Sun Rainbow wrote:

[General]
00:08:718 (5) - 为何break 大概给新手调整？
00:17:289 (2,3) - 包好点 好
00:27:944 (3,1) - 好
01:30:592 (1,2) - 包好点 好
01:44:147 (2,3,1) - 为啥忽然clap了 和原曲相对应。
音效是硬伤 你可以下24clap 好的

[Normal]
00:03:004 (3,1) - 叠住了
00:23:004 (1) - 包好 顺便DS好 好
01:51:014 (1,2) - 好
02:10:532 (1,2) - 这对于normal很难 滑条还好吧

[Hard]
00:05:861 (1,3) - 包好2好
00:25:565 (5) - NC 好

个人观点:你这图属于一年半前的图 你可以去多玩玩 多看下新rank的图 学习一下他的排列
你的排列需要加强。节奏可以。 要的

那 加油吧

Kawaiwkyik wrote:

[Extra]
01:49:568 (1,2,3,4,5) - 不NC?

[Lunatic]
00:41:140 (1,2,3) - 不會讓人誤會為3連打? 還有我覺得把3 ctrl+g比較好好的
00:50:783 (2,3,4,5) - 間隔好大还好吧
01:38:725 (9) - 我覺得這裡不用NC FIXED
01:50:653 (1) - ^ FIXED

[Hard]
01:21:480 (1) - Del nc fixed
01:22:029 (1) - nc fixed
01:22:577 (2) - del nc fixed
01:23:492 (1) - NC fixed

[Easy]
00:21:575 (4) - NC fixed
01:13:282 (3) - 包好2 fixed
01:36:375 (4) - NC fixed




Extra不錯
不過圖風有點舊了

1. 00:00:147 (1) - Finish on Start of slider
2. 00:03:004 (1) - ^
3. 00:05:861 (1) - ^
4. 00:08:718 (5) - remove Finish
5. 00:11:575 (1) - Finish on Start of Slider
6. 00:15:861 (3) - 1 grid up
7. 00:16:932 (1,2,3) - and adjust distance tp 1.2x
8. 00:21:575 (1) - Finish
9. 00:23:005 (1) - ^
10. 00:38:997 (1) - Finish on Start of Slider
11. 00:40:069 (3) - finish this too.
12. 00:52:032 - don't need to expand break time
13. 01:27:882 - add note?
14. 01:39:448 ~01:47:761 - Normal Hitsound more better

1. 00:03:004 (3) - NC
2. 00:09:432 (1,1) - so close! maybe Hard for normal user
3. 00:11:575 (1) - Finish on Start of Slider
4. 00:21:575 (3) - how about this rhythem?
   
5. 01:25:504 (4) - remove Finish
6. 01:26:419 (1) - Finish
7. 01:27:882 (1) - finish on start of slider
8. 01:42:339 (1) - forgot add clap?
9. 01:43:785 (4) - this too
10. 01:48:303 (5) - NC
11. 01:55:351 (3) - move to (304,176)
12. 02:09:809 (3) - Finish

1. 00:35:783 (3) - Finish
2. 00:37:212 (2) - Ctrl + G ?
3. 01:08:997 (1) - Finish
4. 02:09:809 (5) - Finish on start of slider

TaMul wrote:

m4m

[Easy]

1. 00:00:147 (1) - Finish on Start of slider OK
2. 00:03:004 (1) - ^ OK
3. 00:05:861 (1) - ^ OK
4. 00:08:718 (5) - remove Finish NO
5. 00:11:575 (1) - Finish on Start of Slider OK
6. 00:15:861 (3) - 1 grid up OK
7. 00:16:932 (1,2,3) - and adjust distance tp 1.2x OK
8. 00:21:575 (1) - Finish NO
9. 00:23:005 (1) - ^ NO
10. 00:38:997 (1) - Finish on Start of SliderOK
11. 00:40:069 (3) - finish this too. OK
12. 00:52:032 - don't need to expand break time I'll think about it
13. 01:27:882 - add note? think this break is too short
14. 01:39:448 ~01:47:761 - Normal Hitsound more better

NO Sorry
[Normal]

1. 00:03:004 (3) - NC
2. 00:09:432 (1,1) - so close! maybe Hard for normal user fixed
3. 00:11:575 (1) - Finish on Start of Slider
4. 00:21:575 (3) - how about this rhythem? I'll think about it
   
5. 01:25:504 (4) - remove Finish OK
6. 01:26:419 (1) - Finish
7. 01:27:882 (1) - finish on start of slider
8. 01:42:339 (1) - forgot add clap? Yes think you
9. 01:43:785 (4) - this too ^
10. 01:48:303 (5) - NC NO
11. 01:55:351 (3) - move to (304,176) fixed
12. 02:09:809 (3) - Finish OK

