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Raujika - Grim

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JauiPlaY
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JauiPlaY
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2013年1月22日 at 21:53:03

Artist: Raujika
Title: Grim
Tags: spboxer3 lks vivicat beren -baby strawberry-
BPM: 96
Filesize: 5594kb
Play Time: 03:29
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (1.27 stars, 132 notes)
  2. Hardy (4.84 stars, 442 notes)
  3. JauiPlKsp3 (5 stars, 599 notes)
  4. viviBeren (4.09 stars, 238 notes)
Download: Raujika - Grim
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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22nd map.
It's like a winter star melody.
And I'm getting really addicted to it.

Freestyle diff names inside.
Special thanks to sp3, lks, vivicat, beren and little strawberry.
This one would not be completed without you. Seriously.
Last edited by JauiPlaY , edited 13 times in total.
Flower
1,723 posts
Joined August 2011
Flower
Hi~ Mod from the queue~

基本上就用中文说了 英文不是很能说明白
少一个Hard 不然有跳难度之嫌

[Easy]
没啥问题
00:47:905 (2,3,4,5) 以及同类梗 - 梗不是很好听……或许一般的normal-whistle-normal-whistle就可以了？
01:40:405 (1) - 音量80%

[220B]
没甚问题
02:27:905 (2) - 再往右下放一点
02:46:030 (2) - 擦边？略像burai slider

[Hardly]
我打错diff名了……
然后一看哇小草莓
总之先不管吐槽 这难度比普遍意义上的Hard鬼畜很多 建议再做一个简单些的 或者减少这个的难度
以下基本为减少难度提供的意见 如果认为【啊 你叒就不要怪我做的难蛤蛤蛤】的话可以无视
01:03:530 (9,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 难打
01:10:092 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
01:11:342 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这是什么 姬坝么 你要是不放低难度的话就做成跟上面那个一样然后Ctrl+R
01:12:905 (1) - 这跳难打
01:16:967 (3,4) - 交换过来也不丑 这不用刻意加难度
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1) - Rule不知道你现在这梗可不可以 反正每个稍微向下偏移一些可能会好看些
01:35:405 (1,1,1,1) - 同样的问题
01:34:311 (3,4,5) - 难打
01:57:905 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 放在Hard难度偏难了
01:58:530 (5) - 加whistle
02:02:905 (1,2,3,4) - 干脆四个全部stack好些
02:04:155 (1) - 不好读
02:08:530 (5) - 好鬼畜
02:16:498 (6) - 加whistle，NC
02:16:655 (1) - 去NC
02:18:842 (4) - 滑条尾加whistle
02:19:780 (3) - 加whistle
02:52:905 (1) - 去NC
02:53:217 (2) - NC
03:02:905 (1,2) - ^

[3p]
花舞难度 这图初见D 没能力mod 还是空着好了
Scorpiour
2,633 posts
Joined May 2011
Scorpiour
hi there~~m4m

[General]
  1. 试了下效果，于是建议从Normal往上都用SliderTickRate 2
  2. 还有你这diff名真是奇葩……
[I can pass]
  1. 02:10:405 (1,2,3,4,1) - 音量上做一个梯度出来？
  2. 02:20:405 (1) - 这里到break的一段可以考虑把whistle加上～
  3. 02:57:905 (2,3,4,5) - 2|4 whistle更好听一些
  4. 03:02:905 (2,3,4,5) - ^
[220B]
  1. 00:57:905 (1,2) - 只是提一下，如果是normal的话不建议这么放，hard的话就无视好了……这命名我实在无法分辨…………
  2. 01:04:155 (1) - 去掉NC？
  3. 01:59:155 (2) - 去掉头clap？
  4. 02:09:155 (3) - 这儿音乐上有明显的三个音，而且最后一个音是向下的，所以用长slider的话，考虑加个红描点在中间来配合音乐做一点变化？
  5. 02:49:780 (4) - ctrl+r一下似乎比较有感觉～
  6. 03:16:967 - 这里考虑加个note？
  7. 03:21:967 - 建议加note，高音被空掉了不舒服……
[Hardy]
  1. 01:13:842 (1) - 有点看不清的slider
  2. 01:25:405 (1,1,1,1) - ……………………………………how many sliders here
  3. 01:35:405 (1,1,1,1) - ……………………………………………………………………
  4. 01:56:655 (1,2,3,4) - anti-stream的间距建议再做小一些，否则会confusing
  5. 02:44:623 (7,8,9) - 这种stack严重破坏flow
  6. 03:19:155 (1,2,3,4) - 这里可以考虑anti-stream，保持现有大的间距不变的情况下把4个note平均放开，比如这样

    或者左右交替的稍微拉开一些弧度也行
  7. 03:22:905 (1) - ctrl+r一下？
[JauiPlKsp3]
  1. 00:48:061 (2,3) - 考虑交换位置？然后00:48:686 (6,7) - 这俩也是，感觉打起来舒服
  2. 01:14:467 (10) - 向下弯感觉更舒服
  3. 01:24:780 (1) - 有没有可能ctrl+r一下？
  4. 01:29:467 (5,6) - 这两个分别ctrl+r？打着更舒服
  5. 02:00:405 (1) - 感觉上这个应该在这里会比较好～～能跟上flow：坐标456:68，形状上和后面的(2)对称过来
  6. 02:03:217 (2) - ctrl+r下试试？类似LC常用的那种反向slider flow
  7. 02:07:905 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - 这里4个一组的分组比这样3、5的分组要舒服，做成2组四方跳吧：
    把02:08:373 (1) - 放到88:180，然后02:08:529 (2,3,4,5) - 整体改成逆时针的方向（3和5位置互换），最后把NC放到02:08:529 (2) -
  8. 03:17:905 (1) - 这里ctrl+r下打起来会比较舒服，03:18:530 (3) - 同
吐槽完毕给星闪人～
-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-

Scorpiour wrote:

[Hardy]
  1. 01:13:842 (1) - 有点看不清的slider 改掉~
  2. 01:25:405 (1,1,1,1) - ……………………………………how many sliders here 。。。。
  3. 01:35:405 (1,1,1,1) - ……………………………………………………………………
  4. 01:56:655 (1,2,3,4) - anti-stream的间距建议再做小一些，否则会confusing 嗯减小了一点，但是不多。。
  5. 02:44:623 (7,8,9) - 这种stack严重破坏flow 是吧！我开始时候做的晃晃晃那种拉条，然后被改掉了。。。然后我现在又换了。。。
  6. 03:19:155 (1,2,3,4) - 这里可以考虑anti-stream，保持现有大的间距不变的情况下把4个note平均放开，比如这样

    或者左右交替的稍微拉开一些弧度也行 嗯不错
  7. 03:22:905 (1) - ctrl+r一下？没有，我复制粘贴过去的
谢谢mod~

Flower wrote:

