Arash feat. Helena - Broken Angel (Dj Aligator Remix) · forum

Lizellota

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Lizellota 2012-06-17T17:04:46+00:00

Такс.. как и обещала лови мод ^^

[Hard]

00:03:264 - может быть сюда ноту и финиш нормала добавить?
00:03:730 - вистл
00:04:197 - убери вистл
00:04:664 (5) - вистл
00:05:130 - убери вистл
00:05:597 (1) - убери финиш, он тут ни к чему, поставь лучше вистл
00:05:831 - добавь ноту о.о
00:06:064 - убери вистл
00:06:997 - ^
00:07:464 (1) - убери финиш
00:10:731 - убери хлопок, поставь вистл
00:13:999 (4) - вистл
00:14:465 (5) - убери вистл
00:14:932 (1) - ^ (я имею ввиду со всего слайдера убери его)
00:14:932 - поставь хлопок
00:15:866 (3) - ^
00:16:799 (2) - ^
00:17:499 (5,7) - поставь вистл
00:19:133 (2) - вместо хлопка, вистл лучше поставь
00:21:000 - ^
00:21:700 (3) - вистл
00:21:933 - убери хлопок
00:22:400 - зачем тут финиш? убери его
00:22:867 (2) - вместо хлопка, поставь вистл
00:23:800 - убери хлопок
00:24:267 - убери финиш
00:24:734 - вместо хлопка - вистл
00:25:667 - ^
00:26:601 (2,4) - ^
00:28:468 - ^
00:29:168 - вистл
00:29:401 - убери хлопок
00:30:335 - вистл
00:31:035 - ^
00:31:268 - убери хлопок
00:33:135 (8) - вместо вистла - финиш
00:49:938 - финиш
00:50:405 (1) - убери финиш
00:50:405 (1) - хлопок
00:50:871 - убери хлопок
00:51:338 - хлопок
00:51:805 (5) - убери хлопок
00:52:272 - хлопок
00:52:738 - убери хлопок
00:53:205 - хлопок
00:53:672 - убери хлопок
00:54:139 - ну зачем тут финиш? вообще никак не сочитается с ритмом, убери его, поставь лучше хлопок
00:54:605 - убери хлопок
00:55:072 - хлопок
00:55:539 (2) - убери хлопок
00:56:006 (4) - хлопок
00:56:472 - убери хлопок
00:56:939 - хлопок
01:01:140 (9) - здесь тогда уж лучше финиш, чем хлопок
01:03:474 - убери финиш
01:20:043 (4) - финиш
01:20:276 - убери финиш
01:22:143 (7) - ^
01:24:477 (1) - хлопок
01:38:946 - убери финиш
02:05:084 - финиш
02:06:017 - хлопок
02:07:651 - добавь две ноты

[BCI'S Normal]

Чудесно :3

[Easy]

00:20:066 (2) - убери вистл
00:25:901 - ^
00:27:301 - whistle
00:29:401 (2) - убери вистл
00:31:268 - убери хлопок
01:10:475 - ^
01:12:342 - whistle
01:16:076 (5) - убери хлопок
01:18:409 - убери финиш
01:19:810 (4) - ^
01:23:544 - финиш
01:24:010 - хлопок
01:24:944 - хлопок
01:25:411 - убери хлопок
01:26:811 (2) - хлопок
01:27:278 (3) - убери хлопок
01:27:744 (4) - хлопок
01:28:678 - ^
01:29:144 - убери хлопок
01:29:611 (1) - хлопок
01:30:545 - ^
01:31:011 (3) - убери хлопок
01:31:478 (4) - хлопок
01:32:878 - убери хлопок
01:34:279 (6) - хлопок
01:34:745 - убери хлопок
01:36:146 - хлопок
01:36:612 - убери хлопок
01:55:282 - ^

Вроде всё нашла.. хорошая мапка, удачи ~~ Baka-nyan XD

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riffy 2012-06-18T01:44:38+00:00

Поправил те места, где был нарушен паттерн хитсаундов >3<

Aurele

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Aurele 2012-06-18T02:22:31+00:00

