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Flash back Dominant feat.si-na+Latte - JUMPING!!

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This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2014年9月15日 at 16:28:45

Artist: Flash back Dominant feat.si-na+Latte
Title: JUMPING!!
Source: きんいろモザイク
Tags: Trance EXITUNES anime kiniro mosaic opening
BPM: 180
Filesize: 7714kb
Play Time: 04:22
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (3.52 stars, 677 notes)
  2. Insane (5.06 stars, 917 notes)
  3. Normal (1.43 stars, 287 notes)
Download: Flash back Dominant feat.si-na+Latte - JUMPING!!
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总之先马

Insane
  1. 01:16:747 (3) - 这个如果旋转方向一样个人感觉可能会好点
  2. 01:17:080 (4) - 头和01:16:414 (2) - 尾重叠
  3. 01:17:414 (1) - ctrl+G?
  4. 00:25:414 (2) - ^
  5. 00:36:080 (2) - ^
  6. 03:56:580 (1,2,3) - ^
  7. 04:13:414 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - 漂亮!
  8. 01:16:747 (3,2) - 没叠在一起,这两个01:18:747 (6,8) - 和01:17:747 (2) - 一起稍微移动一下嘛
  9. 01:49:747 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 建议这三段的第一段的结尾note和第二段的头note重叠,然后第二段的尾和最后一段的头重叠
  10. 02:04:414 (1,1,1) - 这种3个的这样如何?
Hard
  1. 00:54:746 (1,2) - 换着两短滑条吧,感觉更合适那两个耶
  2. 01:21:413 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里这样更好
  3. 02:06:913 (4,1) - 差了一点点,没重叠完全
  4. 03:19:413 (1) - 不要NC?然后03:20:080 (3) - NC?
别的美丽;w;
恭喜您获得1个贴条道具,快发贴条给吧友们吧! PS:此道具今晚24点后失效是要闹那样/w\
Jemmmmy
M4M
[insane]
00:12:414 (1) - 取消nc
00:13:080 (4) -
00:15:081 (2,3,4) - 不太好的遮挡呢
00:36:080 (2,5) - 00:37:247 (6,1) - 最好能不overlap就不
00:44:914 (3,5) - 00:50:247 (3,5) - ^
00:53:080 (5,1) - 5 放在1的尾部
00:59:247 (9,10) - 10的尾完全重叠进9的内部
01:17:080 (4,1,2) - 头部最好成一条直线
01:52:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 不是一条完美的曲线,可以用滑条来检查
03:40:414 (7,8) - 滑条头应该向着7
03:46:747 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 摆开些,不要没必要的重叠
[hard]
00:32:413 (5,6) - 6的位置顺着5的方向
00:49:080 (7,8,9) - 相同距离
04:05:413 (5,6,7) - ^
01:05:913 (2,5) - 2完全放在滑条里
02:17:413 (5) -
02:18:746 (1) -
Topic Starter
AIR

Jemmmmy wrote:

M4M
[insane]
00:12:414 (1) - 取消nc
00:13:080 (4) -
00:15:081 (2,3,4) - 不太好的遮挡呢
00:36:080 (2,5) - 00:37:247 (6,1) - 最好能不overlap就不
00:44:914 (3,5) - 00:50:247 (3,5) - ^
00:53:080 (5,1) - 5 放在1的尾部
00:59:247 (9,10) - 10的尾完全重叠进9的内部
01:17:080 (4,1,2) - 头部最好成一条直线
01:52:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 不是一条完美的曲线,可以用滑条来检查
03:40:414 (7,8) - 滑条头应该向着7
03:46:747 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 摆开些,不要没必要的重叠
[hard]
00:32:413 (5,6) - 6的位置顺着5的方向
00:49:080 (7,8,9) - 相同距离
04:05:413 (5,6,7) - ^
01:05:913 (2,5) - 2完全放在滑条里
02:17:413 (5) -
02:18:746 (1) -
感谢,自己改起来很吃力;w;
P A N
m4m from my queue.


[Insane]

00:55:747 (4) - I think this slider is hard to get 300. since it's perfect stack with the slider that "1/2 spacing" before. but this one is 1/4 spacing with the 1/2 spacing. I got 100 here.
01:21:414 (7,8,9) - I think this rhythm are not fit, this part is not the same with 01:16:080 (1,2,3,4), so make you could try 1/2 rhythm instead.
01:59:247 (5) - what about move 240|272? for make it easier since the spacing is suddenly too big, and it will be a straight line pattern too. http://puu.sh/86Vkt.jpg
02:04:414 (1,1,1) - same as I mention, this note you made are not fit with music well imo. try other rhythm. maybe this http://puu.sh/86Vto.jpg also mute the (6)'s slider tail.
02:50:747 (1) - ctrl+g is really improve the flow. don't forget to move 02:51:080 (2) follow the (1)'s tail.
02:58:746 (1,2,3,4) - try this rhythm? http://puu.sh/86VWV.jpg
03:07:414 (1) - the slider is hidden too much, I almost miss here.
03:42:747 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - and yes, this is where I miss :P, I didn't think that this part are that fast since the music is relax so long, so maybe make this part easier?
03:45:747 (8) - same as I mention on the first part, it's hard to get 300.

[Hard]

00:41:913 (1) - use balance spacing. (1.55x)
00:52:746 (5) - NC? since you did on 00:20:746 (1) too.
00:54:080 (3) - meh touch hp bar, try to move it other place.
move 00:55:413 (3) a bit up for you can move 00:55:913 (4) to perfect stack with (1) also fix the spacing after that.
00:58:746 (9) - NC? for a new pattern. if you agree, check the other place too.
00:59:580 (11) - perfect stack?
01:50:413 (5) - this rhythm are same as (1,2,3,4), stick it when them and NC on (6) for new pattern/spacing. if you agree, also check the other.
02:17:413 (5) - it's overlapped here, try to make it curve for blanket with 02:17:913 (7)'s tail?
02:21:913 (2) - I think it's too close. make the spacing balance?
02:46:746 (5) - NC? the pattern are change.
03:29:746 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - try to make their spacing further on each note? I think it's fit with the music, pattern suggestion --> http://puu.sh/86Xbg.jpg
04:05:913 (6) - too close.

[Normal]

00:32:080 (2) - touch hp bar, move a bit down.
hmm this diff is fine to me.

good luck, ♥♥♥ KAREN ♥♥♥
Topic Starter
AIR

P A N wrote:

m4m from my queue.


[Insane]

00:55:747 (4) - I think this slider is hard to get 300. since it's perfect stack with the slider that "1/2 spacing" before. but this one is 1/4 spacing with the 1/2 spacing. I got 100 here.
01:21:414 (7,8,9) - I think this rhythm are not fit, this part is not the same with 01:16:080 (1,2,3,4), so make you could try 1/2 rhythm instead.
01:59:247 (5) - what about move 240|272? for make it easier since the spacing is suddenly too big, and it will be a straight line pattern too. http://puu.sh/86Vkt.jpg
02:04:414 (1,1,1) - same as I mention, this note you made are not fit with music well imo. try other rhythm. maybe this http://puu.sh/86Vto.jpg also mute the (6)'s slider tail.
02:50:747 (1) - ctrl+g is really improve the flow. don't forget to move 02:51:080 (2) follow the (1)'s tail.
02:58:746 (1,2,3,4) - try this rhythm? http://puu.sh/86VWV.jpg
03:07:414 (1) - the slider is hidden too much, I almost miss here.
03:42:747 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - and yes, this is where I miss :P, I didn't think that this part are that fast since the music is relax so long, so maybe make this part easier?
03:45:747 (8) - same as I mention on the first part, it's hard to get 300.

[Hard]

00:41:913 (1) - use balance spacing. (1.55x)
00:52:746 (5) - NC? since you did on 00:20:746 (1) too.
00:54:080 (3) - meh touch hp bar, try to move it other place.
move 00:55:413 (3) a bit up for you can move 00:55:913 (4) to perfect stack with (1) also fix the spacing after that.
00:58:746 (9) - NC? for a new pattern. if you agree, check the other place too.
00:59:580 (11) - perfect stack?
01:50:413 (5) - this rhythm are same as (1,2,3,4), stick it when them and NC on (6) for new pattern/spacing. if you agree, also check the other.
02:17:413 (5) - it's overlapped here, try to make it curve for blanket with 02:17:913 (7)'s tail?
02:21:913 (2) - I think it's too close. make the spacing balance?
02:46:746 (5) - NC? the pattern are change.
03:29:746 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - try to make their spacing further on each note? I think it's fit with the music, pattern suggestion --> http://puu.sh/86Xbg.jpg
04:05:913 (6) - too close.

[Normal]

00:32:080 (2) - touch hp bar, move a bit down.
hmm this diff is fine to me.

good luck, ♥♥♥ KAREN ♥♥♥
Thanks a lot :)
Kibbleru
ehh since you only modded my insane ill only mod insane here too

[Insane]
00:13:414 (1,2,3,4) - not really an appropriate stack since i do not hear any pauses in music and this really awkwardly stops flow, you can either unstack them all or stack them in pairs of 2
00:17:414 (1,2,3,4) - ^
00:15:414 (3,4) - ctrl g these individually for better flow
00:23:414 (1,2) - a bit confusing to read here, people will misread this as a big slider
00:23:580 (2,3) - about these 1/4 distances... i think the jumps are too big. its almost 4.0 and they're basically the same distance as your 1/2 jumps so it makes it hard to differentiate the rhythm.
00:30:747 (3) - make this a straight slider like (1)?
00:33:080 (5,6) - confusing to readd
00:37:413 - feels empty without a note here especially since its such a strong sound
00:45:247 (4,5,6) - again it's hard to differentiate between 1/4 and 1/2 jumps
01:01:747 (6,7) - last one of these ill point out
01:12:580 (8,9) - again, jump too big. last one ill point out
01:57:414 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - make the spacing a bit more even here, there are random antijumps and jumps
02:02:747 (1,1,1,1,2,3,4,1,1,1) - i don't think all these NCs are necessary
03:07:080 (3,1) - overlap here makes it really hard to read
Frey
FROM M4M

[General]

兵乓球赛(小学生感想)

[Normal]

00:17:081 (2) - 我不知道现在的规则允不允许Normal难度这样变动Distance Snap。从安全考虑,你最好修改一下00:17:081 (2,3) 的DS

00:21:081 (2,3) - 这两个部件的摆放,整体上来看,不怎么美观。试着减少00:21:414 (3) 的弯曲度,使得00:21:081 (2,3) 这两个部件整体看上去就像是一个弧线。

00:30:747 (1) - 直的不怎么好看,可以稍微加个白点加点弧度。同时这里也是存在可能性的变DS问题。当然,如果变动DS没问题,那边就这样吧。

00:36:080 (1) - 美观上不好看,既没和00:34:747 (4) 组成blanket,然后直的斜滑条也不好看。可以让它的角度向水平线靠近,即让原来在x156 y340的白点向上移一点。然后加白点,增加一点弧度。

00:55:747 (2,3) 这两个快贴在一起了,并且后面看起来也很挤。稍微好一点改法是:00:56:080 (3) 加一个白点,向右下弯曲一点。如果改了,记得调整后面的DS。

00:58:746 (3) - 让原本在x457 y87的那个白点,移动到大概x504 y172的地方,让00:57:414 (1)的尾巴和(3)以直线形状呈现。

01:02:080 (3) - 这种角度不好看,稍微向水平线靠近。原本在x448 y157的白点,大约移动到x472 y212

01:14:747 (4) - 这里和01:15:747 (5,1,2)在美观上没有平行。可以选择给这个直滑条加白点,让它向着(5,1,2)几个圆圈略微弯曲。

01:22:080 (1) - 调整一下prev的DS。因为1.25和标准的1.3差太多了。

01:52:414 (5) - 让原本在x453 y120的白点向上移动(大约x464 y72),使得01:52:080 (4,5)整体成直线形状。

01:58:747 (6) - 这里可以选择加一个白点。向下略微弯曲一点。

02:00:747 (3) - 和之前的02:00:414 (2)放在一起看是不美观的。之前在x380 y82的白点移动到x372 y112;在x432 y112的白点移动到x428 y128

02:03:414 (3,5) - 这个排列方法有被认定为重叠的危险...让02:03:747 (4,5) 向下面移动一点,给(3)留点间隔。同时,如果这里改了,请注意一下调整02:06:080 (1) 的DS

02:24:747 (4,5) - Blanket没有对齐

02:40:080 (2) - 不美观,可以选择把长滑条换成时间轴上间隔长的圆圈。

02:47:080 (4,5,6) - 没有对直,把它们做直吧。或者,02:47:080 (4) 放到x100 y304 、02:47:414 (5) - 放到x196 y264 、02:47:747 (6) - 放到x296 y288。

03:11:080 (2,3) - 整体没有对直,x159 y304的白点稍微向上移动一点。

03:32:080 (7) - 出于美观,可以选择放到x424 y136

04:13:413 (3,4) - 这个重叠...没问题?

