1. Incarnate (2,8 stars, 227 notes)
2. Rhythm Master (4,77 stars, 373 notes)
3. Rookie (1,9 stars, 125 notes)

---beatmap changes---
-changed hp rate it was too high
-changed bmp from 328 to 167 as suggested by insanityprawnboy
-changed slider velocity to 1.40
-changed overall dificulty
- resnaped and ajusted all notes and sliders
-added finishing and claping sounds to some notes
-adjusted some badly positioned notes ------------thanks to insanityprawnboy------------- 
-repositioned a few notes in easy mode

---21 jan---- 
-final beta test of normal version
-completed test version of easy mode, test and feedback please :)

---23 jan---
-updated and fine tuned normal version to be harder to pass, also changed sounds
-started to work on the hard version
- finished hard mode!!! (finnaly)
 
----27 jan-----
-updated normal version
-updated hard version
--- 7 fev ---
-updated hard and normal again
-updated all dificulties to fix timing and spacing/positioning-----thanks to saturos-fangirl-------
--- 9 fev--- 
-updated all versions the beginning of the maps where off sync so i had to resnap all notes
--- 13 fev ---
-updated normal to sync a few notes 
-changed  a few note position on all dificulties
---24--- fev
-updated a few issues with all dificulties
---25 fev---
- added a few sounds to easy and normal
-fixed a few notes on normal and hard
---design changes---
-added a background
-added background video
-added combo burst skin
- added skin
-fixed spinner background

Saturos-fangirl wrote:

02:22:66 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - the timing on this pattern doesnt fit the lyrics
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Saturos-fangirl wrote:

the text on the spinner still doesnt spin well

insanityprawnboy wrote:

Rookie:

No real problems

Incarnate:

00:26:85 (10) - Change this to a hitcircle at 0:26:852 and a 1-beat slider at 0:27:033 with 1 repeat - it sounds much better
(same pattern as at 00:32:63 (7,8) )
00:29:38 (1) - Extend this by 1/2 a beat
00:36:24 (4) - Extend by 1/2 a beat
00:42:03 (4) - Same as ^
didnt do this as it stays off rhythm if i do so
02:24:46 (8) - Make a slider that connects to next (1)
02:28:86 (1) - Perhaps add a hitsound to this (optional)
02:32:18 (2) - Make 1/2 a beat later
03:32:72 (1) - Add a finish to this (maybe a clap as well)

Distance snapping seems fine to me - I'll check Master in detail later - done

Starred


Edit: -

Rhythm Master:
00:29:56 (2) - Make this 1/2 a beat later
00:36:24 (4) - Extend by 1/2 a beat and put (5) on the white tick
placed 5 on white tick but slider is fine
01:31:46 (1,2) - Move left a little
01:38:294 - Put a circle here (stack over next (1,2) combo)
02:24:46 (8) - Same as on Incarnate
02:32:18 (2) - Make 1/2 a beat later
its fine unless you mean 3 which is the slider, if so its done
02:47:276 - Put a circle here next to the end of (6)
02:50:510 - Circle here (over grey (1,2) combo)
03:03:26 (2) - Extend by 1/2 a beat
03:32:72 (1) - Maybe add a clap as well? (optional)

whymeman wrote:

(Note: I'll try to put in as much as I can part by part with the best of my ability. Sorry if I over look any mistakes.)

Rhythm Master (Still checking....)

00:39:32 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - the spacing here seems a bit uneven.
fixed, thanks



**Side Notes**

I somehow got the first offset at 466ms and it worked fine for me but I could but wrong since the BPM can sometimes filp around or the offset might be "fake". Also, i'm checking with the current offset that it is set (on 6,250ms) so any problems posted is base off of the offset you currently have it on.

well... true.. that offset is correct but it could also be a fake... ill keep my offset as i think its not wrong and if i changed to your offset i would have to probably re-arrange the map to adjust the notes

Roley wrote:

Hey Aeon! Well, this is my second mod, hope it would be resourceful.
(btw i love the new skin you applied to the map!)