[Hardly]
我打错diff名了……
然后一看哇小草莓 我一看哇原来是❀的mod
总之先不管吐槽 这难度比普遍意义上的Hard鬼畜很多 建议再做一个简单些的 或者减少这个的难度 果然是太难了OJZ
以下基本为减少难度提供的意见 如果认为【啊 你叒就不要怪我做的难蛤蛤蛤】的话可以无视 没没没，建议什么的都要看的
01:03:530 (9,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 难打
01:10:092 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
01:11:342 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 这是什么 姬坝么 你要是不放低难度的话就做成跟上面那个一样然后Ctrl+R
01:12:905 (1) - 这跳难打
01:16:967 (3,4) - 交换过来也不丑 这不用刻意加难度
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1) - Rule不知道你现在这梗可不可以 反正每个稍微向下偏移一些可能会好看些
01:35:405 (1,1,1,1) - 同样的问题
01:34:311 (3,4,5) - 难打
01:57:905 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 放在Hard难度偏难了
01:58:530 (5) - 加whistle 我记得我加了啊怎么没有了。。。
02:02:905 (1,2,3,4) - 干脆四个全部stack好些 我觉得不如这样好诶
02:04:155 (1) - 不好读
02:08:530 (5) - 好鬼畜
02:16:498 (6) - 加whistle，NC 感觉不大好。。。
02:16:655 (1) - 去NC
02:18:842 (4) - 滑条尾加whistle 不好听诶。。。
02:19:780 (3) - 加whistle 也不太好的感觉。。。
02:52:905 (1) - 去NC
02:53:217 (2) - NC
03:02:905 (1,2) - ^ 这个nc的我也要再看看，因为我之前的想法和你一样，但是后面觉得别扭，我再看看吧。。。
难度方面的我要再斟酌斟酌，的确是有点难了，但是我还不知道怎么改。。。然后就是音效什么的我还要再看，反正现在的感觉不大好。
谢谢mod~

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Regou
1,927 posts
Joined July 2010
Regou
反正我都好久沒Mod圖也就mod一下吧~w~...
From CLANNED modding queue

[I can pass]
I can pass too
00:45:405 (1) - 感覺這個略醜啊,不改下嘛
不會mod ;__;...

[220B]
感覺Normal最好還是用CS3, 簡單難度note的密度都比較低所以用CS4並不好看
考慮下HP+1?
00:50:717 (2,3) - 個人不喜歡這樣放...(2)換成note?
00:55:717 (2,3) - 同上
01:04:155 (1) - 去掉NC
01:26:655 (1) - ^
01:27:905 (3) - NC
01:36:655 (1) - 同上,去NC,然後在01:37:905 (3)再加NC
01:55:405 (1,2) - 不好看啊;__;...
02:41:655 (3) - 感覺應該可以再拉圓滑一點,那樣比較好看...
02:46:030 (2) - 當心被XAT挑._.(不過個人覺得沒問題)

[Hardy]
00:47:592 (6) - Ctrl+H?
01:19:155 (6,7) - 老是覺得怪怪的,...算了,還好
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1) - 好梗
01:29:155 (2,3) - 這種大跳放在Hard diff不太合適, 改下spacing吧
01:39:155 (1) - 第一次玩的時候不太看得到軌道...
01:55:873 (4,5) - 1 grid left
01:56:655 (1,2,3,4) - Spacing弄小一點會更容易辨認到這個Anti-jump
02:07:123 (5,6,7,8) - Ctrl+R,比較容易看到排位>__>
02:10:405 (1) - Finish?
02:11:030 (1) - ^
02:11:655 (2) - ^
02:12:280 (2) - ^
03:22:905 (1,2) - Slider路軌重疊了...?
03:29:155 (1,1,1,1,1) - 好像不太合節奏啊...?
老實說挺喜歡這個diff的,加油~~

[JauiPlksp3]
神難度名
00:42:436 (1,2) - 這兩個Ctrl+R好像比較符合節奏...?
01:29:467 (5,6) - 這兩個分別Ctrl+R比較好打
02:59:623 (1,2,3,4,5) - Spacing大一點...
03:24:155 (5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - 聲量弄漸大啊,就這樣下太... o.o

加油!! :D
LKs
3,119 posts
Joined August 2009
LKs

Scorpiour wrote:

hi there~~m4m
[JauiPlKsp3]
  1. 02:00:405 (1) - 感觉上这个应该在这里会比较好～～能跟上flow：坐标456:68，形状上和后面的(2)对称过来 看了 但这样会破坏02:00:405 (1,2,3) - 的组合 我把02:00:092 (1,2) - 颠倒了一下貌似flow好点
  2. 02:03:217 (2) - ctrl+r下试试？类似LC常用的那种反向slider flow 感觉区别不大 但改了
  3. 02:07:905 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5) - 这里4个一组的分组比这样3、5的分组要舒服，做成2组四方跳吧：改了 虽然这么改我打着感觉有点怪
    把02:08:373 (1) - 放到88:180，然后02:08:529 (2,3,4,5) - 整体改成逆时针的方向（3和5位置互换），最后把NC放到02:08:529 (2) -
  4. 03:17:905 (1) - 这里ctrl+r下打起来会比较舒服，03:18:530 (3) - 同
吐槽完毕给星闪人～

regou: 鬼畜
-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-

Regou wrote:

[Hardy]
00:47:592 (6) - Ctrl+H? 不了吧。。。我觉得还好啊。。。
01:19:155 (6,7) - 老是覺得怪怪的,...算了,還好 >~ <
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1) - 好梗 嘿嘿
01:29:155 (2,3) - 這種大跳放在Hard diff不太合適, 改下spacing吧 的确有点太跳。。。换了换
01:39:155 (1) - 第一次玩的時候不太看得到軌道... 这个我不知道改不改或者该怎么改。。。先放着咯
01:55:873 (4,5) - 1 grid left 那样就歪了诶OJZ
01:56:655 (1,2,3,4) - Spacing弄小一點會更容易辨認到這個Anti-jump 好吧管他DS。。。又改小了点
02:07:123 (5,6,7,8) - Ctrl+R,比較容易看到排位>__> 这个的确是，但是我觉得吧不改的话玩起来更有意思。。。先保留吧，再看看后面的modder怎么说
02:10:405 (1) - Finish?
02:11:030 (1) - ^
02:11:655 (2) - ^
02:12:280 (2) - ^太吵了感觉。。。音乐很轻的
03:22:905 (1,2) - Slider路軌重疊了...? 这个不可以吗？我还真不知道。。我问问在改咯
03:29:155 (1,1,1,1,1) - 好像不太合節奏啊...? 我觉得还好吧，最后这样放主要是比较好玩 :D
老實說挺喜歡這個diff的,加油~~
谢谢~


加油!! :D
谢谢mod~！ :D

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Steph De Chine
93 posts
Joined June 2012
Steph De Chine
好吧……我忽然发现自己不是很会Mod了……那就随便给点小意见吧……
I can pass
00:42:905 (2,3) - I can pass还让note被压住?新手会有意见的
01:22:905 (2,3) - 同上
02:52:905 (2,3) - 同上
03:12:905 (2,3) - 同上

