1. 01:05:148 (1) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1097658 | This gets pretty close to touching my lifebar (which is a recreation of the original old one.) Its possible that people with a longer bar or those that play in 4:3 might actually have part of the slider go underneath.
2. 01:25:291 (4,1) - I went through the editor and noticed that you have the spinner 1/4 directly after the circle. Is it possible to move this at least 1/4 ahead so that new mania players won't get completely destroyed by the sudden 1/4?
3. 01:51:220 (2,3,4) - The first thing that bugs me is that the note actually feels a lot closer due to it being placed under the horizontal slider and giving off a fake illusion that it might actually be 1/1 instead of a 3/2 | Not asking to change this, but just wanted to point out that it might be very hard to read for an easy diff to newer players.

Irreversible wrote:

Hi Ike, going on Forum anyway now!

[Normal]
Take out your patterns which contain 8 circles, I told you last time :C
Replace with some sliders instead, and mixed with circles if you want :3 Wait! I thought you only meant on Easy difficulty (because I fixed that one ._.) You want Normal fixed too? D: I intentionally add the circles to follow the main beats, but at the same time make it harder than Easy orz.

[Hard]
00:21:434 (3,4,5) - I guess that pattern is really hidden for a hard. I suggest something that follows the flow better anyway: try something like that http://puu.sh/5DUee.jpg (that's not the best solution probably, please try something that fits for you! I didn't wanna break your pattern, that's why
Fixed!
00:42:434 (4) - You use many jumps in your hard, that's why people will fail on that one probably, they'll think that's a jump. Please space that one properly, or add a circle before. I shall. Fixed!
01:04:612 (4) - is that drum on purpose? Yes, I thought it sounded good, so I added one there XD.

Most of it is fine, sometimes the things are quite hidden tho since you use jumps.. Go over your diff again and you might find some parts where you think yourself that the jump is not fitting! :3 (not going to mention them, since i usually tend to use jumps myself, where they don't really fit, most of the time it's quite fun after all ) Okay, I shall do some final self-modding then! Thanks for the feedback!

[Insane]

00:14:362 (3,4) - CTRL + G the rhythm here please, it sounds much cleaner. I know it destroys your pattern, but it's worth it. It looks weird. Sorry! I'm much better off changing the pattern somehow or just keep it as it is! Declined!
00:38:148 (2,3) - ^ This one too! It plays weird! Sorry, have to decline this one!
00:45:434 (4) - I think a jump here would fit better than 00:44:791 (1,2,3) - :O 00:45:434 (4) - the sudden slowdown with the jumps doesn't fit anyway - so you better increase the spacing here too EDIT: I think I fixed this one now! :3
00:46:077 (5,6,1,2) - Your map overall looks really clean - but this one is a bit crumpy. Try avoiding that 1 touches 5 to fix it :3 OMG! This suggestion is genius! I love you it! Fixed XD!
00:56:791 (1) - You should use a jump here as well to emphasize the finish.. I agree with you! Currently, this pattern has inconsistent spacing comparing to the previous and next notes. This is a must fix. More to come!
01:14:148 (1,2) - The jumpgods called me and where angry, because they want to see increased spacing here. Well, this dudum kinda calls for it. Personal preference tho It would makes sense that the jump gods were angry, because I added jumps in my Hard difficulty but not on my Insane difficulty! Fixed, so the jump gods don't punish me! D:

Overall I like the map, but please take a look 00:53:148 (4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - at this part, I think you could place the jumps better if you emphasize the finishes I'll see what I can do here, but there's no guarantees that I could find another alternative pattern without experimenting a little. Hell, it was very hard to rearrange 01:39:648 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) on Normal, but I somehow find the solution. Hopefully, I can find a solution for this pattern as well. More to come!

