DJNightmare wrote:

Blue = Suggestions
Red = Recommended
Green = Comments

General
Please make use of Kiai time as a period of time where the music is, lets say epic. Try not to use it just for show in the the parts like (02:38:992 and 02:52:805). At least make a kiai period from 02:38:992 to 02:52:589 and so.
Also, i feel that some parts for the new hitcombo are put in an awkward way, try to fix it.

[Normal]

01:06:834 (1,2,3) - Try making it more curved and smooth. << i think that's ok
01:08:560 (5,6,7) - ^ << ^
01:24:747 (8) and 01:26:906 (2) - Overlapping it doesn't seem to have a nice pattern or symmetry. << fix it
02:22:589 (1,2,3,4) - Make it vertically symmetry would be nice (4 grid up is also good) << Well... I fix it but, symmetry.

[Insane]
Very well done, i can't seem to find any modding to be done. << thx

Good luck on your map =D

1. 01:03:380 (2,3,4) - this: http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot222-0.jpg it fits the song better
2. 01:08:776 (6) - clap
3. 01:48:920 (1) - add clap at the end
4. 01:50:647 (2) - remove clap
5. 01:51:078 (3) - add note on head
6. 02:36:402 (1,2,3,4,5) - spacing is different..?

1. 00:48:057 (1) - clap here
2. 01:02:301 (2) - it's hard to see the slider path because of slider (7) hitburst from the previous combo, how about this slider going left
3. 01:55:826 (5) - add finish it fits the music
4. 01:56:042 (7) - remove clap here
5. 02:21:510 (6) - add clap here

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

Hi, from my queue

good map, star

oh and why WIP, you should move to pending

Normal

1. 01:03:380 (2,3,4) - this: http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot222-0.jpg it fits the song better
2. 01:08:776 (6) - clap
3. 01:48:920 (1) - add clap at the end
4. 01:50:647 (2) - remove clap
5. 01:51:078 (3) - add note on head
6. 02:36:402 (1,2,3,4,5) - spacing is different..?

Hard

1. 00:48:057 (1) - clap here
2. 01:02:301 (2) - it's hard to see the slider path because of slider (7) hitburst from the previous combo, how about this slider going left
3. 01:55:826 (5) - add finish it fits the music
4. 01:56:042 (7) - remove clap here
5. 02:21:510 (6) - add clap here

that's all



Good luck~

JauiPlaY wrote:

Hi
Some suggestions:

[General]
I think the title should be lastendconductor?
And the background's size should be 1024x768.

[Normal]
00:54:316 (6) - Add clap to 00:54:747.
01:24:747 (8) - Add clap to 01:26:042.
01:34:891 (4) - Add clap.
01:36:618 (8) - ^
01:44:603 (7) - Remove clap from the end.
01:55:395 (4) - Add clap.
02:25:179 (T) - You have no custom hitsound so it's an useless timing point. Delete it.
02:37:697 (6) - Move to x256y320.
And you'd better control your combo between 3-6 since it's a normal diff.

[Hard]
00:28:201 (5) - Ctrl+R and more interesting.
01:15:467 (4) - Clap.
01:43:740 (1) - Add clap to the beginning.
02:45:251 (1) - Clap.

The hard was nice, but I'm afraid the normal was not good enough...really I mean.
Good luck~

L_P wrote:

hi.. from modq
although your mod is short, but your map is impressively clean , especially when it is made 9 months ago, god
im quite curious where the heck did you get those stars, in 3 pages of mods..? damn pro

General: if you find a MAT who dont wanna bubble too many maps, he will sure point out this: the gap between 2 diff. is too big (you know the score different is 8M

Normal
general: .. some very easy long sliders, some very hard notes sliders pattern, but kinda made it below 3 stars, pro.

00:32:949 (5,1) - me dont like overlapping the repeat sign in the lowest diff. although there is no problem at all, but not very pretty << Fix it
01:16:762 (1,2,3,4) - make it a curve? << No... This part is my mistake is distance...

02:16:546 (2,3,4,5) - 2 sliders or repeating slider? feel like it would be easier.. << Fix it
02:22:589 (1,2,3,4) - same << Fix it

Hard
OD is a bit too low, when i play this part 02:18:057 (6,7) - i misjudge it and play it like 1/4 but i still got 300...

