Film11 wrote:

Timing and offset look ok.

Great work on the art, I especially like the spinner. One small issue is that the life bar doesn't fit in the border properly. It needs to be less wide and moved so the end matches up with the border. Here's an image:
<<you are so circumspective! I will fixed it later

[Normal]
There are lots of sliders which are circular shaped that have the start and end points exactly on top of each other. This means it's hard to tell which way the slider ball is supposed to go round. Perhaps you could move the end points slightly away from the start points? In any case I certainly don't think you should have these on normal difficulty. Examples are: 00:38:08 (6), 00:59:22 (5), 01:10:89 (1) etc. The longer ones (01:46:86 (1) and 01:51:27 (1)) are especially nasty.

Another issue I have is with the hitsounds. In the chorus you've made some of the beats silent, which I don't get. It feels like to me that I'm missing them and throws me off a bit. This is a personal issue though, so I'll be interested to see what you think about it.<<I just want to march the voice, and I haven't thought about what you said, I would like to know other people's felling, OK?

Other than that Normal looks good

[Hard]
Same issues as above. Guess you could keep them if you think it makes it harder
01:34:55 (8,9) - Align these
01:39:76 (16,17) - ^

That's it! Well done so far. Starred.

pete2528 wrote:

awesome skin. i feel your map watching me

star+

JInxyjem wrote:

This map is good, you have mapping potential, as seen in your 1st map.
Also storyboarding potential.

[Normal]
00:49:28 (3) - Feels like this beat there for the sake of being there...<<aah...I think it's OK
01:46:86 (1) - This slider is unrankable as we do not know where the slider moves, left or right. Move the slider start further away from the slider end.<<slider velocity is low, it doesn't hard to recongnize the move side
01:51:27 (1) - ^

[Hard]
00:28:14 (9) - This slider is unrankable as we do not know where the slider moves, left or right. Move the slider start further away from the slider end.<<fixed
00:59:22 (7) - ^<<fixed
01:10:89 (1) - This is not as bad, but still ^fixed
01:44:02 (8) - ^<<this one is OK
01:46:86 (1) - ^
01:51:27 (1) - ^
02:08:63 (6) - ^

(^ means same error as above)

Starred.

EDIT: 400 post. Yay me!

Zekira wrote:

Got a minor timing issue here, eh?

BPM: 95.1
Offset: 15354, resnap. This way it will sound better in the Timing tab and I adjusted it accordingly, yielding 15354.

tieff wrote:

Wow, good work!
I mod your map with Zekira's timing.

[Normal]
00:15:35 (1) - 00:49:73 (4) - Use normal hitsounds here?<<I think it's OK
00:19:77 (2) - Finish on start.<<fixed, you are awesome to have such a advice
00:33:01 (4) - New combo. Finish.<<fixed
00:43:11 (2) - New combo, finish on start.<<fixed
00:51:00 (2) - Whistle on end.<<fixed
00:51:94 (4) - Whistle on start.
00:52:57 (5) - Whistle.
00:52:89 (6) - Whistle on end.
01:12:13 (3) - Super-nazi. Up a bit.
01:13:39 (4) - New combo+finish.<<fixed
01:36:74 (2) - Whistle.
01:37:05 (3) - ^ on end.
01:38:00 (5) - ^ on start.
02:27:84 (2,4) - Whistles.

[Hard]
00:13:14 (2,3) - Spacing?<<fixed
00:33:01 (7) - New combo+finish.<<fixed all
00:43:11 (2) - ^
01:13:39 (3) - ^
01:23:49 (6) - ^

Star!

blissfulyoshi wrote:

Normal:
00:21:97 (2) - new combo for consistency
00:29:70 (1,2) and 00:39:80 (8,9) -make these 2 sets have consistent combos
02:11:44 (1) - I don't like how the repeat is not snapped to anything
I think you should remove the mini brakes such as 02:10:18 and 02:15:17 because the drain is minimum in these areas.
y is there a timing section after the spinner ends, and not right before?
^ pick some advice and fixed

