sammy711 wrote:

From BMT modding queue

Really awesome Storyboard...
Hanatan !
[Hana Emi]
00:06:212 (3) - remove slider whistle, it sounds bad. You should add whistle on the head instead
00:54:273 (3) - remove slider whistle
01:20:293 (1) - no need NC here. You shoud follow what you did before:NC once a big white line
01:26:722 (2,3,4) - how about patttern like this

like this

01:31:620 (3,7) - add the clap. the sudden vanish of the clap sounds weird
01:32:998 (8,9,10) - And these three note maybe also need a clap or something
01:36:671 (4) -

like this

maybe this place fits better in keeping the DS
01:44:477 (5) - NC here
01:45:702 (1) - finish?
01:51:518 (1) - remove slider whistle
01:58:712 (4,6) - 01:58:865 (5,1) - make these two group parallel can be better
01:59:630 (3) - weird place here. Inconsistent DS here

like this

some change with the same distance and some stack like this can be better
02:01:773 (4) - NC
02:01:926 (5,6) - too close compared with before, and this caused it seems so crowded. Maybe you can try a better place to set 02:02:232 (6)

like this

02:05:293 (1) - finish
02:05:447 (2) - No matter in which way thought, this should not be a place to set a big jump.　And the downbeat 02:05:293 (1) much more deserve it.
02:05:293 (1,2) - Maybe Ctrl+G this could be better but you'd best replace this part
02:06:518 (7) - NC
02:19:375 (1) - Remove NC here. Not such many NCs are required here
02:19:834 (2) - i dont think here is a good place to put this note. Apparently you are try to put this note farther to strengthen the downbeat (02:19:987 (1)),but you can just throw away the DS and put this one to where 02:19:222 (2) - sits
02:19:987 (1) - finish on the head
02:21:518 (5) - ＾
02:24:885 (1) - remove that noisy slider whistle
02:27:028 (9) - ^
02:30:702 (5) - ^
02:32:844 (4) - clap on the head
02:34:069 (8) - ^
02:34:069 (8,9,10) - this pattern is a little bit crazy.
No one will concern if a circle in where he can't see is 1/3 or 1/2
When I played it, the rhythm messed up here 02:35:293 (2,3,4,5) - And i can hardly read what the rhythm here is. Maybe you should put those 1/3 in a clear way, or put those 1/3 in a smaller DS
02:34:681 (11) - finish on the head
02:42:028 (4) - ^
02:49:375 (1) - ^
02:58:253 (1,2,3) - make those parallel
02:58:559 (2,1) - perfect blanket
03:24:579 (1,2,3,4) - these stream are not neat. Disabling Grid snap can make a much smoother curve.
03:25:498 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
03:31:926 (1) - remove NC
03:35:906 (1) - remove slider whistle
03:35:447 (6,7,8) - there is no trace of reversing or returning sight in the music, so instead of reverse jump, how about pattern like this

like this

03:37:742 (8) - clap
03:38:355 (1) - finish on the head
03:38:661 (2,1) - perfect stack
03:38:814 (3) - clap on the tail
03:40:038 (3) - ^
03:42:640 (5) - clap on the head
03:48:763 (3,4) - you should keep the DS here ww
03:49:069 (5,7) - It is not beautiful to touch each other. Stack 03:50:293 (9) - is a much better choice

like this

03:53:049 (1) - finish on the head
03:57:181 (8) - move it to (248,88), it keeps a good distance to 03:56:722 (7,10) -
03:57:947 (1) - finish
03:59:630 (3) - clap on the tail
04:11:569 (6) - NC here
04:17:538 - Audio from here to 04:19:603 - is almost 0... Maybe you should reset Audio from here
04:14:477 (5) - clap on the head
04:21:212 (6) - NC

OK... This map is a good job but some patterns are still seem strange. Especially some jump is not fit with the song, like 04:21:212 (6) - distance here has not ever show this is a downbeat. Maybe some jump is awesome, but using it to an appropriate timing is also important I think

Hope this can get ranked

sammy711 wrote:

sammy711 wrote:

