Satellite wrote:

[General]

1. 02:51:901 - この位置にbpm175で赤線を追加しないといけないかも？ちょっとわからないのでBATに尋ねてみてください。

1. 00:50:701 (8) - この周辺から曲調が静かになるので大きいジャンプは合わないと思います。付け加えて言うと、大きいドラムの音に合わせてジャンプを作っている00:50:187 (5,6,7) - よりスペーシングが広いのは少し変に感じました。

Satellite wrote:

Hi.

[General]

1. 02:51:901 - この位置にbpm175で赤線を追加しないといけないかも？ちょっとわからないのでBATに尋ねてみてください。　　fixed

[Normal]

1. 00:09:128 (2) - bpmが変わっている場所なのでNcをいれてもいいかもしれません。
2. 00:42:644 (3) - Ctrl + Gの流れはどうですか？
3. 01:12:130 (1,2,3,4,5) - Down beatで拾ってるリズムが少し難しいかもしれません。こんな感じで試してみてください。
   
4. 01:16:930 (3,5) - 裏の音でなんかなっているのにあわせてwhistleいれませんか？合うと思います。
5. 01:54:987 (2) - リバースのところ何もないのはさびしいのでclapをいれてみたり？
6. 02:20:187 (3) - できれば手前のスライダーにかぶらないほうがベターです。
7. 02:22:759 (3,4) - 裏の音でなんかなっているのにあわせてwhistleいれませんか？合うと思います。
8. 02:50:702 (4) - 後ろのclapは合わないと思います。
9. 02:54:644 (1) - リバースのところにもwhistleをいれてあげるといいでしょう。
10. 03:06:816 (3) - 開始と最後にもwhistleを追加してみては。
11. 03:50:873 (3) - add finish.
12. 03:51:216 (4) - add finish (head)
    All fixed

[Hard]

1. 00:55:330 (1,2,3,4) - 少し叩きづらいリズムと思いました。これを試してみてください。
   
2. 01:21:730 (3,1) - ちょっとこれも叩きづらいように思いました。歌詞にそって、これはどうですか？
   
3. 02:01:159 (1,2,3,4,5) - もっと曲に沿ってこんな感じにしてみてはどうでしょうか？
   
4. 02:27:902 (1,2,3,4,5) - 72度ずつ回転(Ctrl+Shift+R)させると綺麗な5角形が作れるので、よかったら作り直してみては。
   All fixed

ざっと見て、こんな感じです、私から見て特に問題がありそうな箇所は見当たらないです。
Nice mapです、Rankedまで頑張ってください~　star

KSHR wrote:

はじめまして

Satellite wrote:

[General]

1. 02:51:901 - この位置にbpm175で赤線を追加しないといけないかも？ちょっとわからないのでBATに尋ねてみてください。

downbeatの位置を正す必要があるので、Satelliteさんの指摘した通り 02:51:901 - に別の赤線が必要です
その位置にある緑線は音量変更でしか使っていないので、それは削除して新しく追加した赤線でその音量変更を設定すればパーフェクトです

赤線チェック中にInsaneで一箇所だけ気になったので、

1. 00:50:701 (8) - この周辺から曲調が静かになるので大きいジャンプは合わないと思います。付け加えて言うと、大きいドラムの音に合わせてジャンプを作っている00:50:187 (5,6,7) - よりスペーシングが広いのは少し変に感じました。

no kds


Good luck with your mapping, Chirony

Kocari wrote:

Tari and Kocari's Modding Queue
You requested and here I am
Don't usually go out of my way to do a long song like this but it's been a while since I modded and thought this song was nice

[Normal]

SPOILER

00:20:016 (4) - Could possibly move that slider over to the right or formulate somehow to get the next slider and that note to have the slider start point in the center of the slider

00:37:159 (1) - Slider not at the furthest point using distance snapper

00:54:301 (2,3,1) - Trying making this section a little more symmetrical possibly like this http://puu.sh/7usZz.jpg and having the NC slider arc like the other one pointed a little to the next note

00:58:759 (4) - Move a little to the left to be in the center of the slider

00:59:101 (1,2) - Trying having them more symmetrical like this http://puu.sh/7ut6b.jpg and try to DS

01:03:902 (2,1,2) - Only my preference of changing notes around to something like this http://puu.sh/7uta0.jpg and leading the next sequence to something like this and in the pictures DS already applied http://puu.sh/7utc2.jpg

01:38:873 (2) - Try to straighten this note out instead of having it a little slanted

01:46:073 (1,2,3) - Again only my preference but this looks good also http://puu.sh/7utmo.jpg and leading to this http://puu.sh/7utnf.jpg and http://puu.sh/7utov.jpg DS already applied

Notes where I feel should be at because it sounds a whole lot better with them going there and syncing with the snares because you did that with the sequence after that so why not try it before too
[*] 01:57:730
01:59:101
02:00:473
02:44:359

02:04:930 (1,3) - Try to make those straighter with that sequence seems a tad out of line to me

02:40:244 (3) - Move that 2 unites down to make it look a little better

02:51:902 (1) - Not directly in the center of that slider
All fixed

Nothing else wrong or out of place so it's good

I was feeling a little tired I promise you I will finish this up tomorrow

Raiku wrote:

Raiku mod!

[Normal]

01:03:902 (2,2) - This is a noticeable overlap, I suggest this instead, nice blankets (http://puu.sh/7uGPJ.jpg), (http://puu.sh/7uGQW.jpg). hmm... no change

02:12:816 (1) - I feel that flipping this slider over proves a nice blanket and makes better flow (http://puu.sh/7uGXs.jpg).

02:30:987 (4) - I personally recommend making this section flow better by rotating this slider on its selection centre at about 45 degrees (http://puu.sh/7uGZl.png), so it looks like this (http://puu.sh/7uGZW.jpg). I felt it played better when testing.

03:37:844 (1) - I would consider making this slider blanket the middle note before it like so (http://puu.sh/7uH7L.jpg).

03:54:644 (1) - I think that this slider will play very well and add a little more variety to the flow where I think that the same curve repeats too much, if you inverted the curve like so (http://puu.sh/7uHdO.jpg).
All fixed

[Hard]

00:32:016 (1) - I think you can make this blanket more even like this for aesthetics (http://puu.sh/7uHiJ.jpg).

00:50:016 (2,3,4,1) - This overlap is a little too conspicuous, maybe go for this (http://puu.sh/7uHob.jpg).

00:56:359 (1) - I feel that this slider could blanket the head of the next one (http://puu.sh/7uIdj.jpg).

01:05:444 (4) - You can counter this overlap by stacking this note on top of the space where the note that it overlaps was a little bit like I have in this screenshot (http://puu.sh/7uIP1.jpg).

01:56:359 (4,5) - I would consider altering the positions of these notes to create a neater passage into the next section with a blanket like I have in this alternative (http://puu.sh/7uISG.jpg).

03:48:644 (3) - I reckon you could make this slider blanket the head of the preceding one for this section (http://puu.sh/7uJ3J.jpg).
All fixed


[Insane]

00:29:444 (2,3) - I highly recommend when coming out of a streamy section to a slower part, you space accordingly. So with these two, distance snap will be enough to space them out to a degree as not to have the player to confuse them for more 1/4 notes (http://puu.sh/7uKmF.jpg). Try this instead?

00:30:987 (2) - This is a small change, but consider lowering the tail point of this slider as to make the blanket appear more centralized and even a little something like this (http://puu.sh/7uKnP.jpg).

01:45:044 - At this point, I think 2 sliders are more relevant than 4 notes in a row with no prior 1/3 usage as it gives the player the chance to avoid unnecessary 100s. While I think the 1/3 is great, I think you should make a point to introduce this timing to them prior otherwise there may be some confusion that would lead to a frustrating miss. My alternative is this (http://puu.sh/7uKyb.jpg).
Here is a very difficult problem. I like now position but I think also good you pointed out. I want to keep.
I think use the opinion of guys as reference.

03:32:873 (5,6,7) - These three notes I highly recommend evenly spacing out.
All fixed

A well made Insane, good luck with BAT attention!

Gamu wrote:

遅くなってごめんなさい。

明日 postできるとおもいます。

先に、☆だけ投げときます！

2. i think normal part's hit sound is little big some parts(00:40:930 to 01:26:530) (01:45:044 to 02:28:587), (02:40:587 to 03:13:501) (03:32:701 to END). better volume down 10~20%

1. 00:26:873 (2) - move slider's middle point 416, 180
2. 00:38:187 (3) - move to 280, 96
3. 02:47:101 - put note
4. 02:48:816 (1,2) - i recommend this one http://puu.sh/7vVmt.jpg
5. 03:11:102 (2) - slider's middle point to 304, 240 and end point to 284, 288
6. NICE JOB for Normal

1. 00:02:776 (1) - move slider's end to 288,264
2. 00:44:016 (1,2,3) - make clearly and distance same
3. 01:46:759 (4) - Ctrl G
4. 01:52:073 - put note? your choice
5. 01:53:101 (2,4) - i don't recommend overlapping like this
6. 02:50:530 (2,3,4,5) - make distance same
7. Feel like insane

1. 00:33:730 (2,3) - don't overlap plz
2. 01:21:044 (1) - move to 224, 220
3. 01:45:044 (1,2,3,4) - better change to slider
4. 02:14:359 (1,2) - better make not to overlap
5. 03:11:614 (1,2,3) - user can be confused make like this http://puu.sh/7vWO8.jpg
6. 03:56:530 (2,3) - make same shape

Neta wrote:

From PM mod request

[General]

2. i think normal part's hit sound is little big some parts(00:40:930 to 01:26:530) (01:45:044 to 02:28:587), (02:40:587 to 03:13:501) (03:32:701 to END). better volume down 10~20%　　down 10%

[Normal]

1. 00:26:873 (2) - move slider's middle point 416, 180
2. 00:38:187 (3) - move to 280, 96
3. 02:47:101 - put note
4. 02:48:816 (1,2) - i recommend this one http://puu.sh/7vVmt.jpg
5. 03:11:102 (2) - slider's middle point to 304, 240 and end point to 284, 288
6. NICE JOB for Normal
   All fixed

[Hard]

1. 00:02:776 (1) - move slider's end to 288,264
2. 00:44:016 (1,2,3) - make clearly and distance same
3. 01:46:759 (4) - Ctrl G
4. 01:52:073 - put note? your choice
5. 01:53:101 (2,4) - i don't recommend overlapping like this
6. 02:50:530 (2,3,4,5) - make distance same
7. Feel like insane　　hm... I'll consider it
   All fixed

[Insane]

1. 00:33:730 (2,3) - don't overlap plz
2. 01:21:044 (1) - move to 224, 220
3. 01:45:044 (1,2,3,4) - better change to slider
4. 02:14:359 (1,2) - better make not to overlap
5. 03:11:614 (1,2,3) - user can be confused make like this http://puu.sh/7vWO8.jpg
6. 03:56:530 (2,3) - make same shape
   All fixed

GOOD LUCK~

1. TagsにAngel Noteを追加しましょー
2. ローマ字のタイトルに ","　をつけたほうがいいかもです。　Kanransha ~ Anohi to, Kinou to Kyou to Ashita to ~
3. PreviewTimeがずれているので、212872にしてください。
4. 無音のsoft-sliderslide4が追加されてないことが気になりました。1,2,3と追加しているのに、4だけ追加されてないのはおかしいと思います。

1. 00:35:787 (2) - 綺麗に00:33:730 (3)を囲むことができます！
   
   image

   
2. 00:49:159 (1) - 始点のwhistleと中点のclapを入れ替えたほうが自然です。
3. 00:51:559 (3) - ここにNew comboいれてください。
4. 00:52:930 (1) - 逆にここを外してください。
5. 00:56:359 (4) - new comboを追加！
6. 01:09:730 (4) - finishよりもclapを入れたほうが、曲に合うと思います。次のfinish音を強調できます。
7. 01:12:644 (2,3,4,5) - 初心者にとってリズムがつかみにくいので、こちらのリズムを試してみてください～
   
   image

   
8. 01:12:644 (2) - リズムが変わるので、ここからnew comboを始めたほうがいいです。01:12:130 (1)のnew comboを外しといてください。
   上の画像はnew combo弄ってないです。
9. 01:44:359 (1,2,3) - このような感じにしてみる？
   
   image

   
10. 01:58:073 (1) - 始点にwhistleが欲しいです。
11. 01:59:444 (1) - ^
12. 02:20:187 (3,4) - リズムが変わっているので、もしかしたらスライダーに変えることをおすすめしたい。
13. 02:28:244 (4) - backに音がありますので、clapを始点、中点、終点、全部につけるといいかも。
14. 02:29:616 (2) - 始点にS:C1のfinishを追加すると、いい感じです。

1. 00:06:151 (1) - CTRL+Gしたほうが流れ良くなります。
2. 00:23:102 (4) - 始点clap入れようー
3. 00:26:530 (3) - ^
4. 00:27:216 (6) - ^
5. 00:27:902 (3) - ^
6. 00:39:387 (4) - drum-clapを追加かな？
7. 00:51:216 (1) - whistle (始点)
8. 00:52:930 (3) - ^ (circle)
9. 00:53:616 (1) - ^ (始点)
10. 00:54:301 (2) - ^ (^)
11. 00:54:816 (3) - ^ (^)
12. 00:55:330 (4) - ここのwhistleを削除し、00:55:501 (1)の始点にwhistleを追加。
13. 01:56:016 (3) - 終点 drum-clap.
14. 01:56:359 (4) - ここにもdrum-clap.
15. 01:56:530 (5) - ここにはdrum-clapなくてもいいと思うけど、音量を下げて追加してもいいね。
16. 01:56:702 (1) - ここの終点whistleを削除
17. 01:57:387 (3) - whistle (始点)
18. 01:58:416 (2) - ^ (終点)
19. 01:59:444 (1) - ^ (始点)
20. 02:00:644 (5) - ^ (始点)
21. 02:01:330 (1) - ^ (始点と終点)
22. 02:29:616 (1) - 終点のclapが浮いてると思います。もしつけるとしたら S:C2のclapにするべきだと思います。
23. 03:31:673 (5) - 始点、中点、終点にclapを追加。
24. 03:50:873 (1,2,3) - clapがほしい！
25. 03:52:244 (5) - finish!
26. 03:52:330 (1) - clapが抜けてます。

