13,14) - this pattern could be improved imo,the gap here with muzu is a bit large .try this ok!
6. 01:13:233 - add note here? the gap with muzu is a bit huge ok~ added d~

[ Muzukashii]

Notes

1. 00:59:023 (213) - add finish? kantan and futsu also did it ok~! added finish.

[ Oni]

Notes

1. 00:59:023 (329) - same as muzu, add finish? 　ok~!
2. 01:09:128 - ^ change!
3. 01:00:760 (341,342) - i think this part could add a 5-plet pattern like this,you can try this pattern. ok~! change!
4. 01:02:023 (349,350) - reverse them, i feel this vocal's accent is pretty close with 01:01:865 - and 01:02:181 - Consent~ change!

spread is pretty good, call me back then

qoot8123 wrote:

[ JuDa's Onii]

Notes

1. 00:38:181 (11,12,13) - how about use kkd? to follow the snare sounds good !
2. 00:57:760 (1) - listen the song carefully, this note could be k no change. Music makes a weak . listened to that part, I guess don fits better ,linked with 00:56:496 (7) - D.
3. 01:17:970 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - hmm..how about try this? more fit the song imo uum,,, vocal sounds good as your suggestion, but listened on drumpart ,01:18:049 (3,5) - sounds snare. I wont ignore these. T_T however this part still made a over power to me.from 01:18:602 (9) - , decreased the density.
   
   
   
   added by myself.
   00:33:523 (12) - kat. instead of 00:33:681 (14) - sounds snare.
   01:22:470 (5) - kat. make a little enhance for 01:23:023 (1,2) - .
   

spread is pretty good, call me back then

• d=Don
  D=Big Don
  k=Katsu
  K=Big Katsu

• 01:23:181 - the end of the kiai is unsnapped in all diffs except Juda's Oni, please fix >.<

• nothing to suggest here

• 00:16:707 (27) - change to k for consistency with the pattern of 00:14:181 (22,23,24) - ? sounds good imo

• 00:58:075 (206,207) - i know will sound a bit empty but i think a break before the kiai will be good because more than 10 seconds without a 2/1 break in a muzu is bad.. also i don't want to see a DQ so, how about delete these notes?

• looks fine

• same, looks fine xD

Hanjamon wrote:

Hi Blackhair~ here the mod you requested me long time ago.. i'm sorry for the late, i'll mod before qoot rechecks np! ok!Hanjamon~

• d=Don
  D=Big Don
  k=Katsu
  K=Big Katsu

[General]

• 01:23:181 - the end of the kiai is unsnapped in all diffs except Juda's Oni, please fix >.< lol thanks! changed~!

[Kantan]

• nothing to suggest here >w<//

[Futsuu]

• 00:16:707 (27) - change to k for consistency with the pattern of 00:14:181 (22,23,24) - ? sounds good imo ok! change!

[Muzukashii]

• 00:58:075 (206,207) - i know will sound a bit empty but i think a break before the kiai will be good because more than 10 seconds without a 2/1 break in a muzu is bad.. also i don't want to see a DQ so, how about delete these notes? fmm... ok deleted 2notes~

[Oni]

• looks fine thanks >w<!!!////

I only suggested these two things, i don't see something wrong with these mapset, good luck! ^^

qoot8123 wrote:

recheck. no kd ok :3

General:

01:23:182 - unsnapped kiai time ok~ changed 01:23:181 -

Futsuu:

01:22:707 - add k to make the gap more close with muzu ok~ add k :3

Muzu:

01:34:391 (339) - remove the finish ? i feel this drum is not as strong as 01:34:707 - ok! delete big~



that's all from me.

qoot8123 wrote:

talked with mapper, and we fix some unsnaped green line, everything is fine now

Bubbled!

1. add 'second opening' to tags, it's the second opening right?
2. also add 'eroge', 'visual novel', or maybe add the english ver too (Beyond the sky into the firmament) (preference) to tags

1. Actually i want to recommend SV 1.4 here, but since qoot said nothing, i cancelled my intention
2. 00:02:181 - isn't it better if you add ak here for following the loud piano and the pattern for the rest of this part (this part is almost same with 00:08:496)
3. 00:28:707 (16) - same as below www
4. 00:39:918 (28) - remove the finish here for consistency with other diff (and i think the other diff don't have it either)
5. 00:44:970 (33) - ^
6. 00:37:549 (25) - finish can be added to emphasize the music
7. 01:05:339 (10) - can be changed to d because of lower vocal than 01:05:970 (11) -
8. 01:25:549 add k for the same reason as above
9. 00:11:023 (1) - it seems weird that only kantan has the spinner here.. probably change it with some notes?

