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10nya

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-10T11:22:59+00:00

happy30 wrote:
[General]

- The offset is too early, use offset 225. Don't forget to resnap the timing sections as well
- The first part of the song's timing signature is actually 3/4. Go to the timing setup panel and choose 3/4 (waltz) for both diffs.
- Then make a new red timing section at 01:26:225 - and change it back to 4/4 since the timing signature changes here to normal.

Nice use of hitsounds

[10nya]
01:39:892 (5) - add new combo
01:40:892 (1) - remove new combo
01:42:226 (5) - add new combo
02:06:559 (5) - add new combo

00:25:225 (5) - spacing
01:24:892 (5) - i don't get this jump, why is it here?
01:36:226 (4) - bad overlap
02:07:559 (3) - weird spacing, make prev/next on this note equal?
02:13:559 (3) - ^
all fixed

Niva wrote:
Hi - t e n n y a - (: hi

[General]

-> ~~Add 'tennya' to tags orz~~
-> Offset is VERY early you see my play using DT + HR back then though :3 and it's even gets more obvious on editor, in 25% playback I get around ~+39 o.o fixed

[10nya]

-> I feel much more comfortable reading this with AR7 btw, but it's just me~ (also same about Lally's diff about whistle usage) AR changed, also I think the music changed so there's no need to add whistle
00:27:533 (3,4,5,6) - I feel really weird having the sudden jump on (4,5) here while (3,4) is using low spacing, to make it feel MUCH more natural I recommend accelerated spacing like this though: (works excellent with the piano!)
SPOILER
somehow fixed
00:32:866 (5,6) - Considering the strong piano sound here, how about using 3/4 slider on (5) here followed by straight slider like this?
SPOILER
changed
00:37:199 (7,8) - CTRL+G instead so these two will appear from the right? I think this plays good to both your previous (6) and next (1) :3
changed
00:39:533 (3) - Not symmetrical with (1) here, is this intentional? changed
00:40:866 (6,1,2,3) - Again here, the anti-jump on (2,3) feels really, REALLY unnatural - I'd make the jump looks more equal at least, for example placing (1,2) in the following position would do good already (:
112,204,42866,5,2,0:0:0:0:
255,384,43533,1,2,0:0:0:0:
changed
00:49:533 (7) - Change first whistle to clap? Alongside keeping your clap consistency, it also works emphasizing the rest two whistles xD how can I forget this orz changed
01:01:866 (6) - Stack above (4)'s start instead? Considering the music's emphasize the jump should be (6) to (1) here actually, not (5) to (6) o.o
ah ok!
01:05:200 (5,6,7) - If you're going for something linear here I recommend something like this though to make it connected to both (4) and (1) :
200,188,65200,1,8,0:1:0:0:
111,216,65533,1,10,0:0:0:0:
127,123,65866,1,0,0:0:0:0:
changed
01:11:533 (2) - Put in ~x:333 y:68? It's much better if you put something moving here to flow with the piano, really ._. changed
01:16:200 (4) - Move to ~x:330 y:276? Would look better if (2,3,4) is arranged in a symmetry imo >_< ah sorry for didn't notice this =w= changed
01:24:533 (4,5,6) - Err, again, this doesn't feel really correct with the music as well (standard spacing -> sudden big jump -> sudden anti-jump), a jump with equal distance like this should do better already though:
SPOILER
fixed according 1.40 distance
01:29:533 (2) - Split into 1/2 slider + circle? Previously you've followed drums on 01:27:200 (2), would be MUCH better if you keep going on the drums here also though (:
fixed
01:35:533 (3,4) - I really, REALLY don't recommend such overlap here - I get your point for a jump though, this should do better:
SPOILER
somehow fixed
01:47:033 (7,8,9) - Add a slight crescendo (gradual volume increase) here to create a build-up here? Won't be hard to do though
ah ok~!
01:54:366 (4) - I personally found your exit pattern for (1,2,3)'s symmetry is quite weird imo (especially (4)'s overlap with (1)), I'd continue with this though personally:
SPOILER
01:55:200 (4,1,2) - Then you can just continue with another symmetry like this (:
SPOILER
somehow changed
02:00:533 (4,1,2) - Umm, why don't you just create y-axis symmetry here ._.
changed
02:20:533 (2,3,4) - Again, not symmetrical here, is it intentional?
forgot, changed
There you go, overall some jumps feels unnatural though, there's still a lot room for improvement from what I see (: yeaaa
Good luck with this map though :3 tks

updated

Nichiyouki

1,579 posts

Joined August 2011

Nichiyouki 2013-03-10T19:12:38+00:00

Hi, tennya owo

M4M request from my modding queue

Red = Unrankable
Blue = You should consider
Black = My suggestion

General

Okay, clear

Lally's Normal

00:28:891 (3) - Add whistle on slider begin? I think it may suit to putting it.
00:38:225 (4) - Add NC here to follow the rhythm.
01:17:558 (4) - It wil be better if you change into straight slider or move 2nd point of slider to down 2 grids imo.
01:26:200 ~ 02:28:866 - Unsnapped all note after tennya change offset. Please resnap these.
01:36:558 - I suggest that add a circle or change a circle on 01:36:225 into a slider on 01:36:225 ~ 01:36:558. Because this rhythm has music sound.

10nya

00:24:225 (4,5,6) - Move (4) to down 1 grid and right 2 grids. It will be more beautiful when you have noticed (3,4). Then on (5,6), spacing between (4,5) and (6,1) are too far, which these are make to look strange. So I will suggest that move (5) to up 1 grids and right 3 grids, and move (6) to up 4 grids and right 1 grid. All these will be more beautiful and perfect imo.
00:42:891 (1,2) - I don't think it isn't the problem, but it will be better if you reduce spacing.
00:56:891 (1) - Move to right 1 grid.
01:11:891 (3) - Spacing between (2) and this is too close. Please move it to down 1 grid and left 2 grids.
01:35:225 (2,3,4,5,1) - I feel that on (2,3,4) is cluttered. I think that move (4) to x:284 y:28 will be better, and I've noticed spacing between (4,5,1) are not equal. Please try move some these note to make to spacing are equal.
02:23:558 (2) - Ctrl+G will be more smoothly imo.

Comment: Nice map. I think it's look good for me, but don't forget resnap notes on Lally's Normal, too. Now I will give a star to you

Hope my mod will be useful for you.

Good luck~

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-10T23:27:33+00:00

Nichiyouki

Nichiyouki wrote:
Lally's Normal
00:28:891 (3) - Add whistle on slider begin? I think it may suit to putting it. it don't fits very well with the piano here
00:38:225 (4) - Add NC here to follow the rhythm. done
01:17:558 (4) - It wil be better if you change into straight slider or move 2nd point of slider to down 2 grids imo. fixed and fixed spacing
01:26:200 ~ 02:28:866 - Unsnapped all note after tennya change offset. Please resnap these. resnapped all
01:36:558 - I suggest that add a circle or change a circle on 01:36:225 into a slider on 01:36:225 ~ 01:36:558. Because this rhythm has music sound. added a circle here

ty for modding C:

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

[General]
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AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 86225
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1
BeatDivisor: 4
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
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TitleUnicode:東雲菊
Artist:BURTON
ArtistUnicode:BURTON
Creator:- t e n n y a -
Version:Lally's Normal
Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
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10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-11T09:16:27+00:00

Nichiyouki wrote:

Hi, tennya owo Hi Nich-san :3

M4M request from my modding queue

Red = Unrankable
Blue = You should consider
Black = My suggestion

General
Okay, clear

10nya
00:24:225 (4,5,6) - Move (4) to down 1 grid and right 2 grids. It will be more beautiful when you have noticed (3,4). Then on (5,6), spacing between (4,5) and (6,1) are too far, which these are make to look strange. So I will suggest that move (5) to up 1 grids and right 3 grids, and move (6) to up 4 grids and right 1 grid. All these will be more beautiful and perfect imo.
nice, changed :3
00:42:891 (1,2) - I don't think it isn't the problem, but it will be better if you reduce spacing. changed
00:56:891 (1) - Move to right 1 grid. ok
01:11:891 (3) - Spacing between (2) and this is too close. Please move it to down 1 grid and left 2 grids. I'll keep current one, cause it have same y axis as 01:13:225 (5,6) :3
01:35:225 (2,3,4,5,1) - I feel that on (2,3,4) is cluttered. I think that move (4) to x:284 y:28 will be better, and I've noticed spacing between (4,5,1) are not equal. Please try move some these note to make to spacing are equal. changed thanks
02:23:558 (2) - Ctrl+G will be more smoothly imo. I'll keep my current one

Comment: Nice map. I think it's look good for me, but don't forget resnap notes on Lally's Normal, too. Now I will give a star to you star thank youuu >w<

Hope my mod will be useful for you.

Good luck~

thanks for modding~ updated c:

@Lally~~onee-chan~~ : sorry for not noticing unsnapped notes ;;n;;

UnitedWeSin

889 posts

Joined July 2012

UnitedWeSin 2013-03-14T08:50:54+00:00

Hi hi

Modding here as you requested! Sorry super late. I've been struggling with motivation for modding.

All just suggestions, please do not make the change if you do not want to/ do no like it. I'll provide pictures just to make a point more clear. Please make the change in a way that keeps with your own style and your own intentions, not mine.