From BMT modding queue

Really awesome Storyboard...
Hanatan !
[Hana Emi]
00:06:212 (3) - remove slider whistle, it sounds bad. You should add whistle on the head instead fixed
00:54:273 (3) - remove slider whistle fixed
01:20:293 (1) - no need NC here. You shoud follow what you did before:NC once a big white linefixed
01:26:722 (2,3,4) - how about patttern like this hmm yeah i like this better

like this

01:31:620 (3,7) - add the clap. the sudden vanish of the clap sounds weird fixed
01:32:998 (8,9,10) - And these three note maybe also need a clap or something fixed
01:36:671 (4) -

like this

ok fixed
maybe this place fits better in keeping the DS
01:44:477 (5) - NC here fixed
01:45:702 (1) - finish? fixed
01:51:518 (1) - remove slider whistle fixed
01:58:712 (4,6) - 01:58:865 (5,1) - make these two group parallel can be better ok i tried my best
01:59:630 (3) - weird place here. Inconsistent DS here redid this part

like this

some change with the same distance and some stack like this can be better
02:01:773 (4) - NC fixed
02:01:926 (5,6) - too close compared with before, and this caused it seems so crowded. Maybe you can try a better place to set 02:02:232 (6) ok fixed

like this

02:05:293 (1) - finish fixed
02:05:447 (2) - No matter in which way thought, this should not be a place to set a big jump.　And the downbeat 02:05:293 (1) much more deserve it. fixed
02:05:293 (1,2) - Maybe Ctrl+G this could be better but you'd best replace this part hmm ok
02:06:518 (7) - NC fixed
02:19:375 (1) - Remove NC here. Not such many NCs are required here fixed
02:19:834 (2) - i dont think here is a good place to put this note. Apparently you are try to put this note farther to strengthen the downbeat (02:19:987 (1)),but you can just throw away the DS and put this one to where 02:19:222 (2) - sits ok fixed
02:19:987 (1) - finish on the head fixed
02:21:518 (5) - ＾
02:24:885 (1) - remove that noisy slider whistle
02:27:028 (9) - ^
02:30:702 (5) - ^
02:32:844 (4) - clap on the head
02:34:069 (8) - ^ fixed all these ^
02:34:069 (8,9,10) - this pattern is a little bit crazy.
No one will concern if a circle in where he can't see is 1/3 or 1/2
When I played it, the rhythm messed up here 02:35:293 (2,3,4,5) - And i can hardly read what the rhythm here is. Maybe you should put those 1/3 in a clear way, or put those 1/3 in a smaller DS ok i think i fixed it
02:34:681 (11) - finish on the head
02:42:028 (4) - ^
02:49:375 (1) - ^ fixed ^
02:58:253 (1,2,3) - make those parallel fixed
02:58:559 (2,1) - perfect blanket fixed
03:24:579 (1,2,3,4) - these stream are not neat. Disabling Grid snap can make a much smoother curve.
03:25:498 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^ ok fixed ^
03:31:926 (1) - remove NC fixed
03:35:906 (1) - remove slider whistle fixed
03:35:447 (6,7,8) - there is no trace of reversing or returning sight in the music, so instead of reverse jump, how about pattern like this

like this

03:37:742 (8) - clap fixed
03:38:355 (1) - finish on the head fixed
03:38:661 (2,1) - perfect stack fixed
03:38:814 (3) - clap on the tai l fixed
03:40:038 (3) - ^ fixed
03:42:640 (5) - clap on the head fixed
03:48:763 (3,4) - you should keep the DS here ww fixed
03:49:069 (5,7) - It is not beautiful to touch each other. Stack 03:50:293 (9) - is a much better choice ok ty fixed

like this

03:53:049 (1) - finish on the head fixed
03:57:181 (8) - move it to (248,88), it keeps a good distance to 03:56:722 (7,10) - fixed
03:57:947 (1) - finish fixed
03:59:630 (3) - clap on the tail fixed
04:11:569 (6) - NC here fixed
04:17:538 - Audio from here to 04:19:603 - is almost 0... Maybe you should reset Audio from here not sure what you mean
04:14:477 (5) - clap on the headfixed
04:21:212 (6) - NC fixed

OK... This map is a good job but some patterns are still seem strange. Especially some jump is not fit with the song, like 04:21:212 (6) - distance here has not ever show this is a downbeat. Maybe some jump is awesome, but using it to an appropriate timing is also important I think

Hope this can get ranked

pishifat wrote:

just wondering, why isn't widescreen support enabled? the entire storyboard would work just fine in widescreen excluding black.png and Light Border.png, which would just need to be scaled a bit larger. seems kind of stupid to have it look like this when it could easily look like this (which is a lot better). no kudosu obviously

KyleDinny wrote:

I'll mod this when I get back from school :3

KyleDinny wrote:

[Hana Emi]

00:12:640 (1,2) - Blanket the 2nd note properly for a better look fixed
00:13:559 (3,4) - ^ i like this the way it is
01:33:457 (1,2,3,4) - Make these smaller sliders and reverse them once again, and make them more compact like in this picture hmm ok fixed

SPOILER

http://i.gyazo.com/95145ae4c292c6564b950bf63448ab8a.png

02:17:538 (1) - Reverse selection on this slider, the jump feels too forced. fixed
02:45:702 (4) - The curve looks a tad ugly imo, I suggest a change to this picture below ok fixed

