osuplayer111 wrote:

[Timing]

Seems fine.

[Easy]

00:11:72 (1,2,3,4) - Too much claps. Try to change it.
First pause is a bit too long... [/color]
01:04:17 (2,3) - Too hard for easy maps.
01:06:81 (6) - Silence this slider only on ending.
01:56:63 (1) - Too close from 01:55:12 (4)

[Normal]

Good.

[Hard]

00:01:72 (11,1) - Spacing.
Too much new combo on start of the map.
01:05:31 (1,2,3) - Align correctly.
01:30:21 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - This jumps goes out from nowhere.[/color]

ignorethis wrote:

omg this is your first map? Great. Thanks ! Thanks !

<Easy>
A bit like normal, especially the 1/2 velocity sliders, but still ok.
02:26:06 (1) - Not a proper place to end the song. Ending at 02:20:782 is preferable. Sorry, but I kinda like the ending, it's more dramatic imo. Please accept it. =D

<Normal>
00:48:140 - Make this picture gradually fade in, not just appear out of nowhere. It's just wrong. In Easy it doesn't matter because a spinner is there blocking this picture xD =O I forgot there are also this non-video version of the beatmap, because with video, the video will block the sudden "pop" of this picture. Will fix this later. =P Thanks.
01:20:02 (1) - Remove clap.
02:02:66 (2) - Bad spacing. Should be away from 1, or player will think this is closely after 1, click it too soon and then go wrong. Although it's recogniseable, I still suggest you move this away.
02:07:76 (4) - ^
02:26:06 (1) - Same as Easy.
All fix.
<Hard>
00:16:25 (3,4,5,6) - Remove finish.
00:48:140 - Same.
00:59:27 (7) - New combo.
01:33:98 (4) - Bad spacing.
02:26:06 (1) - Same as Easy.

<Insane>
01:05:68 (2) - Bad spacing.
Also the problems I mentioned above.

All fix. Thanks for the great mod !
Except for these problems this map's a high quality one for a first-time mapper. Good luck with ranking. Star'd.

A big thanks for your star and your praise !

blissfulyoshi wrote:

Easy:
00:16:63 (7,1) - spacing? (I personally do not want small jumps in easy, but that is your choice) I kinda like the small jump, sorry...
00:18:89 (1) - remove new combo
00:20:40 (4) - add new combo
00:51:53 (1) - remove new combo
01:06:81 (6) - make this timing section slightly earlier to make sure ppl who drop the slider early hear the silence (about a eighth note earlier)
01:28:32 (1) - remove new combo
01:30:97 (1) - remove new combo
01:38:14 (4,1) - spacing?
01:49:83 (3,1) - swap new combo What does swap new combo means ? lol
01:51:53 (3) - new combo?
Fixed.
Normal:
00:19:27 (1,2) - swap new combo
00:20:59 (1) - remove new combo
00:24:93 (1,1,1) - this new combo spam seemed random
00:25:31 (1) - I would like if this was not under the light blue 2
01:03:04 (1) - remove new combo
01:49:27 (1,2) - spacing
02:23:04 (1,2) - swap new combo

Hard:
you might want to increase the overall difficulty Ok
00:00:49 - it feels weird that you did not map this part
00:09:46 (6,7) - spacing (These spacing mistakes could also be fixed by adding a new combo
00:18:51 (1,4) - swap new combo
00:21:34 (1) - remove new combo
00:28:51 (1) - remove the new combo here to keep the pattern of 2s
00:52:66 (1,1) - personally I did not see the reason for 2 new combos here
00:59:27 (7) - new combo
01:23:80 (7) - new combo
01:27:95 (7) - new combo
01:40:78 (4,5) - spacing
01:52:29 (3) - look nicer if you place this under the dark blue 1 I don't understand this... XD
01:56:63 (2) - these long sliders do not fit the difficulty Hmmm.... I have been thinking of changing this part for quite some time. Will fix that later. =P

Insane:
00:30:97 (1) - remove new combo
01:40:40 (7) - place under the purple 2/4 @.@ Don't understand this part too. >.<

Much better than before. Star.