220B
01:52:592 (4) - 去掉折返箭头
01:57:592 (3) - 去掉折返箭头
02:02:592 (4) - 去掉折返箭头
02:07:592 (4) - 去掉折返箭头
02:57:592 (4) - 缩短一半
03:02:592 (4) - 缩短一半

原谅我……本周比较忙，就只能先Mod成这样了……
Lan wings
790 posts
Joined August 2010
Lan wings
[General]
Combocolours跟BG顏色太像``瞎眼``看不清``求對比向Combocolours
這些奇葩的難度名到底是怎麼來的0.0?(220B)
難度跨度有點大啊1星直接跳到4星``然後hard又突然難那麼多
[I can pass]
I can fc
00:42:905 (2,3) - E用stack 差評
01:22:905 (2,3) - ^
02:52:905 (2,3) - ^
03:12:905 (2,3) - ^
[220B]
00:42:905 (1) - 來點弧線?osu.ppy.sh/ss/430951
00:53:530 (3) - ^http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/430952
00:53:530 (3,1,2) - 1後面的拉上一點?讓3的尾巴跟1 2成一直線
02:01:967 (3,4) - 4歪了點第二個點大概在x272 y160
03:06:655 (3) - 往左一格
03:09:155 (3) - 既然拉成直線了就前面的對上0.0右1上1
[Hardly]
爲什麽我感覺這GD比給我的GD還好
於是很多地方的clap都沒有放``音量太大的話可以調低點(clap有點太大聲了``建議用軟件減大概1~2分貝?)
00:41:030 (1) -
00:42:280 (4) -
00:43:530 - 大概是類似這些位置``我就不找了
00:47:592 (6) - 沒弄平``斜了
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1) - 於是這樣放沒問題?
01:35:405 (1,1,1,1) - ^
01:39:155 (1) - 前面0.5這裡突然加速1.5相當於普通的1.0突然變成2.0``太突兀了``容易miss
01:51:655 (7,1) - stack
01:54:155 (7) - 如果改了上面的這裡也一起改
02:27:905 (1,2,3,4,5) - 這形狀不好看``暫時想不到別的形狀(打
[JauiPlksp3]
原來首尾相連成3P就是說的這裡
01:07:905 (1,2,3,4) - 2可以跟01:06:967 (3) - 這裡stack``然後如果改的話4個都要重新排一排
02:30:405 (1) - 這坨東西下面能不能小一點``我放的靠上一點就拖斷slider了``起碼讓圈圈包住中間啊http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/430988

泥馬全是神麻婆陣容讓我怎麼mod
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-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-

Lan wings wrote:

[Hardly]
爲什麽我感覺這GD比給我的GD還好 没有啦，风格不一样~我觉得我给你那个GD才叫漂亮啊OJZ
於是很多地方的clap都沒有放``音量太大的話可以調低點(clap有點太大聲了``建議用軟件減大概1~2分貝?) clap？我好像都没有用clap诶。。。
00:41:030 (1) -
00:42:280 (4) -
00:43:530 - 大概是類似這些位置``我就不找了 恩我在看
00:47:592 (6) - 沒弄平``斜了 fixed~!
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1) - 於是這樣放沒問題? 我也不知道，我觉得挺好的。。slider开始结尾也都能看到。。。
01:35:405 (1,1,1,1) - ^
01:39:155 (1) - 前面0.5這裡突然加速1.5相當於普通的1.0突然變成2.0``太突兀了``容易miss 改掉了
01:51:655 (7,1) - stack 嗯
01:54:155 (7) - 如果改了上面的這裡也一起改 好
02:27:905 (1,2,3,4,5) - 這形狀不好看``暫時想不到別的形狀(打 我觉得还好。。。如果有新的好看的的形状的话我会改
谢谢mod~！
更新咯
Laurier
1,785 posts
Joined February 2011
Laurier
mod4mod time

I can pass
01:36:655 (2,3,4,1) - about this placing ? (2,3,5)http://puu.sh/14Nd6 and next one stack on (3)
02:10:405 - volume 20~30% down ?
02:30:405 (5) - add whistle
02:50:405 (1) - I think it's too near the spinner end

220B
00:49:780 (4) - nazi 1grid right (same y line as (3)end)
00:51:655 (4) - bit down and you can make more goog bracket
00:56:655 (4,5) - like this ? http://puu.sh/14Ns9
01:16:655 (2,3,1) - http://puu.sh/14Nvz (3)stack on 01:15:092 (4)
02:05:405 (1) - make a curve ? http://puu.sh/14NyH

Hardy
01:04:780 (6,1) - I think need more spacing http://puu.sh/14NFd
01:10:092 (1) - remove NC
01:10:405 (3) - NC
01:51:030 (5) - 1 grid left and fix spacing
01:53:530 (5) - ^
01:59:155 (1) - Flow is bad. like this ? http://puu.sh/14NLp
02:44:155 (4,5,6,7,8) - use same spacing is good

JauiPlKsp3
00:42:280 (1,2,3) - like this? http://puu.sh/14NVX
01:10:092 (4,5,1) - make a jump
01:30:561 (2) - ctr+R?
02:14:936 (2,4) - ^
03:27:436 (1,2) - ^

That's all
-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-

Laurier wrote:

Hardy
01:04:780 (6,1) - I think need more spacing http://puu.sh/14NFd ok fixed~!
01:10:092 (1) - remove NC
01:10:405 (3) - NC all fixed!~
01:51:030 (5) - 1 grid left and fix spacing
01:53:530 (5) - ^ fixed all
01:59:155 (1) - Flow is bad. like this ? http://puu.sh/14NLp true, the flow is bad, but i don't really like the way you offered... so changed into something else
02:44:155 (4,5,6,7,8) - use same spacing is good oops :P
thanks for modding~!
又更新咯
x847606653
524 posts
Joined January 2011
x847606653
Hi,there._.
来骗kds的>_>,大部分只是建议

不考虑bpmx2么

JauiPlKsp3
00:49:780 (4,5) - 换个位置
02:07:280 (3) - 换成1slider+1cirle

Hardy
那些slider的遮挡真的没问题么0.0

其它都好
实在没什么好挑的233，star个
Deni
Deni

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General

You should explain what kind of difficulty "220B, Hardy, I can pass, JauiPlKsp3" is in your first post or just make them into regular ones. (Easy,Hard...)

I can pass (Easy)

00:44:155 (3) - I think stacks are too difficult for beginner because they can't see the circle. Change it maybe..
01:04:155 (4) - Remove Clap and then add on 3rd reverse arrow so that it fits to the rest.
01:09:155 (4) - ^
01:14:155 (5) - ^
01:20:405 (1) - This slider is too close to the spinner before for Easy! (AiMod)
01:24:155 (3) - Same as 00:44:155 (3)
01:54:155 (4) - Remove Clap and then add on 3rd reverse arrow so that it fits to the rest.
02:24:155 (4) - ^
02:29:155 (4) - Remove Clap on reverse arrow.
02:50:405 (1) - This slider is too close to the spinner before for Easy! (AiMod)
02:54:155 (3) - Same as 00:44:155 (3)
03:14:155 (3) - ^
03:24:155 (4) - Make the hitsond the same like 03:19:155 (5) -

220B (Normal, I guess)

Good difficulty but you might work a bit on your slider..

