Saturos-fangirl wrote:

[Alice]
looks good


[Rabbit]
looks good


[Hearts]
01:25:24 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - hitsounds in here somewhere? [Done]
01:50:69 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^ [Done]
02:09:24 (9,10) - remove finishes from the middle three hits of each [Done]
03:17:60 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - hitsounds


call me back for bubbles orz

tieff wrote:

[Armin]
03:53:60 (4) - Maybe align with 3? ..no.

animask wrote:

[Alice]
00:56:15 (1,2) - Too much finishes [Removed a couple]
01:06:69 (2) - Remove finish [Swapped with whistle. A bit subtler]

[B. Rabbit]
00:14:88 (4) - Finish? [Done]
00:15:60 (6) - ^ [Done]
00:17:24 (4) - ^ [Done]
00:21:06 (5) - Remove Finish [Not done, but note beforehand changed from finish to clap]
00:59:06 (1) - Align with 2? [Done]
00:58:15 (1,2) - Or move these two to the left to align it
01:27:24 (7,8,9) - Instead of claps use only finishes here [Done]

[Hearts Parallel]
00:49:42 (1,2) - Feels a bit weird....maybe remove the clap? [whistled instead]
00:59:06 (1) - Remove New Combo [Done]
01:46:88 (1) - ^ [Done]
01:47:79 (3) - Add New Combo [Done]
02:38:33 (6) - I would sort of...prefer you end the beatmap here... [uhh...what? didn't catch that last part.]
03:24:88 (1) - Finish maybe? [Done]
03:36:69 (3) - Remove? [nah, I like it the way it is, sorry]
03:37:24 (5) - ^

nooodl wrote:

Alice's Melancholy is pretty much perfect I guess... The only thing I could think of is the fact that it's a little cramped at times, with various sliders and notes very close to each other.

B.Rabbit's Rage
You should use either straight sliders or curved, but mixing them together doesn't go so well for a song like this.
[Sure they do.]
00:36:15 (1) - line up horizontally with previous slider end [Done]
00:37:60 (4) - line slider end up with 00:36:15 (1) - if this is possible [Of course it is]
00:51:60 (5,6) - mix these together into 1 slider? [I like the faster pace these two sliders creates]
00:59:42 (2) - etc. this part could do with a little less clapping. [A few less claps, a few more finishes]
01:11:06 (1) - reverse arrows should also fit to some part of the song. [They do. It's called where it sounds right to me]
01:27:97 (1) - This part, until the end, only has one slider! Adding in some more would add some variety. Only a suggestion. [Not done, because I think it's fine]

Hearts Parallel
00:44:88 (1,2,1) - It would be awesome if these sliders shared one endpoint. [Done]
00:58:88 (1) and following combos - it really looks like you're trying to fill up your beatmap by placing hitcircles on every red tick. Same for 03:34:69 (1) and following. [ Not at all. I think I did it because a) Hearts parallel is the equivalent of an insane map and b) Because it has to be insane for a reason]
01:39:42 (3) - line up with (1) [Done]
02:32:51 (8) - make this slider symmetric by moving the bottom 2 points one grid tick to the right (on most precise grid) [Done]
04:08:51 (3) - line up with slider(1) end. [Done]

Armin
Whoa, whoa, what's with the big circle size?

01:05:24 (5) - Line up with (3)
02:04:51 (1,2,3,4,5) - somewhat sloppy
03:55:42 (1,2) - Can you line these endpoints up?

Starred, by the way!

Gens wrote:

[Overall]
- Is the storyboard really necessary? IMO yes it is

Use offset 1,244 plzkthnx. If I do that there will be beats before the offset, which I'm told is a NO-NO



[B.Rabbit's Rage] (313!)
00:26:51 (5) - Could you delete the upper slider point of this please? Some repeat arrow stuff, you know... Done

[Heart's Parallel]
00:26:51 (6) - Practically the same problem as [B.Rabbit's Rage]. Done
03:02:69 (9) - Hidden slider arrow. I really hate when mappers do something like this >:| well, I reversed it, so think of the beat spacing (or lack thereof) as a throw off

[Armin]
00:13:06 (1,1) - Beats right after a spinner is fail ;(. You can leave it there if you want.)

Gens wrote:

[Armin]
00:13:06 (1,1) - Beats right after a spinner is fail ;(. You can leave it there if you want. Eh? Not fixed.

vytalibus wrote:

Offset: 1,275 ms.

[Alice's Melancholy]
00:37:60 (3) - Move the end point back to the red tick. Fixed
01:31:09 (1) - Starting point seems out of place. Fixed

[Heart Parallel]
00:13:82 (3) - Out of place. Fixed, I Think.

Alace wrote:

offset:1259

vytalibus wrote:

[Armin]
03:30:72 (1,2,3) - Unevenly-spaced.

1. Spinner
2. Length of map

RemmyX25 wrote:

The only other gripe I have about this and [Armin] is that it's four minutes long. Not really sure if it can be ranked with 4 minutes, giving over 12 million points.

alan_629_6 wrote:

Alice's Melancholy
00:40:55 (4,5,6) - alignment? you may move note 5 and 6 to left a level 3 grid. or are you do it on purpose?
It's on purpose to slowly line up to the next slider

B.Rabbit's Rage
i think the slider velocity is too high for the difficulty and the song.
why don't set the slider velocity at 1.20? sounds better. Hrm... I like it the way it is

00:45:64 (2,3) - spacing? or you do it on purpose? Purpose
01:16:55 (9,10) - alignment? or you do it on purpose? Fixed

Hearts Parallel
01:28:18 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - i know is difficult to align them. however i still need to point out because really asymmetrical. Hm? Where exactly do you mean?
01:33:82 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^ ^
01:54:37 (4) - are you trying to make a circle? it seems the note 4 is extraordinary and out of alignment??? Not at all
03:22:00 (8) - alignment with 03:21:46 (5)? Done
04:08:64 (1) - spinner extend to 04:14:007? Hrm... I think it just feels wierd...

overall this map is good^@^ wish my suggestion help you some! wish your map will be ranked soon!!!

alan_629_6 wrote:

hi this is my suggestion:

Armin
Personally i am prefer small circle. why don't you make you bigger a level? Nah XD
00:04:18 (3) - not align with 00:02:73 (3) Why not ;_;
00:51:82 (6,7,8,9) - better don't put the hidden note behind the slider. BAT definitely will ask you to change it. Not fixed D:
00:58:55 (1) - cancel the new combo ^
01:03:27 (5) - this note sounds like forced to put in. delete it? I don't see hitsounds here.
01:09:09 (3) - ^ Idem
01:22:73 (11) - suggestion. do you want to extend this slider to 01:23:280? I don't see sliders XD
02:24:55 (8) - not even with 02:25:27 (10) Not fixed
03:00:91 (6) - not even with 03:02:18 (8) Not fixed
04:08:18 (2,3) - alignment? or you do it on purpose? Not fixed
good job^@^ it difficult. i sure i can't afford to play it! many traps and hidden notes

H1ko wrote:

-10 offset work perfetc for me