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Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl

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Xgor
Elite Mapper
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Xgor
[Skin]
Make the Comboburst smaller! (It's way to big!)
There is some kind of shading under the numbers...(Please remove it.)
Also i suggest that you make the hearts a little bit bigger so the numbers don't stick out.

[All diffs]
01:24:093 (1) - I suggest you make this slider not completely silent..

[Easy]
:)

[Normal]
:)

[Hard]
:)

[Insane]
:)

[Hawkzor's]
Would be nice if it had a bit more hitsounds at some parts but otherwise great ;)

Great map, the main things i found was somethings that could be improved in the skin.
*star*
Andrea
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Andrea
[Overall]

BPM: 160,00 - Offset: 960 (Remember to resnap all notes.)

[Easy]

00:12:018 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:41:006 (1) - ^

[Normal]

01:09:093 (4) - New combo.

[Hard]

00:05:024 (3) - Sounds bad. Adjust it.
00:57:018 (7) - New combo.

[Insane]

01:07:068 (3) - New combo.
01:21:093 (1,1,1,1,1) - These new combos seems out of the map. Seems weird.

[Hawkzor's Sane]

Cool :3
Hanyuu
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Hanyuu
Easy:

i dont know but think about removing this notes to lower the difficult a bit:
00:13:031 (2,4,6) -
00:29:006 (1) -
00:33:093 (2,3,4,1) - (slider at 2)
00:52:031 (2,1,3) -

if not then its okay but its more like a normal difficult to me :s

Normal:

00:42:093 (1) - remove combo
01:06:093 (1) - i think you should change to a different pattern here because it does not fit so good

Insane:

00:05:024 (1) - this jump is a bit unexpected and hard
XepherX3
625 posts
Joined September 2008
XepherX3
all fixed:
Download: newnumbers.zip
Vanmonky
986 posts
Joined June 2009
Vanmonky
As your request in my queue.

[Easy]
00:48:093 (1) - Add finish.
00:54:093 (1) - ^

[Normal]
00:48:093 (1) - Add finish.
00:54:093 (1) - ^
00:57:099 (1) - Remove finish.
01:00:093 (1) - Add finish.
01:06:093 (1) - ^

[Hard]
00:48:093 (1) - ^
00:57:093 (1) - Remove finish.
01:00:093 (1) - Add finish.

[Insane]
00:38:006 (1) - Overlaping slider. Change it.
00:48:093 (2) - Add finish
00:54:093 (1) - ^
00:57:093 (1) - Remove finish
01:00:093 (2) - Add finish.
01:06:093 (1) - ^

[hawzork's Sane]
No problem.

---

Yes, you may ignore them all ^^
And *star~
Nakata Yuji
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Joined April 2009
Nakata Yuji
Easy:
00:05:018 (3) - Move this 1/4 tick forward.
00:11:006 (1,2,3) - Not in a straight line, try to fix this.
01:06:093 (1,2,3) - ^
01:24:093 (1) - I don't think this needs to be here.

Normal:
00:11:043 (1,2,3) - This... Feels really weird...
00:13:031 (2) - Make this line up horizontally to the purple (1) to the left.

Hard:
This is fine.

Hawkzor's sane:
There are way too many jumps that should not be jumps. I'll let you find them yourself.

Starred, not bad.
Beuchi
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Beuchi
Hi hi! :3

Here are some suggestions for your map: Of course you don't have to do them if you're not agree :D

~All diffs~
BPM: 159,90 (?) 160 seems a bit off on some parts :o btw if you change it make sure you resnap all notes :3

~Easy~
00:05:031 (3) - Snap this on 1/4 and put it on red tick.
01:09:093 (1) - Undo New Combo.
01:24:093 (1) - Make the whole spinner slient, like in [Normal]

~Normal~
No problems. Nice work! :)

