TetMax wrote:

Hi^^ hi hi o/

[General]

You need to change title to "Happy Ending Simulator (PV size)" Any source to confirm this ?

[Easy]
01:14:057 (2) - add Whistle
01:15:068 - ^
01:47:595 - add Clap
01:48:101 - add Clap?

[Normal]
01:07:315 (5) - add NC

01:18:439 (1) - add Whistle
01:31:584 (5) - add Clap
01:45:404 - ^
01:47:595 (4) - ^
01:50:123 - remove Clap
01:50:292 (4) - add Clap

[Insane]
01:12:540 (6) - add NC
01:19:450 (5) - add NC

01:21:303 ～ 01:41:528 - unify many samples by this pattern > { - / W / C / - / W / W / C / F } i don't really understand what u mean here :/
01:43:045 ～ - unify many samples by this pattern > { F+C / - / W / C / - / W / C / W } ^

Good Luck!

TetMax wrote:

OK,,

[Source]

Full ver (3:53) → https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O40qaM-fRSw
Lyrics → http://www.littleoslo.com/lyj/home/2014 ... %A9%9E-pv/

PV ver (2:20) → https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tC3ewIVSDWU
(singer only) → https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vKlX-B3k5PQ

[Sample]

Sampling like these. (W:Whistle / F:Finish / C:Clap)
But you should be careful of exceptions. it was already like this for this part
01:21:303 ～ 01:41:528

01:43:045 ～ the whistle doesn't fit here

Ranking criteria wrote:

Do not alter the song's title. This includes adding any marker to describe the cut of the song such as "Short Ver.", "TV Size" and so forth unless those markers are part of the official song title as listed by a reputable source.

1. Guy's Hard's tag is different you put twice XD

1. 00:44:900 (2) - this is not problem but i recommend 104, 64 it looks better
2. 01:03:271 (1) - 424, 172 will be clear
3. 01:38:326 (2) - how about move slider's end point to 84, 100?
   SPOILER

   
4. 01:48:438 (1,3) - hmm.. i think make these two same is better but it's on your choice

1. 00:44:394 (1,2,3) - this three's distance is different better move 3rd one to 144, 200
2. 00:46:080 (3) - ^ 372, 180
3. 00:58:214 (3) - bend little more like 00:57:540 (3) will be nice
4. GJ

1. 00:56:529 (1) - little out of blanket better move to 84, 84
2. 01:15:742 (5) - 152 240 will be natural
3. 01:56:444 (6) - this is out of line 472, 252 will be perfect
4. 01:56:528 (1) - 476, 284 if you accepted 3rd one

1. 00:53:664 (7,8,9) - これも良いと思います～
   SPOILER

   
2. 01:30:741 (1) - blanketのたにスライダー端点を320、96に移してください
3. だめだこれmodding難しい

1. 01:03:271 - 01:21:472 - This section uses 3/4 timing. The rest uses 4/4. (Not really so important to change. Just makes timeline neater.)

1. 01:02:428 (1,2) - First: NC on 2 instead of slider 1. Second: Shorten slider 1 to 01:02:933 and add slider on 01:03:271 and end at 01:03:608 ? (Both are for consistency.)
2. 01:23:494 (4,1,2) - Make similar to 01:22:146 (2,3) (that is, a slider starting at 4, ending at 1 head, and another slider at 1 end, ending at 2) ?
3. 01:52:483 (3,1) - Can be modified so that slider 1 blankets circle 2. Doesn't break spacing consistency. (puush not working well for me, sorry.)

1. 00:50:967 (4) - NC
2. 01:31:584 (5) - Change to slider ending at 01:31:584 (5) ? (Just for the sake of drum roll o.o)
3. 01:49:786 (1) - Remove NC (for consistency)

1. 01:01:922 (1,2) - Reverse order? (I mean, upward slider first before circle)
2. 01:15:405 (1,2,3,4,5) - This stream feels like it's overmapped due to being followed by two long sliders. (OK, I know that 01:11:360 - 01:19:787 is a whole section of 1/4.)
3. 01:17:428 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
4. 01:14:057 (1) - Remove NC here, and...
5. 01:14:563 (3) - NC here instead.
6. 01:17:428 (3) - NC here instead of 01:17:933 (1) - this slider?
7. 01:19:113 (4) - NC here instead of 01:19:450 (1) - this slider?
8. 02:02:932 (5) - NC

1. 01:03:271 - 01:20:124 - Like what Eyenine said, this section uses 3/4 time signature for the music's rhythm. Please change the inherited timing point at 01:03:271 to be uninherited and pick the 3/4 (waltz) time signature. It'll be really important in Taiko mode and the Nightcore mod.