SPOILER

http://i.gyazo.com/130e7aaa1d11f35823016616201361d4.png

02:46:314 (5,1,2,3) - I know the song changes and all, but these are so mundane for a hard difficulty like this. I suggest making it more difficult. i really like this part
03:20:753 (8) - Add a note here for a good buildup. fixed
03:42:028 (1) - Part after this is overmapped, I suggest a change to this timeline and positioning like in the picture. ok ty

SPOILER

https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2015669

Nothing else to find! ;o

Great mapped, wbl for ranked I imagine XD

blizzardice wrote:

fun map

also, don't know how to mod (good) so these are mostly opinions

hana emi

01:26:875 (1,2,3,4,5) - is this section following the rhythm, or voice, or both? if it's following the voice, then (3) is overmapped it feels really awkward with 3 not being there
03:01:620 (1,2,3,4,5) - space each note a little (distance apart increasing every note for this combo, so that the transition from this pattern to the much more spaced notes is smoother) oh ok i see what you mean, fixed
03:20:753 (8,9) - overmapped mayb e? (although you do this a lot so prob keep it) its there for the buildup
03:52:896 (6) - a little weird (again, ^) hmm it feels alright to me
04:08:508 (4) - maybe take out this note (tried playing that section without that note, felt better) i dont really like this sorry
04:12:640 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - either turn this pattern into 2 sliders, maybe to prepare the player for patterns like this 04:49:375 (1,2,3,4,5) or decrease the spacing a little because this pattern is hard (for non-touch players lol), although it's a kiai part of the map so it's probably fine if you don't nerf it that hard hmm i see what your saying, but since this is the last kiai time of the song, it has to be the most difficult part, that why the background is changed as well
04:56:110 (2,3) - switch 2 and 3, i think a left-right-left-right zig-zag is easier to read than up-down-up-down i'll leave it for now, your actually the very first person to have a problem with this part, so if more opinions about this part occur, i'll change it

good luck~

lkx_Shore wrote:

[Hana Emi]
00:06:212 (3) - remove sliderbodyt-whistle fixed
00:06:824 (1,2,3) - use 20% Volume normalhit? i changed samlpleset to drum instead
00:08:355 (2) - add whistle? hmm ok
00:19:681 (6) - Sliderhead add clap? fixed
00:19:987 (1) - change into 1/1 slider it better i like it the way it is
00:59:094 (1,2) - stack it? hmm no thanks
01:13:865 (1) - sliderhead add finish. ok fixed
01:24:426 (2,3,4) - too close ok i increased spacing a little bit
01:32:844 (7) - Nc? fixed
02:00:855 (2) - clap change into whistle? fixed
02:19:987 (5) - http://puu.sh/byBvE/0bd9a52d95.png
02:32:156 (1,2) - stack? no ty
03:33:916 (2) - clap change into whistle? fixed
03:59:630 (3) - slidertail add clap fixed
04:02:844 (1) - add soft-finish fixed
05:10:804 (4,5) - music is calm here,use small distance is better. fixed

too many random jump here...Goodluck!

neonat wrote:

General

Why does AiMod say that: File missing:sb\blue dot.png woops i fixed that sorry

Being 98 BPM, I think having AR around 8~8.5 would be more appropriate, it would be less forcing a higher AR upon the player, and make it better to play IMO yes it is 98 bpm, but i mapped it with 1/8 slider BSD, so it is essentially 196 bpm

Hana Emi

00:15:549 - seems like you missed the drum beat here. Before this you had been mapping to the drums as well, up until this point at least. Add something here to match up, so it won't be so odd-one-out opk fixed
00:28:253 (3) - more to the left? It felt a little weird moving from 00:27:947 (2) because I had to twist down and right a bit fixed
00:54:120 (1,2,3) - shift it further away from 00:53:661 (4) - move 00:54:885 (4,5,6) along with it if you have to, shifting it left would be the best choice. It just looks too cramped right now, causes complication to 00:53:661 (4) fixed
01:16:008 (4) - would look better less curved in ok fixed
01:38:967 (4,3) - y-axis is off by 1. Really, ctrl + G 01:38:967 (4) and you can see that they are 268 and 269 (01:38:967 (4) is 269) i think i fixed it
01:46:161 (3) - this slider feels weird, especially because of the end ending at 01:46:314 - It just plays weird with the slider, maybe change it to circles, the only other significant part that feels slider worthy is the next vocal word at 01:46:620 (5) - it's either that or the position feels weird hence it plays off fixed
02:06:977 (3,5) - their ends aren't stacked perfectly, you can Ctrl + G both of them to check fixed
02:19:987 (5) - would really deserve a finish on the start of the slider fixed
02:34:069 (8) - you could NC this fixed
02:57:947 (4) - finish on start of slider fixed
03:02:538 (4) - shift more to the left, movement would be smoother fixed
04:17:538 (1) - finish on start of slider
04:17:538 (1,2,3) and 04:18:763 (1,2,3) - currently they are both in the sequence of 1/4 slider circle 1/2 slider, but this doesn't fit the song, mostly because of the music and that held vocal. What would fit better would be 1/2 slider circle 1/4 slider sequence: fixed