[Hard]

00:39:746 (3,4) - 这里没有对直

00:41:413 (7) - 这里开始的DS不怎么对,如果你想突出这一段的几个圆圈的话,最好+NC,

00:42:746 (2) - 同上,这里的DS很奇怪,这里用1.5,但是后面的又用1.4。 我建议你统一一下DS。或者变DS时加一个NC

00:46:580 (8) - Next的DS需要和prev统一

00:54:413 (4) - 美观上来说,这里不好看。可以盖在00:55:246 (2)上面

00:56:580 (6) - 如果要增加难度,可以ctrl+G

01:09:413 (1) +NC

01:22:080 (5,6,1) - 这三个整体上不好看。可以选择01:22:913 (6) +NC,然后01:23:080 (1) +NC

01:27:080 (2) - 同样的,如果要增加难度就应该Ctrl+G

01:28:080 (4) - 不一定要放在屏幕正中心。可以选择放在大约x236 y312的地方,使得它和前面的(1)(2)(3)垂直。

01:42:580 (1) - 这个在美观上不好看。这样改:把原来在x170 y190的白点移动到x64 y80,把原来在x101 y173的白点移动到x68 y114。

01:46:913 (2,3) - Blanket方面,没有做整齐,请修改好。

01:58:746 (7) +NC

02:59:913 (4,5) - 有点歪,没有整体形成一个直线形状。把原来在x201 y196的白点移动到x200 y192

03:23:913 (5,6) - Blanket有一点没围好

03:29:746 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里要变DS,还是以等差的DS来变吧。即0.5→0.6→0.7→0.8这样。因为你从03:30:246 (4)这里就开始乱了。

03:39:080 (1,2) - 这个太随意了...至少做一点美观,弄成整体上的几何形状啊..

03:48:080 (9) +NC → 03:48:746 (1) +NC → 03:49:413 (1) +NC (这里要改就请全部改)

03:58:746 (1) +NC → 03:59:413 (1) +NC → 04:00:080 (3) +NC (同上,一起改)

[Insane]

整体上来说,我不怎么认同为了走蓝线而消音。

00:12:414 (3) - DS没有准确,调整一下DS。

00:12:581 (4) - 不知道是不是故意这么做的,但是这里打起来很别扭。我建议放到x476 y124

00:23:414 (1,2,3) - 嘛嘛...勇气可嘉,因为这种圆圈放滑条尾的做法很少见。我要说的是这里的(3)和(1)Blanket有一点歪,请修正一下。

00:58:747 (5) - 这里太难了。我建议重叠到00:58:414 (4)的起始处上,然后加一个NC

01:02:580 (9) - 这里跳的很奇怪。叠在01:02:747 (1) 上吧

01:03:080 (3,4,5,6) - 这挤在一堆里面不好读,为什么不做成三角形之类的几何图形?

01:15:414 (1) +NC

01:48:247 (1) +NC 或者 01:48:414 (9) +NC (二选一)

01:53:580 (7) +NC

01:54:247 (1) +NC

01:58:747 (1) - 这里不好读。叠在01:58:080 (5) 上

02:16:580 (3,4,5) - 不好读。稍微好一点的方法,就是(3)(4)都叠在02:16:747 (5)的起始处

03:45:746 (8,9) - 这里绕手。我还没想出怎么改(sry

04:12:080 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - 啊哈哈哈...这个没问题? 实际上我想说,有点歪,要么调整前8个,要么调整后8个。

不清楚的话就PM我,我尽量答复


:) Hope you get a rank soon!
Topic Starter
AIR

Kibbleru wrote:

ehh since you only modded my insane ill only mod insane here too

[Insane]
00:13:414 (1,2,3,4) - not really an appropriate stack since i do not hear any pauses in music and this really awkwardly stops flow, you can either unstack them all or stack them in pairs of 2 fix
00:17:414 (1,2,3,4) - ^ fix
00:15:414 (3,4) - ctrl g these individually for better flow fix
00:23:414 (1,2) - a bit confusing to read here, people will misread this as a big slider
00:23:580 (2,3) - about these 1/4 distances... i think the jumps are too big. its almost 4.0 and they're basically the same distance as your 1/2 jumps so it makes it hard to differentiate the rhythm.
00:30:747 (3) - make this a straight slider like (1)?
00:33:080 (5,6) - confusing to readd
00:37:413 - feels empty without a note here especially since its such a strong sound
00:45:247 (4,5,6) - again it's hard to differentiate between 1/4 and 1/2 jumps
01:01:747 (6,7) - last one of these ill point out
01:12:580 (8,9) - again, jump too big. last one ill point out
01:57:414 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - make the spacing a bit more even here, there are random antijumps and jumps
02:02:747 (1,1,1,1,2,3,4,1,1,1) - i don't think all these NCs are necessary to make color looks great/д\
03:07:080 (3,1) - overlap here makes it really hard to read
thx :)
Topic Starter
AIR

Left 4 Dead wrote:

FROM M4M

[General]

兵乓球赛(小学生感想)

[Normal]

00:17:081 (2) - 我不知道现在的规则允不允许Normal难度这样变动Distance Snap。从安全考虑,你最好修改一下00:17:081 (2,3) 的DS fix

00:21:081 (2,3) - 这两个部件的摆放,整体上来看,不怎么美观。试着减少00:21:414 (3) 的弯曲度,使得00:21:081 (2,3) 这两个部件整体看上去就像是一个弧线。fix

00:30:747 (1) - 直的不怎么好看,可以稍微加个白点加点弧度。同时这里也是存在可能性的变DS问题。当然,如果变动DS没问题,那边就这样吧。DS全程开snap的,一定是你想多了

00:36:080 (1) - 美观上不好看,既没和00:34:747 (4) 组成blanket,然后直的斜滑条也不好看。可以让它的角度向水平线靠近,即让原来在x156 y340的白点向上移一点。然后加白点,增加一点弧度。

00:55:747 (2,3) 这两个快贴在一起了,并且后面看起来也很挤。稍微好一点改法是:00:56:080 (3) 加一个白点,向右下弯曲一点。如果改了,记得调整后面的DS。

00:58:746 (3) - 让原本在x457 y87的那个白点,移动到大概x504 y172的地方,让00:57:414 (1)的尾巴和(3)以直线形状呈现。

01:02:080 (3) - 这种角度不好看,稍微向水平线靠近。原本在x448 y157的白点,大约移动到x472 y212fix

01:14:747 (4) - 这里和01:15:747 (5,1,2)在美观上没有平行。可以选择给这个直滑条加白点,让它向着(5,1,2)几个圆圈略微弯曲。

01:22:080 (1) - 调整一下prev的DS。因为1.25和标准的1.3差太多了。

01:52:414 (5) - 让原本在x453 y120的白点向上移动(大约x464 y72),使得01:52:080 (4,5)整体成直线形状。

01:58:747 (6) - 这里可以选择加一个白点。向下略微弯曲一点。

02:00:747 (3) - 和之前的02:00:414 (2)放在一起看是不美观的。之前在x380 y82的白点移动到x372 y112;在x432 y112的白点移动到x428 y128fix

02:03:414 (3,5) - 这个排列方法有被认定为重叠的危险...让02:03:747 (4,5) 向下面移动一点,给(3)留点间隔。同时,如果这里改了,请注意一下调整02:06:080 (1) 的DSfix

02:24:747 (4,5) - Blanket没有对齐

02:40:080 (2) - 不美观,可以选择把长滑条换成时间轴上间隔长的圆圈。

02:47:080 (4,5,6) - 没有对直,把它们做直吧。或者,02:47:080 (4) 放到x100 y304 、02:47:414 (5) - 放到x196 y264 、02:47:747 (6) - 放到x296 y288。fix

03:11:080 (2,3) - 整体没有对直,x159 y304的白点稍微向上移动一点。

03:32:080 (7) - 出于美观,可以选择放到x424 y136

04:13:413 (3,4) - 这个重叠...没问题?没办法,DS

[Hard]

00:39:746 (3,4) - 这里没有对直fix

00:41:413 (7) - 这里开始的DS不怎么对,如果你想突出这一段的几个圆圈的话,最好+NC,fix

00:42:746 (2) - 同上,这里的DS很奇怪,这里用1.5,但是后面的又用1.4。 我建议你统一一下DS。或者变DS时加一个NCfix

00:46:580 (8) - Next的DS需要和prev统一fix

00:54:413 (4) - 美观上来说,这里不好看。可以盖在00:55:246 (2)上面fix

00:56:580 (6) - 如果要增加难度,可以ctrl+G

01:09:413 (1) +NC

01:22:080 (5,6,1) - 这三个整体上不好看。可以选择01:22:913 (6) +NC,然后01:23:080 (1) +NCfix

01:27:080 (2) - 同样的,如果要增加难度就应该Ctrl+G

01:28:080 (4) - 不一定要放在屏幕正中心。可以选择放在大约x236 y312的地方,使得它和前面的(1)(2)(3)垂直。

01:42:580 (1) - 这个在美观上不好看。这样改:把原来在x170 y190的白点移动到x64 y80,把原来在x101 y173的白点移动到x68 y114。fix

01:46:913 (2,3) - Blanket方面,没有做整齐,请修改好。fix

01:58:746 (7) +NCfix

02:59:913 (4,5) - 有点歪,没有整体形成一个直线形状。把原来在x201 y196的白点移动到x200 y192fix

03:23:913 (5,6) - Blanket有一点没围好fix

03:29:746 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里要变DS,还是以等差的DS来变吧。即0.5→0.6→0.7→0.8这样。因为你从03:30:246 (4)这里就开始乱了。这个是个弧,有调过

03:39:080 (1,2) - 这个太随意了...至少做一点美观,弄成整体上的几何形状啊..好,来个三角

03:48:080 (9) +NC → 03:48:746 (1) +NC → 03:49:413 (1) +NC (这里要改就请全部改)

03:58:746 (1) +NC → 03:59:413 (1) +NC → 04:00:080 (3) +NC (同上,一起改)

[*]这个难度做的很随意,辛苦你认真看了;w;
[Insane]

整体上来说,我不怎么认同为了走蓝线而消音。

00:12:414 (3) - DS没有准确,调整一下DS。

00:12:581 (4) - 不知道是不是故意这么做的,但是这里打起来很别扭。我建议放到x476 y124 1245放在一条线上了

00:23:414 (1,2,3) - 嘛嘛...勇气可嘉,因为这种圆圈放滑条尾的做法很少见。我要说的是这里的(3)和(1)Blanket有一点歪,请修正一下。这个感觉还不错,铃爷的歌旅鸦往条中间放才差劲

00:58:747 (5) - 这里太难了。我建议重叠到00:58:414 (4)的起始处上,然后加一个NC 从下往上横向拉距离,没有硬伤的话就暂时不改

01:02:580 (9) - 这里跳的很奇怪。叠在01:02:747 (1) 上吧

01:03:080 (3,4,5,6) - 这挤在一堆里面不好读,为什么不做成三角形之类的几何图形?

