Well first of all, why not use soft sounsd at the beginning? It might sound nicer :3
+1 or +2 HP Drain?
00:14:856 (1) - the end point of the slider is not in the middle -
http://puu.sh/wwQO00:28:984 (2) - I think this wound sound better, but just my opinion -
http://puu.sh/wwJS00:44:095 (6,1,1) - these are weird imo, and the hitsounds in these realyl fast repeat sliders, whistle and claps, I don't think they fit, and after these again whistle (but that's probably just my personal taste, since I don't really like whistle)
01:05:962 (1,2,3,4) - again these hitsounds
01:24:512 (5) -
http://puu.sh/wwMq - she sings that for a long time, so I don't think those repeat sliders are necessary
01:32:375 (5,6) - same as above, but this one fits better maybe
01:37:657 (1,2,1,1,2,3,4,5) - hitsounds
01:53:874 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - this is a little bit weird, but okay
02:06:896 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - hitsounds
02:22:620 (1) - starting from here, why did you put whistle?
02:14:758 (1) - that line is a bit strange? make it straight?
http://puu.sh/wwQ9