~Hard~
00:51:018 (4) - Fix spacing.
00:53:081 (4) - ^

~hawkzor's Sane~
No problems. Nice work! :) (btw: 00:56:043 (9) - Cute slider x3)

So nice map Teara, and nice song too :)

*Gives shiny llittle star*
Kitsunemimi
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Joined April 2009
Kitsunemimi
There may be a problem with the skin. (although it's really good)
The spinner-background.png is off center, it moves down a little when it appears. You need to move the image upwards so that it doesn't look like it's shifting when it appears.
The score-x.png matches with the background, so it's hard to see.
I'm using a custom skin, so the numbers I see behind the hearts overlay looks strange. You may want to include the osu! default numbers.

[Easy]:
00:25:057 (2) - Snap to red tick
00:30:095 (1,2,3) - Did what you did for 00:24:095 (1,2)
00:36:095 (1,2,3) - ^
That's it.

[Normal]: (yay it's <3.50 stars!!)
00:05:018 (3) - Snap to red tick
00:24:082 (1) - Bump forward to white tick
00:25:045 (2) to 01:09:085 (1) - ^ (you resnapped it incorrectly)
01:08:022 (2) - Snap to red tick
01:12:073 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,1) - Bump it all the way forward to the next white tick (resnapped incorrectly again)
01:24:023 (1,2) - Move it up and towards the center (suggestion)
The song isn't in 1/3ths it's in 1/4ths (or 1/2ths)

[Hard]:
Good!

[hawkzor's Sane]:
00:15:019 (1) - (LOL @ THE SLIDER POINTS!)
00:27:045 (4) - Move to blue tick. You need to make this slider one 1/4th long.
00:30:045 (3) - ^
00:33:045 (4) - ^
00:46:031 (6) - You have to adjust the timing section of this note and move it too.
01:13:057 (3,5,6) - 0_o
01:19:058 (3,5,6) - ^
Couple weird things, but nice map.

I wonder how you made this thing in 1/3ths :O . Also, I'd check up on the timing; my computer became laggy in the recent updates so I can't time it. It seems like it's off though.

It's a good map, I like the skin. Star for you!
hawkzor
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hawkzor
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
Teara
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cyanberryio
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Requested in #mod.
Warning, some nazi in here.

I swear, the timings off, try the following.
1. BPM: 160.045 , Offset: 950
2. BPM: 160.600 , Offset: 84,218
*is not too sure about the second section* It just sounds better. :o
[Easy]
00:34:070 (4) - Align with (2)?

[Normal]
Nice.

[Hard]
Tip: For slider ends you can put the timing section you can put it directly on it(without worrying about people who can't hit it spot on), like 00:29:083. Unless that was intentional.

[hawkzor's Sane]
Great.
DJPop
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BPM is really off =_=" I'll check again when I have more time.

~Easy~
00:05:025 (3) - start on left purple tick
00:15:057 (1) - start on next white tick
00:29:007 (5) - no hitclap at the end, if you want hitclap, you have to do with almost sliders in every diffs too
00:47:090 - no hitwhistle and hitclap
00:48:096 (1) - hitfinish
00:54:097 (1) - ^
00:56:047 (5) - new combo
01:06:097 (1) - hitfinish
01:12:231 - no hitfinish

~Normal~
00:05:018 (3) - end on white tick
00:48:096 (1) - hitfinish
00:54:097 (1) - ^
01:24:086 (1) - end on white tick

~Hard~
00:29:827 - don't silence this slidertick
00:35:008 (5) - hitwhistle or hitclap at the end
00:38:008 (4) - offscreen a little
00:48:096 (1) - remove hitclap, add hitfinish
*00:49:071 (3) - hitclap
00:51:021 (4) - ^
00:52:071 (3) - ^
00:54:022 (5) - ^*
*00:50:046 (1) - remove hitclap
00:51:096 (1) - ^
00:53:046 (3) - ^*
00:54:097 (1) - hitfinish
00:55:072 (3) - hitclap
00:57:022 (1) - ^
01:00:097 (1) - hitfinish

~hawkzor's Sane~
01:20:058 (6) - end on white tick
hawkzor
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hawkzor
BPM change T_T

tried fixing most I could see, modding might be helpful

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
DJPop
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alvisto
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alvisto
NORMAL
Fine, except that I was caught off guard at some 1/6 beats place xD

HARD
Fine

HAWKZOR'S SANE
00:49:068 (3) - Hitsound these to claps ? Also hitsound the whole chorus with claps at its appropiate place ?
01:23:005 (2) - Align this with 1 properly.