01:51:030 (3) - Make this slider more symmetrical
02:27:905 (2,3) - Mhh only straight lines? Maybe add a curve or make it more interesting.
02:59:155 (3) - ^
03:11:030 (2) - ^

That's all I found in your mapset. Contact me ingame or PM me if you have any questions.
popner
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Joined March 2011
popner
Hi ~ Mod request from My Queue.

Just suggestions:

[I can pass]
01:04:155 (4) - 低难度还是建议不要用多次折返

[220B]
00:39:780 (2) - 最好不要多次折返
01:02:905 (1) - miss a NC?
02:26:655 (3) - 不对称，可以调整一下：


[Hardy]
00:44:155 (4,1) - nazi - 没stack好
00:54:780 (5,1) - ^
01:08:842 (1,2) - 以为是和01:06:342 (3,4)一样的节奏
01:10:405 (1,2,3,4,5) - 感觉有点歪，用多边形功能？
02:49:155 (1,2) - nazi - 包围02:50:405 (1)不是包得很好
02:57:748 (8,1,2,3,4) - 稍微拉开点距离避免重叠？
03:07:748 (8,1,2,3,4) - ^
03:29:467 (1,1,1) - 可以不用每个都NC

[JauiPlKsp3]
96acc都会死，考虑减HP
00:47:436 (1) - 去NC
00:48:530 (5) - 如果不减HP，这里最好加NC
01:05:405 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 这段建议缩小间距，因为音乐比前面弱，排列却比前面难
01:10:092 (4) - 和前面的距离比较容易误判为1/4
01:22:592 (3) - 又有stack又是half-backing，所以加NC？
01:39:155 (1,2,3,4) - 用和01:37:905 (1,2,3,4,5,6)类似的节奏和梗？现在这样感觉略单调。（特别是01:39:780 (3)这里没有跳感觉不好）或者把这两组梗交换一下位置？
02:23:217 (3) - 同01:22:592 (3)
02:25:717 (3) - ^
02:30:405 (1) - 建议ctrl+h一下
03:12:436 (1) - 去掉NC
03:22:436 (1) - ^
03:27:436 (1) - ^

That's all I can find. GL~
-Baby Strawberry-
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Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-

x847606653 wrote:

Hardy
那些slider的遮挡真的没问题么0.0 我也说不好啊。。。我觉得没什么问题。。。
谢谢mod！~

popner wrote:

[Hardy]
00:44:155 (4,1) - nazi - 没stack好 fixed
00:54:780 (5,1) - ^ fixed！
01:08:842 (1,2) - 以为是和01:06:342 (3,4)一样的节奏 这个怎么说呢，我觉得还好其实。。。
01:10:405 (1,2,3,4,5) - 感觉有点歪，用多边形功能？ 的确，5歪了
02:49:155 (1,2) - nazi - 包围02:50:405 (1)不是包得很好 嗯改掉了
02:57:748 (8,1,2,3,4) - 稍微拉开点距离避免重叠？ 还好啦这个
03:07:748 (8,1,2,3,4) - ^
03:29:467 (1,1,1) - 可以不用每个都NC 好看~
谢谢mod~！

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giO-
giO-
Hello, from #modreqs for Mod for Mod with Renard - Smoke Tower http://osu.ppy.sh/s/38149


General

The .mp3 file is 4.17min and all maps on mapset finish on 03:30:405 - , so i suggest to cut .mp3.
Anyway i did it for you if you will follow this suggestion. Here the cut mp3 http://puu.sh/15Fu6


220B

00:39:780 (2) - delete 2 repeats and add beat here 00:40:405 - , sound better to me instead of the slider repeats
00:50:717 (2,3) - maybe unstack? i think the pattern looks better if you do it
00:55:717 (2,3) - maybe same here as above ^
00:59:780 (3) - you forgot the clap here
01:21:030 (3) - clap? it sound nice
01:22:280 - also here, you should add clap
01:23:530 (2) - here too ^
01:28:842 (3) - remove 2 repeats and add beat here 01:29:467 - ?
01:31:030 (3) - clap here
01:32:280 - ^
01:33:530 (2) - ^
01:38:842 (3) - as i said on previous suggestion "remove 2 repeats and add beat here 01:39:467 - ?"
02:42:592 (4) - move this on x:368 y:152
02:52:280 - clap?
02:53:217 (1) - this slider sound a bit weird, maybe you should remove repeat and add beat on 02:53:842 - , that's sound better to me, if you do it just add clap on the end of slider here 02:53:530 -
02:54:780 (4) - clap
02:55:717 (1) - ^
02:57:280 (3) - ^
02:58:530 - ^
03:01:030 - ^
03:02:280 - ^
03:03:530 (2) - ^
03:06:030 - ^
03:07:280 - ^
03:08:530 - ^
03:26:967 - beat here?


Hardy

01:30:405 (1) - remove new combo and add on 01:30:717 (2) - ?
02:00:248 (3) - move this on x:284 y:196 , it seems almost overlapped to the previous slider on 01:59:780 (2) -
02:02:748 (6) - move on x:92 y:160
02:06:030 (2) - remove 1 repeat and add beat here 02:06:498 -


Good luck! ;)
-Baby Strawberry-
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giO- wrote:

Hello, from #modreqs for Mod for Mod with Renard - Smoke Tower http://osu.ppy.sh/s/38149



Hardy

01:30:405 (1) - remove new combo and add on 01:30:717 (2) - ? don't wanna change it...
02:00:248 (3) - move this on x:284 y:196 , it seems almost overlapped to the previous slider on 01:59:780 (2) - i don't think that would matter... keep it for now...
02:02:748 (6) - move on x:92 y:160 its straight now...
02:06:030 (2) - remove 1 repeat and add beat here 02:06:498 - hmmm...nope...


Good luck! ;)
thanks for modding~!

可能改了一点点吧。。。
JauiPlaY
1,292 posts
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Topic Starter
JauiPlaY
Thanks for modding everyone! Some issues have been fixed.
Updated!
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Leorda
Hi there


[General]
* Your diff name makes people confuse which one is hard or insane diff. You should change it into difficulty name (e.g. "Easy", "Normal")


[I can pass]
01:20:405 (1) - The sliderpath is overlapped by spinner-osu, so beginners can't see the path clearly
02:30:405 (1) - Why you need a new combo here?
02:50:405 (1) - Same issue as 01:20:405 (1)


[220B]
03:12:905 (1) - I think this slider needs more wavy


[Hardy]
* AR -1? Your current approach rate are bit fast
* More than three unique slider speeds shouldn't be used

02:02:280 (5) - Remove whistle at sliderbody, it's useless


That's all I got, good luck
-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
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-Baby Strawberry-

Leorda wrote:

Hi there



[Hardy]
* AR -1? Your current approach rate are bit fast ok
* More than three unique slider speeds shouldn't be used idk...i think it should be fine since its not that hard to play

02:02:280 (5) - Remove whistle at sliderbody, it's useless i changed some hitsound based on this.