1. 00:10:369 (4) - 終点のwhistleを削除して、00:10:783 (5)に追加するほうがいいです。
2. 00:23:102 (4) - clapが欲しいかな。
3. 00:26:187 (1) - ^ (中点)
4. 00:27:902 (2) - ^ (^)
5. 00:28:416 (4,5) - この二つにもclap.
6. 00:39:387 (4) - ここも！
7. 00:39:559 (1) - 終点にfinishかな。
8. 00:45:387 (1) - ここは始点にfinish.
9. 01:22:416 (2,3,4) - この三つにclap!
10. 01:23:444 (1) - 真ん中においてもいいのですが、01:22:759 (4)と重ねたほうが綺麗かな。
11. 01:34:416 (1) - スライダーよりも、ここは連打おきたいなー
    
    image

    
12. 01:45:044 (1,2,3,4) - clapとか、なにかしら音つけたほうがいいです。音量でかいと思うので、45%くらいになるといいかもね。
13. 01:45:730 (1) - finishが欲しい.
14. 01:51:216 (1) - ^ (始点)
15. 01:56:187 (7) - clap
16. 01:56:701 (1) - 始点finishがいると思います。
17. 02:15:559 (4) - clap-
18. 02:28:244 (1,2) - 始点、終点、サークルにclapね
19. 02:29:616 (1) - 強い音があるので、始点にfinish.
20. 02:35:102 (1) - ^ (whistleの代わりに)
21. 03:10:759 (5) - clap!
22. 03:12:816 (3) - ^ (始点)
23. 03:13:159 (4,5) - 始点、終点、サークルにclapね
24. 03:50:873 (2,3,4) - 三つにclap~
25. 03:52:244 (1) - finishかな
26. 03:57:044 (3) - 終点にclap
27. 03:57:730 (1) - 始点finish!
28. 04:02:873 (3) - 近すぎかな。もっと離れさせたほうがいいかも。

Gamu wrote:

こんにちはー

おそくなりました orz

[General]

1. TagsにAngel Noteを追加しましょー
2. ローマ字のタイトルに ","　をつけたほうがいいかもです。　Kanransha ~ Anohi to, Kinou to Kyou to Ashita to ~
3. PreviewTimeがずれているので、212872にしてください。
4. 無音のsoft-sliderslide4が追加されてないことが気になりました。1,2,3と追加しているのに、4だけ追加されてないのはおかしいと思います。
   All fixed

[Normal]

1. 00:35:787 (2) - 綺麗に00:33:730 (3)を囲むことができます！
   
   image

   
2. 00:49:159 (1) - 始点のwhistleと中点のclapを入れ替えたほうが自然です。
3. 00:51:559 (3) - ここにNew comboいれてください。
4. 00:52:930 (1) - 逆にここを外してください。
5. 00:56:359 (4) - new comboを追加！
6. 01:09:730 (4) - finishよりもclapを入れたほうが、曲に合うと思います。次のfinish音を強調できます。
7. 01:12:644 (2,3,4,5) - 初心者にとってリズムがつかみにくいので、こちらのリズムを試してみてください～　　参考にして少し変えてみました
   
   image

   
8. 01:12:644 (2) - リズムが変わるので、ここからnew comboを始めたほうがいいです。01:12:130 (1)のnew comboを外しといてください。
   上の画像はnew combo弄ってないです。
9. 01:44:359 (1,2,3) - このような感じにしてみる？
   
   image

   
10. 01:58:073 (1) - 始点にwhistleが欲しいです。
11. 01:59:444 (1) - ^
12. 02:20:187 (3,4) - リズムが変わっているので、もしかしたらスライダーに変えることをおすすめしたい。
13. 02:28:244 (4) - backに音がありますので、clapを始点、中点、終点、全部につけるといいかも。
14. 02:29:616 (2) - 始点にS:C1のfinishを追加すると、いい感じです。
    All fixed

[Hard]

1. 00:06:151 (1) - CTRL+Gしたほうが流れ良くなります。
2. 00:23:102 (4) - 始点clap入れようー
3. 00:26:530 (3) - ^
4. 00:27:216 (6) - ^
5. 00:27:902 (3) - ^
6. 00:39:387 (4) - drum-clapを追加かな？
7. 00:51:216 (1) - whistle (始点)
8. 00:52:930 (3) - ^ (circle)
9. 00:53:616 (1) - ^ (始点)
10. 00:54:301 (2) - ^ (^)
11. 00:54:816 (3) - ^ (^)
12. 00:55:330 (4) - ここのwhistleを削除し、00:55:501 (1)の始点にwhistleを追加。
13. 01:56:016 (3) - 終点 drum-clap.
14. 01:56:359 (4) - ここにもdrum-clap.
15. 01:56:530 (5) - ここにはdrum-clapなくてもいいと思うけど、音量を下げて追加してもいいね。　　ここはなしで
16. 01:56:702 (1) - ここの終点whistleを削除
17. 01:57:387 (3) - whistle (始点)
18. 01:58:416 (2) - ^ (終点)
19. 01:59:444 (1) - ^ (始点)
20. 02:00:644 (5) - ^ (始点)
21. 02:01:330 (1) - ^ (始点と終点)
22. 02:29:616 (1) - 終点のclapが浮いてると思います。もしつけるとしたら S:C2のclapにするべきだと思います。
23. 03:31:673 (5) - 始点、中点、終点にclapを追加。
24. 03:50:873 (1,2,3) - clapがほしい！
25. 03:52:244 (5) - finish!
26. 03:52:330 (1) - clapが抜けてます。
    All fixed

[Insane]

1. 00:10:369 (4) - 終点のwhistleを削除して、00:10:783 (5)に追加するほうがいいです。
2. 00:23:102 (4) - clapが欲しいかな。
3. 00:26:187 (1) - ^ (中点)
4. 00:27:902 (2) - ^ (^)
5. 00:28:416 (4,5) - この二つにもclap.
6. 00:39:387 (4) - ここも！
7. 00:39:559 (1) - 終点にfinishかな。
8. 00:45:387 (1) - ここは始点にfinish.
9. 01:22:416 (2,3,4) - この三つにclap!
10. 01:23:444 (1) - 真ん中においてもいいのですが、01:22:759 (4)と重ねたほうが綺麗かな。　　今のが好きなのでno changeで
11. 01:34:416 (1) - スライダーよりも、ここは連打おきたいなー
    
    image

    
12. 01:45:044 (1,2,3,4) - clapとか、なにかしら音つけたほうがいいです。音量でかいと思うので、45%くらいになるといいかもね。
13. 01:45:730 (1) - finishが欲しい.
14. 01:51:216 (1) - ^ (始点)
15. 01:56:187 (7) - clap
16. 01:56:701 (1) - 始点finishがいると思います。
17. 02:15:559 (4) - clap-
18. 02:28:244 (1,2) - 始点、終点、サークルにclapね
19. 02:29:616 (1) - 強い音があるので、始点にfinish.
20. 02:35:102 (1) - ^ (whistleの代わりに)
21. 03:10:759 (5) - clap!
22. 03:12:816 (3) - ^ (始点)
23. 03:13:159 (4,5) - 始点、終点、サークルにclapね
24. 03:50:873 (2,3,4) - 三つにclap~
25. 03:52:244 (1) - finishかな
26. 03:57:044 (3) - 終点にclap
27. 03:57:730 (1) - 始点finish!
28. 04:02:873 (3) - 近すぎかな。もっと離れさせたほうがいいかも。
    All fixed

1. 01:14:016 (3) - 頭にfinish欲しいです！
2. 01:15:044 (4) - 01:13:330 (2) - の終端とスタックしたほうが見栄えgoodです！
3. 01:58:073 (1) - NC外したほうがいいかもです。01:59:444 (1,2,3) - はつながっているので。
4. 02:00:816 (3) - 02:01:844 (4) - への流れが悪く感じました。02:01:844 (4) - に対してblanketしてみてはどうでしょうか。02:02:187 (1,2) - と対称的になっていい感じになると思います。
5. 02:48:816 (1,3) - play中重なってしまうのでStackして整えてみるといいかもです。
   その上で02:49:673 (2) - をblanketすると綺麗になると思います。
6. 03:32:702 (1) - clapよりfinishのほうが合いそうですがどうでしょうか
7. 03:44:016 - ここからのKIAIではWhistleは付けないのでしょうか。Lastのサビですし付けたほういいかなと思いました。
8. 04:02:530 (3) - 少し音量を下げ過ぎに感じました。個人的に30%は欲しいです。

1. 01:04:073 (5) - ギターの音で分けているならNCあったほうがいいかなと思いました！
2. 01:22:244 (1) - clap
3. 01:22:416 (2,4) - Whistle
4. 02:27:730 (4,1) - clap
5. 02:28:073 (2) - clap
6. 02:28:244 (3,5) - Whistle
7. 03:42:473 (1) - 終端のfinish外しましょう。
   つけるのなら03:42:986 (2,3) - 2つの始端部分にシンバルの音があるのでここに付けたほうが自然だと思いました。

1. 02:00:130 (3) - 終端のpointを1grid右に。blanket
2. 03:31:673 (1,2,3) - ここもう少し飛ばしたほうがvoにあってて自分は好きなのですがどうでしょうか。03:31:844 (2) - を下に持って行って2.50x程・・・
3. 04:02:701 - 04:03:043 - ここの間が気になりました。Lastですし明確な音もあるので拾った方がgoodな気がします。

litoluna wrote:

hi~
from queue
[Normal]

1. 01:14:016 (3) - 頭にfinish欲しいです！
2. 01:15:044 (4) - 01:13:330 (2) - の終端とスタックしたほうが見栄えgoodです！
3. 01:58:073 (1) - NC外したほうがいいかもです。01:59:444 (1,2,3) - はつながっているので。
4. 02:00:816 (3) - 02:01:844 (4) - への流れが悪く感じました。02:01:844 (4) - に対してblanketしてみてはどうでしょうか。02:02:187 (1,2) - と対称的になっていい感じになると思います。
5. 02:48:816 (1,3) - play中重なってしまうのでStackして整えてみるといいかもです。
   その上で02:49:673 (2) - をblanketすると綺麗になると思います。　　参考にして一部変更しました
6. 03:32:702 (1) - clapよりfinishのほうが合いそうですがどうでしょうか
7. 03:44:016 - ここからのKIAIではWhistleは付けないのでしょうか。Lastのサビですし付けたほういいかなと思いました。
8. 04:02:530 (3) - 少し音量を下げ過ぎに感じました。個人的に30%は欲しいです。　　緑線を削除して35%で揃えました
   All fixed

[Hard]

1. 01:04:073 (5) - ギターの音で分けているならNCあったほうがいいかなと思いました！　う～ん...とりあえずno changeで
2. 01:22:244 (1) - clap　　Insaneと同じにしました
3. 01:22:416 (2,4) - Whistle　　ここも上と同じです
4. 02:27:730 (4,1) - clap
5. 02:28:073 (2) - clap
6. 02:28:244 (3,5) - Whistle参考にして少し変更しました
7. 03:42:473 (1) - 終端のfinish外しましょう。
   つけるのなら03:42:986 (2,3) - 2つの始端部分にシンバルの音があるのでここに付けたほうが自然だと思いました。ここはつけずに行きます
   All fixed

[Insane]

1. 02:00:130 (3) - 終端のpointを1grid右に。blanket
2. 03:31:673 (1,2,3) - ここもう少し飛ばしたほうがvoにあってて自分は好きなのですがどうでしょうか。03:31:844 (2) - を下に持って行って2.50x程・・・
3. 04:02:701 - 04:03:043 - ここの間が気になりました。Lastですし明確な音もあるので拾った方がgoodな気がします。
   All fixed

Good Luckです！

-Nanaka- wrote:

こんにちはー
ナイスな選曲と良い譜面だったのでModしてみました！

[のーまる]
00:27:559 (3) - AiModのDS漏れしてるので置き直しましょう
02:54:643 (1) - 02:56:701 (4) - と同じ向きに丸めたほうが見栄えも流れもいい気がします
03:02:530 (1) - ここからピアノの音が特に強くなるので終点はClapではなくwhistleのが合うと思います
03:08:359 (1) - add whistle
03:11:787 (3) - ここは始点whistle、折り返しClap、終点whistleの方が合ってると思います
03:13:159 (2) - add whistle
03:29:959 (2) - ここは画像のようにおいたほうが見栄えも流れもいいと思います()　　　http://puu.sh/7yKHA.jpg
03:52:072 (1) - このスピナー近すぎると思います、ノーマルなので白線からでいいかと！
04:03:216 (1) - 終点にwhistleおいた方が優しく終わる感じがして好きです！ｗ、採用でしたら全Diffお忘れなく！
All fixed

[はーど]
00:28:930 (1) - 00:38:187 (3) - までコンボカラー変わりすぎな気がします、１拍おいてもいいかもれません。
個人的には03:13:502 (3) - 00:33:044 (1) - 00:35:787 (1) -リムーブNCで

00:38:187 (3) - 終点にもFinishはどうでしょう？　　no changeで
03:02:872 (1) - add whistle
03:04:244 (1) - add whistle
03:04:930 (3) - add whistle
03:05:616 (1) - add whistle
03:06:816 (1) - 終点にadd whistle
03:07:673 (4) - add whistle
03:08:359 (1) - add whistle
03:09:386 (1) - 終点にadd whistle
03:10:416 (3) - add whistle
03:11:102 (1) - add whistle
03:13:159 (2) - add whistle
全Diffの流れ的に03:13:502 (3) - Add　clap、03:13:158 (2) - 終点にClap、03:13:672 (4) - 始点にClap　　03:13:672 (4) これだけno changeで
04:03:215 (5) - 間奏の始め観たいにNCで終わるのはどうですか？
All fixed

[いんせいん]
個人的にはOD８がいいと思うんですがどうでしょう？　　7でいいと思うんですが、もし他に指摘があれば検討します
02:51:902 (1) - add whistle
02:52:586 (3) - add whistle
02:53:273 (1) - add whistle
02:53:959 (4) - add whistle
02:54:644 (1) - 始点と終点add whistle
02:56:015 (3) - 始点と終点add whistle
02:57:044 (1) - 終点add whistle
02:59:444 (3) - add whistle
03:00:129 (1) - add whistle
03:00:472 (3) - add Clap
03:01:502 (1) - add whistle
03:01:158 (5) - add Clap
03:02:186 (4) - Clapではなくwhistleで03:02:530 (1) - こちらにClapつけてあげましょう　　参考にして一部変更しました
03:02:873 (1) - add whistle
03:03:559 (5) - add whistle
03:04:243 (1) - add whistle
03:04:930 (5) - add whistle
03:05:616 (1) - add whistle
03:06:216 (5) - add whistle
03:08:359 (1) - add whistle
03:09:043 (2) - add whistle
03:09:730 (3) - add whistle
03:10:416 (4) - add whistle
03:11:102 (1) - add whistle
03:11:702 (2) - add whistle
03:12:302 (1) - 終点にadd whistle
03:13:159 (4) - add whistle
03:13:502 (5) - add Finish　　drumの音で対応しました

02:40:587 (3) - ここからピアノが入るのでお好みでここからwhistle入れてあげてもいいと思います！
Insaneはサビに１つもリバースが無いのがプレイしてて気になったので入れて(ry！　入れるところ頑張って探してみます！
All fixed

とても素敵な譜面でした！
頑張ってください

kajiyatta wrote:

M4M
[General]
Fine.
[Normal]
Placement
01:10:759(2,3) 初心者にとって、(1)のスライダー後に自然に手が伸びるのは(3)の方だと思います。この部分は少しわかりにくい配置なので、変えたほうがいいと思います。e.g.)