[10nya]

Map Design/Rhythm

00:24:225 (4) - Why so many points on this slider? o.o
00:24:225 (4,5) - I'm not seeing the reason for the spacing increase here. I would make more sense if you evened out the spacing from the 4 to the 5 and then had a jump into the next combo on the 00:26:225 (1).
00:28:891 (6,7,8,9) - I'm not a big fan of this placement honestly. The stack doesn't look or play very nice, and the spacing increase for the 00:28:225 (4,5,6) is kinda meh. Try some different placements here, perhaps stacking the 5 and the 6 instead would feel better. Also a nice back and forth pattern and small jump to the triplet might play well here.
00:30:225 (1,2) - Flow is kinda broken here and it feels bad with this nice song imo. Try flipping the slider around and adjusting placement to make a blanket.
00:36:225 (5,6,7) - Do you want to make this perfectly symmetrical on the y-axis? If you do then make the 5 and 7 the same slider by just copying the 5 and flipping it over, right now they are different. Also maybe move the pattern to the right slightly so that the 00:36:891 (6) is centered perfectly.
00:37:225 (7,8,1) - Again flow is kinda broken through here imo. I would prefer to have more of a circular flow into the 1. Try making the 8 blanket and placing the 1 differently.
00:56:891 (5,6,1) - Try and even out the spacing here. A bit strange imo to have lesser spacing to the 1.
00:58:224 (1,2,3,4) - Personally I didn't really like the flow here when the 3 is stacked on the head of the 2. It plays better to me if you stack the 3 on the head of the 1 instead and maybe have the 4 blanket the 2.
01:01:891 (6,1) - The jump is too much imo. It breaks flow because nothing in the song calls for a jump this large, it's the largest in the map. Try placing the 6 to the right of the 01:00:891 (5) near its endpoint and have a smaller jump into the next combo.
01:12:224 (4,5,6) - I don't like this placement. It feels weird that there is no movement to the 6 because it's the most accented note in the phrase given that it has the clap on it. I suggest moving the 5 up and having a downward flow into the 6.
01:16:224 (4,5,6) - Same as earlier, I don't really like the flow from the 4 to the 5. I suggest flipping the 4 around and having it blanket the 5 or the 6 in a constant spacing.
01:42:891 (2) - The slider shape was a bit strange to me. Try giving it a curve in each half and having it blanket the 01:44:558 (3).
01:46:891 (6,7,8,9,1) - It would be nicer imo to give the stream a bit of a curve and have it match the 1. You could even have larger spacing for the stream since this is essentially the climax of the song. Also I think it would be better to replace the 01:46:225 (4) with just a single circle and have the stream start at 01:46:558 since that note is quite accented and it's strange for it to be on the end of the slider.

Bleh that's not very good. I just made the stream and put it in a random spot. Anyways, you'd have to rearrange the combo before this, but I think the stream in 1.0 spacing feels really nice as a lead into the kiai.
02:23:558 (2,3,1) - Maybe instead of another blanket here you could try a more interesting placement and have the finishing note of the song be in the center of the screen. I think it makes for a better ending to the beatmap.

Hitsounds

01:46:891 (6,7,8,9) - To fit with the song nicer, try making the 6 a drum clap and having the 8 and 9 be drum finishes. So you would have a drum clap on the 6 and 7, and then a drum finish on the 8 and 9. That fits the sounds in the music better imo.

[Lally's Normal]

Map Design/Rhythm

00:34:891 (1,2,3) - Imo it looks better if you make the 1 and the 3 the same slider. To have two different curves in this same combo looks weird to me. Copy the 1 and flip is over to do so.
00:44:891 (4,5) - Again make these sliders the same. It would be better if each had the same curve. Give each a curve similar to the 5 would be better.
00:49:558 (1,2) - Maybe play with the placements here a bit so that you could have the 2 centered on the grid and be in a pattern with the rest of the combo, and also avoid the overlap with the 1 and the previous combo.
01:02:891 (1,2,3) - Personally I think the flow is a bit nicer if you flip these sliders around.
01:07:558 (3) - Hm, I think we can follow the drum transition better here with a different rhythm.

Replaced the 01:07:558 (3) with a single circle and started a 1/1 slider at 01:08:225.
Totally up to you, I just felt that it played better than the two 1/2 sliders at 01:09:225.
01:25:558 (1,2) - NC is much better on the 2 imo. That is the downbeat, plus we're still following the drum transition with the 1. Don't say that you're following the violin with this NC because the 01:26:225 (2,3,4) is clearly following the drums very well.
02:08:891 (2,3) - Same as earlier, I think it might be better to make the 2 the same slider as the 3 and the next two sliders also.
02:14:225 (1) - Cool!
02:18:225 (2,3) - Strange rhythm imo. It fits much nicer with the song if you move the 3 to 02:20:225.
02:21:558 (1,2,3) - I really recommend rearranging this a bit so that you could have the 3 in the center of the screen. It really makes for a nicer end to a map.

Hitsounds

01:45:058 (1) - A drum clap on the end is better imo.

Ok that's all from me I think. I hope it helps. Nice mapset! :>

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-15T07:05:57+00:00

UnitedWeSin wrote:
Hi hi
Modding here as you requested! Sorry super late. I've been struggling with motivation for modding. Thanks for accepting <3

All just suggestions, please do not make the change if you do not want to/ do no like it. I'll provide pictures just to make a point more clear. Please make the change in a way that keeps with your own style and your own intentions, not mine.

[10nya]

Map Design/Rhythm

00:24:225 (4) - Why so many points on this slider? o.o to make the shape nicer I think =w= Kinda dislike new osu!'s slider thingy

00:24:225 (4,5) - I'm not seeing the reason for the spacing increase here. I would make more sense if you evened out the spacing from the 4 to the 5 and then had a jump into the next combo on the 00:26:225 (1).

fixed
00:28:891 (6,7,8,9) - I'm not a big fan of this placement honestly. The stack doesn't look or play very nice, and the spacing increase for the 00:28:225 (4,5,6) is kinda meh. Try some different placements here, perhaps stacking the 5 and the 6 instead would feel better. Also a nice back and forth pattern and small jump to the triplet might play well here.
changed
00:30:225 (1,2) - Flow is kinda broken here and it feels bad with this nice song imo. Try flipping the slider around and adjusting placement to make a blanket.

fixed~!
00:36:225 (5,6,7) - Do you want to make this perfectly symmetrical on the y-axis? If you do then make the 5 and 7 the same slider by just copying the 5 and flipping it over, right now they are different. Also maybe move the pattern to the right slightly so that the 00:36:891 (6) is centered perfectly.
I'll keep current one
00:37:225 (7,8,1) - Again flow is kinda broken through here imo. I would prefer to have more of a circular flow into the 1. Try making the 8 blanket and placing the 1 differently.
^
00:56:891 (5,6,1) - Try and even out the spacing here. A bit strange imo to have lesser spacing to the 1.
fixed
00:58:224 (1,2,3,4) - Personally I didn't really like the flow here when the 3 is stacked on the head of the 2. It plays better to me if you stack the 3 on the head of the 1 instead and maybe have the 4 blanket the 2.
3 stacked to 1's slider head
01:01:891 (6,1) - The jump is too much imo. It breaks flow because nothing in the song calls for a jump this large, it's the largest in the map. Try placing the 6 to the right of the 01:00:891 (5) near its endpoint and have a smaller jump into the next combo.
fixed
01:12:224 (4,5,6) - I don't like this placement. It feels weird that there is no movement to the 6 because it's the most accented note in the phrase given that it has the clap on it. I suggest moving the 5 up and having a downward flow into the 6.

I'll keep current ><
01:16:224 (4,5,6) - Same as earlier, I don't really like the flow from the 4 to the 5. I suggest flipping the 4 around and having it blanket the 5 or the 6 in a constant spacing.
changed
01:42:891 (2) - The slider shape was a bit strange to me. Try giving it a curve in each half and having it blanket the 01:44:558 (3).
oh changed!
01:46:891 (6,7,8,9,1) - It would be nicer imo to give the stream a bit of a curve and have it match the 1. You could even have larger spacing for the stream since this is essentially the climax of the song. Also I think it would be better to replace the 01:46:225 (4) with just a single circle and have the stream start at 01:46:558 since that note is quite accented and it's strange for it to be on the end of the slider.

Bleh that's not very good. I just made the stream and put it in a random spot. Anyways, you'd have to rearrange the combo before this, but I think the stream in 1.0 spacing feels really nice as a lead into the kiai.
fixed<3
02:23:558 (2,3,1) - Maybe instead of another blanket here you could try a more interesting placement and have the finishing note of the song be in the center of the screen. I think it makes for a better ending to the beatmap.
somehow changed

Hitsounds

01:46:891 (6,7,8,9) - To fit with the song nicer, try making the 6 a drum clap and having the 8 and 9 be drum finishes. So you would have a drum clap on the 6 and 7, and then a drum finish on the 8 and 9. That fits the sounds in the music better imo.
fixed~!

Ok that's all from me I think. I hope it helps. Nice mapset! :>

thank you for the mods >w<

Birdy

5,720 posts

Joined April 2011

Birdy 2013-03-18T15:49:13+00:00

Sup, from popner's queue.