That's all I got, good luck
thanks for modding~!

http://puu.sh/18RRf
wantuole
528 posts
Joined December 2010
wantuole
[General]
根据sb上写的
I can pass是你自己完成的
220B是vivicat、beren合作
Hardy 是Baby strawberry单独制作
JauiPlKsp3难度是你和lks spboxer3合作
把每个难度对应的制作人写在歌曲首页 能更方便的了解他们具体帮了你什么。
[I can pass]
ok
[220B]
00:52:280 (5) - 不要被之前的3盖住
02:50:405 - 这里的kiai开始音效有点低了
[Hardy]
很多有意思的遮盖
02:03:842 (6) - ctrl+r
[JauiPlKsp3]
ok
感觉lks spboxer3老师太善良了
整个难度的最难部分在开头JauiPlaY
这么分布难度总觉的有点怪
就这些 祝你们好运
当然 星星~
-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-

wantuole wrote:

[General]

[Hardy]
很多有意思的遮盖
02:03:842 (6) - ctrl+r 呃呃呃，这个我觉得现在这样比较好。。。


就这些 祝你们好运
当然 星星~
chaotic_iak
287 posts
Joined February 2012
chaotic_iak


Unrankable, problem, plausible problem. Yay good stuff.

[General]
Neat skin, but slider ball is invisible so it might be somewhat a problem.
Seriously, is this song titled "Grim"? I don't find it creepy or sad at all :P
Why do you have a long outro? (18% aka 45s unused)
Also for storyboard (the texts of the diff creator(s)), maybe put it somewhere righter? At the moment some part (one or two first letters) of the text are hidden by the equally white background.

[220B]
Assuming this is a Hard diff, since otherwise there are a lot of too hard objects for Normal like stacking and 1/4-beat gaps (156ms).
02:41:655 (3) - Somewhat difficult to read. If this diff is Normal this would be a major problem.

[Hardy]
If this is Insane, then not much problem. If Hard, then you have too many unexpected slider velocity changes.

Err that's all? Nicely done map with neatly done storyboard+skin. Good luck!
mancuso_JM_
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mancuso_JM_
Hi JauiPlaY! :3. Mod Time from my queue

[General:]

• 220B and Hardy are Still submitted in format v9, so you need resubmit and transform it in format V10. Btw, I can pass and JauiPlKsp3 have an inconsistency in the Title Unicode and Artist Unicode, so you need to fix this too.
• Since you have completed the Circle Skin, you have to add the SliderBorder. Add this Code under your Combo Colours
SliderBorder: 255,255,255

[I can pass:]

• Why no Claps on the first part of the song? They sounds really fitting with the Instrumental and often these Whistles don't cover the Instrumental at all, sound much better Claps instead of Whistles on these places where appear Claps sounds on the Instrumental

• 00:39:155 (1): Add a Whistle on the Slider beginning because fit properly with the bells in the Instrumental
• 00:42:905 (2,3): Stacked Notes are often sudden to New Players, especially if you have a Note beneath a Slider. Unstack these for a better readability to New Players
• 00:45:405 (1): There is a high pitch in the Instrumental over this Slider beginning, for this reason sound weird this Slide without any hitsound. Try adding a Whistle here
• 00:50:405 (1): (^)
• 00:56:655 (2): The Whistle on the Slider end sound overused to me, I think that it is enough with the Whistle in the Repetition. Try to Remove the Whistle from the Slider end (And this is one of the situations where a Clap can work on the end)
• 01:04:155 (4): I know that the BPM is slow, but a 1/2 Slider with a lot of repetitions is Hard to read to New Players. You should make another thing, removing repetitions and adding another Sliders instead so New Players will not have troubles
• 01:04:780: And in this place should be a Clap to follow the Instrumental
• 01:09:155 (4): Same as 01:04:155
• 01:10:092: To be consistent with your previous Slider with a lot of repetitions, you should add a Clap here
• 01:14:155 (5): Same as 01:04:155 again
• 01:14:780: And.. Add a Clap here
• 01:20:405 (1): To start the Kiai, a hitsound on the beginning should work fine. Try adding a Whistle here
• 01:22:905 (2,3): (omg! Copy/paste >:( )- As I said before unstack these to don't cause any trouble on New Players
• 01:25:405 (1): I'm repeating stuff for these copy/paste, I really dislike the copy/paste, sorry. Returning to the mod, add a Whistle on the Slider beginning
• 01:30:405 (1): (^)
• 01:37:280: *Explained before* Remove this Whistle
• 01:40:405 (1): Hmm.. I don't know if this New Combo is really Necesary to the song and following your Symetry I think that it's better if you Remove this New Combo
• 01:54:155 (4): Try to do another thing to reduce the number of Repetitions
• 01:54:780: And here should be a Clap
• 02:24:155 (4): Avoid this please, as I said before
• 02:42:905 (3): I can feel the rhythm changing at this point, so a New Combo would be a good idea here
• 02:50:405 (1): I don't feel really necesary a beat over a Red Tick, if I didn't listen the music in 25% I couldn't listen anything. Would be better if you Reduce this Slider by 1/2 and then add a Note in 02:52:280
• 02:52:905 (2,3): Again this, unstack these Notes please

- It becomes preety repetitve this mod because you used a lot of copy/paste. Just try to check the previous points on my mod to add it then

[220B:]

Vivicat:

• 00:39:780 (2): Such a lot of Repetitions in 1/4, this can cause confusion in an Average Player. Try replacing this in 2 Sliders, if you do this will follow better the music.
SPOILER

• 00:50:717 (2,3): This Stack doesn't fit really well, try to do another thing, because this is not the best way imo
• 00:51:030 (3,5): Hmm.. this weird overlap looks bad in my opinion. For a better play and esthetic you should avoid that
• 00:55:717 (2,3): Same as 00:50:717, about this Stack
• 01:00:405 (1): This New Combo looks odd here, maybe it is better if you Remove this New Combo
• 01:21:030 (3): It doesn't follow the music very well the Slider end on a Blue Tick, I think that you will follow better the music if reduce the Slider lenght by 1/4 (So, this Slider should finish in 01:21:342)
• 01:25:405 (1,2,3,4): In this difficulty is better if you follow the principal Instrumental instead of follow the background of the Instrumental. To be sincere, I would like to reduce the Slider lenght of these Sliders in 1/4
• 01:28:842 (3): Same as 00:39:780, there is a lot of Repetitions in this difficulty
• 01:35:405 (1,2,3,4): Same as 01:25:405
• 01:38:842 (3): A lot of Repetitions here, so same as 00:39:780

Beren:

