Shinxyn wrote:

Haha TakoLuka as hitcircle~ when adding a hitcircle.png, always add hitcircleoverlay.png as well.
Add "samfree" to source (the song's composer), and remove "megurine" since thats already in the artist
Your placement's pretty good for a first map~

Avoid adding so many timing panels until you know what your doing... and since this song is pretty out, the volume changes you applied are hardly noticable and unneeded.... plus 02:36:18's timing panel, there is an option to .5x your bpm using the yellow/green timing panel instead of red.

Normal and Hard are almost the same level of difficulty... Normal can be much easier, try increasing the circle size and reduce some notes

I heard a clap, a lonely clap, in Normal, which could be removed or followed up
Pointing some technical issues-

Normal- try avoiding using 1/4 as much as possible, and there are lots of extra beats for this diff...
Try adding new combo when there is a gap in her singing or when you switch to following music instead of vocal
00:01:87 (1,2) - this is offbeat
01:01:12 (4) - too close to last note
01:04:49 - clap...? this is the only clap? remove or add more
03:25:12 (1) - the spinner, AUTO must be able to get at least 2000 bonus from spinners or else its unrankable

Hard- Same as Normal in terms of new combo and 1/4... and there are some extra beats in this, but its fine here
..... redo the claps, they don't really make much sense >:
00:22:69 (7) - the repeat is on a 1/4, which it doesn't have to be
00:57:56 (3) - end 1/4 earlier
01:00:56 (5) - messed up spacing... its kinda a trap since you were following vocal too
01:42:94 (2) - barely see this repeat
Sometimes you follow vocal but cut off a bit in some places, recheck what your mapping to, and make it clear when you change it around... (spacing or new combo or hitsounds)

This looks pretty good, but will need a bit more mods

osu_CN_yaya wrote:

首先，map的错误：
第一条绿线跟红线重合了，要删掉。
offset不对，你的重音全都对到红线上去了，4分拍的map,重音应该对应到比较长的那根白线。

hard
00:16:69 (6) - 变成一个Note
00:18:75 (6) - slider改为一拍，然后后面半拍加一个Note
00:22:87 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1238
00:25:12 (4) - 变成Note 。 做个小jump不错
01:00:94 - 加个note
01:08:06 (1) - 延长1/4
01:09:56 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1239
01:39:00 (7) - new combo
01:44:25 (1) - 不要用spinner
01:57:56 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1240
02:00:19 - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1241
02:29:62 (4) - 少折一下
02:34:87 (8) - 改成Note
02:55:87 (10) - new combo
02:58:87 (18) - new combo
03:13:50 (8) - 太近


normal
00:29:06 (1) - 太近
02:27:00 (1) - 不要用spinner
其他的还可以


你要清楚一点：你是在跟节奏作图还是在跟唱声作图，不要一半一半。
慎用spinner，不是拖长音或者是无音或者是很适合放spinner的地方，不要用spinner
我给你的所有例子都不要管我的排列，我只是在放节奏。

anyway,这是你第一张，很不错了

1. osb文件不需要,删掉再full submit
2. Audio lead-in Hard跟其他文件不同,是1952ms,其他两个diff.是1996ms
   打开各个难度的osu文件,在[General]下找到
   
   [General]
   AudioFilename: ruka.mp3
   AudioLeadIn: 1952
   PreviewTime: 181314
   Countdown: 0
   SampleSet: Normal
   StackLeniency: 0.5
   Mode: 0
   LetterboxInBreaks: 1
   把1952那个地方都改成2000吧,也就是2秒,统一一下

Breeze wrote:

我路过的...

[General]

1. osb文件不需要,删掉再full submit
2. Audio lead-in Hard跟其他文件不同,是1952ms,其他两个diff.是1996ms
   打开各个难度的osu文件,在[General]下找到
   
   [General]
   AudioFilename: ruka.mp3
   AudioLeadIn: 1952
   PreviewTime: 181314
   Countdown: 0
   SampleSet: Normal
   StackLeniency: 0.5
   Mode: 0
   LetterboxInBreaks: 1
   把1952那个地方都改成2000吧,也就是2秒,统一一下

note没什么问题

star

虽然我个人并不喜欢前面没消失的note挡住后面要出现的note

MoonFragrance wrote:

[Easy]
00:21:752 (2) - align with 00:20:064 (1) fixed
00:37:877 (2) - 3 grids down on grid lv 3 fixed
00:56:064 (1) - nice slider, but so confusing to easy changed another one
01:56:064 (1) - ^ changed to spinner
02:08:064 (1) - ^ should i at least heave one? lol

