yf_bmp wrote:

Hi! As you requested.

Notice:

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1. Red: Be unrankable
2. Blue: Be important
3. Black: Suggestions

[General]
BG最好是4:3或者16:9, 建议裁剪一下 噗，我记得当时是剪了的啊……Fixed.
听得出来mp3的音质是伪192KBPS. 建议替换品质更好的MP3 你永远也不会想知道这MP3是从哪来的……由于各种需要调音量，原MP3已经被我毁得面目全非了，我也因此调了几次Timing
Letterbox 每个难度去掉 OK.

[Insane]
太难了

00:05:182 (2,3) - 有些近..打的时候也发现了.00:03:596 (3,4) - 间距是1/2. 而后面却成了1/1.音乐也没有明显变化 建议增加距离
00:06:047 (1,2) - ^. 这个也可以尝试叠上
00:06:913 (3,4,1,2) - 这个间距不太好 太多不等距了给人不舒服感.. 可以让3与4再近一些
00:08:355 (3,4,5) - 这里也是..可以让4与5之间的距离比较近 做成一种梗 这里不懂。
00:12:105 (9) - 应该是这里NC, 00:12:538 (1) - 这里有个小变速但没什么关系 去掉也可以
00:12:105 (9,10,1) - 做个等距跳会更舒服些
00:16:865 (4,5,1) - 这个突然的顺flow和你之前之后的风格太不和谐啦 可以做成三角跳之类的 看我多善良<3
00:18:451 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 顺序我觉得换成这样会更舒服也更符合你的风格. 图: 那样产生不了两两分组的感觉，因为跳的角度的转换不同……我不是处女座

SPOILER

00:20:903 (5,6) - 总觉得太近 AR9，没问题
00:25:086 - 有鼓点 加上为好
00:27:538 - 你这段应该是有些跟键盘音的吧, 那么这里最好有物件. 可以延长00:27:105 (2) - 我做图一般都是跟最明显的音，所以有时候会出现音轨互跳的感觉，但是个人觉得并不会突兀。
00:35:615 (4,1) - 这里可以跳的更大一些
00:48:451 (1,2,3) - 这里的拍子出现的比较突兀, 如果跟前面用一样的距离会有些难读的..可以让这三个放成间距0.7x的. 图:

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00:59:124 - 鼓点建议加上 虽然是为了跟vocal但我还是建议加 为了配合一下 之后几个也可以都加上.可以叠到2上 这个地方有人建议我说不要加（我原本是有的），玩得舒服一些。我个人认为为了强调两两一组，这样其实还好，我会看看后面人的mod的。后面几个同
00:59:557 - ^
00:59:990 - 这里随便 不加也行
01:00:422 - ^
01:00:855 - 这里加上会好点, 但这里不要叠
01:01:432 (1,2) - 听音乐的话这两个的距离最好拉开 并且nc在2上,不是1

01:07:490 (1,2,3) - 不推荐在kiai一开始就这样跟vocal..很有失感觉
01:12:105 (4) - 虽然不是一开始但我依然不建议这种节奏在这里出现 上面一个改了，这一个没改。因为我觉得这一个蛮fit
01:14:557 (7) - 这里NC会让人容易拆解combo 建议NC一下
01:20:759 (3,4) - 不如合并成一个折返 现在打也会觉得怪怪的..
01:32:153 (1) - 不建议变速 你这里原本打的很爽突然减速不太舒服 可以做一个激霸的长一点的1/1滑条 其实我大多ins都会有这样一个梗，就是在某个节奏快的地方出现的一个1/1减速。个人习惯问题，而且挺喜欢的。
01:36:480 (4,5) - 这两个包一下做成梗为好. 也就是说让这两个近一些.如果改了的话01:36:769 (5) - 这里NC 懒搞
01:38:644 (4,5) - 这不远不近距离感觉不太好 可以再远一点