• 02:05:405 (1,2): I don't recommend to add Notes Under Sliders, because they are difficult to read in an Average Player. Would be a better idea if you unstack this
• 02:24:155 (3): What about to reduce this Slider in 1/2 and after that add a Note in 02:24:780? It sounds much better because you can remark all the aspects in the song
• 02:30:405 (4): Add a New Combo due to the music change and because it is more consistent with the previous break in the difficulty.
• 02:41:655 (3): Such a bad Slider, I'm preety sure that you can make a better thing here (this should be for esthetic especially)
• 03:14:780 (3): The transition is not the best here, I can't feel the usage of the blue tick really necesary here. This pattern will sound better if you reduce the Slider lenght in 1/4
• 03:20:405 (1): This doesn't sound really good, I can listen a better Rhythm if you transform this Slider in 1/2 (Without the Repetition, obviously)

- Well, is not bad, but the differences between Vivicat's section and Beren's Section is really noticable. Vivicat's section is much Harder than Beren's One. Since it is a Collab you should talk more about the difficulty to have a better consistency, because now, this differences of difficulty make the difficult weird to play. I suggest both to make the difficult of the map more equal than now to have a better gameplay

[Hardy:]

• 00:40:405 (3,1): I find more coherent this pattern if you Swap the Combo placement in these Sliders.
• 00:45:405 (1): Add a Whistle here
• 00:51:655 (T): I would like to know why do you reduce the Slider Speed here?.. The music it's going in a constant speed, I don't feel any change in the music. On the other hand, flows much better if you keep the Slider Speed here
• 01:00:405 (7,1): Swap the New Combo placement as I said before
• 01:06:811 (4): The Rhythm that you wanted to give here, sounds cut and bad. Will follow better the music if you move this Slider 1/4 back and then make it longer in 1/4 too.
• 01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1): Omg.. This kind of patterns plays preety bad, it is really odd to play looking the Slider Speed Change. I really suggest you to change this..
• 01:35:405 (1,1,1,1,1): (^)
• 01:37:905 (1,2): This is unrankable because the player can not see the Slider lenght of the 2nd Slider. Try doing another thing here, so the pattern is correctly readable
• 02:08:373 (4,5): The Spacing change is just to keep the Symetry because the music doesn't need that here. Just mantain the Spacing as you did before

- This difficulty needs much more work, really. It needs a lot of improvements in the Rhythm, you can also try another varieties in your kiais sections instead of use just copy/paste in the Same kiai.

Sorry, but I can't finish with my mod. I can't mod this map because in General needs more improvements (and the song don't motivate me to continue). Anyways the last difficulty is the best one of the mapset in my opinion.

Well, Since I couldn't continue with the mod and because you had to wait a lot for my mod I'll shoot 2 Stars.
Hope this can helps you
Good Luck :)
NatsumeRin
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NatsumeRin
[General]
I'm not sure but could you change those diffs names to some common one plz...?
This song is really quite, i doubt if the kiai is really needed.

[I can pass]
00:42:905 (2) - ...kinda ugly to me, maybe switch red/white points. there's some similar sliders too,.

[220B]
00:50:717 (2,3,4,5) - the overlap is a bit much for normal
01:15:405 (1,2) - maybe move the last point of 1 down a bit.
02:24:155 (3) - add a note?
02:41:655 (3) - make the shape clear a bit.

[Hardy]
00:51:655 (4) - 0.5 is too sudden here. as it's symmetry with 2 and have nothing special here, i really doubt if people could notice.
00:54:155 (4) - ^
01:25:405 (1) - no plz. at least move a bit every time.
01:32:905 (1) - is the sliderwhitle on purpose?
01:35:405 (1) - same thing.
02:02:280 (5) - remove sliderwhistle?
02:20:405 (1,2,3,4,5) - this shape seems too straight, any better flow?
02:22:905 (1) - ^, same thing to some following notes.
02:51:655 (4) - 0.5x thing
I think this diff needs some change really...

[JauiPlKsp3]
00:55:405 (1) - why only this one has 0.5x and different with the previous notes?
01:09:467 (3) - the previous 0.5x at least has a new combo there...
02:49:936 - add a note?
02:56:655 (1) - remove sliderwhistle

我觉得你在给我解释清如何判定0.5x之前我是不会泡的.
-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-

mancusojuanmattos wrote:

Hi JauiPlaY! :3. Mod Time from my queue



[Hardy:]

• 00:40:405 (3,1): I find more coherent this pattern if you Swap the Combo placement in these Sliders. yea sure, makes it much clearer than before
• 00:45:405 (1): Add a Whistle here i prefer not to add it
• 00:51:655 (T): I would like to know why do you reduce the Slider Speed here?.. The music it's going in a constant speed, I don't feel any change in the music. On the other hand, flows much better if you keep the Slider Speed here changed!
• 01:00:405 (7,1): Swap the New Combo placement as I said before yea
• 01:06:811 (4): The Rhythm that you wanted to give here, sounds cut and bad. Will follow better the music if you move this Slider 1/4 back and then make it longer in 1/4 too. hmm, i would say im gonna keep mine, urs are fine, and it is surely the most common way, but i would like to keep my thoughts.
• 01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1): Omg.. This kind of patterns plays preety bad, it is really odd to play looking the Slider Speed Change. I really suggest you to change this.. haha this is the section i like the most, believe it or not. its suppose to be rankable right? anyway, i know its wierd, but still i wanna keep them :P
• 01:35:405 (1,1,1,1,1): (^)
• 01:37:905 (1,2): This is unrankable because the player can not see the Slider lenght of the 2nd Slider. Try doing another thing here, so the pattern is correctly readable what i did is pull them out which makes them tail to tail, that should be readable
• 02:08:373 (4,5): The Spacing change is just to keep the Symetry because the music doesn't need that here. Just mantain the Spacing as you did before well the jump is not that big thou... idk...imo i think its fine...

- This difficulty needs much more work, really. It needs a lot of improvements in the Rhythm, you can also try another varieties in your kiais sections instead of use just copy/paste in the Same kiai.
thanks for your mod~

NatsumeRin wrote:

[Hardy]
00:51:655 (4) - 0.5 is too sudden here. as it's symmetry with 2 and have nothing special here, i really doubt if people could notice.
00:54:155 (4) - ^ half spacing is fixed due to the last mod, sry about that :P
01:25:405 (1) - no plz. at least move a bit every time. yea as you said, i moved each slider 1 grid above each other, that would be ok right?
01:32:905 (1) - is the sliderwhitle on purpose? i would say thats a mistake :O
01:35:405 (1) - same thing. same method
02:02:280 (5) - remove sliderwhistle? indeed...
02:20:405 (1,2,3,4,5) - this shape seems too straight, any better flow?
02:22:905 (1) - ^, same thing to some following notes. i've no idea on this now... i tried a curved one, but its almost in the same way i would say.
02:51:655 (4) - 0.5x thing all changed
I think this diff needs some change really...
thanks for your mod~

update :)
JauiPlaY
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Topic Starter
JauiPlaY
Thank you mancusojuanmattos and NatsumeRin!! I've fixed those unrankable problems and some other things which I thought it's necessary to fix!
Map uploaded! /=3=/
NatsumeRin
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bubbled.
JauiPlaY
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JauiPlaY
3g oil~ \owo/
-Baby Strawberry-
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-Baby Strawberry-
天啊这就泡了。。。
kanpakyin
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kanpakyin
......才發現是ntr泡的, 如果是這樣的話就多等一周再來rank (mapper和bubbler都是中國人)
Strawberry
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Strawberry
神谱!!!