Quite cool already, just throwing few nazi/design suggestions.

[Lally]
01:13:558 (4) - Could be blanketing the previous one.
01:44:225 (3) - Move somewhere around x68 y180.
01:56:558 (6) - Don't use over 1 reverse in an Easy diff.
That being said, rename to Easy and lower AR & HP by one or two. By rhythm, placement, SV etc. this is an Easy, not Normal.
02:11:558 (1) - x324 y192
02:18:225 (2,3) - Why not simply like this? http://puu.sh/2jSKq

[tennya]
01:07:224 (2) - Could blanket the previous one's end.
01:22:225 (1,2,3) - http://puu.sh/2jSRo Make (1)'s curve slighter, so you can move (2) and (3) closer, (3)'s end nearly overlap's (1)'s path now.
01:29:558 (2) - Might be covered by (4)'s burst.
01:56:891 (3) - Middlepoint 2 squares up, and end a bit to the left.
02:08:891 (1) - End 2 squares right, 1 down.
02:23:225 (2) - y:284

Xierra

569 posts

Joined July 2011

Xierra 2013-03-19T05:08:16+00:00

10Nya~
Hey there, just my random mod. Should I do this on random or for popner? I'm not sure about my mod quality, so I don't know if I'm worthy to be in popner's queue. Please don't hesitate to not give kudosu if my mod is useless

Lally's Normal

I'm not one to tell that this one is Easy simply by looking at the stars. The way you click here is already on Normal. Easy should be even easier than this IMO.

00:36:225 (3) - Move this slider to x:180 y:212?
01:32:225 (2) - Move this slider to x:364 y:316?

At least this one should make flow slightly better. Other than that, thumbs up!

10nya

00:29:225 (7,8,9) - The stacking looks different from the others. Why not stack like on 01:09:891 (7,8,1)

I don't like messing with the flow since it's very good to me. Jempol!

Relaxing enough. Maybe there's a chance I make an Easy for you? :3
As I expected from 10nya again hehe, your mapping's good! Oh that goes to you too Lally. Good luck on ranking!

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-19T07:14:51+00:00

Static Noise Bird wrote:
Sup, from popner's queue.

Quite cool already, just throwing few nazi/design suggestions.

[tennya]
01:07:224 (2) - Could blanket the previous one's end. it'll make the jump worse, changed somehow
01:22:225 (1,2,3) - http://puu.sh/2jSRo Make (1)'s curve slighter, so you can move (2) and (3) closer, (3)'s end nearly overlap's (1)'s path now. I'll keep current :3
01:29:558 (2) - Might be covered by (4)'s burst. fixed
01:56:891 (3) - Middlepoint 2 squares up, and end a bit to the left. ok
02:08:891 (1) - End 2 squares right, 1 down. ok
02:23:225 (2) - y:284 ok

@Xierra: kd for modding Normal diff, btw minna it's normal not easy diff xD

thanks for modding <3

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-19T09:50:43+00:00

UnitedWeSin

UnitedWeSin wrote:
Hi hi
[Lally's Normal]

Map Design/Rhythm

00:34:891 (1,2,3) - Imo it looks better if you make the 1 and the 3 the same slider. To have two different curves in this same combo looks weird to me. Copy the 1 and flip is over to do so.
i wanted to have some difference so no changes here
00:44:891 (4,5) - Again make these sliders the same. It would be better if each had the same curve. Give each a curve similar to the 5 would be better.
i prefer it a bit curved here , it flow a bit better with the next slider for me
00:49:558 (1,2) - Maybe play with the placements here a bit so that you could have the 2 centered on the grid and be in a pattern with the rest of the combo, and also avoid the overlap with the 1 and the previous combo.
SPOILER

i followed this for this pattern:

01:02:891 (1,2,3) - Personally I think the flow is a bit nicer if you flip these sliders around.;_; i like how they are atm
SPOILER

01:07:558 (3) - Hm, I think we can follow the drum transition better here with a different rhythm.hmm not really sure about this will think about
SPOILER

Replaced the 01:07:558 (3) with a single circle and started a 1/1 slider at 01:08:225.
Totally up to you, I just felt that it played better than the two 1/2 sliders at 01:09:225.
01:25:558 (1,2) - NC is much better on the 2 imo. That is the downbeat, plus we're still following the drum transition with the 1. Don't say that you're following the violin with this NC because the 01:26:225 (2,3,4) is clearly following the drums very well.fixed here

02:08:891 (2,3) - Same as earlier, I think it might be better to make the 2 the same slider as the 3 and the next two sliders also.hmm i dunno for now i make no changes

02:14:225 (1) - Cool! \o3o/

02:18:225 (2,3) - Strange rhythm imo. It fits much nicer with the song if you move the 3 to 02:20:225.atm no rhythm changes :X

02:21:558 (1,2,3) - I really recommend rearranging this a bit so that you could have the 3 in the center of the screen. It really makes for a nicer end to a map.fixed a bit

Hitsounds

01:45:058 (1) - A drum clap on the end is better imoi prefer the actualy one o3o.

Ok that's all from me I think. I hope it helps. Nice mapset! :>

Static Noise Bird

Static Noise Bird wrote:
Sup, from popner's queue.

Quite cool already, just throwing few nazi/design suggestions.

[Lally]
01:13:558 (4) - Could be blanketing the previous one.it was not suposed to be a blanket here
01:44:225 (3) - Move somewhere around x68 y180.looks better fixed
01:56:558 (6) - Don't use over 1 reverse in an Easy diff. it's a 1/2 normal o3o i don't think is a big problem
That being said, rename to Easy and lower AR & HP by one or two. By rhythm, placement, SV etc. this is an Easy, not Normal.uhm no o3o
02:11:558 (1) - x324 y192 no changes here i prefere like it is atm
02:18:225 (2,3) - Why not simply like this? http://puu.sh/2jSKq because i prefer it like this, and for compicate pattern a bit

Xierra

Xierra wrote:
10Nya~

Lally's Normal
I'm not one to tell that this one is Easy simply by looking at the stars. The way you click here is already on Normal. Easy should be even easier than this IMO.<- thank you u.u

00:36:225 (3) - Move this slider to x:180 y:212? no changes here since if i change this one i need to change the next 2 sliders since they are copypasted and make a kind of triangle
01:32:225 (2) - Move this slider to x:364 y:316?it will ruin the spacing and i think is not neded o3o

At least this one should make flow slightly better. Other than that, thumbs up!

As I expected from 10nya again hehe, your mapping's good! Oh that goes to you too Lally. Good luck on ranking! ty :3

Ty for modding \o3o/

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

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AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 86225
Countdown: 0
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Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
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10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-19T10:43:17+00:00

updated

RikiH_

1,149 posts

Joined February 2011

RikiH_ 2013-03-21T18:13:59+00:00

From popner's queue \o/

Lally's normal

00:44:891 (4) - La curva è quasi invisibile, quindi toglila oppure curvalo un po' di più
00:46:225 (1) - Metti l'ultimo sliderpoint in 316|312 e magari cerca di spostarlo in modo che sia simmetrico al centro
01:12:891 (3,4) - Prova a blankettarli un po' meglio
01:56:558 (6) - Non mi piacciono molto i due repeat... Lo sostituirei con uno slider unico
01:58:225 (1) - Non so se volevi farlo partire dal centro, ma se è così devi spostarlo a desta di una grid
02:00:225 (2,3,4) - Questo stack non mi convince, magari può confondere i giocatori "nabbi" dato che questa è la diff più semplice
02:23:558 (2,3) - Prova a spostare un po' lo slider e a fare in modo che la nota (3) vada a trovarsi nel centro esatto della grid

10nya

00:29:225 (7,8,9) - I'd stack them or use a bigger spacing for consistency (Like you did in 01:57:891 (4,5,1) for example)
00:29:391 (8) - Try to move this in 448|248. I don't know why but I'd prefer it there...
00:58:891 (2) - Move 2nd sliderpoint to 304|268 and 3rd sliderpoint to 316|348 for a better blanket
01:00:225 (4,5) - Make this blanket better, maybe copy-paste 00:58:225 (1,2) If you followed my previous suggestion
01:05:891 (7) - Move to 64|112? I don't like the flow you used here
02:04:558 (3,4) - The blanket is a bit meh
02:17:225 (2,3) - ^

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Wow, this map is really good, good luck for ranking

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-22T03:51:34+00:00

RikiH_ wrote:
From popner's queue \o/ hi xD

10nya

00:29:225 (7,8,9) - I'd stack them or use a bigger spacing for consistency (Like you did in 01:57:891 (4,5,1) for example) I'll keep current
00:29:391 (8) - Try to move this in 448|248. I don't know why but I'd prefer it there... fixd
00:58:891 (2) - Move 2nd sliderpoint to 304|268 and 3rd sliderpoint to 316|348 for a better blanket moved 2nd slider point to x300 y263 tough~
01:00:225 (4,5) - Make this blanket better, maybe copy-paste 00:58:225 (1,2) If you followed my previous suggestion done
01:05:891 (7) - Move to 64|112? I don't like the flow you used here fixed!
02:04:558 (3,4) - The blanket is a bit meh not meh for me lol
02:17:225 (2,3) - ^ I copied this from previous slider so should be ok :3