[Hard]
还是有些偏难
00:25:951 (4,5,6) - 这梗配合00:26:096 (5) - 的遮挡真的太难了.. 可以去掉00:25:951 (4) ,(5)的位置也最好不要遮挡
00:45:999 (6) - nc一下
00:58:836 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - 这变距太难啦 换成等距的
01:03:451 (1,1,1) - 这三个建议换梗..不然就真的太难了
01:07:490 (1,2,3) - 同insane 这里我没换，但ins我换了
01:08:644 (6) - 叠在01:08:067 (4) - 的尾上
01:22:922 (2,3,4) - 这节奏简直噩梦 不如换成这样: 图

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01:25:374 (2,3) - 太远了 但这里简单改改还不行..得换梗
01:28:836 (1) - 为何NC
01:28:259 (6,7,8) - 这三个等距会好些啊
01:31:865 (4,5) - 前面是跳,所以这个距离有点太近了

[Normal]
难
00:10:086 (1) - 转盘不合适啊 里面有很多音的 为了减难度，在这里和EZ保持一致。
00:20:182 (2) - 四个折返太难了些,可以考虑这样子:

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00:38:499 (2) - 延后1/2.. 不建议这里跟vocal 感觉跟节拍和跟vocal没很大差别
00:55:230 (3) - 提前1/2 跟鼓点
00:55:663 (5) - ^..改了的话顺便再把这段的读图改的再容易些
00:57:538 (3,4,5,6) - 同上
01:06:480 (2) - 不建议叠
01:20:615 (2) - 去掉 normal还overmap真的没意思...
01:22:923 (2) - ^, 再调一下距离
01:23:644 (3,4) - 改成一个折返, 因为下面是重叠梗 真的太难了 图:

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[Easy]
00:08:211 (1,1) - 转盘间隔太近了,1可以调整到 00:09:653 -
00:30:855 (1,2) - 前面normal够难了 easy别重叠了...
01:16:432 - 建议加上, 不然kiai空荡荡的
01:17:009 - ^

没什么了
Good Luck!
其余All Fixed.

Cheol wrote:

gool duck~

lks_Xhore wrote:

Cheol wrote:

gool duck~

Desperate-kun wrote:

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  General

1. Your Background-Image has a size of 1511x1079. It needs to be exactly 1366x768. Sadly it has the wrong proportions, so you have to cut something from the bottom in order to get it right. I still resized it for you. If you don't mind the cut at the bottom, use mine. If you don't like it, you have to search for a different Background for your map. In fact, someone has told me that and I've already fix it. But I forget to inform about it. Sorry.
2. The Difficulty Spread definitely needs work. The Easy, Normal & Hard are good as a spread, but the Insane seems to be very hard compared to the other diffs. Basically, in your Hard diff, you aren't using much 1/2-tapping (due to the fact that it's mostly sliders), you don't use much 1/4 (or only triplets) and you don't use any complex rhythms to tap (like 1/3 or something). In the Insane, you use massive 1/2-tapping together with huge jump patterns (for example 00:12:971 (2,3,4,5,6,7)), you are using longer streams and complex rhythm at some points, which is a bit hard to read. There are 2 solutions for this problem:
   1. Give OD7 to the Insane (and maybe even HP6). It will improve the spread, as it will make your Insane noticably easier.
   2. Probably you don't want to make your Insane easier. Then you could also rename it to Extra and create an easier Insane, which also uses AR9 but the settings I listed in 1. It should use a lot of 1/2-tapping, but without huge jump patterns. Then it shouldn't use complex rhythms like 1/3 to tap (only with reverse sliders, like in Hard) and it shouldn't use very long streams.

I'm gonna consider it while finding BATs to give comment.

