00:17:867 - strong vocals ends here which could be represented better with a circle on 00:17:690 and 3/2 slider after it. Although this skips the 00:18:043 kick here, I think this is more representable of the song.
00:19:278 - You could solve the same issue here by making 00:18:749 (1) a reverse and adding circle 00:19:278 here.
01:15:219 (1) consider spacing this away from 8 instead of being stacked under it to emphasize the finish
01:52:455 (2,3,4) – I think it would be cool to stack 3 to 2 instead of 4 to make the movement increasing gradually (stacked->unstacked) to reflect the drums, still I get your idea that 3 is a loud vocal so feel free to ignore