[Normal]
00:14:064 (1,2,3,4) - so confusing spacing to normal fixed
00:26:064 (1,2,3,4) - ^ fixed
00:54:752 (4,5,6) - make a straight line fixed
03:09:189 (5,6,7) - ^ i think this place isn't neccesary to change

[Hard]
00:02:252 (2,3) - separate them sorry for my careless...
00:05:252 (2,3) - ^ ^
00:08:252 (2,3) - ^ ^
00:11:252 (2,3) - ^ ^
00:22:127 (6) - spacing fixed
00:52:127 (8) - align with 00:51:377 (5) fixed

[Insane]
00:00:565 (1) - delete new combo fixed

pete2528 wrote:

:D

nice

Matsuri wrote:

Kawaii~* > w <

+Star

Estelle18 wrote:

Luka Luka >w<~

Shinxyn wrote:

two more diffs since way back then..
Why are there two offsets? remove the second?(then resnap) lol I will fix it

Easy- lots of 1/2 beats make it kinda hard to follow, but it's not much of an issue
00:56:064 (1,2) - this is the only 1/2 notes next to each other in this map, it really ruins the pace though, it could still work if you just remove (1).. yeah..
02:36:189 (5) - either map the rest of the song or end in a less awkward place (like at the break) i think i will delete the last part

Normal-
00:56:064 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - add some claps around here? since it seems to be lacking.. yeah,i will 0.0
01:08:064 (1) to the break - the claps just ended suddenly...? >: add some? yeah
01:34:502 (7) - new combo will be fixed
01:36:189 (11) - remove one repeat? yea~it sounds better
02:08:064 (1) to the break - same as 01:08:064 ^as 01:08:064
02:44:064 (1,2,3,4,1) - really clustered, couldn't tell that (3,4) were apart >_< it's my fault...
03:21:189 (4) - new combo? will be fixed

Hard- wee, good~
00:13:127 (7,8) - add finish? will be fixed
00:43:877 (9) - right a bit (its not grid snapped, but not "in line") lol how do you find it out...awesome shin...yeah i will fix it
00:56:814 (3) - add a clap to either side of slider? will be fixed
02:10:127 (1,2,3,4) - space these equally? will be fixed
02:29:627 (4) - remove one repeat? maybe i think it would not be better for those sliders after it
03:23:064 - O-o odd volume jump~ i will decrese a level

Insane- EH........ 17mil!? I don't think its "hard enough" to justify the score >_<~
either make it easier (.... reduce a total of two ticks off any of the difficulty settings gets this to a reasonable 13mil)
or make it harder...~! (OD+1, HP+1?), making it to 13mil would be the safer route~
No grid snap~ some arrangements could look better, but nothing important at this speed
Don't think you missed any hitsounds for this diff

well... i will remap it

~Here's your star

i think i will upload until i finish the remap for insane

NatsumeRin wrote:

[General]
Add kiai time. note这么深色还是可以加的。。我只加了最后一段

[Easy]
01:38:250 - add a note No,这样会打乱后面三个circle
01:43:500 (5) - finish. fixed
01:44:250 (1) - the spinner is more than 5 secs, try to make it shorter. fixed
另外就是我觉得Easy是不是不要用太多弱拍音= =。。。这个是个人看法 我也知道有些地方用得不好。。不过暂时想不出方法解决

[Normal]
00:15:561 - add a note fixed
00:16:124 (7) - make the slider's hitsound <Normal-Clap-Normal-Clap> and many places like here. nice hitsound
00:36:186 (5) - don't like this 1/2 slider, according to the song. fixed
01:44:249 (1) - a too long spinner. and the time is different from [Easy] (though 0.001), but i think there may be a timing difference between diffs. fixed
03:06:377 (1,2,3,4) - maybe need spacing a bit. fixed

[Hard]
00:00:186 - 00:13:680 all normal sound is boring.
then all the way is <Normal-Whistle-Nomal-Whistle-.....>....change some of them 我还是不想加..normal-whistle有点烦人，clap又觉得不好
before 03:00:000, i can't find any 1/4 notes...maybe need some= =
03:02:627 (3,4) switch them, now the 1/4 is kind of meaningless. fixed
03:06:189 (3) new combo here instead of the next (1) fixed
03:06:377 (1,2,3....9) maybe use new combos frequently to make it easier to read. 我只有两种颜色，不觉得newcombo多比较好

and here's my star~

jamesleao wrote:

Hard:
00:01:124 (5) - 后面加个finish hitsound如何
Normal:
Good
Easy:
00:49:874 加一段KIAI如何

还有就是normal和hard的高潮还可以加一些KIAI（个人意见）

Good work

VanMoNky wrote:

I wanna make an Insane diff for this. May I?