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Wow, this map is really good, good luck for ranking

thanks

Mikkuri

823 posts

Joined April 2010

Mikkuri 2013-03-24T06:27:36+00:00

~mod request from #modreqs~

*hitsound mod only, you can ignore this mod if useless*

[General]
clear!
nothing to point

[Lally's Normal]
nice one hehe

[10nya]

00:29:225 (7) - add additions normal hitclap
01:10:058 (8) - use drum hitfinish sound better imo
01:12:224 (4) - add additions normal hitclap head
01:13:224 (5) - add additions normal hitclap
01:14:225 (1) - add additions normal hitclap head
01:15:224 (2) - add additions normal hitclap
01:16:224 (4) - add additions normal hitclap head
01:17:224 (5) - add additions normal hitclap
01:18:225 (1) - add additions normal hitclap head
01:20:225 (3) - ^
01:22:225 (1) - ^
01:23:225 (2) - add additions normal hitclap
01:23:558 (3) - add additions normal hitclap tail
01:25:891 (7,8) - use drum additions as same as 01:09:891 (7,8) -
01:46:558 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - I prefer this (5) clap (6) clap (7) drum-hitclap (8) drum-hitclap (9) drum-hitfinish (10) drum-hitfinish
02:08:725 (8) - add drum-hitfinish

That's all =v=

10nya

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Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-24T09:34:38+00:00

0OoMickeyoO0 wrote:
~mod request from #modreqs~
*hitsound mod only, you can ignore this mod if useless* hi!

[General]
clear!
nothing to point

[Lally's Normal]
nice one hehe

[10nya]
00:29:225 (7) - add additions normal hitclap ok
01:10:058 (8) - use drum hitfinish sound better imo ok
01:12:224 (4) - add additions normal hitclap head ok
01:13:224 (5) - add additions normal hitclap ok
01:14:225 (1) - add additions normal hitclap head ok
01:15:224 (2) - add additions normal hitclap ok
01:16:224 (4) - add additions normal hitclap head ok
01:17:224 (5) - add additions normal hitclap ok
01:18:225 (1) - add additions normal hitclap head
01:20:225 (3) - ^
01:22:225 (1) - ^
01:23:225 (2) - add additions normal hitclap
01:23:558 (3) - add additions normal hitclap tail well all done =w=
01:25:891 (7,8) - use drum additions as same as 01:09:891 (7,8) - ok
01:46:558 (5,6,7,8,9,10) - I prefer this (5) clap (6) clap (7) drum-hitclap (8) drum-hitclap (9) drum-hitfinish (10) drum-hitfinish ah ok
02:08:725 (8) - add drum-hitfinish done
That's all =v=

thanks for modding~! updated

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-24T23:42:32+00:00

@ tennya : how about to change my diff name just lo Lally to be a bit more consistent with your diff name? C:

RikiH_ wrote:
Lally's normal

00:44:891 (4) - La curva è quasi invisibile, quindi toglila oppure curvalo un po' di più è piccola ma c'è non vedo necessita' di cambiarlo
00:46:225 (1) - Metti l'ultimo sliderpoint in 316|312 e magari cerca di spostarlo in modo che sia simmetrico al centro non volevo infatti creare uno slider simmetrico :O
01:12:891 (3,4) - Prova a blankettarli un po' meglio ho fatto la blanket con 01:11:558 (2,4) - non con 01:12:891 (3,4) - se noti
01:56:558 (6) - Non mi piacciono molto i due repeat... Lo sostituirei con uno slider unico non sei la prima persona che lo menziona quindi lo cambio
01:58:225 (1) - Non so se volevi farlo partire dal centro, ma se è così devi spostarlo a desta di una grid qui no :3 amo non seguire centro o cose del genere,troppo da standard ste cose mi piace variare un po'
02:00:225 (2,3,4) - Questo stack non mi convince, magari può confondere i giocatori "nabbi" dato che questa è la diff più semplice anche se è la diff piu facile del mapset resta sempre comunque una normal poi ho fatto altri stack quindi non trovo nulla da sistemare qui C:
02:23:558 (2,3) - Prova a spostare un po' lo slider e a fare in modo che la nota (3) vada a trovarsi nel centro esatto della grid stessa cosa qui del cambiare un po' sarebbe troppo ovvio che finisse al centro e non mi va :3

ty for modding :3

le fix o3o

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Xinely

5,014 posts

Joined April 2012

Xinely 2013-03-25T06:51:34+00:00

Hi lally-nya o3o
from pm in game ~

[Lally :3]
00:32:558 (3) - x:324 y:100
00:43:558 (3) - 1 grid down?
00:45:558 (5) - make curved as 00:44:891 (4) - better imo
00:48:224 (4) - 2 grid right and 1 grid down to one line diagonal
00:49:558 (1,2) - swap NC?
01:07:224 (2) - 1 grid right?
01:13:558 (4) - move 1 grid left to avoid almost little overlap?
01:36:891 (1) - x:136 y:288 to one line diagonal? if follow this don't forget fix spacing after this note
01:37:391 - give soft-sliderslide2 ?
01:58:725 - ^
02:14:725 - ^
02:16:058 - ^
02:00:891 (4) - ^
01:52:225 (1,2) - swap NC?
02:08:225 (1,2) -^

[nya :3]
saya bosen inggris an .3.
00:37:225 (7) - turunin y nya jd 120 biar sejajar sama yg 00:36:225 (5) - ?
00:51:558 (3) - ctrl+G?
00:53:891 (7) - sejajarin sama yang 00:53:224 (5) - ? ex: 352,328
01:09:891 (7,8,1) - stream ini DS nya kecilin dong. kyk 00:29:225 (7,8,9) - jgn jahat2 nya D:
01:30:225 (3,4,5,6) - DS jumpnya samain?
01:36:725 (5,1) - klo ikutin yg 01:09:891 (7,8,1) - , ini juga digituin ya
01:57:891 (4,5,1) - ^
01:40:225 (6) - spacing issue
01:47:058 (8) - spacingnya? 0,84x
01:55:225 (4) - ctrl+G?
02:02:225 (3) - 452,232

naisu o3o
good luck nyan :3

Last edited by Xinely 2013-03-25T08:45:46+00:00, edited 1 time in total.

Makar

osu! Alumni

2,258 posts

Joined February 2011

Makar 2013-03-25T07:07:38+00:00

hi! from my queue

Bolded suggestions are things that are unrankable or in some way related to the ranking criteria.

[General]

Song folder, bg, timing, etc, All check out fine~

[Lally's Normal]

01:56:558 (6) - I suggest removing a repeat and adding a circle. This is the only slider with more than one repeat on it, and it's not very predictable to me.
02:19:891 (3) - This is a really unfitting slider... Delete it and add a circle on 02:20:225?

[10nya]

Eh I see no reason for the special name. Rename to Hard?
00:37:225 (7,8,1) - I find this to be very unflowy. Try moving (1) so that the direction of the mouse is more natural, like so: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/671235
01:25:891 (7,8,1) - Unstack this so its like the other triples in this section?
Not really anything to say ~

Not much to say for this~ goodluck and nice song =w=

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-25T10:50:07+00:00

@ Lally nee-chan: renamed :3

Xinely wrote:
Hi lally-nya o3o
from pm in game ~

[nya :3]
saya bosen inggris an .3. lol xD
00:37:225 (7) - turunin y nya jd 120 biar sejajar sama yg 00:36:225 (5) - ? ok
00:51:558 (3) - ctrl+G? noep
00:53:891 (7) - sejajarin sama yang 00:53:224 (5) - ? ex: 352,328 changed to 352,352
01:09:891 (7,8,1) - stream ini DS nya kecilin dong. kyk 00:29:225 (7,8,9) - jgn jahat2 nya D: emoh :3
01:30:225 (3,4,5,6) - DS jumpnya samain? ok
01:36:725 (5,1) - klo ikutin yg 01:09:891 (7,8,1) - , ini juga digituin ya gak usah, ini rhythmnya beda jadi beda juga pattennya :3
01:57:891 (4,5,1) - ^ ^
01:40:225 (6) - spacing issue kenapa saya baru sadar lol fixd
01:47:058 (8) - spacingnya? 0,84x biar stack di tengah vertical axis :3
01:55:225 (4) - ctrl+G? nggak karena di 01:56:225 (2) udah di crtl g
02:02:225 (3) - 452,232 ok

naisu o3o
good luck nyan :3

Makar wrote:
hi! from my queue

Bolded suggestions are things that are unrankable or in some way related to the ranking criteria.

[General]
Song folder, bg, timing, etc, All check out fine~

[Lally's Normal]
01:56:558 (6) - I suggest removing a repeat and adding a circle. This is the only slider with more than one repeat on it, and it's not very predictable to me.
02:19:891 (3) - This is a really unfitting slider... Delete it and add a circle on 02:20:225?