Thanks for the great mod and the star ! P.S. : Finally got your star. =D

alan_629_6 wrote:

Hi ! Sorry for the late come. I try my best. Those mistakes that other people say already I won't say anymore, ok ?

Easy - Ok. The slider moves too fast. Change it slower ?

Normal - I didn't notice any mistake.

Hard - The slow slider parts are ugly. Change ?

Insane -
1:20:216 (9) - Alignment is a bit off.
1:20:782 (1) - The beats too near. Make it farer.
1:22:857 - Same.

Also, please recheck some of the beat placement. Some are not straight and some look weird. Also the white flash background at the end of the song is off. Fix it.

Good luck !

Breeze wrote:

现在这个map看起来已经很棒了 谢谢！
不过还是没有完全的按照distance snap来做,spacing有些地方不是那么的对
不过问题不大 我是有用distance snap,只是有些地方我要强调它的距离感。=P

[easy]
看起来已经没什么问题了,不过结束的地方让人觉得突然断了,为什么不做完呢?　最初原因是懒惰，哈哈，第二原因是，我感觉那个ｅｎｄｉｎｇ好像很震撼！

[normal]
00:11:725 (1) - 这个spacing没对
00:22:291 (1) - ^,不过这个还好
也还是结尾的问题

[hard]
00:04:337 (1,2,3) - 这3个note声音听起来不怎么爽,降低一些比较好ｆｉｘ
00:08:518 (1) - 被前面还没完全消失的note挡住,会比较花,不建议这么放ｆｉｘ
00:09:050 (1,2,3) - 看来你喜欢这么放,好吧,也没什么问题,无视我吧ｆｉｘ，我好像很喜欢大大声的ｂｅａｔ，哈哈
01:32:870 (1) - 又被前面的note挡住了ｆｉｘ
眼力真好！

[insane]
没发现什么问题,great


比我第一个map强很多啊TAT,真厉害你过奖了。＝Ｐ

Z-Ramm wrote:

Easy
01:20:78 (1) - This note needs to be hit right after the spinner ends, and considering that this is an Easy, I think that might be a little bit difficult for noobs. You could remove the note, adjust spinner length, move this note closer to the center of the screen so it's more obvious, etc. Thanks, good eye ! Fix it !

Normal
02:00:78 (1,2,3,4) - This whole sequence just seems arbitrarily placed to me, I can't tell what it's following. Maybe change this up to follow the bass-ish part a bit, kind of like a simplified version of what you did on Hard. Thanks ! I had fix it ! It used to sync with the music, but I forgot to edit it once I change the offset and BPM. =P

Hard
00:01:82 (1) - Move to next white tick, add a note before it in the empty space if necessary. Nice ear ! Now this sounds a hell lot better.
00:02:00 (2) - Move beginning to next red tick. Keep the endpoint where it is now. These two changes will make it sound a lot better. Same.
01:26:44 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Not saying you necessarily have to change anything, but this pattern confused the crap out of me at first. It seems like something that would belong on Insane. I like this, sorry. =P

Insane
01:20:31 - Add a circle here. Fix !

Very nice map for your first. Starred.
Thanks for the great mod and star ! =D

Takuma wrote:

General:
I don't really how the video goes blank for awhile, then appears, then it repeats. Also, your SB is a bit odd imo. I understand your senseness of odd, coz I feel odd the 1st time too, so, I need other's opinion, since I used 2 full days to create this storyboard. (storyboard is new to me you see)