01:15:414 (1) +NC

01:48:247 (1) +NC 或者 01:48:414 (9) +NC (二选一)

01:53:580 (7) +NC

01:54:247 (1) +NC

01:58:747 (1) - 这里不好读。叠在01:58:080 (5) 上

02:16:580 (3,4,5) - 不好读。稍微好一点的方法,就是(3)(4)都叠在02:16:747 (5)的起始处

03:45:746 (8,9) - 这里绕手。我还没想出怎么改(sry

04:12:080 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - 啊哈哈哈...这个没问题? 实际上我想说,有点歪,要么调整前8个,要么调整后8个。其实可以放表盘跳,尾杀妥妥的

不清楚的话就PM我,我尽量答复


:) Hope you get a rank soon!
感谢/д\
[Twinkle]
因为有点长,所以就先看看insane orz

[insane]
好多绿线! 音效感觉很不错
00:10:747 (1,2,3,4) - 开始的滑条可以速度渐增
00:16:913 - 这里是有一个比较重的音的,漏了不太好。 00:17:164 - 这个地方没音,用连打不太好,这里还是重复前面的节奏就行。建议00:17:080 到 00:17:247 用一个2分拍滑条,这里有持续人声。
00:30:747 (3,5) - 这两个叠的不太好看,换一个用直的试试看?
00:32:747 (4) - ctrl+g
00:36:747 (5) - ctrl+g
00:43:414 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这里尝试换一种排列吧?看到你前面用这种直线的用的次数比较多,直线、曲线note也不如打转角的跳要好打。
00:45:247 (4,5) - 4换一个方向,5不要堆在里面?
00:55:080 (2,4) - 完全重叠,尽量避免吧,就头放在一起还可以。
00:59:913 这里漏了一个比较重的音
01:05:580 这也是漏音,kiai段这样打起来的时候很不舒服
01:10:913 同上
01:12:080 (7,9) - 避免,后面就不说了
01:14:747 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这里节奏不对 应该是这样
01:16:080 (1,2,3,4) - 这里和开始一样同样可以渐加速,为什么1和4都空了4分之一拍?
01:17:080 (4,1,3) - 连续三个滑条完全一样,试着换一下方向或者造型
01:21:414 (7,8,9,10) - 这也可以变速,最后一个不用空4分之1拍,下面的物件移近一点就可以了。
01:24:747 (1,2,3,4) - 这种梗用的太多了
01:27:080 (2) - 长了4分之一拍
01:43:913 漏音
01:44:080 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里节奏不好01:44:414 (4) - 重音不要放在滑条末尾,表现力不够。这两个连打也算是overmap,没有背景音。
01:57:414 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里想要距离渐增的话两个1组加NC 01:57:414 (1,3,5,7) - +NC
01:59:247 (5) - 这个的后面也有音,和后面构成7连打
02:15:747 (8) - 不用空4分之一
02:23:080 (8,9,10) - 这里可以滑条渐减速
02:37:414 (1,2,3,4) - 02:40:080 (1,2,3,4) - 漏了很多音,试试把音都加上减小DS?

大概就这样/w\加油~
Topic Starter
AIR

[Twinkle] wrote:

因为有点长,所以就先看看insane orz

[insane]
好多绿线! 音效感觉很不错
00:10:747 (1,2,3,4) - 开始的滑条可以速度渐增 fix
00:16:913 - 这里是有一个比较重的音的,漏了不太好。配合了人声
00:17:164 - 这个地方没音,用连打不太好,这里还是重复前面的节奏就行。建议00:17:080 到 00:17:247 用一个2分拍滑条,这里有持续人声。
00:30:747 (3,5) - 这两个叠的不太好看,换一个用直的试试看?不太好动,先放着
00:32:747 (4) - ctrl+gfix
00:36:747 (5) - ctrl+g一个方向,不好动
00:43:414 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这里尝试换一种排列吧?看到你前面用这种直线的用的次数比较多,直线、曲线note也不如打转角的跳要好打。fix跳折
00:45:247 (4,5) - 4换一个方向,5不要堆在里面?
00:55:080 (2,4) - 完全重叠,尽量避免吧,就头放在一起还可以。这个难度没关系吧;w;
00:59:913 这里漏了一个比较重的音fix
01:05:580 这也是漏音,kiai段这样打起来的时候很不舒服配合人声
01:10:913 同上
01:12:080 (7,9) - 避免,后面就不说了
01:14:747 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 这里节奏不对 应该是这样难得有个连打;w;
01:16:080 (1,2,3,4) - 这里和开始一样同样可以渐加速,为什么1和4都空了4分之一拍?
01:17:080 (4,1,3) - 连续三个滑条完全一样,试着换一下方向或者造型同方向排列
01:21:414 (7,8,9,10) - 这也可以变速,最后一个不用空4分之1拍,下面的物件移近一点就可以了。
01:24:747 (1,2,3,4) - 这种梗用的太多了
01:27:080 (2) - 长了4分之一拍fix
01:43:913 漏音
01:44:080 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里节奏不好01:44:414 (4) - 重音不要放在滑条末尾,表现力不够。这两个连打也算是overmap,没有背景音。
01:57:414 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这里想要距离渐增的话两个1组加NC 01:57:414 (1,3,5,7) - +NCfix
01:59:247 (5) - 这个的后面也有音,和后面构成7连打
02:15:747 (8) - 不用空4分之一fix
02:23:080 (8,9,10) - 这里可以滑条渐减速fix
02:37:414 (1,2,3,4) - 02:40:080 (1,2,3,4) - 漏了很多音,试试把音都加上减小DS?这里压重鼓点

大概就这样/w\加油~
感谢噢/д\
moonlightleaf
From my queue

[Normal]

00:14:081 (3) - 我觉得还是和1 一样好点

00:25:080 note

没包好 - 有挺多这样的小细节

01:00:414 (4,1) - ^

00:38:080 (2) - 试试拉到 00:37:746

00:39:080 (3,5) - 加note

00:43:413 (2) - 参考前面

00:50:746 (1) - 试试

00:56:080 (3) - 弯滑条

00:58:746 (3) - ^

01:02:080 (3) - ^

呜 很多可以改成好看的弯 不说惹

01:04:080 (1,2,3) - 12可以不换色 3换色 参照 1个长白线换色 或者隔一个换一次 好好检查下

02:07:080 note

02:11:080 (2,3,4) - 试试

03:21:747 (1) - 滑条尾点(344,216)

03:38:747 (1) - 这里滑条感觉不好

[Insane]

00:13:414 (1,2,3,4) - 个人感觉不是很好 34 67 都

改成滑条试试

00:17:414 (1,2,3,4) - 参照前面

00:15:414 (3,4,1,2) - 试试

00:20:081 (1,2,3,4) - 分开

00:25:414 (2) - ctrl+g

00:29:747 (6) - 试试

00:33:080 (5) - 折返

00:36:080 (2) - ctrl+g

00:41:914 (5) - ctrl+j+h+g

00:43:414 (4,5,6,7,8) - 试试 5边星

00:45:247 (4) - ctrl+g

00:57:414 (1,3) - 13 对换, 2ctrl+g

01:01:747 (6) - 叠到7 ?

01:05:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这边有点坑 相比之下 01:10:747 (1,2,3,4,5)这里就好很多

01:17:414 (1) - ctrl+g

01:18:747 (6,7,8,9) - 我不喜欢这种

01:20:747 (4,5) - ^

01:43:414 (9) - ctrl+g

01:52:080 (9) - 放在1上 不然太坑了= =91的DS

01:59:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 试试

02:00:746 (3,4) - 3 和 4 分别ctrl+g

02:10:747 (1) - 试试 先ctrl+h

02:13:580 (2,4,6,8) - 删掉这些 试试

02:21:246 (11,2,4) - 删掉

02:25:996 有音 漏一个 坑别人

02:37:413 - 02:41:913 啥节奏 没看懂 好坑

02:43:747 (3) - 放前面红线 然后02:43:914 (4)ctrl+g , 02:44:247 (5)折返 , 6删掉

02:56:914 (5) - ctrl+g

02:57:746 (3) - 删掉

03:00:830 (5) - 删掉

03:08:414 (3,4) - 删掉

03:10:414 (3) - ctrl+g

03:11:580 (7,1) - DS太坑 7折返

03:16:414 (7) - ctrl+g

03:18:747 (4) - ctrl+g

03:46:164 (10) - 删 这没音 而且3连也是红线起头

03:48:164 (6) - ^

04:05:664 (2,1) - 感觉超坑的

04:13:414 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - 还不如对角对角点 直接画圈接 不怎么好玩

呜~~~~~~~~~嗨!>w< 加油
Saoji
Hi,
From M4M -> http://osu.ppy.sh/s/164155 (or if you really don't like the song or something -> http://osu.ppy.sh/s/132886)
Thank you to say what you change or not (if possible, why you didn't).

[Genral]
  1. The volume is too loud (you shouldn't let it at 100%) I suggest you to reduce it to 70% or max 80%.

    I think you changed the offset without replacing notes. Indeed, A LOT of your notes isn't snapped.
  2. Object isn't snapped! 00:11:081
  3. Object's end is not snapped! 00:11:331
  4. Object isn't snapped! 00:11:414
  5. Object isn't snapped! 00:12:081
    etc. Chech Aimod and resnap them all :S.

    Also care you have to resnap some of your timing as well.
  6. Kiai's end isn't snapped! 01:17:414
  7. Kiai's end isn't snapped! 03:09:414
  8. This map may need an epilepsy warning, as it contains frequently toggled storyboards.
  9. More than 1/3 of the map is kiai time. Consider reducing this. (Take this seriously please).
  10. Stack leniency is larger than 0.9 or smaller than 0.3.

    Might take a while to resnap everything and recheck your timing sections as well, but otherwise, your offset is wrong. :S

[Insane]
  1. 00:19:081 (2) - Delete and, Ctrl+C this 00:18:747 (1) - and Ctrl+V, and Ctrl+H and Ctrl+J and remove NC :3
  2. 00:41:914 (5) - This is really hard to read if it's not unrankable.
  3. 00:55:747 (4) - ^
  4. 00:56:580 (8,9) - This isn't really catchy, also I suggest you to try something like this
  5. 01:52:414 (1) - arrange spacing.
  6. 01:53:247 (6) - It plays really bad adding a triple might fix this easily. And for the flow, try this http://puu.sh/8k9Gi.jpg then add NC here 01:53:412 (1) -
  7. 02:04:414 (1,1,1) - The pattern is good, but it dosn't fit, you can keep the same pattern but reduce the sliders like this
  8. 02:15:414 (7) - It should finish on the red tick before.
  9. 03:45:747 (8) - Hard to read/unrankable
  10. 01:12:080 (7) - ^
  11. 04:13:414 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - I also abuse of those rainbows NC but this is useless and it usually use too much drain for the rest of the map.
  12. 00:56:080 (5) - NC
  13. 01:01:414 (5) - NC
  14. 01:12:080 (7) - NC
  15. 01:18:747 (6) - NC
  16. 01:24:080 (7) - NC
  17. 01:25:413 (5) - NC
  18. 01:42:580 (6) - NC
  19. 01:49:747 (1) - This is obvious to me that this sounds bad, make the slider finish on red tick
  20. 02:23:080 (8) - NC
  21. 02:43:412 - Why no note?
  22. 02:44:247 (5) - add reverse and let 02:44:746 empty
  23. 03:13:414 (5) - NC
  24. 03:45:414 (7) - Should finish on red tick
  25. 03:48:747 (9) - ^
  26. 03:59:414 (9) - ^
  27. 03:11:579 (7) - delete and add a single note instead, then add a slider 1/2 here 03:11:746 -
  28. 00:45:247 (4) - should finish on the reck tick after so delete this 00:45:580 (5) - and a single note here 00:45:746 -

That's pretty much it, honestly, I didn't check in details like really you know. But I will give you some tips to improve your map/style.

  1. First of all, you abuse of the sliders which finish on blue ticks, it can be really good as you did here 00:10:747 (1,2,3,4) or here 01:21:414 (7,8,9,10) - but for a random example this sounds bad 01:10:078 (5,6) - oir even here 00:23:580 (2,3) - Try to follow a bit more the music.
  2. About your pattern, there's some good stuff, quite funny, a bit hard to read sometimes but it's good (except the unrankable ones). You usually make good blankets so this is nice, I mean, it looks nice, but sometimes it's a bit messy though.
  3. Your NC are wrong sometimes
  4. Your flow is somehow ok, there's a lack of it but you're on the good way! :)
  5. Basically, the main problem here is the timing of your sliders... I tried to give you some examples, try to check what you like and dislike and recheck what you can improve. As I said the flow is a bit missing but that's not that bad.

Alright, that's it.
To sum up, it's a funny map, for sure. But there's still some stuff to fix :).

PS: I said it's a M4M, but don't feel obliged to mod mine actually if you don't feel like it. Or have a look on easy or normal diff only maybe. Well that's up to you if you have anything to say for insane or whatever you like, just go ahead! :).