SPOILER

Next time try not to post the same link (in my queue) 3 times lol, Good Luck. sorry again lol

Knotts wrote:

Hiii jimmy. Mod request from my queue.

Hana Emi

1. Maybe add a silent sliderslide hitsound. The rolling sound doesn't sound really nice during the quiet slow parts. ok
2. 00:12:640 (1) - Sounds better to end this slider at the red tick fixed
3. 00:21:212 (1) - Whistle fixed
4. 00:21:518 (3) - ^ fixed
5. 00:21:671 (4) - Drum clap or finish fixed
6. 00:22:130 (7) - Whistle fixed
7. 00:26:875 (6) - Clap sounds a little better than finish to me fixed
8. 00:55:498 (5,1) - Improve blanket fixed
9. 01:34:681 (1,2) - I thought it'd be cool to lower the SV here to build up momentum but you did the opposite and sped it up xD ok i made them slower
10. 03:24:885 (4) - Replace this with a stream into the next slider pls. It'd feel a lot more fun fixed
11. 04:13:100 (4) - This finish doesn't sound good here ok fixed
12. 04:13:559 (1) - ^ Might be better to replace this one with a whistle. fixed
13. 04:14:171 (3) - Whistle fixed
14. 04:14:477 (4) - Clap oops i missed that one
15. 04:17:538 - Sounds like a good time to lower the SV but I guess it's a little to late to say that.
16. 05:00:702 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - I'm sure you can make a better looking circle than that

i tried me best

I didn't really add all the hitsound suggestions that I could have so ask me for more if you ended up liking them, if not I'm sorry orz.
That's all from me. PM me if you need anything else

SkyDevil wrote:

decided to check on the map and holy shit you should stop spamming stars cause it's a waste to do so, my friend did that too and it barely got any more attention than any other map... you should save them just to hit the 12* minimum for your next map