Hard:
00:02:10 (2) - Too close to (1). Fix
01:01:53 (1,2,3) - This is a little too big spacing - please tone it down a bit. Fix
01:26:44 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - It looks fun to play, but it looks messy. Can you fix it maybe? This is 1 of my favourite part of HARD, so, I would like to see how other people thinks, if it is really too messy, then I would fix it. =P Sorry...
01:51:63 (1) - Remove new combo. In case you didn't notice, every new odd combo there (like this one, a standalone 1) indicates there's a new clap there, so I would like other's opinion as well on this. 1/4th back on the timeline, then move 01:51:91 (2) away. Fix, this sounds certainly better.
01:52:29 (3) - New combo. Same reason as above
01:52:85 (1,1) - Remove new combo. ^
02:02:66 (4) - New combo. Fix

Normal:
00:19:27 (1) - Remove new combo. Fix

Easy:
02:02:66 (3) - New combo. Fix

Ryuukun wrote:

[Overall]
I think kiai mode is a bit overused on this map. Ok, will fix that later

[Easy]
No Problems

[Normal]
No Problems

[Hard]
01:06:82 (2) - i would set this one, one 1/2 tick later (on the white) and add a circle here 01:07:38 Did I have this part ? I am confused >.<
00:10:40 (2) - This one should start here 00:10:49 Fix
01:44:65 (1) - set this one here 01:44:60 - (1 1/8 tick earlier) I used 1/4, would it be confusing to fix this ? 1/8 tick earlier certainly sounds better. i need opinions on this as well, since someone said stick to 1/4 the whole time.
01:51:63 (1) - set this one here 01:51:58 - (1 1/8 tick earlier) Do I have this note ? =O Did you modded my old version of my map ?

[Insane]
No Problems

Starred.

lukewarmholiday wrote:

Hard
01:00:78 (4) - New combo since the combo is a little after the slider

Insane
00:39:27 (6) - Move closer to 5
01:25:87 (5,6,7) - Move further from 4, its a little underspaced Nice eye !
01:31:34 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Uhh what, 4,5,6 are overspaced then 9 is too close to 8 Nice eye !

I like it, it's sloppy but you're a new mapper.

BagnoGamer wrote:

[Insane]
00:41:159 - You lack one note here. Fix !
(Reinsert break)
And spacing feels weird. Which part ?
Star. Thanks for the star !

gdeath wrote:

nice map!
easy:
01:04:17 (2)最好是堆垛在(3)的上面。作为easy难度，我个人是不太喜欢这种pattern，这对easy来说快速的二连有点困难。不过不改也没什么问题。改了^o^

normal:
01:27:952 (5) 间隔。应该往下拉点。后面(6,7,8)的note记得也要一起修改。good eye !

hard:
fine

insane:
00:11:159 (2) 取消start的whistle.end部分留着。这样听起来更好听些。 Fix !

i played this game and cleared it.继续加油吧^_^
stared~

antony11 wrote:

Offset 405 seem lillte bit slow for me i suggest you to use 400

Afer my quick look, Easy fine for me

Hard:
00:15:12 (8) - late 1/4 beat
01:01:72 (2) - late 1/4 beat
01:26:81 (2) and 01:27:56 (5) - same with ablove
01:28:89 (5) - early 1/4 beat

Insane:
00:35:40 (2) and 00:36:06 (5) - early 1/4beat

Normal:
01:26:44 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 3 slider move early 1/4 beat and make it longer
01:38:80 (2) and 01:39:55 (4) - early 1/4

Started

alvisto wrote:

antony11 wrote:

Offset 405 seem lillte bit slow for me i suggest you to use 400

Afer my quick look, Easy fine for me

Hard:
00:15:12 (8) - late 1/4 beat
01:01:72 (2) - late 1/4 beat
01:26:81 (2) and 01:27:56 (5) - same with ablove
01:28:89 (5) - early 1/4 beat

Insane:
00:35:40 (2) and 00:36:06 (5) - early 1/4beat

Normal:
01:26:44 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 3 slider move early 1/4 beat and make it longer
01:38:80 (2) and 01:39:55 (4) - early 1/4

Started

Hmmm.... Seems like all the moddings that you suggested involve modifying the 1:26:81 part. Your suggestions is not bad, but it totally changes how those beats sound. So, for now I will still keep it, unless everybody is against it. XD Thanks for your great modding ! =D

Lissette wrote:

Hi!