Call me if you need help! Okay, but only if I need it! :3

1. Red - Unrankable
2. Purple - Highly recommended
3. Black - You'd better fixed
4. Gray - Just suggestion

• General

1. Fine
   
   Beginner
2. Fine
   
   Easy
3. Fine
   
   Normal
4. 01:16:291 - 01:16:291 - 01:17:148 - 01:18:005 - 01:18:434 - whistle
5. 01:23:148 (2) - ^
   
   Hard
6. 00:07:505 (2,3) - whistles at white lines
7. 00:30:648 (6) - remove whistle? it has a lower tune than 5 and 7, so imo only a clap for 6 is enough
8. 01:16:291 (3,4,5) - whistles at the begining of sliders
9. 01:18:005 - 01:18:434 -
10. 01:21:648 (8,9) - whistles at the beginnings?
    
    Insane
11. 00:07:077 (1,2) - whistles at the begining of sliders sound better (add at 2 at least imo)
12. 00:31:720 - 00:32:148 - whistle
13. 01:21:648 (10) - ^?
14. 01:31:720 - 01:32:148 - ^ (it is more like you missed this part)
15. 01:36:862 (3,4) - ^
16. 01:43:720 - ^
17. 01:45:434 - ^
18. 01:45:862 - ^
19. 01:50:577 (2) - ^
20. 01:52:720 - ^
    Wonderful Insane! Great Job!

1. Custom diff names~ \:D/ Hopefully this isn't breaking the difficulty name rules orz
2. I noticed that the MP3 are a bit off in quality in a few parts(mainly in the kiai; feels a bit too small on volume imo), so you might consider to finding a better one owo Here's mine; I know this isn't the best, but I find this one a bit better imo (mostly noticed with the background music is clearer) btw you might want to check the timing, since I think it's slightly different imo :b http://puu.sh/6agpv.mp3

1. 00:20:791 (4) - I know this one circle is supposed to form a pattern with 00:17:362 (1,2,3,4) -, but the flow from (3) to (4) as you can see, isn't really good here, as players will need to make an sharp upward turn with the cursor, whilst the natural flow from (3) is aiming to the right, not up :< So yeah, it wasn't a really big problem, but considering the flow up until this point is all natural, you might consider changing this :3 though there aren't many option available to change the pattern without changing the rhythm a bit here orz My suggestion here is to arrange the rhythm a bit here; You can change 00:19:077 (3) - to a 1 1/2 repeat slider with the repeat on 00:19:720 -, I think this one fits better imo, since the vocal here is also repeating on the word 'kitte', so the repeat will emphasize this too :3 And then you can try making the pattern like this
   
   this one

   

   152,140,18648,1,8,0:0:0:0:
   212,192,19077,2,0,B|196:240|232:264|208:312,2,120
   272,140,20791,1,4,0:0:0:0:

   The flow will be more comfortable this way imo. You might change the shape of 00:19:077 (3) - as what you prefer though :b
2. 00:42:220 (2,3) - Personally didn't really like how you use the 4 circles on this rhythm imo. Well, the rhythm is of course okay and is pretty much easy to understand for beginners, but I think this (2) and (3) circle will become a bit confusing. See, the rhythm up until now are pretty much a 1/1 that follows either the music and the vocal. Though I feel this one has a slightly more denser vocal on this part, I'd suggest to make these two circles into a slider. That way, beginner will have less chance on breaking the combo here owo
3. 01:19:077 (1,2,3) - Seeing as how aesthetics plays a major role on this difficulty, having these two straight sliders are a bit out of place compared to all other patterns lol I'd suggest to tidy them a bit here;you can try to curve them to form a a curved triangle like this
   
   here

   
   
   The flow is basically still the same, but it should looked better visually like this imo
   

   216,244,79077,6,0,P|189:296|136:323,2,120,2|2|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   180,172,80791,2,0,P|141:180|96:168,1,80,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   52,232,81648,2,0,P|60:264|56:312,1,80,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

4. 01:48:220 (2) - I would personally prefer if you didn't just put this casual straight slider here imo besides that it plays a bit boring (even for beginners lol), with this long slider you can make some interesting curve :3 You can try making this kind of simple curve
   
   like this

   
   this way, the curve will also emphasize the background music (mostly the piano) and will make the play less boring too imo :'D
   

   136,316,108220,2,0,B|204:312|248:352|248:352|288:312|368:320,1,240,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