Good luck!
Topic Starter
AIR

moonlightleaf wrote:

From my queue

[Normal]

00:14:081 (3) - 我觉得还是和1 一样好点

00:25:080 note只压了重音,要改的话难度恐怕不好把握

没包好 - 有挺多这样的小细节

01:00:414 (4,1) - ^

00:38:080 (2) - 试试拉到 00:37:746

00:39:080 (3,5) - 加note

00:43:413 (2) - 参考前面

00:50:746 (1) - 试试

00:56:080 (3) - 弯滑条

00:58:746 (3) - ^

01:02:080 (3) - ^

呜 很多可以改成好看的弯 不说惹我慢慢弯;w;,现在想看极黑哩

01:04:080 (1,2,3) - 12可以不换色 3换色 参照 1个长白线换色 或者隔一个换一次 好好检查下fix

02:07:080 notefix

02:11:080 (2,3,4) - 试试

03:21:747 (1) - 滑条尾点(344,216)fix

03:38:747 (1) - 这里滑条感觉不好姨,没滑条啊

[Insane]

00:13:414 (1,2,3,4) - 个人感觉不是很好 34 67 都

改成滑条试试

00:17:414 (1,2,3,4) - 参照前面

00:15:414 (3,4,1,2) - 试试搞了点花样

00:20:081 (1,2,3,4) - 分开

00:25:414 (2) - ctrl+g

00:29:747 (6) - 试试fix

00:33:080 (5) - 折返

00:36:080 (2) - ctrl+g

00:41:914 (5) - ctrl+j+h+g

00:43:414 (4,5,6,7,8) - 试试 5边星

00:45:247 (4) - ctrl+g

00:57:414 (1,3) - 13 对换, 2ctrl+g

01:01:747 (6) - 叠到7 ?

01:05:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这边有点坑 相比之下 01:10:747 (1,2,3,4,5)这里就好很多

01:17:414 (1) - ctrl+g

01:18:747 (6,7,8,9) - 我不喜欢这种还凑合;w;

01:20:747 (4,5) - ^

01:43:414 (9) - ctrl+g

01:52:080 (9) - 放在1上 不然太坑了= =91的DS有NC了没关系拔

01:59:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 试试爷爷,真漂亮;w;

02:00:746 (3,4) - 3 和 4 分别ctrl+gfix

02:10:747 (1) - 试试 先ctrl+hfix

02:13:580 (2,4,6,8) - 删掉这些 试试

02:21:246 (11,2,4) - 删掉

02:25:996 有音 漏一个 坑别人

02:37:413 - 02:41:913 啥节奏 没看懂 好坑有的,低音鼓

02:43:747 (3) - 放前面红线 然后02:43:914 (4)ctrl+g , 02:44:247 (5)折返 , 6删掉加了个note,更坑了;w;

02:56:914 (5) - ctrl+g

02:57:746 (3) - 删掉 爷爷,好坑

03:00:830 (5) - 删掉fix

03:08:414 (3,4) - 删掉

03:10:414 (3) - ctrl+g

03:11:580 (7,1) - DS太坑 7折返有nc,不怕

03:16:414 (7) - ctrl+g

03:18:747 (4) - ctrl+g

03:46:164 (10) - 删 这没音 而且3连也是红线起头

03:48:164 (6) - ^

04:05:664 (2,1) - 感觉超坑的

04:13:414 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - 还不如对角对角点 直接画圈接 不怎么好玩你书的兑

呜~~~~~~~~~嗨!>w< 加油
号!!11111
Okoratu


General

  1. Overall quite nice a map, the hitsounding isn't to my liking though
  2. I, and many others who play your map with 100% BG dim, may dislike your choice for combocolour 2:
    Example

    Do you see these approach-circles? because i can barely see them I'd suggest you take something brighter instead, like:
    R: 145
    G: 0
    B: 145
  3. Is this really trance (as tagged)? D:
  4. HP Drain Rate 4 feels by far too low for an Insane, might try 6-7?

Insane

  1. A nice diff, not really challenging, but nice :D
  2. 00:15:414 (3) - i think this one could be farther away from 00:15:081 (2) - (Because this one is spaced from the prev object: 1.92x and only 0.8x to the next)
    Example

    Moving it this way is at least less of an antijump!
  3. 00:41:414 (3) - rotating it somehow like this may make this one easier to read:
  4. 00:41:747 (4) - ofc you'd move this one then aswell if you apply that
  5. 00:55:080 (2,4) - The only problem i got with these is that the approachcircle of 00:55:747 (4) - becomes visible BEFORE the first slider even finishes, so it could cause some confusion to players due to the object they just played seemingly "staying" on your screen. If you want to keep it that way i'd suggest you move 00:55:747 (4) - slightly up like this:
  6. 01:12:080 (7,9) - same thing with these 2, I would suggest rotating one of them in order to make it more readable
    Example

    Maybe like this, dunno, didn't test D:
  7. 01:26:747 (1,4) - might consider doing something similar to them, but i can't really say if it's that necessary right now:
  8. 01:49:246 - why don't you map this sound? I mean you mapped it with the ends of 01:48:414 (3,4) - but don't map this dominant one? I think it'd be nicer to listen to if the bass in the middle of that slider would be mapped:
  9. 01:53:580 (7,10) - due to the aforementioned i would move one of those sliders slightly up and to the right
  10. 02:05:579 - might consider mapping this vocal? :D
  11. 02:16:246 - ^ ? D:
  12. 02:25:996 - could make this more quiet sound aswell to make this stream more pleasant to play?
  13. 02:53:414 (1) - might stack this circle properly with 02:53:080 (11) - ?
  14. 02:58:746 (1,2,3) - you could move these without the distance snap so they neatly align ingame like this:
    Example

    Ofc you would then have to resnap this slider 03:00:247 (2) - to align correctly with 02:59:414 (3) - :D
That's all, as I said in the very beginning i don't really like the way you use because they *clack* so much ;o

Gl with your map!
ts8zs
Exitunes:3
嗯 看样子收不下GD了:3
YoshinoSakura
hi from my queue
抱歉来晚了

[General]
勾上瞎狗眼提示
hitnormal略难听

[Insane]
您确定hp4?
00:13:414 (1,2,3,4) - 个人不喜欢这种梗,dt杀手。【只是个人意见
00:23:747 这里的音漏了,建议把slider end在那个地方
00:28:580 (2) - 非常不喜欢滑条尾静音,那样打起来完全没有感觉了,而且用到这里也不是很适合。后同
00:37:247 (6,1) - 叠在一起防止误读?
00:41:413 (3,5) - 没有叠好。。
00:52:247 (2,3) - 感觉异常不顺手,建议把滑条旋转一个小角度00:53:413 这个地方的音明显多于,从00:53:247 (6) - 开始起滑条就好
01:58:414 (1,2) - 为何不在扩大一下间距
02:24:747 (3,4,1) - 虽然略坑,不过还说得通
02:37:414 (1,2,3,4) - 建议这里slider好了,note不好掌握节奏。后同
03:11:913 加个note弥补一下间距不对
03:45:080 (6,8) - 爷爷没叠好

除了3/4滑调都还好。如果坚持要用的话,tick rate改成2,combo color改相近一点会好读很多。
hitnormal受不鸟了

[Hard]
00:14:247 (2,3,4) - 为何间距突然变小了
00:52:080 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 唔,这间距变得也太突然,会招来很多一分的
01:14:747 (6) - 这里这么好的jump素材为何一个slider带过了
01:16:746 (3,4) - 挨着了不好看
02:37:413 (1,2) - ^
另外还是建议开着ds以便掌握间距。现在里面一会儿大一会儿小的看起来不美观。

normal用cs3就好

Good Luck! :)
Topic Starter
AIR

Yales wrote:

Hi,
From M4M -> http://osu.ppy.sh/s/164155 (or if you really don't like the song or something -> http://osu.ppy.sh/s/132886)
Thank you to say what you change or not (if possible, why you didn't).

sorry for later;w;,I‘ll mod it this weekend

[Genral]
  1. The volume is too loud (you shouldn't let it at 100%) I suggest you to reduce it to 70% or max 80%.

    I think you changed the offset without replacing notes. Indeed, A LOT of your notes isn't snapped.
  2. Object isn't snapped! 00:11:081
  3. Object's end is not snapped! 00:11:331
  4. Object isn't snapped! 00:11:414
  5. Object isn't snapped! 00:12:081
    etc. Chech Aimod and resnap them all :S.

    Also care you have to resnap some of your timing as well.
  6. Kiai's end isn't snapped! 01:17:414
  7. Kiai's end isn't snapped! 03:09:414
  8. This map may need an epilepsy warning, as it contains frequently toggled storyboards.
  9. More than 1/3 of the map is kiai time. Consider reducing this. (Take this seriously please).
  10. Stack leniency is larger than 0.9 or smaller than 0.3.

    Might take a while to resnap everything and recheck your timing sections as well, but otherwise, your offset is wrong. :S

offest bug,fix

[Insane]
  1. 00:19:081 (2) - Delete and, Ctrl+C this 00:18:747 (1) - and Ctrl+V, and Ctrl+H and Ctrl+J and remove NC :3
  2. 00:41:914 (5) - This is really hard to read if it's not unrankable.
  3. 00:55:747 (4) - ^
  4. 00:56:580 (8,9) - This isn't really catchy, also I suggest you to try something like this
  5. 01:52:414 (1) - arrange spacing.
  6. 01:53:247 (6) - It plays really bad adding a triple might fix this easily. And for the flow, try this http://puu.sh/8k9Gi.jpg then add NC here 01:53:412 (1) -
  7. 02:04:414 (1,1,1) - The pattern is good, but it dosn't fit, you can keep the same pattern but reduce the sliders like this
  8. 02:15:414 (7) - It should finish on the red tick before.
  9. 03:45:747 (8) - Hard to read/unrankable
  10. 01:12:080 (7) - ^
  11. 04:13:414 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - I also abuse of those rainbows NC but this is useless and it usually use too much drain for the rest of the map.fix
  12. 00:56:080 (5) - NC
  13. 01:01:414 (5) - NC
  14. 01:12:080 (7) - NC
  15. 01:18:747 (6) - NC
  16. 01:24:080 (7) - NC
  17. 01:25:413 (5) - NC
  18. 01:42:580 (6) - NC
  19. 01:49:747 (1) - This is obvious to me that this sounds bad, make the slider finish on red tickfix
  20. 02:23:080 (8) - NC
  21. 02:43:412 - Why no note?Pause
  22. 02:44:247 (5) - add reverse and let 02:44:746 empty
  23. 03:13:414 (5) - NC
  24. 03:45:414 (7) - Should finish on red tickfix
  25. 03:48:747 (9) - ^
  26. 03:59:414 (9) - ^
  27. 03:11:579 (7) - delete and add a single note instead, then add a slider 1/2 here 03:11:746 -
  28. 00:45:247 (4) - should finish on the reck tick after so delete this 00:45:580 (5) - and a single note here 00:45:746 -

That's pretty much it, honestly, I didn't check in details like really you know. But I will give you some tips to improve your map/style.

  1. First of all, you abuse of the sliders which finish on blue ticks, it can be really good as you did here 00:10:747 (1,2,3,4) or here 01:21:414 (7,8,9,10) - but for a random example this sounds bad 01:10:078 (5,6) - oir even here 00:23:580 (2,3) - Try to follow a bit more the music.
  2. About your pattern, there's some good stuff, quite funny, a bit hard to read sometimes but it's good (except the unrankable ones). You usually make good blankets so this is nice, I mean, it looks nice, but sometimes it's a bit messy though.
  3. Your NC are wrong sometimes all right,try to fix
  4. Your flow is somehow ok, there's a lack of it but you're on the good way! :)
  5. Basically, the main problem here is the timing of your sliders... I tried to give you some examples, try to check what you like and dislike and recheck what you can improve. As I said the flow is a bit missing but that's not that bad.

Alright, that's it.
To sum up, it's a funny map, for sure. But there's still some stuff to fix :).

PS: I said it's a M4M, but don't feel obliged to mod mine actually if you don't feel like it. Or have a look on easy or normal diff only maybe. Well that's up to you if you have anything to say for insane or whatever you like, just go ahead! :).