1. I know, I know you said you mapped it like a 196 BPM song. But somehow, I find AR8.7 to make this diff play better. Not sure if it's just me or it's because it is going pretty well with the patterns you've created, but seriously, try it first.
2. You'll need tick rate 4 as the instruments are played constantly every 1/4 beats.
3. 00:01:926 - 00:07:436 - I don't know if it's just me, but I personally feel that the movement needed here is awkward due to the low spacing. Consider increasing a little more?
4. 00:06:212 (3) - Maybe you meant to add a whistle on the head instead of the body?
5. 00:09:273 (1,2,3) - Make the spacing consistent so they'll be more natural to play? The music's strength is pretty constant anyway so yeah.
6. 00:13:559 (3,4) - Try to make a blanket pattern so they'll look neater?
7. 00:14:783 - Add a whistle to follow the string's sound?
8. 00:17:232 - I seriously recommend to map the drum note here as it is very noticeable and it's very awkward to skip the note.
9. 00:21:824 (5) - Change the clap to a whistle? Fits the song better.
10. 00:24:579 (6) - Again, add a whistle to follow the string instrument?
11. 00:27:028 - Same as 00:17:232.
12. 00:27:947 (2) - ...And uh, add a whistle for an obvious reason? (There are a lot of instruments, especially strings, that can be emphasized here. Not going to point more of them to avoid making this mod too long; I believe you can look for them by yourself.)
13. 00:46:008 (4,1,2) - Make a jump between (1,2) instead of (4,1)? Goes way better with the vocal pitch.
14. 00:53:049 (3,4) - Change (3) into two circles and make a series of gradually-increasing jumps to go along with the cymbals?
15. 00:54:273 (3) - Remove the whistle on the body, then use Soft addition on the head and use the whistle to emphasize both the drum and piano note?
16. 00:54:273 - 01:10:804 - I believe you can place claps on every 2nd and 4th white tick of every stanza. You'll have to find another custom clap hitsound that fits, though.
17. 00:59:018 - Why not adding a circle here? Plays way better that way.
18. 01:01:314 (8,1) - Feels weird to play since the vocal and music here is quite strong and yet the spacing is small. Also, the flow doesn't really go well due to 01:01:008 (7,8)'s flow and 01:01:620 (1)'s curve.
19. 01:03:151 (1) - Add a finish to emphasize the instrument here? Also, I believe the spacing from 01:02:844 (3) should be larger compared to 01:03:151 (1,2,3). Right now, the spaces feel kinda... random.
20. 01:05:600 (4) - I believe you should add a repeat to follow the instrument at 01:05:906. I mean, it's okay to follow the vocal, but stronger instruments should be prioritized (at least mapped too).
21. 01:18:610 (9,10,1) - Rotate 30 degrees anti-clockwise and place it like this for a better flow?
22. 01:23:508 (6,7,1) - This can also be rotated CCW a bit. Don't worry about the 01:22:283 (4,1) stack; this doesn't affect anything while playing.
23. 01:28:559 (1) - Is the usage of the old slider algorithm (no, not gonna explain it; it's complicated man) intentional? (This is triggered by making a red node, then removing the red part and thus making the node a normal gray one, but with a different behaviour if dragged).
24. 01:33:457 - 01:34:579 - The entire section is pretty much off-beat. I can't figure out how is this part supposed to be timed though...
25. 01:38:661 (2,3,4) - This is pretty awkward to play due to the linear nature of the flow. Are you sure with this...?
26. 01:40:804 - Did you forget a finish? It's definitely needed here.
27. 01:45:242 (5,6,7) - Make it shaped like 01:44:783 (2,3,4) for aesthetic reasons? (2,3,4,5,6,7) looks weird overall due to the shape inconsistency.
28. 01:46:314 (4) - Forgot a clap?
29. 01:50:600 (6,1) - Swap NC? I think you know why. The combo pattern here doesn't really make sense, to be blunt.
30. 02:06:977 (3) - Ctrl+G for a better flow? Not really sure though; might as well play around with 02:06:977 (3,4,5) altogether.
31. 02:12:640 - Use the Soft addition so the finish used will be the Soft one? Fits better with the cymbal in the music.
32. 02:13:865 (5,6) - What's with the sudden decrease of spacing here? It feels pretty extreme and odd to hit the objects.
33. 02:16:926 (6) - Try moving to (240,60) so 02:16:314 (4,5,6) will look neater overall?
34. 02:19:834 (4) - Move to (186,196) so the spacing between 02:19:375 (3,5) will be consistent?
35. 02:19:987 (5,1) - Swap NC to follow the song's rhythm?
36. 02:32:079 - I believe a circle should be added here to follow the instrument's sound.
37. 02:34:681 (4,1) - Again, swap NC? Also, make a jump between 02:34:477 (3,4)? Doesn't make sense for this to have a really small spacing compared to 02:34:069 (1,2,3).
38. 02:35:906 - Add a whistle to follow the instrument, just like 02:35:293 (2,3,4)?
39. 02:37:742 (5) - Add an NC? I... just feel that it goes better with the strong instruments and the jump to this from 02:37:742 (5).
40. 02:38:049 - Also add a whistle to follow the instrument? (Uh okay, just realized that I already notified you about this before, but w/e.)
41. 03:17:232 - 03:21:212 - This entire part is just... awkward to play. Sorry, even I can't exactly pinpoint and explain what is wrong here. This just... feels extremely wrong to play because they... don't go along with the instruments and vocal. That's all I can say.
42. 03:52:896 (6,7,1) - Make something that flows like this so this part will be more comfortable to play?
43. 03:57:793 (11,1) - I believe the spacing here should be larger to emphasize the cymbal at (1).
44. 04:04:681 (5) - What is this slider following, exactly? Might as well extend it to a 1/2 slider.
45. 04:08:508 (4,5,1) - Inconsistent spacing. This is very, very bad to have in a spaced triplet.
46. 04:16:008 (5,6,7) - ^
47. 04:54:273 (1,2,3,4) - ...I'm seriously not sure about these 3/4 sliders. They don't really go along nicely with the song, especially (2) since you skipped a drum note at 04:54:732.
48. 04:56:110 (1,2,3,4) - Make the spacing consistent? I can't see a reason not to.
49. 04:59:171 (1,2,3) - Same as 04:54:273 (1,2,3,4).
50. 05:01:620 (1,2,3) - You can make the blanket at (1,2) better, and make (2,3)'s tails not overlap each other. That would be far better for the design.
51. 05:06:212 - Map this instrument sound? Feels odd to skip it with a slider.
52. 05:08:661 (1) - I can't see any reason for the NC... Remove it, I guess? Also add a whistle to follow the instrument?
53. 05:10:804 (4,5) - The sudden movement needed here can be confusing for players. Are you sure with this?
54. 05:18:457 (1) - Same as 05:08:661 (1).
55. 05:22:207 (3,4) - Suddenly using this kind of rhythm? It doesn't even match the music here. Combine them into a 1/1 slider, please?
56. 05:26:722 (1,2,3) - A 1/4 slider with a repeat will be more easier to follow and is nicely fitting the song. Try it?