~(ROOKIE)~
01:19:791 (Slider 7) Make the ending beat of the slider a finish sound
done its better now
01:43:684 (Spinner) Extend it 'till 01:48:848. It will sound way better.
well.... ill give you a piece of advice... dont mod all maps with beatsnap 1/8 you should mod/make maps at their own rythm this map is 99% 1/4.....ok now about this error... not entirely correct i had to extend but not to your time i extented to 01:48:810... if you didnt point this out i would have never found it
(2 Mistakes..not bad )

~(INCARNATE)~
00:37:695 (5, 6) Move it 1/8th tick back. It sounds a bit off.
**Don't forget to resnap everything, since you moved it 1/8 tick. There's not much to resnap since there is a long break..**
done
02:26:528 (Slider 1) Too early! Go 1/8th tick forward, and make it repeat itself
didnt do this one, as its correct... its suposed to start when you hear the "UMM" and the curve on its is for the "NHE"
02:27:830 (Slider 1, Circle 2) Get Rid of it.
didnt do this one either as every slider here is for a word and if i did that it would not only make the song easier as it would break the flow, the note 2 is to add a hitsound to the begining of the slider where it goes "EEEH"
03:29:492 (Sliders 3-6) (look below)
a) get rid of slider 4 and slider 6 (now you should have combo 1-4)
b) Slider 3 should have its duration extended to 03:30:211
c) (New) Slider 4 should have its duration extended to 03:31:648 and make it repeat itself.
(A couple of mistakes..but its great!)
didnt do this one either because its a nice pattern but not only that each slider is for a word( i tend to use slider to words that drag along time) and the hitsound between them goes with the background beats

~(RHYTHM MASTER)~
02:41:348 Too late, move back 1/8th tick.
*Resnapping time!*
done
(I spot one mistake, AWESHUM! )

Incarnate had the most mistakes so far. I will be looking in this map another time to check for mistakes if applicable. Although the modding didnt take a long time because lots of the beats is in its proper place. I am sure you will get this map approved in no time!
well this map is 6 months old.... althoguht i only started working seriously on it about 3 months ago XD

btw, thanks for checking my map!

Sincerely,
Roley (Who is getting better in modding!!)
modding and mapping

If you fix Incarnate, I will star this map

Aeon wrote:

well...there are plenty of bats but like i said... i think my map has an anti-BAt agent i think bats are not attracted to this at all...

whymeman wrote:

Aeon wrote:

well...there are plenty of bats but like i said... i think my map has an anti-BAt agent i think bats are not attracted to this at all...

I wouldn't lose hope on this beatmap. It still has a higher chance of being noticed since its on the first page and you've gained alot of help with it too.

insanityprawnboy wrote:

Modding, go!

Rookie

01:43:68 (1) - start at 01:44:223, end at 01:48:893
didnt do it as the way it is its correct previously on 1 you hear "je" then where the spinner starts theres a spike in the voice thats what i tried to pickup then ends with the vocals because if i shorten it up ill have to place notes on those lyrics
while ignoring the previous ones hidden by the "jeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee" and i dont realy like that
02:07:217 - Needs a circle?
done
Incarnate:

00:37:65 (5,6) - sounds fine on white tick imo and players aren't likely to be able to read it's an 1/8 early
done there IS a slight difference but most people wont notice and this way it ends on a white tick
01:25:89 (1) - move a little to the right so it's symmetrical
done
02:17:27 (6,7,1) - not evenly spaced
might not seem like it but it is turn on distance snap and check
02:37:75 (1,1,1,1,1) - add a whistle to the start point of each of these
done
03:06:31 (4) - too far from (3)
done
03:15:12 (8) - line up horizontally with (6)
done
03:32:72 (1) - needs finish
done

BATs will show up eventually

BATs will show up eventually

Edit:
forgot to mention -> Song Setup -> Title -> just 'Inner Universe'
Artist -> 'Yoko Kanno, Origa' matches up with other ghost in the shell beatmap
need to full submit for it to work tho >_<

Edit(2):

Rhythm Master:

01:38:29 (1,1,2) - no new combo for second (1)
01:42:42 (7,1) - big gap here, can be left if intentional tho
02:17:99 (7,1) - move (1) to be symmetrical with next (2), move (7) to keep spacing
02:24:46 (1,1) - make ends overlap here? happens with next sliders
02:37:75 (1,1,1,1,1) - same as Incarnate
02:41:34 (1) - white tick plz (know it's slightly late but less likely to get a 100 on white)
02:50:15 (1,2,1) - no new combo on last (1)
03:02:90 (1,2) - bottom of (2) is off the screen slightly - move these one [grid level 2] square up
03:20:51 (5,1,2) - all the same combo please
03:32:72 (1) - as slider before allso has finish, can this be finish and clap? (Incarnate too?)

