Suna no Kodomo

00:08:363 (8363|1,8508|0,8605|1,8702|0,8945|1) - Watch out for hand balance, really heavy on left hand especially with the mixed 1/4 and 1/6 snaps. Maybe arrange like this?

00:08:736 (8736|1) - suggest to move on col 3 to avoid that little trill happening on col 12 and for more smooth transition

00:09:367 - there is a missing guitar here

since the snaps here are simplified can suggest something like this if you like it

start at 00:09:173 -

00:10:921 - missing guitar vocal here?? Add on col 1?

00:14:334 (14334|0) - Why suddenly stop mapping it as jump/doubles? You were consistently doing it in this section

Applies to 00:15:499, 00:16:664

00:16:664 (16664|3) - your LN at 00:17:440 (17440|3) - sounds better to start at 00:16:664, lengthen it 00:16:664 to 00:20:159

00:17:440 (17440|3,17440|2) - This feels kind of sudden to suddenly stop mapping the guitar and mapping that sound instead (which isn't very synced because it starts way earlier)

I would suggest to keep mapping the same sounds until 00:18:994

00:22:571 (22571|2) - Move to col 3 to avoid jacking with 00:22:765 (22765|2) - ?

01:48:785 (108785|1,108979|1) - Same

00:23:800 - You could add a note here for the guitar, similar to what you did on 00:28:460 (28460|2)

00:28:105 - 01:47:911 - 02:32:183 - Missing double aaaa

00:28:396 (28396|1) - remove this note?? You only used doubles for the kicks/claps or mostly on 1/1 rhytms

00:28:605 (28605|3,28897|0,28897|1,29479|3,29479|2) - This section feels pretty inconsistent from the previous part (00:23:945), not sure if this was done on purpose or not

00:31:227 (31227|0,31809|1) - End 1/2 earlier at 00:32:100 - since the vocal more abruptly cuts off? Would then also add a note here at 00:32:246 - for the swinged vocal

00:33:557 (33557|1) - Similarly here, I would shorten to 1/2 only, and add note at 00:33:848 - for guitar

00:34:431 - Also add note here for similar reason to the other 1/2 additions for guitar. Could make it 1/2 LN overlapped with 1/1 like this

00:34:722 - to 00:48:702 - Is a lot emptier in terms of rhythm and does make it feel boring compared to the more active sections at 00:20:741 - or 00:48:702 - where there's a more consistent 1/2 rhythm to at least keep the flow consistent. I'd recommend at least having a base 1/2 rhythm for the player to follow on top of what you've already mapped.

00:35:095 (35095|3) - suggest to end the LN on the white line above 00:35:678 - since this vocal isn't that short

00:38:508 - You could add a note here to represent the louder sound (also to 00:39:091)

Applies to 00:47:829

00:39:027 (39027|1) - change this note into a 1/4 LN ??? There are already other 1/4 LNs that you used but i think you missed this

you can also move 00:38:882 (38882|0) - on col 3 to give a different feeling between vocals and drum

00:39:965 - you can make another LN at 4th col like the LN at 2nd col.

at 00:42:295 too, maybe add one note at 2nd col?

00:42:959 (42959|0) - suggest to move on col 2 and 00:43:251 (43251|1,43251|0) - the LN on col 1 and the other note on col 3 for better spread

00:46:372 (46372|2) - maybe you can remove this LN

00:46:955 (46955|1) - Maybe move to 3rd column for more variety in the placement? (This seems to be a 3 notes anchor 00:45:790 (45790|1,46372|1,46955|1))

00:48:217 - add a note at 2nd col?

at 00:51:033 as well, you can add one note at 1st col

00:48:266 - 00:48:557 - I think it'd be alright to add doubles here for the 1/4 percussion. Depending on how hard or easy you want it, you can do a simple [12][34] jumptrill, or you can jack them like this as an example:

00:57:586 - 00:57:877 - 02:12:149 - 02:12:440 - 02:21:469 - 02:21:761 - Same applies here

00:49:576 (49576|3) - Maybe could move the LN end to white line here, since the vocal ended there

00:49:867 - 00:59:188 - 01:02:683 - Add doubles here. For the first chorus of the song, just having consistent 1/1 doubles provides a good base structure for the player to grasp onto while playing.

01:08:508 - 01:13:168 - 01:17:829 - 01:22:489 - 01:27:149 - 01:31:809 - 01:34:139 - 01:36:469 - 01:38:800 - 01:41:130 - 01:43:460 - 01:52:780 - 02:24:236 - 02:41:712 - 03:00:353 - 03:39:965 - 03:43:460 - 03:49:285 - Same

00:53:654 (53654|3,53945|2) - For pitch relevancy, could be nice to shorten 00:53:654 (53654|3) - to rice note and put it in the same column as 00:53:945 (53945|2) - since vocal pitch is the same

00:54:319 (54319|3,54756|2) - the vocals here are really noticeable

00:54:756 (54756|2) - this should start on its correct place here on 1/3 00:54:707 - because at this point the previous vocal has a stop compared to the other vocals where they are continuous

so 00:54:319 (54319|3,54756|2) - resnap the ending and the start of those LN in the 1/3 00:54:707 - ?

00:55:984 - Missing note for the guitar?

00:56:421 (56421|1) - I think you could move this note to the left column, 1. for the pitch relevancy and 2. the 1st column in this specific timestamp is ghost :(((((

00:56:567 - 00:56:712 - Add note for the thump-like sounds?

00:56:940 (56940|3) - move on col 1 for better spread?