Good luck!
Good job,thanks :)

Okoratu wrote:



General

  1. Overall quite nice a map, the hitsounding isn't to my liking thoughi'll try to change it
  2. I, and many others who play your map with 100% BG dim, may dislike your choice for combocolour 2:hair's
    [color=#5b5b5b]Do you see these approach-circles? because i can barely see them I'd suggest you take something brighter instead, like:

    R: 145
    G: 0
    B: 145
  3. Is this really trance (as tagged)? D:fix
  4. HP Drain Rate 4 feels by far too low for an Insane, might try 6-7?
fix

Insane

  1. A nice diff, not really challenging, but nice :D
  2. 00:15:414 (3) - i think this one could be farther away from 00:15:081 (2) - (Because this one is spaced from the prev object: 1.92x and only 0.8x to the next)

    Moving it this way is at least less of an antijump!
  3. 00:41:414 (3) - rotating it somehow like this may make this one easier to read:great!
  4. 00:41:747 (4) - ofc you'd move this one then aswell if you apply that
  5. 00:55:080 (2,4) - The only problem i got with these is that the approachcircle of 00:55:747 (4) - becomes visible BEFORE the first slider even finishes, so it could cause some confusion to players due to the object they just played seemingly "staying" on your screen. If you want to keep it that way i'd suggest you move 00:55:747 (4) - slightly up like this:fix
  6. 01:12:080 (7,9) - same thing with these 2, I would suggest rotating one of them in order to make it more readablefix

    Maybe like this, dunno, didn't test D:
  7. 01:26:747 (1,4) - might consider doing something similar to them, but i can't really say if it's that necessary right now:I think you are right
  8. 01:49:246 - why don't you map this sound? I mean you mapped it with the ends of 01:48:414 (3,4) - but don't map this dominant one? I think it'd be nicer to listen to if the bass in the middle of that slider would be mapped:fix
  9. 01:53:580 (7,10) - due to the aforementioned i would move one of those sliders slightly up and to the rightfix
  10. 02:05:579 - might consider mapping this vocal? :D
  11. 02:16:246 - ^ ? D:
  12. 02:25:996 - could make this more quiet sound aswell to make this stream more pleasant to play?
  13. 02:53:414 (1) - might stack this circle properly with 02:53:080 (11) - ?fix
  14. 02:58:746 (1,2,3) - you could move these without the distance snap so they neatly align ingame like this:

    Ofc you would then have to resnap this slider 03:00:247 (2) - to align correctly with 02:59:414 (3) - :Dfix
That's all, as I said in the very beginning i don't really like the way you use because they *clack* so much ;o
thanks for your job :)

Yoshino-Sakura wrote:

hi from my queue
抱歉来晚了

615改名梨,差点没认出来

[General]
勾上瞎狗眼提示
hitnormal略难听 我改,这个是直接偷二姨的

[Insane]
您确定hp4?fix
00:13:414 (1,2,3,4) - 个人不喜欢这种梗,dt杀手。【只是个人意见DT180的人都不是人
00:23:747 这里的音漏了,建议把slider end在那个地方
00:28:580 (2) - 非常不喜欢滑条尾静音,那样打起来完全没有感觉了,而且用到这里也不是很适合。后同
00:37:247 (6,1) - 叠在一起防止误读?
00:41:413 (3,5) - 没有叠好。。fix
00:52:247 (2,3) - 感觉异常不顺手,建议把滑条旋转一个小角度fix
00:53:413 这个地方的音明显多于,从00:53:247 (6) - 开始起滑条就好
01:58:414 (1,2) - 为何不在扩大一下间距搞个四边形
02:24:747 (3,4,1) - 虽然略坑,不过还说得通
02:37:414 (1,2,3,4) - 建议这里slider好了,note不好掌握节奏。后同
03:11:913 加个note弥补一下间距不对fix
03:45:080 (6,8) - 爷爷没叠好fix

除了3/4滑调都还好。如果坚持要用的话,tick rate改成2,combo color改相近一点会好读很多。fix
hitnormal受不鸟了我改我改

[Hard]
00:14:247 (2,3,4) - 为何间距突然变小了
00:52:080 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 唔,这间距变得也太突然,会招来很多一分的
01:14:747 (6) - 这里这么好的jump素材为何一个slider带过了fix
01:16:746 (3,4) - 挨着了不好看fix
02:37:413 (1,2) - ^fix
另外还是建议开着ds以便掌握间距。现在里面一会儿大一会儿小的看起来不美观。

normal用cs3就好

Good Luck! :)
感谢~

update
bigfrog
hello,from m4m~

Normal
grid 2很明顯就是故意的,可是我還是推薦用grid 4...
00:16:081 (1,2,3) - 不建議在這邊變換間距,後面有些難度也一樣,雖然不是規定但是對於新手來說間距固定會比較好打
01:57:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 呈半圓狀如何呢? 把(5)往右移一些
02:03:747 (4,5) - 試試這個 :
感覺比較好 :>
02:22:747 (1,2) - 平行? 因為你的02:24:080 (3,4) 感覺是有平行的,而且節奏幾乎一樣
03:42:747 (1) - 會不會接的有點急...或許可以移到偏移螢幕的中間,不過很麻煩...只是建議

Hard
00:45:080 (3,4) - 圍好
01:16:413 (2,3) - 也許可以改成這樣子 :
會比較好打
03:26:580 (5) - 我覺得開頭重疊在03:25:413 (2)的結尾比較好,flow的話03:25:913 (3) 可以調整一下

Insane
00:29:747 (6) - 逆時針轉30度? 感覺接下來的00:30:247 (1,2) 會比較順
00:51:247 (6,7) - 跟00:50:580 (4,5) 一樣?
01:01:747 (6,7) - 其實我不是很喜歡這種擺法,一兩個沒關係,可是太多很容易混淆...
01:05:580 - 加一個圓圈?這裡空一格感覺有點怪...
02:04:413 (1,1,1) - 打起來非常彆扭的感覺,因為這裡節奏和kiai其他段一樣,歌詞也沒接很緊,可是卻都只差1/8拍

Insane大概就這些,然後我發現你擺了很多圓圈在只到藍線的滑條後...真的不是不好,只是覺得有點overmap
以及很多滑條間故意加上連擊的部分,當然這是我個人的想法,我只是覺得做圖還是要有個限度,不然很可能會毀了一首歌的感覺...

就這些,這大概真的不是個好mod...
Good Luck!!
Frostings
Hi ids~ modding from my queue

[General]
02:26:747 - break should start here

change from this:
//Break Periods
2,88280,98147
2,146613,156814
into:

//Break Periods
2,88280,98147
2,146747,156814

[Insane]
00:45:247 (4) - ctrl + G for flow?
00:49:747 (1,2) - Use 0.5 distance snap to keep it consistent
00:55:414 (3) - maybe ctrl + G for circular flow with 00:54:747 (1,2) - ?
01:53:913 (8) - I think you should move this down a little to about 276,256 to keep 01:54:247 (9) - at 0.4 distance snap (which you have been using in this section for these patterns)
02:00:413 (2,4) - you should avoid overlap like this if it's unintentional
02:24:080 (1,2,3,4,1) - this is really hard to read when playing because you use the same apparent distance to map different rhythms
For example 02:24:747 (3,4) - these are 1/1 beats away while 02:25:080 (4,1) - are 1/2 beats away, and yet their distances are equal. maybe try to fix

02:37:413 ~ 02:45:247 - instead of mapping the very soft drums here, why not map the instruments that are easier to hear? This little section is a little awkward to play
02:50:747 (1,2) - spacing? there is enough room to apply 0.3 spacing, which is what you're using in this section
02:57:414 (1,2,3,4) - really difficulty to read, looks a lot like a 1/4 stream
03:57:914 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - try this rhythm:



[Hard]
This difficulty is as hard as Insane!

Some NC problems I think
starting from 00:12:080 to 00:18:747 -
start NC at downbeats (long white ticks)

also start NC here 00:25:413 (5) - and remove here 00:26:080 (1) -
00:36:080 (7,1) - same as above
01:24:746 (1,5) - ^
01:42:580 (1,3) - ^ and remove NC 01:45:246 (1) -

also review this section for NC errors:
02:49:413 to 03:06:580 -

one more section:
04:04:080 to 04:16:080 -

I won't mention specifically which objects should be NC because I think you'll know

02:16:413 (2,3) - Better blanket
02:54:746 (5,1) - ^

layout flow and rhythm ok

[Normal]
01:59:747 - note here
04:17:413 (5) - I think this should be deleted and have spinner start here

Also you should look over this difficulty as well for NC inconsistencies

sorry I can't check hitsounds because my earphones broken and my speakers are bad
Topic Starter
AIR
IRC MOD from FaiVillager
2014-04-28 10:54 FaiVillager: 01:15:414 (1) - 后面几个slider的消音建议改成sn的小声音 要不然音效有点怪 其实类似的情况一般不推荐完全消音的
2014-04-28 10:55 ids: 好,第一次用消音手法,不太会用
2014-04-28 10:56 FaiVillager: 没关系 练习就好了啦 音效的话你可以找我帮你听听 我本身乐感是很好的练过唱歌
2014-04-28 10:57 ids: 赞,我没啥音乐基础,完全凭感觉下音效;w;
2014-04-28 10:57 FaiVillager: 消音的话短滑条可能会比较好 因为长slider的移动声效(就是你拖它的声音)会影响效果
2014-04-28 10:58 FaiVillager: 个人是这个想法 而且一般的话我很少见到消音的梗
2014-04-28 10:58 FaiVillager: 这只是个看法吧 最后决定的是你
2014-04-28 10:58 ids: 嗯,我用的时候注意点;w;
2014-04-28 11:05 FaiVillager: 00:33:747 (1) - 这种的你可以不消音试试感觉
2014-04-28 11:06 ids: 挺好的...
2014-04-28 11:07 FaiVillager: 那就行
2014-04-28 11:07 FaiVillager: 随你的感觉
2014-04-28 11:07 FaiVillager: 话说你这图做的挺好的
2014-04-28 11:08 ids: ;w;
2014-04-28 11:09 FaiVillager: 02:25:830 (7) - 音乐在这个位置是没音效的 如果你确实想在这里摆串串也没关系 只是提醒下233
2014-04-28 11:11 FaiVillager: 03:28:914 (4) - 推荐换成两个note
2014-04-28 11:12 FaiVillager: 排列我喜欢 给你点个赞
2014-04-28 11:13 ids: 02:25:413 - 减了个Note
2014-04-28 11:13 ids: 谢梨
2014-04-28 11:14 FaiVillager: 哦对了 SC2的finish音效声音有点大 感觉怕有人听时间长了会别扭
2014-04-28 11:15 FaiVillager: 不对..SC1
2014-04-28 11:15 ids: 号,调小
2014-04-28 11:16 FaiVillager: 顺带整体的话一般80%左右会比较好(这个没有定论的 只是这么用的比较多) 不过取决于你的歌 还有具体音效怎样
2014-04-28 11:17 FaiVillager: 我音效的建议基本就这么多 希望对你有帮助XD
2014-04-28 11:17 ids: 问下能不能整体偏移音量,setup里一动就全美丽
2014-04-28 11:18 FaiVillager: setup一般是不动的 你可以在timing里边把所有的红线绿线全选然后调音量
2014-04-28 11:18 ids: 我试试
2014-04-28 11:19 ids: 还是全美丽,我直接改音效文件好勒
2014-04-28 11:20 FaiVillager: 全没?
2014-04-28 11:20 FaiVillager: 音效文件我倒是不会改 但是你怎么改没的- -
2014-04-28 11:20 FaiVillager: 我去试试
2014-04-28 11:21 ids: 百分率变一样,setup里就这效果
2014-04-28 11:21 FaiVillager: 没问题可以改啊...
2014-04-28 11:22 FaiVillager: 恩..那你希望怎么改 是只改finish嘛
2014-04-28 11:22 ids: 算了,一根根改
2014-04-28 11:23 FaiVillager: ...辛苦了
2014-04-28 11:25 FaiVillager: setup里边那个会把一个系列所有音效全变了 如果像我之前做的astral dogma那样很多音效自己一个系列那是可以这么改...
2014-04-28 11:25 ids: 就是这样;w;
Hollow Wings
m4m from queue

Insane

  1. 00:36:080 (2) - 反向
  2. 00:44:414 (1) - 这种地方就不用消尾音了吧,后面很多地方也是,这里老实说是漏了个鼓点吧,略可惜啊
  3. 01:56:580 (7) - 这个做成向下凸的弧形比较好。。。
  4. 04:05:664 (2,1) - nc移动,后同
  5. 全图各种反向flow。。。好吧,我不知道你是否是因为喜欢才这么摆的,因为如果这么摆的话其实完全无法挑出什么东西来,无非就是啪啪啪打图罢了orz
    梗其实还可以再摆的整齐点,其他没啥。。。