Hard:
00:20:40 (1) - remove new combo for consistency<<fixed
00:29:70 (1,2) and 00:39:80 (10,11) -make these 2 sets have consistent combos
01:00:14 (1) - make it consistent with normal?
01:37:05 (1) - this new combo use in this area felt a little random since you usually kept it one long combo for the line of lyrics

Great map. Star.

kino77 wrote:

音效调大声些?不咋听得见.<<还好- -改起来也麻烦,多享受歌曲吧
[normal]


看来你mod的比较慢...我改过几次了,所以timing有点不一样...不太好理解...
00:17:90(1)-结束于00:19:18?
00:25:47(1,2,3,4,5,6)-把1去掉,把每个silder前移1/4拍,去掉6,将5延长至6的位置结束?<<其实我是在配合电吉他的双音.这样应该没问题的
00:39:20(7)-去掉?
00:45:97(2)-缩短至00:47:22,并在00:47:87出加一个reverse slider,1拍之后折返,00:49:14结束?
00:49:28(3)-移到00:49:45?
00:54:00(8)-开始于00:54:18? <<放后一拍更不合适,这个note确实有点问题
01:00:50(1)-结束于01:01:45?
01:05:85(1,2,3,4,5,)-从这开始有点乱,我直接说改完的吧...1不变,2在01:06:65 ; 3从01:06:80到01:07:43 ; 4从01:07:74到01:08:07 ; 5从01:08:37到01:09:00 ; 增加6从01:09:30到01:09:96?
02:01:37(x)-其实这里加个spinner也八错啦~结束于02:05:48?
02:16:52(1,2,3,4)-又乱老..>_<增加圈圈1在02:16:52,条条2从02:16:83到02:17:15 ; 条条3从02:17:47到02:18:08,同时去掉3结束点上的那个圈圈~
02:25:04(7,8)-把它们融合成一个条条吧~阿门...
02:31:46(1)-开始于02:31:65折返于02:31:98结束于02:32:28?
02:46:65(1)-做法同上?
02:51:37(1)-结束于02:56:90?

[hard]

00:26:25(4,5,6,7,8,9,10)-4结束于22:26:90;5移至22:27:05;6开始于00:27:19结束于00:27:68;7移至00:27:83;去掉8,9提前至8处开始;10提前至00:28:94?
00:35:72(2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9)-说时间说的快疯了,直接上拍子了...2缩短1/4拍,3,4,5,6,7,8,9全部提前1/4拍?
00:45:97(2,4)-2缩短2/1拍,并在原结束处增加一个圈圈;4同理?
00:51:04(2,3,4,5,6,7)-2缩短1/4拍;3移至原2结束处;去掉4,5,6换成开始于00:51:66的reverse slider,持续1/2拍后折返,折返2次,结束于00:52:60;7移至00:52:75;8开始于00:52:91结束于00:53:38;在00:53:54处增加一个圈圈?
01:05:83(1)-结束于01:06:14?
01:07:58(4,5)-各后移1/4拍?
01:41:95(4,5)-4后移1/4拍,去掉5?
02:31:48(1,2,3)-均后移1/4拍,02:32:43,开始于02:32:58?
02:38:58(5)-后移1/2拍,并在此处加一个圈圈?
02:46:63(1)-开始于02:46:78?
02:51:37(1)-结束于02:56:90?

gdeath wrote:

我也觉的声音有点轻。还是增加点比较好。音量低的话，你多处设置的normal&soft切换效果就小了
抱歉，没帮到什么忙。anyway its a nice map.stared~

Breeze wrote:

有些改了,不过有些我倒是举得没什么问题,总是还是谢了,辛苦了

alvisto wrote:

Hi ! A very great map, with very great skin and storyboard. I like the opening storyboard. 谢谢~话说为什么要写英文...我的英文很差的orz

