winber1 wrote:

a ilttle late sorry

Lunatic

00:05:601 (2,3) - when sightreading this, these rhythms are not immediately obvious because of the jumps and spacing you gave at the beginning of the map. Yes, i see the pattern you did here, but i'd still like it better if the spacing was actually increased a bit more to emphasize the rhythm. Not a bad suggestion. Might fix.
00:16:195 (8) - perhaps place this not at the beginning of combo 6 not the end. It also has a certain better flow imo. Fixed. I also fixed the blanklet slider and the spacing.
00:20:320 (3,4) - seems a little off symmetry. move down a bit? Fixed.
00:29:695 (7,8) - not the best use of anti-spacing, but i can live with it. I agree. I might fix that.
01:12:445 (2,1) - stacks aren't perfect Fixed
01:24:163 (1) - idk i feel the spinner feels bretter when it ends at 01:25:195 - Nah
01:28:570 (1,2,3) - if i was mapping this i'd probably turn this into a repeat slider to first get the rhythm in the players head. Fixed.

Hard

00:05:601 (2,3,4) - man, this really just doesn't look very readable at the first attempt :/ oh well. lol I can see that I'll fix that then.
00:43:570 - just my opinion, but i would like it better if a hitcircle was here instead the end of a slider. Has more impact imo. you could just do something like http://puu.sh/ijEZ or something. Nah
00:57:820 (2) - i would just delete this note to follow ur original pattern and rearrange spacing afterwards. Not a bad suggestion, but I like it as it is.
01:24:163 (1) - similar to insane Nah


Normal

--I'm a little hesitant to do things like 01:04:570 (7,8) and have the stacks, but you're consistent with it so it's fine. I was a bit concerned about this myself. I might fix it though.

01:19:570 (4) - why not do the same thing as 01:16:570 (5,6) - Not sure why. In this case, I might as well fix 01:04:570 then.


Easy

00:37:570 (1,2,3) - would look neater imo if you didn't have increased spacing here. use the same as 00:40:570 (1,2,3,4,5) - ? You're right fixed.
00:50:882 (2) - may be abetter idea to remove this note to match 00:52:570 (3) - or just add a note at 00:53:882 - I'm following the vocals on this part. There's vo vocal on 00:53:882.

Just suggestions.
Good luck~~ hope this helps a bit :3

Thanks for the mod. I'm usually a bit late when I mod people's maps myself, so it's all good.

Elly-chan wrote:

Call me back when you make all of your fixes, then i'll see what I can do.

Senya - Tsuki ni Murakumo Hana ni Kaze

(General)

1. The Title is Incorrect. It should be as follows: 'senya - Tsuki ni Murakumo Hana ni Kaze (Short Ver.)'.
2. There is an inconsistency in tags. On [Hard], there are two o's infront of opening. Remove the first one so that it's just 'opening'. fixed
3. Offset is off by a little bit. Change it to 96. It sounds better. Ask others and see if their opinions are shared with mine. Offset sounds good to me O_O
4. Hm, this isn't a big problem at all, but I suggest for you to change your background to something with at least one Subterranian Animism character. After all, this is Koishi's stage theme or somethin', so it should have something to do with the game seeing that reimu is overused enough as it is. Plus, the picture's kinda blurry. So.. yeah. Yet again, not a big problem, but I highly suggest for you to change it. Maybe
5. Maybe change the audio leadin for the easy/normal difficulties to 1,000? The difficulties don't start at the first vocals 'Tsuki ni' in which the hard and insane difficulties start at, so that's about half a second that should get deducted from the audio leadin. Completely optional.

fixed

(Easy)

Hitsound and combo mods

1. 00:46:195 (4) - Misplaced Clap. You see, the clap really should have been on this slider's only slidertick, so placing the clap on the slider end sounds off and is inconsistent with your hitsound pattern. Remove it, please.fixed
2. 00:49:570 (1) - Remove the clap from the beginning of the slider. Looking at what you did at 00:52:570 and 00:55:570, you only used whistles on the beginning of the sliders that have a similar-sounding part like at 00:49:570. So, lets say if you had a whistle at the beginning of (1), you wouldn't need a clap to keep consistency, right? Yeah! Then remove the clap here so that you can only hear a finish and keep consistent hitsounds. ^^fixed
3. 00:55:570 (3, 4) - Remove all hitsounds from this slider and note and add finishes. You can hear it as it is indicated in the music. Trust me on this one.i decided to add both XD
4. 00:58:570 (3) - Why didn't you add a finish? Like I have mentioned previously, add a finish for it is indicated for there to be one in the music.fixed
5. 01:00:070 (5, 6) - On (5)'s slider starting point: and add a finish. There is one in the BGM, so there should be one here. At (6): Add a finish. You can keep the clap since you had one on (7).fixed
6. 01:00:070 (5) - Add a new combo here. It prevents the combo from being way too long in an easy (7), and it also makes sense since this part is following the finishes in the BGM. (Yes, this is the main part because the singer, senya, is holding a note.)fixed
7. 01:27:070 (1) - There should be a finish here, not a whistle! Please, replace the whistle with the finish, for obviously there should be a finish since it is indicated in the BGM.

