I'm a bit late, sorry. Well, lets begin:- This map mp3 bitrate isn't allowed (320kbps). You have to encode this mp3 to 192~128kbps and do a fullsubmission.
- Timing doesn't sound good to me. I think you should search for someone to recheck timing.
- Remove from Tags "Lacuna Coil Trip The Darkness". Title and Artist words count as tags.
- I think that you should remove from the title "(Official)". It doesn't seem necessary. It is necessary to add (for example) "Techno Remix" when it's a remixed version of the original song but this song isn't a remix, it's the original version.
- A background image would be nice. I know that this map isn't finished but I think you should add a backgound anyways.
- [Easy]
This is definitely not an Easy. I highly recommend you to rename this difficulty to "Normal".
I also highly recommend you to use Grid Level 3. It's way better and helpful to make better slider shapes and patterns.
Oh, talking about patterns.. try to avoid making linear patterns. They're boring to play. Be creative and make some more curved sliders too 
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The samples volume it's reaaaaaaaally high (100% o.o). I think you should lower it to 50%.
You should use more hitsounds (claps, whistles), not only hitfinish.
And also, you should adjust your difficulty settings at Song Setup. I suggest you to use this settings:[list:db999]
- HP Drain Rate: 2
- Overall Difficulty: 3
- Circle Size: 4
- Approach Rate: 6
Here are a lot of spacing problems. You have to map with "
Distance Snap" activated. It places notes in the playfield according to their timeline ubication. Please check all spacings with Distance Snap activated and fix them. I'm not going to point out spacing problems in this mod. Find them by yourself
. I'll only give you an example:
00:08:414 (2) 
This note isn't placed correctly.
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But here, I placed it correctly
00:08:169 (2) - This note sounds off. Move this note to the next white tick. I also suggest you to remove hitfinish here and consider mapping the empty part between this note and the next one (1). It's boring to wait all those seconds to click 2 notes again aaaaaand wait once again the same ammount of seconds to click 2 more notes.
00:10:126 (2) - ^ Same as above
00:12:082 (2) - ^
00:14:038 (2) - ^
00:15:995 (2) - ^
00:17:951 (2) - ^
00:19:908 (2) - ^
00:21:864 (2) - ^
00:25:044 (3) - This slider sounds off too. Move it to
00:24:554 and make it 2 ticks larger (end at
00:25:533). I also don't uderstand that white point you added at
x176 y240:
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It's useless, it doesn't change the slider shape. You should delete it.
00:27:734 (7) - This note sounds off too. Move it to
00:27:978 so it fits with the vocals. Oh I also suggest you to remove hitfinish. It doesn't fit here in my opinion.
00:28:957 (1,2) - Try this. I think that it sounds way better and It's easy for beginners (Ignore the slider shape and desing. I did it randomly)-
00:32:625 - Why is this Break here all of a sudden? Please map this Break. You can try this to replace that break if you like how it sounds:
SPOILER- Replace 00:32:380 (3) with a slider, with endpoint at 00:33:359.
- Add a note at 00:33:848.
- Add a slider at 00:34:337 with repeat at 00:34:826 (ends at 00:35:315 obviously).
- Add a note at 00:35:804.
- Add a slider at 00:36:293 and make it end at the white tick (00:36:782).
- Add a note at 00:37:272.
- And to end this boring procedure add a slider at 00:37:761 and make it end at 00:38:494.
00:40:206 (1) - Remove this new combo and hitfinish at end. The new combo is not necessary and the hitfinish doesn't fit in my opinion. Also.. don't place sliders like this. The slider
(2) end it's hidden by slider
(1) end. Try to avoid this spacings and overlaps. They're confusing for beginners.
00:40:206 (1) - Same as above about hifinish.
00:41:184~
00:43:630 - Why is this part empty? You should map this.
00:44:119 (1) - This slider end sounds off. Make it end at the white tick (
00:44:608) and remove hitfinish at the end of the slider. It doesn't fit.
00:45:342 (2) - This sounds off too
Try to move this slider to
00:45:097, make it 1 tick larger, add 1 repeat to it and delete
00:46:076 (3). I think it sounds better.
00:46:565 (3) - I suggest you to delete this note. It doesn't seem necessary and I think that it sounds better if you delete it.
00:47:054 (3) - New combo here. It fits with the vocals. Also, this is the chorus. I recommend you to add a green section here with Kiai Time and then add another green section at
01:04:662 to end the Kiai.
00:49:255 (1,2,3) - This may be a bit difficult. I suggest you to delete
(1) and
(3). It sounds better and it's more easy for beginners.
00:49:989 (6) - Add a repeat to this slider. It sounds way better in my opinion.
00:56:347 (5) - Move this note somewhere else because it's being hidden by the previous slider
(4).
00:57:081 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This doesn't sound good and may be difficult. Try something like this instead (once again, ignore the slider shape:
Yes, you have to delete the first spinner. To replace that spinner I suggest you to try something like this:
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Also, move the spinner to
01:01:727 like in the image and make it end at
01:04:662.
01:10:776 (2) - Move this slider to the next white tick, and after that, do this (the next notes sound off too):
01:15:423~
01:17:868 - Another empty part. You should map this too.
01:18:357 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Why do you now follow the music when your previous notes were following the vocals? Also, move all the
(2) notes 1 tick fordward.
01:26:183 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Remove some hitfinishes. A lot of consecutive hitfinish doesn't sound good.
01:28:384 (7) - Move this slider 1 tick back and make it 1 tick shorter (notes placed at red ticks may be confusing for beginners so you should avoid placing notes in this difficulties). Also, this slider shape it's unrankeable. It's unrankeable to place a slider end at his own body.
01:31:074 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This sounds off. Listen this part with playback rate at 25% and try to make a better rhythm here. I also suggest you to unstack this notes. It's boring to keep clicking at various notes stacked without moving the cursor or something.
01:33:275 (7) - Just the same as I told you in 01:28:384. Also, add new combo.
01:34:009 - Add a Kiai Time here (end at
01:49:661).
01:37:677 (1) - Move this slider 1 tick back, delete 1 repeat of it, make it 2 ticks larger and remove new combo.
01:39:879 (3) - New combo here. It fits with the vocals.
01:41:835 (4) - ^
01:43:058 (7) - Hmmm this note doesn't fit too. I think that it sounds better if you delete it.Woah that's all. You have a lot to fix
I'm sorry for the looong mod. I did it for the best of your map. If you have any questions or something you can contact me ingame or just send me a forum PM. Oh and, I've started mapping my Insane. It may took a bit of time to finish.. I'm a slow mapper, but I'll try to finish my guest as fast as I can.