00:00:070 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - your rhythm in two first parts is a bit off, you may change it to something like on my example https://osuazinlen.s-ul.eu/r5LnnNk8
00:14:641 (6,1) - might be hard to read for players at this skill level, plus it looks kinda ugly, move to the right slightly pls so 6 leads into 1
00:16:998 (1,2,3,4) - the backround sounds doesn´t stress through the song, this secuence must be simplify to have more consistency on the whole map. I recommend you begin the NC in 17:212