Yo.
From my modding queue. (Queue name is a lie.)
[General]
BPM is right, I guess. My call on the offset is 2ms. (Offset be the first beat of the song, not the third.)
(Mod uses your timing. Change offset only after checking difficulty-specific mods.)
Kiai times are not assigned properly. Kiai times should start on the first beat of the chorus, and in this case, the first syllable of the chorus vocals. I suggest that kiai times should be assigned on the following ranges:
00:48:761 - 01:03:761
01:41:260 - 01:56:259
02:26:259 - 02:56:727
Normal hitsounds are too strong. Reducing it by around 10-15% should be fine enough.
[Easy]
AR - 3
OD - 2
Spacing should be consistent at all times in an Easy. Check AIMod for spacing issues and fix them. An example is 00:22:512 (6,1) - where you used 1.4x spacing. These two objects should be spaced 1.0x if you used 1.0x at the start.
Also, NCs aren't assigned properly. Preferably, NC should be added after eight beats, or eight white ticks.
00:48:292 (1,2,3) - The two sliders doesn't fit here. Slider 1 ends at the start of the chorus, while slider 2 doesn't follow anything. I suggest this change.
http://puu.sh/8rYTF.jpg (This change follows the vocals better.)
00:58:136 (4,5) - Slider 5 should come first before the circle. This follows the vocal better. (I won't point out any similar cases anymore. I know you can find them out well.)
01:03:761 (5) - Replacing this slider with a spinner fits better. Also, the spinner acts a bit like a signal of a coming break.
[Normal]
Hmm... This is a bit too difficult for a Normal. You should use less 1/2 notes while still following the music.
(I'll point out only a few of the possible changes to make the map easier.)
00:22:043 (5,6,7) - Change to a 1/1 length slider.
00:26:027 (6,8) - Delete these notes.
00:30:246 (8) - Delete note.
00:49:464 (2,3,4) - Move slider to 00:49:698 - and delete circles 3 and 4
00:59:308 (6,1,2,3,4,5) - Change to something like this:
http://puu.sh/8rZBJ.jpgI have pretty much covered every possible and fitting change scheme for this mapset.
Also, NC aren't assigned properly. Addition of NC is a bit similar to Easy, one NC per 8 beats.
[Hard]
00:33:293 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - This stream doesn't fit the music. Change with something easier or more fitting. (Something like what you did the easier diffs.) (Also applies to all other long streams)
I'll be blunt. This mapset might require a lot of changes, or worst, a remap. I request that you study the changes I have suggested by testing the flow, analyzing the music, etc. If you have learned how I made the changes I suggested, that's the time you apply them to similar cases in your map. Your style is good, it just needs honing.
Also, you can consult good mappers and/or modders for specific questions and/or advice regarding mapping. Don't be shy, they're open for questions and don't eat humans. Don't ask me, though. I'm not good enough.
Sorry if I'm not the best mod for this.
Anyway, good luck.