[10nya]
Eh I see no reason for the special name. Rename to Hard?
00:37:225 (7,8,1) - I find this to be very unflowy. Try moving (1) so that the direction of the mouse is more natural, like so: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/671235
01:25:891 (7,8,1) - Unstack this so its like the other triples in this section?
Not really anything to say ~

Not much to say for this~ goodluck and nice song =w=

riffy

osu! Alumni

8,060 posts

Joined December 2010

riffy 2013-03-25T12:57:05+00:00

random mod ~~because i'm so ganteng~~

[General]

Let us know that 10nya is a [Hard] diff. write about it in creator's word.
I'dtry Slider Tick Rate 2. It feels here better o3o/

[Nyally]

This is the easiest diff, so OD/HP Drain - 1 will make it more balanced and playable!
00:28:891 (3) - try to use 1/2 slider + circle here instead? It feels like 00:29:225 - that quick piano sounds ends here and you shouldn't ignore it! le pattern
00:43:558 (3,4) - try to re-arrange this pattern a bit to make it follow music closer?
Screenshot (note:i have replaced 00:45:558 (3) - with circle because it feels like some kind of "echo"
01:11:558 (2) - use 2 circles here instead? 01:11:558 - 01:12:225 - these beats are more playable if you put circles on them.
01:33:225 (3) - slider start here feels kinda..off. Instrumental sound starts at 01:32:891 - so, I think you should re-arrange your pattern a bit.
what I'm talking 'bout
01:52:225 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - nazi - this combo feels too long, check it out! I'm sure you've missed a new cmbo somewhere
01:58:225 (1,4) - why 2/1 sliders here but 1/1 sliders at 02:02:891 (1,3)? I'm pretty sure you should use 1/1 sliders at 01:58:225 (1,4)! Clap in the middle of a slider is kinda "weird" for beginners.

Very neat diff with cute flow and awesome hitsounds.

[10nya]

00:28:891 (6) - it's a prefect place for a 1/8 slider but since this diff is calm I've got another variant for you. example 1 (1/8 slider) or [url]example 2 (1/4 slider)[/url]
00:36:225 (5) - nazi - this part doesn't feels jumpy at all. What's more it doesn't fit with your regular jumps. So, how about keeping regular spacing here?
00:53:224 (5,6,7,1) - nazi - this pattern is quite confusing because 00:53:224 (5,6) - doesn't feels jumpy at all. Try to stack 00:53:224 (5,6) - and place jump between 00:53:558 (6,7,1) . example which explains better than I do
01:05:224 (5,6,7) - you ad jump on previous similar pattern, didn't you? Do the same here, jump will perfectly fit here!
01:11:225 - try to place here a circle? It will fit with drum(or whatever it is) sound perfectly! What's more it will make your rhyth a bit more consistent
01:33:891 (4,1) - normally, you don't use this kind of flow. So, I guess you wanted a jump here, didn't you? jump looks cute here, anyway
01:47:058 (8,9,10) - since you reduce voluyme here, replacing them with a slider would be a good idea! example

~~~~~~~~~~~
Great job. I really like that map, so here's your Star!

~

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-26T09:11:54+00:00

-Bakari- wrote:
random mod ~~because i'm so ganteng~~ yes bakari you're so ganteng and moe ;;w;;

[General]
Let us know that 10nya is a [Hard] diff. write about it in creator's word. ah ok lol
I'dtry Slider Tick Rate 2. It feels here better o3o/ it wont fit for me Dx
[10nya]
00:28:891 (6) - it's a prefect place for a 1/8 slider but since this diff is calm I've got another variant for you. example 1 (1/8 slider) or [url]example 2 (1/4 slider)[/url] tough this part is calming ._. no change sorry T^T
00:36:225 (5) - nazi - this part doesn't feels jumpy at all. What's more it doesn't fit with your regular jumps. So, how about keeping regular spacing here?yeah, somehow changed
00:53:224 (5,6,7,1) - nazi - this pattern is quite confusing because 00:53:224 (5,6) - doesn't feels jumpy at all. Try to stack 00:53:224 (5,6) - and place jump between 00:53:558 (6,7,1) . example which explains better than I do I want to make jump at here because of the piano sound somehow fixed something in this part tough thanks for reminding!
01:05:224 (5,6,7) - you ad jump on previous similar pattern, didn't you? Do the same here, jump will perfectly fit here! how can I didn't realize this orz fixed!
01:11:225 - try to place here a circle? It will fit with drum(or whatever it is) sound perfectly! What's more it will make your rhyth a bit more consistent yes :3
01:33:891 (4,1) - normally, you don't use this kind of flow. So, I guess you wanted a jump here, didn't you? jump looks cute here, anyway tks for the cute sugestion :3 fixd
01:47:058 (8,9,10) - since you reduce voluyme here, replacing them with a slider would be a good idea! example sorry I want to keep current pattern ;;w;;
~~~~~~~~~~~
Great job. I really like that map, so here's your Star! ~

bakari thanks for the mods and star >w<)/

Arnold0

1,675 posts

Joined February 2012

Arnold0 2013-03-26T19:06:15+00:00

I wanted to mod but the map is too good for me >.<

In hard :
01:27:891 - Add a note for the little sound in the music ?

I hope you'll get this ranked :3

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-26T20:11:26+00:00

Xinely

Xinely wrote:
Hi lally-nya o3o
from pm in game ~
HI C:
[Lally :3]
00:32:558 (3) - x:324 y:100 ok o3o
00:43:558 (3) - 1 grid down? true
00:45:558 (5) - make curved as 00:44:891 (4) - better imo changed a bit
00:48:224 (4) - 2 grid right and 1 grid down to one line diagonal changed a bit
00:49:558 (1,2) - swap NC? i prefer not
01:07:224 (2) - 1 grid right? ok
01:13:558 (4) - move 1 grid left to avoid almost little overlap? here not
01:36:891 (1) - x:136 y:288 to one line diagonal? if follow this don't forget fix spacing after this note i prefer to do not changes here
01:37:391 - give soft-sliderslide2 ?
01:58:725 - ^
02:14:725 - ^
02:16:058 - ^
02:00:891 (4) - ^didn't get really well this 5 points
01:52:225 (1,2) - swap NC? no because of violin change
02:08:225 (1,2) -^-^

Makar

Makar wrote:
hi! from my queue

[Lally's Normal]
01:56:558 (6) - I suggest removing a repeat and adding a circle. This is the only slider with more than one repeat on it, and it's not very predictable to me. already fixed on prev mod
02:19:891 (3) - This is a really unfitting slider... Delete it and add a circle on 02:20:225? hmm dunno about this will think about

-Moeri-

-Bakari- wrote:
random mod ~~because i'm so ganteng~~

[Nyally]
This is the easiest diff, so OD/HP Drain - 1 will make it more balanced and playable! it's a normal baka so actual settings are good o3o
00:28:891 (3) - try to use 1/2 slider + circle here instead? It feels like 00:29:225 - that quick piano sounds ends here and you shouldn't ignore it! le pattern this would be a cute pattern but this pattern id i change this slider to 1/2 slider it will become harder as i wanted to do it
00:43:558 (3,4) - try to re-arrange this pattern a bit to make it follow music closer? i was following the bas here not the piano
01:11:558 (2) - use 2 circles here instead? 01:11:558 - 01:12:225 - these beats are more playable if you put circles on them. i preferr to keep it like now because i was following a bit the violin here
01:33:225 (3) - slider start here feels kinda..off. Instrumental sound starts at 01:32:891 - so, I think you should re-arrange your pattern a bit. not really sure about this will think about
01:52:225 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - nazi - this combo feels too long, check it out! I'm sure you've missed a new cmbo somewhere ups done
01:58:225 (1,4) - why 2/1 sliders here but 1/1 sliders at 02:02:891 (1,3)? I'm pretty sure you should use 1/1 sliders at 01:58:225 (1,4)! Clap in the middle of a slider is kinda "weird" for beginners. i like to change sometimes not alway the same 1/2 or 1/1 pattern prefer sometimes to do 2/1 and then 1/2 or 1/1 and not using always the same rhythm to change a bit

Very neat diff with cute flow and awesome hitsounds.

Ty Moeri o3o <3

ty for modding all \:D/

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: CD 1 06 Shinonomegiku.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 86225
Countdown: 0
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 0

[Editor]
DistanceSpacing: 1
BeatDivisor: 4
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:Shinonomegiku
TitleUnicode:東雲菊
Artist:BURTON
ArtistUnicode:BURTON
Creator:- t e n n y a -
Version:Lally
Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
Tags:palette Lally original soundtrack ost visual novel eroge
BeatmapID:226861
BeatmapSetID:79207

[Difficulty]
HPDrainRate:4
CircleSize:3
OverallDifficulty:4
ApproachRate:4
SliderMultiplier:1.2
SliderTickRate:1

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//Background and Video events
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//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
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10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-27T09:09:41+00:00

@Arnold0 : thanks for the view but I won't change that part >u<;

updated~!

Andrea

Beatmap Nominator

16,650 posts

Joined August 2008

Andrea 2013-03-28T22:18:04+00:00

~General~

Please specify the kind of difficulty and don't add only the guest mapper name, it's confusing.

~Lally~

Settings are too high for this kind of difficulty, try to reduce OD and HP by 1 tick at least.

01:57:558 (3,4,1) - Don't stack these notes together, they might be confusing to read for beginners since this is the easiest difficulty of the mapset, try to find a way to fix this.
02:00:225 (2,3,4) - Same here for the same reason as explained above, space them normally please.
02:24:891 (3) - Try to place this circle at the center with respacing the whole pattern, for a better ending.