• fixed

1. 00:43:570 (1, 2, 3, 4) - .. This just doesn't feel right. Sorry to burst your bubble. I suggest doing this, it both sounds and plays better! fixed
2. 00:53:882 (x) - You added a note here in the previous dark blue combo and the next green combo.. So, why not add one here? It fills up the empty space quite well. hmm.. I was following the vocals.
3. 01:03:070 (1, 2, 3) - These flow weirdly, and they look kinda ugly in gameplay since they are in a boxy pattern spaces ever-so-closely together. I suggest for you to do something less cluttered or boxy.fixed
4. 01:16:570 (5) - Yet another slider that looks messy in-play. It also doesn't flow/play to well, either. I suggest re-positioning it!I decided to re map that part
5. 01:22:570 (3, 4) - Kinda getting close to the edge of the screen.. Maybe re-arrange the whole entire combo like this? 'kinda looks better this way ^^.

much better, fixed

Overall, it could use some tidying up. It was very nice, though! Good job for your first 'serious' map. >w<

(Normal)

Hitsound and combo mods

1. 00:32:132 (1) - You only added a whistle here in hard and insane because the whistles for this small section were following her vocal. On this difficulty, you are following your own whistle pattern, so therefore you must remove the whistle. If you don't want to, apply the same whistle-vocal pattern for this section on normal and easy, which is more time-consuming.fixed
2. 00:43:570 (1) - You forgot to add a finish, silly! As indicated in the BGM, of course.fixed
3. 00:45:070 (3) - Add a new combo for some emphasis here? After all, there is a finish in the BGM, and usually on emphasis-finishes, you place a new combo.fixed
4. 01:02:320 (1) - Hows' about you add a whistle here? I saw you added one at (2), so why not add one here? Or, EVEN BETTER! Add a whistle at (1) followed by a clap at (2)! That sounds MUCH better!fixed
5. 01:03:070 (3) - New combo? The kiai starts here, it has a finish, and it just looks/sounds better here. Also, it keeps the purple combo from being very long (9).fixed
6. 01:22:570 (2) - Finish as indicated in the BGM, sweetie!fixed
7. 01:27:070 (1) - Perhaps replace the whistle with a finish? "There should be a finish here, not a whistle! Please, replace the whistle with the finish, for obviously there should be a finish since it is indicated in the BGM."

• fixed

1. 00:28:945 (2) - Dat slider path.. Hm. Maybe re-position it? It's ugly in play due to if you get a 300, it will cover half of the slider track up, and it just looks messy due to it being right under where a previous slider path was less then two beats ago.fixed
2. 00:31:570 (1) - This is a big NO. Remove the slowdown. Slowdowns/speedups are unadvised in easier difficulties, and if you are going to add one, at least put it in an area that makes more sense, like where you put the slowdown in Hard and Insane. So.. yeah. Remove it.
3. 01:04:570 (5, 6) - Kinda confusing.. (5)'s not what i'm after, but (6) is. It's stacked immidietly after (5) follows the vocals under the slider end, switching from the vocals to following the BGM. Very confusing for normal/easy players. Either remove the notes that come right after the sliders, or space them out. This should solve that problem.fixed, also I remapped some parts.
4. 01:10:945 (3) - Unless there is a totally valid reason to stack this, unstack it. It's hard to read and makes no sense as to why it is stacked. I just re mapped
5. 01:12:070 (1) - Remove one repeat from it and add a note, instead. Sliders that repeat over three times that are not kick sliders in harder difficulties are very boring and deserve to be broken up. (Result will be this: )

fixed?

Same as easy. Could use some tidying up, but otherwise, it's great.