These are only my opinions though. =P

Normal
2:31:473 (1) - The slide starts here seems weird, since all the other sliders are of same length. Maybe add a note 1/4 earlier ? Or just let the slider start 1/4 earlier and end at the same place. I like the 1st correction better.<<改好了,good advice
2:41:726 - 2:45827 - This set of sliders is a bit too on the left. If you play on solo mode, there will be a score leaderboard there that will obsturct the view of sliders. Maybe move these sliders slightly to the centre of the screen ?<<的确,想得很周到,thanks,fixed
2:46:458 - Same here. Maybe it sounds better with a note here, or just move the slider earlier and end at same place.
2:51:347 - Spinner on next red tick. (1/4 beat later) End spinner at 1/4 beat later too.<<改好了

Hard
00:10:937 (4) - Whistle
00:12:199 (7) - Whistle
00:13:461 (4) - Whistle<<加上这3个whistle的确听起来更好
00:14:406 (6) - Add a new timing section here. BPM use the same one (95.10). And set the hitsounds to normal. Let 00:14:880 (1.2.3.4) all have normal sounds. I think it sounds better if you only start soft at 00:25:290, because from 00:14:880 to 00:25:290, normal sounds seems to "hear" better. <<因为这个地方在OFFSET之前所以加timing不方便,我把(1.2.3)加上whistle感觉也不错
00:45:006 (4.5.6.7) - Maybe add a timing section here and let it have "normal" sound ? It sounds better. =P (EDIT : actually after I put normal sounds into 4.5.6.7, it sounds no different than before. XD So, it's your decision to make... )
00:45:637 - 1st break - I like the chorus part where you insert soft sounds between those normal sounds, but the problem is soft sound is too soft (almost silent), so it make hitting those beats unmeaningful.<<加大声音了
1:27:909 (1-6) - Put normal sounds ?<<更正了
1:41:789 (3,4,5) - Sounds really weird here... Maybe insert s slider here and let it end at next red tick, and delete the slider 4.
1:45:890 - Lengthen the slider to the next red tick.<<fixed
02:17:278 - This slider seems weird... Let it start at 1/4 earlier and end at 02:17:436<<fixed
02:35:890 (12-16) - Make this normal sounds louder ?
2:51:347 - Same in normal.

No problem in timing and placing and beats, but I think the hitsounds is too soft, and since this song heavily emphasizes on background drum sounds, maybe you can add another difficulty featuring all the drum sounds ?

Star !

谢谢你细心的mod

Lizbeth wrote:

Cool map n_n

just a couple of things

[normal]
00:17:87 (1) - end this slider at 00:19:13, i think sounds better<<I think it's OK
02:16:48 (1) - end this slider 1/4 beat earlier<<fixed
02:17:27 (2) - make this start 1/4 beat later, ending at 02:17:75
02:46:61 (1) - start this 1/4 beat later, ending at 02:47:08<<fixed

[hard]
all those inherited timing sections aren't placed right, place it just like you did in Normal, 1/4 o 1/2 beat before the notes.

other than that, pretty good map
also like the skin


thanks for your mod^___^
good job
Star

Azure_Kyte wrote:

Your map looks very good XD.

There are only a few things I can come up with, and ones with * in front are ONLY suggestions; you don't have to do these.

[Normal]
* 00:49:26 (3) - Delete this; It feels a little wierd to me being on normal.
00:53:99 (8) - Move this forward a quarter tick then shorten the slider by one degree.<<fixed
* 01:38:95 (7,8,9) - Fix spacing <<fixed
* 02:11:44 (1) - Dont reverse this and end the slider on 02:12:07. Then add a hit circle at 02:12:38.
*02:17:27 (3) - Move forward one quarter tick <<fixd

[Hard]
00:26:23 (4) - ? I can't tell what this is mapped to
00:27:02 (6) - ?^
* 00:33:65 (2,3,4) - Add the finish Hitsound on these as well.
*00:43:74 (2,3) - ^
01:07:56 (4) - I can't tell what this is mapped to
01:08:35 (5) - Move forward a quarter tick. <<fixed
*01:14:02 (2,3,4) - Add the finish hitsounds here too
*01:24:12 (2,3) - ^ (include the slider end)
01:31:37 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I can tell when to hit the beats, but it's still not rally mapped to anything in places <<(1,3,5,7)have matched the voice with normal hit sound
02:17:27 (3) - Move forward a quarter tick
02:31:47 (1) - Move Back a quarter tick <<fixed
02:32:26 - Place a beat here.
02:46:45 - Place a beat here.