EASY
No problem

GENERAL
The comboburst is a bit too "centre" when playing. Maybe trim the image so that the unnecessary white parts is removed,and when it appears during playing, it won't occupy the whole screen ?

Great map. Star.
MaxSalsa_old
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MaxSalsa_old
[Map]
Dunno if it's intentional, but the hitcircles aren't colored in except on sliders - only the timing rings are colored. Not gamebreaking (to me) but I think it might be important...

[Easy]
Nothing to note.

[Normal]
Nothing here.

[Hard]
00:02:044 (1,2,3,4) - I'm not sure I like how these got closer (or how the set before is further apart). Livable though.
01:23:042 (5) - I think this would have more impact in the middle of the four notes before it.

[hawkzor's Sane]
00:27:050 (4) - For this and the similar short sliders thereafter, consider putting a clap on the endpoint. I think it would match better with the other claps around them.
01:21:092 (1,2,1,2,1) - What was the point of decreasing the hitsound volume here? I can't tell what you were going for here.

Sounds good overall though. Take this Star.
hawkzor
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hawkzor
updated

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
Takuma
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orioncomet
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orioncomet
Love this song <3
hawkzor
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hawkzor
\:D\Hooray for bubble ~ \:D/
/:D\
Starrodkirby86
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I'm itching to rank this...

Unfortunately, there's just one little tiny oopsie-doodle. >:

Check out comboburst-0.png...

Max width for combobursts are 500px~ Can you please resize or crop to compensate for that? Also, since there's only one comboburst in this song, I would think just renaming it to comboburst.png would suffice.

Don't forget to full submit!
Teara
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Teara
-cries-

Fixed :<
Starrodkirby86
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Need a handkerchief? ;)
Teara
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:<

Cries some more~
Ephemeral
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Ephemeral
Bubble repair!
Teara
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Teara
Fixed unsnapped notes~

Thanks Ephe~

-sigh-
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whymeman
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whymeman
Sorry, but the timing feels kinda off. BPM seems to screw up right after 00:24:943. That extra .045 feels like its throwing the beat off a bit. Make sure to look into that other offset as well since it may not be needed.
Teara
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Teara

whymeman wrote:

Sorry, but the timing feels kinda off. BPM seems to screw up right after 00:24:943. That extra .045 feels like its throwing the beat off a bit. Make sure to look into that other offset as well since it may not be needed.

Since me and timing aint good friends, I'll try and get someone to take another look at it :"
Lybydose
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Lybydose
Ok I give up. Using only one timing section seems to make it go off at 00:24:825, and then again at 00:48:980. Problem is, I'm having trouble coming up with an offset for that first section up to 00:24:825 since THAT also seems to go off for like 3-4 seconds at one point (and then it's fine again).

If you're curious, I was using

BPM: 160, Offset: 1700
BPM: 160, Offset: 24,980
BPM: 160, Offset: 48,955

I'm not really very confident in this though.
Zekira
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Zekira
This is the best that I can get it to:

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [Red Lines].osu

Timed using my typical timing technique (as noted from the notes), but I must say that this was one annoying song that was composed with a shaky sense of rhythm.

EDIT: At least spell my name right (in your first post, look D:)
hawkzor
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hawkzor
Ok , added all timeing sections, tried fixing it as far as I could -_-
Some notes i cant get snapped onto the right timing,
Some notes was 1/3 and other 1/4, now everything just seems screwed.