And that's it! Mainly just need to keep stacked notes the same colour, other than that it's all v.good.

MisterVercetti wrote:

After playing this, I feel a need to rant.

It's beatmaps like this that make me pissed off about the way the ranking system currently works. This is one of the coolest (if not THE coolest) map I've ever played, yet here it sits, without a single BAT having even entered this thread. And why? It's certainly not its priority ranking, which currently sits at +10 (is the Kudosu system even working?). It's not that you don't know what you're doing; this map is awesome, the people who've modded your map thus far seem to agree, and judging from the amount of Kudosu you've pumped into this thing, you obviously know what makes a good map. It's not that you lack dedication; you've put three Kudosu stars on this and have heeded every bit of advice that's been given to you. No; all it takes is looking at your profile. Not a single ranked beatmap yet, and a relatively low in-game rank. This only goes to prove the point I made in my Feature Requests thread that most BATs are extremely biased as to which maps they give modding/ranking priority to. Thus, maps that oftentimes still need work get ranked while truly stunning maps like this get left in the dust. That, to put it quite bluntly, is &%$@ING UNFAIR.

Okay, that's enough ranting for now. It's just that this map is so effing cool that there's simply no excuse a BAT hasn't modded this yet. Once I find a way, I will be making an appeal for a BAT to mod this map.
thanks for that.. but i dont think you will get any luck... like i said.... this map is anti-BAT i asked so many times in osu! channel for bats to mod it... did never asked directly though
But now for the VERY MINOR kinks that need fixin':

[Rookie]

0:33:599 (2) - New combo.
could you point out the time and combo again ? i didnt get it
0:31:370 (5-8) - Move this group a lv. 3 space left so that 5 aligns with 4, yet proper spacing is still maintained.
done
0:40:948 (2,3) - Move these a lv. 2 space right.
done
2:19:791 (2,3) - Try moving these next to the slider's end instead of underneath it, that way they don't give the impression that the end of 1, 2 and 3 are the same rhythm distance apart.
done
2:25:540 (1) - Move a lv. 3 space left.
2:27:696 (1) - ^
both done done
[Incarnate]

0:31:641 (5) - Move a lv. 3 space down.
done better i re-arrenged note positions
0:48:534 (5) - Align this with 4.
denied... if you notice the other noted before it they are going from bottom to top... following voice volume level

0:55:360 (6) - Optional: new combo for consistency's sake?
done ( how did i not i notice that before O.o
1:09:732 - I absolutely ADORE the way you link sliders like this!
thanks im glad you like my slider art

1:14:043 (2) - Try moving this next to the end of 1 instead of underneath it so the player doesn't get the impression they should click it at the same rate as the linked sliders.
done
1:34:552 (4,5,6) - These linked sliders are even cooler than the last set!
1:44:223 (1-4) - Move this group a lv. 3 space up so that 1 aligns with the end of the slider while maintaining correct spacing.
done
2:15:839 (3) - Move it a lv. 3 space right.
done
2:24:462 (8) - Two things: Optional: new combo? Also, yay for more cool, linked sliders!
nope... i believe it still belongs to the combo it is in
2:53:205 (2) - AWESOME SLIDER!!!
2:58:953 (1,2) - Optional: Link these? Pleeeease?
done
3:25:899 (7,8) - Move these a lv. 3 space up.
done
3:29:492 (3-6) - I just can't get enough of these!

