-Bakari- wrote:

Hello!

[General]

1. As Niva said your mp3 is unrankable. Well.. I've encoded it for you, just in case if you need it. Here's the link
   thank you
2. Song is short, so I've expected to see Easy/Normal/Hard/Insane/Lunatic mapset. But it's ok to ignore it - if you're lazy.
   i'm too lazy! _(;9rz
3. Have you missed Imperishable Night in tags? (thanks to BCI for pointing that out)
   fixd
4. Consider increasing volume of hitsounds, it is hard to hear them in some parts.
   hmm, let's see..

[Normal]

• 
  

1. This is the easiest diff, so try to reduce your diff settings a bit. How about AR4 and HP/OD3? Remember, if you have no [Easy] diff, try to make [Normal] a bit easier!
   the diff is easy btw (look at the star rate) so no need to decrease them oxo
2. 00:08:204 (3,1) - nazi - this pattern looks a little bit messy, not a big deal, but can you fix it a bit?
   great idea, ok
3. 00:16:984 - why have you ignored that piano beat here and 00:17:716 - here? It feels quite weird to play it :< Consider placing some notes here
   added~
4. 00:26:679 - somehow I love that double notes you have at 00:27:045 (3,4) - so try to do the same here? Circe at 00:26:679 - will make rrhythm more enjoyable and consistent, what's more it sounds much better to me.
   Note: same for 00:28:691 - 00:38:386 - 00:54:118 (2) - 00:59:057 - 01:33:082 - those bats really need an object!
   great idea, added circles/1/2slider except for 00:54:118 (2) because i want to follow the music here and 01:33:082, added circle on 01:33:730 here tough
5. 00:44:789 (3) - i guess you've missed a New Combo here. It looks like this combo is too long and it doesn't fit here well. Try to place NC at 00:44:789 (3) - to keep consistency
   how can i forget this lol
6. 00:48:082 and 00:49:179 - those beats feel weird during testplay. Why? Because you have similar slider at 00:46:069 (6) - and it has some circles. That's why I want you to place circles at 00:48:082 and 00:49:179
   ok
   Note: 00:54:118 (2) - same here
   no, reason as mentioned on 00:26:679 issue
7. 01:32:533 (2,3,4) - try to avoid patterns like this one.This is the easiest diff and beginners my *may right? misunderstand this pattern!
   fixed
8. 01:34:545 - here, you finish your kiai. But it looks abit weird because slider ends 1/2 earlier. You have two options:
   1)End slider at 01:34:545 - to synchronize kiai and slider
   2)Or you can finish your kiai at 01:34:362 (for all diffs) to make kiai follow music and your patterns. (recommended)
   did the 2nd one :3

[Hard]

1. Your OD/HP are too low. Try to increase the by one tick to keep diff settings more balanced and enjoyable?
   ok
2. 00:01:435 (2) - and many-many-many similar sliders. - personally, I don't like the way how you place those sliders at all. It looks like you're trying to map every single beat you hear. Well.. 00:01:435 and 00:01:801 are quite beats (but you start/end slider on them) but 00:01:618 - is LOUD and easy-hearable beat (and all you have there is a slidertick!) That's why this slider flows/plays pretty awkward and may stress or confuse players If you want to keep your pattern this way, use custom slidertick (it should be a loud one). Otherwise sound here is weird.
   Note: 00:04:362 (2) - 00:07:289 (2,5) - 00:16:069 (7) -00:18:996 (1) - same here
   all fixed except at 00:16:069 because it follow guitar/bass sound that start from 00:15:621 to 00:16:718 (offset changed because mp3 fixed ;3
3. For the first part, your comboing looks quite inconsistent. So..I've made a box of new combos for you.
   
   SPOILER

   1. 00:05:277 (1) - remove this one to keep comboing consistent.
   2. 00:11:130 (1) - ^
   3. 00:14:057 (1,6) - swap NCs. It'll make your patterns more consistent and it will help you to read that jump/regular spacing changes at 00:15:155 (5,6) -
   4. 00:16:984 (1,5) - swap NCs here for consistency.
   5. 00:18:996 (1) - remove this one, it'll become extra NC. i dont quite understand this part orz, but changed all owo
      and we're done with combo-mods
4. 00:28:326 (3) - did you want to make a blanket slider here? I guess you might re-arrange those sliders this way because it looks much better. Just an opinion, tho
   i want to make jump rather than blanket here orz
5. 00:34:545 (1) - I said that we're done with combo mods, but this NC is kinda off your pattern. Consider removing it to keep comboing ore cnsistent.
   ok
6. 00:57:045 (2) - there's some drum sounds try to remove this slider and have some fun with rhythm? Personally, I'd try something like this here.
   i'm following vocal here
7. 01:10:399 - consider placing an 1/2 slider here? I feel like there's some beats at 01:10:399 - and you should map it to keep consistent and playable rhythm. Or you can replace the whole part with a break, to be consistent with [Normal]
   this is intentional (1,2,3) is following music while (4) is following vocal
8. 01:16:984 (3) - mehh, this slider seems to be totally off vocals and music. Try to map something mnore creative here. example
   ok
9. 01:34:545 - same suggestion about kiai. Just try to keep it consistent in all diffs.
   ok