All in all, a good map. Definitely starred XD

v2b wrote:

star

alvisto wrote:

我够kudosu了！帮你shoot a star !

Agent Spin Here wrote:

I like what you've done with the storyboard, but these hitcircles aren't very good tbh :/
I don't think you should use kiai.
I also don't like your use of soft hitsounds for most of the song, but that's up to you. However, you shouldn't put timing sections that change hitsounds directly on notes because if the note is hit early it'll play the wrong hitsound. <<oh,i ddn't considered about that, thanks

Normal
00:49:26 (3) - forward 1/4
00:55:73 (1) - spacing <<fixed
01:00:46 (1) - Lengthen by 2/4 and end with a normal finish <<fixed
01:18:13 (1) - This spinner's a bit out of place
01:34:84 (6) - Forward 1/4
01:46:83 (1,1) - center these <<fixed
01:56:14 (1) - end this with a normal finish <<fixed
02:51:50 (1) - wnd with a finish

Hard
Hitsounds need lots more work during the not-chorus
00:55:73 (1) - why is this stacked? <<as for distance spacing, there is no space to set it
01:31:37 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - CONFUSION <<changed
01:51:25 (1) - bring this down a bit <<fixed
01:56:14 (1) - start on the white tick <<fixed
01:56:14 (1) - end with a normal finish <<fixed
02:07:18 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Change this, it sounds and plays weirdly <<changed
02:46:61 (1) - Start it 1/4 later and make it 1/4 shorter, then add notes at 02:46:458 and 02:46:615 <<fixed
02:51:50 (1) - add a finish to this

x3ns0r wrote:

fixed combo burst

[attachment=0:e95fb]comboburst.png[/attachment:e95fb]


and a big shiny star

Symbolic wrote:

[Normal]

Please use more Normal hitsound samples instead of Soft, it sounds better imo.

00:15:35 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:17:87 (1) - ^
00:20:40 (1) - ^
00:22:92 (1) - ^ <<I thinks it's OK, there're some people said to add new combo *_* anyway, it's not the point
02:17:43 (3) - Let this slider begin 1/4 later and then let it end 1/4 earlier. <<fixed
02:31:63 (1) - ^ <<fixed
01:10:08 (1) - Remove new combo.


[Hard]


Please use more Normal hitsound samples instead of Soft, it sounds better imo.
Put the Overall Difficulty down by 1 tick.
Use 1 or 2 Slider Tick Rate <<fixed


Nice map,
Starred *

vytalibus wrote:

Call me picky, but I think the hitcircle image needs some re-centering. Especially in sliders will you notice how off it is to the center.

[Normal]
The one after 01:39:58 forgot the kiai timing, so the next one showed a kiai explosion that doesn't fit. <<Fixed
02:09:86 (6) - You don't need the break after this. <<fixed

[Hard]
01:31:53 (2) - Start point doesn't have a whistle hitsound? Is this correct? Just need a confirmation...
01:32:79 (6) - ^ <<fixed
02:14:28 (7) - You don't need the break after this. <<fixed

[Hillman's Fool]
WHERE ARE THE HITSOUNDS?!<<hit sound added

kingcobra52 wrote:

Normal

It's fine, but I noticed there weren't many hitsounds (only changing from soft to normal and back). <<hit sound added

Hard

02:17:27 (3) - Move 1/4 forward? (to go with 'love') Space accordingly. <<fixed, and hit sound added

Hillman

Increase overall difficulty 1 or 2 ticks. It's a bit easy right now. <<fixed

*star*

Gens wrote:

[Overall]
- Uuh maybe add some epic Goth combo colours? I'm just sayin'.　<<I have thought about that, and this time added

[Timing]
BPM is wrong. BPM should be 95.09, it's off at the end. It isn't really that troubling, but it still needs to be fixed before ranking. <<thanks, fixed