[Rhythm Master]

(To save space, YAY, you kept the cool linked sliders! )

0:52:486 (1) - Move it a lv. 3 space down.
done
1:38:474 (1) - Seems a strange place to start a new combo...
nope... its a different beat so it has a different combo

2:12:246 (6,7,8) - Move this group a lv. 2 space left.
cant due to distance snap
2:24:462 (1,1) Optional: Link 'em? PLEEEZ?
done
2:42:785 (1,2) - Move 'em a lv. 3 space up.
done
2:50:510 (1) - Why is this note its own combo?
same as before
2:53:205 (3) - RETURN OF THE AWESOME SLIDER! YES!!!
3:03:264 (2) - Move this next to 1 instead; stacking them is misleading after the previous two stacked groups.
meant that way.... to make things a little harder
3:20:510 (5) - Start combo here instead of next note.
still belongs to the combo it is in
Optional: maybe extend this difficulty to the end of the song? After such a cool map, it seems shameful to let that much song go to waste! (Not to mention you have that weird bookmark floating around by itself; it made me think there was more!)
will analize and consider....although it might just become too long
As you can see, the problems left in this map are very, very minor, and can be fixed in minutes. Like I ranted before, considering how cool this map is, I'm nothing short of irate that the BATs haven't even given it the light of day.

I'd give you multiple stars if I could, but I can only give you the one, unfortunately. Outstanding! Better than several ranked maps I've played!

MetalMario201 wrote:

Super Nazi Mod Powers Go!

Rookie:

1. 00:36:24 (4,5,6) - I don't like 6 being located between 5 and the slider end on an Easy. Especially since in the font used, 5 and 6 look so much alike.
   cant realy do much about it....besides i've never had any problems...)
2. 01:17:09 (4) - Move forward by a 1/2 then shorten by a 1/2 to preserve the ending. Respace accordingly.
   done
3. 01:34:34 (4) - Move forward by a 1/2 (leave the ending where it ends up). Respace.
   done
4. 01:37:03 (6) - Lengthen by a 1/2.
   done
5. 01:58:95 (1) - Kind of mean how soon after the spinner we have notes. Please shorten by a 1/1.
   done
6. 02:11:88 (2,3) - These are the only 1/2s in the entire difficulty which aren't stacked. Stack please.

done

Incarnate:

1. 00:35:16 (2,3) - Spacing. Move further apart.
   done
2. 01:50:51 (2,3) - Spacing. Move further apart. Your other 1/2s are just barely touching.
   done
3. 01:53:38 (2,3) - ^
   done
4. 02:47:81 (1) - Lengthen this spinner by a 1/2 to end on the downbeat.
   done
5. 02:52:30 (1) - Move forward by a 1/2.
   done
6. 03:06:49 (4) - Move forward by a 1/2 then shorten by a 1/2 to preserve the ending. Respace accordingly.

done
Rhythm Master:

1. 01:21:40 (8) - Counterintuitive and doesn't synch to anything. Please remove.
   ... well i understadnthe counter intuitive part but it goes with the background beat if you check....something like "tum" "tum" but done since its counter intuitive(unless i separate from the stack)
2. 03:03:26 (2) - This slider's endpoint is outside the playing field, which is unrankable.
   done... that was odd
3. 03:06:31 (5) - ^

done... same as above lol
Also, have a non-wobbly spinner with a center pin:

Detective Tuesday wrote:

Starred! Very good map sir, just a few things.

RHYTHM MASTER.

I actually managed to find something after your update =P. Check it-

1:17:097 (4) - You're gonna wanna move this forward an eight note (onto the white mark). It's too early, the song's lyric falls right on the beat.

1:34:342 (4) - Same.

3:06:318 (5) - Same.

You had those same problems on the other difficulties, but it looks like you fixed them with your latest update.
Overall, very good. I hope this gets mapped as much as you do ^^.

:EDIT: Actually, found the same problem at 1:17:097 in Incarnate mode.

Larto wrote:

Storyboard is weird... It's visible for like 2 ms.

Also, the combonumbers are from the Xi-Style skin and you didn't ask the skinner if you could use them so, ask him or make your own please :S
ok ill make my own
Also your spinner circle isn't centered.
metalmario201 fixed that as soon i as finish my spinner background ill upload everything to fix slpinner circle
Easy:
02:03:26 (1) - Remove the sounds of this spinner please <_<
done
Pretty good otherwise, have a star~