1. 00:23:023 (40,41,42,43) - isn't it better as kddk here? follows the vocal more i think
2. 00:33:128 (59) - k here flows better
3. 00:39:128 (73) - add finish here OR remove finish 00:44:181 (85) - both have the same density but different note lol (also applied for other diffs
4. 00:53:654 (105,106,107,108,109,110) - no need for finish, since they don't appear on the other diff also. but what i want to suggest is that you added finish at 00:54:444 (107,108,109,110) - them because the drum sounds like crashing there (also applied for other diffs
5. You may want to hear the music more closely to hear which music needs to be emphasized and which doesn't need

1. 00:05:023 ~ 00:06:286 is empty yet it's so full at oni. adding some note here might be good. (but not too much, try balancing it with oni and futsuu too)
2. 00:07:549 (21) - why not move this to 00:07:391 which follows the vocal more?
3. 00:22:233 try adding a note here to follow the vocal. it's weird to leave it empty imo
4. 00:37:865 add k here because futsuu has a note either. so to balance the spread, leaving this empty would be weird.
5. 00:42:602 (146) - remove finish, since nothing can be emphasized (and it's weird
6. 01:16:075 (289,290) - isn't it better to swap this? i think it follows the pitch more.

1. 00:05:023 (21,25) - these can be removed since piano starts at 00:05:181 (22) - , and vocal changes at 00:05:812 (25) -
2. 00:20:181 ~ 00:21:128 can be changed to something like this. follows the vocal better, and also can make a break here so the pattern isn't constantly same
3. 00:39:760 (206,207,208) - change to kkd for following the vocal and better flow
4. 00:41:181 (215) - sudden finish, it's weird i guess. not to mention that there's no finishes on the other diffs
5. 01:28:391 (492,496) - same with 00:05:023 (21,25) -
6. 01:34:075 (513,514) - remove them, drums start at 01:34:233 (515) - and part before them is completely empty
7. 00:24:760 (110,111,112,113,114,115,116) - i kinda doubt that triplet, since actually they can be done with simpler way (muzu/refer to Juda's oni)

1. 00:06:286 (7) - change to d for consistency with 00:01:233 (1) - they have same music also
2. 01:02:654 (9) - can be removed since vocal isn't playing there ovo
3. 01:29:654 (7) - same with 00:06:286 (7) -
4. 01:34:075 (23,24) - can be removed since drum is playing at 01:34:233 (25) - and the part before it is silence

Senritsu wrote:

[JuDa's Oni]

1. 00:06:286 (7) - change to d for consistency with 00:01:233 (1) - they have same music also no change. around the 00:01:233 (1) - , it sounds a weak yet. But around the 00:06:286 -, it sounds up than formar.
2. 01:02:654 (9) - can be removed since vocal isn't playing there ovo no change. back sounds not stopped. if delete this, they felt the stopped Instrumental.
3. 01:29:654 (7) - same with 00:06:286 (7) - no change. consistent with 1st part.
4. 01:34:075 (23,24) - can be removed since drum is playing at 01:34:233 (25) - and the part before it is silence Snare Sounds. no change.

that's all
good luck for rank o/

Senritsu wrote:

hi there
coming from pm req a long time ago
since this is bubbled already i will just simply mod it, since i don't want to ruin qoot's bubble
what's wrong with editor

[General]

1. add 'second opening' to tags, it's the second opening right?
2. also add 'eroge', 'visual novel', or maybe add the english ver too (Beyond the sky into the firmament) (preference) to tags
   ok add tags (eroge, Visual novel, second opening,Beyond the sky into the firmament,preference)

[Kantan]

1. Actually i want to recommend SV 1.4 here, but since qoot said nothing, i cancelled my intention
2. 00:02:181 - isn't it better if you add ak here for following the loud piano and the pattern for the rest of this part (this part is almost same with 00:08:496) No change. I am here felt not need anything even though extend is sound.
3. 00:28:707 (16) - same as below www Same as ^
4. 00:39:918 (28) - remove the finish here for consistency with other diff (and i think the other diff don't have it either) No change. Because I sound feel big, I think that 00:39:918 (28) - placement to.
5. 00:44:970 (33) - ^ Same as ^
6. 00:37:549 (25) - finish can be added to emphasize the music No change. Instead, Futsuu finish of the 00:37:549 (69) - it was delete.
7. 01:05:339 (10) - can be changed to d because of lower vocal than 01:05:970 (11) - No change. I did not feel so.
8. 01:25:549 add k for the same reason as above
9. 00:11:023 (1) - it seems weird that only kantan has the spinner here.. probably change it with some notes?　　　Since sounded like of behind is growing, it does not change the spinner.