[Skin]
- Is the hitcircle misaligned on purpose? It is kinda distracting... Probably because I'm kinda tired, anyway.
- Make the scorebar-bg a little transparent? Some notes are abit hidden because this, ex.: [Hard], 02:30:05 (8). <<fixed

[Normal]
- Would it be too much to ask to decrease HP Drain?
01:00:46 (1) - I'd make this spinner longer if I were you. It is pretty evil for Normal. <<a slider instead

[Hard]
01:42:42 (3,4) - Spacing. Yes yes, I know, it didn't tripped me while playing, but still, looks kinda bad. <<fixed

[Hillman's Fool]
- You used almost no patterns here, which makes the map nothing more than boring. It's your choice if you want to leave it like this, but I really suggest you to use more beat patterns.
- I am listening to some places which could really use more finishes.

02:52:91 (1) - The last spinner ends abit awkward... Shorten or enlarge by 1/4. <<fixed

~ ~ ~

I am no way a fan of Evanescence or Goth music, but here ya go.
I am going to give you my star now, but please fix timing ASAP. I normally refuse to give a star because timing, but I'm feeling abit cool now.

Mafiamaster wrote:

I think Evanescence is mispelled in the tags on all difficulties. ;_; <<|o| "fool" mistakes,fixed

Hard~
01:05:83 (1) - Lengthen this slider to a 1/4 tick. fixed
01:08:35 (5) - Lengthen by a 1/4 tick I think it's OK
01:09:30 (6) - Move this forward by a 1/4 tick. ^

Hillman's a Fool~
00:33:64 (9,10) - Could you move these up some so they aren't cut off from the bottom of the screen? let me keep it ;_; and wait for a BAT's advice
00:39:79 (11,12) - I'd have to say the same thing with this as well. ^
01:22:85 (6) - New combo maybe? Fixed

Great job!!

jamesleao wrote:

What a nice map and song , the storyboard is beautiful lol
Starred!

deepsea wrote:

Inconsistent timing.(offset 15345 and 15354)

I can't check which is more accurate now, but you should coincide them to better one.>_>

Also don't forget to resnap notes.

Larto wrote:

Mods marked with a * are only suggestions based on how patterns earlier/later in your map. You don't NEED to do them, but it would be preferred.
Mods marked with a ** are only personal taste suggestions. Do them or not, it doesn't matter.

Offset: 15,363 fixed

Overall:
- 02:36:696 - New Kiai fountain here? * fixed
- Use the same hitcircle colors for every difficulty. fixed
- Place a Preview Point. How to? Go to 00:45:325, click on "Timing" in the toolbar and choose "Set Current Position as Preview". Do this on every difficulty. This makes the song start from the chorus when you select it on the song selection screen. oh,I see...thanks very much! I didn't that before orz

Hillman's Fool:
00:20:41 (1) - Remove New Combo * I think here is OK
00:21:04 (2) - Add New Combo * ^
00:23:24 (1) - Repeat once more ** and Remove New Combo * fixed
00:24:51 (10) - Add New Combo * added
00:30:50 (3) - Add New Combo * added
00:33:02 (6) - Add New Combo because of Spacing Change. added
00:39:81 (11) - Add New Combo * fixed
00:39:81 (11,12) - Move up. Offscreen notes are bad. fixed
00:43:12 (4) - Add New Combo * fixed
00:47:85 (10) - Add New Combo * fixed
00:48:17 (1) - Remove New Combo * I think here is OK, 'cause big deault number looked werid
01:44:64 (9) - Add New Combo * added

Hard:
01:07:57 (4) - Start 1/4 later, end 1/4 earlier. fixed
01:30:922 - Start Kiai 1/4 later fixed
02:10:043 - Remove the Break. fixed
02:21:559 - Start Kiai 1/4 later fixed
02:32:44 (4) - let this slider start 1/4 later and end 1/4 later, place a circle at the time when it starts at the moment. fixed

Normal:
00:45:483 - Start Kiai 1/4 later fixed

I LOVE the spinner ;p