1. 00:58:077 (6) - I kinda have a feeling that this note is placed stacking with 00:55:505 (2) - for a pattern here. But I guess you can try placing this one higher up to emphasize the higher pitch on the vocal imo. Try putting this one on x420/y212, with this the flow will become a linear zigzag pattern; it'll give more variation to the flow in this diff rather than just the usual ones :3
2. 01:31:934 (4,5) - the change of the rhythm here may confuse beginners a bit imo. See, the rhythm on 01:29:362 (1,2) - are following the vocal exactly, whilst on the next slider at 01:30:862 (3,4) - don't; it follows the main 1/1 rhythm back and kinda suddenly too imo :< Beginners will hit 01:31:934 (4) - early because they will though that it follows the vocal on 01:31:720 - :' So yeah, my suggestion here is to change 01:31:934 (4,5) - into a slider here, because in my experience (and watches many beginners play :b), sliders are read more easier than circles; it will also help greatly if you want to change from one rhythm to another. So consider changing the rhythm to become like this owo
   

1. 00:20:791 (4) - Consider adding NC here, as the rhythm here has actually changed; this one follows the background music like in the next spin :3 and you may also want to keep the consistency in comboing since you used NC here on Hard and Insane too :b
2. 00:43:077 (1,2,3,4) - Instead of making this part only used 8 eight circles play, you can try making the rhythm more interesting here, since the previous patterns (i.e 00:38:791 (2,3,4,5) - for instance) plays really good :3 So yeah I suggest to spice the rhythm here to emphasize the vocal; since the vocal here is a bit more powerful than the background music. Try changing 00:43:934 (3,4) - to a two connecting 1/2 slider pattern (just like what you did on 00:37:077 (6,7) - ). With this the rhythm are more inutive than just using 1/1 beats and with how you used the rhythms on previous beat, this one will fit better with the map :3 You can try positioning them like this owo https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1228202
3. 00:56:792 (1,2,3,4) - As in above :b
4. 01:11:148 (5) - Instead of putting this as a straight slider that goes right, I think it would fit better if you put this slider as an upward curved slider like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1228211. The curve will emphasize the vocal at the background and the upward motion will emphasize the rising pitch better than making it go straightly left :3 And also, the flow will become circular, which I like, so yeah consider changing this one too :b
5. 01:16:720 (2,3,4,5) - I don't know about this, but if you're following the vocal here(which you should, since vocal is the most powerful here), 01:18:005 (4) - should be only a single circle, not a 1/2 slider :< Besides that, I think the pause between (4) and (5) fits really well with the song. Though the choice will always be yours ne? Just consider changing this :3 And I noticed this later, but you also used this rhythm on 01:31:720 (4,5) - ouo
6. 01:47:791 (1,2,3) - Just a small suggestion but I think you can make the pattern here prettier imo See, The slider pattern here is currently curved-straight-straight-straight slider, my suggestion is to curve 01:47:791 (3) - like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1228231. Beside that it will make the pattern looks better, it'll also balance the usage of how the sliders are curved on this pattern too :3
   

   84,152,104791,5,2,0:0:0:0:

7. The easier diifs(Beginner, Easy, and Normal) are all really nicely made and plays very good! owo There aren't any notes that feels forced to make up a pattern; everything plays really well! Awesome as usual, Ike

1. 01:39:434 (8,9,1) - Umm I don't know if this is intentional or not, but I find the manual stacking here a bit weird imo, this is how they looked during gameplay https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1228245 o.o So yeah, you might want to fix the stacking a bit; as auto stack doesn't do any good (It'll put a really small distance with the previous note on 01:39:220 (7) - ), you may want to use the manual stacking, but move (8) a bit more to the right, so that it will looked like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1228263
   

   196,248,99434,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   192,248,99541,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   188,248,99648,6,0,P|116:208|100:136,1,160,6|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