Hinsvar wrote:

Yo; modding here!

*Bolded = Unrankable or very, very strongly suggested; red = Highly suggested or questionable (still weaker than the bolded ones); black = Minor suggestions/rants; blue = Notes/advices to avoid/fix repeated problems. Also note that hitsound suggestions on a diff may apply on similar parts of the song and the other diffs of the mapset.

>Hana Emi

1. I know, I know you said you mapped it like a 196 BPM song. But somehow, I find AR8.7 to make this diff play better. Not sure if it's just me or it's because it is going pretty well with the patterns you've created, but seriously, try it first.
2. You'll need tick rate 4 as the instruments are played constantly every 1/4 beats.
3. 00:01:926 - 00:07:436 - I don't know if it's just me, but I personally feel that the movement needed here is awkward due to the low spacing. Consider increasing a little more?
4. 00:06:212 (3) - Maybe you meant to add a whistle on the head instead of the body?
5. 00:09:273 (1,2,3) - Make the spacing consistent so they'll be more natural to play? The music's strength is pretty constant anyway so yeah.
6. 00:13:559 (3,4) - Try to make a blanket pattern so they'll look neater?
7. 00:14:783 - Add a whistle to follow the string's sound?
8. 00:17:232 - I seriously recommend to map the drum note here as it is very noticeable and it's very awkward to skip the note.
9. 00:21:824 (5) - Change the clap to a whistle? Fits the song better.
10. 00:24:579 (6) - Again, add a whistle to follow the string instrument?
11. 00:27:028 - Same as 00:17:232.
12. 00:27:947 (2) - ...And uh, add a whistle for an obvious reason? (There are a lot of instruments, especially strings, that can be emphasized here. Not going to point more of them to avoid making this mod too long; I believe you can look for them by yourself.)
13. 00:46:008 (4,1,2) - Make a jump between (1,2) instead of (4,1)? Goes way better with the vocal pitch.
14. 00:53:049 (3,4) - Change (3) into two circles and make a series of gradually-increasing jumps to go along with the cymbals?
15. 00:54:273 (3) - Remove the whistle on the body, then use Soft addition on the head and use the whistle to emphasize both the drum and piano note?
16. 00:54:273 - 01:10:804 - I believe you can place claps on every 2nd and 4th white tick of every stanza. You'll have to find another custom clap hitsound that fits, though.
17. 00:59:018 - Why not adding a circle here? Plays way better that way.
18. 01:01:314 (8,1) - Feels weird to play since the vocal and music here is quite strong and yet the spacing is small. Also, the flow doesn't really go well due to 01:01:008 (7,8)'s flow and 01:01:620 (1)'s curve.
19. 01:03:151 (1) - Add a finish to emphasize the instrument here? Also, I believe the spacing from 01:02:844 (3) should be larger compared to 01:03:151 (1,2,3). Right now, the spaces feel kinda... random.
20. 01:05:600 (4) - I believe you should add a repeat to follow the instrument at 01:05:906. I mean, it's okay to follow the vocal, but stronger instruments should be prioritized (at least mapped too).
21. 01:18:610 (9,10,1) - Rotate 30 degrees anti-clockwise and place it like this for a better flow?
22. 01:23:508 (6,7,1) - This can also be rotated CCW a bit. Don't worry about the 01:22:283 (4,1) stack; this doesn't affect anything while playing.
23. 01:28:559 (1) - Is the usage of the old slider algorithm (no, not gonna explain it; it's complicated man) intentional? (This is triggered by making a red node, then removing the red part and thus making the node a normal gray one, but with a different behaviour if dragged).