00:09:639 (3,4,5,6) - feel like these 4 could make a rectangle, with bigger spacing << I don't want big spacing
01:03:812 (8) - maybe add 2 repeat? the next 2 notes seem out of arrangement to me..? << Not Wrong
01:29:496 (6,7) - feel like could do this, i think this looks prettier, and next slider is a repeat slider, that you could change it if you want to << Overlap...
02:42:445 (5,6) - stack these 2 together? << Humm... It's not wrong Maybe...

not much i could say, when this rank, i will surely play this haha.

edit: 800th post woohoo

nich95 wrote:

Hi, W h i t e

From my modding queue

[Normal]
00:26:042 (1) - Move slider down 2 slot. << fix it
00:58:848 (1) - Move slider left 2 slot. << fix it

[Hard]
01:42:661 (1) - Remove NC << Well... ok
02:43:524 (1) - Remove NC? << I think, that's ok

That's all, that I can find them.
nice map and song, star

Good luck.

Fenya wrote:

Hi

General:
I think .osb is unnecessary if you will not have SB nor custom hitsounds by .osb. << thx!

Normal:
Did CopyPaste in some parts? o.o << Ye..?
02:36:402 (1,2,3,4,5) - Spacing... Is supposed to be a normal, that these notes are like a stream? << fix it
02:37:697 (6) - Circle unnecessary, sounds bad D: << umm.. i think that's ok

Hard:
Good diff n.n
I think it would be better if you don't so many circles one above the other? http://puu.sh/iJnb << Ok... but I don't want to fix it... sorry
Did CopyPaste in some parts? o.o
00:18:920 (3) - 1 grid up << fix it
02:26:258 (6) - 1 grid down, so that the stream be symmetrical << fix it
02:33:164 (6) - 1 grid up << fix it

Well, I'm not good at this, I did everything I could >_< <<
Sorry for my bad English D:
Good work, good luck

hillaryzx wrote:

Here's my mod~ :3

General

- Inconsistency in Kiai time - http://puu.sh/iQHi

Normal

00:34:675(1) - add finish to the front of the slider << fix it
00:55:395(1) - add clap to the front of the slider << fix it
02:16:978(3) - extend this slider to 2:17:409 << Maybe it is not good... Sorry
02:23:021(2) - I sense wrong placed clap, should be at the tail of the slider << fix it

And Remapping...

Hard

01:16:114(1) - add finish at the beginning of the slider << fix it!!


What I can see is that my mod is short and the map is good.
Good luck!
And so, I'll take my leave...

S h i a wrote:

Oh hi hi hi o/
mod req. via my damn queue.

[Overall]
.osb file have different name with song. yes remove it.

[Normal]
hitsounds is kinda weird.
00:24:316 (1) - remove clap from middle of this slider and add clap at the end of the slider.
00:25:179 (2) - yes same ^
01:51:078 (4) - new combo here?
01:52:373 (1) - remove new combo
01:54:100 (4) - new combo
02:30:359 (3) - remove clap at slider ends
02:31:654 (4) - add clap
02:33:812 (4) - remove clap

All fix it

you should add SC2 clap to these sliders and notes below << if i make this, kiai time is so short... and beat is so wrong...
02:40:719 (3) - slider head
02:42:445 (1) - slider head
02:44:172 (3) - slider head
02:45:898 (1) - slider head
02:47:625 (4) -
02:49:352 (1) - slider head
02:51:078 (3) - slider head
02:54:532 (3) - slider head
02:56:258 (1) - slider head
02:57:985 (3) - slider head
03:01:438 (4) -
03:03:165 (1) - slider head

[Hard]
consider adding some SC2 clap. if you accept Normal's hitsounds suggestion
00:14:927 (5) - a triple stream here is weird, move this note to 00:14:711 sounds better to me. << fix it
00:38:560 (6) - weird triple sounds. better like this.

SPOILER

and don't forget add clap to << fix it
00:52:373 (6) - yeah. same weird thing happens. suggest you fix as 00:38:560 .
01:29:603 (7) - add note here? << humm... i think that's ok...
01:43:740 (1) - remove this clap at slider head. << fix it

Well. that's all. good luck.
Fight!

Really Thx a lot!!!