~10nya~

00:29:225 (7,8,9) - Space them straight instead of curved? They don't look so good to me right now.
01:16:224 (4,5,6) - I don't like how you've spaced these notes together, they don't look so good and feels random. Try to make them like this.
SPOILER
01:40:891 (7) - New combo due to the new stanza and music change.
01:42:225 (1) - Remove this new combo from here afterwards then.
01:46:558 (5) - New combo due to the spacing change and also music change.
01:47:058 (8) - I can't hear this note at all, increase the volume a bit please.
02:20:891 (3) - This slider is touching the HP Bar, try to move it down a bit to fix this problem.

Good map ^^

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-03-29T00:20:46+00:00

No changes for me since i dont wanna reduce HP and OD because is a Normal not a Easy diff, stacks are not a big problem they are simple,and i don't wanna chenge the patten because i don't wanna have a obv finish in my diff like a circle in the middle i prefer to have something different how i said before in other mods :3 ty anyway <3

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-03-29T02:22:29+00:00

Andrea wrote:
~General~
Please specify the kind of difficulty and don't add only the guest mapper name, it's confusing.
nah the star rating should be show what's the diff's difficulty and added on creator words too ovo;
~10nya~
00:29:225 (7,8,9) - Space them straight instead of curved? They don't look so good to me right now. ah ok!
01:16:224 (4,5,6) - I don't like how you've spaced these notes together, they don't look so good and feels random. Try to make them like this.
SPOILER
ah fixed
01:40:891 (7) - New combo due to the new stanza and music change.
01:42:225 (1) - Remove this new combo from here afterwards then.
01:46:558 (5) - New combo due to the spacing change and also music change. all done
01:47:058 (8) - I can't hear this note at all, increase the volume a bit please. increased 10%
02:20:891 (3) - This slider is touching the HP Bar, try to move it down a bit to fix this problem. changed into circles anyway
Good map ^^

thanks for the mod Andrea~! updated

Alarido

1,744 posts

Joined September 2012

Alarido 2013-04-04T00:44:48+00:00

From my Queue! Let's go...

Don't kudosu this post! I'll explain why:

Your map is so perfect *_* I took a time to check it at all and everything is in their right place: hitsounds, combos, patterns and so on. I can't tell you about your map but you should seriously call a MAT/BAT. They'll chcek it so they can point anything I can't catch this time... and they may Bubble this (:

GOOD LUCK 4 Rank \^^/ The song I liked too

and both diffs play well --- see my replay here ---> http://www.mediafire.com/download.php?6q7wu60hrl4u0u5

Att.

P.S.: Probably some MAT/BAT or another people will ask you for adding +1 diff, but I think it's not necessary.

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-04-08T06:49:14+00:00

cFiszpan wrote:
P.S.: Probably some MAT/BAT or another people will ask you for adding +1 diff, but I think it's not necessary.

I don't think is necessary since the normal is very easy and adding a extra easy will be like to have 2 easy diffs and hard is really simple too, for this song i don't think more diffs are neded imo \:3\

popner

osu! Alumni

2,407 posts

Joined March 2011

popner 2013-04-08T17:53:22+00:00

From my judge queue.

[10nya]
00:26:225 (1) - does this slider shape makes much sense? For me, I would rather like to see some blanket like this:

SPOILER

00:30:225 (1,2) - the blanket here looks not that good.. To make consistent of spacing, you can try to increase the spacing here. example:

SPOILER

00:34:225 (1,2,3,4) - suggestion on note arrangement: (I lowered the approach rate to make it clearer)

SPOILER

00:38:225 (1,3) - for same reason as 00:30:225 (1,2), it is better to make a stack here:

SPOILER

or

SPOILER

00:58:224 (1) - move to 232,320? So 00:58:891 (2) can fit 00:58:224 (1) better. If you apply this, you need to move 00:59:891 (3) too.
01:00:225 (4) - same as above.
01:05:224 (5,6,7,1) - make a diamond out of them?
01:18:225 (1) - the slider can be curved to fit head of 01:17:558 (6) better, like:

SPOILER

01:36:225 (4,5,1,2,3) - really weird flow. My suggestion is, first make a diamond for 01:34:225 (1,2,3,4):

SPOILER

Then make a direction change to start new flow on 01:36:891 (1):

SPOILER

Thus the movement between 01:36:891 (1,2,3) is straight.
Code for this part (only 01:36:225 (4,5,1) need to be changed)

272,48,96225,2,0,P|228:60|172:52,1,85,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
144,40,96725,1,8,0:0:0:0:
108,12,96891,6,0,L|112:192,1,170,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

02:06:891 (2,3,4,5,6) - inconsistent spacing.
02:24:891 (5) - moving the note to right side provide a better flow:

SPOILER

[Lally]
00:34:891 (1) - make same bending as 00:32:891 (4)?

SPOILER

00:44:891 (4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2) - pattern suggestion on this section:

SPOILER

^ If you consider this seriously you will know how to improved the diff. Now I just see too much random stuffs(or moving in small rounds) in the flow and the diff still have rooms to get improved.

Call me back later.

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-04-10T06:52:13+00:00

popner wrote:
From my judge queue.

[10nya]
00:26:225 (1) - does this slider shape makes much sense? For me, I would rather like to see some blanket like this:
SPOILER
done
00:30:225 (1,2) - the blanket here looks not that good.. To make consistent of spacing, you can try to increase the spacing here. example:
SPOILER
somehow fixed
00:34:225 (1,2,3,4) - suggestion on note arrangement: (I lowered the approach rate to make it clearer)
SPOILER
fixed
00:38:225 (1,3) - for same reason as 00:30:225 (1,2), it is better to make a stack here:
SPOILER
or
SPOILER
did the 2nd one
00:58:224 (1) - move to 232,320? So 00:58:891 (2) can fit 00:58:224 (1) better. If you apply this, you need to move 00:59:891 (3) too.
01:00:225 (4) - same as above. 1grid to left done
01:05:224 (5,6,7,1) - make a diamond out of them? changed pattern
01:18:225 (1) - the slider can be curved to fit head of 01:17:558 (6) better, like:
SPOILER
done~
01:36:225 (4,5,1,2,3) - really weird flow. My suggestion is, first make a diamond for 01:34:225 (1,2,3,4):
SPOILER
Then make a direction change to start new flow on 01:36:891 (1):
SPOILER
Thus the movement between 01:36:891 (1,2,3) is straight.
Code for this part (only 01:36:225 (4,5,1) need to be changed)
272,48,96225,2,0,P|228:60|172:52,1,85,8|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
144,40,96725,1,8,0:0:0:0:
108,12,96891,6,0,L|112:192,1,170,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
thanks you
02:06:891 (2,3,4,5,6) - inconsistent spacing. fixed into 1.66 ds
02:24:891 (5) - moving the note to right side provide a better flow:
SPOILER
ctrl+h -ed

^ If you consider this seriously you will know how to improved the diff. Now I just see too much random stuffs(or moving in small rounds) in the flow and the diff still have rooms to get improved.

Call me back later.

thanks popner >w<

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-04-12T06:46:11+00:00

popner wrote:
From my judge queue.

[Lally]
00:34:891 (1) - make same bending as 00:32:891 (4)? kay
SPOILER
00:44:891 (4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2) - pattern suggestion on this section:
SPOILER
SPOILER
SPOILER
^ If you consider this seriously you will know how to improved the diff. Now I just see too much random stuffs(or moving in small rounds) in the flow and the diff still have rooms to get improved.
i prefer here to follow my flow style: slider 00:44:891 (4,5) - are to traight for my opinion i wanna have softer form and same about the form that you give to 00:47:558 (2,3,4) - i prefer to have softer forms how i did in all the map and not create a straight flow here