Hi Baka.
Here's a fast Mod before I go to sleep. o/

[General]
The Kiai times starts/ends weird in my opinion.
I'm suggesting you to start the first Kiai time @00:49:938.
For the second, start it @01:38:479 and end it @01:53:415
Edit: I just saw something with the Beatmap forum's title. Be sure to correct the title. Arash Feat. Helena - Broken Angel (Dj Aligator Remix)

[Easy]
Why is your hitsounds placed with 1/3? It's better if they're placed with 2/4. If you do it with 2/4, catch me to remod.
00:24:500 - This slider starts pretty well, but ends bad.
01:28:211 - Add a new combo, 01:29:611 delete the new combo, 01:31:011 add a new combo. It's better in that way because of the pattern and it will short the next combo.
01:55:282 - Delete the clap. Because there's 3 claps in a row.

[BCI's Normal]
Mhm, are you sure this is a Normal or an Hard difficulty? That's kinda hard for a Normal...
I don't find anything wrong here. All I can say is : It's too hard for a Normal difficulty.

[Hard]
00:16:099 - this slider ends weirdly like I said for your Easy difficulty. I'm suggesting you to delete this circle (00:15:866 (3) - ) and move the slider there.
00:15:866 - If you do that ^ Add a new combo to this slider and remove the combo for this circle : 00:16:799
00:17:733 (8) - Move the circle for x:188 y:192 to make a shape like this
01:08:374 (4) - Move the circle for x:156 y: 88 and move this circle (01:08:608 (5) - ) for x:256 y:48 to make a shape like this and in my opinion, it looks pretty good.
01:19:343 (3) - This one isn't aligned perfectly with 01:18:409 (1,2) - . you should make it to x:324

Nice map. Here's a star. ♫

also :

Gabe wrote:
DJ Aligator !

riffy

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riffy 2012-06-18T08:37:50+00:00

Gabe wrote:
Hi Baka.
Here's a fast Mod before I go to sleep. o/

[General]
The Kiai times starts/ends weird in my opinion.
I'm suggesting you to start the first Kiai time @00:49:938.
For the second, start it @01:38:479 and end it @01:53:415 i prefer to follow vocals :<
Edit: I just saw something with the Beatmap forum's title. Be sure to correct the title. Arash Feat. Helena - Broken Angel (Dj Aligator Remix) ~

[Easy]
Why is your hitsounds placed with 1/3? It's better if they're placed with 2/4. If you do it with 2/4, catch me to remod. i'll re-do them
00:24:500 - This slider starts pretty well, but ends bad.~
01:28:211 - Add a new combo, 01:29:611 delete the new combo, 01:31:011 add a new combo. It's better in that way because of the pattern and it will short the next combo. nope. i prefer my pattern, sorry
01:55:282 - Delete the clap. Because there's 3 claps in a row.^~

[BCI's Normal]
Mhm, are you sure this is a Normal or an Hard difficulty? That's kinda hard for a Normal...
I don't find anything wrong here. All I can say is : It's too hard for a Normal difficulty.

[Hard]
00:16:099 - this slider ends weirdly like I said for your Easy difficulty. I'm suggesting you to delete this circle (00:15:866 (3) - ) and move the slider there.~
00:15:866 - If you do that ^ Add a new combo to this slider and remove the combo for this circle : 00:16:799 ~
00:17:733 (8) - Move the circle for x:188 y:192 to make a shape like this no.
01:08:374 (4) - Move the circle for x:156 y: 88 and move this circle (01:08:608 (5) - ) for x:256 y:48 to make a shape like this and in my opinion, it looks pretty good. ~
01:19:343 (3) - This one isn't aligned perfectly with 01:18:409 (1,2) - . you should make it to x:324 ~

Nice map. Here's a star. ♫ thanks~

also :

Gabe wrote:
DJ Aligator !