Normal
00:53:04 (5) - sounds good without this note, it's up to u True.Fix

Hard
01:07:19 - what's this timing section for? For the silent end of the slider. Anyway, you make realize there's a timing error here. Fix

Insane
00:13:04 (8,9,10) - move half beat later 1/2 ? It sound too weird for a 1/2 adjustment... Or maybe I misunderstand you ?
00:23:98 (5) - move to the next blue tick, and..... Nice one !
00:24:17 (6) - move to the next red tick, end the slider at 00:24:55 Fix !
00:25:49 (5,6) - same as above Fix
00:27:00 (5) - move to the next blue tick Fix
00:27:19 (6) - remove this note (dot forget fix spacing if you make the changes) Fix
All fix on INSANE are nice ! Thanks !

Nice map!
Star

m980 wrote:

[Hard]
02:24:36 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - Hitsounds for this don't really flow well. I kinda understand why you don't like it. Ok, I make the hitsounds louder, but I still let them gradually lose sounds. See whether you think this flows better or not. XD

[Insane]
00:16:25 (1,2,3) - Completely confused me. Fix
01:04:17 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - Spacing is RIDICULOUSLY close and is VERY confusing Fix
01:26:44 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - v Don't understand this part
01:38:51 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I don't like how you didn't map this to the music. Uhm... I forgotten the previous edit already, might have fix this part already, take a look again please ?
02:21:34 (1) onwards - Hitsounds for this section doesn't really flow.Fix this part by deleting 2 notes. Please check again whether this fits or not ? =D
HP Drain rate is less harsh than Hard XD Coz I myself can't pass this map you see. XD Fix ! (Change to same level as Hard, or you think it's better to be more harder than this ?
Random Stacks and Streams AREN'T FUN. Ok ! Completely remap some of the stacks, random streams part of the map. Can replay again and comment again ? Thanks ! =D

[All Difficulties]
01:56:63 - I don't really like silent sections. Please atleast make it quiet. Ok, fix this. XD
02:26:63 - I really don't like how you end the maps at this time. It doesn't really make sense and feels weird. Maybe you should end it 02:57:00. That's just my opinion though :p Many people have voiced this opinion before already, so, I guess it is weird then. XD Ok, I shortened EASY & NORMAL, semi lenghtened HARD to a later part, and of course, super lengthened INSANE to 02:57:00. Please help me recheck those lenghtened part ? XD

[Storyboard]
You have 2 osbs.. Delete "Motoi Sakuraba - Battle with God Syndrome -Valkyrie Profile- (alvisto).osb".
Your filepaths are screwed up.
""Songs\1.14 - Battle with God Syndrome\1.jpg""
Get rid of "Songs\1.14 - Battle with God Syndrome\"
This does for all of them Thanks for this tips ! I didn't know that ! >.<
"White.jpg" Isn't the right size, resize if to 640x480 and delete all Size related transformations. =O 640x480 is perfect ! I fix Black too.

Azure_Kyte wrote:

[Normal]
-01:30:59 (2,3) - The spacing n this looks wierd; try moving the slider and beat to match the picture below. Good eye ! Thanks !

Starred! Thanks for the star !

kingcobra52 wrote:

-All difficulties end at a weird spot. It might be better to end at 02:20:78 instead. Fix that already, can please recheck my map ? =P

-Lighten the dark blue and purple combo colors a bit. The approach circles are hard to see when the bg is all black. Hmmm.... Totally fix that, coz I just put in Breeze's skin and changed the hit circle colour too. Please see whether those approach circles is still hard to see ?

Hard

01:27:19 (4) - New combo.
01:28:70 (4) - ^ Fix !