Hard

  1. 没啥好说的,用cs3的结果就是ds那么大么orz。。。像03:53:413 (6,7,8) - 这种blanket可以包更好点,全图都是

Normal

  1. blanket问题同hard,比如00:34:747 (4,1) - 以及还有很多这样的,其他么,你hard都用cs3了,Normal不用cs2么
这不是触手最爱的音效么

good luck
Kinomi
General
NCnormal两条长白线加一次,高难度一根两根加一次都行,特殊梗另加
为什么用太鼓音效

Normal
spacing小一点 前面就不会显得那么空了
00:17:414 (3,4) - 太丑,让3和00:20:081 (1) - 对称
00:17:413 (3) - 这头上应该下finiish的
01:17:414 (1) - finish
01:28:080 (7) - finish都没下
finish我就不一个一个挑了,你自己检查下不对的和漏的
01:45:080 (6) - 这个3/2节奏坑爹,01:41:414 (1) - 前面这个最好做成一样的。01:41:247在这里起一个1/2滑条,不然后面的很误以为和前面节奏一样结果按早
01:49:747 (1,2,3) - 这边我还是建议你急需跟鼓01:50:080,01:50:580,01:50:913,01:51:247漏了这些听起来感觉很奇怪
01:52:414 (5,1,2) - 同理这的节奏也不太对
01:58:747 (5) - 这应该在01:59:247结束吧
04:14:080 (4) - normal不要这么摆,会看不懂

Hard
还是要检查finish
01:28:080 (4) - 这个我感觉还是太近了,general spacing算是比较大的,这么小间距容易错认为是1/2
02:45:413 (1,1,1,1) - 又没变速加那么多NC干嘛。。
03:30:246 (4) - 这怎么不NC了
04:16:080 (1) - 稍微拉开点距离,感觉这变速不是很明显,贴一起有点别扭
没什么大问题

Insane
SV高但是间距并没放开有种滑条快了到了note跳就很缩的感觉
00:20:081 (1,2,3,4) - 这种为什么叠一起。。音调不同的
00:28:414 (1) - 间距问题,这个和前面1/2的间距一样了,要么摆远,要么原地放
01:15:747 (3) - 建议放1/8折返后面都可以试试放1/8
01:52:414 (1) - 和前面一样的间距问题,这种多注意一下吧。。都改了
02:37:414 (1,2,3) - 这三个距离还是要大一点,不怎么好读,后面的也是,不然02:39:914 (6,1) - 这两个的距离第一次打起来感觉很诡异
02:43:579 (3) - 狂坑,和前面一样的,至少NC一下
02:46:914 (2,3,4) - 这个flow怎么说也不是很好,从下面起
打起来感觉还行,以后关注一下怎么用排列和flow表现音乐的特殊部分吧
wmtokok
From Teller's team modding queues ( ・´ω・`)

[Insane]
00:59:580 (6) - 尾部的whistle 改為finish 因為我參考這個00:56:914 (9) -
02:03:080 (1,1,1) - 這種NC是什麼的= = ,我明白你要突出這部分,但你看看這個03:46:747 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - 這個你都沒加上NC
02:04:747 (1,1) - 同樣是莫名的NC (總合這個部分,你可以這樣修改:
02:03:080 (1) - remove NC
02:03:414 (1) - remove NC
02:03:747 (1) - remove NC
02:04:080 (2) - NC
02:04:414 (1) - remove NC
02:04:747 (1) - remove NC
02:05:080 (1) - remove NC
02:05:414 (2) - NC
02:25:080 (4) - 這個DS問題很大... x:240 y:144比較好
02:58:414 (9) - 這個finish明顯地提早了.... 你前邊都是放在大白線,最好把這個finish放到02:58:746 (1) - 的頭部
03:18:580 - , 03:18:913 - ,03:19:247 - ,這3個是個重音...我建議突顯一下
03:29:247 (6) - 頭部可以考慮改為finish
03:29:914 (4) - 這個跟03:30:080 (5,6,7,8) - 的節奏是相同的,沒有必要跟他們這麼遠
04:10:747 (1) - 由這裡開始故意弄得七彩賓紛嗎?(我覺得這裡很有創意 :) ) 雖然不是什麼大問題..但我估計往後應該會有人提起這個,因為你在hard不是這樣NC,你希望BAT會接受這創意吧...

[Hard]
01:16:413 (2) - Move to x:316 y:296 ,令空間感更好
02:16:746 (3) - 尾部的點向右拉小許 x:276 y:164 這樣包的更好
03:35:413 (5) - 移到03:35:247 ,再把spinner移到03:35:747 和加長到大白線,,這樣更順暢

[Normal]
02:05:747 - 加一個note,這裡有點空 聽起來有點怪
04:14:080 (4) - Normal不建議overlap

end~~

音樂很好聽 :)
加油...
mintong89
hi 下面都是个人建议, 如冒犯请原谅

[General]
+10 offset, 我觉得太快了

[Insane]
我觉得你的SV不适合你的排放. 你的排放太拥挤了可以试试放开来点, x0.80我还能接受但是1.00或1.20实在是...太挤了.
NC没分配好...

00:10:747 (1,2,3,4) - 我觉得这个不要插蓝线比较好, 个人觉得会误导成1/2 (就是尾端在红线.). 如果真的要这样做的话希望可以把2,3,4都NC.
00:12:081 (1) - 这里建议finish, 毕竟他有很大的cyambal音.
00:13:080 (6) - 建议CTRL+G, 觉得会比较鬼畜点而且会比较好玩, 毕竟是insane嘛.
00:15:081 (2,3) - 这两个之间怎么那么靠近啊...会误读成3/4.
00:20:914 (6,1) - 不如用同样的slider吧?
00:23:580 (2,3) - 我觉得这3/4放的怪怪的...
00:25:414 (2,3,4) - 表示不明为啥要whistle.
00:55:414 (3) - 我觉得CTRL+G会有更好的flow.
01:18:080 - 我觉得这个是slider头会比较好, 因为相比起来 01:17:913 - 这个没啥音比较不重要.
01:38:747 - => 02:00:080 - 我觉得歌那么安静不要用啪啪音比较好...其实我很想吐槽为啥要用啪啪音
01:39:914 (4) - 这个的头加clap吧, 有音效
02:00:080 (1,2) - 如果要做这样的梗的话这里也做一样的吧 02:00:747 (3,4) -
02:37:414 (1,2,3,4) - 我觉得可以做三角形来着...
02:44:080 - 这重音真的要用Slider-end来放吗...

[Hard]

01:39:413 (2,3) - 用同样的slider拉法吧?

normal还可以, 加油.
wcx19911123
m4m here

[General]
那个comboburst不知道可以不,估计透明像素要去掉

[Normal]
00:28:080 (1,2) - 这spacing有问题
00:32:080 - 为啥从这里开始spacing又突然变成1.0,之后又变回1.3了。。感觉不是很合曲
03:13:247 (4,5) - 这种节奏比较突兀,因为整个diff几乎没有下压红线的节奏。。
03:42:747 (1) - 这个距离上个spinner有点远,建议拉大点时间间隔,或者spacing(距离spinner中心)缩小点
03:45:414 (3,4) - 这里spacing大了点
03:57:747 (1,3) - 不太建议这么遮,对新人可能不太友好

[Hard]
03:24:413 (6) - blanket好点?
03:29:746 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 建议spacing变化均匀点,前面三个几乎没变,后面突然变大,变化得不太均匀
04:05:413 (5,6,7,8) - 建议用跟01:16:080 (1,2,3,4) - 类似的节奏,比较合曲

[Insane]
02:10:580 - 加个note?
02:16:247 - ^,把02:16:080 (1) - 换成slider也行

这图节奏挺好的,不过感觉3/4用得有点多,有不少其实不太合曲。排列就感觉有点单调,可以试试用多点slider shape,试试留意下flow,应该会更好
good luck
Topic Starter
AIR

LZCSC wrote:

总之先马

Insane
  1. 01:16:747 (3) - 这个如果旋转方向一样个人感觉可能会好点
    和后面不连贯
  2. 01:17:080 (4) - 头和01:16:414 (2) - 尾重叠和后两个一条线
  3. 01:17:414 (1) - ctrl+G?
  4. 00:25:414 (2) - ^
  5. 00:36:080 (2) - ^
  6. 03:56:580 (1,2,3) - ^fix
  7. 04:13:414 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - 漂亮!ouo
  8. 01:16:747 (3,2) - 没叠在一起,这两个01:18:747 (6,8) - 和01:17:747 (2) - 一起稍微移动一下嘛
  9. 01:49:747 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 建议这三段的第一段的结尾note和第二段的头note重叠,然后第二段的尾和最后一段的头重叠fix
  10. 02:04:414 (1,1,1) - 这种3个的这样如何?
fix

Hard
  1. 00:54:746 (1,2) - 换着两短滑条吧,感觉更合适那两个耶
  2. 01:21:413 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里这样更好
  3. 02:06:913 (4,1) - 差了一点点,没重叠完全
  4. 03:19:413 (1) - 不要NC?然后03:20:080 (3) - NC?fix
别的美丽;w;
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bigfrog wrote:

hello,from m4m~

Normal
grid 2很明顯就是故意的,可是我還是推薦用grid 4...
00:16:081 (1,2,3) - 不建議在這邊變換間距,後面有些難度也一樣,雖然不是規定但是對於新手來說間距固定會比較好打
01:57:414 (1,2,3,4,5) - 呈半圓狀如何呢? 把(5)往右移一些
02:03:747 (4,5) - 試試這個 :
感覺比較好 :>
02:22:747 (1,2) - 平行? 因為你的02:24:080 (3,4) 感覺是有平行的,而且節奏幾乎一樣fix
03:42:747 (1) - 會不會接的有點急...或許可以移到偏移螢幕的中間,不過很麻煩...只是建議

Hard
00:45:080 (3,4) - 圍好fix
01:16:413 (2,3) - 也許可以改成這樣子 :
會比較好打
03:26:580 (5) - 我覺得開頭重疊在03:25:413 (2)的結尾比較好,flow的話03:25:913 (3) 可以調整一下fix

Insane
00:29:747 (6) - 逆時針轉30度? 感覺接下來的00:30:247 (1,2) 會比較順fix
00:51:247 (6,7) - 跟00:50:580 (4,5) 一樣?
01:01:747 (6,7) - 其實我不是很喜歡這種擺法,一兩個沒關係,可是太多很容易混淆...
01:05:580 - 加一個圓圈?這裡空一格感覺有點怪...
02:04:413 (1,1,1) - 打起來非常彆扭的感覺,因為這裡節奏和kiai其他段一樣,歌詞也沒接很緊,可是卻都只差1/8拍

Insane大概就這些,然後我發現你擺了很多圓圈在只到藍線的滑條後...真的不是不好,只是覺得有點overmap
以及很多滑條間故意加上連擊的部分,當然這是我個人的想法,我只是覺得做圖還是要有個限度,不然很可能會毀了一首歌的感覺...

就這些,這大概真的不是個好mod...
Good Luck!!