[Hard]
AR 7 No It's hard to read the map

1. 00:35:783 (3) - Finish NO
2. 00:37:212 (2) - Ctrl + G ? NO
3. 01:08:997 (1) - Finish NO
4. 02:09:809 (5) - Finish on start of slider OK

ts8zs wrote:

[Extra]
00:19:254 (8) - Ctrl+G no
00:35:783 (1,2,3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/884121 好
00:37:390 (3) - move to 136,252 好
00:39:712 (3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/884132 咱改了下位置
00:42:212 (1) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/884138 no
01:20:382 (9) - moveto 112,192 好
01:30:773 (1,2,3) - http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/884144 no
最后的速度太鬼畜了XD

Kawaiwkyik wrote:

[Extra]
01:49:568 (1,2,3,4,5) - 不NC? 好

mintong89 wrote:

hi

黑: 随意可忽略
蓝: 请认真考虑
红: 不符合规则

[Lunatic]

00:00:147 (1) - slider 太弯, 建议把尾点移左点 FIXED
00:00:861 (4) - ^ 尾点移右 FIXED
00:08:004 (1,2,3,4,5) - 一般来说做星不会加slider的吧...而且你这样放slider打起来也不顺手 FIXED
00:30:322 (1,2) - 这距离拉远点吧... 我找找地方。
00:39:712 (2,3,4) - ^ 不要叠住..好
00:43:997 (1,2,3,4,1) - 做个星啊 现在挺好的

怎么说呢...不够整齐&干净 而且各种对称... 还有就是难度没分好, 到了有些部分难 有些部分太简单...

;w;对称确实有点多。难度自己打起来感觉还行。我会仔细考虑的。谢谢意见

[Extra]

这diff明显好过Lunatic很多...难图我mod不出什么lol

因为不是我做的'w'

[Hard]

00:01:575 (1,2,3) - 这DS虽然一样但是00:02:111 (2,3) - 会给人有一种太靠近了的感觉 建议不要跟DS拉远点 试试看
00:11:575 (1,2,3,4) - ...真心觉得真的别放这种梗 非常难看 好吧偷懒了 我换
00:16:218 (2) - CTRL+G 这种反上去的梗会让人不习惯 好的
01:09:175 - 我觉得这里没必要空住 加个note? 好的

N&E 好像没啥大问题

Nymph wrote:

[General]
神さびた古戦場　～ Suwa Foughten Fields 虽然不是什么问题但是你~两边的空格一个是全角一个是半角看起来挺奇葩的。。弄成一样的吧
没注意已改。多谢。
罗马音title我不是很确定 直接翻译成英文大丈夫?这个原曲是这样显示的

Lunatic的kiai开始时间跟别的diff不同 需要弄成相同的
FIXED

[Lunatic]
00:01:754 (2) - 这里感觉用3连打有点太早且多余 也没有很切合音乐 建议用普通单点 已改梗

00:02:289 (4) - 同上

00:06:575 (4) - 建议加newcombo 更好看一些 好

00:07:289 (7) - 同上


[Normal]
00:23:004 (1) - Unsnapped slider (end). FIXED

01:26:419 (1,2) - 如果不想被一些人找茬的话最好用20音量以上（类似的5音量的不再提 sliderend5可以接受）

Megurine Luka wrote:

Quick Check So I will use Chinese.
Not a full mod so it's your choice to decide whether give the kd or not.

[Easy]

00:16:932 (1) - spacing FIXED
00:20:146 (1,2,3) - spacing不齐 FIXED
00:30:687 (3) - 开始在00:30:870? 好
00:45:425 (1) - 尾巴往左收一格 好
01:17:272 (4,5,1) - spacing不齐 FIXED
01:22:029 (2) - 结束在01:22:577
01:48:845 (6) - 我觉得这个折返有点多..一般来说E/N折返不建议超过3
01:53:906 (1) - spacing

[Normal]

00:07:289 (3,4) - 用一样的slider 好

[Extra]

个人觉得CS大一号会好一些不过对我来说CS5也acceptable就是了

只是quick check 就不做Full mod了 /w\
我个人觉得作为新人还算不错不过能再沉淀一下多改改倒是更好。或者再做做别的图之后再回来看。现在明显还有些不成熟/w\

就是这样了~

• the last red section is not bad but the green one should be removed imo.

1. 00:35:069 (2) - a new combo here if it's not supposed to be that.

1. 01:49:568 (1,2,3) - 3/4 rhythm here.
2. 00:35:426 (2) - add a new combo if you're not on purpose.

1. 00:30:687 (3) - too early.
2. 01:25:504 (3) - end this at 01:26:419.

Colin Hou wrote:

[General]

• the last red section is not bad but the green one should be removed imo.