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  Easy

1. 00:06:047 to 00:11:528 - In this section, the spinners seem to be unconsistently placed in Easy and Normal. It doesn't really make any sense to me. I highly recommend you to decide for one version here.
2. 00:28:836 to 00:35:759 - In this section, it seems weird that there are really huge gaps between the objects. I know you want to map the vocals here, but these are long vocals, for example it starts at 00:31:143 and ends at 00:32:297, so the big gaps between objects feel very empty. Either use long sliders here to fit the vocals, or just delete those few objects and make it a longer break. I highly recommend to change this.
3. 00:51:913 (1,2) - I'd swap NCs here, in order to get it consistent with 00:47:009 (3,1) -
4. 01:32:153 (3,4,1) - The flow isn't the best here. (4) should be placed more to the left, so the transition with (3) is better: Like this. Then you could rotate (1) about -90° and place it like this to have a perfect flow
5. 01:38:644 (2) - Probably you should make this slider a little bit less curved. It's rather short and has a very strong curve, which makes it look kind of weird. Try something like this ?
6. Well, the Easy is quite ok. The problem is, that the rhythm is really difficult for newbies. I know how hard it is to map Easy diffs to songs which have weird rhythm like this, so it's fine. I'd highly recommend you to lower overall difficulty to OD1 though, just because the rhythm might be hard to understand for newbies ;w; So that they won't make so many 50s!

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  Normal

1. 00:20:903 (4,5,6) - This transition might be a bit hard to perform for Normal-Players. I'd curve the slider the other way around, like this.
2. 00:28:836 to 00:35:759 - Same thing as in Easy. Long sliders, or break. Otherwise it seems pretty weird.
3. 01:12:682 (1) - End this spinner at 01:14:413, like in the Easy diff. It's the most emphasized vocal.
4. 01:32:586 (3,4,1) - Again, weird transition for a Normal diff. Try this instead?
5. 01:37:490 (1,2) - Personal opinion, but slidershapes like this might be a little bit unfitting for such a calm section in the song. It would fit better if you use curved sliders here or something different
6. Nice Normal, though the rhythm might be hard for newbies to understand sometimes, due to the many polarity issues. Try to avoid that in the future.

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  Hard

1. 00:06:047 (2,3) - The transition between these objects isn't a very good flow, since (2) is curved. Why don't you make (2) linear and parallel to (3)? Like this for example.
2. 00:36:913 (1) - Don't you think it looks better if you place the anchor points more in the middle of the wave-slider? Something like this? It's only personal opinion though.
3. 00:39:653 (1) - This NC seems pretty unnecessary to me.
4. 01:07:490 (1,2,3) - This is really unreadable for a Hard diff, especially since it looks so similiar to 1/2-stacks. I'd highly recommend you to use a 3/4-reverse-slider instead: This rhythm
5. 01:16:432 (8) - This slidershape looks kind of random, and the flow with the previous object isn't the best either. Why not use something like this or something completely different?
6. 01:26:817 (2) - It looks pretty weird to have different spacing to the previous and next object. Why don't you move it, so it's 1,2x to both sides? Like this Ooops, I forgot after I made some change with (1).
7. Otherwise, good Hard diff. Nice