SPOILER

01:58:073(2) スペーシングが×0.6くらいになってるので、DS通り配置してください。
03:33:729(3,4)　全体的に言えることなんですが、無理にブランケットを作る必要はないです。かえって打ちにくくなるケースが多いので、素直に配置したほうが無難です。

SPOILER

Rhythm
00:01:651　不要な緑線
00:50:876 ^
02:21:387 ^　他にもいくつかあります。
02:11:616(3) ここだけ赤線をとっているのは妙です。他サビ部と同様に白線で音取りをした方が初心者向きです。

SPOILER

03:52:243(1) すごい中途半端なとこでスピナーが終わってるので、03:53:615か03:53:958で終わらせましょう。
Hit Sound
Insaneにまとめて書いてあるので割愛します。　　一部変更しました
*All fixed

[Hard]
Placement
00:43:159(2) ブランケットの中に入れるよりも(4)と同じように外側に出してやるほうが打ちやすく、流れも良くなると思います。

SPOILER

00:44:016(1) スペーシングが狭いので、DS通りに配置してください。
01:15:730(2)　図のように配置してみてはどうですか？前のnoteからの流れもよく打ちやすくなると思います。

SPOILER

02:48:816(1,2,3) 真上に動かすような打ち回しになり、少し窮屈な感じがします。配置を少し変えてみると良いと思います。e.g.)

SPOILER

03:42:472(1) 逆向きにしてやると囲むような配置になり、次のnoteへの動きも良くなります。

SPOILER

03:52:243(5) NCつけ忘れ？この部分は必ずNCつけていたので。
Rhythm
01:51:130 ここに大きなドラム音があるので、noteを追加して3連打にしてみては？
02:41:444 ボーカルの始まりなので、ここが空白だとリズムを取りにくいように聞こえます、
03:52:329(1) 終わりを03:53:615にしたほうが良いと思います。dwon-beatでスピナーを終わらせておく方がプレイしてる側には分かりやすいからです。
Hit Sound
01:18:987(4) 始点のclap削除。他のdiffにはついてません。
01:23:787(1) ^
02:51:901~ ピアノ音に合わせてwhistle追加してみては？InsaneでそのようにしていたのがHardでは見当たらないので、手抜きと思われてしまうかも…
Insaneとほぼ同じなので割愛します。　　こちらも一部変更しました
*All fixed

[Insane]
Placement
00:05:776(1,2) Nc入れ替えてみては？(2)の方が明らかに音が大きいので、こちらからNCかけた方があっていると思います。
00:18:301(1) CTRL+Gした方が前後の流れが今よりも自然になります。　　今のほうが好きなのでno change
00:56:016(6) ここから速度が変わるので、NCつけるとすればここから付けたほうが良いと思います。
01:01:844(1,2,3,4) この部分は配置がやや煩雑なので、少し統一感のあるようなスペーシングにすると良いと思います。e.g.)　　参考にして変更しました

SPOILER

01:34:759(5) 曲調が穏やかになり、速度も変わるのでここでNC付けたほうが良いです。
01:43:673(3) 少しスペーシングが狭いです。前の(1,2)は×1.5できているので、ここもそのようにした方が良いと思います。
01:44:530(1,2) ピアノ音がはっきり聞こえるので、スタックさせずに離して配置した方が曲に対して自然です。e.g.)

SPOILER

01:55:330(1~) もっとスペーシング設けたほうが良いと思います。狭いとかえって打ちにくくなります。　

SPOILER

02:13:844(4) 前の(3)からの流れが悪く、かなり打ちにくい部分に見えます。例えば図のように配置し直すなどして、配置を変えてみると良いと思います。

SPOILER

02:46:073(1) 上向きにしてやると次のnoteへの流れもよく打ちやすくなります。

SPOILER

Rhythm
04:06:644 不要な緑線
00:36:473(3) 前の(1)が1/1でとっているので、ここも同様に音取りをした方が対称的でよく見えます。00:36:644でスライダーを止めるほどの大きな音も無いので。

SPOILER

00:58:930(1,4) 赤線からスライダーを持ってきているために、ここからのパートが曲とワンテンポずれているように聞こえます。スペーシングも広くなるので、ややわかりにくいです。できれば白線からスライダーを持って来るような音取りに変更した方が良いです。(02:04:930~ではそうなっていました、)
01:10:244(2) tick音の部分のボーカルが結構強いので、そこを拾ってやるような音取りの方が良いと思います。
03:06:215(5) この部分に音はないので、前の白線からスライダーを持ってきた方が聞こえがいいです。　　no changeで
03:51:815 ここにドラム音入ってるのでnote追加して5連打の方が曲に合ってます。
Hit Sound
00:23:101(4) シンバル音がバックにあるのでfinish追加。
02:15:559(4) ^
00:26:187(1) リバース部分にfinish追加。
00:30:301(1) 始点のfinish削除でかわりにwhistleを追加すると良いと思います。バックの音と合っていないように聞こえました。
01:09:559(4) 終点にfinish追加。
03:01:158(1) 始点にfinish追加。
*All fixed

Good luck.

1. The first offset should be 1651 to align the downbeat to large white tick.
2. I think it would look nice if you enabled letterbox in breaks for all diffs, since there is no video or storyboard.
3. It might be better to end first kiai at 01:22:759 since there is a pause here.
4. If you do that^ then also use 03:51:216 as end for third kiai section.

1. 00:03:151 (2) - It's just my opinion, but I think it feels better this way: http://puu.sh/7D6y8.jpg because it matches the relaxed feel of the music with a kind of "dragging" flow. I know it doesn't blanket like you had it before, but it just feels nicer to me.
2. 00:06:151 (2,3,1) - This flow seems strange to me because the movement from (2) through to (1) feels round but (1) curves in a different way than expected. I'd suggest something like: http://puu.sh/7D6Xq.jpg instead.
3. 03:24:816 (1) - Slider shape is a bit unbalanced. You can move the middle white node to the right a bit to make it look nicer and more round: http://puu.sh/7D8qJ.jpg
4. 00:42:644 (3,4,1) - Awkward flow. I suggest to move (1) to the left to make the flow more round like this: http://puu.sh/7D8Ta.jpg but you will need to adjust the other notes after it for spacing if you change this.
5. 01:47:102 (3,1) - This overlap will be hard to beginners to read, especially if they have hitbursts, because the hitburst from end of (3) might cover the head of (1). I suggest to do Ctrl+G on (3), as it will still flow properly but will be easier to read.
6. 03:13:502 (3,4) - Maybe it's better to use a slider here to match with piano glissando.
7. 03:52:243 (1) - Extend this spinner to the red tick? It will match nicely with the syncopated electric guitar note.
8. For the slow introduction section, I suggest to use hitsounds to follow the top note in each guitar chord. I suggest using only soft-whistle on beat 3 of each bar like this: http://puu.sh/7D7u5.png and http://puu.sh/7D7zJ.png where the arrow shows where to put whistles. There is also whistle on (2) and (3) obviously because of strong guitar sound. I wouldn't use any other hitsounds in this section besides what I mentioned.
9. 00:12:690 (1) - I think you should remove the whistles because the music is neutral here, and quiet.
10. 00:17:959 (1) - Use finish on head.
11. 00:55:330 (2) - Finish on end?
12. 00:56:359 (1) - Remove clap from head.
13. 01:15:559 (1) - Add whistle on end.
14. 03:56:702 (4) - Add NC
15. 03:48:815 (1,2) - Swap NC: http://puu.sh/7DgpP.jpg
16. 03:37:844 (1,2) - Swap NC
17. 00:39:216 - Starting here, your combos are the wrong way around.. You should remove NC from 00:39:216 and add to 00:39:902 instead. Then switch the NC with 00:41:273 (1,3) from (1) to (3). Here are some images to help you see what I mean: http://puu.sh/7D9GJ.jpg http://puu.sh/7D9Kq.jpg http://puu.sh/7D9Mc.jpg
18. 00:09:128 (1) - Remove new combo. It's not necessary.

1. 00:19:844 (2,3,4,5) - I don't see why you chose this rhythm here. It feels like it doesn't match the music well. Maybe try this instead: http://puu.sh/7Ddn7.jpg
2. 01:34:416 (1) - I think you shouldn't start on that beat because it can be confusing. At the beginning of the song you skipped that pick-up beat, so I think you should do the same here: http://puu.sh/7DdE2.jpg and if you change this, move the inheriting section (green line) too.
3. 01:46:759 (4) - Ctrl+G? This way feels nicer to me: http://puu.sh/7DdJz.jpg
4. 01:54:644 (2) - Ctrl+G? It makes a nice zigzag pattern with (3,4,1).
5. 02:01:844 (2,3,4) - I think a 1/4 repeat slider works better here, but it's up to you.
6. 03:04:930 (3,4) - You could switch these around. I think it's more fun that way http://puu.sh/7De9Q.jpg
7. 00:12:690 (1,2) - Same suggestion as Normal.
8. 00:27:216 (6,3) - Add finishes on the heads of these sliders too.
9. 00:55:930 (2) - Add clap to match drums.
10. 03:39:730 - You can do combos like this: http://puu.sh/7DghS.jpg to emphasize the pattern.
11. 02:25:330 (5,1) - Swap NC?
12. 02:22:587 (4,1) - Swap NC?
13. 02:17:273 - Same suggestion as the other part: http://puu.sh/7Dg6t.jpg
14. 02:14:359 (4,1) - Maybe swap NC
15. 02:11:616 (4,1) - Swap NC
16. 02:00:644 (5,1) - Swap NC
17. 01:44:359 (4) - Add new combo
18. 01:16:759 (5,1) - Swap NC?
19. 01:11:273 - Do combos like this? http://puu.sh/7DfKR.jpg
20. 01:08:530 (5,1) - Swap NC
21. 00:52:244 (1) - Remove NC
22. 00:38:530 (4,1) - Swap NC because the two sliders are part of the same vocal phrase as the notes before them, and the circles are a different idea.

1. 00:03:901 (4) - Ctrl+G for nice round flow into (1)?
2. 00:23:959 (3) - Maybe don't use the 1/1 slider here, since your rhythm pattern uses it for parts like 00:19:844 (3) and 00:22:587 (3) and 00:25:330 (3) so maybe you should use a different rhythm at 00:23:959 (3) which doesn't use syncopated 1/1 slider.
3. 03:00:129 (1,2,3,4) - Try this: http://puu.sh/7Dht2.jpg
4. 03:52:072 (1) - Add a circle for vocals?
5. 03:58:758 (5,6) - Try this: http://puu.sh/7DhFH.jpg
6. 03:10:416 (4) - Add NC?
7. 01:49:844 (5) - ^
8. 00:56:016 (1,2) - Swap NC for consistency.
9. 00:49:159 (1,2) - ^
10. 04:05:615 - Move the last inheriting section to 04:06:643 to match with Normal and Hard.
11. 00:17:274 - Remove the inheriting section (green line). It's not necessary.

CloudSplash16 wrote:

Hi, modding as you requested.