Sushi971 wrote:

Add more lead in please.(set it to ~2sec)

[Easy]
00:20:061 (1,2) - align?
02:13:874 (x) - even if there are no notes, make kiai finish please~

[Normal]
Fine
03:25:877 (x) - even if there are no notes, make kiai finish please~

[Hard]
02:35:436 (4) - put it a little to the right to go for perfect diamond
02:47:252 (2,4) - align?


nice one~

DJPop wrote:

Set audio-lead-in max.

~Easy~
00:33:186 (3) - move up 5 grids & right 7 grids (Lv3)

~Normal~
00:25:499 (1) - move down 1 grid (Lv2)
02:36:186 (1) - silence the slidertick

~Hard~
03:25:877 - end Kiai here


+Star

Tonoko wrote:

好好啊...hard的感觉很像Ultimate的风格 > <

lukaluka

edit 对了顺便一提 那些曲线slider最好把中点定在头尾的中间,这样会好看一点 <---happy30 说的 /逃

哈~不如让monkey酱把这个gif放在右下角一直摆啊摆的 >w<

VanMoNky wrote:

For a suggestion, change the comboburst. Luka's hair is cut badly.

VanMoNky wrote:

EDIT : no kudosu for this post. After I put my diff here, I will mod your map.

VanMoNky wrote:

As your request. Sorry for the delay.

Read this first for the icon explanation.
- [?] Asking for a second thought.
- [!] Fatal error. You have to fix this for sure.
- [No icon] Only a suggestion.

[General]
Move "samfree" to tags. Move "vocaloid" to source. If necessary, change "vocaloid" to "Vocaloid2". fixed

[Easy]
Add some clap pattern. Clap fit to the song. fixed
--------------------------
If I'm the one who map this song with this style, I will do like this.
00:26:061 (1,2) - Move forward one 1/2 tick.
00:29:061 (1,2) - ^
00:30:374 (3) - Move forward one 1/2 tick. Reduce one 1/2 tick.
00:32:249 (1,2,3) - Move forward one 1/2 tick.
01:26:249 (1,2) - ^
01:29:248 (1,2) - ^
01:32:248 (1,2) - ^
The current beat is kinda hard to follow for me. I have remapped these
--------------------------
00:37:499 (1) - Add finish. fixed
00:49:874 (1) - Move it closer to the middle of the spinner. Add finish. I changed from another way
01:01:874 (1) - ^ fixed
01:37:499 (1) - ^ fixed
01:56:061 (1) - Replace this with some notes or sliders. finally i fixed lol
02:08:061 (1) - ^ ^

[Normal]
01:03:374 (5,6) - Swap them. fixed
01:37:499 - Map this break. i think normal level should have more break lol

[Hard]
01:40:499 (1) - Replace this with some notes or sliders. fixed
02:25:499 (1) - ^ i prefer the spinner 0.0

Starred.

adron zhero wrote:

I didin't liked the BG(seems that she is staring at me) well..this BG is the song's original picture in NicoNico-Douga

Easy:
>>1:26:249 add circle
>>1:26:811 ^
>>1:29:249 ^
>>1:29:811 ^
>>1:32:249 ^
>>1:32:811 ^
(It's strange without these circles, but it's your choice) if i put these in it will be an easy+

Normal:
>>I saw that severals circles are with wrong spacing.You can add sections with diferent BPM if you want to add diferent spacing(I'm not saying that i don't like diferent spacing in one beatmap, but correct spacing is vital[for me at least ]).

do you mean the slow part?i think using different spacing can make beatmap pretty,close notes will let people feel the rhythm is slow

Hard:
>>Same thing then Normal.