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  Insane

1. 00:08:067 (1,2,3) - You could easily make this a perfect triangle by moving (3) to (333|190).
2. 00:20:903 (1) - The noise you are mapping here is not really 1/8, it's just a noise, but I think it's okay to use 1/8, since it sounds pretty good. What bothers me is that the noise only lasts until 00:21:047, so this rhythm is definitely wrong. Try this rhythm instead.
3. 00:40:374 (1) - I'd recommend to remove this NC due to NC-spam in this section.
4. 00:47:730 (3) - This is 1/6. If you listen to it on 25%, you can probably here it. Just change it to an 1/6-slider with only one reverse.
5. 00:48:451 (1,2,3) - NCs on every circle could help to make it more readable
6. 00:52:201 (2) - 1/6 again. This time, it's even harder to hear, but it exists.
7. 00:53:067 (1,2,3) - This time, they're far away from each other, but I'd still NC them if you did it at 00:48:451, for consistency. Also, you could make these a perfect triangle (to look better) and then change the stream afterwards, for example like this. 00:53:499 (3) would be moved to (172|84) for a perfect triangle.
8. 01:06:480 (4) - This 3/4-slider doesn't fit here well. It sounds strange, since there is nothing in the music at 01:06:696. There is beat and vocals-end at 01:06:624 though, so I'd recommend using an 1/2-slider instead. That means, this rhythm.
9. 01:09:076 (5) - Since this slider ends on the big white line, you are completely ignoring the stanza here, which sounds really bad. Also, 01:09:437 (7) this note doesn't fit, since there's nothing in the music. The stream should start at 01:09:509 instead. That is why this is the only fitting rhythm here.
10. 01:10:230 (3) - There is no beat at 01:10:374, and you're ignoring the stanza again in a bad way, so you should definitely change it to this rhythm.
11. 01:18:307 (1,2) - Same as previous ones. You are ignoring the stanza: It sounds bad, that the slider ends at the big white line. Change to this rhythm.
12. 01:21:480 (5) - I don't see a reason for 1/8 here. Simply change it to an 1/4 reverse-slider would improve the rhythm.
13. 01:32:153 (1) - This played kind of strange. In fact, this slider is only slowed down because you wanted symmetry here, though I think playability should be more important than aesthetics. You might atleast use 0,75x instead of 0.5x, and do something like this
14. Well, this Insane diff needs some work in rhythm. I only mentioned the most important aspects; To be ranked it'll need more mods to improve the rhythm. Remember for your future maps: 1. Don't use 1/8 reverse-sliders without listening to the music on 25%, if it's really fitting. 2. Only use sliders which end on the big white line in really special cases, since the main drum beat is often on this big white line and it feels bad if it doesn't get clicked. In your calm sections this fits, because there is no drums (for example 00:28:547 (5)). But in the sections with drum beat, you have to use either this or start sliders on the big white line, but not this.
    
    For the rhythm issue that you mentioned, I cared it a lot in fact. However, you can see that I added most of the finish on the red line before the Long white line during Kiai, for music itself says so. So I don't think I should pay much attention to the rhythm on the Long white line since players even won't notice there exist a Long white line without any drum ! So it won't be that awkward as you said, because follow the 1/2 rhythm will be fine for most people. Fixing it can make progress, however, so I still fixed most, and low down the volume here 01:10:374 - .
    Your flow is really good though, it's really fun to play! ^-^ Thx for your appreciation!

Nice mapset overall! Needs some more work to be ranked, but I enjoyed playing and modding it. Please, reply to my mod, and tell me what you didn't fix and why Thanks ^^

Others that I didn't mentioned are all fixed. Nice mod! Thx a lot!

wcx19911123 wrote:

[General]
offset need to +10 imo.. I'll find some more opinions on the timing

[Normal]
01:11:384 (4,5) - blanket?

nothing to say, remind me if I forget the timing

wcx19911123 wrote:

found some opinions on the timing, finally I suggest you to use offset 1158, it would be the best offset
call me back

wcx19911123 wrote:

bubbled
kd别给了

grumd wrote:

yey
ranked
we lost our chatlogs, lel
but we fixed like, several rhythm and placement stuffs in all diffs and fixed spinners in easy that had objects too close after them
nothing much though

Regraz wrote:

FFFFFFFFFFFDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
Gratz！下一个坑求带啊

Minakami Yuki wrote:

前面还找我试图后面这么快就rank，诗人？

Zero__wind wrote:

这都能rank 我也是非常夫妻

Zero__wind wrote:

这都能rank 我也是非常夫妻

Broccoly wrote:

whenever I get good score and acc maps get unranked.. i guess that's why I shouldn't play qualified maps :C