[General]

1. The first offset should be 1651 to align the downbeat to large white tick.
2. I think it would look nice if you enabled letterbox in breaks for all diffs, since there is no video or storyboard.　　no change
3. It might be better to end first kiai at 01:22:759 since there is a pause here.
4. If you do that^ then also use 03:51:216 as end for third kiai section.
   All fixed

[Normal]

1. 00:03:151 (2) - It's just my opinion, but I think it feels better this way: http://puu.sh/7D6y8.jpg because it matches the relaxed feel of the music with a kind of "dragging" flow. I know it doesn't blanket like you had it before, but it just feels nicer to me.　　fixed it in reference to your opinion.
2. 00:06:151 (2,3,1) - This flow seems strange to me because the movement from (2) through to (1) feels round but (1) curves in a different way than expected. I'd suggest something like: http://puu.sh/7D6Xq.jpg instead.
3. 03:24:816 (1) - Slider shape is a bit unbalanced. You can move the middle white node to the right a bit to make it look nicer and more round: http://puu.sh/7D8qJ.jpg
4. 00:42:644 (3,4,1) - Awkward flow. I suggest to move (1) to the left to make the flow more round like this: http://puu.sh/7D8Ta.jpg but you will need to adjust the other notes after it for spacing if you change this.
5. 01:47:102 (3,1) - This overlap will be hard to beginners to read, especially if they have hitbursts, because the hitburst from end of (3) might cover the head of (1). I suggest to do Ctrl+G on (3), as it will still flow properly but will be easier to read.
6. 03:13:502 (3,4) - Maybe it's better to use a slider here to match with piano glissando.
7. 03:52:243 (1) - Extend this spinner to the red tick? It will match nicely with the syncopated electric guitar note.
8. For the slow introduction section, I suggest to use hitsounds to follow the top note in each guitar chord. I suggest using only soft-whistle on beat 3 of each bar like this: http://puu.sh/7D7u5.png and http://puu.sh/7D7zJ.png where the arrow shows where to put whistles. There is also whistle on (2) and (3) obviously because of strong guitar sound. I wouldn't use any other hitsounds in this section besides what I mentioned.　　some fixed
9. 00:12:690 (1) - I think you should remove the whistles because the music is neutral here, and quiet.　　
10. 00:17:959 (1) - Use finish on head.
11. 00:55:330 (2) - Finish on end?
12. 00:56:359 (1) - Remove clap from head.
13. 01:15:559 (1) - Add whistle on end.
14. 03:56:702 (4) - Add NC
15. 03:48:815 (1,2) - Swap NC: http://puu.sh/7DgpP.jpg
16. 03:37:844 (1,2) - Swap NC
17. 00:39:216 - Starting here, your combos are the wrong way around.. You should remove NC from 00:39:216 and add to 00:39:902 instead. Then switch the NC with 00:41:273 (1,3) from (1) to (3). Here are some images to help you see what I mean: http://puu.sh/7D9GJ.jpg http://puu.sh/7D9Kq.jpg http://puu.sh/7D9Mc.jpg
18. 00:09:128 (1) - Remove new combo. It's not necessary.
    All fixed

[Hard]

1. 00:19:844 (2,3,4,5) - I don't see why you chose this rhythm here. It feels like it doesn't match the music well. Maybe try this instead: http://puu.sh/7Ddn7.jpg
2. 01:34:416 (1) - I think you shouldn't start on that beat because it can be confusing. At the beginning of the song you skipped that pick-up beat, so I think you should do the same here: http://puu.sh/7DdE2.jpg and if you change this, move the inheriting section (green line) too.
3. 01:46:759 (4) - Ctrl+G? This way feels nicer to me: http://puu.sh/7DdJz.jpg
4. 01:54:644 (2) - Ctrl+G? It makes a nice zigzag pattern with (3,4,1).
5. 02:01:844 (2,3,4) - I think a 1/4 repeat slider works better here, but it's up to you.　　no change
6. 03:04:930 (3,4) - You could switch these around. I think it's more fun that way http://puu.sh/7De9Q.jpg
7. 00:12:690 (1,2) - Same suggestion as Normal.
8. 00:27:216 (6,3) - Add finishes on the heads of these sliders too.
9. 00:55:930 (2) - Add clap to match drums.
10. 03:39:730 - You can do combos like this: http://puu.sh/7DghS.jpg to emphasize the pattern.
11. 02:25:330 (5,1) - Swap NC?
12. 02:22:587 (4,1) - Swap NC?
13. 02:17:273 - Same suggestion as the other part: http://puu.sh/7Dg6t.jpg
14. 02:14:359 (4,1) - Maybe swap NC
15. 02:11:616 (4,1) - Swap NC
16. 02:00:644 (5,1) - Swap NC
17. 01:44:359 (4) - Add new combo
18. 01:16:759 (5,1) - Swap NC?
19. 01:11:273 - Do combos like this? http://puu.sh/7DfKR.jpg
20. 01:08:530 (5,1) - Swap NC
21. 00:52:244 (1) - Remove NC
22. 00:38:530 (4,1) - Swap NC because the two sliders are part of the same vocal phrase as the notes before them, and the circles are a different idea. All fixed

[Insane]

1. 00:03:901 (4) - Ctrl+G for nice round flow into (1)?
2. 00:23:959 (3) - Maybe don't use the 1/1 slider here, since your rhythm pattern uses it for parts like 00:19:844 (3) and 00:22:587 (3) and 00:25:330 (3) so maybe you should use a different rhythm at 00:23:959 (3) which doesn't use syncopated 1/1 slider.　　hmm... no change
3. 03:00:129 (1,2,3,4) - Try this: http://puu.sh/7Dht2.jpg
4. 03:52:072 (1) - Add a circle for vocals?
5. 03:58:758 (5,6) - Try this: http://puu.sh/7DhFH.jpg
6. 03:10:416 (4) - Add NC?
7. 01:49:844 (5) - ^
8. 00:56:016 (1,2) - Swap NC for consistency.
9. 00:49:159 (1,2) - ^
10. 04:05:615 - Move the last inheriting section to 04:06:643 to match with Normal and Hard.
11. 00:17:274 - Remove the inheriting section (green line). It's not necessary.
    All fixed

Good luck!

1. 00:03:151 (2) - Seeing as your whistles mostly follow the sharp guitar sounds for this part, I would remove the whistle on the reverse here for consistency with that idea. (Note that you don't use a whistle here for Hard and Insane)
2. 00:07:651 (1) - Same as above.
3. 00:26:187 (1) - Add a clap on the tail to go along with the finish for emphasis on the drums that are strong in the music here. Also it would be consistent with Hard and Insane as you have a clap here for those difficulties.
4. 00:26:873 (2) - Same as above.
5. 01:00:473 (3) - Use a finish instead of a clap? You had one for 02:06:301 (3).
6. 01:03:216 (1) - Remove NC to be consistent with how you use NCs every two stanza changes.
7. 02:47:101 (3) - Spacing inconsistency here. Make sure it stays at 1.0x interval.
8. 02:50:702 (3) - Remove clap on the tail. There's nothing in the music to warrant it.
9. 03:40:930 (1) - A finish would be better than a clap with how you're using finishes here.
10. 04:01:844 (1) - Change the volume to 35% here instead of 04:01:501 so the finish on the tail of 04:01:159 (2) isn't softer than the one on 04:00:473 (1).
    
    Nice difficulty! I really like it.

1. 00:28:587 - I feel like this volume decrease comes too soon. I would prefer you change the volume to 45% starting at 00:28:930 (1).
2. 00:39:216 (6) - Use S:C2 for this finish? It's the same sound here as heard on the tail of 00:33:730 (5) but a little bit louder.
3. 01:45:387 (3) - Add a clap to go along with the finish so you're not skipping over the strong drum sound here.
4. 02:27:216 (3) - How about making a clean blanket here?
   Example

   
5. 02:46:073 (1) - Remove clap on the head. It isn't fitting here and you didn't use one for 02:43:330 (1).
6. 03:47:444 (4) - Remove clap on the head. It doesn't fit with your clap usage for this part.
7. 03:52:330 (1) - I would remove the clap on this spinner. The beat it's emphasizing isn't very significant and it sounds strange with how the first object immediately after the spinner has a clap. (You'll also notice that your other spinners that end on a strong white tick aren't using a clap)[Insane]
   
   1. 00:05:401 (2) - I would prefer you use a whistle here and remove it from the head of 00:05:776 (4) as it appears your whistles play along with the high-pitched guitar sounds, this would follow that.
   2. 00:06:526 (2) - Remove whistle on the head, the guitar is soft here so this whistle feels unneeded and fits better without it.
   3. 00:27:044 (2) - I didn't really like the use of a reverse 1/1 slider here. Considering how fast-paced and exciting the music is here you would expect to have more movement and clicking for this part. Here's a rhythm I believe fits this part much better. I encourage you to please try it first:
      Example

      
   4. 00:27:216 (3) - Add a finish to go along with the clap. It's the same sound as on the reverse of 00:26:187 (1).
   5. 00:32:016 (2,3) - With a 1/2 rhythm there's no need for a slight overlap between the two and doesn't look very clean. Simply use 1.2x spacing as you had done previously for 00:28:930 (1,2,3).
   6. 00:32:873 (4,1) - Same as above.
   7. 00:38:873 (2,3,4) - This doesn't play intuitively and can confuse some less-experienced Insane players when they try the map for the first time. You're using the same spacing for 1/1 between (2) and (3) and 1/2 between (3) and (4). I understand it would break the triangle pattern but I recommend you make the spacing noticeably different between these pairings to avoid confusion. For instance, having 00:38:530 (1,2) at x:112 y:112 is better so you can easily distinguish that there is more time between 00:38:873 (2,3) than there is between 00:39:216 (3,4).
   8. 00:39:559 (1) - Add a finish to go along with the clap, for the strong cymbal crash.
   9. 00:45:044 (4) - I would either add a finish to go along with the clap or swap the clap for a finish for this.
   10. 01:12:644 (1) - Remove finish from the head. The cymbal crash is actually on 01:12:816 so it would make more sense to have it there. You can try swapping
   11. 01:12:644 (1,2) on the timeline to have an object landing on the strong white tick if you would like.
       
       Example

       
   12. 01:34:416 (1,2,3,4) - The volume for these is too quiet. Use 60% volume for these circles and then start using 40% on 01:34:759 (1).
   13. 01:49:844 (1) - Add a whistle to the tail to catch the piano sound nicely if you would like.
   14. 02:00:987 (2) - Adding a clap to this would follow the drums more accurately.
   15. 02:01:844 (1) - Remove NC, it seems unnecessary to have one and to keep consistency with how you didn't use one for 00:55:844 (4,5,6).
   16. 02:15:559 (4) - Missed a clap? Add it to go along with the finish, it fits very nicely here.
   17. 02:26:873 (7) - There should be a finish here. Add one to go along with the clap for the cymbal crash.
   18. 03:02:873 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - There are some spacing fluctuations that cause this shape to look messy. Try making it a perfectly symmetrical shape as you can see in the image below. Feel free to use the coded example I've provided:
       
       Example

       
       

       256,192,182873,5,6,0:0:0:0:
       340,60,183043,1,0,0:0:0:0:
       172,60,183215,1,8,0:0:0:0:
       84,192,183386,1,0,0:0:0:0:
       172,324,183558,1,2,0:0:0:0:
       340,324,183729,1,0,0:0:0:0:
       428,192,183902,1,8,0:0:0:0:
       340,60,184073,1,0,0:0:0:0:

   19. 03:08:016 (1) - Remove NC for consistency with your combo patterning.
   20. 03:11:616 (1,2) - The whistle on (2) isn't emphasizing anything in the music. It would be better if you removed it and put it on (1) to catch the sharp sound. You can add one on 03:11:959 (3) as well if you would like.
   21. 03:38:016 (4) - Add a finish to go along with the clap for the cymbal crash.
   22. 03:41:102 (1,2) - Same suggestion as 01:12:644 (1,2).
   23. 03:51:901 (5) - Uh the jump to this note is very unexpected and doesn't play well. Most players are going to read this as 1/2 because of the spacing and hit a 100. I would either just stack it on x:120 y:72 or make a stream with 03:51:559 (1,2,3,4,5).
   24. 04:05:086 - The whistle on the spinner doesn't fit well because the music is in decrescendo so you would expect the end of the spinner to be silent. I would remove it.

Trust wrote:

Red: Unrankable
Blue: Highly recommended/very questionable
Black: Suggestion

[Normal]
00:03:151 (2) - Seeing as your whistles mostly follow the sharp guitar sounds for this part, I would remove the whistle on the reverse here for consistency with that idea. (Note that you don't use a whistle here for Hard and Insane)
00:07:651 (1) - Same as above. hmm... I think whistle is need for here
00:26:187 (1) - Add a clap on the tail to go along with the finish for emphasis on the drums that are strong in the music here. Also it would be consistent with Hard and Insane as you have a clap here for those difficulties.
00:26:873 (2) - Same as above.
01:00:473 (3) - Use a finish instead of a clap? You had one for 02:06:301 (3).
01:03:216 (1) - Remove NC to be consistent with how you use NCs every two stanza changes.
02:47:101 (3) - Spacing inconsistency here. Make sure it stays at 1.0x interval.
02:50:702 (3) - Remove clap on the tail. There's nothing in the music to warrant it.
03:40:930 (1) - A finish would be better than a clap with how you're using finishes here.
04:01:844 (1) - Change the volume to 35% here instead of 04:01:501 so the finish on the tail of 04:01:159 (2) isn't softer than the one on 04:00:473 (1).