[Lunatic]

1. 00:17:990 (4) - you can remove this circle from here, because it is the only 1/4 pattern in this part and it sounds a little weird. What's more it appear too suddenly and players may be confused.
   this is insane diff so i think it wont too hard for players to read imo
2. 00:32:350 (6,7,8,9) - loong and calm vocals here, why can't you just plae a one long slider here? It will fit here much better, imo!
   awared this, I want to follow "nobasu" vocal here that's why i decided to put circles rather than slider, removed 9 circle btw
3. 00:52:106 - consider placing a circle here. I feel like there's some kind of echo or quite beat. But it's better to map it. It will help you to keep consistent rhythm, after all!
   Note: 00:55:033 - same here
   good idea, added >_<
4. 00:58:508 (1,2) - this combo feels the way to short and looks a bit messy towards others combos in this diff.
   change of song here, so i decided to make nc here. also next notes (1,2) the sv changed that's why i made nc there too
5. 01:22:838 - during kiai you use a lot of 1/4 patterns So, placing more NCs will be a good idea. Yea, box of NCs again
   
   SPOILER

   1. 01:24:301 (5) - I've already mentioned that you need NCs to make patterns neater
   2. 01:27:228 (5) - ^
   3. 01:29:972 (4) - feel free to skip this one. But 'd recommend you to put it here at least for consistency!
   4. 01:32:899 (4) - ^ same
   all fixed
6. 01:34:362 - same aboutmoving kiai or object. You should apply it for every diff.
   fix

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Nice mapset! Good luck!


Edit [1-6]: grammar and code mistakes were fixed.
Edit [7]: You're ganteng, too! @ 10nya

HelloSCV wrote:

yo yo :3

Normal

AR , OD , HP -1? current setting is too high for Normal ok

00:11:962 (3) - delete whsitle for consistence?
00:14:889 (3) - ^
00:27:328 (4) - add NC here
00:58:974 (4,5,6) - 1/2 slider wiht 1 repeat isn't better? applied all ^q^
01:25:865 (1) - same as Lunatic its purposed since I heard drum rather than soft finish here

Hard

00:13:791 (1) - delete NC , 00:15:621 (7) - add NC
00:16:718 (1) - ^
00:20:011 (5,6,7) - this jump is too sudden for hard diff? ( oh and yea 00:23:669 (1,2,3) - this part has some jumps too but i think they are ok since fits well with rhythm and readable enough becuase of NC ) I heard music at 6,7's part thats why I decided to make jump at here
01:00:072 (3) - finish on end
01:09:218 (2) - ^( or whistle on end )
01:09:584 (3) - add finish on head added finish~
01:24:218 (4,6) - stacking them perfectly?
01:25:865 (1) - same as Lunatic mentioned at normal :3
all has been fixed

Lunatic

00:05:377 (1) - whistle on end
00:46:353 (3,4) - reverse rhythm? i want to follow vocal here orz
00:58:792 (2,3,4) - considering this is Lunatic diff, need some notes here for playable maybe like http://puu.sh/2I7wX.jpg this? somehow fixed
01:10:225 (6,7) - hmm i don't think this rhythm and pattern is fit well with song :/ try different? err somehow fixed
01:25:865 (1) - drum finish is purposed? then how about using just soft finish? feels nicer same reason as normal
01:30:621 (2) - finish or whistle feels nice changed to finish here
01:31:536 (1,2) - same as 00:58:792 (2,3,4) - here , reudce that slider to 1/1 and add a note on next white tick? great idea ok!

i like Touhou xDDD

Good luck for rank!!!

Frostmourne wrote:

well, I once decided to map this song but I failed to map it because I had no ideas how to map it.
I first played throughout this map and it's quite good but I expect to see less triplet

Also the artist should be "FELT" , if you don't want your map to be popped like this case t/73878/start=130
however, with this current mp3, you need offset 952 (-35) the current offset is really late.