Mod Please and see if you can help me, Thanks!

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
whymeman
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whymeman
[Normal]

01:24:910 (1) - Not snapped in the timeline.

[hawkzor's Sane]

I've noticed the endpoints of some of the sliders and the spinners not being snapped, but still within the beat. Still, doesn't hurt to double check it again since it would be considered to be unsnapped notes.

Now, for the timing....

1. Offset: 930ms BPM: 160.201
2. Offset: 24,930ms BPM: 79.60
3. Offset: 30,960ms BPM: 79.40 <- Feels like it falls behind right before the next offset change.
4. Offset: 46,534ms BPM: 45.00
5. Offset: 47,200ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
6. Offset: 47,812ms BPM: 160.045
7. Offset: 48,953ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
8. Offset: 50,812ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
9. Offset: 51,937ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
10. Offset: 53,812ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
11. Offset: 60,937ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
12. Offset: 62,812ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
13. Offset: 63,937ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)
14. Offset: 72,923ms BPM: 160.50
15. Offset: 83,390ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)

Just needs another check before it is good to go and also, please do not make any edits during the modding process. It screws things up.
hawkzor
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hawkzor
fixed sliders, added a new timing section (with a -10 offset) halfway into the one that was falling behind,
seems fine IMO, so check it out

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Sane].osu
whymeman
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I can see where you had some difficulty with the beats. You had the BPM cut in half, which also reduces the amount of "area" you can place the notes accurately in the timeline.

Also, I see that Normal's timing wasn't checked properly, my fault.

[Normal]

1. Offset: 960ms BPM: 160.00
2. Offset: 24,930ms BPM: 159.20
3. Offset: 30,960ms BPM: 159.80
4. Offset: 48,953ms BPM: 160.20
5. Offset: 72,923ms BPM: 160.50
6. Offset: 83,390ms BPM: 158.00

[Easy] & [Hard]

1. Offset: 960ms BPM: 160.20
2. Offset: 24,930ms BPM: 159.20
3. Offset: 30,960ms BPM: 159.80
4. Offset: 48,953ms BPM: 160.20
5. Offset: 72,923ms BPM: 160.50
6. Offset: 83,390ms BPM: 158.00
hawkzor
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hawkzor
Remap'd my difficulty , cleaned it up , no more speed ups and slow downs,
used lots of ideas from my prev version:

diff name subject to change.

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's diff].osu
whymeman
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whymeman
1. Offset: 960ms BPM: 160.20
2. Offset: 24,934ms BPM: 158.00 <- Tested
3. Offset: 30,960ms BPM: 159.80
4. Offset: 48,953ms BPM: 160.20
5. Offset: 72,923ms BPM: 160.50
6. Offset: 83,390ms BPM: 158.00
7. Offset: 84,812ms BPM: Inhereted (1x)

Tried out this timing for that part that sounded iffy. Plays a bit smoother for me but you can test it to make sure its right.

Also, for [hawkzor's Insane], Just a set of sliders at 00:48:953 (1,2,3,4) and 00:51:949 (1,2,3,4) sounds like it could be adjust 1/3 longer. That's all. After this, the map should be ready to go.
KIA
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<3
hawkzor
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hawkzor

whymeman wrote:

Also, for [hawkzor's Insane], Just a set of sliders at 00:48:953 (1,2,3,4) and 00:51:949 (1,2,3,4) sounds like it could be adjust 1/3 longer. That's all. After this, the map should be ready to go.
Fixed, couldn't make all 4 1/3 longer, because last slider would end on the same tick as the next beat, so i made the last one a single hitcircle instead.

Not sure if the stacking is going to be a problem as is atm, have a look from 00:48:953 to 00:54:196.

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Insane].osu
whymeman
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-Duplicated post deleted-

Also....

[Easy]

00:29:107 (5) - Just needs to move 1/3 later on the timeline (both points on the white ticks).