1. 00:50:967 - I personally think using a Drum finish doesn't really fit since it's too subtle compared to the cymbal here. Use a Soft finish instead?
2. 01:02:428 (1,2) - Swap NC here for consistency with the rhythm and similar patterns? I mean, it doesn't seem to be logical to NC 01:02:428 (1) at all sudden (I can't see any reason for this), and applying NC on 01:03:608 (2) will make it consistent with patterns such as 01:05:293 (1,2,3).
3. 01:19:787 (3) - Make it look like this so the flow from 01:19:450 (2) and 01:21:303 (1) will be nicer?
4. 01:29:225 (1) - And make it look like this for the same reason as the suggestion above? You did something like this at 01:23:494 (4,1), and I think it'd be nicer if you continued to use patterns like this.
5. 01:41:528 - Add a finish here for consistency with 01:40:180 since it has the similar cymbal sound and it also has a finish? It's there in the other diffs, I think.

1. 00:49:787 (1,2) - Maybe make a rhythm like 00:47:091 (1,2) to be consistent with the previous patterns with the same rhythm? Shouldn't be too hard for a Normal diff, and also makes this part feel less awkward, at least.
2. 00:51:641 - Use a Soft finish here since the sound of the cymbal in the song here is still the same as 00:50:967, and that one uses a Soft finish?
3. 01:11:360 (1) - The instrument here is pretty strong, so why not add a finish? You have it in Easy, anyway.
4. 01:51:640 - The vocal here is particularly notable IMO, and because of that it feels weird if unmapped, so try adding a circle, maybe?

1. 00:59:057 (5,1,2,3) - Select them all, then move them by 3 grids downward? It'll make the gap between 00:58:551 (4,1,2) look equal, which makes this pattern look neater.
2. 01:03:271 - 01:11:360 - I think you can use the whistle from the default Soft sampleset to emphasizes the instruments on some ticks, such as 01:03:945 and 01:05:293 (2), just like the other diffs. Having the entire section unhitsounded seems to be a (little) questionable idea...
3. 01:09:338 (2,3) - What about combining them into a 1/1 slider since the instruments here are "connected" (listen to the instrument at 01:09:338 - 01:09:675 and you'll get an idea of what I'm saying)? Feels more natural that way, IMO.
4. 01:33:438 (1) - Try this for a better flow?

1. 00:50:377 (3,4) - I know this is a part of how you map, but since the instrument at 00:50:462 has a higher pitch than 00:50:377, unstacking them will be better. How about moving (4) to (108,104)?
2. 01:21:809 (2,2) - This is not really important, but... stack the head of them perfectly?
3. 01:29:393 (6,1) - Swap NC to follow the music's rhythm? (I think, for the chorus, the downbeat/beginning of each stanza falls on the red tick before the downbeat in the editor itself, and it'd be more logical to make the combo pattern follow how the song goes, right?)
4. 01:34:786 (5,1) - ^
5. 01:44:225 (6,1) - I personally think that the flow of the jump here is too linear, making the players need a very straight cursor movement, which is generally awkward to do. Try moving (1) to (336,288)? Seems to flow better with 01:44:562 (2,3) this way, too.
6. 01:44:899 - The instrument here sounds the same as 01:43:550, and you used a clap there, so use a clap here, too, instead of a whistle?

1. 01:01:080 (3,4) - Maybe make the rhythm look like this to follow the vocal at 01:01:332 and 01:01:754? It felt pretty awkward to me while playing because the former is skipped and the latter is simply unmapped. Up to you, though, since it seems you're mostly following the instruments.
2. 01:22:146 (3,4,5) - Make a triangle like this? They'll look neater, there will be a more consistent spacing (which means consistent length of cursor movement, which will make playing more comfortable here), and the flow to 01:22:652 (1) will be more awesome.
3. 01:32:595 (2) - Try to make a slight curve like this so it'd create a nice flow from 01:32:090 (1)?
4. 01:48:101 (3,4,5,6,1) - Eh, I think the stream's curve can be improved so it would look neater. Here's an example.
5. 02:02:932 (5,6) - What about moving (6) a little more to the left (maybe at (144,308)...) so the flow of this jump will be better? It's currently okay, actually, but I think it can still be improved~

1. 01:58:888 (4) - x:421 y:136

1. 00:48:439 (1,2) - I prefer the same pattern as 00:47:091 (1,2) -
2. 01:31:921- add a note?