Nice difficulty! I really like it.
All fixed
[Hard]
00:28:587 - I feel like this volume decrease comes too soon. I would prefer you change the volume to 45% starting at 00:28:930 (1).
00:39:216 (6) - Use S:C2 for this finish? It's the same sound here as heard on the tail of 00:33:730 (5) but a little bit louder. i felt doesn't match its sound
01:45:387 (3) - Add a clap to go along with the finish so you're not skipping over the strong drum sound here.
02:27:216 (3) - How about making a clean blanket here?
Example
02:46:073 (1) - Remove clap on the head. It isn't fitting here and you didn't use one for 02:43:330 (1).
03:47:444 (4) - Remove clap on the head. It doesn't fit with your clap usage for this part.
03:52:330 (1) - I would remove the clap on this spinner. The beat it's emphasizing isn't very significant and it sounds strange with how the first object immediately after the spinner has a clap. (You'll also notice that your other spinners that end on a strong white tick aren't using a clap)
All fixed

[Insane]
00:05:401 (2) - I would prefer you use a whistle here and remove it from the head of 00:05:776 (4) as it appears your whistles play along with the high-pitched guitar sounds, this would follow that.
00:06:526 (2) - Remove whistle on the head, the guitar is soft here so this whistle feels unneeded and fits better without it.
00:27:044 (2) - I didn't really like the use of a reverse 1/1 slider here. Considering how fast-paced and exciting the music is here you would expect to have more movement and clicking for this part. Here's a rhythm I believe fits this part much better. I encourage you to please try it first:
Example
00:27:216 (3) - Add a finish to go along with the clap. It's the same sound as on the reverse of 00:26:187 (1).
00:32:016 (2,3) - With a 1/2 rhythm there's no need for a slight overlap between the two and doesn't look very clean. Simply use 1.2x spacing as you had done previously for 00:28:930 (1,2,3). Sorry, I like now pattern. I think this pattern is no confusion. no change
00:32:873 (4,1) - Same as above.
00:38:873 (2,3,4) - This doesn't play intuitively and can confuse some less-experienced Insane players when they try the map for the first time. You're using the same spacing for 1/1 between (2) and (3) and 1/2 between (3) and (4). I understand it would break the triangle pattern but I recommend you make the spacing noticeably different between these pairings to avoid confusion. For instance, having 00:38:530 (1,2) at x:112 y:112 is better so you can easily distinguish that there is more time between 00:38:873 (2,3) than there is between 00:39:216 (3,4).
00:39:559 (1) - Add a finish to go along with the clap, for the strong cymbal crash.
00:45:044 (4) - I would either add a finish to go along with the clap or swap the clap for a finish for this. I want here emphasize to next finish. no change
01:12:644 (1) - Remove finish from the head. The cymbal crash is actually on 01:12:816 so it would make more sense to have it there. You can try swapping
01:12:644 (1,2) on the timeline to have an object landing on the strong white tick if you would like.
Example
01:34:416 (1,2,3,4) - The volume for these is too quiet. Use 60% volume for these circles and then start using 40% on 01:34:759 (1).
01:49:844 (1) - Add a whistle to the tail to catch the piano sound nicely if you would like.
02:00:987 (2) - Adding a clap to this would follow the drums more accurately.
02:01:844 (1) - Remove NC, it seems unnecessary to have one and to keep consistency with how you didn't use one for 00:55:844 (4,5,6).
02:15:559 (4) - Missed a clap? Add it to go along with the finish, it fits very nicely here.
02:26:873 (7) - There should be a finish here. Add one to go along with the clap for the cymbal crash.
03:02:873 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - There are some spacing fluctuations that cause this shape to look messy. Try making it a perfectly symmetrical shape as you can see in the image below. Feel free to use the coded example I've provided: Thanks!
Example
03:08:016 (1) - Remove NC for consistency with your combo patterning.
03:11:616 (1,2) - The whistle on (2) isn't emphasizing anything in the music. It would be better if you removed it and put it on (1) to catch the sharp sound. You can add one on 03:11:959 (3) as well if you would like.
03:38:016 (4) - Add a finish to go along with the clap for the cymbal crash.
03:41:102 (1,2) - Same suggestion as 01:12:644 (1,2).
03:51:901 (5) - Uh the jump to this note is very unexpected and doesn't play well. Most players are going to read this as 1/2 because of the spacing and hit a 100. I would either just stack it on x:120 y:72 or make a stream with 03:51:559 (1,2,3,4,5).
04:05:086 - The whistle on the spinner doesn't fit well because the music is in decrescendo so you would expect the end of the spinner to be silent. I would remove it.
All fixed

I can see why this is your favourite song! It's very nice!!
Good luck ~

1. fine

1. 00:59:101 (1,2) - 左右対称に
2. 01:09:730 (4) - x:236 y:276でblanket
3. 01:48:130 (4) - Normal(低AR)でのStackはあまり好ましくないかなと思います
4. 04:03:216 (1) - Insaneだと音がだんだん小さくなる処理がされていますが、Hardでも同じように小さくするといいのでは！？
5. 修正点がほとんど見当たりませんでした！とってもよかったです！nice diff!!

1. 00:28:244 (4,5,6) - 正三角形に
2. 00:41:959 (3,4) - 3を180度回転して4に置き換え
3. 00:56:873 (2) - x:148 y:176でblanket
4. 01:05:273 (3,4,5) - spacing一定に
5. 02:39:044 (1,2,3) - 2を中心にして左右対称に
6. 03:47:959 (1) - x:292 y:276でblanket
7. 03:52:072 - ここにサークルを配置して、(以下に続きます
8. 03:52:244 (1) - ここのサークルをremoveしてここのタイミングからスピナーを開始させる お好みで
9. 04:03:301 (1) - Normalのmodの内容と同様に

1. 00:01:651 (1,2) - 2をx:176 y:148にすると綺麗にblanketできるかも？スライダー弄るともっとよさそう
2. 00:02:776 (1) - remove NC 00:02:401 (3) - のスライダーがボーカルの音をフォローしたものではないのでちょっと不自然かなと思いました
3. 00:03:151 (2) - NC ^を変更した場合のみ
4. 00:06:901 (3) - x:312 y:320でblanket
5. 00:10:369 (4,5) - 1/1スライダーで「み～つ～」の音をフォローしたほうが自然？
6. 00:17:274 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 1のサークルをコピー&ペーストして-30度ずつ回転させていくと綺麗な円になります try!
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 00:19:159 (4) - 2の末端にstack
8. 00:20:702 (1,2,3) - 1~3の流れ、spacingを一定にしてしまってもいいような気もします お好みで
9. 00:23:959 (3) - ここだけ1/1スライダーなのは少し不自然かな 前2つとも1/2スライダーやサークルでフォローしてるので統一させたほうがいいと思います
10. 00:26:873 (3,4) - Ctrl+g
11. 00:32:016 (2,3) - 2の末端を3にblanket するとしたらこんな感じ
    
    SPOILER

    
12. 00:37:159 (1,2,3) - 1~3のspacingを一定に
13. 00:45:216 (5,6,1) - 見た目を綺麗に
    
    SPOILER

    
14. 00:49:159 (5,1) - 提案ですが、5のスライダーを1のスライダーにblanket気味に配置
    
    SPOILER

    
15. 00:51:730 - ここ抜けてるのすごくきになります
16. 00:59:101 (1,2) - 1のスライダーをコピー&ペーストして、80度傾けて配置するとこんな感じになります 試してみてね
    
    SPOILER

    
17. 01:02:530 (5,6) - 6を5の反転したものに置き換え
18. 01:03:216 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 4,5はずらして配置してあるのに6は3に思いっきりstackしてあるのはなぜ・・・？
19. 01:11:273 (2,3,4) - 綺麗な三角形に
20. 01:35:273 (2,3) - 2と3を点対称にしよう
21. 01:42:644 (3) - x:236 y:284でblanket
22. 01:45:044 (1,2,3,4) - ここスライダーでフォローしたほうがいいんじゃないかなー・・・
23. 01:56:016 (6,7,8,9) - spacing一定に
24. 01:59:959 (2) - x:136 y:304でblanket
25. 02:31:673 (3) - x:316 y:216でblanket
26. 02:33:730 (1,2,3) - 120度回転
    
    SPOILER

    
27. 03:06:130 (4,5) - これ恐らく1/4の2連じゃフォローできてないと思うので、サークルをremoveしてスライダーの長さ変更
28. 03:22:587 (2,3,4,5) - spacing一定に
29. 03:33:044 (7) - ここだけ飛び出てるのが目立ちます&NC
30. 03:33:216 (1) - remove NC

sionKotori wrote:

遅くなってすみません！明日にはmodできると思います(このpostを上書きして投稿します！)

sionKotori wrote:

BGの左手前の子がかわいいですね <3　(´ε｀ )

[General]

1. fine

[Normal]

1. 00:59:101 (1,2) - 左右対称に
2. 01:09:730 (4) - x:236 y:276でblanket
3. 01:48:130 (4) - Normal(低AR)でのStackはあまり好ましくないかなと思います
4. 04:03:216 (1) - Insaneだと音がだんだん小さくなる処理がされていますが、Hardでも同じように小さくするといいのでは！？
5. 修正点がほとんど見当たりませんでした！とってもよかったです！nice diff!!

All fixed

[Hard]

1. 00:28:244 (4,5,6) - 正三角形に
2. 00:41:959 (3,4) - 3を180度回転して4に置き換え
3. 00:56:873 (2) - x:148 y:176でblanket　X:144でブランケットで来てると思うのでno change
4. 01:05:273 (3,4,5) - spacing一定に
5. 02:39:044 (1,2,3) - 2を中心にして左右対称に
6. 03:47:959 (1) - x:292 y:276でblanket
7. 03:52:072 - ここにサークルを配置して、(以下に続きます
8. 03:52:244 (1) - ここのサークルをremoveしてここのタイミングからスピナーを開始させる お好みで うーんどうだろう？一応no changeで
9. 04:03:301 (1) - Normalのmodの内容と同様に

All fixed

[Insane]

1. 00:01:651 (1,2) - 2をx:176 y:148にすると綺麗にblanketできるかも？スライダー弄るともっとよさそう　参考にして少し動かしました
2. 00:02:776 (1) - remove NC 00:02:401 (3) - のスライダーがボーカルの音をフォローしたものではないのでちょっと不自然かなと思いました
3. 00:03:151 (2) - NC ^を変更した場合のみ
4. 00:06:901 (3) - x:312 y:320でblanket
5. 00:10:369 (4,5) - 1/1スライダーで「み～つ～」の音をフォローしたほうが自然？
6. 00:17:274 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 1のサークルをコピー&ペーストして-30度ずつ回転させていくと綺麗な円になります try!
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 00:19:159 (4) - 2の末端にstack
8. 00:20:702 (1,2,3) - 1~3の流れ、spacingを一定にしてしまってもいいような気もします お好みで　このままで
9. 00:23:959 (3) - ここだけ1/1スライダーなのは少し不自然かな 前2つとも1/2スライダーやサークルでフォローしてるので統一させたほうがいいと思います今のほうが好きなのでno changeで
10. 00:26:873 (3,4) - Ctrl+g
11. 00:32:016 (2,3) - 2の末端を3にblanket するとしたらこんな感じ
    
    SPOILER

    
12. 00:37:159 (1,2,3) - 1~3のspacingを一定に
13. 00:45:216 (5,6,1) - 見た目を綺麗に
    
    SPOILER

    
14. 00:49:159 (5,1) - 提案ですが、5のスライダーを1のスライダーにblanket気味に配置
    
    SPOILER

    
15. 00:51:730 - ここ抜けてるのすごくきになります
16. 00:59:101 (1,2) - 1のスライダーをコピー&ペーストして、80度傾けて配置するとこんな感じになります 試してみてね
    
    SPOILER

    
17. 01:02:530 (5,6) - 6を5の反転したものに置き換え
18. 01:03:216 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 4,5はずらして配置してあるのに6は3に思いっきりstackしてあるのはなぜ・・・？
19. 01:11:273 (2,3,4) - 綺麗な三角形に
20. 01:35:273 (2,3) - 2と3を点対称にしよう
21. 01:42:644 (3) - x:236 y:284でblanket
22. 01:45:044 (1,2,3,4) - ここスライダーでフォローしたほうがいいんじゃないかなー・・・　前にも言われた事があったので変更しますね
23. 01:56:016 (6,7,8,9) - spacing一定に
24. 01:59:959 (2) - x:136 y:304でblanket
25. 02:31:673 (3) - x:316 y:216でblanket
26. 02:33:730 (1,2,3) - 120度回転
    
    SPOILER

    
27. 03:06:130 (4,5) - これ恐らく1/4の2連じゃフォローできてないと思うので、サークルをremoveしてスライダーの長さ変更 4,5を逆にしました
28. 03:22:587 (2,3,4,5) - spacing一定に
29. 03:33:044 (7) - ここだけ飛び出てるのが目立ちます&NC
30. 03:33:216 (1) - remove NC

All fixed

遅くなってすみません…がんばってください～～～

-Yuzuriha-inori- wrote:

insane

01:12:644 これ消して次あるスライダーをここに持ってくる

01:26:530　サウンドつけてみてはどうでしょうか　　ちょうどいいヒットサウンドがないのでこのままで

02:12:473　赤までスライダー

02:12:816　単発

02:12:987　単発
02:13:073　↑同様
02:13:159　赤までスライダー　　この3つは今のほうが好きなのでno changeで

03:51:558　over maps　　うーん、問題無いと思うのでこのままかな

03:53:958 回転ここまで　　今の方がしっくり来るかも

03:54:301　赤までスライダー　　^

03:54:643　単発　　^

03:54:815　単発　　^
fixed

以上です

音取りはよくできていると思います　　ありがとう～

modが参考になれば幸いです＾＾

Desperate-kun wrote:

If you have problems to understand my mod, ask me ingame. I can help you and answer questions

[General]

1. No problems ^-^

[Normal]

1. 00:03:151 (2) - It might be confusing for newbies to read this slider, because it's end is much closer to the previous object than the start. Though this is a Normal diff, it's still the easiest diff of your mapset, so I would avoid that. It also looks strange, because 00:04:651 (1) is a blanket with 00:03:151 (2)'s start and not with the end. I recommend you to do something like this:
   
   Example

   
2. 00:30:302 (3) - It feels strange that this slider leads back in the direction of (2)'s end. This might be confusing for newbies, because they could think that they have to click at the reverse arrow and probably also a bit earlier. I'd recommend you to do sort of a blanket with the next object:
   
   Example

   
3. 00:34:416 (1) - You could rotate this slider a little bit (around the selection center), around -40° would work fine. The transition from the previous objects to this one would have a more natural flow then.
   
   Example

   
4. 00:48:130 (1,2) - The transition doesn't feel very good here. If (2) was placed as in my screenshot, there would be a more natural flow with (1). It would be hard to fix 00:50:187 (3) though... See what you can do about it.
   