2. This difficulty plays really well; it stands fitly between the somewhat tricky Normal and the Insane :3 Although I feel that a few jumps are a bit too far to be in hard; no, I didn't mean the jump isn't fit-the jumps are placed on all right places here ouo It's just some of it are a bit too far from each other, like, it has 2.0 distance from the other notes, like 00:39:648 (5,6) - for instance, and other parts too. You might want to decrease the jump there, as I think the highest jumps in Hard should be in 1.5 to 1.8 to be played comfortably imo Though it's your decision to change it, just consider :3

1. 01:18:434 (9) - Uh I know that you used slidertick hitsound on this map, but unlike on the other parts of the map, I don't really find this one fits imo :< You see, on this slider, you followed the vocal (you started following the vocal on since 01:18:005 (7,8,9) - ), and the clap sound in the tick doesn't go really well with it; it gives a somewhat disruptive feeling with the vocal :C So yeah, I'd suggest to remove the clap slidertick here and just use the soft sampleset one~
2. Uwaah, the flow here is really good! There aren't anything that I can find; the jumps are placed on the right places and there aren't any weird flow here owo So yeah, nice job here too Ike! :3/

LexiaLovesU wrote:

[Easy]

1. 00:03:648 (1,2) - In my opinion I think these type of sliders would fit and match the music more while giving a fun feel
   
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2. 00:13:934 (1,2,3,4) - I feel like this pattern is a bit hard for an easy diff. I think it is a bit hard because to me the transition between the notes is a bit rough as of now when you hit it, it curves like a red tick slider and in my opinion it should curve like a white tick slider. I think doing this to the pattern will make it smoother to play
   
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3. 00:19:077 (2,3) - In my opinion I think the placement with these two sliders could be a bit better. I think right now they seem a bit clumped together also im not going to mention the white tick ending a stanza as something that should be fixed since this slider starts on a red tick it would make the rhythm to hard to play in an easy difficulty x.x . and for the placement why don't you try this owo
   
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4. 00:34:505 (1) - I think the slider should not be straight. its kinda boring having just straight sliders plus they don't fit very well also those four sliders that blanket the repeater sliders are very repetitive so why don't you try to doing this to the slider it will flow better aswell since its not going abruptly up or down it will have more of a natural transition
   
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5. 00:37:077 (3,1) - ^^
   
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6. 00:40:505 (1) - ^^
   
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7. 00:48:220 (1) - ^^
   
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8. 00:54:220 (3) - ^^
   
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9. 00:56:791 (4) - Holy crap you actually broke symmetry o.o I think 00:55:505 (2) - should be the same slider as 4 because if you listen in 25% playback she says something on the red tick as well and also just to keep the sake of symmetry
10. 00:58:077 (6) - in my opinion putting that circle there makes the flow way to circular for way to long maybe put the circle on x 428 y 312 to make it less repetitive
11. 01:01:934 (1) - 1 has a pretty big curve in the opposite direction of 2. I think its to hard for a beginner to hit owo
12. 01:22:505 (1) - ^^
13. 01:24:434 (3,4) - 3 has a pretty big curve in the opposite direction of 4. I think its to hard for a beginner to hit owo
14. 01:38:577 (5) - ^^
15. 01:45:648 (3) - I think a slight curve towards the head of 1 will make this flow better
16. 01:49:076 (4) - this placement it doesn't really fit with that straight slider its to abrupt of transition try this instead
    
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normal now

AnreFM wrote:

A short mod

1. 01:01:924 (2) - Consider adding a NC here, since this note follows a spinner.

1. The way jumps and streams flows on this difficulty totally needs AR8, 7 feels way too slow and confusing to read.

1. 01:14:138 (2) - Consider adding a NC here, since this note follows a spinner.

1. If you're using AR8 on Hard then you could use AR9 here, it would be cool.

1. 01:21:210 (7) - I'd add a new combo here, otherwise it's way too long.
2. 01:27:852 (2) - Consider adding a NC here, since this note follows a spinner.

Peanut12 wrote:

Its a very Nice Map :33



Your Peanut12

Irreversible wrote:

W0000T
I totally forgot about this
Ok I rank it, give me a bit to check it :3

Xinely wrote:

finally
gratz ike :3

Kibbleru wrote:

vid so high quality