~

Shohei Ohtani

Shohei Ohtani 2012-06-20T02:17:03+00:00

ANYWAYS

OVERALL:
CLAPS ON 2 AND 4

Hard:
01:50:848 (4) - Clone (3) and flip it :>

Normal:
00:52:738 (5) - Not moe slider! The problem is that the 2nd slider is too far to the left~
01:32:878 (4) - Not symmetrical!~
01:41:280 (5) - Weird overlap o-o
02:05:084 (6) - Not symmetrical~.

Easy:
01:16:542 (1) - Not moe at all! D:

There's very little wrong with the map in terms of playability or difficulty, your hitsounds just make me sad ;~;.

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riffy 2012-06-20T02:33:36+00:00

Fixed hitsounds (Easy)
And other thing\gs are fixed, too! Thanks, MOECDFA!

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Chewin 2012-06-23T09:36:31+00:00

[General]
Remove Letterbox during breaks

[Easy]
00:16:799 (4) - Nazi but move the last waypoint 2 grid up for a better shape
00:25:667 (3) - New combo
00:30:335 (4) - To keep consistency use finish on the head and remove it from the tail?
00:35:002 (1) - Too soon for the easiest diff of your mapset. You could to reduce 00:31:735 (1) till the long white tick (00:33:135) or just delete this circle
00:50:405 (1) - ^
01:16:076 (5) - Add NC and remove it from 01:16:542 (1)
01:19:810 (4) - Add NC and remove from 01:20:276 (1)
01:20:276 (1) - 2nd waypoint 1 grid up, make it straight
01:29:611 (1) - Since you used new combo here 01:28:211 (1) you should to remove NC on this circle
01:31:011 (3) - Add new combo here instead to avoid this long combo
01:38:946 (1) - 2nd waypoint 1 grid left
01:58:083 (2) - You could to make this slider curved to create a blanket with 01:57:616 (1), something like this: http://puu.sh/D2rM
Good map

[BCI's Normal]
00:30:801 (3) - Clap on the tail fits good imho, try to add it?
00:32:202 (5) - This finish + clap sounds very bad. Remove clap and use just the finish ;3
00:38:736 (1) - Move this slider 2 grid down to create a blanket with 00:39:436 (2)?
00:44:337 (5) - Asymmetric slider, use this code it's better: http://puu.sh/D2tF

264,276,44337,2,0,B|252:332|160:332|156:256,2,140,8|0|8

00:49:004 (6) - Remove clap from the tail and use just the finish hitsound
01:11:175 Since the sound starts here you need to use a circle with new combo here
01:18:876 (3) - Same above, remove clap
01:26:811 (4) - This slider overlapped with 01:25:644 (2) is very confusing for a Normal. Consider to fix this :\
01:38:946 (1,2,3) - Something like this? http://puu.sh/D2wM
01:41:280 (5) - Even if you created a blanket with 01:42:680 (1), I don't like where you placed this slider because it's overlapped with the previous one.. To improve the flow I suggest you to move it elsewhere
01:57:616 (1,2,3,4,5) - Move this elements down to overlap the 01:58:083 (3) with 01:56:216 (4)
02:05:084 (6) - Maybe use New combo here?

[Hard]
00:15:866 (1) - Remove NC for consistency and symmetry with 00:14:932 (1)
00:16:799 (3) - Add NC here instead.
00:24:734 (2) - Overlap with 00:23:334 (4) ?
00:25:667 (4) - ^
00:35:002 (1) - 3 grid up for spacing consitency with 00:35:235 (2,3)
00:46:204 (5) - Forgot clap on the head
01:12:342 (7) - New combo
01:13:042 (1) - Remove nc
Good

That's all, good luck with rank ;3

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riffy 2012-06-23T15:57:17+00:00