Frostings wrote:

Hi ids~ modding from my queue

[General]
02:26:747 - break should start herefix

change from this:
//Break Periods
2,88280,98147
2,146613,156814
into:

//Break Periods
2,88280,98147
2,146747,156814

[Insane]
00:45:247 (4) - ctrl + G for flow?
00:49:747 (1,2) - Use 0.5 distance snap to keep it consistent
00:55:414 (3) - maybe ctrl + G for circular flow with 00:54:747 (1,2) - ?fix
01:53:913 (8) - I think you should move this down a little to about 276,256 to keep 01:54:247 (9) - at 0.4 distance snap (which you have been using in this section for these patterns)
02:00:413 (2,4) - you should avoid overlap like this if it's unintentionalfix
02:24:080 (1,2,3,4,1) - this is really hard to read when playing because you use the same apparent distance to map different rhythms
For example 02:24:747 (3,4) - these are 1/1 beats away while 02:25:080 (4,1) - are 1/2 beats away, and yet their distances are equal. maybe try to fixfix

02:37:413 ~ 02:45:247 - instead of mapping the very soft drums here, why not map the instruments that are easier to hear? This little section is a little awkward to play
02:50:747 (1,2) - spacing? there is enough room to apply 0.3 spacing, which is what you're using in this section
02:57:414 (1,2,3,4) - really difficulty to read, looks a lot like a 1/4 stream
03:57:914 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - try this rhythm:



[Hard]
This difficulty is as hard as Insane!remap

Some NC problems I think
starting from 00:12:080 to 00:18:747 -
start NC at downbeats (long white ticks)

also start NC here 00:25:413 (5) - and remove here 00:26:080 (1) -
00:36:080 (7,1) - same as above
01:24:746 (1,5) - ^
01:42:580 (1,3) - ^ and remove NC 01:45:246 (1) -

also review this section for NC errors:
02:49:413 to 03:06:580 -

one more section:
04:04:080 to 04:16:080 -

I won't mention specifically which objects should be NC because I think you'll know

02:16:413 (2,3) - Better blanket
02:54:746 (5,1) - ^

layout flow and rhythm ok

[Normal]
01:59:747 - note here
04:17:413 (5) - I think this should be deleted and have spinner start here

Also you should look over this difficulty as well for NC inconsistencies

sorry I can't check hitsounds because my earphones broken and my speakers are bad

Hollow Wings wrote:

m4m from queue

Insane

  1. 00:36:080 (2) - 反向fix
  2. 00:44:414 (1) - 这种地方就不用消尾音了吧,后面很多地方也是,这里老实说是漏了个鼓点吧,略可惜啊
  3. 01:56:580 (7) - 这个做成向下凸的弧形比较好。。。
  4. 04:05:664 (2,1) - nc移动,后同fix
  5. 全图各种反向flow。。。好吧,我不知道你是否是因为喜欢才这么摆的,因为如果这么摆的话其实完全无法挑出什么东西来,无非就是啪啪啪打图罢了orz大概因为低潮期
    梗其实还可以再摆的整齐点,其他没啥。。。

Hard

  1. 没啥好说的,用cs3的结果就是ds那么大么orz。。。像03:53:413 (6,7,8) - 这种blanket可以包更好点,全图都是

Normal

  1. blanket问题同hard,比如00:34:747 (4,1) - 以及还有很多这样的,其他么,你hard都用cs3了,Normal不用cs2么显挤
这不是触手最爱的音效么

good luck

Tsukuyomi wrote:

General
NCnormal两条长白线加一次,高难度一根两根加一次都行,特殊梗另加
为什么用太鼓音效因为没有成套合适,音效整体会改,说不定会re

Normal
spacing小一点 前面就不会显得那么空了
00:17:414 (3,4) - 太丑,让3和00:20:081 (1) - 对称
00:17:413 (3) - 这头上应该下finiish的
01:17:414 (1) - finish
01:28:080 (7) - finish都没下
finish我就不一个一个挑了,你自己检查下不对的和漏的
01:45:080 (6) - 这个3/2节奏坑爹,01:41:414 (1) - 前面这个最好做成一样的。01:41:247在这里起一个1/2滑条,不然后面的很误以为和前面节奏一样结果按早
01:49:747 (1,2,3) - 这边我还是建议你急需跟鼓01:50:080,01:50:580,01:50:913,01:51:247漏了这些听起来感觉很奇怪
01:52:414 (5,1,2) - 同理这的节奏也不太对
01:58:747 (5) - 这应该在01:59:247结束吧
04:14:080 (4) - normal不要这么摆,会看不懂

Hard
还是要检查finish
01:28:080 (4) - 这个我感觉还是太近了,general spacing算是比较大的,这么小间距容易错认为是1/2fix
02:45:413 (1,1,1,1) - 又没变速加那么多NC干嘛。。
03:30:246 (4) - 这怎么不NC了
04:16:080 (1) - 稍微拉开点距离,感觉这变速不是很明显,贴一起有点别扭fix
没什么大问题

Insane
SV高但是间距并没放开有种滑条快了到了note跳就很缩的感觉
00:20:081 (1,2,3,4) - 这种为什么叠一起。。音调不同的改跳
00:28:414 (1) - 间距问题,这个和前面1/2的间距一样了,要么摆远,要么原地放原地
01:15:747 (3) - 建议放1/8折返后面都可以试试放1/8加了两个
01:52:414 (1) - 和前面一样的间距问题,这种多注意一下吧。。都改了OK
02:37:414 (1,2,3) - 这三个距离还是要大一点,不怎么好读,后面的也是,不然02:39:914 (6,1) - 这两个的距离第一次打起来感觉很诡异OK
02:43:579 (3) - 狂坑,和前面一样的,至少NC一下
02:46:914 (2,3,4) - 这个flow怎么说也不是很好,从下面起fix
打起来感觉还行,以后关注一下怎么用排列和flow表现音乐的特殊部分吧

wmtokok wrote:

From Teller's team modding queues ( ・´ω・`)

[Insane]
00:59:580 (6) - 尾部的whistle 改為finish 因為我參考這個00:56:914 (9) - fix
02:03:080 (1,1,1) - 這種NC是什麼的= = ,我明白你要突出這部分,但你看看這個03:46:747 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - 這個你都沒加上NCfix
02:04:747 (1,1) - 同樣是莫名的NC (總合這個部分,你可以這樣修改:
02:03:080 (1) - remove NC
02:03:414 (1) - remove NC
02:03:747 (1) - remove NC
02:04:080 (2) - NC
02:04:414 (1) - remove NC
02:04:747 (1) - remove NC
02:05:080 (1) - remove NC
02:05:414 (2) - NC
02:25:080 (4) - 這個DS問題很大... x:240 y:144比較好fix
02:58:414 (9) - 這個finish明顯地提早了.... 你前邊都是放在大白線,最好把這個finish放到02:58:746 (1) - 的頭部fix
03:18:580 - , 03:18:913 - ,03:19:247 - ,這3個是個重音...我建議突顯一下fix
03:29:247 (6) - 頭部可以考慮改為finish
03:29:914 (4) - 這個跟03:30:080 (5,6,7,8) - 的節奏是相同的,沒有必要跟他們這麼遠
04:10:747 (1) - 由這裡開始故意弄得七彩賓紛嗎?(我覺得這裡很有創意 :) ) 雖然不是什麼大問題..但我估計往後應該會有人提起這個,因為你在hard不是這樣NC,你希望BAT會接受這創意吧...我先找着bat再书吧

[Hard]
01:16:413 (2) - Move to x:316 y:296 ,令空間感更好
02:16:746 (3) - 尾部的點向右拉小許 x:276 y:164 這樣包的更好
03:35:413 (5) - 移到03:35:247 ,再把spinner移到03:35:747 和加長到大白線,,這樣更順暢

[Normal]
02:05:747 - 加一個note,這裡有點空 聽起來有點怪
04:14:080 (4) - Normal不建議overlap

end~~

音樂很好聽 :)
加油...

Mintong wrote:

hi 下面都是个人建议, 如冒犯请原谅

[General]
+10 offset, 我觉得太快了fix

[Insane]
我觉得你的SV不适合你的排放. 你的排放太拥挤了可以试试放开来点, x0.80我还能接受但是1.00或1.20实在是...太挤了.
NC没分配好...

00:10:747 (1,2,3,4) - 我觉得这个不要插蓝线比较好, 个人觉得会误导成1/2 (就是尾端在红线.). 如果真的要这样做的话希望可以把2,3,4都NC.
00:12:081 (1) - 这里建议finish, 毕竟他有很大的cyambal音.
00:13:080 (6) - 建议CTRL+G, 觉得会比较鬼畜点而且会比较好玩, 毕竟是insane嘛.
00:15:081 (2,3) - 这两个之间怎么那么靠近啊...会误读成3/4.NC
00:20:914 (6,1) - 不如用同样的slider吧?
00:23:580 (2,3) - 我觉得这3/4放的怪怪的...
00:25:414 (2,3,4) - 表示不明为啥要whistle.配合平音
00:55:414 (3) - 我觉得CTRL+G会有更好的flow.fix
01:18:080 - 我觉得这个是slider头会比较好, 因为相比起来 01:17:913 - 这个没啥音比较不重要.fix
01:38:747 - => 02:00:080 - 我觉得歌那么安静不要用啪啪音比较好...其实我很想吐槽为啥要用啪啪音re
01:39:914 (4) - 这个的头加clap吧, 有音效
02:00:080 (1,2) - 如果要做这样的梗的话这里也做一样的吧 02:00:747 (3,4) -
02:37:414 (1,2,3,4) - 我觉得可以做三角形来着...
02:44:080 - 这重音真的要用Slider-end来放吗...不均衡感

[Hard]

01:39:413 (2,3) - 用同样的slider拉法吧?

normal还可以, 加油.

wcx19911123 wrote:

m4m here

[General]
那个comboburst不知道可以不,估计透明像素要去掉

[Normal]
00:28:080 (1,2) - 这spacing有问题
00:32:080 - 为啥从这里开始spacing又突然变成1.0,之后又变回1.3了。。感觉不是很合曲
03:13:247 (4,5) - 这种节奏比较突兀,因为整个diff几乎没有下压红线的节奏。。
03:42:747 (1) - 这个距离上个spinner有点远,建议拉大点时间间隔,或者spacing(距离spinner中心)缩小点
03:45:414 (3,4) - 这里spacing大了点
03:57:747 (1,3) - 不太建议这么遮,对新人可能不太友好
re

[Hard]
03:24:413 (6) - blanket好点?
03:29:746 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 建议spacing变化均匀点,前面三个几乎没变,后面突然变大,变化得不太均匀
04:05:413 (5,6,7,8) - 建议用跟01:16:080 (1,2,3,4) - 类似的节奏,比较合曲

[Insane]
02:10:580 - 加个note?换条
02:16:247 - ^,把02:16:080 (1) - 换成slider也行

这图节奏挺好的,不过感觉3/4用得有点多,有不少其实不太合曲。排列就感觉有点单调,可以试试用多点slider shape,试试留意下flow,应该会更好谢谢
good luck
感谢,一直懒得推
LZCSC
来了o/

Normal


  • 总体上
  1. ar高了,5比较合适(配合sv看的话)
  2. DS小了,以至于很多note距离太近(比如00:34:080 (2,3) - ,2到3开始的距离时间长度和3滑条的持续时间长度一样,但是你2到3头的距离只有那么一小段,这样玩起来很不舒服),我个人觉得的话用1.2左右,这样也方便摆出很多造型(比如 00:12:080 (1,2,1) -
    你0.7是这样的,但是如果是1.2的话就可以是这样
    (建议开DS1.2大改一遍)
  3. 02:48:080 - 这段起的不要是KIAItime吧,感觉没前后有唱腔的KIAI那种程度

    节奏方面
  4. 用1/2
  5. 00:44:747 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - 这段节奏往前移一个红线到白线的距离(这歌节奏真有点特色),然后可以考虑吧00:48:580 (1) - 拉长至00:49:413 - 结束
  6. 00:23:413 - 到 00:44:080 - 这一段,节奏过于死板,可以适当的加点在两个大拍子中间,比如 00:28:413 - 加个circle,00:33:747 - 加个之类的,但是不要太过于频繁,主要是丰富节奏变化的作用
  7. 00:54:747 - 这段开始kiaitime,中间每个段建议放空一下,比如00:58:747 (3) - 换成这种节奏,中间有一小段空的,这样就不会显得太单调
  8. 01:09:413 (1) - ^和上面完全一样
  9. 01:02:080 (5) - 试试这个
  10. 01:07:747 (2) - 删?
  11. 如果上面的删了的话01:05:413 (2) - nc,01:06:747 (1) - 不要nc
  12. 02:37:414 (1) - 02:38:747 - 结束
  13. 02:39:413 (2) - 如果是跟鼓的那个声音的话应该在02:39:247 - (有个很轻微的嚓声在02:42:080 - ,但是我相信玩家在玩到这时绝对不会听的出那个,都应该是跟着清晰的鼓声)
  14. 02:40:080 (1) - 02:41:247 - 结束,可以考虑02:39:913 - 加个circle,
  15. 02:42:080 (2) - 移到02:41:913 - (如果同意上面那个circle的改法的话)
  16. 02:42:747 (1) - 节奏上不贴切,换成
  17. 02:44:247 (3) - 前移一个红线到白线的长
  18. 02:45:080 (4) - 移到02:44:913 -
  19. 改到这儿突然发现,前面的每02:37:414 (1,2) - 和02:40:080 (1,2) - 都可以使用这种节奏(适当的变一下)
  20. 02:58:414 (4) - 可以考虑删了
  21. 03:17:413 (4) - 03:17:913 - 处结束
  22. 03:18:414 (5,1,2) - 这段不贴切,试试这个
  23. 03:36:080 (1) - 这个转盘移动到03:35:747 - 这里起,03:38:080 - 结束
  24. 03:38:747 (1) - 这个转盘删除,改成:03:38:747 - 03:39:413 - 03:40:080 - 03:40:747 - 加4个circle,03:41:080 - 起转盘到 03:42:413 - 结束