1. I suggest offest 7042 to you
2. Inconsistency in Kiai Times:
   Normal Kiai #2: Starts on 02:38:992, ends on 02:52:373
   Hard Kiai #2: Starts on 02:38:992, ends on 02:40:503
   make them the same?

ikari_kyon wrote:

hi /o/ good morning

[General]

- add W_h_i_t_e to tags? people with spaces on their user names always add those tag type
- soft-hitclap.wav uh this custom hitsound doesnt fit to this song >: but is just my opinion

<<

[Hard]

1. 00:07:049 (1) - finish to start of slider
2. 00:10:287 (6) - try a clap, for a double clap pattern, the start feels a bit boring
3. 00:13:740 (4) - clap ↑
4. 00:33:812 (7) - no finish on end of slider
5. 00:34:675 (1) - finish on start of slider
6. 00:58:848 (7) - finish on start of slider
7. 01:00:143 (4) - clap
8. 01:00:359 (5) - no clap
9. 01:08:344 (6) - clap on end of slider, is a nice double clap with your stream
10. 01:10:287 (5) - clap, for keep double clap from up
11. 01:22:157 (6) - clap on end of slider
12. 01:25:827 (3) - clap
13. 01:40:287 (3) - Im not sure if this slider is rankable, is getting back on the same slider tick
14. 01:56:474 (8) - finish on start of slider
15. 01:56:906 (9) - finish on end of slider
16. 02:25:179 (1) - clap on start of slider, feels better with clapping pattern change
17. 02:38:992 - Im not sure if this would be a nice place to add a second kiai, the first is enough

<< I don't want that...

[Normal]

- why this start later than [Hard]?

1. 00:58:848 (1) - clap on end of slider, support the clap on the repeat
2. 01:11:366 (3) - missing clap on start of slider
3. 01:13:093 (2) - no clap on start of slider, is enough with finish
4. 01:16:762 (1) - this red tick dont follow nothing on the song
5. 01:34:244 (1,2) - dont stack objects on the easiest diff, this should be played by beginners
6. 01:50:647 (2,3,1) - ↑
7. 01:52:373 (2) - no clap on end of slider
8. 01:53:668 (3,1) - dont stack
9. 01:54:100 (1) - no clap on end of this slider
10. 02:16:978 (3,4) - ↑
11. 02:22:589 (1) - no clap on end of slider
12. 02:23:021 (2) - clap on start of slider
13. 02:25:611 (1) - is totally covered by previous spinner hitburst, please move to other location
14. 02:35:970 (2) - stack on 1/1 and at end of slider may be fine, but dont get risk
15. 02:40:503 - oh you forgot the kiai from [Hard] xD if you wanna keep the second kiai from normal, check the kiai from this timeline to 02:52:373.
16. 02:46:546 (2) - delete this note please, is easiest for newbies witouth this
17. 02:47:625 (4,5) - dont stack
18. 03:00:359 (2) - please delete
19. 03:01:438 (4,5) - dont stack

LKs wrote:

From 【All requests posted here will be modded】 queue

General

1. I suggest offest 7042 to you
2. Inconsistency in Kiai Times:
   Normal Kiai #2: Starts on 02:38:992, ends on 02:52:373
   Hard Kiai #2: Starts on 02:38:992, ends on 02:40:503
   make them the same?

Normal

custom slidertick is needed..you missed so many clap sound due to long sliders
01:11:366 (3) - clap
02:14:819 (1) - NC
02:16:114 (2) - remove NC
02:28:632 (1) - NC
02:29:496 (2) - remove NC, you must set NC on downbeat

Hard

01:57:229 (10) - I don't think it's necessary to NC here
02:14:603 (7) - whistle
02:15:035 (3) - move whislte to the beginning
02:15:467 (4) - whistle
02:26:150 (5) - clap here but not at 02:26:258
02:28:308 (6) - clap
02:29:603 (5) - clap here but not at 02:29:711
02:33:056 (5) - ^
02:36:509 (5) - ^
02:35:214 (6) - clap

quite good, GL

Frostmourne wrote:

Hi W h i t e (sorry for late modding, I was reading a book yesterday and twice to get exam )

From my mod queue (You don't need to follow all of my mod because it just be a suggestion)

Normal
00:37:265 (3) - move tail to x:444 y:252 and middle to x:476 y:192 for better balance
00:41:582 (1) - move up 2 grid can make it neat due to this 00:44:603 (2) - (middle of the hole of the slider)
00:58:848 (1,2,3) - I suggest you to remove all these clap because it will be a good sign to start next part
01:52:373 (2) - ^ and 2 clap (from 01:53:668 (3) - ) in 1 period is abnormal
02:34:667 (1) - move to x:256 y:72 , this will stack last 02:31:646 (5) -
02:35:962 (2) - then , you must move this to x:256 y:312
02:36:394 (3) - 1 grid right for balancing and 2 grid up for saving distance
02:37:689 (4) - yep , move this up 2 grid to stack with 2
02:51:070 (3) - remove this clap at the tail , it's not quite appropriate to use double clap in this part.