edit:
02:30:405 (1) - 这梗感觉好坑...首先如果按照前面(4)的flow的话，这个slider理所应当是判断为向上的趋势，这个slider的大尾巴也是朝上的我觉得就更容易误读了。。反正我几乎次次断这里; A; 而且前面的(3)还起到了很好的遮挡效果。。如果可能的话求改啊lol
Garven
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Garven
I started to mod this and got about 5 seconds in to the Easy before I found a note stacked under a slider end. wtf
JauiPlaY
1,292 posts
Joined April 2010
Topic Starter
JauiPlaY
I still have chance to change something before ranking, don't worry!
Garven
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Joined January 2010
Garven
[General]
Tick rate 2 fits this song best.
Ma is difficult to read since it's all rather bright. Maybe darken the image with colorization a bit so it's easier on the eyes. This pretty much happens with most of the mapper names placed up there as well.
SPOILER
Consider using a more grey color for the slider border due to the hit circle overlay...

[Easy]
00:44:155 (3) - Don't stack under slider ends in Easy difficulties,

please
01:04:155 (4) - Having variable repeats on these short sliders is not newbie friendly. You go from 3 to 5 quite a bit, along with having notes one beat after these sliders are finished. This isn't newbie-friendly at all, and they're -everywhere-
01:20:405 (1) - Too soon after a spinner for an Easy. Give about 4 beats.
01:24:155 (3) - Stacked under slider end again
02:50:405 (1) - Too soon after a spinner
02:54:155 (3) - Stacked under slider end
03:14:155 (3) - ^

[Normal]
vivicat: The only problem I have is your use of 3-hit and 5-hit repeat sliders everywhere. It'd be best if you could use only 3-hit or only 5-hit repeat sliders. This level of difficulty is better used to introduce their use in the first place - using different values of hits is a bit much for a Normal.

[Hard]
AR -1 please. 8 is too fast for this map.
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - Uh, you're going to need to use tick rate 2 if you want to keep this.
03:29:155 (1,1,1,1) - No new combo spam please. Also I don't get the rhyhtm use here. It sounds bad.

[Insane]
This map also requires tick rate 2 if you want to keep all those huge speed changes.

[sp3]
01:12:905 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - This pattern really doesn't reflect the smooth melody of the song very well. It's very jerky going back and forth like this.

[lks]
02:04:311 (1,2) - This flows better if 2 is ctrl + g'd since it follows 02:02:905 (1,2) -
02:31:655 - Really odd place to start the break. Makes it feel incomplete going into the next section that far.

[jaui]
03:15:248 (10,1) - This alignment looks poor
03:17:280 (2,3,4,5,1) - As does this spacing

The easy needs some major redesigning. The rest of the set is pretty nice though, once you get the proper tick rate in there.
kanpakyin
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Joined June 2010
kanpakyin
As requested.

[General]
  1. As garven said.
  2. Add silent sliderslide since this is a calm song.

[Easy]
  1. 00:44:155 (3) - Stack it perfectly?
  2. 00:45:405 (1) - This shape is quite ugly in my opinion. I would give a suggestion here:
    Suggestion
  3. 01:04:155 (4) - Remove the clap from red tick and then add the clap on 01:04:780 - to fit your hitclap pattern and music.
  4. 01:09:467 (4) - Remove the clap from red tick please. It doesn't fit the music.
  5. 01:24:155 (3) - Same as 00:45:155 -
  6. 01:25:405 (1) - Same as 00:45:405 -
  7. 01:20:405 ~ 01:40:405 - 為甚麼這個部分和一開始那裡一樣...?只是上下顛倒了? 求不偷懶...求換梗
  8. 01:54:155 (4) - Same as 01:04:155 (4) - . Maybe for those clap, use a whistle instead of it.
  9. 02:29:155 (4) - ^

[viviBeren]
  1. 00:55:717 (2,3) - This is not newbie- friendly pattern because of the stack. How about considering changing it?
  2. 02:11:030 (2) - Remove the clap at the beginnning of the slider? It doesn't fit the music perfectly in my opinion.
  3. Beren's part is well made.

[Hardy]
  1. 01:02:592 (1) - How about putting a new combo here because the symmetrical jump starts from here.
  2. 01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - This is too hard for a hard difficulty. I would remove it and changing it to another pattern if I were you.
  3. 01:35:405 (1,1,1,1,1,2) - ^
  4. 02:10:405 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3) - How about removing the whistle on these note and then change them into normal hitsound.

[JauiPlKsp3]
  1. 00:40:405 (1) - How about adding a whistle at the end of the slider to fit the high pitch?
  2. 00:41:186 (3) - I would remove this note if I were you because there is no any instrument/drum sound to support that note. You don't need to adjust the spacing after fixing.
  3. 01:13:530 (5) - A finsih here?
  4. 02:14:780 (1,2,3,4) - 如果(1.2.3.4)- 的方向像02:14:155 (1,2,3,4) - 走的話..flow會好很多..個人意見


Call me back when this is rebubbled.
JauiPlaY
1,292 posts
Joined April 2010
Topic Starter
JauiPlaY

Garven wrote:

[General]
Tick rate 2 fits this song best.呵呵...right.
Ma is difficult to read since it's all rather bright. Maybe darken the image with colorization a bit so it's easier on the eyes. This pretty much happens with most of the mapper names placed up there as well.
SPOILER
I don't think it's a major problem, afterall we all know that is a "map".
Consider using a more grey color for the slider border due to the hit circle overlay...I think white color is okay.

[Easy]
00:44:155 (3) - Don't stack under slider ends in Easy difficulties,

please
01:04:155 (4) - Having variable repeats on these short sliders is not newbie friendly. You go from 3 to 5 quite a bit, along with having notes one beat after these sliders are finished. This isn't newbie-friendly at all, and they're -everywhere-
01:20:405 (1) - Too soon after a spinner for an Easy. Give about 4 beats.
01:24:155 (3) - Stacked under slider end again
02:50:405 (1) - Too soon after a spinner
02:54:155 (3) - Stacked under slider end
03:14:155 (3) - ^
Remaked and fixed all...I guess.

[Normal]
vivicat: The only problem I have is your use of 3-hit and 5-hit repeat sliders everywhere. It'd be best if you could use only 3-hit or only 5-hit repeat sliders. This level of difficulty is better used to introduce their use in the first place - using different values of hits is a bit much for a Normal.No more 5-hit.