24. 01:33:457 - 01:34:579 - The entire section is pretty much off-beat. I can't figure out how is this part supposed to be timed though...
25. 01:38:661 (2,3,4) - This is pretty awkward to play due to the linear nature of the flow. Are you sure with this...?
26. 01:40:804 - Did you forget a finish? It's definitely needed here.
27. 01:45:242 (5,6,7) - Make it shaped like 01:44:783 (2,3,4) for aesthetic reasons? (2,3,4,5,6,7) looks weird overall due to the shape inconsistency.
28. 01:46:314 (4) - Forgot a clap?
29. 01:50:600 (6,1) - Swap NC? I think you know why. The combo pattern here doesn't really make sense, to be blunt.
30. 02:06:977 (3) - Ctrl+G for a better flow? Not really sure though; might as well play around with 02:06:977 (3,4,5) altogether.
31. 02:12:640 - Use the Soft addition so the finish used will be the Soft one? Fits better with the cymbal in the music.
32. 02:13:865 (5,6) - What's with the sudden decrease of spacing here? It feels pretty extreme and odd to hit the objects.
33. 02:16:926 (6) - Try moving to (240,60) so 02:16:314 (4,5,6) will look neater overall?
34. 02:19:834 (4) - Move to (186,196) so the spacing between 02:19:375 (3,5) will be consistent?
35. 02:19:987 (5,1) - Swap NC to follow the song's rhythm?
36. 02:32:079 - I believe a circle should be added here to follow the instrument's sound.
37. 02:34:681 (4,1) - Again, swap NC? Also, make a jump between 02:34:477 (3,4)? Doesn't make sense for this to have a really small spacing compared to 02:34:069 (1,2,3).
38. 02:35:906 - Add a whistle to follow the instrument, just like 02:35:293 (2,3,4)?
39. 02:37:742 (5) - Add an NC? I... just feel that it goes better with the strong instruments and the jump to this from 02:37:742 (5).
40. 02:38:049 - Also add a whistle to follow the instrument? (Uh okay, just realized that I already notified you about this before, but w/e.)
41. 03:17:232 - 03:21:212 - This entire part is just... awkward to play. Sorry, even I can't exactly pinpoint and explain what is wrong here. This just... feels extremely wrong to play because they... don't go along with the instruments and vocal. That's all I can say.
42. 03:52:896 (6,7,1) - Make something that flows like this so this part will be more comfortable to play?
43. 03:57:793 (11,1) - I believe the spacing here should be larger to emphasize the cymbal at (1).
44. 04:04:681 (5) - What is this slider following, exactly? Might as well extend it to a 1/2 slider.
45. 04:08:508 (4,5,1) - Inconsistent spacing. This is very, very bad to have in a spaced triplet.
46. 04:16:008 (5,6,7) - ^
47. 04:54:273 (1,2,3,4) - ...I'm seriously not sure about these 3/4 sliders. They don't really go along nicely with the song, especially (2) since you skipped a drum note at 04:54:732.
48. 04:56:110 (1,2,3,4) - Make the spacing consistent? I can't see a reason not to.
49. 04:59:171 (1,2,3) - Same as 04:54:273 (1,2,3,4).
50. 05:01:620 (1,2,3) - You can make the blanket at (1,2) better, and make (2,3)'s tails not overlap each other. That would be far better for the design.
51. 05:06:212 - Map this instrument sound? Feels odd to skip it with a slider.
52. 05:08:661 (1) - I can't see any reason for the NC... Remove it, I guess? Also add a whistle to follow the instrument?
53. 05:10:804 (4,5) - The sudden movement needed here can be confusing for players. Are you sure with this?
54. 05:18:457 (1) - Same as 05:08:661 (1).
55. 05:22:207 (3,4) - Suddenly using this kind of rhythm? It doesn't even match the music here. Combine them into a 1/1 slider, please?
56. 05:26:722 (1,2,3) - A 1/4 slider with a repeat will be more easier to follow and is nicely fitting the song. Try it?