01:02:037 - Could add note here for the short 1/4 rhythm (also there is sound at 01:02:328 - but it's optional to add as it would create a 1/4 minijack)

01:16:018 - Add note here as well

01:04:804 (64804|3) - suggest to move on col 1 and 01:04:513 (64513|2) - on vol 4 for better spread

01:07:343 (67343|0,67343|1,67343|3) - I suggest to nerf this to be a jump/double, since it's kind of a quiet sound + you haven't really been using hand/triples in the map anyway

01:09:673 - you can add a note at 4th col, since I heard a loud guitar sound, 01:12:003, 01:16:664 as well. Also applies to 01:21:324 - 01:35:304 - 01:39:965 you can add a note to make it a double

01:09:965 (69965|2,69965|3) - Accidental jump/double? There's only vocal here (and guitar but its really quiet here so I don't think that should be applied anyway)

01:10:838 - Maybe add a note here to continue the rhythm? There's a loud guitar there anyway

01:12:586 (72586|2) - Can you extend this to end at 01:13:023 - ? If you do that, move 01:13:168 (73168|2) - to col 2 so there's more space between releases. Like this

01:21:906 (81906|1) - 01:31:227 (91227|3) - 01:40:547 (100547|3) - etc., Same

01:15:290 (75290|1) - suggest to move on col 3 for better spread

01:19:076 (79076|1) - suggest to end this LN for the voooOOOoooOOoooOOOooocal here 01:19:367 -

then change this 01:19:367 (79367|0) - into a 1/2 LN

there are two spelling at this point

01:20:241 (80241|1) - can moooOOOoooOOooOOooove... this on col 3 to differentiate from the previous chord since the structure synths are completely different

01:21:697 (81697|3) - Move to 3, move 01:21:406 (81406|1) - to 1 for better comfort, right hand is kind of yikes with 01:21:115 (81115|3,81115|2,81552|2,81697|3,81843|2) -

01:25:547 - 01:34:867 - 02:40:110 - 02:58:751 - 03:05:741 - 03:08:363 - 03:43:023 - 04:01:664 - Add notes for the 1/4 here

01:31:018 (91018|0) - Move to 3, shift 01:31:163 (91163|1,91309|2) - one column to the left (so it's 1-2). Generally, should try to avoid 1-2-1 LN + rice combos as it's a bit of a weird movement.

01:32:474 (92474|2) - can moooOOOoooOOooOoooove... this on col 2 to avoid that tiniy anchoring

01:34:431 - 01:39:091 - 01:41:421 - 01:43:751 - 02:01:372 - 02:25:693 - 02:26:275 - 02:37:343 - 02:46:664 - 02:51:033 - 02:55:984 - 03:02:974 - 03:05:013 - 03:05:304 - 03:07:634 - 03:16:955 - 03:21:615 - Add doubles for kicks. There is more, please check your consistency again.

01:40:921 (100921|2) - suggest toooOOoooOOooooOooo... extend this LN up to 1/1 lenght for the vocal

01:45:790 (105790|2) - you can make it a 1/2 LN so it will be similar to the part at 00:21:906

song is too catchy and stuck in my head :<

01:49:804 (109804|1,109950|2,110095|1) - can ctrl h for better balance

01:51:115 (111115|2) - move col 2 ?? Follow consistency like all the other similar pattern

01:52:862 (112862|0) - suggest to move col 3 to avoid the anchoring happening on col 1

01:54:528 (114528|3) - Probably move LN end to 01:54:819 since the vocal ends there

01:54:673 (114673|1,114819|0,114965|1) - Could rearrange to avoid left hand bias

01:57:086 (117086|3,117231|2) - Might control J to avoid the 3 note stack with LN at 01:56:503 (116503|3,116794|3,117086|3) -

01:58:979 (118979|2) - move on col 4?? Avoid that anchoring here

02:01:372 (121372|0,121518|1,121664|0,121809|1,121955|0) - While it's only 103BPM, this is still a map geared more towards beginners, so I would try to rearrange it so to avoid a one handed minitrill

02:02:765 (122765|1) - suggest to remove this note for consistency

then reduce the lenght of this 02:02:765 (122765|2) - down to 1/4 and add another 1/4 LN here 02:02:911 - on col 1 for the vocal

02:02:974 (122974|0) - I don't think it makes sense for the long note to continue like that, especially since the next vocal just ends immediately unlike the other times you mapped continuous LNs like this, I suggest to just end it on 02:03:266

02:03:639 (123639|3) - i think you missed a vocal here 02:03:930 -

suggest something like this as rearrangement if you like it

start at 02:03:639 -

02:05:824 (125824|0,125969|3,126115|0) - Better to control H to avoid the shield at 02:05:387 (125387|0,125824|0) - and left hand bias

02:05:824 (125824|3,126115|3,126406|3,126843|3,127134|3,127425|3,127717|3) - quite a pressure here on col 4

suggest to move 02:05:824 (125824|3,126115|3,126406|3,126843|3) - on col 3 and 02:05:969 (125969|2) - on col 4

02:06:469 - There's a vocal note here

02:11:712 (131712|3,131712|2) - 02:32:100 (152100|2,152100|0) - remove double (kick is too weak)

02:21:324 (141324|1) - You could move this to 4th column to avoid the anchor (which I am pretty sure was representing the drum? if not then u could probably just ignore)

02:21:324 (141324|1,141324|3,141324|0) - Reduce to double. Could then make 02:21:469 - a double since they're all the same strength kicks and no minijacks

02:23:736 (143736|0) - Left hand bias, move to 3 to make redistribute the weight

02:29:770 - Missing guitar note?