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you don't need this spinner imo 00:00:188 (1) -

00:03:187 (1,2) - This jump is the same distance as 00:03:687 (5,6) - but 00:03:854 (6) - needs to have so much more emphasis because it is by far the most important note in the combo. Consider spacing like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15741040/3921

00:03:937 - just get rid of this green line cause youre not using it.

00:04:687 (2,3) - this is pretty overmapped considering there isnt anything in the song that supports a cirlce on 00:04:854 (3) - , consider using a 1/2 slider on 00:04:687 (2) -

00:05:521 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - I know what you're mapping here cause i did it too, but this is far more intense than the song calls for especially considering you use a cut stream. I also think the rhythm is a little too intense for this small section considering its not supported by the drums. HOWEVER, if you are attached to rhythm consider seriously reducing the spacing https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15741129/ed75

00:09:187 (1) - This is completely personal, but i strongly suggest keeping straight sliders on a 5-15 degree tilt for better aesthetics/structure https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15741137/4d02

00:14:104 (4,1) - it would be good if you stacked this so it better for reading http://prntscr.com/v72tbr

00:15:687 (6,7,8) - This is overmapped, consider using 1/2 rhythm

00:20:187 (1,2,3) - These need a lot more punch cause the song is so strong here especially considering the jumps before them. I strongly suggest increase spacing between them

00:22:187 (1,2,3) - The drum rhythm changes here compared to 00:20:187 (1,2,3) - which you map using the same rhythm. I'd map these accordingly

00:23:521 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - same as #1951628 but also you have a really cool drum pattern underneath here that you ignore by mapping it this way. I think changing the rhythm to accommodate for it would be beneficial

00:25:687 (3,4,1) - 4 is the same distance from 3 and 1 but varies in timing so i think continuing the stack from 00:25:354 (2,3) - to would be good to help. Keep in mind the phrasing doesnt change until 00:26:187 (1) - so having 4 be different from 2 and 3 is kind of odd https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15741182/a219

00:31:521 (2,3) - missed 1/4 rhythm 00:31:771 -

00:31:687 (1,2,3) - 00:31:854 (3) - you should do something to emphasize this snare

00:36:187 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1,2,1) - It would be nice to have a coherent structure to these 1-2s instead of seemingly arbitrary placement but this is very subjective

00:41:021 (4,5,6) - The spacing here is really high in considering the song is slowing down and in in comparison to the spacing at the beginning of the map. Consider reducing

00:41:354 (6) - the rhythm here should be like this http://prntscr.com/v72zsn or this http://prntscr.com/v730l1

00:56:187 (1,2) - the spacing here doesn't need to be this big

00:57:021 (3) - this is supposed to be 1/6, and since you're mapping it as a slider anyway, may as well change it

overlap this 00:58:687 (2,3) -

01:04:188 (1) - you can make a cool slider art here :) like this 01:12:187 (1) -

01:07:937 (2,3,4,1) - This is really big spacing for like the calmest part of the song, this needs to be heavily reduced

01:07:937 (2,3,4,1) - Kinda like a previous issue but the spacing here is really large for starting on a blue tick, probably best to reduce it

01:19:521 (3) - This would be infinitely better as a 1/2 slider circle than what you have now. By changing it you could get so much more emphasis and kick here.

01:21:187 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 01:23:187 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - you need to keep these patterns the same since the phrasing of the song doesnt change at all

01:36:187 (1,2,3) - the structure here can be better! something like this http://prntscr.com/v739qy

01:36:187 (1,2,3,4) - These are really underwhelming especially coming off of the massive stream and jumps. You can give these a good spacing increase.

01:40:687 (2,3,4) - this is really overmapped, consider simplifying rhythm

01:48:687 (2,3,4) - this should be 1/4

01:50:520 (4) - You miss an important point in the song when you map the stream this way. Consider changing so that it reflects the vocals and change in drums

01:51:854 (5) - I think you should go massive jump here but thats just me

02:06:187 (1,2,3) - This rhythm is wrong, it should be https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/15741266/b225

the spacing here 02:08:187 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - should be consistent with this 02:10:187 (1,2,3,4) - , 02:12:187 (1,2,3,4) - , 02:12:187 (1,2,3,4) - and this 02:14:187 (1,2,3,4) -

02:14:521 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - This is a really big jump for a stream that starts on a blue tick, I would decrease the spacing here to make it more readable or change 02:14:521 (4) - to a 1/1 slider so you can make 02:14:521 (4) - active

02:15:271 (5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3) - the rhythm here should be like this http://prntscr.com/v73qbq or this http://prntscr.com/v73rdk

02:15:521 (8,9,1) - drums change here but they are still mapped the same as the snare, consider lowering the spacing for these like you've done previously in the map

02:16:521 (1,2,1,2) - this should not be 1-2 jumps. because there is no drum beat here 02:16:687 (2,2) - make this into sliders