[Hard]
AR -1 please. 8 is too fast for this map.Done, and HP -1 too.
01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - Uh, you're going to need to use tick rate 2 if you want to keep this.Yeah.
03:29:155 (1,1,1,1) - No new combo spam please. Also I don't get the rhyhtm use here. It sounds bad.The rhythm is fine for me, but I fixed those ncs.

[Insane]
This map also requires tick rate 2 if you want to keep all those huge speed changes.It is tick 2, you didn't realize?

[sp3]
01:12:905 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - This pattern really doesn't reflect the smooth melody of the song very well. It's very jerky going back and forth like this.I think it's okay.

[lks]
02:04:311 (1,2) - This flows better if 2 is ctrl + g'd since it follows 02:02:905 (1,2) - ^
02:31:655 - Really odd place to start the break. Makes it feel incomplete going into the next section that far.I think it's okay...and it's sp3's part.

[jaui]
03:15:248 (10,1) - This alignment looks poorI think it's okay.
03:17:280 (2,3,4,5,1) - As does this spacing^

The easy needs some major redesigning. The rest of the set is pretty nice though, once you get the proper tick rate in there.Thanks for your appreciation.

kanpakyin wrote:

As requested.

[General]
  1. As garven said.Tick changed.
  2. Add silent sliderslide since this is a calm song.Yeah.

[Easy]
  1. 00:44:155 (3) - Stack it perfectly?
  2. 00:45:405 (1) - This shape is quite ugly in my opinion. I would give a suggestion here:
    Suggestion
  3. 01:04:155 (4) - Remove the clap from red tick and then add the clap on 01:04:780 - to fit your hitclap pattern and music.
  4. 01:09:467 (4) - Remove the clap from red tick please. It doesn't fit the music.
  5. 01:24:155 (3) - Same as 00:45:155 -
  6. 01:25:405 (1) - Same as 00:45:405 -
  7. 01:20:405 ~ 01:40:405 - 為甚麼這個部分和一開始那裡一樣...?只是上下顛倒了? 求不偷懶...求換梗
  8. 01:54:155 (4) - Same as 01:04:155 (4) - . Maybe for those clap, use a whistle instead of it.
  9. 02:29:155 (4) - ^All fixed.

[viviBeren]
  1. 00:55:717 (2,3) - This is not newbie- friendly pattern because of the stack. How about considering changing it?
  2. 02:11:030 (2) - Remove the clap at the beginnning of the slider? It doesn't fit the music perfectly in my opinion.
  3. Beren's part is well made.All fixed.

[Hardy]
  1. 01:02:592 (1) - How about putting a new combo here because the symmetrical jump starts from here.Okay.
  2. 01:25:405 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - This is too hard for a hard difficulty. I would remove it and changing it to another pattern if I were you.I'd like to keep it.
  3. 01:35:405 (1,1,1,1,1,2) - ^^
  4. 02:10:405 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3,1,2,3) - How about removing the whistle on these note and then change them into normal hitsound.^

[JauiPlKsp3]
  1. 00:40:405 (1) - How about adding a whistle at the end of the slider to fit the high pitch?
  2. 00:41:186 (3) - I would remove this note if I were you because there is no any instrument/drum sound to support that note. You don't need to adjust the spacing after fixing.
  3. 01:13:530 (5) - A finsih here?
  4. 02:14:780 (1,2,3,4) - 如果(1.2.3.4)- 的方向像02:14:155 (1,2,3,4) - 走的話..flow會好很多..個人意見我觉得...没什么好改的囧


Call me back when this is rebubbled.Okay thanks...
Thanks for modding!
Garven
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Joined January 2010
Garven
[General]
Sure, we know that is says "Map" but this is about the presentation, not the intelligence of the viewer. You have white on white, which is bad for readability. This isn't applying to only "map" but many of the mapper names as well. It's an easy fix and you even acknowledge that it's an issue, and yet you brush it off as if it's nothing.
Did you even try a lighter shade of grey? I found about 185,185,185 fits much better than 255,255,255.
The slider follow circle is cut off on all 4 edges. It looks weird and obviously not done on purpose.

[Hard]
I would recommend tick rate 4 for this considering the rhythms used. It would also help the readability of all the crazy slider speed changes.
01:22:905 (1,2) - This has been bugging me. The spacing is just misleading. Move this further out. Applies to other iterations as well.

[Insane]
Actually Tick 4 will be needed then, sorry I didn't notice. It also fits the song well anyway, especially since you follow the faster rhythms so often in this particular map.

Are you going to let the mappers reply? It seems that you don't want to change anything rather than looking at the merit of the criticism.

As for your parts:

How does this look "okay"to you?
SPOILER
Same with this (all 1/2 rhythms):
SPOILER

It's sloppy and plays poorly respectively.
LKs
3,119 posts
Joined August 2009
LKs
about the Storyboard. It is better to say I put white on white deliberately

in other words, That was the effect I wanted that could only be reached under this circumstance. so don't mind its readability.

And i believe if there are ppl really care of the SB's conten.t they won't be obscured so much so that they can't recongize what the SB conveys
spboxer3
Global Moderator
3,616 posts
Joined November 2009
spboxer3
我想確認一下 是我這邊的combo color SB了還是怎 怎麼是原色不是custom的 本來不是有分顏色嗎?

東西修改過了 話說我覺得我的pattern被改過= =
osu file format v11

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Garven
osu! Alumni
5,857 posts
Joined January 2010
Garven
Thanks for fixing that stuff up. The set looks much better now. Rebubbled!
kanpakyin
Global Moderator
4,233 posts
Joined June 2010
kanpakyin
Rechecked. Everything looks fine.

Ranked.

(ノ・ω・)ノ
Deni
Deni
Congrats! >w<
Sea_Food
484 posts
Joined September 2012
Sea_Food
How the fuck did this shit get ranked?

All of the notes are like compleatly random.

The mapper must be deaf. The reason 30% of the notes come actually at same time when there is a beat on the song must be just luck.
AlphaWaves
84 posts
Joined June 2011
AlphaWaves
Omg such a beautiful song, and the chart is really well mapped in my opinion.
Just the skin that makes it hard to play.

Congrats, really nice job.
Strawberry
osu! Alumni
1,536 posts
Joined October 2010
Strawberry
@sea_food: be polite and respect others? it only shows the collab diff is hard for you, however itself is an excellent work.

anyway, congratz
-Baby Strawberry-
387 posts
Joined September 2011
-Baby Strawberry-
恭喜恭喜>　＜
Night Master Miku
7 posts
Joined March 2012
Night Master Miku
All I can say is WOW! This is a very nice song! At first I thought on EASY after the first spin, there was something wrong with the first beat. I watched more replays and then I figured out that there was nothing wrong :lol: . Anyways you made a good song and I enjoyed playing it! ;)
JauiPlaY
1,292 posts
Joined April 2010
Topic Starter
JauiPlaY
Thanks for ranking, kpy!
And to the ppl who played and like this map: Thank you very much too! :D
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