Not a mod, good luck

• [Normal]

1. 00:18:168 (4) - Right and down 1 grid.
2. 00:45:607 (2) - Move to x:52 y:156
3. 00:49:631 (x) - Use a slider start at 00:49:631 - and end at 00:49:997 - to replace 00:49:448 (4,5) - ?

• [Hard]
  I think you can make soft whistle same with your Lunatic in the front part.

1. 00:07:924 (3) - Distance.
2. 00:14:875 (6,7,8) - Try make them beautiful?
3. 00:19:448 (3) - Left 1 grid.
4. 01:03:716 (4) - Add finish in the slider begin.
5. 01:18:899 (6) - Move to x:16 y:180?

• [Lunatic]

1. 00:03:533 (4) - Move x:306 y:118 to stack with 00:02:436 (1) -
2. 00:03:899 (1) - Add soft whistle in the slider begin? Because this have piano sound.
3. 00:09:753 (1) - ^
4. 00:10:302 (2) - The 2nd waypoint move to x:396 y:248 maybe can make more symmetry.
5. 00:15:973 (5) - Just a suggestion. I think this can make more compact rhythm,try this?
   SPOILER

   
6. 00:17:070 (1,2) - Remove the two circle and use slider with one reverse end at 00:17:802 - and add whistle in slider begin and end will more good for play.
7. 00:18:168 - Useless inherited point.
8. 00:23:381 - ^
9. 00:27:863 (2,4) - I think the rhythm not follow the vocal accurately. Try this?
   SPOILER

   
10. 00:31:704 (4) - NC? Because 00:34:631 (1) - you have a NC.
11. 00:41:033 (5) - Distance.
12. 00:49:631 - The place I really want to have a note >< Wait too long to hit this 00:49:814 (6) - .And this 00:49:082 (4) - can make one reverse.
    SPOILER

    
13. 01:05:180 (9) - move to x:480 y:208
14. 01:11:216 (1) - The distance use 1.3x I think will be better.
15. 01:34:082 (1) - Why you don't use 1.00x speed with a slider end at 01:34:265 - and add a circle at 01:34:357 - ?

xxheroxx wrote:

Why did you cut this song? It's a pity since it's beautiful, if I were you I'd map the full version.
Also, I don't really understand your SB "cr.png", these circles are just random, why don't you delete them and do something else? With your BG I'm sure you can do a lot of better things, for example why don't you make a firefly effect?

LunarSakuya wrote:

General
- hm...I do kinda agree the circles are a bit random xD If you can't do firefly atm, you could try making them more ripple-like (slow to fast opening like in http://osu.ppy.sh/s/25463 at the first note) i'll poke my friend to do it huehuhe xD


Normal
00:36:094 (1) - make a 1/2 slider http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/834717 (maybe even add a note before the current (2)); similar pattern like 00:26:582 (2) -
01:32:985 (3) - NC to begin this measure, delete NC on 01:34:082 (1) -
all done

Hard
00:06:826 (1) - the finish on the head sounds really soft compared to the bg music, wouldn't hurt to increase the finish volume here and at other similar parts done
00:08:838 (5,6,7,8) - i think you can make these symmetrical using the y-axis its intentional : \
00:20:912 (6) - NC (like 00:23:655 (1) - ) or bring these closer together to avoid rhythm confusion within the same combo reduced distance
01:04:265 (5,6,7,8,9) - hm you could Ctrl + j this whole pattern http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/834942 The (6) will have a better contrast & appearance with (4) imo whoop j-ed
01:33:716 (3,4,1) - Equalize the spacing, didn't really see a reason for the subtle spacing change in the last note whups fixd

Lunatic
00:04:448 (2) - try something like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/834945 if you don't mind the distance change; it will stay consistent with your oval flow so far ok
00:16:521 (6,7,8) - Use this rhythm instead http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/834959 it matches the bgm better imo, especially where the stack is with the echo-ish sound lol lol ok
01:08:838 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - check the spacing of all notes in this stream and make sure they're equal; (6,7) looked a bit funny remapped this part

lovely map. i will place my star here for now <3 also pretty song! though sounds like it could be a bit longer lol
Good luck!

Senritsu wrote:

hi nyaroge~
taiko mod as requested
uh.. not much to say.. guess it can help _(:3

Muzukashii

00:18:533 (2) D?
00:33:533 (1,2,3,4,5) k d k d k
00:41:948 (4) D
01:31:338 (1) d?

0gre's Oni

00:09:204 (9) k
00:15:241 (1) ^
00:21:094 (1) ^
00:22:009 (2) d
00:59:326 (1) k
01:10:837 uh.. ddk, maybe?
01:33:716 (2,3,4) K K D?