   Example

   
5. 00:59:101 (1,2,3) - This pattern appears to be kind of random. My suggestion is to replace 01:00:473 (3) with a ctrl+g-version of 00:59:101 (1), so it makes a nice parallel pattern :3 See:
   
   Example

   
6. 01:12:130 (5,1) - I think it would look much better if (1) was placed similar to my screenshot. And also, the flow to the next objects would be consistent Basically, 01:12:644 (1,2,3) would be a very nice pattern if you change it:
   
   Example

   
7. 01:14:016 (3,4,1) - The transition flows weird. After (3) and (4), I'd expect to move my cursor more to the left instead of to the top-left. You'll see on my screenshot what would be a perfect transition, but sadly, you'll have to change the following pattern if you apply it, because there is no easy method of fixing ;w;
   
   Example

   
8. 01:38:873 (2,3) - I don't think these straight sliders fit the atmosphere of this calm section and the wonderful piano. Also, the flow could be improved here. I suggest using curved sliders instead, maybe like this:
   
   Example

   
9. 01:48:473 (1) - Why is there a jump here? It looks like it is not supposed to be there. And it also doesn't fit, as you don't use jumps anywhere else in this map and there is no special sound that would make a jump like this reasonable here. The easiest method of fixing would be to ctrl+g 01:48:473 (1).
10. 02:07:673 (1) - I'd use a curved slider here, to improve the flow and to stand out against this pattern 02:04:930 (1,2,3,4) more. Example:
    
    Example

    
11. 02:24:130 (1) - Again, I would prefer a curved slider here. Straight sliders have to be used very careful in Normals in my opinion, because newbies try to follow the exact sliderpath, and it might be hard for them to change between an oval movement and a linear movement. The following example would flow better, and there would be a nice little pseudo-flow break afterwards to emphasize the strong vocals at 02:25:159 (2).. I'm sure you will like it :3
    
    Example

    
12. 02:48:816 (1) - The spacing is pretty low here (0.95x) - You might move this object a little bit.
13. 03:02:530 (1) - I would move the NC from this object to the next one, because I think this one belongs to the previous combo. In fact, the emphasized beat is the end of this slider, so it feels better if you change it :3　　no change, There is no problem currently
14. 03:04:930 (1) - Same here. Move the NC to the next object for the same reasons. ^
15. What I like: Very clean Normal, almost no spacing errors. Your style is consistent in terms of sliderhapes and patterns, which I like. The rhythm is mostly fine :3 Also, I love the hitsounding. Good job!
16. What could be improved: The difficulty has some little and some bigger flow / readabilty issues, especially at the beginning, but I listed them in my mod. I have the feeling that your second kiai time is more intense than the first and third one, because you mapped more beats, but it's nothing major. At least it doesn't get boring because you use rhythm variation ^^ But for your future mapping, especially when you use longer sliders (2/1 or longer) they shouldn't be used without a reason. And that reason will likely also apply to other similar parts of the map, so it's recommended to use these rhythms again. I hope I explained this well enough o: Anyways, I personally don't like your usage of sliders starting on an Upbeat, because you use them too often in my opinion. But that's only me :3 I think they fit, as you're emphasizing vocals with them, so it shouldn't be a big problem.

fixed

[Hard]

1. 00:04:276 (1) - I would recommend you to split this in a circle + 1/1-slider as you can see in the example, because it would emphasize the vocals at 00:04:651 better. Generally, I wouldn't recommend you to use upbeat-sliders in Hards except for special cases :3
   
   Example

   
2. 00:22:759 (3,4) - The placement of these sliders appears to be pretty random to me. Maybe you could use a flipped version of (3) instead of (4), and place it in a symmetrical way, as seen in my example. You would have to rearrange 00:23:444 (1) then.
   
   Example

   
3. 00:29:444 - I'd map this beat, because of the vocals. It adds a nice effect to use a offbeat slider starting here, because it really fits so it's cool :b See what I mean in my example, and listen to it yourself to decide if you apply it or not:　　umm... no change
   
   Example

   
4. 00:30:302 (4) - If you rotate this by 30° and move it, so the spacing to the previous and to the next object will be 1.3x, it will have a better flow and aesthetic :3 See:
   
   Example

   
5. 00:34:759 (2,3,4) - This transition played kinda bad. It would be better to create an oval movement :3 For example:
   
   Example

   
6. 00:41:959 (3,4) - Why do you use jumps as big as this here? You didn't use them before and you don't use them anywhere else in this section. It feels really unfitting. ctrl+g some sliders to get this would be better:
   
   Example

   
7. 01:12:473 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - The NCs should be on the sliders and not on the circles, because these are more emphasized. You can cleary hear loud cymbal sounds there.
8. 01:35:273 - Same suggestion as 00:29:444　　no change
9. 01:54:302 (1) - The flow can be improved here. The transition from the previous object to this one doesn't feel so nice. Maybe do something like this:
   
   Example

   
   　　^
10. 01:56:701 (1) - Why is this slider faster than the following ones? (1.0x ~ 0.75) It doesn't make sense to me, as it belongs to that calm section, too.
11. 02:18:473 (5,1,2,3,4) - In the first kiai, at 01:12:473 (1,2,1,2,1,2) you used NCs to emphasize these special sounds. Why not here? Also, the spacing seems to be very unconsistent for these. Maybe use a better pattern, as I've showed you in the screenshot?
    
    Example

    
12. 03:40:930 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - Same as 01:12:473 - fix the NCing
13. What I like: Your style is pretty consistent again, which I like. You got some fun and good-looking patterns as well ^^ The hitsounding is also really good. Your rhythm seems mostly good and consistent to me. The flow is also quite good, jumps are used appropriate (except that one jumpy pattern I listed).
14. What could be improved: The rhythm has some inconsistencys. It's not needed to get your map ranked, and it is also not something you can or should try to change now, because it would be too much effort; but for your future maps: Clearly listen to the song and try to do the best you can according to rhythm, because if you do that, there won't be so much inconsistencys, for example in the kiais. What I mean is, sometimes you mapped a 1/1-slider, sometimes you didn't... Or in the calmer sections, sometimes you mapped 1/2 at a specific point, but in the next section you didn't. I hope you can understand what I mean. Next thing is, what I really don't like about this diff: The spacing inconsistencys. You are using distance snap, but it doesn't give the impression in some sections. For example, the calmer sections: Sometimes you are using 1,2x spacing for the 1/2, sometimes 1,3x. It seems random and not visually appealing, because you can't see a structure behind this placement. I suggest you to go through your whole map, and fix the 1/2-spacing issues in every calm section (that means the sections where you got slider speed x0.75). Use 1,3x, not 1,2x, so the circles don't touch each other. It will really improve the feeling you have when playing the map.　　ok. some DS was fixed

fixed

[Insane]

1. 00:04:276 (1) - Same as in Hard - I would definitely turn this into a circle + 1/1-slider
2. 00:32:359 (3) - I don't like that it touches (2) slightly. Maybe do a blanket like this:
   
   Example

   
3. 00:40:416 (3,4,5) - This is not visually impressing. You could make it a better pattern by using a flipped version of (3) instead of (5), like this:
   
   Example

   http://puu.sh/8BAZG.jpg
4. What I like: 02:40:587 - This section with the high spacing is extremely cool and so fun to play, really good job with that! *-* This map impressed me more than your other difficultys. It was more consistent (though it's an Insane, which are the hardest to do when trying to be consistent) with rhythm and flow than the others. Hitsouding was nice again. Very fun to play :3
5. What could be improved: There could still be more structure in the map, but you'll improve in your future maps I can't really explain it to you.. In more professional maps, every slider and circle fits perfectly to each other. In your map, there are still some patterns that appear kind of random to me.

fixed

Finally, I'm done with this. I found surprisingly few issues in the Insane diff, although I modded it at the same level as the other diffs. It's really the best diff in this mapset and also the most fun to play. While Hard diff needs some more work, the Normal seems also quite good already.
The mapset as a whole seems good to me. All the diffs need some little work though, to be ready for rank, in my opinion. After 5~6 more mods, you should finally call a BAT member o:

EDIT: Gave a star :3 thanks!

Good luck :3

HabiHolic wrote:

Suck

[Insane]
00:17:959 (9,1) - swap NC
00:44:359 (2) - ctrl + g
01:02:873 (6) - Bad Jump so.. Ctrl + g Batter
01:23:787 (1) - add finsh no chnage
fixed

here is small mod good luck
please call me i can Another diff mod

Kenterz wrote:

Hello, as requested (°ω °)

Normal

00:47:444 (5) - Use the same slider as 00:46:416 (2), then it'll do a great kind of symmetry
00:49:159 (2) - This kind of curve make the transition between (2) and (3) kind of bad. If you reverse the curve, then it'll be a bad transition between (1) and (2), so I suggest to make it as a linear slider.
00:52:930 (2) - i feels like this slider isn't good here. It makes the flow quite bad. I suggest to add 2 circles instead of this slider :

SPOILER

01:03:902 (4) - I don't very like the idea to start a kiai time with a slider's tail. I suggest you to make a 1/2 slider instead of it and add a circle at 01:04:587 (also there's a beat at 01:04:244 so it's not a problem =P)
01:08:359 (2) - I suggest to move it around 320|112, it'll follow a bit more (1)'s curve Some changes in the reference to your opinion
01:16:930 (3,4,5) - I suggest to make the pattern a bit different to make a blanket with (5) and (4) :

SPOILER

01:56:016 (3) - Move it 1 grid down to stack with 01:53:959 (1)'s tail
01:58:073 (2,1) - CTRL + G these slider and move 02:00:473 (2) around 180|252 (to increase a lot the flow)　no chnage
02:01:844 (4,1) - I suggest here to make a pattern with a better flow, it'll be more enjoyable :

SPOILER

02:08:702 (2) - Stack it with 02:06:987 (4) ? The flow will just be affected a bit but it'll not be visible. hmm...no chnage
02:10:073 (5) - Same problem as the 1st kiai time. Make the 1/2 slider begins at 02:09:730 and add a circle at 02:10:416.
02:11:787 (3,4,5) - Try this pattern (it'll increase the flow, since at the moment it's a bit strange xD) : some chnage

SPOILER

02:20:187 (3) - I think you should make it as 2 circles. The way of the slider makes it weird, and this problem would be solved with 2 circles.
02:37:844 (1) - Move it a little bit down to make 02:36:473 (2,3,1) a perfect triangle
02:59:444 (3) - Stack it on 02:56:701 (4) and then you can stack 03:00:130 (1) with 02:58:073 (1)
03:35:787 (2,3) - There's a little distance snap error here
03:42:473 (4) - Use same slider as 03:41:787 (3)
03:44:016 (1) - Change the curve here, then the transition between this slider and 03:42:472 (4) will be fine \:D/ :

SPOILER

03:46:759 (2) - Make it blanket with 03:46:416 (1), it'd make like a big circle around (1) :

SPOILER

03:48:816 (4) - Here also try to make a better blanket with 03:48:473 (3)

Eixed

Hard

00:06:901 (2) - Use same slider as 00:06:151 (1) ? no change
00:07:463 (1) - Avoid this stack, it created a big jump between 00:06:901 (2) and this circle.
00:09:541 (2,3) - Use CTRL+G since it'll follow the flow with 00:08:776 (4,1)
00:18:987 (4,1) - This pattern totally break the flow. I suggest to CTRL+G (1) to avoid this, and I think the jump created isn't a problem since there's many of them in the whole diff. Also I suggest you to stack it on 00:18:816 (3), then it'll be cleaner (also you need to change a bit the curve and move 00:19:844 (2)) :　no stack. Gtrl+G (1) only

SPOILER

00:36:473 (6) - Use same slider as 00:37:159 (1) to make a kind of symmetry ?
00:58:244 (2) - Maybe reverse the curve to increase the flow ?
01:04:073 (6) - Try to make this slider a bit cleaner : hmm...i like current slider

SPOILER

01:21:044 (1) - I really think you should CTRL+G it, since it totally break the flow ='/
01:21:730 (4) - This slider is a bit weird, I suggest you this :

SPOILER

02:01:844 (4,5,6) - I think you should move them around 352|192 because it's hard to see when you have to click if it's stack =/ i think don't hard。keep it
03:47:787 (5) - Don't stack it on (1), move it around 320|192, then the big jump will be deleted

Fixed

Insane

00:17:959 (1) - Use the same slider as 00:18:302 (2) ? Then it'd not break the flow like the old one
00:23:444 (1) - I think it'll be better for the flow to use a curved slider :

SPOILER

00:40:587 (4,5,6) - I think you should move these objects to make a pattern similar as below, it would be great =D :

SPOILER

00:42:130 (4) - Move it around 120|136, then the flow would be better :3
00:49:159 (5) - Use the same slider as 00:48:644 (3) and increase 00:49:502 (1)'s curve
00:50:873 (1,2) - Why aren't these sliders x0.75 ? The slow part begins at 00:50:873 so I think you should change that
01:01:330 (5) - Why not reverse the curve ? It'd increase the flow with 01:01:844 (1,2,3,4)
02:02:530 (2) - Move it around 400|364
03:06:129 (4) - Please use a 1/2 slider, this 3/4 slider doesn't need to be here, it doesn't follow the song and it's the only one in the whole diff.
03:34:244 (1) - Try to reverse the curve here

almost fixed

I hope the mod has been helpful (」・ω・)」

CelsiusLK wrote:

Hi from your request

[General]
Nothing

[Insane]
00:09:541 (3,4) - You can make these look same
00:18:302 (2,3) - Suggest keep DS consistent
01:07:844 (3,4,5,6) - Keep DS the same
01:13:330 (3) - Ctrl+G ?　　No><, I used dare same like pattern to 01:13:159 (2,3,4,1)
01:42:130 (2,3) - Better blanket
02:11:102 (4,5) - Make these look the same　　no change
02:13:844 (4,1) - ^
02:16:759 - I hear instrument beat on red line suggest make 02:16:416 (3) - repeat one time
02:41:787 (1) - Slidertick need hitsound　　i don't think need
03:12:816 (3,4) - Blanket
03:37:844 (3,3) - End of 03:39:044 (3) - stack 03:37:844 (3) -

[Hard]
00:30:987 (5,1) - Make these look the same
00:41:959 (3,4) - ^
00:47:959 (1,3) - Suggest don't stack

[Normal]
00:57:730 (3) - Move to x=304 y=204　

no comment = fixed

thank you for modding(・ω<)

Overall some patterns need to improve so it looks good and have better flow
Good luck

-Chata- wrote:

Hi. From -Chata- & K.P's Modding Queue

[General]

1. Tagsに「OP」を入れてください

[Normal]

1. 00:39:902 (1,3) - ARが遅いせいで変な形に重なってます。配置を少し変えて方がいいと思います。
2. 00:42:644 (5) - 流れ的に、以前と以後のNCを見てもここはNew combo付けたほうがあってます。
3. 01:06:987 Clap抜けてます
4. 01:08:701 (3,1) - 最初のと同じく。
5. 01:21:044 (4) - New comboで。
6. 02:51:901 (1,4) - Whistle付けたほうが良くないですか？音的に。
7. 02:57:386 (4,1) - 4と1のNCをすわっぷで。02:51:901 (1) - これのようにしてください。
8. 02:54:644 (1) - ここの頭のところにはほいっするで。03:00:130 (1) - ここと合わせて。
9. 03:10:759 (1,2) - のーまるにしては浮いてます。すごいジャンプになってるから調整を。
10. 03:10:759 (1,2) - 03:12:129 (1,2) - 1と2のNCをちぇんじで。
11. 03:37:501 (2,1) - 良くない形の重ねだと思うので最初のと同じく。
12. 03:44:015 (1) - ちょっとだけ重なってて変ですね。配置の提案ですhttp://puu.sh/9oJG4/618667ebad.jpg
13. 04:02:529 (3) - スライダーのしっぽにfinishを付けたほうが音がいいですね　　少しうるさく感じたのでno change