[Futsuu]

1. 00:23:023 (40,41,42,43) - isn't it better as kddk here? follows the vocal more i think　　No change. I did not sound like you think.
2. 00:33:128 (59) - k here flows better No change.
3. 00:39:128 (73) - add finish here OR remove finish 00:44:181 (85) - both have the same density but different note lol (also applied for other diffs ok~ 00:39:128 (73) - add Big~
4. 00:53:654 (105,106,107,108,109,110) - no need for finish, since they don't appear on the other diff also. but what i want to suggest is that you added finish at 00:54:444 (107,108,109,110) - them because the drum sounds like crashing there (also applied for other diffs
5. You may want to hear the music more closely to hear which music needs to be emphasized and which doesn't need
   umm... 00:53:654 (105) - remove finished. 00:53:970 (106,107,108,109,110) - No change. and 00:53:970 (41,42,43) - Kantan 3notes add big~

[Muzukashii]

1. 00:05:023 ~ 00:06:286 is empty yet it's so full at oni. adding some note here might be good. (but not too much, try balancing it with oni and futsuu too)　　No change. Here we put to match the vocals.
2. 00:07:549 (21) - why not move this to 00:07:391 which follows the vocal more?　　No change. Here is those were placed in accordance with the piano I feel well, natural.
3. 00:22:233 try adding a note here to follow the vocal. it's weird to leave it empty imo No change. Too stuffed Notes I think not good.
4. 00:37:865 add k here because futsuu has a note either. so to balance the spread, leaving this empty would be weird. No change. One before will feel that it is not needed because a Big note & and Futsuu notes delete
5. 00:42:602 (146) - remove finish, since nothing can be emphasized (and it's weird No change. I felt needed a Big note.
6. 01:16:075 (289,290) - isn't it better to swap this? i think it follows the pitch more. No change. Sound behind I feel low.

[Oni]

1. 00:05:023 (21,25) - these can be removed since piano starts at 00:05:181 (22) - , and vocal changes at 00:05:812 (25) - No change. Here it can not be delete ringing chime.
2. 00:20:181 ~ 00:21:128 can be changed to something like this. follows the vocal better, and also can make a break here so the pattern isn't constantly same　　No change. I do not think so.
3. 00:39:760 (206,207,208) - change to kkd for following the vocal and better flow No change. I will hear the ddk.
4. 00:41:181 (215) - sudden finish, it's weird i guess. not to mention that there's no finishes on the other diffs　　No change. Because here there is a large sound of cymbals.
5. 01:28:391 (492,496) - same with 00:05:023 (21,25) - Same as ^
6. 01:34:075 (513,514) - remove them, drums start at 01:34:233 (515) - and part before them is completely empty No change.The sound of the snare drum is heard from behind.
7. 00:24:760 (110,111,112,113,114,115,116) - i kinda doubt that triplet, since actually they can be done with simpler way (muzu/refer to Juda's oni) No change. I am want to match the vocal

that's all
good luck for rank o/

Thanks mod~!

qoot8123 wrote:

restore the bubble.

Julie wrote:

BN checked~! :3

re-check so no kudoo XD

irc for a better mp3 files fixed
Call me back to re-recheck after qoot re-bubble this, due to mp3 change, I'll need him to rebubble it xD.

[Kantan]

01:07:580 (11) - delete, keep this part empty like you did here 01:06:317 - , can feel more impact on this 01:08:212 (12) - :3

ok change~ :3

[Futsuu]

01:30:949 (63) - move to 01:30:791 - , piano sound more clear and louder, player might want to hit this sound before.　　ok~ :3

01:35:212 (70) - k, same piano sound as 01:35:370 (71) - OR delete to keep it consistent with 01:33:949 - and 01:34:106 - . ok! change k~

[Muzukashii]

00:15:317 - to 00:20:054 - lots dkdk, which is good because same rhythm and match the song , but these 00:16:106 (41,42) - , 00:17:370 (47,48) - , 00:18:633 (53,54) - and 00:19:896 (59,60) - have the same sound. fmm ok 00:17:370 (47,48,53,54) - Ctrl+G

01:30:948 (326) - same reason as Futsuu. Careful, the note is unsnap 1ms. ok move~

Have a few notes with 1 ms unsnap, snap them again in timing panel, since your map doesn't have any 1/6 .

:3

[Oni]

Have a few notes with 1 ms unsnap, snap them again in timing panel, since your map doesn't have any 1/6 .

The only difficulty that preview time is different from all the other difficulty. Snap it to 01:00:554 -. lol　I did not notice thank you Julie~ :3

Thanks Recheck and Mod~!

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