Chewin wrote:
[General]
Remove Letterbox during breaks

[Easy]
00:16:799 (4) - Nazi but move the last waypoint 2 grid up for a better shape i like nazi mods but this 2 grids doesn't make any sense
00:25:667 (3) - New combo nope. new combo evbery 2nd big white line.
00:30:335 (4) - To keep consistency use finish on the head and remove it from the tail? what consistency? i think i put finishes every big white line
00:35:002 (1) - Too soon for the easiest diff of your mapset. You could to reduce 00:31:735 (1) till the long white tick (00:33:135) or just delete this circle
i don't think so, anyway i put circle closer to center of screen
00:50:405 (1) - ^ no. reason same as above
01:16:076 (5) - Add NC and remove it from 01:16:542 (1) ~
01:19:810 (4) - Add NC and remove from 01:20:276 (1) ~
01:20:276 (1) - 2nd waypoint 1 grid up, make it straight so what? i don't want straight slider :/
01:29:611 (1) - Since you used new combo here 01:28:211 (1) you should to remove NC on this circle ~
01:31:011 (3) - Add new combo here instead to avoid this long combo i'd like to put it on (6)
01:38:946 (1) - 2nd waypoint 1 grid left no. don't you think that in this way slider looks better?
01:58:083 (2) - You could to make this slider curved to create a blanket with 01:57:616 (1), something like this: http://puu.sh/D2rM actually i'm avoiding blanket-slider here to keep consistency in shapes
Good map

[Hard]
00:15:866 (1) - Remove NC for consistency and symmetry with 00:14:932 (1) ~
00:16:799 (3) - Add NC here instead. ~
00:24:734 (2) - Overlap with 00:23:334 (4) ? ~
00:25:667 (4) - ^ ~
00:35:002 (1) - 3 grid up for spacing consitency with 00:35:235 (2,3) nope, sorry. i want to keep it as is
00:46:204 (5) - Forgot clap on the head ~
01:12:342 (7) - New combo part of my pattern~
01:13:042 (1) - Remove nc ^
Good

That's all, good luck with rank ;3

thanks!

Edit: some fixes from BCI via IRC

/

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Fapfrit 2012-06-26T12:05:56+00:00

[Hard]

00:33:252 - запилить брейк тайм?
00:41:070 - убрать слайдер@поставить круг?
00:53:205 (9) - придать форму?
00:58:339 (3) - придать форму?
01:06:391 (5) - может удалить? не очень этот трипл звучит. а круги как-нибудь разнести друг от друга
------
ну, ошибок нет / спейсинг норм / с ритмом намудрил. хорошо

[BCI's Normal]

00:18:199 - пили круг!
00:24:267 - брейктайм. подправь на панели сверху, чтоб стоял на белом тике (а не между белым и голубым). section pass вылезет в ритм
------
я бы ещё про спиннеры написал. что половина не по ритму, но да ладно

[Easy]

01:16:542 (2) - редко пишу про "измени форму, подвинь это", но может сделать из слайдера обычный S?
------
на изи бывают ошибки?

где-то я эту песню уже слышал. хорошо. ну и про бг с крокодилом :'D

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riffy 2012-06-26T12:21:33+00:00

Fapfrit wrote:
[Hard]

00:33:252 - запилить брейк тайм? ~
00:41:070 - убрать слайдер@поставить круг? cимметрия :<
00:53:205 (9) - придать форму? это часть идеи.
00:58:339 (3) - придать форму? ^
01:06:391 (5) - может удалить? не очень этот трипл звучит. а круги как-нибудь разнести друг от друга ~
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ну, ошибок нет / спейсинг норм / с ритмом намудрил. хорошо

[Easy]

01:16:542 (2) - редко пишу про "измени форму, подвинь это", но может сделать из слайдера обычный S? blanket slider же
------
на изи бывают ошибки?

где-то я эту песню уже слышал. хорошо. ну и про бг с крокодилом :'D

thanks!

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lovhin456 2012-06-28T03:23:50+00:00

Hello

[General]
- When testing I tend to hit 5 ~ 10 ms early, not that I'm an expert with timing but it doesn't hurt to check
- The kiai feels much better if you start it on 00:49:938 (1st kiai) and on 01:38:479 (2nd kiai)

[Easy]
- 00:34:069 ~ It would be better if you end the spinner here, that way you give more time to the players before hitting the next note
- 01:07:674 (1,2) ~ Spacing

[BCI's Normal]
- I think that you should lower the volume for the intro part, the claps seem to powerful
- OD +1
- 01:53:415 ~ Remove clap
- 02:04:617 ~ Add clap to keep the pattern going ?