LexiaLovesU wrote:

is the difficulty of insane is it really equal to insane
i think no
its more of Extra diff :/ and this makes a bad spread for between the so called "insane" and hard
and the mapper knows this
this map is bad as in way too hard the mapper was too focused on making the map really hard it may fit with the song but it does not fit for the difficulty. and yes we can determine a quality of a map by its difficulty. This map has bad Insane since its not even an Insane :/ its an extra just cause the diff is labeled Insane doesnt mean it is and i think most will agree that this map itself definitely way too difficult for it to be an insane diff.
I thinks its bad considering this and i wished the mapper made a proper insane and named this diff Extra
Next time make a proper Insane diff instead of spamming jumps everywhere you can make hard insanes while following ds it was done before...
TBH that this should not have been ranked considering this spread cause as i said this isn't an Insane diff anymore :<

Think about that

Garven wrote:

Fix 'em please.

Considering 00:53:081 (1,1,1) - you might want to use sliders here instead of circles.

The mp3 quality is really poor. Find a better one please.

Garven wrote:

The problem is that both of those sections are different rhythms, but there's no way for the player to be able to discern that. I think from a gameplay perspective, it would be more fair if you tried to set a slider in there somewhere that establishes the rhythm at least for the first part.

Garven wrote:

[General]
So few circles in your maps until Insane. Kinda boring. If I use more circles instead of sliders, difficulty will increase. It is not even a definite Easy and Normal now.

[Easy]
00:26:701 (1) - This spinner is awkward. Since you have no sounds on it, it's just kind of there with nothing really going on in the music. I'd just delete it. OK.
Why do you have a break if you mapped through it in the Hard/Insane? Was for making it easier, but I mapped it at last.

[Normal]
00:04:057 (2,1) - What is this doing in a Normal? Follow the music, firstly. Secondly, don't use advanced techniques in lower level maps. Fixed.
Why do you have a break if you mapped through it in the Hard/Insane? Same as above.

[Hard]
Wow. This difficulty jump is HUGE. Map a real Hard diff and rename this to Insane please.
00:59:298 (1,1,1) - Please don't new combo spam This New Combo Setting is used for players to read the map easier. Using this pattern without New Combo is somehow too difficult especially in Hard. Besides, many mappers use this. Why not for me ?
01:01:461 (1,2,1,1,1,2,1,1,1) - ^ Same as above.
01:24:249 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - This doesn't really play that well. The stop and go with a constant rhythm when you stop with the vocal, but keep going with the rhythm on the drum part but not moving really flows poorly. I recommend you remove the circles between the sliders. That or remove the sliders and use double circles instead. OK.

[Insane]
Rename this to Extra. Another Name.
00:08:096 (1,2,3,4,5) - Spacing is suddenly rather high for a fairly subdued part of the song. No. This is used to hint players that map is becoming difficult. Besides, this part is faster and the rhythm is stronger than previous.
00:32:903 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - Please don't new combo spam Well, maybe in this diff I will use fewer New Combo since it is ok for player to read the map harder.
00:36:942 (1) - What is this following? The strong beat in the music is at 00:37:086 - Fixed.
00:40:692 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) - I'm not really sure what you're trying to follow here, pattern-wise. You don't hear the piano here?
00:42:134 (1,2) - And after all those jumps, this feels waaaay too close. The pacing and flow feels broken. Fixed.
00:42:855 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Please don't new combo spam OK. It won't hurt a lot.
00:48:480 (1,1,1) - I still highly recommend that you use a slider considering that both of these have different rhythms. Also don't new combo spam. In fact. These three sounds are REALLY strong. Using sliders will hurt the feeling of hitting. Just as you said in General, somehow boring. If there is definite snap of these sounds, I won't use the slider on 00:53:096 (1) - ,either.
00:53:096 (1,1) - New combo spammmm. I'm not going to point them out anymore. These rhythm are special so it is ok to stay like this. But it is ok to be fixed, too, since this is Extra now.
01:11:413 (1) - Slider end is unsnapped fixed.

You really need to fix the broken difficulty spread before you push this to re-rank. Let me know when you get the new difficulty in and I'll give it a look-over. OK.