Well... the map definitely needs a major improvement everywhere. It's kinda decent and actually playable, but it can be improved in every aspect possible. Hell, I'd say to remap this entirely (using what you've already known and what you've already learned during the modding process).

I'll leave the decision to you, though. Also, I believe this map will soon be able to turn into a cool one, so don't give up!

Good luck on the way!

EndlessShadow wrote:

Spent 3 Kudosu! here~

Good Luck for this.

Now : 6 Song Higher. = Need 6 More Kudos

Genocide wrote:

good luck ~

Kazamastar11 wrote:

Wtf ?

Perfect chart, nothing to mod ..

Sorry ! Take my star..

EndlessShadow wrote:

Why NOt using Combo Color :

White
Grey
Light Blue

Xinely wrote:

from m4m

• 
  General

1. i ever downloaded your map when it had SB but SB has gone here. do you remove the SB? yes i deleted the SB D: a lot of people didnt like it
2. The combo colour for 2nd and 3rd are really hurt to see for me because too bright when blend with the BG. how about http://puu.sh/c1VmI/8f69b646f1.png instead? ok ty for this
   

   Combo1 : 0,128,255
   Combo2 : 150,150,150
   Combo3 : 0,217,217

3. add "SliderBorder : 255,255,255" below of "Combo3" because you're using skin fixed
4. AiBat found some of unsnapped here http://puu.sh/c1VTT/970f8b8a9f.png fixed
5. also AiBat found missing and unused skin files http://puu.sh/c1W40/04c91f0659.png

fixed

• 
  Hana Emi

1. AR 9 is too fast for low bpm song here. i would say around AR 8,3 here I reduced it to ar8.7
2. OD 8 is too high, try OD7 instead, dont kill everyone lol fixed
3. 00:01:927 - nazi but to be honest this greenline is unnecessary, just remove it and make 00:01:621 - this red line with 20% volume fixed
4. 00:03:763 - 00:04:682 - 00:05:294 - 00:06:212 - 00:08:355 - 00:08:967 - 00:09:274 - 00:09:886 - you must to add whistle for those times, the piano sounds are really loud fixed
5. 00:13:559 - missing finish sound fixed
6. 00:29:860 (1) - replace with whistle sound here. definitely a piano sound ;-; ok fixed
7. 00:22:284 (4) - some of nazi but try move to 192,240. design feels better here , flow as well hmm fixed
8. 00:26:876 (5) - maybe make 1/4 slider repeat instead since 00:27:029 - it has drum sound same as both blue ticks here yeah your right i hear the drums there, fixed
9. 00:46:927 (1,3) - why whistles sounds for these slider's bodies? imo the sounds are really noisy here ok removed them
10. 00:54:120 (6,7) - nazi but if possible make the better and smoother flow here, example http://puu.sh/c1XUV/67f8c437f3.jpg fixed
11. 01:02:845 (3,4) - i would say to swap the rhythm here. so you can emphasize that "psssh" cymbal with a little jump yes i agree, fixed
12. 01:06:518 (1,4) - it would be nicer if you make same shape for these sliders, consistency is needed imo fixed
13. 01:10:192 (4) - better to keep the consistency of spacing here since the musics are almost same from here, previous, to next. move to 248,184 fixed
14. well let me to the point for all. The flows are nice, i love it. But most of the jumps here are too far and feel forced (i asked a BAT who can play standard and he said like that. oh same taste with me too), the song is calm and low so imo reduce the jumps would be nice here. and the hitsounds are really plain here. usally hitsound pattern is 1st 3rd whiteticks are whistles and 2nd 4th whiteticks are claps. but you can add more whistles on red ticks here if you want to make it more awesome

Good Luck ~

[Nemesis] wrote:

Why.... why is it still unapproved????

Forsaiken wrote:

[Nemesis] wrote:

Why.... why is it still unapproved????

Because he has not changed to pending Beatmap

skinnyjimmy wrote:

Forsaiken wrote:

Because he has not changed to pending Beatmap

How do i change it to pending? I only have 1 difficulty so it wont let me do it from the editor

1. what with all those timing lines? you just need one with 98 bpm at 00:00:386 offset, you can check my map https://osu.ppy.sh/s/180366 or the ranked version of this: https://osu.ppy.sh/s/181430
2. There are a few pots where the SB load get too hight, will be nice if you check with some people that are good at SB, ex: Damnae
3. Missing Skin Files : spinner-background.png, spinner-circle.png, spinner-metre.png, spinner-osu.png
4. Unused Image Files hit50k.png, ranking-accuracy@2x.png, sb\burst.png, spinner-bottom.png, spinner-glow.png, spinner-middle.png, spinner-top.png

1. 00:01:927 (1,2) - overall I'll like if you work more with hitsounds, place likes 00:01:927 (1,2) - are really nice with whistles, since there is a piano sound that fit a lot with the soft default whistle, there are a lot more spots where you can add them
2. 00:03:763 is whistle on slider body on purpose? cuz it doesn't sound nice
3. 00:09:580 add whistle here too is exactly the same sound as 00:09:274 (1,3) -
4. 00:11:110 (5,3) - ugly overlap
5. 00:10:804 (4) - also there are alot of slider that end following nothing in the music, evenif this is considered as rankable, it doesn't make sense with the song, in my opinion
6. 00:13:253 (3) - this one is ending at 1/8 for not reason
7. 00:14:631 there are some beats like this one that doesn't follow nothing significative in the song, the problem with this is that you lose the emphasis of the ones that are prominents like 00:14:784 (4,5,1,2) -
8. 00:15:549 ^
9. 00:18:381 this beat is not following nothing in the song
10. 00:25:728 (4) - ^
11. 00:25:804 (1) - unsnapped
12. 02:33:304 (5) - this slider is starting with nothing in the music
13. I don't see the point of pointing the same stuff again and again, to be honest your placement and design is really nice, but your rhythm doesn't fit this song, I want you to go again to your map and check the rhythms, try using 50% or 25% if you improve the rhythm in this mapset it will be really great, actually this have too much overmap. Of course you can ask more opinions from other BATS. anyways GL with this

Fuseka wrote:

Yeah make it more easy and remove the storyboard then you ll probably be able to rank it.
But no one is gonna play ur map cuz there are already 2 boring maps of this ranked.