[Hard]

1. 00:26:873 (4,4) - NCした方がパターン的に会います。
2. 00:34:416 (6) - 上と同じく。
3. 00:35:101 (7,8) - この２つ重ならないほうがプレイの時にいいです
4. 00:39:387 (1,3) - ２つのNCをすわっぷ。このままだと00:39:387 (1) - から急に流れが変わるからわかりづらいし00:39:902 (3) - ここでハイライトに変わる。そして00:40:930 (5,6,1) - ここにはこのようにNCを付けてます。
5. 00:47:273 (2,3,1) - 流れ的にも悪いしハードの割には難しいパターンです。(2)と(3)のところと(3)と(1)のところの距離があんなに違くてはハードのユーザーには向いてませんね
6. 00:54:816 (3,1) - NCをチェンジ。00:55:501 (1) - ここにNCを付ける理由が特に無いです
7. 00:59:444 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6) - これハード的にどうかと思いますね。連続でこんなに早くスペーシングが変わるとAIMが追いつけません
8. 01:17:959 (4) - 流れ的NC
9. 01:21:387 (2,3,4) - これはInsaneに出ても難しいパターンですな。直線の流れと急に変わるスペーシング。この２つは入れるとき注意しないといけません
10. 01:22:073 (5,1) - 「この思い」の始まりは(5)ですからNCはこっちに
11. 02:16:930 (5,1) - 上と同じく歌詞の始まりに合わせましょう
12. 02:21:216 (4,1) - これも同じく。
13. 03:00:472 (8,9,10) - これも00:47:273 (2,3,1)と同じですね。流れも逆方向だし。ハードのジャンプの場合できればスライダーの後にジャンプをおいたほうがやりやすくていい感じになります。これはInsane同様ね。
14. 03:13:502 (3,4) - この2つをCtrl ＋Gにして順番を変えてください。
15. 03:51:901 (4) - これを1/2のスライダーに変えて(1)につなげた方が流れがいいです。　　音楽と合っていないと思うのでno changeで

[Insane]

1. Insane is skiped.

no comment = fixed

ここまでです。

Insaneは大きな問題はないのでパスさせてもらいます。

だって長いんだもん(っ´・ω・｀c)

それでは Good luck

あまりにも長くMODしてたせいで2くどすが別の人に・・・　(´・ω・｀)

wendao wrote:

[Insane]
00:10:369 (4) - I think this slider got too far from (3), maybe DS 2x will be better　ok.

[Hard]
01:23:959 (1) - Wrong placed spinner??　　yeah, i didn't notice
01:46:244 (1) - remove NC no change

[Normal]
Fine

sorry for short mod, I think all diff were fine as it

star~

Alarido wrote:

Modding upon pm request (:
遅くなって、すみません (requested 8 days ago ><)

Legenda

Tags: (more than one can occur at same line)
{ N } → It stands for Nazi. Smaller/microscopic changes for extreme perfection (look & feel)
{ C } → It stands for Cosmetics. Changes that usually affects just the appearance.
{ F } → Suggestions about flow.
{ R } → Suggestions about rhythm.
{ P } → It stands for Placement. Spacing and other placement issues that doesn't affect flow. It usually appears at Easy/Normal diffs.
{ H } → Suggestions about hitsounds.
{ D } → About certain patterns that might not fit in a specific difficulty due to its inherent harshness.

Icons:
→ Unrankable stuff, must change if you aims for ranking.
→ Doubtful, a thing to ask a BAT about.
♥ → Compliments!
* → Comments (lines marked with * aren't mods).

[Insane]
00:05:776 (5) { F } - For reducing distance (oh random jumps!) and improve flow (by avoiding it to feel broken), move to x:140 y:160 and set its tail to x:176 y:104. In addition, it will improve flow continuity as you can view illustrated below:

FLOW I

01:11:959 (3) { F } - Why not move to x:340 y:224? The flow will be more improved, it will became more natural and also intuitive by making the flow on 01:11:787 (2,3,4) - like the flow at 01:11:101 (5,6,1) - (:
01:51:902 (3) { P } - Why not move to x:284 y:360? Reduce distance (from 4x, it's Highlander-Norris!) and feels more playable. Also, nothing in the song is suggesting so big-and-distant jump.
01:58:587 (3,4,1) { F } - It feels a bit strange in terms of flow.... Consider Ctrl-G'ing 01:59:102 (4) - to give some naturality as you can see below:

FLOW II

03:00:302 (2) { P } - Consider reducing the distance on (2,3) to make it a bit more playable, by moving 03:00:302 (2) - to x:312 y:240 (it'll reflect the pattern at 02:59:443 (4,5) - too)

[Hard]
♥ No complaints here.

[Normal]
01:58:073 (2) - { F } It could be changed to a 1/1 repeating slider like the one below

FLOW III

Good luck (: rank it soon ^^
がんばってください

Att.

1. Tagのopは機能しないので削除してください。

1. 00:03:151 (2) - 前後のスライダーを考えて縦に配置したほうがより流れがよくなると思います。
2. 00:10:783 (1) - ここのスピンですが、BPMが変動するので長いスライダーに変更したほうがより初心者に優しいです。またスライダーにすることでスピンよりも難しくなく、後のスライダーのタイミングもよりわかりやすいし、時間も作れるかと思います。
3. 00:28:930 (2) - New comboはここからだと思います。
4. 00:56:359 (1) - 始点にfinishのおとがあるので試してみてください～
5. 01:14:016 (3,4) - Easyの無いNormal diffに対してこのパートは難しいと思います。赤線の上にCircleを置くのではなく、そこからスライダーを伸ばしてみてください。
   
6. 01:34:416 (1) - 一番下の難易度なので歌詞をフォローするよりもダウンビートに合わせてスライダーを開始させたほうがより初心者にわかりやすいと思います。なのでこのCircleは不要です。
7. 02:19:844 (3,4) - ,03:42:472 (3,4) - 上記と同じです。
8. 02:47:444 (2,3) - 間隔をもう一度確認してみてください。
9. 03:03:559 (3,4) - ここも少し気になります。
10. 03:24:816 (1,2) - (1)のスライダーの流れに添って配置してあげるとよりプレイしすいです。
11. 03:33:044 (2) - 気合タイムからNew comboを開始したほうがより譜面の統一感があっていいと思います。またこちらに追加する必要は無いです。03:32:702 (1) -
12. 04:01:844 (1) - 特に強調する部分も無いと思うのでNew comboは不要です。
    指摘はしませんでしたが、02:14:187 (2,4) - ,02:29:616 (2,4) - ,02:48:815 (1,3) - こういった部分での重なりが気になりました。重なっているとスライダーの番号が見えづらく非常にやりにくいのでできれば見た感じ間隔があくくらいには移動してほしいです。ここの３つ以外にも見られたので確認してみてください～

1. 00:09:541 (2,3) - 前のパターンに合わせて(2)のwhistleを(3)に移動したほうがよりリズムが取りやすいかと思います。
2. 00:37:844 (2) - 流れにそって折り返しを左側に移動してあげると前後の流れに合います。
3. 00:48:473 (2) - 特にジャンプするような音でもないので普通に配置したほうが無難です。
4. 00:58:759 (3) - すこし上に移動してあげると丸い感じになってより綺麗に見えます。
5. 01:01:501 (3) - ここ01:00:130 (3) - と同じようにジャンプさせたほうがより面白いと思います。
6. 01:23:444 (1) - 綺麗に配置したいところだけどもうすこし間隔あけないと混乱してしまう恐れがあります。
7. 01:34:759 (1) - 終点はwhistleで充分です。すこし煩く感じました。
8. 01:51:730 (2) - この音に対してジャンプがかなり大きいので少し減らしてください。
9. 02:21:302 (2) - ここにCircleを置き、3連打を作成していますがこの難易度はHardなのでそこまで音を取るような大きな音もないので不要に思えました。
   3 diffの構成に対してやや難易度が高いように思えました。内容に関しては問題はありません。すこしやさしくするように調節してみてください。

1. 00:56:359 (1) - 始点にfinish
2. 01:11:101 (5,6) - 前の(4)スライダーが上から下に流れてくるので、こちらは前の流れを意識して下から上に流れるように配置してあげるとより流れがよくなります。
3. 01:16:244 (5) - 前の(1,2,3,4)が左回りなのでこのスライダーもそれに応じて配置してみてください。
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 02:10:416 (1) - 始点にfinish
5. 02:27:902 (7) - clap忘れ・・・？
6. 02:48:816 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - このあたりの四角形配置をすこしだけ傾けるとかっこいいです
7. 02:50:016 (1,2,3,4,5) - 連続したclapがやや煩いので音にあわせてだんだん音量をあげてみてはどうでしょう？
8. 03:50:530 (5) - clap
9. 03:51:986 (1) - 歌詞に合わせるより前のパートと同じようにダウンビートにあわせて配置してあげたほうがプレイヤーも余裕ができていいと思います。始点～03:52:243 -

1. 00:28:244 - Insane diffと合わせる感じでclapを付けてみてはいかがでしょう？
2. 00:49:844 - add whistle ? 00:49:159 - ここと同じくらいvocalのアタックが強いので付けてみてもいいかもしれません。
3. 01:03:216 (3) - 次の(4)番にAIM運びする際に01:04:587 (1) - ここのslider endもほぼ同時に目に入ってくるので初心者の方は混乱してしまうかもしれません。
   画像のようにスペースをあけることで若干ですが読みやすくすることができると思います。codeも貼っておきますのでよかったらお試しください
   
   img & code

   

   43,108,63216,2,0,P|90:100|136:118,1,100,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

4. 01:04:244 - Normal diff はclapのみでInsane diff はfinishのみだったので統一するといいかもしれません、個人的にはclapとfinish両方付いてるが好みです。
5. 02:30:644 - ここからのclap音いいですね！とても参考になりました
6. 03:02:872 - add whistle ? 02:51:901 - ここと音程が一緒なので付けてもいいかもしれません。少しだけ音のアタック弱いのが気になりますが合うと思います。
7. 03:38:529 - clap → finish

1. 00:28:244 (1,2,3) - add clap? ( volume 40% ) , Insane diffと合わせる感じです。
2. 02:01:844 (4,5,6) - ARが7なのでslider endにスタックさせると読みにくいと思います。02:01:759 - ここと絡んでるストリームと勘違いして初見ミスしてしまったのでendから外すことをオススメします。
3. 02:27:216 (3,4,5,1) - 音取りの提案。02:27:387 - ここのvocalと02:27:644 - ここのスネアが欲しいのでこういうのはいかがでしょうか？
   
   img

   こんな感じやこんな感じなど。
4. 02:56:702 (4,1) - NC入れ替えてみませんか？ここまでの法則を考えると入れ替えたほうが自然だと思います。
5. 03:50:016 (3,4) - ここも音取りの提案させてもらいますね。
   
   img

   こんな感じが好みです

alacat wrote:

Hey~ M4M

[General]

1. Tagのopは機能しないので削除してください。

[Normal]

1. 00:03:151 (2) - 前後のスライダーを考えて縦に配置したほうがより流れがよくなると思います。
2. 00:10:783 (1) - ここのスピンですが、BPMが変動するので長いスライダーに変更したほうがより初心者に優しいです。またスライダーにすることでスピンよりも難しくなく、後のスライダーのタイミングもよりわかりやすいし、時間も作れるかと思います。
3. 00:28:930 (2) - New comboはここからだと思います。
4. 00:56:359 (1) - 始点にfinishのおとがあるので試してみてください～
5. 01:14:016 (3,4) - Easyの無いNormal diffに対してこのパートは難しいと思います。赤線の上にCircleを置くのではなく、そこからスライダーを伸ばしてみてください。
   
6. 01:34:416 (1) - 一番下の難易度なので歌詞をフォローするよりもダウンビートに合わせてスライダーを開始させたほうがより初心者にわかりやすいと思います。なのでこのCircleは不要です。
7. 02:19:844 (3,4) - ,03:42:472 (3,4) - 上記と同じです。
8. 02:47:444 (2,3) - 間隔をもう一度確認してみてください。
9. 03:03:559 (3,4) - ここも少し気になります。
10. 03:24:816 (1,2) - (1)のスライダーの流れに添って配置してあげるとよりプレイしすいです。
11. 03:33:044 (2) - 気合タイムからNew comboを開始したほうがより譜面の統一感があっていいと思います。またこちらに追加する必要は無いです。03:32:702 (1) -
12. 04:01:844 (1) - 特に強調する部分も無いと思うのでNew comboは不要です。
    指摘はしませんでしたが、02:14:187 (2,4) - ,02:29:616 (2,4) - ,02:48:815 (1,3) - こういった部分での重なりが気になりました。重なっているとスライダーの番号が見えづらく非常にやりにくいのでできれば見た感じ間隔があくくらいには移動してほしいです。ここの３つ以外にも見られたので確認してみてください～

[Hard]

1. 00:09:541 (2,3) - 前のパターンに合わせて(2)のwhistleを(3)に移動したほうがよりリズムが取りやすいかと思います。
2. 00:37:844 (2) - 流れにそって折り返しを左側に移動してあげると前後の流れに合います。
3. 00:48:473 (2) - 特にジャンプするような音でもないので普通に配置したほうが無難です。
4. 00:58:759 (3) - すこし上に移動してあげると丸い感じになってより綺麗に見えます。
5. 01:01:501 (3) - ここ01:00:130 (3) - と同じようにジャンプさせたほうがより面白いと思います。
6. 01:23:444 (1) - 綺麗に配置したいところだけどもうすこし間隔あけないと混乱してしまう恐れがあります。
7. 01:34:759 (1) - 終点はwhistleで充分です。すこし煩く感じました。
8. 01:51:730 (2) - この音に対してジャンプがかなり大きいので少し減らしてください。
9. 02:21:302 (2) - ここにCircleを置き、3連打を作成していますがこの難易度はHardなのでそこまで音を取るような大きな音もないので不要に思えました。
   3 diffの構成に対してやや難易度が高いように思えました。内容に関しては問題はありません。すこしやさしくするように調節してみてください。