[Normal]

00:29:043 (1) - The only thing to deal with now is doing a small adjustment for this slider. If you set it up like this, it should flow with the beat much smoother. (Before adjustment) (After adjustment | Notice the timing adjustmet of the notes.)

[Hard]

00:29:043 (1) - Needs an adjustment 1/3 later as well, but also may need some adjustment to the silder's duration time to have it with the beat. Maybe having the repeating slider end at 00:30:626 with all points on the white tick should fix this (but if you have another idea of fixing this, that's fine too).

After that, your map is back to being bubbled again.

Recheck Edit: Alright then... *shoots a bubble*
Teara
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Teara
Thanks for all the hard work Whymeman. :)
Andrea
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hawkzor
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hawkzor
fixed.

Download: Chieko Kawabe - Be Your Girl (Teara) [hawkzor's Insane].osu
Cyril Scarlet
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Cute song Cute hit circle skin ♡(✿´∀`✿)ﾉ
Andrea
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Mafiamaster
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POPPED!

hawkzor's Insane~
Stack leniency all the way to the left is unrankable. Move the tick off of the "Rarely Stack" portion.
Teara
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Mafiamaster wrote:

POPPED!

hawkzor's Insane~
Stack leniency all the way to the left is unrankable. Move the tick off of the "Rarely Stack" portion.
Fixed.

and hwaks diff

01:18:904 (2) - new combo. before someone pops it again for this reason.
Mafiamaster
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Rebubbled!
Teara
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Your message contains to few characters.

just removed a wall of text that was rage~
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James2250
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Tearaaaaaaa this map is too awesome to go to the graveyard
don't give up!!! :(
ouranhshc
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ouranhshc

James2250 wrote:

Tearaaaaaaa this map is too awesome to go to the graveyard
don't give up!!! :(
Beuchi
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Beuchi

James2250 wrote:

Tearaaaaaaa this map is too awesome to go to the graveyard
don't give up!!! :(
Show everybody how persevering you are and don't give up, please ;)
ouranhshc
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ouranhshc
i survived two topics full of shit, then you can survive this.

STAY STRONG

We Love You

from #mod
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James2250 wrote:

Tearaaaaaaa this map is too awesome to go to the graveyard
don't give up!!! :(
To be truthful, I don't know much about the situation, but you ask me for a timing request some time ago that I ignored since I felt better timers already got to the map. Still, I kept the pm in case I might want to mod the map at a future date. That date happens to be today, and I was sort of depressed that someone gave up on a very nice map. As a result, I too offer words of encouragement to you.

Now to the mod:
Add "hawkzor" to the tags in every diff

That is the only significant thing I noticed. (pls no kds)

=======================
I personally think the map is fine and it has a very nice skin, so star and good luck in getting this map ranked.
Teara
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dkey
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Star :)
hawkzor
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Is this supposed to be bubbled ? ;p
Teara
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yea, but I had a rage fit, moved to help, got it popped, and I'm to stubborn to ask for a rebubble ( and I feel to ashamed ~ ok thats a lie =p )
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hawkzor
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I wish I had that text you deleted :D
ztrot
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ztrot
I tighten up some of the images for you
Edit: I'll bubble just let me know if you choose to add the images





ztrot
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poof
EEeee
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EEeee
Nice work! didn't see any problems

*star :3
whymeman
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Be Your Girl Ranked Map
Beuchi
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Yayyy!! *-*

Congrats~ x333
Gens
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About time.
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yay
James2250
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congratssssssssssssssssssssss :) :)
good job on not giving up! :P
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K3nsh1n_H1mur4
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A question.

Why you use a random loli in BG/Spin and not the Lucy/Nyuu ?

Lucy/Nyuu

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deadbeat
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deadbeat
don't u think it'd be silly having a picture like that as BG for a game that people under 15 play???


i did wonder the same..but it doesn't matter that much really
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