All fix it

Hard
00:31:214 (4) - up 1 grid to make it symmetrical to (2) and complete stack with 00:29:488 (5) - << No.1 is fix, but stack is not good, I think


Hard is good



Good luck ~

wmfchris wrote:

[General]
kiai time: they should be same for both of your diffs and should start and end on downbeat.

[Hard]
Fix the kiai time as stated.
00:16:322 (3) - try clapping at the end
00:48:049 (1) - down 1 grid lv4
01:02:293 (2) - new combo
01:55:818 - ^?
02:10:495 (1) - whistle?
02:50:854 (8) - clapping in the middle sounds a bit odd to me

*In your diff it seems that your NC pattern refers to your placement, but better fits the accent of the song as well orz.
*I can't get your logic between one clap and two consecutive claps... but the rest of the hitsounds are well used.

[Normal]
- I want to point out that generally each combo are too long, and the intervals are unstable (3 bars or 4 bar, etc.) as I mentioned, NC referring to the song is more important than referring the pattern (not meaning NC to notify spacing change)

Maps are quite nicely done. Besides problem mentioned above, what bothers me is that you repeat quite a lot in the mapset, and there's really no highlighted section corresponding to the song. If such stuffs can be improved I think your map has quite a lot of potential, so good luck there~

Kawayi Rika wrote:

Hi ~ W h i t e ~

Mod time for my Queue ~

Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[General]

1. Remove AudioLeadIn pls.

[Hard]

1. AR-1 will be better with this song.
   
   Skip add finish
   
   and fix it thx!!
2. 01:43:732 - Add finish.
3. 01:29:919 - Unsanped KIAI time line.
4. 01:57:545 - ^
5. 02:38:984 - ^
6. 02:52:365 - ^
7. 02:52:797 - ^
8. 03:06:610 - ^

That's all ~ nice map ~

Good luck ~

Odaril wrote:

..if your mapset has two difficulties, one of them cannot be insane.

BeatofIke wrote:

[General]
*Offset is late. Try changing it to 7020, assuming that your Universal offset is 0. If you do, make sure you change the offset and re-snap all the timing sections in all difficulties.

Good Map otherwise. No kudosu please.

Before Offset is 7020 but not good...

Jacob wrote:

Odaril wrote:

..if your mapset has two difficulties, one of them cannot be insane.

Even though you have a normal and a hard, the hard is 4.98 stars and has an insane ranking. This may be an issue.

Remove "w_h_i_t_e" from the tags in your normal difficulty.

ikari_kyon wrote:

add W_h_i_t_e to tags? people with spaces on their user names always add those tag type

Jacob wrote:

[Normal]

The combo changes listed below are to keep the combos consistent. It's very recommended that you fix them.

00:26:034 - Remove NC
00:27:761 - Add NC
00:29:488 - Remove NC
00:31:214 - Add NC
00:32:509 - Remove NC
00:34:804 - Remove clap
01:05:315 - Remove NC
01:05:747 - Add NC
01:06:826 - Remove NC
01:13:085 - Add clap
01:15:675 - ^
01:16:920 - Remove clap
01:18:265 - Remove NC
01:21:718 - ^
01:22:149 - Make it so that the reverse arrow of this slider is at 01:22:581. The current slider doesn't fit. Make sure to fix the spacing of the notes after it. If you do this, consider adding a note at 01:23:444.
01:23:660 - Add NC
01:24:308 - Remove NC
01:24:739 - Make the reverse arrow of this slider at 01:25:171. If you do that, try adding a note at 01:26:034.
01:32:941 - Remove NC
01:33:372 - Add NC
01:42:869 - Remove NC
01:44:164 - Add NC
01:45:920 - Remove NC
01:47:185 - Add NC
01:48:912 - Make the slider here like the one before it. Also, remove NC.
01:50:639 - Add NC
01:51:070 - Remove NC
02:14:380 - ^
02:18:811 - Add NC
02:16:538 - Remove NC
02:21:286 - ^
02:21:718 - Add NC
02:31:646 - Remove NC
02:32:077 - Add NC
02:33:804 - Remove NC
02:35:962 - Add NC
02:36:394 - Remove NC
02:37:689 - Remove this note.

can't mod hard right now, too busy

no kudosu

Ch1ka wrote:

Hi, W h i t e. I love 07th Expansion, so I'm here.
If it wouldn't be helpful, don't give kudosu.

[General]
Why White in tags? And add zts in tags, he is composer.

[Normal]
01:01:430 (3) - Asymmetrically relatively to (2)
02:37:689 (2) - Isn't it excess? It would be better without that circle.