Starred. Thanks for the star !

animask wrote:

[Easy]
Maybe lower overall difficulty by 1 tick Ok ^o^
01:49:83 (3) - New Combo
01:50:21 (1) - Remove New Combo Good Eye !

[Normal]
00:13:23 (3) - Add a Clap? Ahh ! Good Ear ! Fix
00:14:74 (2) - ^ Fix
00:27:57 (1) - New Combo? Fix
00:51:53 (1) - Remove New Combo Fix
01:06:63 (2) - Add a whistle at the end of the slider maybe? Definitely sound better with whistle XD Fix !
01:55:87 (5) - Add a Clap on the beginning of the slider Ya, sound better. Fix

[Hard]
01:49:65 (1) - Remove New Combo and Clap Ahhh !! I mistime the clap ! =P Thanks, and fix
01:49:83 (1) - Add a Clap and Remove New Combo
01:53:04 (1) - Remove New Combo
01:54:55 (1) - ^ Actually the purpose of me adding all new combo at these particular weird spots is to emphasize that lonely new combo is the clap sound. XD However, if many think it's unnecessary, I may remove it. =)
02:31:53 (1) - Extend to next white tick Fix

[Insane]
00:35:87 (4) - Stack it properly on 3 Nice eye
00:36:44 (6) - Stack it properly on 1 Nice Eye !
01:06:44 (5) - Add a Clap? Ah~~~ I forgot to clap this... nice ear !
02:19:08 (18) - Add New Combo The purpose I don't want to put a combo here is to let player know they have to continuous hit the beats for 17 times. Please tell me whether this is necessary or not, coz I am not a very good INSANE player. XD
02:19:27 (1) - Remove New Combo
02:22:85 (1) - ^ I believed I remove this notes already ? =O You are modding the old version of my map ! XD
02:23:61 (1) - ^ ^
02:55:49 (1) - Extend to next white tick Fix

Nice Job for your first beatmap~ Ah~~ I get pink ! Means affetionate & loving ? Thanks !

WyndII wrote:

I, still can't import your map in my osu! but the music is great and you have enough stars that says "This map is food good." Awww, that's bad. Anyway, thanks for your star ! But sorry, I can't kudosu you, but I think I modded your map already right ? =P

Star for you~

Symbolic wrote:

I didn't see anything of the skin? At my osu! it just loaded the default skin..


[Easy]

Remove the timing sections where u stopped mapping lolol.

kingcobra52 wrote:

Easy

-Remove kiai time from the end where you had notes before. Otherwise you get a skip prompt at the end. (basically what Symbolic said above)

Symbolic wrote:

00:10:21 (5) - Shorten this slider by 1/4. Previously I have this shorten, but someone said it is too hard for EASY. Guess I will shorten it back then. XD
01:32:85 (1) - Let this start 1/2 earlier and extend it by 1/2. Fix

I'll mod the rest later, have a star for now. Thanks for the Star !
*

kingcobra52 wrote:

Hard

00:10:21 (1,2) - Line up with 3. Fix. Good Eye !

Insane

01:07:19 (3) - Line up with 2. Good Eye !
02:51:72 (4) - New combo. Fix

Much better combo colors. ^^ Thanks. ^o^

whymeman wrote:

(Only checking the skin like you asked.)

Errors:

1.) The hit circle...

[attachment=0:95c72]hitcircle.png[/attachment:95c72]

The image on the hit circle is a bit too large. I can see it extending slightly out of the circle overlay as well.

2.) The Score bar...

Nothing really wrong with this but..... why does it say "Enemy HP"? I thought "Your HP" or just "HP" might work since having "Emeny HP" kinda makes it feel backwards to me. (Only a suggestion though).


That's all. I normally don't do this without fully modding, but i'll drop my star in.

arien666 wrote:

How many it get stars?
I don't know
But this is good XD

Star this

DeathxShinigami wrote:

First off...

Starred.

[Easy]

Lower HP drain by 1. Feels to life drain for an easy and most easy's I've seen ahve lower drain than that sadly.

