i get what you are doing with these notes, but i find this better to listen to:
00:11:641 (15,16) - one tick back
00:12:194 (17) - two ticks back
00:14:641 (25) - one tick back
00:22:220 (54) - one tick back
00:22:457 (55,57) - delete
00:24:746 (67) - one tick back
00:25:299 (69) - delete maybe
00:27:272 (78) - one tick back
not sure if this is just me but imo it's worth trying
(1/4 snapping)
00:43:457 (219) - might be best to make this note "k", so you could use something like "kkkdk" for 00:43:141 (215,216,217,218,219) if you want
00:52:299 (322) - probably "k" here, you could change 00:52:062 (319,320,321,322) to be something like "dddk" if you want
00:54:509 (348) - this is fine how it is but you do map this same sound as "k" a lot, so you could swap 00:54:430 (347,348) if you want, or use another pattern
00:57:983 (390) - should probably be "k", you could maybe map 00:57:667 (386,387,388,389,390) as "kkddk" or another pattern if you want
00:58:615 (398) - this should probably end as "k" too, 00:58:299 (394,395,396,397,398) and change this pattern a little so that it's not only monos