[Lunatic]

1. 00:35:069 (2) - a new combo here if it's not supposed to be that. Fixed

[Hard]

1. 01:49:568 (1,2,3) - 3/4 rhythm here. FIXED
2. 00:35:426 (2) - add a new combo if you're not on purpose. OK

[Easy]

1. 00:30:687 (3) - too early. fixed
2. 01:25:504 (3) - end this at 01:26:419. fixed

1st map来看，基本功很硬啊，比较厉害。目前就是缺点娱乐性，GD的note丢的有点太随性，争取做到每个都可以看出来设计的原因是最好，毕竟到了现在差距也就这上面能体现了。

因为风格比较成型所以只作了点technical check，期待大变化

pimpG wrote:

mod as requested, sorry for delay It doesn't matter

easy

00:00:147 (1,2,3) - copy one of this sliders and replace the other two, rotate... currently their shapes are inconsistent and they look not intentionally random made fixed
00:01:575 (3,4,5,1) - try making them more geometric http://puu.sh/3MYDB.jpg fixed
00:08:718 (5) - new combo here for consistency with 00:03:004 (1) - maybe? uhmm I think it is not neccessary
00:16:932 (1,2) - swift new combo, long white tick is where the rhythm really changes, its also for consistency with 00:11:575 (1) - fixed
00:27:944 (3,1) - blanket can be improved here ok
00:34:712 move the break to this point, looks nice imo I think it can help newer for adust.
01:04:711 (1) - i dont think this new combo is nescessary, this part is the same as 00:11:575 (1,2,3,4) - and you did not used this nc logic there
01:07:568 (1) - ^ fixed
01:23:492 (1) - personally don't like this curve, consider making it softter fixed
01:27:882 - add a note here, its an important sound ok
01:48:122 - add a note here, i think skipping this long white tick feels weird ok

normal

00:01:575 (1) - remove new combo, its not nescessary ok
00:19:789 (4,1) - make them blanket,will look much better OK
00:20:861 (2,3,1) - try to make them not touch OK
00:28:858 (1,2,3,4,5) - this part surely needs more work on placement / aesthetic. my sugestion: http://puu.sh/3MZQm.jpg http://puu.sh/3MZR3.jpg you did a good job thanks a lot
01:08:997 (1,2,3,4) - was this supposed to be symmetric? if yes i sugest you make them perfect and centered on the screen, if no please remap this part OK remap
01:17:272 (1) - remove new combo fixed
01:17:638 (2,1) - swift new combo fixed
01:19:102 (2,3,1) - try to make them not touch fixed
01:35:833 (1) - remove new combo foxed
01:37:279 - add new combo fixed
01:48:303 (5) - new combo fixed
01:51:014 (1,2,3,4) - this combo is a bit boring for me, looks unfitting in that diff, 1 and 2 does not looks good as the same shape and 2 4 does not looks good overlapping like that, try this http://puu.sh/3MZBZ.jpg OK
02:04:749 (3) - new combo
02:06:918 (1,1,2,3) - nice thank you

hard

i like this hard, flows really good and all, but still could use more refinement on slider shapes and a recheck on spacing, but you can check this by your own

00:00:147 (1,2,3) - looks a bit random made, something like that looks more suitable http://puu.sh/3N0S6.jpg or this http://puu.sh/3N0Uc.jpg I choose the form
00:01:575 (1,2,3) - needs some refinement on this blankets : ( they were suposed to be symmetrical. please remove this notes then make a new pattern like that, but make them ligned at x and y, after making them perfect you can select them and rotate by 45 ok I'll try it
00:22:646 (5) - symmetry maybe? http://puu.sh/3N19J.jpg
00:30:322 (1) - remove new combo, its not nescessary and its inconsistent to previous parts fixed
00:33:431 (1) - spinner is unfitting here, feels sudden, i sugest you map this part I'll think about it
00:43:997 (1) - remove new combo
00:44:711 (1) - ^
00:45:247 (2) - new combo
00:46:140 (1) - remove new combo
00:58:997 (3) - new combo for consistency with next combos
01:03:282 (1,2,3) - this is more visual appealing http://puu.sh/3N1gF.jpg it's great
01:10:425 (6) - new combo for consistency with next combos
01:40:894 (1) - remove new combo
01:46:677 (1) - ^
01:53:544 (1) - remove new combo
01:54:267 (3) - new combo
01:54:990 (1) - remove new combo
02:05:472 (1,3) - swift new combo
02:09:086 (1) - remove new combo
02:09:809 (5,1) - swift new combo
(all nc solved)
lunatic

irc modded

extra

looks fine to me

that's all, nice map
I have been very greatful to you do a lots for me!

Nymph wrote:

I can see you make great efforts on this map, and it is so much better than last time you show it to me.

Let's give it a try.
thank you very much

pimpG wrote:

wow congrats

384059043 wrote:

预祝rank~

Charles445 wrote:

Hi, timing needs a fix before I can mod this.

You need a 163 BPM section at 01:26:419. Any sections after that should be +9.

Charles445 wrote:

Looks good here.

~Rebubbled!~