1. 01:27:708 (4,5) - exchange their position. I think it is better to make the rotated pattern in common with 01:28:888 (3,4,5) -
2. 01:42:371 (3,1) - skillful!
3. 01:54:337 (3) - how about the symmetric angled slider with 01:54:843 (5) - ?
4. 01:59:225 (1) - upward slder is better for smoother cursor moving

1. 01:17:091 (5,1,2,3,1) - 少し流れが悪く感じました。回転させるflowでつないでも良いと思います。
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   148,40,77091,2,0,P|164:88|164:120,1,70,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   214,270,77428,6,0,P|146:263|108:207,1,140,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   196,180,77933,1,0,0:0:0:0:
   282,208,78102,2,0,P|315:185|355:151,1,70,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   321,77,78439,6,0,P|267:29|128:45,1,210,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

2. 01:21:135- add a note
3. 01:30:573 (4) - x:128 y:17. ここはsmoothな流れにした方が良いと思います
4. 01:43:550 (3,4) - 平行にしない方がsmoothだと思います
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 01:46:247 (2) - x:376 y:57. blanketしない方がsmoothだと思います

1. 01:00:911 (2,3) - 位置逆にしてＤＳ調整した方が良いflowになると思います
2. 01:20:966 (2) - delete?

RandomEffect wrote:

From my queue~

[Easy]

1. 01:58:888 (4) - x:421 y:136 fixed

[Normal]

1. 00:48:439 (1,2) - I prefer the same pattern as 00:47:091 (1,2) - i try to diversify my pattern >.<
2. 01:31:921- add a note? Yeah not bad added

[Insane]

1. 01:27:708 (4,5) - exchange their position. I think it is better to make the rotated pattern in common with 01:28:888 (3,4,5) - i prefer the current pattern
2. 01:42:371 (3,1) - skillful!
3. 01:54:337 (3) - how about the symmetric angled slider with 01:54:843 (5) - ? yup fixed
4. 01:59:225 (1) - upward slder is better for smoother cursor moving kay :

nice song! I love nano<3 me too <3
Star ~☆
~Good Luck~

Okoratu wrote:

General

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1. RANK WHEN (also dat 42 sec intro)
2. Srsly I won't find much here...

Insane

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1. plays nice except for some things that annoy me (which i'm going to try to point out in the following [also your streams are sexy])
2. 01:05:967 (3,4) - I have no idea what sound this is that they make on 01:06:388 - but it's so dominant that i'd suggest mapping it (or at least consider it if more ppl think that way) as you said i'll consider if more ppl notice this
3. 01:11:697 (2,3) - dunno they kind of threw me off as something unintuitive, because there's 01:11:360 (1) - which maps the same sounds but isn't jumping or anything...
   My suggestion would be either: Okay
   
   1. Make 01:11:697 (2,3) - a slider like 01:11:360 (1) -
   2. Or make 01:11:360 (1) - 2 sliders like 01:11:697 (2,3) -
4. 01:24:168 (1) - might change its shape to something more even like this:
   
   Example

   
5. 01:35:629 (1) - this might be hypocritical, but you could move it to better blanket fixed
   
   Example

   
   slider in the pic is at x: 468 y: 60
6. 01:47:090 (1) - moving this one closer to 01:46:416 (3) - would at least make this one more pleasant to play since it's a jump with a sharp angle flow done
   
   Example

   
7. 01:52:315 (6) - 2.70x jump, might consider lowering that one to sth around 2.30 - 2.40 at max imo fixed
   
   Example

   
   Putting it in the end of 01:51:135 (1) - actually lets you keep the triangle and lowers the distance to 2.40

Gl with your map!

popner wrote:

Sry for late.

[Insane]
00:59:563 (3) - missed clap added
01:29:899 (2) - ^ ^
01:28:045 (1,3) - nazi - they do not properly stack with each other.fixed
01:39:674 (4,1) - the spacing of this blanket is inconsistent with the others. You can move 01:40:180 (1,2,3) - up a bit and adjust the shape of 01:40:180 (1) - . Like: okay

SPOILER

01:42:539 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - nazi - not a accurately straight path. You should move 01:42:371 (3,2) - left a little. the current way is good enough imo

[Guy's Hard]
01:29:225 (4) - missed clap added for him

[Easy]
00:51:641 (3) - missed clap on end added

Remember to check through all diffs on hitsounds consistency. Then call me back.