[Normal]

Looks fine.

[Hard]

Fine here to.

[Insane]

I really don't care but raise HP drain by 1?

alvisto wrote:

Jeffro wrote:

This map is awesome!

Starred.

Couldn't really find problems in this map

Thanks ! And oops, I accidentally gave kudosu to ya. XD

Jeffro wrote:

I will probably be denied them soon so I need to withdraw myself from shooting a star @ my map.

Wojjan wrote:

I told you in chat what to do with Easy. Thanks ! I didn't know about that DS tips at all. I learned a new thing from ya. =D

Normal
00:06:44 (5,1) - spacing Good eye !
00:27:57 (7) - Space correctly by putting the DS to x1.6. And it should go 'till the white tick after the end Good eye and ear !
00:50:02 (1,2,3,4,5) - This is quite chellenging for Normal. Changed to slider
02:15:49 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Place on the grid, and the 3,4 in the middle of the grid Fix !


Hard
00:13:61 (2,5) - Place on the blue ticks. Why I didn't sense this earlier ? lol. Good ear
01:05:31 (1,3) - Place their ends on blue ticks
01:06:82 (1) - Slider end goes on the white tick after end.
02:26:06 (1,2,3) - Remove Kiai. It's too sudden
02:28:14 (4,5) - That's too much of a jump Totally missed that. That was not intentional i assure you.
All fix

I don't like Insane at all. In the least, lower the HP drain with combo's like this =( Ok, I will try adjusting INSANE again, since you are the 2nd one who complain that INSANE is not fun. =D

x3ns0r wrote:

alright here is a new spinner

Alace wrote:

As i said in IRC
Soft-clap doesn`t fit the song
I will take a look again after you fixing hitsounds
great map

Alex0686 wrote:

[attachment=0:afed7]stuff.rar[/attachment:afed7]

Gens wrote:

Here comes a lazy mod!

[Overall]
- Check that the Kiai Time is the same on all difficulties.
- 3secs of Lead-In is too much... Ok. Will fix that after I get back from school.

[Skin]
- Maybe force default skin and get rid of the hitcircleoverlay.png you have there? I dunno.
- Some skinning elements still need polishment, like the Ki and the Healthbar. Oh no, photoshop thingy again. Will see what can I do about this... (I am a total PS noob)

[Easy]
01:32:66 (1) - Doesn't sounds good at all. Fix

Everything else seems fine to me. Thanks for the mod & star !

minyeob wrote:

[Hard]
00:12:29 (3) - Make closer from (2). Good eye !

[Insane]
00:29:08 ( ) - Add a circle on here. (Like Hard) Good eye !

Very Nice.
This map is worth taking some kudo stars. Oh my gawd~~~ You spent so much kudosu on my map... I am plesantly and excitedly speechless... XD Thanks a lot a lot !!

Here you are! Good luck =D

Starrodkirby86 wrote:

All right~

We did an IRC mod. Fixed some miscellaneous problems here and there.

Here's your SB fixed. Extract in your song folder. Check if everything is good and yeah.

Larto wrote:

Overall:
- Remove the Audio Track from the video please, just to save filesize
- Remove the Countdown (from Easy at least). Song Setup -> Storyboarding. =O Thanks !

Insane:
02:40:59 (1,2,3) - Spacing is inconsistent. I mean, I didn't really have a problem with it while playing, but think about redoing that pattern Redone ! I accidentally missed this when I resnap all the notes. XD

Hard:
02:27:38 (1,2,3,4) - I wouldn't stack these notes, it's pretty confusing. Fix !

Normal is good

Easy is good.

Lizbeth wrote:

nice, congrats on your first ranked map n_n

DeathxShinigami wrote:

Someone will need a brighter side.

Lissette wrote:

congrats alvisto!!

Mafiamaster wrote:

Wow! I'm very impressed to see how far this came the last time I saw this. SB-wise
This is very good and congrats on your first ranked map!