Hard


  • 总体上
  1. 排列上读图会有很大的误导(自己打了找人打,都觉的读不太懂)比如 00:12:080 (1,2,3,4,1) - 这里你的节奏是这样的,而你的排列确是这样的,而这段节奏确实如你下的那样没有明显的分段的感觉,这样故意拆成两段实际上造成了读图的误导,觉得你中间故意漏了个拍子,打起来各种不懂,又比如00:57:413 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ,你这样分两个摆,玩家的第一想法是这种节奏,但实际上是一个拍子也没漏下,通篇都用了这种,如果是故意用这个增加读图难度的话,感觉做的过了点,个人建议不要这样,hard还是比较依靠ds那种摆摆,合适的地方跳跳那种感觉吧,建议有那种误导可能的地方重新摆一下
    个人觉得最大的问题就只是这个
Good Luck!
Topic Starter
AIR

LZCSC wrote:

来了o/

Normal


  • 总体上
  1. ar高了,5比较合适(配合sv看的话)
  2. DS小了,以至于很多note距离太近(比如00:34:080 (2,3) - ,2到3开始的距离时间长度和3滑条的持续时间长度一样,但是你2到3头的距离只有那么一小段,这样玩起来很不舒服),我个人觉得的话用1.2左右,这样也方便摆出很多造型(比如 00:12:080 (1,2,1) -
    你0.7是这样的,但是如果是1.2的话就可以是这样
    (建议开DS1.2大改一遍)
  3. 02:48:080 - 这段起的不要是KIAItime吧,感觉没前后有唱腔的KIAI那种程度

    节奏方面
  4. 用1/2
  5. 00:44:747 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - 这段节奏往前移一个红线到白线的距离(这歌节奏真有点特色),然后可以考虑吧00:48:580 (1) - 拉长至00:49:413 - 结束
  6. 00:23:413 - 到 00:44:080 - 这一段,节奏过于死板,可以适当的加点在两个大拍子中间,比如 00:28:413 - 加个circle,00:33:747 - 加个之类的,但是不要太过于频繁,主要是丰富节奏变化的作用
  7. 00:54:747 - 这段开始kiaitime,中间每个段建议放空一下,比如00:58:747 (3) - 换成这种节奏,中间有一小段空的,这样就不会显得太单调
  8. 01:09:413 (1) - ^和上面完全一样
  9. 01:02:080 (5) - 试试这个
  10. 01:07:747 (2) - 删?
  11. 如果上面的删了的话01:05:413 (2) - nc,01:06:747 (1) - 不要nc
  12. 02:37:414 (1) - 02:38:747 - 结束
  13. 02:39:413 (2) - 如果是跟鼓的那个声音的话应该在02:39:247 - (有个很轻微的嚓声在02:42:080 - ,但是我相信玩家在玩到这时绝对不会听的出那个,都应该是跟着清晰的鼓声)
  14. 02:40:080 (1) - 02:41:247 - 结束,可以考虑02:39:913 - 加个circle,
  15. 02:42:080 (2) - 移到02:41:913 - (如果同意上面那个circle的改法的话)
  16. 02:42:747 (1) - 节奏上不贴切,换成
  17. 02:44:247 (3) - 前移一个红线到白线的长
  18. 02:45:080 (4) - 移到02:44:913 -
  19. 改到这儿突然发现,前面的每02:37:414 (1,2) - 和02:40:080 (1,2) - 都可以使用这种节奏(适当的变一下)
  20. 02:58:414 (4) - 可以考虑删了
  21. 03:17:413 (4) - 03:17:913 - 处结束
  22. 03:18:414 (5,1,2) - 这段不贴切,试试这个
  23. 03:36:080 (1) - 这个转盘移动到03:35:747 - 这里起,03:38:080 - 结束
  24. 03:38:747 (1) - 这个转盘删除,改成:03:38:747 - 03:39:413 - 03:40:080 - 03:40:747 - 加4个circle,03:41:080 - 起转盘到 03:42:413 - 结束

Hard


  • 总体上
  1. 排列上读图会有很大的误导(自己打了找人打,都觉的读不太懂)比如 00:12:080 (1,2,3,4,1) - 这里你的节奏是这样的,而你的排列确是这样的,而这段节奏确实如你下的那样没有明显的分段的感觉,这样故意拆成两段实际上造成了读图的误导,觉得你中间故意漏了个拍子,打起来各种不懂,又比如00:57:413 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ,你这样分两个摆,玩家的第一想法是这种节奏,但实际上是一个拍子也没漏下,通篇都用了这种,如果是故意用这个增加读图难度的话,感觉做的过了点,个人建议不要这样,hard还是比较依靠ds那种摆摆,合适的地方跳跳那种感觉吧,建议有那种误导可能的地方重新摆一下
    个人觉得最大的问题就只是这个
Good Luck!

Normal总体问题ds,难度上限还有余,改了
hard我觉得这样挺好玩,我已经尽量维持0。7/1。2两种ds交替,但是如果bat出来说这不行我立刻改,大概是这种坚持程度
辛苦你看了这么多
Topic Starter
AIR
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Topic Starter
AIR
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Zero__wind
0.0
Insane里面01:15:663 (2,4) - wrong snap 应该用1/6 ↓
用和风音效真的很奇怪……感觉不合适
节奏就不说了……这种nightcore风格的曲子不要老用3/4 slider,很没有节奏感
有些三连下的位置不对
别老想着跟人声 多找背景音乐的旋律里面的规律来组织节奏

加油
Topic Starter
AIR

Zero__wind wrote:

0.0
Insane里面01:15:663 (2,4) - wrong snap 应该用1/6 ↓
用和风音效真的很奇怪……感觉不合适
节奏就不说了……这种nightcore风格的曲子不要老用3/4 slider,很没有节奏感
有些三连下的位置不对
别老想着跟人声 多找背景音乐的旋律里面的规律来组织节奏

加油
谢谢零风帮看ouo
见识了一波图后自己也觉得insane非常别扭,因为感觉工作量大就懒得re。。。
FaiVillager
我也来233
首先overlap的问题还是有 我不知道现在是不是允许了
[insane]
00:15:414 (1) - 恩 弧度稍微改一点可以更贴合上个slider末尾的形状
00:15:746 (2) - 跟1左右对称是否更好?
00:20:914 (6,1) - 这两个虽然没必要对称但是弧度调成一样更美观一些吧
00:26:580 (1) - 开头可以加whistle音效
00:27:747 (4,5) - slider开头加finish 结尾和5的音效去掉更好
00:50:914 (5) - 这个遮盖可以考虑移开 玩起来流畅度不错但是看着不太美观
01:00:414 (2) - 末尾的绿线可以考虑不加和上一个slider音效对应
01:10:080 (5) - 弧度很好但是可以整体逆时针转一点让它以后面的话条对称(这个要改的话会比较。。)
01:13:914 (3,4) - 可以考虑做成弧形连打是移动更顺畅
01:15:747 (3,4) - DS太大 虽然没有本质的问题但是hr这里太容易断尾了
01:16:080 (1) - 歌声是321所以推荐和后面的话条同样长
01:28:080 (9) - 考虑价格音效做结尾银
01:54:247 (4) - 特意没有摆在slider延长线上吗
02:16:080 (1) - 第二个红点我认为改成白色的比较好
02:59:080 (2) - 感觉内部错位太多了 两个红点可以稍微近一点
03:28:080 (1) - 同样结尾绿线可以考虑不加
03:30:747 (1) - 结尾做成SC1的finish听起来不错
03:35:247 (6,7) - 考虑做成一条弧线
04:02:247 (5) - 向上平移一点吧
04:17:496 (1) - 同样可以考虑加音效
最后一段kiaitime对于sc1finish的使用同样可以搬到前两个kiai去

[hard]
00:31:913 (4) - 中间两个红点用一个就好 因为看起来有点太生硬
01:18:580 (6,1) - 考虑做成和前边一样的ds
01:22:080 (5) - 和前边共线可能不错 01:24:080 (1) - 同样
02:43:247 (3) - 中间第二个红点换成三个白点slider会更平滑
03:53:413 (6) - 拐弯拐得太大了

normal个人感觉没什么问题了

早日rank啊 我挺喜欢这个的
Topic Starter
AIR

FaiVillager wrote:

我也来233
首先overlap的问题还是有 我不知道现在是不是允许了
[insane]
00:15:414 (1) - 恩 弧度稍微改一点可以更贴合上个slider末尾的形状
00:15:746 (2) - 跟1左右对称是否更好?
00:20:914 (6,1) - 这两个虽然没必要对称但是弧度调成一样更美观一些吧
00:26:580 (1) - 开头可以加whistle音效
00:27:747 (4,5) - slider开头加finish 结尾和5的音效去掉更好
00:50:914 (5) - 这个遮盖可以考虑移开 玩起来流畅度不错但是看着不太美观
01:00:414 (2) - 末尾的绿线可以考虑不加和上一个slider音效对应
01:10:080 (5) - 弧度很好但是可以整体逆时针转一点让它以后面的话条对称(这个要改的话会比较。。)
01:13:914 (3,4) - 可以考虑做成弧形连打是移动更顺畅
01:15:747 (3,4) - DS太大 虽然没有本质的问题但是hr这里太容易断尾了
01:16:080 (1) - 歌声是321所以推荐和后面的话条同样长
01:28:080 (9) - 考虑价格音效做结尾银
01:54:247 (4) - 特意没有摆在slider延长线上吗
02:16:080 (1) - 第二个红点我认为改成白色的比较好
02:59:080 (2) - 感觉内部错位太多了 两个红点可以稍微近一点
03:28:080 (1) - 同样结尾绿线可以考虑不加
03:30:747 (1) - 结尾做成SC1的finish听起来不错
03:35:247 (6,7) - 考虑做成一条弧线
04:02:247 (5) - 向上平移一点吧
04:17:496 (1) - 同样可以考虑加音效
最后一段kiaitime对于sc1finish的使用同样可以搬到前两个kiai去

[hard]
00:31:913 (4) - 中间两个红点用一个就好 因为看起来有点太生硬
01:18:580 (6,1) - 考虑做成和前边一样的ds
01:22:080 (5) - 和前边共线可能不错 01:24:080 (1) - 同样
02:43:247 (3) - 中间第二个红点换成三个白点slider会更平滑
03:53:413 (6) - 拐弯拐得太大了

normal个人感觉没什么问题了

早日rank啊 我挺喜欢这个的
thx for your work :)

IRC MOD from chole
2014-06-09 19:16 Chloe: 01:15:636 (1,3) -
2014-06-09 19:17 AIR: 知道这里是1/6,处理不好
2014-06-09 19:17 Chloe: 01:58:746 (1) -
2014-06-09 19:17 Chloe: 这个可以放下去点
2014-06-09 19:17 Chloe: 325 367
2014-06-09 19:17 Chloe: 02:02:747 (1,2,3,4) -
2014-06-09 19:18 Chloe: 02:00:080 (1,2,3,4) -
2014-06-09 19:18 Chloe: 这2组一致点
2014-06-09 19:18 AIR: 好
2014-06-09 19:19 Chloe: 03:01:247 (7) -
2014-06-09 19:19 Chloe: http://puu.sh/9lH3m/c4397e4754.jpg
2014-06-09 19:19 Chloe: you know why
2014-06-09 19:20 Chloe: 03:14:580 (8) -
2014-06-09 19:20 Chloe: same
2014-06-09 19:20 AIR: 你说得对
2014-06-09 19:21 Chloe: 03:30:580 (8) -
2014-06-09 19:21 Chloe: 这个
2014-06-09 19:21 Chloe: 我觉得放到顶上更好
2014-06-09 19:21 Chloe: 03:29:914 (4,5,6,7,8) -
2014-06-09 19:21 Chloe: 或者这个摆个五角星也是可以
2014-06-09 19:22 Chloe: 最后一个KIAI
2014-06-09 19:22 Chloe: 开头气势很足
2014-06-09 19:22 Chloe: 比如这个
2014-06-09 19:22 Chloe: 无奈之后有点怂
2014-06-09 19:22 Chloe: 03:48:080 (5,6,7) -
2014-06-09 19:22 AIR: 好,怂
2014-06-09 19:22 Chloe: ACTION is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/172360 Tama - Saigetsu (Midnight Moon Walker Remix) [Lunatic]]
2014-06-09 19:22 Chloe: 建议使用和性液最后那段KIAI一样的大间距
2014-06-09 19:23 Chloe: 美丽
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