(Hard)

Hitsound and combo mods

1. 00:06:632 (3) - Remove the whistle? I get that it follows senya's vocals, but in this section you are only following your own whistle pattern, not her vocals. That starts later on.fixed
2. 00:25:570 (1) - Here we go. You're following the vocals this time by adding a whistle on every lyric. That's fine, BUT. I suggest that you remove the whistle from here just so we can hear a clear finish sound. Pretty please?As you wish, fixed
3. 00:33:445 (2) - The whistle was supposed to go here, not on the slider end. Right now it sounds really awkward, so I suggest you to put the whistle here instead. fixed
4. 00:33:820 (3) - Since you're following the vocals, why not also add a whistle at the beginning of this slider? It fills in the empty space ~fixed
5. 00:44:882 (7) - I suggest making this part of the green combo that follows this purple one. It follows the vocals and lightens up some combo-pattern confusion myself and some others are having.fixed
6. 01:02:320 (1) - I hear some noise that's kind of whistle-like in the BGM. Perhaps add a whistle here?
7. 01:09:070 (1) - Remove the finish. There's no need for it. Well, here, i'll also let you in on something that would make your map sound magnificent. Add a whistle in this section whenever you hear a sound like the one here. (add one at 01:09:070 and 01:10:570). If you decide to do that, add it to your other difficulties, too.fixed
8. 01:27:070 (1) - "There should be a finish here! Please add a finish, for obviously there should be a finish since it is indicated in the BGM."fixed
9. 01:34:007 (2) - Remove the whistle here and at 01:34:570. It sounded weird even though you were trying to follow the BGM Piano. Either do that or add a whistle for every single note that had a piano sound.I removed the whistle
   
   Some combo patterns you set, especially in the kiai, were hella confusing and very hard to follow. I suggest placing your combos to either the BGM or the vocal next time. Not both. It only causes greater confusion.

• i agree

1. 00:06:070 (3) - I suggest that you should space this out a bit more. It doesn't make complete sense why it's stacked, and 'is kinda better spaced out because it gives that flowy feeling during play. fixed
2. 00:27:070 (5) - Nope. I don't approve of this at all. It is boring to play sliders with more then three repeats on harder difficulties, plus it feels awkward to play. Remove one repeat so that it's only a one-time repeat slider and then add a note where the last repeat would have been. Sounds/plays WAY better! I prefered the repeat slider more, sorry
3. 00:37:570 (1, 2, 3, 4, 5) - Hm.. This beat placement seems fine, but it'd be better if it was like this. . It not only sounds better, but plays better, too. It also fills up the empty space you have goin' on at 00:39:632.

Fixed hopfully. I kinda re mapped some parts.

One of the best hard difficulties I've seen in a while. Magnificent. Haha sweet!

(Lunatic)

Hitsound and combo mods

1. 00:17:695 (6) - I hear a finish in the BGM! Add one, perhaps?~ done
2. 00:28:570 (1, 2, 3, 4, 5) - These are so empty sounding compared to when you add whistles on the sections further on.. I'd suggest adding a whistle on three to fill up the empty-sounding space!fixed
3. 00:58:570 (1) - You accidentally placed a whistle here instead of a finish! Please, replace the whistle with the finish for it fits in with the BGM (and is indicated).fixed
4. 01:02:320 (1, 2) - Add a whistle on (1) and a clap on (2). It sounds MUCH better, and it fills up the empty space!
5. 01:09:070 (3) - "Remove the finish. There's no need for it. Well, here, i'll also let you in on something that would make your map sound magnificent. Add a whistle in this section whenever you hear a sound like the one here. (add one at 01:09:070 and 01:10:570). If you decide to do that, add it to your other difficulties, too."fixed
6. 01:21:070 (1 ~ Spinner) - You forgot to add claps to this section, silly! It sounds very empty without them. Please, add them back in here.lol haha, fixed
7. 01:25:570 (1, 1, 1) - You forgot to add finishes to these notes in the stream. They are indicated in the BGM. Add 'em, please. >w<fixed
   
   Double-check your hitsound and combo patterns for me, mkay? They seem very shaky in this difficulty.

• fixed

1. 00:00:820 (1) - This sounds kinda awkward for being a repeat slider at the very beginning of a map.. Hm. I suggest that you make the beat pattern like this. . It seems as if the slider is following the vocals, and then the single beat starts following both the piano and the vocals. It's a combo-deal Nah, I'll leave it as it is.
2. 00:58:570 (1, 2) - These mess up the map's amazing flow.. They look ugly in play, too. Maybe just make them into curve sliders or sliders like you did previously in the hard difficulty? ( Hard: 00:31:570 (3, 4) haha fixed
3. 01:18:070 (1) - Make this into a one-time repeat slider and then add a note at where the slider would have originally ended. It sounds much better and eliminates the boringness of having a four-time repeat slider on an insane difficulty.

It looks awkward imo. I might just remap.

Andrea Style, I see! That means near perfect. It was amazing. I love this.

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