Monky's Beat:
>>Same thing as Normal and Hard

Very good beatmap

adron zhero wrote:

Monky's Beat:
>>I saw that severals circles are with wrong spacing.You can add sections with diferent BPM if you want to add diferent spacing(I'm not saying that i don't like diferent spacing in one beatmap, but correct spacing is vital[for me at least ]).

happy30 wrote:

[MoNky's BeaT]
reminds me to djpop ><
no errors, but due the score, this diff could only be approved D:

fartownik wrote:

[MoNky's BeaT]
Yeah, this one got DJPopped (01:41:249 (6)).
[Oh God. I made it by autodidact ;__;]
The only thing I can say is that following the example will never give much things to you
Nazing~
01:40:874 (4) - New combo?
01:41:624 (7) - ^
[03:52:499] - End the kiai here.

Dang, a tip: If you end this difficulty there where [Hard] is ending and you reduce the HP Drain by
1 tick, you'll get a rankable score (14mln).

Overmapped, but mapped well.
+star.

happy30 wrote:

mod

fartownik wrote:

mod

Leorda wrote:

NI HAO!

[Easy]
00:26:061 (1) - Allign with 4 from left, make sure this slider not overlapped with previous slider
01:40:686 (1) - Make parallel or curve?
01:41:624 (2) - ^
01:42:374 (3) - ^
02:00:374 (3) - ^

[Normal]
00:18:749 (5) - Make symetric?
00:51:374 (4) - Make parallel or curve?
00:52:124 (6) - ^

[Hard]
01:56:811 (5) - Make parallel?
01:57:749 (8) - ^

Leorda wrote:

Don't forget the VanMonky Logo, LOL

Leorda wrote:

[MoNky's Beat]
I'm really want to say, you're are a overmapping mania in Indonesia
[I really want to say, you are a player with wrong grammar mania in Indonesia lol lol (kidding)]
00:01:874 (1) - Offscreen
00:30:186 (4,5,6,7) - ^
00:39:374 (5) - ^
00:45:749 (3) - ^
01:52:311 (3,4) - ^
Offscreen means when a note couldn't be clicked on play mode. Since all my notes are still clickable, I don't change it.
01:55:874 (8) - Add a finish hitsound
And do some hitsound fixes. Thanks!
Don't forget the VanMonky Logo, LOL
lol no no. No need. But if they ask to, I want to make a Monkurine Luka with Luka's hair on MoNky's head.

Good Eurobeat
STAR

Aakiha wrote:

good map
shoot star

Bikko wrote:

I love this map

1. Max score is above +18 mil. Unrankable!
2. 00:41:249 (6) - New combo since it indicates a BPM change. I recommend even adding a little SB in here to let people know about the speed or something.
3. 00:41:999 (9) - ^ and 01:41:249 (6) - ^ and 01:41:999 (9) - ^
4. 00:48:749 (3) - New combo since it's a change in spacing?
5. 01:48:749 (3) - ^
6. 02:36:749 (3) - ^
7. 02:49:124 (9) - Suggestion: Possibly a new combo here?

LKs wrote:

prefect now
so cool skin.
hope be ranked~~

Mafiamaster wrote:

[Monky's Beat]
Max score is above +18 mil. Unrankable!
00:41:249 (6) - New combo since it indicates a BPM change. I recommend even adding a little SB in here to let people know about the speed or something.
00:41:999 (9) - ^ and 01:41:249 (6) - ^ and 01:41:999 (9) - ^
00:48:749 (3) - New combo since it's a change in spacing?
01:48:749 (3) - ^
02:36:749 (3) - ^
02:49:124 (9) - Suggestion: Possibly a new combo here?

VanMoNky wrote:

Fixed some combo mod. And I don't think it needs a warning. Now even the score fixed to 16+ mil. Yell hurrah!

Mafiamaster wrote:

Looking good now~
Bubbled!

osuplayer111 wrote:

Awesome map, really. But I have to pop for some fix.

[Normal]

4,49 stars Normal? Crazy! Rename it to "Normal+".

02:36:186 (1) - Don't silence completely notes, please. Seems weird.
02:47:999 (4,5) - ^

[MoNky's BeaT]

Great difficulty. Love it.


00:41:249 (1) & 00:41:999 (1) - Can you add an SB warning for this sliders, please?
01:41:249 (1) - & 01:41:999 (1) - ^

VanMoNky wrote:

Well, is it good enough..?

abalee wrote:

consider to decrease the score next time.

Ranked now.

abalee wrote:

consider to decrease the score next time.

Ranked now.

VanMoNky wrote:

abalee wrote:

consider to decrease the score next time.

Ranked now.

Yes I'll remember that.

And congratulation samipale!
I proud of you.

NatsumeRin wrote:

恭喜= =

Tonoko wrote:

;)