[Insane]

1. 00:56:359 (1) - 始点にfinish
2. 01:11:101 (5,6) - 前の(4)スライダーが上から下に流れてくるので、こちらは前の流れを意識して下から上に流れるように配置してあげるとより流れがよくなります。
3. 01:16:244 (5) - 前の(1,2,3,4)が左回りなのでこのスライダーもそれに応じて配置してみてください。
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 02:10:416 (1) - 始点にfinish
5. 02:27:902 (7) - clap忘れ・・・？
6. 02:48:816 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - このあたりの四角形配置をすこしだけ傾けるとかっこいいです
7. 02:50:016 (1,2,3,4,5) - 連続したclapがやや煩いので音にあわせてだんだん音量をあげてみてはどうでしょう？
8. 03:50:530 (5) - clap
9. 03:51:986 (1) - 歌詞に合わせるより前のパートと同じようにダウンビートにあわせて配置してあげたほうがプレイヤーも余裕ができていいと思います。始点～03:52:243 -

NormalとHardにまだ改善点が見られるので、大変だとは思いますが2,3人からModをもらってください :3　よりいい内容になると思います 　了解です！

iyasine wrote:

ちろにーさんこんにちは～！あらきゃっとさんからのリクエストです
NormalとHardをmodさせてもらいますね( ˘◡˘ )

[Normal]

1. 00:28:244 - Insane diffと合わせる感じでclapを付けてみてはいかがでしょう？
2. 00:49:844 - add whistle ? 00:49:159 - ここと同じくらいvocalのアタックが強いので付けてみてもいいかもしれません。
3. 01:03:216 (3) - 次の(4)番にAIM運びする際に01:04:587 (1) - ここのslider endもほぼ同時に目に入ってくるので初心者の方は混乱してしまうかもしれません。
   画像のようにスペースをあけることで若干ですが読みやすくすることができると思います。codeも貼っておきますのでよかったらお試しください 　画像を参考にすこし動かしました
   
   img & code

   

   43,108,63216,2,0,P|90:100|136:118,1,100,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

4. 01:04:244 - Normal diff はclapのみでInsane diff はfinishのみだったので統一するといいかもしれません、個人的にはclapとfinish両方付いてるが好みです。
5. 02:30:644 - ここからのclap音いいですね！とても参考になりました
6. 03:02:872 - add whistle ? 02:51:901 - ここと音程が一緒なので付けてもいいかもしれません。少しだけ音のアタック弱いのが気になりますが合うと思います。
7. 03:38:529 - clap → finish

[Hard]

1. 00:28:244 (1,2,3) - add clap? ( volume 40% ) , Insane diffと合わせる感じです。
2. 02:01:844 (4,5,6) - ARが7なのでslider endにスタックさせると読みにくいと思います。02:01:759 - ここと絡んでるストリームと勘違いして初見ミスしてしまったのでendから外すことをオススメします。
3. 02:27:216 (3,4,5,1) - 音取りの提案。02:27:387 - ここのvocalと02:27:644 - ここのスネアが欲しいのでこういうのはいかがでしょうか？
   
   img

   こんな感じやこんな感じなど。
4. 02:56:702 (4,1) - NC入れ替えてみませんか？ここまでの法則を考えると入れ替えたほうが自然だと思います。
5. 03:50:016 (3,4) - ここも音取りの提案させてもらいますね。
   
   img

   こんな感じが好みです

以上です！3diff 構成難しいのにうまくバランスを取って作られているなと思いました。rankedまでもう一息ですね楽しみに待ってます

- Tu - wrote:

done (y)

normal

01:03:901 (4) - blanket
02:23:787 (4) - blanket

hard

01:14:530 (1,2,3) - pattern not goodlooking
01:44:359 (1,2) - http://puu.sh/9Mg90.jpg or http://puu.sh/9Mgb6.jpg rhythm will be better
02:11:102 (3) - blanket 02:11:616 (1) -
02:42:644 (3) - blanket 02:43:159 (4) -
03:41:616 (2) - blanket 03:41:102 (1) -

chaee wrote:

From: chaee's queue

[Normal]

00:43:673 (2,1) - Stack one on 2
00:56:359 (1,3) - Why not make these symmetrical to eachother. Move 3 down a bit
01:01:844 (1,2) - Try this maybe?

SPOILER

01:07:330 (1,3) - The symmetry here is off. Move 1 down a bit?
01:11:444 (3) - Move this up. It's not perfectly symmetrical to 01:10:073 (1) -
01:49:502 (2,1) - Stack 1 on to 2
02:07:673 (1,2) - Blanket

[Insane]

00:05:588 (4,2) - Stack 2's end with 4
00:22:073 (1,2) - Stack no change. i think current flow is good


That's it's good luck

Loneight wrote:

Hi o/
Request from my googledoc.

• 
  Black is just suggestion, if you don't like , you can skip it
  Blue is recommended to fix
  red is unrankable issue

[Normal]

1. Useless green line:
   
   green line

   02:29:701 -
2. Unsnapped inherited (green) sections:
   
   green line

   00:28:590 -
   00:39:227 -
   00:56:014 -
   02:01:847 -
   03:02:533 -
3. ngzi suggestion, remove the bookmarks(blue lines) if you no use them, try to make beatmap clean
4. 00:09:128 (2,3) - IMO, BPM change is a little like speed(green) change, try to NC them alone to show the change? I worry newbie couldn't read
   
5. 00:51:559 (1) - nazi suggestion, how about copy 00:50:187 (3) - , rotate it -210°, and move to 428|104 for a pretty arrangement?
   
   code

   428,104,51559,6,0,B|342:36|239:84,1,200,8|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

6. 01:01:844 (1) - nazi suggestion, a little weird for its shape, how about make it like this? it'd be better if you want blanket, just 01:01:844 (1) - 4th point move to 92|316, last point move to 52|324, and 01:02:873 (2) - move to 40|224
   
   code

   224,360,61844,6,0,B|152:340|116:288|116:288|88:320|48:320,1,200,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   36,220,62873,1,8,0:0:0:0:

7. 01:23:444 - I just think you miss a note for there, I found 02:29:273 - have a soft sound same as 01:23:444 - and you use 02:29:273 (1) - to follow, but 01:23:444 - no has note, try to make them equal
   
8. 01:23:787 (1) - dosen't it follow the vocal? try to change the start to 01:23:616 - like 03:52:072 (1) -
9. 03:52:072 (1,1) - just feel very weird for there rhythm, 03:52:072 (1) - should end with the vocal, but it end for the snare. And 03:54:644 (1) - seems is only a slider which start at clap without rotation in this diff? but anyway, it also made me feel weird. try to make 03:52:072 (1) - end at 03:53:615 - , change 03:54:644 (1) - to other way like the picture
   picture

   

just my thought, some sliders could make them more better for flow, but anyway, solid diff

[Hard]

1. Unsnapped inherited (green) sections:
   
   green line

   00:50:876 -
   00:56:014 -
   01:56:422 -
   03:02:533 -
   04:06:647 -
2. ngzi suggestion, remove the bookmarks, reason same as Normal
3. 00:28:930 (1) - I worry some players would read it to 1/2 jump because of the distance which is same as 00:26:187 (1,2) - with the AR, try to increase distance?. 01:56:701 (1) - Same as here
4. 00:55:930 (4,5) - try to make them have some distance, because of Stack Leniency, they will be under 00:55:501 (3) - thus hard to read, like the picture
   picture

   
5. 02:46:587 - feel weird for there rhythm, because vocal is more obvious than snare, it'd be suitable to follow vocal instead of the snare, try the rhythm like the picture
   picture

   

though it's fine for me, a little feel you're lazy in this diff, try to make flow more various ;w;

[Insane]

1. Useless green line:
   
   green line

   01:45:730 -
2. 02:14:359 (5,7) - do you miss NC? I feel them same as 01:08:530 (1,1) -

find to me

that's all!
good luck!
osu need more duca

neonat wrote:

Normal

02:00:473 (2,4,2) - make equal spacing between all of them?
03:11:101 (2) - I think this would be better with more curve

Hard

00:06:901 (2) - since this slider doesn't seem to have any pattern relation to 00:06:151 (1) how about you make it look more symmetrical with 00:07:463 (1,2)
00:27:901 (2) - finish on start of slider
00:59:101 (1) - ^
01:38:530 (3,1) - use same spacing as 03:25:844 (3,4) it looks nicer

Insane

00:27:902 (2) - finish on start of slider
00:42:644 (1) - stack on the slider end? x: 256 y: 232 so it won't touch 00:42:130 (4)
01:59:444 (1,3) - blanket not perfect
02:12:302 (3,5,1) - make the spacing between the 3 of them equal


Good Luck

alacat wrote:

It's ok :3 Good luck for your first rank

Bubbled

1. Delete the spaces after and before the tildes in "~ Anohi to, Kinou to Kyou to Ashita to ~" since they're not in the japanese unicode.

Konei wrote:

Before this is going to rank.


[General]

1. Delete the spaces after and before the tildes in "~ Anohi to, Kinou to Kyou to Ashita to ~" since they're not in the japanese unicode.

Xinely wrote:

Hi ~
Random bubble check because this map already bubbled a month ago o.o



Red : must be fixed
Blue : highly suggested

• 
  Normal

1. 00:14:518 (1,1) - imo the gap from spinner to next object a little bit short for Normal which doesn't have Easy diff since newbie will play the easiest diff first and you know how newbie play ;-; . i would to move the spinner to 00:17:959 - and remove 00:17:959 (1) - this slider (so have 3/1 gap after spin i mean)
2. 00:37:159 (1) - hmm i kinda dislike the different shape for this slider, how about 00:35:787 (2) - copy paste and flip from this slider?
3. 00:48:130 (1) - nazi but the blanket a little bit off. move the 2nd curve to 108,40 for better blanket
4. 01:42:987 (3,1) - NC combo would be consistent if you swap the NC here (i mean 01:42:987 (3) - NC and 01:44:359 (1) - remove NC)
5. 02:29:530 - unnecessary greenline since no object would get the effect from this greenline lol
6. 02:51:901 (1) - nazi, the blanket could improve again. move to 204,136 :3
7. 03:46:759 (2) - hmm the music on slider repeat is piano so i dont get why finish here. you should change the finish with the whistle for consistency with 02:24:816 - too
8. 03:54:301 (1) - same explanation as 00:14:518 (1,1) - , i would to remove 03:54:301 (1) - :C

• 
  Hard

1. HP+1 for balance spread with other diffs?
2. 00:02:213 (2) - i would say to remove this slider and add circle 00:02:401 - to follow the guitar instead
3. 00:14:518 (1) - move the spinner to 00:16:804 - since at least need 1/1 gap after a spinner in Hard diff
4. 01:03:216 (1,2,3,4,5) - for me these circles are a little bit to catch for player who after play Normal diffs and want to try Hard diff. i would say to 01:03:559 (3,4) -change into a slider :3
5. 01:19:330 (5) - i dont get why need a huge jump for this circle. i would move the circle to 76,156 instead. just need a jump for next slider
6. 01:44:530 - add note here because the piano sound? if i were you i would make 1/2 slider repeat from 01:44:359 -
7. 02:23:102 (1,3) - nazi, try to avoid the overlap as possible ><
8. 02:30:130 (2) - the music on redticks are quite faint imo. try remove and use circle at 02:30:301 - ? hmm... i felt sense of incongruity on the subsequent pattern. keep it.
9. 02:29:616 - until 02:40:244 - actually the music become so calm so lower SV like 0,75x. but that's too late now so i just saying here for your future maps :3 i couldn't care too much.
10. 02:50:530 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - yup this is quite hard pattern. make 02:50:530 (2,3,4,5) - as 2 of 1/2 sliders or 02:51:216 (6,7,8) - make it as slider repeat
11. 03:00:643 - imo the piano is quite loud and need to mapped, i would say http://puu.sh/bYa8Z/494be2c3ab.jpg like this instead. you still can give the finish on (1)'s tail I change it in reference to your opinion
12. 03:43:759 (4) - the circle has inconsistency spacing (0,94x and 0,84x) so please make it consistent. if i were you i would use spacing around 0,6x for the triplet here
13. 03:51:559 (1,2,3) - try use slider repeat as 03:50:358 (3) - , the music is become calm so imo the triplet a little bit forced
14. 04:00:816 (1) - maybe just for me but i feel the placement of the circle is too far from the centre of spinner. how about move to 176,168 instead?

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1. 00:26:187 (1) - the rhythm can improved here. try remove the repeat and add circle 00:26:530 - so you can emphasize the cymbal by click the rhythm ><
2. 00:47:959 (1) - yup the rhythm can improved too, 00:48:130 - such quite loud guitar so imo need to mapped here. just try a circle and then a slider for 00:48:130 - here
3. 01:34:416 (1,2,3,4) - just my taste but since it already has break time here, imo the player's hands are not really ready for the stream so i prefer to change the circles into 1/4 slider repeat instead i felt like not match 1/4 slider in here.
4. 02:29:616 - until 02:40:244 - same as Hard, just saying too ;3 same hard
5. 02:51:130 (4) - inconsistency spacing (1,20x)
6. 02:51:302 (6,7,8) - same here (it has 1,18x and 1,0x) i would say to make the stream consistent each other
7. 03:00:472 (3) - same as 03:00:643 - in Hard, how about make a circle and then 1/2 slider in 03:00:643 - ?
8. 03:29:873 (3,4) - the music is calm part, imo the 1/4 with high spacing like this are uncomfortable, i would say use 0,8x instead

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Xinely wrote:

fixed things in IRC, mostly fixed unsnapped greenlines huft huftQ_Q

Everything is fine for me now. Enjoy your first qualified map
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Mao wrote:

Gratz! :3