[Hard]
- Same comment about the intro volume as Normal
- 00:32:902 ~ The whistle should go here and not on (8) imo

Overall good

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riffy 2012-06-28T10:13:35+00:00

all fixed for me \o/

Edit: BCI's diff fixed!

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TicClick 2012-06-28T15:42:13+00:00

BPM: 128,575
Offset: 3285

Yeah, something like that. Anyway, it need checking since I'm not completely sure.

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riffy 2012-07-01T08:34:05+00:00

offset fixed.
btw, BCI won't fix kiai in normal. "guest diffs can have different kiai and blah blah blah" so. we keep kiai in this way

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lovhin456 2012-07-04T01:43:19+00:00

Bubbled

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riffy 2012-07-04T02:52:24+00:00

lovhin456 wrote:
Bubbled

thank you! :3

Andrea

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Andrea 2012-07-04T08:14:43+00:00

[General]

Hitsounds are way too quiet, increase the volume of them.

[Easy]

00:50:417 (1) - Too soon after spinner for an Easy difficulty.

[BCI's Normal]

Make sure to use the same Kiai Time of the other difficulties.

00:31:984 (4) - New combo.

Good job!

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BCI 2012-07-04T08:21:41+00:00

osuplayer111 wrote:
Make sure to use the same Kiai Time of the other difficulties.

-Bakari- wrote:
btw, BCI won't fix kiai in normal. "guest diffs can have different kiai and blah blah blah" so. we keep kiai in this way

~~i think my kiai is better, andrea, so sorry D:~~ -Bakari- has convinced me to fix D: NC fxd

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riffy 2012-07-04T08:45:28+00:00

fixed~

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Andrea 2012-07-04T10:16:56+00:00

[Easy]

00:47:150 (7) - New combo.

[BCI's Normal]

00:50:417 (1,2,3,4) - Wrong spacing.

You're welcome :3

Ask for a rebubble from another MAT/BAT if you want me to rank it ><

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SapphireGhost 2012-07-05T20:19:13+00:00

Hello, because of circumstances I won't be online until around 8 hours after this post was made. If you can't wait that long then I wish you good luck in finding another MAT/BAT, if not then definitely contact me and I'll re-check this.

[General]
- On all difficulties, I find it makes much more sense to end the second kiai on the downbeat at 01:53:415.

[Hard]
00:25:684 (4) - Ctrl+H this note? It flows a bit better.
00:33:150 - The break here isn't necessary, I'd remove it.

[BCI's Normal]
- The first kiai of this difficulty is unsnapped by 1 ms. This can be fixed in the .osu file by changing the "49950,-100,4,1,0,41,0,1" line under [Timing Points] to "49951,-100,4,1,0,41,0,1". It's quite insignificant but I'll leave it here if you care.

[Easy]
- No problems here.

That's all.

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riffy 2012-07-06T03:03:17+00:00

all fixed~ \o/

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SapphireGhost 2012-07-06T07:11:14+00:00

In that case, everything is ready now. Good job.
Bubbled!

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riffy 2012-07-06T07:11:50+00:00

yay~ thank you :3

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grumd 2012-07-06T07:55:07+00:00

hooray

Andrea

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Andrea 2012-07-06T08:39:20+00:00

[Hard]

01:17:482 (3,4,5) - This pattern isn't symmetric, was that your intention? If not, fix it.

Just that and I can rank this :3

riffy

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riffy 2012-07-06T08:42:35+00:00

nyan'd
fixed

Andrea

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Andrea 2012-07-06T08:43:56+00:00

Alright, looks good now!

Ranked~

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riffy 2012-07-06T08:44:56+00:00

YEAAAAA
5th!
Haters gonna hate. I think this one my best map :3
If my patterns aren't good for you, let me know :3

MAT request http://osu.ppy.sh/s/53951 o.o

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L_P 2012-07-06T09:08:25+00:00