[Hard]
00:12:221 (5) - Add NC
00:13:085 (1) - Remove NC
00:26:898 (2) - Not perfectly symmetrical slider (nazi)
00:30:351 (2) - ^
00:31:214 (4) - ^
00:32:077 (1) - ^
00:33:804 (7) - ^
00:36:826 (7) - ^
01:29:272 (5) - Clap?
02:37:689 (1) - Isn't it excess? It would be better without that circle.

Good map and awesome song. GL and bye.

I delete White in tag... It's last

wcx19911123 wrote:

from my queue

[General]
Normal is totally an Easy diff imo , I strongly suggest to add a diff between them

[Normal]
01:23:444 (3,4,1,2) - if you rename this to Easy diff , plz change this to 2 repeat sldiers
01:34:236 (2,3) - ^
01:38:984 (4,1) - this anti-jump play very odd to me , why not use 1.0x spacing here?
01:50:639 (1,2) - if you rename this to Easy diff , plz change this to slider
02:16:970 (2,3) - ^

[Hard]
01:49:128 (3) - change to 1/6 slider?

diffs are fine , but plz add a diff between this 2 diffs , or the diff spread is really bad. the scores jump from 0.7m to 8.5m..
if you fixed the diff spread , then feel free to call me back

val0108 wrote:

woo!!woo!!woooooo!! .

Ormax wrote:

Hi!So,just a little mod,some suggestions :3

[Normal]

01:00:567 (2,3) - Those look better if placed like this: http://puu.sh/mk3u
01:05:747 (2) - and 01:06:826 (3) - The gap between them is a bit confusing.Maybe add a note on 01:06:610 - ?
02:16:106 (3,4,5) - This is kinda hard to read,guess a note on 02:16:322 - would make it easier.

[Hard]

01:28:408 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This pattern seems deformed (by distance snap?), maybe you should try moving 01:28:193 (8) - a bit and then making it look like this: http://puu.sh/mk9H ?
02:38:121 (1) - This slider is a bit rotated and looks strange...

So,that's all,hope something will be usefull ._.
Good luck,i'm waiting for this ranked :3

wcx19911123 wrote:

if I recall, the Normal is only 0.7m scores when I modded this map..
uh.. now is 2m, maybe it's my fault when I modded it last time..orz
anyway, the diff spread is fine now, so
bubbled

LunarSakuya wrote:

I see an OSB file and I don't think you're using a Storyboard? Delete it? xD sorry

Jacob wrote:

LunarSakuya wrote:

I see an OSB file and I don't think you're using a Storyboard? Delete it? xD sorry

This isn't unrankable. In fact, it's discouraged to point this out in a map. Especially a bubbled one.

• 
  The source should be "Umineko no Naku Koro ni Chiru" because this song is from Umineko EP8.

1. 01:07:042 (4) - Don't stack a circle under the end of slider on the easiest diff. Newbie cannot read it.
2. 01:42:869 (1) - Add finish to the end.
3. 02:16:538 (4) - It's better not to use 1/2-beat-length slider which has two repeats on Normal diff. Or at least avoid making it overlap with the previous note.
4. 02:35:962 (3) - The same reason as above, please don't stack it.

1. 01:43:732 (1) - Add finish to the top.

happy30 wrote:

The offset is a little late. Try -6 (7036)
Also, try adding a few more tags? (frederica bernkastel lambdadelta chiru)


Nothing else is wrong in the map so PM me for a rebubble once you've fixed the offset/tags

Suzully wrote:

Hello old bubble o/

[General]

• 
  The source should be "Umineko no Naku Koro ni Chiru" because this song is from Umineko EP8.

[Normal]

1. 01:07:042 (4) - Don't stack a circle under the end of slider on the easiest diff. Newbie cannot read it.
2. 01:42:869 (1) - Add finish to the end.
3. 02:16:538 (4) - It's better not to use 1/2-beat-length slider which has two repeats on Normal diff. Or at least avoid making it overlap with the previous note.
4. 02:35:962 (3) - The same reason as above, please don't stack it.

[Hard]

1. 01:43:732 (1) - Add finish to the top.

After fix, send me PM or catch me in game please.
Oops only 10 mins have passed since happy's o.o
The offset seems fine to me though.

happy30 wrote:

remove chiru from the tags (since you've added it in the source now )

happy30 wrote:

okay lets do it again

Suzully wrote:

Enjoy your first ranked!

bbj0920 wrote:

축하드립니다!
비긴 오스님의 첫 랭곡을 진심으로 축하드립니다!!! ㅋㅅㅋ