fixed some sliders by my own \:3/ ty for modding

le fix o3o

osu file format v12

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392,48,43558,2,0,P|320:28|272:56,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
196,128,44891,2,0,P|164:160|152:180,1,60
144,232,45558,2,0,P|160:272|176:296,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
208,332,46224,6,0,P|268:360|324:336,1,120,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
400,260,47558,1,8,0:0:0:0:
440,216,47891,1,2,0:0:0:0:
468,164,48224,2,0,P|484:108|484:92,2,60,2|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
368,224,49558,6,0,P|320:256|304:264,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
264,284,50224,2,0,P|208:304|148:264,1,120,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
112,168,51558,2,0,P|108:128|180:76,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,152,52891,1,0,0:0:0:0:
350,76,53558,2,0,P|404:128|400:168,1,120,8|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
332,268,54891,6,0,P|296:308|280:316,1,60,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
240,340,55558,2,0,P|164:368|116:340,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
28,292,56891,2,0,P|80:252|80:192,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
4,112,58224,6,0,P|72:80|124:88,1,120,2|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
200,168,59558,2,0,P|244:212|316:212,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
416,192,60891,2,0,P|452:160|464:136,1,60
484,96,61558,2,0,P|456:40|396:32,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
340,131,62891,6,0,B|346:155|331:187|331:187|314:220|321:247,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,352,64224,1,2,0:0:0:0:
190,247,64891,2,0,B|198:220|181:187|181:187|166:155|172:131,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
88,52,66224,6,0,P|40:52|28:128,1,120,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
36,172,67224,1,0,0:0:0:0:
64,224,67558,2,0,P|108:272|180:260,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
272,232,68891,2,0,P|328:208|344:200,1,60,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
380,184,69558,2,0,P|416:156|432:132,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
436,84,70224,6,0,P|400:40|332:60,1,120,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
288,156,71558,2,0,P|244:228|192:232,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
105,180,72891,1,0,0:0:0:0:
149,68,73558,2,0,P|197:96|205:164,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
176,272,74891,6,0,P|148:308|128:320,1,60
80,340,75558,2,0,P|44:336|24:256,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
56,152,76891,1,0,0:0:0:0:
140,68,77558,2,0,L|208:60,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
260,64,78225,6,0,P|308:80|348:156,1,120
360,196,79225,2,0,P|364:236|352:272,1,60,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
260,320,80225,2,0,P|216:332|192:332,1,60
144,328,80891,2,0,P|72:308|52:244,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
24,156,82225,6,0,L|4:100,2,60
124,224,83558,1,8,0:0:0:0:
220,296,84225,2,0,L|240:352,2,60
200,240,85225,1,8,0:0:0:0:
196,180,85558,2,0,P|196:136|208:108,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
232,72,86225,6,0,P|284:36|352:52,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
388,76,87225,2,0,P|424:108|432:124,1,60
464,232,88225,2,0,P|448:276|432:296,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
408,336,88891,2,0,P|360:368|300:348,2,120,0|8|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
464,232,90891,6,0,L|512:176,2,60,8|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
360,292,92225,2,0,P|296:320|248:296,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
212,260,93225,2,0,P|180:228|176:192,1,60,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
144,100,94225,2,0,P|204:48|256:60,2,120,0|8|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
64,192,96225,1,8,0:0:0:0:
96,244,96558,1,8,0:0:0:0:
146,279,96891,6,0,B|202:343|258:151|310:343|370:279,1,240,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
440,188,98891,2,0,L|476:124,2,60,8|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
364,280,100225,2,0,P|304:228|316:180,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
344,80,101558,6,0,L|384:28,2,60,8|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
264,168,102891,2,0,P|224:224|160:228,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
68,180,104225,2,0,P|108:124|172:120,1,120,8|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,192,105058,12,8,106891,0:0:0:0:
324,204,107558,6,0,B|380:176|380:176|436:176|452:148,2,120,4|8|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,300,109558,2,0,L|256:364,2,60,8|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
188,204,110891,2,0,B|132:176|132:176|76:176|60:148,1,120,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
116,52,112225,6,0,P|148:56|180:72,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
216,108,112891,2,0,P|260:156|328:164,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
380,68,114225,2,0,P|440:52|484:92,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
504,140,115225,1,0,0:0:0:0:
508,200,115558,6,0,P|472:264|420:272,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
372,272,116558,2,0,P|328:264|312:256,1,60
252,152,117558,1,8,0:0:0:0:
252,152,117891,1,0,0:0:0:0:
252,152,118225,6,0,P|192:108|104:228,1,240,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
108,328,120225,1,8,0:0:0:0:
108,328,120558,1,0,0:0:0:0:
108,328,120891,2,0,P|172:336|174:198,1,240
84,128,122891,6,0,P|48:88|64:24,2,120,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
184,196,124891,1,0,0:0:0:0:
292,248,125558,2,0,P|328:288|312:352,2,120,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
184,196,127558,1,0,0:0:0:0:
228,84,128225,6,0,P|268:56|296:52,1,60
336,44,128891,2,0,P|376:48|428:124,1,120,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
440,224,130225,2,0,P|400:292|344:308,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
288,216,131558,6,0,P|256:164|184:136,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
84,124,132891,2,0,P|52:184|52:244,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
160,284,134225,6,0,B|292:260|344:208|324:148|256:92|188:148|168:208|220:260|356:284,1,480,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
472,312,137558,6,0,L|496:256,1,60,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
500,196,138225,2,0,P|488:148|424:92,2,120,0|8|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
496,256,139891,2,0,L|472:312,1,60,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
364,360,140891,1,0,0:0:0:0:
304,256,141558,6,0,P|272:200|208:200,2,120,8|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
204,320,143558,2,0,P|156:348|136:352,2,60,0|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
264,216,144891,1,4,0:0:0:0:
256,192,145225,12,2,148891,0:0:0:0:

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-04-12T10:24:24+00:00

updated also added some tags

waiting for a few mods I'm not very confident with my diff orz;;;;

Tari

osu! Alumni

1,671 posts

Joined July 2012

Tari 2013-04-13T04:24:47+00:00

This map is already pretty good , some minor changes are possible though.

[General]

Your background isn't properly centered, please go to file -> and open the .osu notepad and then copy and paste this code into your Events section in .osu file in notepad so you can fix this.

[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BGi.jpg",0,0
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255

Please do this across all diffs

You should add t_e_n_n_y_a and tennya to tags I don't think people will be able to search your names with that kind of lettering, doing this will make it easier and more searchable.

[Lally]

00:28:891 (3) - Add a whistle to the start? goes well with the harp sound o3o
00:35:891 (2) - This part has so many silent and quiet beats , I think notes on red ticks feel unfitting for such parts , You should just remove it and add more complex rhythms or more beats on more strong points of the music
00:49:558 (1,2) - Please find a more fitting way to do this , the two notes don't exactly follow the beats in the song as initially intended , yet those two notes can be "isolated" by making this whole thing a separate combo altogether.
00:51:558 (3) - Symmetry patterns and patterns changes in generally should be a different combo , thus adding a new combo here would be a good idea (New symmetry pattern from previous) oh I almost forget , its similar to combo's like these 01:02:891 (1) -
01:11:558 (2) - Since this is a strong instrumental point , adding a whistle to the end of the slider is best , the following hitsounds changes should be only applied if you apply this one
01:13:558 (4) - Same as above, to the end of slider
01:15:558 (2) - ^
01:18:225 (1) - ^ you can possible switch back and forth from these.
01:26:225 (1) - I'd rather you just reverse this to make the rhythm more simply , this is the easiest diff in the mapset , so doing so will not hurt the map and spread much :<
01:39:891 - Yeah , note feels really good here , or did you want a break from adding notes to red ticks because it seems to fit pretty well with the flow if you add the note here
01:50:558 - Ahhh , only do this if you change the above suggestion.
02:02:891 (1) - Yet when there places you can actually put notes in the red ticks and they fit really good with the beats you don't do so :<
02:17:558 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Add at least one whistle in this part

[10nya]

00:33:558 (6) - Rhythm can be better in this , but seriously , your missing a beat on the blue tick , and the slider velocity change doesn't really help with that ( It makes flow worst tbh)
00:36:891 (6) - This really needs to be centered in the middle in order for this to be fully symmetrical , if you want more specification than move it to x:256 y:60
00:39:558 (3) - I'd rather you not stack notes like this , It makes the map much more easier than it already is , here a position you can put the note : http://puu.sh/2z3Gf (x:108 y:292)
01:13:558 (7) - If you do the above , It highly recommended you do this as well
00:44:224 (3) - I'd suggest you start this slider at the blue tick and add a note at this slider's current position , it'll fit with the vibrating notes and beats better ,
00:47:224 (2) - The jump to the next note should be increased slightly , maybe 1.70~1.80 DS would work nice? current position seems very tiny of a jump unlike the previous jump you made in the map here : 00:37:225 (7) -
01:03:224 (2) - Would be better to just change position of this , the previous slider note is already shaped so that some note can possibly blanket it , Here a visual of what I mean : http://puu.sh/2z3SY
01:24:558 (4,5) - Try this : http://puu.sh/2z3Wu It seems to flow just slightly better than your previous placement
01:41:891 (2) - As already explained above , Making a jump here feels really good and if you did the about position change ( I mean this one : 01:03:224 (2) -) Then you should really do this , Here another visual : http://puu.sh/2z41V
01:46:558 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - Again , this should be symmetrical as well , its already close to being so , making it symmetrical won't affect much , but it will polish this diff more
02:07:891 (4,5,6,7,8) - Err , something feels really strange here , but I can't exactly put my finger on the issue , this seems to fit the drums of the music really well btw
02:15:891 (4) - I'd agree whistles sound nice here :<
02:18:225 (4) - Do this only if you do the above,
02:24:558 (4,5) - Yeah , I guess this doesn't need to be symmetry , Seems to be abuse (but its fine if you do make it symmetrical)

Nice Job <3

Good Luck on this!

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-04-13T05:15:18+00:00

Tari wrote:
This map is already pretty good , some minor changes are possible though.

[General]
Your background isn't properly centered, please go to file -> and open the .osu notepad and then copy and paste this code into your Events section in .osu file in notepad so you can fix this.
[Events]
//Background and Video events
0,0,"BGi.jpg",0,0
//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
//Background Colour Transformations
3,100,163,162,255
Please do this across all diffs done ^q^
You should add t_e_n_n_y_a and tennya to tags I don't think people will be able to search your names with that kind of lettering, doing this will make it easier and more searchable. no need to wrote my own username on my own map right? =v= let's see other people thinks~
[10nya]

00:33:558 (6) - Rhythm can be better in this , but seriously , your missing a beat on the blue tick , and the slider velocity change doesn't really help with that ( It makes flow worst tbh) i'll keep current
00:36:891 (6) - This really needs to be centered in the middle in order for this to be fully symmetrical , if you want more specification than move it to x:256 y:60 done
00:39:558 (3) - I'd rather you not stack notes like this , It makes the map much more easier than it already is , here a position you can put the note : http://puu.sh/2z3Gf (x:108 y:292) done
01:13:558 (7) - If you do the above , It highly recommended you do this as well i'll keep current
00:44:224 (3) - I'd suggest you start this slider at the blue tick and add a note at this slider's current position , it'll fit with the vibrating notes and beats better , i want to make this part relaxing orz
00:47:224 (2) - The jump to the next note should be increased slightly , maybe 1.70~1.80 DS would work nice? current position seems very tiny of a jump unlike the previous jump you made in the map here : 00:37:225 (7) - unstacked
01:03:224 (2) - Would be better to just change position of this , the previous slider note is already shaped so that some note can possibly blanket it , Here a visual of what I mean : http://puu.sh/2z3SY great idea~!
01:24:558 (4,5) - Try this : http://puu.sh/2z3Wu It seems to flow just slightly better than your previous placement ah ok
01:41:891 (2) - As already explained above , Making a jump here feels really good and if you did the about position change ( I mean this one : 01:03:224 (2) -) Then you should really do this , Here another visual : http://puu.sh/2z41V keep current, this part has a flow
01:46:558 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - Again , this should be symmetrical as well , its already close to being so , making it symmetrical won't affect much , but it will polish this diff more current one is symmetric tough
02:07:891 (4,5,6,7,8) - Err , something feels really strange here , but I can't exactly put my finger on the issue , this seems to fit the drums of the music really well btw those circles fit the music :3
02:15:891 (4) - I'd agree whistles sound nice here :< i don't want whistle at these part :3 it not fit imo ><
02:18:225 (4) - Do this only if you do the above, ^
02:24:558 (4,5) - Yeah , I guess this doesn't need to be symmetry , Seems to be abuse (but its fine if you do make it symmetrical) somehow fixed
Nice Job <3

Good Luck on this!

thank you for the mod

<3

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-04-15T23:44:33+00:00

- t e n n y a - wrote:
Tari wrote:
[General]

You should add t_e_n_n_y_a and tennya to tags I don't think people will be able to search your names with that kind of lettering, doing this will make it easier and more searchable. no need to wrote my own username on my own map right? =v= let's see other people thinks~

since is the mapper name is not neded to be in tags imo

00:28:891 (3) - Add a whistle to the start? goes well with the harp sound o3o it don't follow my hitsound pattern
00:35:891 (2) - This part has so many silent and quiet beats , I think notes on red ticks feel unfitting for such parts , You should just remove it and add more complex rhythms or more beats on more strong points of the music i prefer to keep it
00:49:558 (1,2) - Please find a more fitting way to do this , the two notes don't exactly follow the beats in the song as initially intended , yet those two notes can be "isolated" by making this whole thing a separate combo altogether. i prefer to use s simple way as adding circles here
00:51:558 (3) - Symmetry patterns and patterns changes in generally should be a different combo , thus adding a new combo here would be a good idea (New symmetry pattern from previous) oh I almost forget , its similar to combo's like these 01:02:891 (1) - i don't think a new combo is missing there i follow a bit the music change with my combos and there i think is not neded to add one.
01:11:558 (2) - Since this is a strong instrumental point , adding a whistle to the end of the slider is best , the following hitsounds changes should be only applied if you apply this one >.< i don't like it so much here
01:13:558 (4) - Same as above, to the end of slider-^
01:15:558 (2) - ^ -^
01:18:225 (1) - ^ you can possible switch back and forth from these.-^
01:26:225 (1) - I'd rather you just reverse this to make the rhythm more simply , this is the easiest diff in the mapset , so doing so will not hurt the map and spread much :< i don't think is neded here o.o
01:39:891 - Yeah , note feels really good here , or did you want a break from adding notes to red ticks because it seems to fit pretty well with the flow if you add the note here i wanna keep it simpler here
01:50:558 - Ahhh , only do this if you change the above suggestion. same about here
02:02:891 (1) - Yet when there places you can actually put notes in the red ticks and they fit really good with the beats you don't do so :< i prefer to have simpler rhythm here don't wanna mahe it harder
02:17:558 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Add at least one whistle in this part i don't think they fit in this part >.<

sorry for refusing everything but the hitsound change imo are not neded and in some part i don't wanna make rhythm harder >u<

Gloria Guard

2,273 posts

Joined May 2011

Gloria Guard 2013-04-16T05:51:04+00:00

Hi - t e n n y a - (:3 」_)=3

From In-game PM

Sorry.. i'm late modding this map here.. ._.

[General]

Fine

[Lally's Normal]

00:32:225 (2,3,4) hmm.. i think this beat awkward... your change this beat? -> http://puu.sh/2B2NA
01:13:558 (3,4) hmm.. this is pattern shape blanket here
01:20:225 (3,4) My personal opinion, This beat in front of 01:18:225 (1,2) to be the same as that about?. http://puu.sh/2B2St
I think it should be the same.
01:33:225 (3) I think moving this slider 01:33:891 Sound can be heard here and here move the tempo can be better ..
01:53:891 add note? In this section, you will hear a sound.
02:02:891 (1) hmm.. Are willing to change your beats differently? I think it is awkward beat.
-> http://puu.sh/2B322 change?
02:19:891 (3) remove 1/2 slider.. this beat really awkward... and 02:20:225 add note
02:25:225 (1) This is spin move 02:25:058 here

[10nya]

00:22:992 (1,2,3) hmm... 2 note move x:256 y:64 and this pattern change please -> http://puu.sh/2B387
00:26:891 (1,2,3) I think this pattern blanket please -> http://puu.sh/2B39L
00:39:891 (2,3,4,5,6) hmm... i think this pattern really awkward... really change please -> http://puu.sh/2B3cr
01:30:558 (3,4,5,6) hmm.. I think this is pattern shape here -> http://puu.sh/2B3ig < this recommend
01:55:891 (4,1,2) This change to the smooth flow -> http://puu.sh/2B3kN

Really nice song ;w;
i'm really like song !! GO GO Rank !!!

10nya

2,746 posts

Joined February 2011

Topic Starter

10nya 2013-04-16T09:11:59+00:00

Gloria Guard wrote:
Hi - t e n n y a - (:3 」_)=3

From In-game PM

Sorry.. i'm late modding this map here.. ._.

not a big problem~ thanks for modding <3

[General]

Fine

[10nya]

00:22:992 (1,2,3) hmm... 2 note move x:256 y:64 and this pattern change please -> http://puu.sh/2B387 ok
00:26:891 (1,2,3) I think this pattern blanket please -> http://puu.sh/2B39L stacked
00:39:891 (2,3,4,5,6) hmm... i think this pattern really awkward... really change please -> http://puu.sh/2B3cr i heard sound at 00:40:558 so no change >_<
01:30:558 (3,4,5,6) hmm.. I think this is pattern shape here -> http://puu.sh/2B3ig < this recommend yeah i feel awkward here too, changed
01:55:891 (4,1,2) This change to the smooth flow -> http://puu.sh/2B3kN

Really nice song ;w;
i'm really like song !! GO GO Rank !!!

thanks for the mod <3

Lally

3,177 posts

Joined December 2011

Lally 2013-04-16T14:30:43+00:00

Gloria Guard wrote:
[Lally's Normal]

00:32:225 (2,3,4) hmm.. i think this beat awkward... your change this beat? -> http://puu.sh/2B2NA i follow the piano in this part so no changes here
01:13:558 (3,4) hmm.. this is pattern shape blanket here it was not supposed to be a blanket there but if you can see is a blanket between 01:13:558 (2,4) -
01:20:225 (3,4) My personal opinion, This beat in front of 01:18:225 (1,2) to be the same as that about?. http://puu.sh/2B2St
I think it should be the same.from 01:18:225 (1) - i follow the fioline so if you listen good you will that at every violin change i start a slider
01:33:225 (3) I think moving this slider 01:33:891 Sound can be heard here and here move the tempo can be better .. i agree here
01:53:891 add note? In this section, you will hear a sound. yap i can hear thet there is bass sound but atm unsure of adding or not because it will make the patten more harder :/
02:02:891 (1) hmm.. Are willing to change your beats differently? I think it is awkward beat.
-> http://puu.sh/2B322 change? changed a bit here
02:19:891 (3) remove 1/2 slider.. this beat really awkward... and 02:20:225 add note i prefer to having a slider here
02:25:225 (1) This is spin move 02:25:058 here no since is a easier diff and it will be to difficulto for beginners to catch all the spinn good after the circle, even if the spinner is long

Ty for modding

le fix :3

osu file format v12

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Title:Shinonomegiku
TitleUnicode:東雲菊
Artist:BURTON
ArtistUnicode:BURTON
Creator:- t e n n y a -
Version:Lally
Source:Mashiro-iro Symphony -Love is pure white-
Tags:palette Lally original soundtrack ost visual novel eroge ましろ色シンフォニー mashifoni
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10nya 2013-04-17T06:33:50+00:00

updated, also added clap on 01:33:558 at lally onechan's diff xD sorry for the change but i think you forgot clap there owo;

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